2008-01-12, 14:08 | Link #81 | |
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atleast the part that's in my quote anyway, fun chapter (a troubled fate is fine too) which also gives us general info about yuuno... ...now then, i wonder how we'll continue from here, seems like the premise is set, and something dramatic and/or important can happen now... Anyway, i'm looking forward to the next installment of Nanoha ~ the collectible card game. Edit: Woo! Page claim!
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2008-01-12, 14:12 | Link #82 | |
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And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol
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2008-01-12, 14:43 | Link #83 | |
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I can't see how I ever missed chapter 4, so the plot was strangely jumped for me. Enjoyed it very much nonetheless. |
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2008-01-12, 14:45 | Link #84 |
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*Keels over from all the cuteness*
wow....so much fluff....I think I'm going to have diabetes for this LOL XD I LOVE IT!!! My only problem is that you misused the word farther, when it should've been furthered. That's the only mistake I noticed
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2008-01-12, 14:47 | Link #85 | ||
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It sounds good. BTW nice chapter as always, I loved the fluff Quote:
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2008-01-12, 14:54 | Link #86 | |
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And yes, the most frustrating part about a forming relationship like that is the "i think/i do like her, but i'm afraid to confess" usually drives everyone around them up the wall in frustration I do remember seeing something alike that IRL, though it was a boy and girl... after two months of dodginess i got fed up with it, sat them together and explained it to them, sorta like kickstarting their relationship... Nearly got my face relocated to the back of my head in the process... people tend to be rather aggressive when someone starts blurting out secrets like that. I suppose it's arika's job to be the frustrated one when fate and nanoha start getting dodgy about their feelings...
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2008-01-12, 15:08 | Link #87 |
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Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-
Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet. Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:
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2008-01-12, 15:22 | Link #88 | |
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What I mean is that you just write the few days later part, where Nanoha's building up the courage to model and such, throwing in some cute and fluff moments while you're at it Once you're satisfied with that, you can go back and write the fluffy and embarrassing moment and blend it in with what you've already written so that it can transition from morning, to a few days later. I do that a lot, but that's part of my writing style so I usually transition as I write That's just what I'd do since I'd like to build up more on the romance more than anything, since that's part of the main focus of the story, unless there are other plot elements I want to exploit that helps build up in the relation, like in this case, Fate helping Nanoha build up her courage, which I might add, WAS WAY TOO CUTE!!! XD Anyways that's my two-cents on that. And on an off-note, I can't seem to sit down long enough to get my brain going long enough to come up with anything to write for Road of Love XD
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2008-01-12, 15:25 | Link #89 | |
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...But I wonder what would be that "rather embarrassing something" ? Saludos, Haru |
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2008-01-12, 15:31 | Link #90 | |
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Spoiler for spoiler about spoiler:
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2008-01-12, 15:41 | Link #91 | |
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Anyways, looking forward to reading it
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2008-01-12, 15:47 | Link #92 | |
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2008-01-12, 15:55 | Link #93 |
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Haha, seems like people want fluff so fluff you shall get.
Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind! Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building
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2008-01-12, 15:59 | Link #94 | |
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Oh this should be fun
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2008-01-12, 16:11 | Link #95 | |
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now that i think about it, it's almost a good thing that you don't decorate your stories with images like some other authors i've seen... an image with nanoha and fate in the depicted lingerie probably would have wiped out half of the people reading the story
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2008-01-12, 16:14 | Link #96 | |
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Spoiler for How to solve a Rubik's cube, NSFW:
fanart ftw
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2008-01-12, 16:21 | Link #97 | |
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quite, now if you'll excuse me, i need to remove the surprise paint from my table, and get some sleep...
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2008-01-12, 16:32 | Link #98 | ||
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Nice! who did it? It really was fast Saludos, Haru |
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2008-01-12, 16:38 | Link #99 | |
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Don't spoil it T_T
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2008-01-12, 20:04 | Link #100 | |
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This is good stuff - been lurking here and there in the former thread - but never really got involved... THAT'S GONNA CHANGE! To Satashi: I realize this long after the last Lyrical Days post, you may have closed voting... but if you're still taking votes: A for me. I would vote B, but Yuuno's comment on a cheap date for Fate has made me think twice... |
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