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Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:02

@ Rain - I limit the chapters in my other works to 3000-4000 and almost always leave cliffhangers

It leaves the readers both frustrated and wanting for more

Side note - Who'd be tsundere enough in the harem to deny they have a kid?

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:06

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Rain - I limit the chapters in my other works to 3000-4000 and almost always leave cliffhangers

It leaves the readers both frustrated and wanting for more

Side note - Who'd be tsundere enough in the harem to deny they have a kid?

Limiting is good, so curiosity will run in everyone's mind

@Side note - hmm, I can't think of any since everyone is inlove with Ichika

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:07

@ Eratas and Yachiyo: Oh, cliffhangers shall be abound. And they shall be EPIC.

And speaking of tsunderes, I'm thinking either Houki or Cecilia.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:08

Yeah, but would all of them accept that they had kid's? Houki's a tsundere for a reason.

@ Rain - Shadow avoids this

Most of the time, the chapter finishes with the proper ending.

Side note - I'd get Houki, but why Cecilia? Also, the most accepting are Maya, Laura (in an inversion, both her and her child state that, as the wife, Ichika was the one who gave birth), and Tatenashi.

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:10

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

@ Eratas and Yachiyo: Oh, cliffhangers shall be abound. And they shall be EPIC.

And speaking of tsunderes, I'm thinking either Houki or Cecilia.

Not only EPIC, but will leave a feeling of DESIRE for more, since...

GREED IS GOOD

\m/

@Eras

Houki... but, is she the first one who fell in love with him? and he confessed in the OVA, so I think making her deny having a child with Ichika is kinda weird, unless something happened between them both. (Quarrel)

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:12

@ Eratas: She's from a prestigious, high class family. There's a lot of stigma with having a kid at her age (even if the kid was from an alternate future), especially if it's found out that he or she is hers.

Also, she tries to be the most "pure" heroine. Having a kid would imply that she did intimate acts with Ichika. And that she went through child birth.

First stage shall probably be denial.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:13

I wonder how to do Kanzashi's daydream

@ Rain - Why would she not want a kid? She needs an heir, doesn't she? Also, pure my ass

She thought she was going to have sex with Ichika when she got invited to his room during the beach trip. She even wore lacy underwear

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:14

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

I wonder how to do Kanzashi's daydream

Referring to cannonball fast, you'll easily get one

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:17

@ Eratas: Irk. Forgot about that.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:19

@ Yachi - I need more that that. I need to show then actually hanging out in their free time.

@ Rain - All of them room with their respective mother's (Bar Kazuma and Usami). This gets hectic since Charlotte and Laura are roommates.

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:21

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Yachi - I need more that that. I need to show then actually hanging out in their free time.

@ Rain - All of them room with their respective mother's (Bar Kazuma and Usami). This gets hectic since Charlotte and Laura are roommates.

How about in the cannonball fast, saving Ichika's life and having her injured. Then Ichika visits her. And.... You know what to do next ^o^

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:22

@ Eratas: Do the kids argue with each other on whose mother deserves to be with Ichika (and in turn which kid is the one that exists)?

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:25

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Originally Posted by EthernalRain

@ Eratas: Do the kids argue with each other on whose mother deserves to be with Ichika (and in turn which kid is the one that exists)?

You spoiled the spoiler

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:25

@ Yachi - Sounds kinda like an angst fic

@ Senpai - Rarely. It's made quite clear by Tabane that if one of them deserved to be with Ichika more, then they'd all disappear except one of them. However, the girls become more agressive because they're worried. A lot of them get along and are friends. Hell, they were cooking with each other during chapter 4, and they immediately stick together if they find another kid.

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:28

@ Eratas: Your story probably has one of the lightest tones out of all the IS fics.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:34

@ Rain - What do you expect? They're kid's, not teenagers. They don't exactly worry about it. Also, a lot of the kid's have unpleasant backgrounds. Laura's too busy with work to spend time with her daughter. Likewise for Charlotte. Shouta's ousted and mocked since he looks like a girl, Tatenashi jr's kept busy with being trained as the new head. Many of the other kids don't have the best backstories, so they don't really worry about going back to their time. Kazuma's the worst off since he's a clone and Ichika had to die ala Cloud and Zack for him to survive. He's barely emotionally active since he's a clone and the first emotion he ever felt was being sad and crying that Ichika died.

Yachiyo · 2012-02-03, 01:34

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

@ Yachi - Sounds kinda like an angst fic

@ Senpai - Rarely. It's made quite clear by Tabane that if one of them deserved to be with Ichika more, then they'd all disappear except one of them. However, the girls become more agressive because they're worried. A lot of them get along and are friends. Hell, they were cooking with each other during chapter 4, and they immediately stick together if they find another kid.

