2008-02-20, 04:24 | Link #20182 | |
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And so begins The Education of Widuri in the... important aspects of human interaction With a most able teacher in Hayate, nothing can go wrong *runs*
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And in my case, I guess it's more of just using author's freedom. But I'll try to make it as accurate to canon as much as I can to a certain degree. So I'll keep this in mind. Quote:
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Thanks for going over this, ark. It may not exactly be very compatible with what I've been doing, but there will be some good things to come out of this once I get the fic going. It's a good standard to review in case I have some balancing issues. Quote:
I'll tackle the rest of the backlog later.
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2008-02-20, 04:49 | Link #20184 | |||||
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The conquest of the TSAB main HQ in the dimensional sea is also a critical step in order to gain access to the Infinite Library as well as the warships. An attack here will happen simultaneously with the one on Midchilda. In order to conquer the non administrated worlds, those warships will be needed. Then I'll start to consolidate my position and start building up my forces for the next step, by getting resources from uninhibited worlds. As for the conquest of the non administrated worlds, it should be simple enough although it might not reach this step as I think the heroes will counter attack before I even reach this point. Anyway, taking Earth for example, even with "the much-dreaded projectile weapons, and we also have nukes, as well as military leaders short-sighted enough to want to use them", it shouldn't be much of a problem. First, I think it is canonly proven that Earth is unable to detect the TSAB warships else they would have detected the Asura in orbit during the events in A's. Second, I'm not planning to land any troops but launch attacks from orbit instead. I don't think they can shoot something they cannot detect. Also, I got the VUDs, which by design, are used to take over an enemy's forces and use it against them. I'm probably cheating but the VUDs is most important element in my plan. And if those short sighted military leaders decided to use nukes against those "infected"... well this poses a moral problem to Wild Goose's and Kagerou's OCs whom if I remember correctly, want to prevent something like what happen to their world from happening on other worlds... Would they aid the Terrans or work against them :evilgrin: Quote:
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2008-02-20, 05:03 | Link #20185 | |
RUN, YOU FOOLS!
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: Formerly Iwakawa base and Chaldea. Now Teyvat, the Astral Express & the Outpost
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2008-02-20, 05:17 | Link #20186 |
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Feh, didn't feel like working on story tonight, so after Roland, I played some game, then got in the mood for technical hashing...
so I present to you.. Spoiler for THIS:
I didn't realize until I was mid-way through that I turned it into a lightning element weapon. Last edited by AdmiralTigerclaw; 2008-02-20 at 05:35. |
2008-02-20, 05:25 | Link #20187 |
~ I Do ~
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When civilians are in trouble, they call the TSAB. But when the TSAB is in trouble, they call... CLERIC-KNIGHTS The best there was, the best there is, and the best there ever will be. Go anywhere, kill anything. They are most comfortable knee deep in Hell while kicking ass big time. They answer to no one and no one, except the Light itself. ~~~~~~ The Cleric-Knight is not your Ace Enforcer. He is not meant for petty arrests and investigations. He is the relentless weapon of the Light that never hesitates, never regrets. His sole aim is the purification of the infected and the extermination of great evils. He is the crusader, the Judge, the executioner rolled into one. Light help you if they ever come for you. ~~~~~~ Daemons, Heretics, Evil. Your time is over. CLERIC-KNIGHTS The buck stops here. ~~~~~~ Authorized by the Regional Government of Belka. ~~~~~~ The following is an excerpt from a file detailing the nature of the Cleric-Knights in general: Spoiler for Full Codex:
~~~~~~ Notable Members of the Cleric-Knights and Celestial Being | | | | | | PS: Oh shoot me for making this character shrine. :P This post made me go @_@ at the sheer complexity. I did something like that before, but to rebuild it was really >_<.
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Damn you KEY. They are, but the nicknames, the fame and their 'Ala Altra' existence is solely a 'small legend in a small world'. Quote:
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The issue is not of taking a more active role, the issue is being constantly prepared for the future, by analyzing ones weakness, strengths, and constantly making an effort to better one's self. One never know when things can turn ugly and saying 'if the enemy can reach me, lol we might as well give up' is not the right mentality. Quote:
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I get to see real life girls wearing cheongsam sometimes during Chinese New Year in my country. Though I must say its quite rare around here. Not many people seem to want to wear our traditional clothes any more. My friend called it the deterioration of our culture, and I have to sadly agree that it is true. Quote:
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Nowadays, things like watching the moon, lanterns, actual neighbourhood lion-dance throughout neighbours, and so many subtle things about 'fun festivities' all died. The only good thing is ang pow, and I don't even get to use it until I'm out of university. It's not THAT long... compared to so many of Satashi's stuff, it's tame. Altogether it's got only about 100,000 words+.
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2008-02-20, 05:49 | Link #20189 | ||
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It's over! ;_; Thank you for this great story! "DVD" release? Can't wait! Quote:
EDIT: Ah thank you... thanks to this picture I know now that CthulhuTech exists.
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2008-02-20, 05:56 | Link #20190 | ||
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Although integrating both Celestial Being and the Grey Knights into a single entity is quite the unusual concept indeed No prob
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2008-02-20, 05:57 | Link #20191 | |
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... I have NO idea what you're talking about. Incidentally the next part is the only thing I know about fightclub.
