2011-12-30, 05:52 | Link #15442 |
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First, of all harem (bar Kanzashi, who haven't show up, and Laura who is paired with Charles) she is the only one that has no past ties whatsoever to Ichika.
Second, the focus all been put on everyone BUT her in chapter 11. In fact, someone in TvTropes pointed her demotion as hilarious (I'm not really happy, but I knew it's truth). Third, Kanzashi at least has clear reason to fell for him, but Cecilia, while understandable, is not interesting enough to develop. I'm currently struck with this, because in my plan so far, turning point of Cecilia's role is after the Madoka Kidnapping where Cecilia serves as her good counterpart. And that's about a dozen of chapter ahead (yes, I plan a lot and write too little). I need something I can apply now, or few chapter ahead.
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2011-12-30, 06:02 | Link #15444 |
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@Zero
Hmm... So what you're saying is, the problem is trying find something that would allow Cecilia to relate to Ichika? Because for Athena, she relates to Inami on the common grounds of both of them losing their parents to tragic deaths. Then again, while I'm able to work out how the two pick up on their friendship/relationship, things would be different for Ichika since he and Chifuyu were abandoned by their parents instead.
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2011-12-30, 06:07 | Link #15445 |
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@tyranid: And they say Rin is the uninteresting one
@zero: Your first problem is actually good angst material, even though it seems everyone only uses it as harem race analysis. The second and third problems are your biggest ones. Third being the most annoying one because it utterly drains you of will to write. Best find another reason why Cecilia falls in love with him EDIT: Or dig up a deeper reason from the somewhat flaky one. |
2011-12-30, 06:09 | Link #15446 |
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Maybe I just have to deconstruct the shafting process anyway.... having her stand in the background tragically as Houki, Rin and Madoka get the missing piece of Ichika's past in chapter 12...
Now I feel like having "WTH Author?!" moment... @Demi 1. is the above, as for 2 and 3... well... maybe Cecilia also need a man that can embrace his own words and principles?
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2011-12-30, 06:11 | Link #15448 |
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Reading through Athena Bouclier again, I think I might need to do some major rectifications... But I think I'll work on that after Chapter 5's published :3
EDIT: Goin out for dinner. Will return in like... hours.
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2011-12-30, 06:38 | Link #15453 |
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Your call, Jak.
If there's anything I want to tell that you can't be too paranoid here, because this place is damn insecure. Someone actually find my plan with Blitz because of my loose finger. If you want to post it, chances that there's a reader who sneak in anyway. If you don't mind they got a spoiler, feel free to post it, otherwise just P.M. us or don't post it and keep the surprise.
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2011-12-30, 07:01 | Link #15455 |
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Indeed: Deconstruction. Something that should be cool or funny become horrific or sad, and vice versa, though usually applied in the former.
Take Boss!Ichika for example: In Doukuganryuu, Ichika is charismatic and badass leader gang that attracts badass chicks around, ready for virtually any single challenge. In Sacred Twins, Ichika is a Knight Templar Vigilante man bearing the name of "Emperor of the Silver Thrones". And dear god he wanted to leave that darkside of him, as he realized how horrific is that sitting on top of mountain composed of his defeated enemies and allies. EDIT: as for Cecilia's case, I really need something that could be funny but tragic enough if you deconstruct it.
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2011-12-30, 07:04 | Link #15456 |
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There's absolutely nothing horrifying about finding a 10 year old sitting on a pile of bloody dead bodies while he's holding a gun that's out of bullets
The deconstruction path of Cecilia's romance branches 2 ways for me. How about you zero? |
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