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Tiresias · 2011-09-24, 05:40

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Originally Posted by falcolobo

My story is somewhat complicated, but if read from the beginning it is easy to follow.

SECOND CHANCE

PLOT:
Ichika Orimura was taken hostage for the second time of his life, right after he had taken his high school entrance exams...but this time it doesn't end as well as his first incident. This time he gets caught in an explosion during a rescue gone wrong, and is on the verge of death. Shinonono Tabane, intervenes after being called by Orimura Chifuyuu. She has a daring plan: install an IS core into Ichika's dying body. After a painstaking surgery, it is a success Ichika is now part IS.

But the time to relax isn't now. Do to international pressures of Japan gaining an extra IS (for Ichika's IS is a new one built by Tabane), he is forced to enter IS Academy...a school only for girls.

LINK:

SECOND CHANCE

I like they way you justify Ichika being able to use an IS (I still find the female-only premise silly though, but that's my critique with the series in general)

However, if I may:

Spoiler for some nitpics:

Anyway, that's just my two cents; feel free to ignore it if it only causes you trouble since it's not exactly plot important

. I'm more curious on how this will impact the story in general though because right now the story is still the same IS only with an explanation on Ichika's uniqueness. Let the flaps of the butterfly wings shake the world

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 05:41

Other than Fanfiction.net, have you guys been able to collect and index all the IS fics written and completed so far?

I give up trying to upload my fic onto my weebly page. That server's good for casual webpages, but not if you actually know how to code in HTML...>_<

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 05:47

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

Other than Fanfiction.net, have you guys been able to collect and index all the IS fics written and completed so far?

I give up trying to upload my fic onto my weebly page. That server's good for casual webpages, but not if you actually know how to code in HTML...>_<

I think only Fanfiction.net has an archive for the stories, why are you so reluctant to post there?.

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 05:56

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

why are you so reluctant to post there?.

1.) The chances of my work being read is so minimal as to be laughable.
2.) I only re-started writing fanfics recently. If you're interested in the stuff I used to do:
http://wavehawk.weebly.com/fan-work.html

So yeah...I've written romance and thrillers before. But I'm going to stay well away from fantasy for the time being, as it makes my head hurt...

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 06:08

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Originally Posted by wavehawk

http://wavehawk.weebly.com/fan-work.html

1.) The chances of my work being read is so minimal as to be laughable.
2.) I only re-started writing fanfics recently

Most of your work is good even if you say you just started re-writing recently. You won't know if people will read it or not so why not try posting it and see what happens. Only a few people are reading my fanfic and I'm still posting it there so it can't hurt to try can it? Also, your work is pretty well written compared to some of the other stories in that archive so I doubt you'll get any flack for that.

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 06:18

Scratch that. Wavehawk is taken on that board.

That's actually a 3rd reason I don't post to many forums. There's other people who use my netnick, and I've gotten in trouble before for that.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 06:20

Looking forward to it old man

HasuMasu · 2011-09-24, 06:30

You don't think anyone will read it?

Nice joke.

(You need more confidence in your work.)

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 06:36

I'm serious. I get a lot of criticism that my writing isn't anime enough---understandable because I write the way proper books and novels are written, but nobody seems to agree.

Oh, I wonder fi this song will inspire some of you guys to write some cool battle scenes for IS?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OlgZS...eature=related

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 07:08

I think requiem of a dream fits as a fight song better, especially if a battle is drawn out then suddenly goes hardcore near the end.

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 07:09

Ask the mods if putting up a fanfiction-related ideas/music thread is appropriate?

I also had a shudder--not for this fic, but if in a future fic I have someone threaten to kill or injure Ichika...

(gets chills)

...<Ren> would...not be as nice as she is now, that's for sure...She'd probably start by cutting off all the fingers of the children of the man who'd dare threaten Ichika, just as an appetizer. Then...

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 07:24

Quote:

Originally Posted by wavehawk

Ask the mods if putting up a fanfiction-related ideas/music thread is appropriate?

I also had a shudder--not for this fic, but if in a future fic I have someone threaten to kill or injure Ichika...

(gets chills)

...<Ren> would...not be as nice as she is now, that's for sure...She'd probably start by cutting off all the fingers of the children of the man who'd dare threaten Ichika, just as an appetizer. Then...

If that happened then Ichika would try to stop her himself since blaming the guys kids is going too far. If Ichika can't talk her out of it then Irish would probably start shooting at her since he hates people involving innocents and civilians in conflicts especially if it's blatant murder and torture.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-24, 07:34

Quote:

Originally Posted by wavehawk

Ask the mods if putting up a fanfiction-related ideas/music thread is appropriate?

I also had a shudder--not for this fic, but if in a future fic I have someone threaten to kill or injure Ichika...

(gets chills)

...<Ren> would...not be as nice as she is now, that's for sure...She'd probably start by cutting off all the fingers of the children of the man who'd dare threaten Ichika, just as an appetizer. Then...

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

(Run away from the keyboard and hid under his blanket)

EDIT: DAMN IT! As expected from the Old man! That would be awesome, you have to post it! NO EXCUSES!

Not Anime enough? Screw it, you took the 'Novel' in Light Novel and made it right! Ling's story is pretty awesome, and I felt this one is going to be better since Thriller is your specialty.

EDIT 2:
Anyone knew how petite is Kanzashi? her picture in the Uchigane Nigata shown that she's really tiny.
So, which is taller, her or Ling? because it's important for my fic.

