2011-11-23, 19:56 | Link #9181 |
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@ Eratas: Her name is Koyomi.
Anyway, you can. He's proud, and yes, flawed. But he doesn't relish the fact he's the "hero of London", because he believes everyone had a part in the victory. Many friends of his died, not to mention the losses on either side. That's a note I forgot. Also, a home situation has cropped up. I won't be back for a while. |
2011-11-23, 20:03 | Link #9182 | |||
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If there's any girl with decent ship tease and relationship development....it's neither Haruna, Lala, Yui or other harem, it's Rin. As in, Rin Kujou, the bodyguard of Saki Tenjouin. Unlike the usual, they started as pure just friend and growing attraction is mostly due to genuine interaction and chemistry (you can check the old To-Love-Ru Stratos if you want. Warning: Illogical plot, undefined fanon-rules, and Spotlight sue syndrome). If I take the realistic path and ignoring the fandom rage, then he'll ended up with Rin. Quote:
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EDIT: Rain, maybe he meant Tabane's adopted daughter form the novel?
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2011-11-23, 20:05 | Link #9183 |
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@ Rain - I meant Tabane's canon daughter, not Koyomi. How the hell would Koyomi knock out the three of them and knock them out? She's 5!
He may not be a braggart about it, but he also shows signs of enjoying the fame despite his claims otherwise. Irish calls him a hypocrite for this. The other one is the fact that Kyuukai keeps denying he's a killer. Like it or not, he keeps justifying his killings and always tries to distance himself from his acts and seems to angst when he doesn't. Irish calls him out on the fact that Joshua (he thinks) and Michael died because of him even if they didn't attack first and actually tried to help them. Irish full well knows and admits he's a killer and has no angst about it.
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2011-11-23, 20:12 | Link #9184 |
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@ Zero - Argh! Can't edit again!
Rin? But isn't she devoted to Saki and everything? She seems to borderline hate him in to love ru. I'm curious as to how they even become friends. Just make sure to keep the POV's balanced. Also, don't forget to put chapters that focus on the girls only. It's not only the males that push the story, everyone does. Side note - The experiment she used was a parody of the reverse bear trap. Instead of breaking someones jaw, it forcefully opens their mouth and feeds them carrots instead. All of the protag have their hands tied and the device on their heads. Irish smashes a window and uses the bars to keep it from opening fully and breaks the trap.
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2011-11-23, 20:25 | Link #9185 | ||||
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If you wonder what kind of yay, here's the excerpt of their first meeting. Quote:
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2011-11-23, 20:30 | Link #9186 | |||
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Touma is... so unlucky he does not even get mentioned. Accelerator = Irish. Level 5 Electromaster can fire the railgun even when the weapon is damage, stun pilots from extreme range, and do all sorts of scary things that the IS shield cannot stop. Right now, Laura is Level 2. But she can manifest enough of her power to allow her to 'punch through' G3 shields. IE, I'm using the canon scene where Laura heavily damaged Shenlong and Blue Tears with just her fists as proof for this crack. As well as account for how an IS supposedly weak to electricity can use railguns and heat rods like Schwarz Regen without backfiring. Quote:
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Laura Level 5 = Unstoppable Spear. Irish Level 5 = Ultimate Shield. Them in a fight = Ultimate Carnage Sex, since both enjoy fights.
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2011-11-23, 20:32 | Link #9187 |
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@ Meister - Waiting for your update for Vandam. I'm clicking fanfic.net for it.
@ Zero - Foe yay it is! Need help with re-writing it? I'm pretty good in grammar and formatting. Side note - Can you think of a first sign that Tatenashi and Irish are falling for each other. I need it to be subtle but not too subtle.
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2011-11-23, 20:40 | Link #9188 | ||
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@ Meister
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Anyway this is one of the most intense non-sexual shiptease so far, they're both jealous and convincing themselves that their feelings and concern for Rito is not-romantic (it's actually both). Quote:
I think one of the LEAST subtle cues is Irish paid a lot of attention to her (he tend to ignore people), problem lies in Tatenashi, we can't be sure she actually liked him or just teasing him on purpose (like with Ichika).
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2011-11-23, 20:44 | Link #9189 |
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@ Eratas: I intend to have the other male OC call him out on that. Kyuukai is flawed like everyone else, no matter how hard he tries to be perfect. Irish does the deconstructing job very well. If most deconstructions end up starting like sledgehammers, smashing away, then Irish is like a scapel, easily cutting at Kyuukai's mind.
