2012-01-06, 04:40 | Link #16624 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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@ KaizerKnight
sorry for late response, this is somewhat better than first chapter. If anything, the lack of gratuitous Japanese helped that. @ Rain Mysterious protector of sort, think Graham Aker of Gundam 00 season 2 but as protagonist.
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2012-01-06, 05:05 | Link #16625 |
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@ Senpai - Come on~ Real men wear pink- *Shot*
Side note - Yes, I used Tvtropes standards. Why? @ Meistah - Does Karon or anyone in her family have red eyes? Yukiko has red eyes and that's a very rare eye color, especially by today's standards.
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2012-01-06, 05:30 | Link #16626 |
I am no one
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No problemo, just that strange to find he's sue by TvTropes Standard.
Try this, the msot accurate Mary Sue Litmus ever
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2012-01-06, 05:33 | Link #16627 |
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@ Senpai - He's not a sue, I just made some mistakes He avouds the most blatant sue traits
Side note - Made another mistake: Irish's scar on the neck is thin and smooth, but that apparently makes no sense. He didn't get proper treatment and even fought while the wound was open
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2012-01-06, 05:46 | Link #16629 |
That one guy
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*both are training kendo swings*
Houki's child: Mom Houki: Yes? Houki's child: Can I ask you for something extra special for my birthday? Houki: Well that depends, mommy can't afford anything too expensive. Houki's child: Well it might be expensive but you said you'd get it for me sooner or later. I just want it to be sooner, Houki: Oh? What is it? Houki's child: I want my own sword. Houki: *swings a bit too hard and loses grip on the bokken resulting in a broken wall* Wait, what? Houki's child: I want my own sword. You said that the family blade would be passed down to me soon. Houki: Umm... can't you wait until you come of age? *goes to pick up her bokken* Houki's child: I can't! Houki: Why not? *grabs the bokken and pulls it out* Houki's child: So I can brag about it of course Houki: A sword is a very serious responsibility, it's not something to treat so trivially. Houki's child: But all the boys in class are bragging about how big their swords are! Houki's bokken snaps under her grip. ------------------------------ wonder if anyone got the joke |
2012-01-06, 05:48 | Link #16630 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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Concussion is a hit on the head, hard enough do disrupt the working on the brains. Light concussion usually don't result in anything fatal, though the victim often unconscious for 5 minute or so.
@Demi That's somehow reminds me of Star Driver's HoYay-related meme. "My sword are slightly longer than yours", yeah.
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