How about making it a little disappointing?

Making them all disappear and one random kid from one random woman appeared from random place?

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:35

... And there we have the character development.

Your fic is shaping up to be amazing.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-03, 01:38

@ Yachi - What do you mean?

@ Rain - Nope, that's subverted too. Ichika asks Kazuma in detail about what happened to him and Kazuma says that he can't answer that since it would jack up the rating of the fic and it won't fit the genres. He fast forwards the explanation so Ichika can hear, but the audience can't

EthernalRain · 2012-02-03, 01:41

Oh, the weight and suspense of a well timed change of where the audience is watching.

2012-02-03, 01:02	Link #20641
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Rain - I limit the chapters in my other works to 3000-4000 and almost always leave cliffhangers It leaves the readers both frustrated and wanting for more Side note - Who'd be tsundere enough in the harem to deny they have a kid? __________________

2012-02-03, 01:08	Link #20644
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Yeah, but would all of them accept that they had kid's? Houki's a tsundere for a reason. @ Rain - Shadow avoids this Most of the time, the chapter finishes with the proper ending. Side note - I'd get Houki, but why Cecilia? Also, the most accepting are Maya, Laura (in an inversion, both her and her child state that, as the wife, Ichika was the one who gave birth), and Tatenashi. __________________

2012-02-03, 01:13	Link #20647
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	I wonder how to do Kanzashi's daydream @ Rain - Why would she not want a kid? She needs an heir, doesn't she? Also, pure my ass She thought she was going to have sex with Ichika when she got invited to his room during the beach trip. She even wore lacy underwear __________________

2012-02-03, 01:19	Link #20650
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Yachi - I need more that that. I need to show then actually hanging out in their free time. @ Rain - All of them room with their respective mother's (Bar Kazuma and Usami). This gets hectic since Charlotte and Laura are roommates. __________________

2012-02-03, 01:25	Link #20654
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Yachi - Sounds kinda like an angst fic @ Senpai - Rarely. It's made quite clear by Tabane that if one of them deserved to be with Ichika more, then they'd all disappear except one of them. However, the girls become more agressive because they're worried. A lot of them get along and are friends. Hell, they were cooking with each other during chapter 4, and they immediately stick together if they find another kid. __________________

2012-02-03, 01:07	Link #20643
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas and Yachiyo: Oh, cliffhangers shall be abound. And they shall be *EPIC*. And speaking of tsunderes, I'm thinking either Houki or Cecilia.

2012-02-03, 01:12	Link #20646
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: She's from a prestigious, high class family. There's a lot of stigma with having a kid at her age (even if the kid was from an alternate future), especially if it's found out that he or she is hers. Also, she tries to be the most "pure" heroine. Having a kid would imply that she did intimate acts with Ichika. And that she went through child birth. First stage shall probably be denial.

2012-02-03, 01:17	Link #20649
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: *Irk.* Forgot about that.

2012-02-03, 01:22	Link #20652
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: Do the kids argue with each other on whose mother deserves to be with Ichika (and in turn which kid is the one that exists)?

2012-02-03, 01:28	Link #20655
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	@ Eratas: Your story probably has one of the lightest tones out of all the IS fics.

2012-02-03, 01:34	Link #20656
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Rain - What do you expect? They're kid's, not teenagers. They don't exactly worry about it. Also, a lot of the kid's have unpleasant backgrounds. Laura's too busy with work to spend time with her daughter. Likewise for Charlotte. Shouta's ousted and mocked since he looks like a girl, Tatenashi jr's kept busy with being trained as the new head. Many of the other kids don't have the best backstories, so they don't really worry about going back to their time. Kazuma's the worst off since he's a clone and Ichika had to die ala Cloud and Zack for him to survive. He's barely emotionally active since he's a clone and the first emotion he ever felt was being sad and crying that Ichika died. __________________

2012-02-03, 01:35	Link #20658
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	... And there we have the character development. Your fic is shaping up to be amazing.

2012-02-03, 01:38	Link #20659
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Yachi - What do you mean? @ Rain - Nope, that's subverted too. Ichika asks Kazuma in detail about what happened to him and Kazuma says that he can't answer that since it would jack up the rating of the fic and it won't fit the genres. He fast forwards the explanation so Ichika can hear, but the audience can't __________________

2012-02-03, 01:41	Link #20660
EthernalRain Head of FRACTURE R&D Join Date: Oct 2011	Oh, the weight and suspense of a well timed change of where the audience is watching.