2015-09-19, 21:50 | Link #81 | |
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I see, any idea on what the setting for the vacation trip is going to be? In general, the cliche for anime is the Izu Islands or other islands off the south coast of Japan. That, or Okinawa if you want to go a bit further out. That or you could try something a bit more original. Also, as for these ideas, do tell if it won't spoil too much... I was kind of wondering if it might have had something to do with Kirino becoming curious about BDSM. Also, on a random note, I have my own head-canon of what the final result of Ayase and Kuroneko's relationship will look like- this will be a while from now in the story, and you probably won't go into too much lurid detail on this, but I can't help imagining Ayase presenting Kuroneko with a cat tail attached to a plug intended for insertion in a very specific location |
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2015-09-23, 05:37 | Link #82 | |
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On the cat tail plug. Call me pervert , but I do think about it more than once. It would just be very very hard for it to appear in this fanfic through. Maybe I could imply on it vaguely at the very ending. With some time skip of course Anyway, Vol 3 Epilogue. It was quite long actually, almost a chapter long Spoiler:
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2015-09-23, 14:11 | Link #83 | |
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Also, as for the tail plug, I doubt you or I are the first person to come up with the idea of using a tail plug on Kuroneko. I mean, if you say "nekomimi" and "BDSM", isn't it natural that I say tail butt plug! As for being a pervert, nothing wrong with that, from where I see it, there are two kinds of people in this world, people who embrace their perversion and those who deny it. As long as it's consentual and won't cause permanant injury, there's nothing wrong with a having a perverted side- don't listen to the elements in society that tell you otherwise! |
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2015-09-24, 09:03 | Link #84 | |
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On the chapter, honestly, when I first planned to write this whole fanfic, I was worried that Kuroneko may end up to be too submissive (and make their relationship mostly one-sided). But right now I am quite content at the development up to this point as it started to shape into the sort of relationship I expected them to have. Had the plan for most of chapter 17, and more than half for chapter 18, then a fair bit of chapter 19 (or 20). Just need actual time and mood to write them (my life has been hell lately >__<). Also still need to research a bit more on Shirahama through as doesn't quite have the feel of it yet
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2015-09-24, 18:50 | Link #85 | |
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As for Kuroneko as Ayase's relationship, as I have never seen the second season of OreImo, you probably have a better grasp of what sort of relationship makes most sense canon-wise. That said, I'm not sure if one character always taking the a more dom/sub role necessarily makes the relationship one-sided- there may be many reasons why one person in this sort of relationship may lean heavily towards either a dominant or submissive role- it may simply be an aspect of their personality or simply their sexual interests, or there may be some deeper-rooted psychological reason behind a person being more dominant or submissive. Also, as for why my ideas always seems to involve Kuroneko as the sub, I guess her already being into cosplay and being somewhat chuuni just somehow leads into more perverted ideas about how to combine them with BDSM lifestyle. IDK, perhaps this fic has just gotten me thinking about some of the perverted things I'd like to do if I ever find myself a cosplayer and perhaps slightly chuuni submissive... Unfortunately for your ideas, a lot of them are probably too graphic for this fic. Of course, I find Kuroneko and Ayase fit pretty well into the switch relationship they have now. In any case, sorry to hear your life's been difficult lately, but take your time, and I will be looking forward for the next chapter in Ayase and Kuroneko's kinky adventures! |
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2015-09-24, 23:08 | Link #86 | |
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I may have mentioned to you before, but this is why I liked Kuroneko in the novel. A bit awkward, straightforward, kind-heart, but in the same time very manipulative when it comes to the need or well-being of her loved ones. And as you can see in this fanfic, she can still actually control the relationship even when she is the one being tied down.