Yep, Kyuukai's a hypocrite who's slowly trying not to be a hypocrite. His trying hard to justify his killing is what keeps him sane. He knows what he does is wrong, and when he angsts it's two sides of his brain trying to argue over which is right. Which pulls him back to square one, and he'll try to justify it again, starting the circle over again. He knows something's wrong with him, and so, he seeks more help. I intend to have another OC show up, when I have a school sequence. Yes, I have a school sequence. After Kyuukai comes back and is pulled out of duty, FRACTURE command (with fear of Tabane) sends him to a real, co-ed high school. The one Dan goes to. Ichika and the gang get pulled along as well, since Tabane pulled a few strings to make sure Kyuukai has some friends. At the school, Kyuukai encounters another student. A certain Ryoko Murakami. His technical stepsister, if he ever considered Daisuke to be anywhere near a father. After she realizes she can't get anywhere with Kyuukai, she'll focus on Ichika, and then somehow manage to land herself with Dan. Which in later (more like sooner) chapters, infuriates Utsuho. Kyuukai meets another person as well: Someone who actually will help him with his problems. The very recently hired school counsellor, Daniella Blanchard. The daughter of Daniel Blanchard. Kyuukai thinks its useless, but Tabane holds his weapons and projects hostage, and demands Kyuukai to go see her. And so begins therapy. |
2011-11-23, 20:46 | Link #9190 |
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@ Meister - Ironic that Irish is the strongest there yet he's the weakest in the real verse
But what's Laura's skill about? I have no Idea what thay spear means. Side note - Irish prefers to avoid combat, not enjoy it. Accelerator is a sadistic bastard when fighting, doesn't mean he enjoys it. @ Zero - So it's more of friendly enemy and rivalmance then? I know how to write those. Side note - How about actually trying not to tease him and use more appropriate actions? Of course, Irish just thinks she's planning something rather than see it as an improvement.
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2011-11-23, 20:50 | Link #9191 |
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@ Rain - Of course, Kyuukai also calls Irish out on his actions. It's not a straight hannibal lecture for Kyuukai. Problem is, Irish doesn't deny his problems and actually agrees with him, this infuriates Kyuukai a lot.
Side note - Why is everyone pairing Dan up now? Nobody thought of it before and I was going to use it for daydreams. Now all of us are doing it?
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2011-11-23, 20:57 | Link #9193 |
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@ Rain - Just seems odd since no one mentioned it before and now everyone here's doing it. Shadow and Daydreams also pair up those two.
Side note - Who do you want Kyuukai to hang out with the most in campus? I'm planning for Irish to spend time with the stident council group (Tatenashi, Kanzashi and Nohohohon sisters) since Ichika doesn't really talk to them.
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2011-11-23, 21:00 | Link #9194 | ||
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Rin also develop some kind of rivalry with Houki, due for them being resident katana-wielding lady of War. Meanwhile, Saki has strained friendship with Tatenashi since childhood and Saki ditched her after graduating from Junior High (for example Saki has A+ aptitude but limited combat skill, and that's just the tip of the BIG Iceberg....). Quote:
Going too school, back in 2-3 hours.
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2011-11-23, 21:02 | Link #9195 |
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@ Eratas: He could hang out with Kanzashi as well, for the same reasons as in HotM. Kanzashi aspires to be an IS engineer, and she's a fan of anime and manga. Same as Kyuukai, who could try to help her with her aspirations and they could share in their hobby. But he's ditching as soon as Irish shows up though.
But other than that, he'd either be pestering Houki to visit Tabane (if she knows about their relationship), or he'd be trying to woo Laura/hang out with her once they're together. When he's not doing either of those things, he'd either hang out with Ichika or follow him for laughs/research on harem dynamics. Kyuukai's staying where again? He could either stay on academy grounds like before, or you could do something else. Maybe he could stay at the orphanage I mentioned before? |
2011-11-23, 21:13 | Link #9196 |
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@ Zero - Then it's not a problem. I know how to write about Rivalmances since I've played a game about them. Belligerent sexual tension, ahoy!
The theme for Shadow is also about lettong go of the past and moving on. All protags can't do this and so they're hindered throughout the story. Side note - It really doesn't help that their first actual kiss was because she got drunk and basically mouth raped him (He's not strong, remember). This causes tension later on since he doesn't want to admit he felt anything about it. @ Rain - On campus. All of the protags stay on campus (Though I don't know who he'll be rooming with). Kanzashi still falls for Ichika but it's Irish who helps her get over her inferiority complex and telling her that she's not her sister. Irish and Kyuukai's relationship is extremely strained and they often come to confrontation with one another. Neither side is right most of the time though. Houki blames her sister for the wars so she's not going to be easily convinced about getting back together with Tabane. Ironically enough, Irish and Laura hang out with each other more than their respective LI's. Both of them can find peace with one another that theu can't get anywhere else.
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2011-11-23, 21:24 | Link #9197 |
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@ Eratas: Then Kyuukai can hang out with Tatenashi. They won't be LIs, but they'll at least be good friends. Kyuukai can help Tatenashi with her exploits on Irish (and he'll enjoy them, since Irish doesn't like it), and Tatenashi can help Kyuukai with his exploits on Laura (since she thinks the guy needs a girl and badly).
Say, what are your plans for Koyomi and Kuu in the story? What events do you intend for them to have? Anything big? |
2011-11-23, 21:42 | Link #9198 |
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@ Rain - Their plans will end up blowing in their faces since normal dating techniques won't work on them. Child soldiers were bred to forgo emotion.
Kyomi is mainly not present on account of being 5. Kuu, as mentioned before, puts the protags in Jigsaw parody trap for an experiment and becomes interested in Irish when he manages to disarm the reverse carrot traps Tabane and Kyuukai are gonna stress when they find both of their daughters/sisters interested on the guy that acts like the the opposite of what they believe in.
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