2009-01-02, 20:40 | Link #3082 | |
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I will agree that Claymore fanfiction sometimes gets a bit overly explicit - & the amount & fashion in which yuri gets presented seems to be increasing - but I think that the Animesuki thread is probably the most tame, moderated & constructive of all the places where Claymore fiction is submitted. If you throught MisterJB's stuff was overdone, you should see what they write on FF.net & Livejournal. If you think Claymore fanfiction is heading in a direction you're unhappy with, then do the most practical thing: write something, with your impressions & post it here. It'll be a better way for us to understand what you're talking about, instead of getting into personal feud with a fellow writer. |
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2009-01-02, 20:41 | Link #3083 |
Death by writing
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Hong Kong/Brisbane
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My picture album has been updated with a two-in-one profile mainly because it's almost physically impossible to find good artwork of these two characters.
Tonight's serving. I actually did not update on FF.net because I want to "lock and reload" on my current chapter count. But I will update tomorrow. For now, for those who keep up with Animesuki timezone rather than Ff.net timezone: Here is The Southern Battles.
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2009-01-02, 20:47 | Link #3085 |
Warden of the West
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Casterly Rock
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well, this is probrably the smallest chapter I ever wrote but like I said, i'm trying to put only one plot on one chapter. Well, I hope you enjoy it.
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2009-01-03, 03:04 | Link #3086 | |
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Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: Home of the 2010 Olympics
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I'm liking father and son . I'll leave shelter with the more conceptual review, since I'm tired and lazy. But before I hit submit, I'd like to do some self-advertising: Name: Stories of a Faint Smile Character: Teresa http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4765560/1/ As usual, constructive criticism is very, very welcome.
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2009-01-03, 07:08 | Link #3087 | |
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2009-01-03, 14:24 | Link #3088 | |
Banned
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
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Although I felt this chapter ruined the flow of the story, I think that it should have been the first chapter because of how the story before ended. The last chapter you put up should have been this one instead. I find that you do that a lot with your fic and it makes it difficult to read. Instead of going back and forth with your chapters, like writing about one thing then writing about something else in the next chapter, then going back to writing what you were writing before in the chapter before that makes it hard to fallow and it gets hard to remember whats going on. What I am saying is try to write about one thing at a time in your story to make the flow of the story easier to fallow. |
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2009-01-03, 14:32 | Link #3089 | |
Insane Fangirl
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2009-01-03, 14:40 | Link #3090 |
Banned
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Canada, but sometimes in La La-Land hanging out with Midori-chan89
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@Hari Michiru: You know these two chapters are the start of the second part of his story. The only reason why I felt it went against the flow of the story is because at the end of the first part of the story the father shows up.
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2009-01-03, 16:26 | Link #3094 |
Warden of the West
Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Casterly Rock
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Thanks fot the review hell and thanks for the advice. I will be sure to follow it so, the next three chapters will be solely focused on the Helen & Deneve arc, I think its conclusion will be really nice.
Hari Michuru: The blame is on me, myself and I. http://forums.animesuki.com/showthre...91#post2003091 That is where all began if you are interested. ps: it's vague. Maybe even too vague |
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