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Great as always but Im still waiting for Syn to find out Vivio's job also.. @Satashi: After Watching Ep. 2 of Rosario + Vampire Capu2 (go watch it if you haven't seen it) I've now got an Image of Fate and Tiana duking it out Fate Kicking and Tiana wielding giant bludgeoning weapons (with spikes) When are you going to Update Vampire!Fate? Please
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2008-10-25, 04:23 | Link #10303 | |
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2008-10-25, 09:09 | Link #10304 | |
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"... If you asked..." That line is a clasic! Massage... can't wait!!! XD XP XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Het yaw ot Dorlw Awr Itav...
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2008-10-25, 10:13 | Link #10305 |
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Just another little something. This one was going to be the VMOT! segment for "How Reputations Are Made"--I figured that a long omake would go well with a shorter story for balancing's sake...but it goes better here.
You know, Vivio would definitely have problems if someone said to her, "You should be more like your mother!" Spoiler for Do As Your Mother Would Do:
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2008-10-25, 10:23 | Link #10306 | |
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You should post it for "How Reputations Are Made" too, don't let people miss this Cuídense y sigan sorniendo |
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2008-10-25, 11:53 | Link #10308 |
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It would be a bit easier to follow if no more than one character had dialogue per paragraph...but that aside, if Johannes is going to be fighting monsters in a sewer, let's go with B. Explosions in contained areas with possibly unstable ceilings and possible gas leaks so clearly fit MGLN.
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2008-10-25, 14:21 | Link #10309 | |
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Wow they killed Alto, does that mean the Terrans are going to try and kill Vita when they have the chance? Probably, but I doubt Nanoha and Co. are going to let that happen. Hmm, missiles sound big, explosive, and powerful... B
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2008-10-25, 14:28 | Link #10310 | |
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2008-10-25, 16:54 | Link #10311 | |
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... That made no sense, right? I guess my idea here is not so much that the story is a drastic change for Nanoha as a character and her fate, but more of a different series of events that happened to her between A's and StrikerS after her injury. That was my thought process while I was mapping out the basics of the plot, and it's something that I really want to stay true to. So, in a nutshell, that's why I originally wanted her to be fifteen. (I realize there's still the plothole of who saved Subaru while Nanoha was off shooting a gun, but I digress.)
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2008-10-25, 19:02 | Link #10312 | |
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That being said, if you want her to be fifteen, then make her be fifteen. Tell the story you want to tell. That's pretty much what everyone, including me, has been saying. |
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2008-10-25, 19:19 | Link #10313 | |
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Erm, well. I won't give anything away... if you want to know exactly what I have in mind, PM me, please? And, on another note, I completed the first chapter of Bless the Broken Road... HUZZAH! This chapter also included two characters from Triangle Heart, Kuon and Alisa Bannings. My characterization for them is mainly by ear, since I have no access to them in the games... Spoiler for Bless the Broken Road: Collision Course:
Originally I didn't have the flashback of Kuon being found by Nanoha and becoming Fiasse's familiar, but I figured I could just put it in and save myself from questions about how Nanoha was capable of supporting a familiar. Feel free to rip into this however you see fit. Chapter 2 will be out soon, hopefully.
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2008-10-25, 19:42 | Link #10314 |
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All right BtBR! ()
I liked the chapter, I liked Kuon interaction with Nanoha a lot. The idea of Nanoha with a motorcycle appeals to me a lot. Its sounds so bad ass. And it is a good way to feel like you're flying. As for the characterization of Alisa (Arisa? meh ), I'm a little confused. Wouldn't she know Japanese because she went to school with Nanoha and Suzuka there? or is this another AU factor? She seems a little OoC compared to how she is in MGLN and A's. Anyways, this mission to Earth sounds interesting for Fate and Co. I look forward to seeing Kyouya and Miyuki, as well as some action with Tiore Crystera’s journal and the secret of the Forgotten Song.
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2008-10-25, 19:45 | Link #10315 | |
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She never appears in MGLN or A's; she's Triangle Heart only, though Arisa was based off her. In the original game she was a ghost who hated the world but still befriended Nanoha... in this story she's Nanoha's closest friend in England, so her knowledge of Japanese is limited. I had fun with the Miyuki/Kyouya bit. XD
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2008-10-25, 20:42 | Link #10316 |
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I know I'm double-posting, and I apologize... but it's for a good reason! I have something new for you guys, especially for all of you from chat...
A Lutecia/Vivio one-shot! Post StrikerS, Vivio is 13 and Lutecia is 17. They might be OOC, but I'm not sure. I think they're good. Spoiler for Never Been Kissed:
I might try putting it on FF.net... just to see the reviews I'd get.
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2008-10-25, 20:55 | Link #10317 | |
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The flashback with Kuon works, though I'm not sure if it works where it is; that is, it's a strongly emotional scene showing both Nanoha's kindness and worry for others (actually nice--it helps to show that her fundamental spirit hasn't been destroyed by what happened to her--that this isn't a "Dark Nanoha" story despite her gunslinging) and the foundations of her relationship with Kuon, but you've just added it on as a scene where it would work better as an insert or flashback either following Kuon's introduction or at some point where the tie between the two of them is relevant to the storyline. (nb: Why do I keep wanting to call Kuon, "Kyon"? ) Obviously, I'm also interested in what caused the Nanoha/Fate split, why Fate was so hurt by it, and what'll happen between them in the future. Thus in this prologue you've defined three separate conflicts or subplots (blast it, I know there should be a word for what I mean but I don't know it...this is what I get for being a finance major and only needing two semesters of literature as an undergrad): a character-development storyline concerning the altered Nanoha, how she's changed, how she deals with the new herself; the plot storyline concerning the journal and the TSAB mission; and the relationship (whether friendship or romance) concerning Nanoha and Fate (and, by extension, Nanoha and her old TSAB friends and her family). That's a lot of ground to cover, so I'm hoping this story proves to be quite a long one to let it play out properly. Anyway, good work. You've got me hooked, which is the purpose of a first chapter. |
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2008-10-25, 21:47 | Link #10318 | |
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@Thread: Are we allowed to post a fanfic about Triangle Heart? I mean it might have things about Nanoha or Fate, but mostly centered around Kyouya and Miyuki (no not Kyoudai-ai ). Or does that not count as Nanoha Fanfiction? <--- I probably won't get around to writing this, but it's still a question.
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2008-10-26, 00:25 | Link #10319 |
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The render of Karil is ready, jus need to color it xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Well, well, I posted another riddle some post ago and noone has been able to resolve it, uh?
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Run with it maybe another entry or two, and see where it takes you. It couldn't hurt right? Edit: OH SWEET!! PEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEGIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII CURAAAAIIIIIIIIMU DESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS SSSSU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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