2008-05-27, 06:59 | Link #9461 |
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Aebliss: Umm... not sure, really... I guess it could be considered "fanfiction" Kagedanji: DoS redo/self-edit Filled Insanity: Disappearance prologue edit Kagedanji: DoS redo/self-edit, part 2 shaoron: (you already have this one) Aebliss: DoS "Edit of an edit" I think I got 'em all...
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2008-05-27, 07:22 | Link #9462 | |
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2008-05-27, 11:14 | Link #9465 |
Kneel Before Your King!
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Spoiler for Boredom, pt7:
... I know I said I was going to finish things with this one, but I figured I'd stop where I did, as that last part might have been a bit too much... plus I've gotta go find a nice safe minefield to hide in, due to fear of rabid Kyonko fanboys probably wanting my head after writing that... *e*Is there really any need for me to actually keep doing this? Part one Part two Part three Part four Part five Part six {This is seven} PartTheEND
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2008-05-27, 12:41 | Link #9466 |
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Just discovered this last night. Have spent most of last night, and part of this morning reading through this huge pile of posts. Still have another 300 or so pages to read through. Gah!
Still, this is so fun, the genderbending scenario. Totally turning the story around. I've really enjoyed reading what has been written so far. While I'm not a writer by any stretch of the imagination, I do tend to be fairly good with editing. If no one minds, I'll go ahead and read through and post a few suggested changes to whats already been done. |
2008-05-27, 13:01 | Link #9467 | |
Homo Ludens
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2008-05-27, 13:46 | Link #9468 |
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A few suggested Changes for Volume 1 Chapter 1 (I pulled this from the baka-tsuki project page, so may not be the latest versions.) Also, please don't be offended by these suggestions. Thats all they are, suggestions. Use or don't use them as you like.
Spoiler for Suggested Changes Chapter 1:
Again, feel free to use this or not. I'll be back with more suggestions later. Last edited by Molenir; 2008-05-27 at 17:24. |
2008-05-27, 18:52 | Link #9473 |
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The "do hope" part is what sounds weird. However I figured, if you're changing that sentence, then you might as well go all the way, and alter the whole thing to sound a bit more normal. Though admittedly, I forgot to pluralize she. And of course didn't pay attention to the stalking psycho girls, which also sounds a bit off. I think this...
"I hope shes not one of those psycho, stalker-type girls who follow you around for years." or something similar would be better then the original; "I do hope she isn’t one of those stalking psycho girls that follow you around for years.” The original works of course, and doesn't really need to be changed. I suppose in this case, its mostly just a matter of preference, and possibly where you're from. Regardless though, I really think that the "Do hope" sounds weird and ought to be changed. But like I said, just suggestions, feel free to use them or not. |
2008-05-27, 19:47 | Link #9474 | |
One PUNCH!
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Or even "I sure do hope..." Last edited by CrowKenobi; 2008-05-27 at 19:48. Reason: sentence needs a comma |
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2008-05-27, 22:16 | Link #9475 |
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I haven't had time to go through all of chapter 2 yet. Still in process of doing so. Anyway, thought I'd go ahead and give my initial suggestions now, and add the rest later.
So, Volume 1 Chapter 2, suggestions so far. Spoiler for chapter 2 suggestions Part A:
Feel free to comment, ignore, or simply disregard the above suggestions. |
2008-05-27, 23:01 | Link #9477 |
Doughy goodness. I think.
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So now that I re-edited all of my stuff, can my works under my name in the archive post be cleared out and replaced with these?
The Day of Saggitarius, Challenge - http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...postcount=9428 The Day of Saggitarius, Battle - http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...postcount=9433 Asakura Ryo's Assault - http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...postcount=9476
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2008-05-28, 00:42 | Link #9480 | |
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