Chapter 8 is almost done, just this little detail and I'll send it to blitz.

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 07:38

Don't know if you guys noticed it yet, but <Ren>...doesn't play fair. Ever. So at this point you're probably wondering:
1.) If she's such a nasty piece of work, why hasn't she tried to eliminate the other girls?
2.) What's her secret, that makes her 'not normal'?
3.) What ability does she have?
4.) Is Wavehawk baiting you with hints just to mislead you?

HasuMasu · 2011-09-24, 07:39

She's about as tall as Charlotte and her
bust is roughly the size of Ran's
(which is slightly smaller than Charlotte's).

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 07:48

Isn't involving children still going too far? Using them as hostages or threatening them is can be excused but actively targeting them and torturing them when they don't even know what's happening is going too far, it would make her an outright villain protagonist. Unless that's what you aiming for.

All I know is that Kanzashi is about half a head shorter that Tatenashi and slightly thinner as well. Theres a picture of them together in the Infinite Stratos wiki if you want to check.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-24, 07:48

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Originally Posted by Detective-san

She's about as tall as Charlotte and her
bust is roughly the size of Ran's
(which is slightly smaller than Charlotte's).

Hmm, so....in my fic, it'll be put like this (Obviously not canon):

Dan (182) > Ichika (174) > Chifuyu (171) > Houki (166) > Madoka (164) > Cecilia (161) > Char (160) > Kanzashi (159) > Ran (157) > Maya (156) > Ling (154) > Laura (148)

Where the hell I put Tabane and Tatenashi?

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 07:51

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

If that happened then Ichika would try to stop her himself since blaming the guys kids is going too far.

<Ren>: "What Ichika doesn't know won't hurt him. Besides, it's a valid tactic. Oda Nobunaga would regularly annihalate peaceful villages to gain a psychological advantage over his enemies."

Haruko: "HOW CAN YOU TALK AS IF ODA NOBUNAGA IS AN ADMIRABLE PERSON WHEN YOU KNOW DAMN WELL HE'S NOT!?!"

Eratas123 · 2011-09-24, 08:02

Irish is preparing his gun as we speak and he's setting his sights on a certain knife crazy girl

Tatenashi is about Houki's height isn't she? Btw how tall is 5 feet on that chart of yours? Is ot 152?

wavehawk · 2011-09-24, 08:16

"Would a man appreciate a woman who smells of blood?"

2011-09-24, 05:41	Link #1502
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	Other than Fanfiction.net, have you guys been able to collect and index all the IS fics written and completed so far? I give up trying to upload my fic onto my weebly page. That server's good for casual webpages, but not if you actually know how to code in HTML...>_< __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-09-24, 06:18	Link #1506
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	Scratch that. Wavehawk is taken on that board. That's actually a 3rd reason I don't post to many forums. There's other people who use my netnick, and I've gotten in trouble before for that. __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-09-24, 06:30	Link #1508
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	You don't think anyone will read it? Nice joke. (You need more confidence in your work.) __________________

2011-09-24, 06:36	Link #1509
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	I'm serious. I get a lot of criticism that my writing isn't anime enough---understandable because I write the way proper books and novels are written, but nobody seems to agree. Oh, I wonder fi this song will inspire some of you guys to write some cool battle scenes for IS? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OlgZS...eature=related __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-09-24, 07:09	Link #1511
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	Ask the mods if putting up a fanfiction-related ideas/music thread is appropriate? I also had a shudder--not for this fic, but if in a future fic I have someone threaten to kill or injure Ichika... (gets chills) ...<Ren> would...not be as nice as she is now, that's for sure...She'd probably start by cutting off all the fingers of the children of the man who'd dare threaten Ichika, just as an appetizer. Then... __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

2011-09-24, 06:20	Link #1507
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Looking forward to it old man

2011-09-24, 07:08	Link #1510
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	I think requiem of a dream fits as a fight song better, especially if a battle is drawn out then suddenly goes hardcore near the end.

2011-09-24, 07:38	Link #1514
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	Don't know if you guys noticed it yet, but <Ren>...doesn't play fair. Ever. So at this point you're probably wondering: 1.) If she's such a nasty piece of work, why hasn't she tried to eliminate the other girls? 2.) What's her secret, that makes her 'not normal'? 3.) What ability does she have? 4.) Is Wavehawk baiting you with hints just to mislead you? __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..." Last edited by wavehawk; 2011-09-24 at 07:51.

2011-09-24, 07:39	Link #1515
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	She's about as tall as Charlotte and her bust is roughly the size of Ran's (which is slightly smaller than Charlotte's). __________________

2011-09-24, 07:48	Link #1516
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Isn't involving children still going too far? Using them as hostages or threatening them is can be excused but actively targeting them and torturing them when they don't even know what's happening is going too far, it would make her an outright villain protagonist. Unless that's what you aiming for. All I know is that Kanzashi is about half a head shorter that Tatenashi and slightly thinner as well. Theres a picture of them together in the Infinite Stratos wiki if you want to check.

2011-09-24, 08:02	Link #1519
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Irish is preparing his gun as we speak and he's setting his sights on a certain knife crazy girl Tatenashi is about Houki's height isn't she? Btw how tall is 5 feet on that chart of yours? Is ot 152?

2011-09-24, 08:16	Link #1520
wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	"Would a man appreciate a woman who smells of blood?" __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."