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I actually stuck on a part in the original Chapter 17, so decided to just remove the whole thing and jump straight to Chapter 18, the summer vacation. Actually was planning it out several days ago already, just don't have time to write it down =/
As always, I will proof-read on it later Spoiler for Chapter 17:
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Now, as for my thoughts on the chapter itself, way to punish your naughty spying girlfriend, Kuroneko! A little public humiliation, or at least the potential for its is always effective. I know most of my ideas have involved Kuroneko as the sub, so here if I were to give our pervert cat some ideas for how to further torture poor Ayase, how about next time, let her keep her panties on... but leave a little something extra inside them... specifically a little egg-shaped, vibrating remote-controlled "something! Although that might have to wait until they are little more intimate, but after this, I could totally see Kuroneko doing that... perhaps when Ayase is in her college classes, or with Mai, or Kirino... or I wouldn't put it past Ayase... as an act of revenge. Also, I like the way Kuroneko is "disciplining" Ayase for things she did in real life, although at this point it may be more an excuse to do kinky things to her! If they were to get more into actually disciplining each other for things they did, it would be an excellent way to keep the plot interesting while at the same time deepening their relationship. |
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On the 'third person POV', it was not what I meant. As to my knowledge , in Japan and East Asia culture in general, addressing yourself by name or as third person (rather than "I", "my") is a childish/cute way to do. So in term of BDSM, it was part of dirty talk. For example, one do that to act cute/childish so they can beg the other party to do things for them. For example Ayase did this in Chapter 7 (out of desperation), or Kuroneko did this in Chapter 14 (obviously out of jealousy) (Or it's also part of an act, as obviously it's more sadistic to punish a childish or cute person. So the submissive do that to make the dominant party more satisfied with their acts, sort of) Ayase case this chapter here however is a little bit different, as I tried to show that she was really into the act at that point, that she unconsciously address herself in her monologue as "Ayase" (basically she start to forget that the whole thing was part of an act) Quote:
You will recognise another thing that you mentioned to me way back later. And one more idea, that already sorta have its own chapter , but is pushed back (or will happen later) in this vacation arc.
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2015-10-07, 15:03 | Link #92 | |
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At this moment I had ideas for almost 2 chapters , possibly 3, but I prefer the 3rd one to happen after they have been back home. So depend on whether I felt the arc has already been long enough. Feel free to feed me more ideas if anything comes up (even if i can't use in this arc, I always can implement it later )
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Or she could covertly lay a stencil on her back while she's tanning and "write" something in tan lines. As for what the stencil should say, perhaps "Property of Ayase Arageki" or perhaps the old favorite: "Pervert Cat" (As a bonus, after doing the latter, she should call Kuroneko "Hentaineko" for the rest of the trip). Once again, you're welcome to ideas, and as for the next chapters, I look forward to seeing them, and if you need any help writing them, feel free to ask me about some of your ideas. |
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(Like I could actually see the screen of Ayase dropping sand on Kuroneko to form words on her back, you know. Don't know where it will fit in through. Or whether it should just be briefly mentioned or have whole actual chapter on it)
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And if anything doesn't fit in at this point, there is plenty of other points in their relationship to for them to experiment with all kinds of different things! And don't worry about using my ideas, I'm always happy to provide some romantic advice to our two lovebirds (at this point, I think I like your versions of Kuroneko and Ayase more than the canon ones... then again, maybe it's simply because I can relate to the kind of things they're into!) In any thing, if you don't mind me asking, how are you doing on the chapters, any idea on a estimated time of completion. In any case, I eagerly await the next instalment. |
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Just need a bit of detail on it out. The chapter 19 however is still on sketch, like I already know the main beef for it, but the lead up is still a bit vague I actually had more problems with life than with writing those chapters honestly (both with work, and another family matter). Like last chapter I already got every detail planned out 3 days before actually have time to start typing... so... =/ Then as you already knew, unlike for the first few where i will just write whatever come to my mind. Now there is a need to double check/ triple check an idea to make sure a) it fit with previous chapters, and b) it won't deny any possible future events. So...
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Meanswhile chapter 18. It was literally twice as long as normal chapter. And further to my defense at the slow writing of this, but real life has been hell for me these past weeks and possibly in coming weeks as well =/ As usual, it still hasn't proof-read properly... So... Spoiler for Chapter 18:
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