2008-02-01, 14:21 | Link #41 |
Homless Shadow
Join Date: Dec 2007
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Hehe!
I've finished my fourth chapta of Naruto Enru! Hope this keeps you entertained!
I'm sorry I haven't been able to write so much, I got some problems going on with my family and GCSE's approaching so quickly the stress is gunna make me eat my own head But, I'll try to make the 4th chapter come out reasonably soon! Chapter 3: Team Rivalry! http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=4 Rate & review please! Even if you don't like it, constructive critism is always good to have! |
2008-02-03, 12:44 | Link #43 |
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Join Date: Jun 2007
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Sorry!
I was supposed to post this AGES ago on the other thread but I forgot so umm...here.
Naruto: Rekidaishi no Ne
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2008-02-03, 13:11 | Link #44 |
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Well, I really can't miss such an oppertunity, though I am certainly one of the last people who really have the right to be posting this, seeing as I haven't updated since last April...
Title: Nakama Summary: an AU, written before the Kakashi Gaiden. The young Kakashi is under the future Fourth Hokage, with his team mates, Obito and Midori. They go through the war together and slowly come to realise the reality of the world they live in. "Nakama" has a sequel called "Touketsu no Namida", which goes on with Kakashi's ANBU era. You'll find that and a few one-shots in my profile: Pen-name: LinSetsu Enjoy! |
2008-02-05, 13:13 | Link #45 |
Homless Shadow
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Hey again, I actually had some spare time on my hands *(big shock)* so i've gone and written up the 4th chapter of Naruto Enru, so her you go.
Chapter 4: Learning the Jutsu! http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...7213&chapter=5 Hope you enjoy it, please rate and review this, as well as chapter 3, still havent got any comment on that |
2008-02-06, 01:05 | Link #46 |
It's the year 3030...
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A242 - Finally! It's nice to see that you've gotten your story off the ground! Good start so far. I'm especially interested in Tetsuo's adopted daughter. Besides the fact that poison specialists are bad-ass, she gets to externally control only the substance, which is just cool as hell! Keep it coming, I'm looking forward to later chapters.
KL - That was an interesting chapter. In a way, it made me feel like I was reading a Naruto chapter; it moved sort of slowly, and not much happened, but it made me more excited for next chatper. I can't wait to see what surprises Kumagimo Tower holds in store. Katoso - The rivalry between Katoso and Kanji is developing nicely. It's reminiscent of the Naruto/Sasuke rivalry from very early on in the series. I'm also interested to learn more about the two ninja roaming through the tea country, who I assume are related to Katoso because of their outfits. It'll be interesting to see what those two bring to the table. I'll try to get actual ratings up for all of you on the TONFA website soon. I've been real lazy about it, which isn't good, since many of you have been nice enough to rate my story there Edit: Well, I started a new fanfic today. Have a look at the first chapter: http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?sid=7521 It probably won't be as long as my first one, but I don't know that for sure. Either way, it will be totally different! Read, rate, enjoy!
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2008-02-06, 09:57 | Link #47 |
Domo Ori Gato Mr. Roboto
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Finally! I got it finished
"Leaf's Squad 15" "Chapter 4 Punishment! 30 Days D-Rank" http://www.narutofic.org/viewstory.p...ze=0&chapter=4 Please enjoy, and let me know what you think. I'm going to read everyone's new chapter's tonight and I'll review them here and rate them there for you.
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2008-02-06, 22:26 | Link #48 |
Domo Ori Gato Mr. Roboto
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Well I've caught up on everyone but KurayamiLeader's fanfics, he's just got such a large lead on me.
Reith: Nice I like the flash back/memories was a nice change from what all else I've been reading. Katoso Shunin: The story is coming along very nicely. I laughed at Kanji being fooled by Katoso with the water clones. I also wanted to point out that it's Kekei Genkai not Gekko Genkai, I'm not trying to flame or get on your case just wanted to let you know. I think I figured out how to write our characters together. Later on your village could hire a squad from my village for help since yours is so short on men, and it turns out to be my squad. Quzor: Very Nice! I love the samurai/ninja idea, that'll be cool. And The fight between the leader and that other punk was cool too. May I ask why "Tsubashi" didn't have a samurai sword or is that confidential for now? KurayamiLeader: sorry I haven't caught up yet, as soon as I do I'll give you a nice big reveiw. Let me know what you think of my newest chapter.
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2008-02-07, 02:15 | Link #49 | |
It's the year 3030...
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As for your new chapter: It was an interesting idea, but I thought it was kind of...well...slow. I didn't quite understand why Zaku would say he started the fight when he didn't, or why he thought he would get in more trouble if he didn't say he did. I also wasn't a particular fan of squad 15 getting 30 days punishment, compared to 15 for the others; it seemed to me like all involved parties should have received equal punishment (there goes my socialist mind again), but maybe that's just me. I did like the end, though (I won't spoil it here). All in all, I guess it wasn't too bad. I would have liked to see more happen, but intense action can't occur in every chapter, lest it become boring (like my stories ).
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2008-02-07, 02:45 | Link #50 | |
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2008-02-07, 08:26 | Link #51 | |
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2008-02-07, 18:26 | Link #52 |
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Here's another new story from me!
The Super Squad 7 http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4058959/1/The_Super_Squad_7 I know I havn't finished the others. I'm going to focus on The Leaf Village Life and The Continued Legacy after I finish by short M-rated three-shot tonite. |
2008-02-09, 11:50 | Link #53 |
Homless Shadow
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Hey , I've done yet another chapter, for you to read, review, or rant about if it needs improvement:
Chapter 5: New Mission! http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=6 Sorry the chapters are released on wavy dates, but my life hasnt been so on track at the moment.. ah well |
2008-02-09, 13:32 | Link #54 |
It's the year 3030...
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http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=2
It's done. Chapter two of "The Devil's Offspring" has finally been completed, ahead of schedule no less. My brain is a little...well...I don't really know how to feel about this chapter. I like it, but I think I could like it more, I don't know. Read it and tell me what you think
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2008-02-10, 15:21 | Link #56 | |
It's the year 3030...
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2008-02-10, 18:09 | Link #57 |
It's the year 3030...
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Well, I didn't think I'd do it today, but Adediran convinced me to put some time in. So here it is, the Third Chapter of "The Devil's Offspring."
http://narutofic.org/viewstory.php?s...ze=0&chapter=3 It's a bit longer than the other chapters, but I hope you enjoy it. Feel free to review it there, and give some feedback here...it would be greatly appreciated
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2008-02-11, 19:15 | Link #59 | |
Ha ha ha ha ha...
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I'm atill working on mine, though I kinda have put it on hold due to schoolwork and the fact that I'm lacking inspiration at the moment. I don't really like how my chapter is being written so far, so when I DO get a chance to work on it, it's getting changed continuously. I can't say when I'll have it done, but know that it's being whittled-away-at. Or so to speak.
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