* Tshou raises his hand and smacks the back of Sheba's head. Tshou: First rule about Fight Club, you do NOT talk about Fight Club! Quote:
... .. . .. ... ATC... who are you trying to fool? This isn't a magical weapon at all. Its an thinly disguised ion/electric cannon (i think) with an exotic power source (mana) that requires a mage to use with an insanely long range. I don't know about the rest but this is a personal request from me. When you design stuff, could you consider throwing away all the sci-fi stuff out of the window? |
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2008-02-20, 06:15 | Link #20192 | |
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That's the Rebuilt bits, and accomodates both the God Empress and Sankt Kaiser theories as well, and throws in more background about Celestial Being in Nanohaverse. The whole aim of that codex copypasta is so that when my guys go around yelling "Beginning Intervention", no one will yell "but isn't that illegal?" since their right to operate independently goes a long way and reeks of High Council stink. For once, like ol Nel, the Brains have their uses. Also, the first part before the copypasta is supposed to be a TV ad aired in TSAB channels to raise awareness about the Cleric-Knights, and hopefully perk interest for the talented. I'll do a proper video about who should apply later.
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Of course, I'm also of the belief that I should be "ripping apart" the stories and ideas politely, which means no swearing and no personal attacks, which is another thing I've been trying to hammer into people. Quote:
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For example, you mentioned that resource-gathering has been going on from MC 0043 and picked up at MC 0068. That's at least twenty-five years for this conspiracy to have existed. Twenty-five years is a long time for a person. It's more than enough time for them to doubt the worthiness of their cause, more than enough time for them to accidentally slip up, and more than enough time for them to get promoted. Suddenly the low-ranking is not low-ranking any more. These people are going to need a lot of fanaticism to keep up the charade for twenty-five years. Or just seven years, if you're intending for recruitment to begin from MC 0068. Also, if they're low-ranking, they don't have much influence, and they'll need a lot of helpers in order to keep up the conspiracy. Which means even more people to be in on the secret. I realize that none of them may be individually cognizant of the entire plan, but they're still being asked to both commit a crime (probably serious) and pretend that nothing is out of the ordinary. I know that one person in the right place at the right time can make a huge difference, but that difference tends to be more chaotic than directed, and for a plan like this to go off efficiently, they're going to need a lot of direction. In other words, this turns it from a "rogue faction" of the TSAB into a vast conspiracy with hundreds, or likely even thousands, of fanatics dedicated to their cause. I'm not saying that it's impossible, but I'm just giving a warning that it may or may not be story you want to write. Quote:
This also makes the assumption, albeit not unfounded given what we've seen of the series, that the TSAB is putting all its eggs into one basket, and taking out the city and its environs will be enough to cripple the administration. Remember that we're dealing with at least an entire planet. It's actually relatively easy to drop a planet into barbarism and chaos, but far more difficult to take it over and still retain a modicum of order. A rebellion will not last very long if there's nothing to eat the next day. Quote:
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The "charismatic leader" is the best suggestion I can offer without going deeper into esoteric scenarios, and I'd add that he would probably use both respect and fear to keep people in line. Not so much of the fear, but lay on the respect. These people should want to die for this leader, whether because of personal charisma, or because they think that the leader really does have the best answer and the capability to carry it out. And you will need a leader, or at least a leading force, since someone has to be working on all of this and calling the shots. I do like the idea of "infection", but I'm not sure that Unison Devices as we know them are the way to go. That's mostly a mechanical and probably semantics issue, though. If possible, I'd like to see (here or via PM) how the VUDs work, since what I'm assuming may not be correct. Specifically, I want to know exactly how they spread and infect people, and exactly what they can do once they've infected someone. The first scenario I thought of was that one may as well infect the entire planet of Midchilda, and all of the off-planet personnel, and enough of the other planets, such that one can just switch on the infection. This would require that the VUDs just act as a kind of basic mental change, so that those infected still have their usual "this is my job" state of mind, but have their beliefs changed to match the villain group in your story. Sort of like a mass instant conversion. The second scenario is that one may as well just infect the high-ranking TSAB personnel, since the TSAB, for the most part, follows orders. In both scenarios, the VUDs must be undetectable by any known means used by the regular personnel. This is all assuming that the VUDs are the entire point of the story. Otherwise, it would probably be less trouble to just Machiavelli oneself to be the best and brightest star of the TSAB, and then have the present leadership assassinated. Then take over and start your reforms and changes. Random notes that I can't figure out where to put: the villainous group should probably have a sense of superiority over the non-administered worlds, in the "we're doing you a favour by colonizing you" way. If the charade falls, this may result in friction with those who are from non-administered worlds. It's probably not essential, but it's the one way I can think of offhand to rationalize the "subjugate non-administered worlds forcibly" goal. EDIT: I should probably mention that I am trying as hard as possible not to prejudice my thinking with concepts from ReBoot. Specifically the Season 4 Daemon arc. |
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2008-02-20, 06:23 | Link #20195 | ||
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And there is the fact that while primarily magical, Nanoha is also inescapably sci-fi. Heck, Nanoha once wielded a high-mega launcher-like weapon that looked like something straight out of Gundam or Eva in the manga. And of course, what would you call the cyborgs and mecha? Besides, it's still a magical weapon as far as I can see, just with a far more technical explanation than your usual magical weapon. Also, I'm not sure about your gripes when you have Tais, Yui and the Eva system that's essentially sci-fi in presentation. Quote:
And operating outside the jurisdication of any law sure is fun Welcome back to the madness that is OC
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2008-02-20, 06:30 | Link #20196 | |
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And the best part is that they don't sneak around but are Licenced to Flout.
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2008-02-20, 06:30 | Link #20197 | |
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I'm here to somehow relieve myself of the pressure im facing X_X
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2008-02-20, 06:34 | Link #20198 | |
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Foy: (reties hair) Blame it on your height for being so inconspicuous. Gimmy: The funny thing is, how come the silent one got remembered? Hiro: ... Action speaks louder.
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2008-02-20, 06:43 | Link #20200 |
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Right, first off, let me introduce you to the russian coat of arms:
Difference in details, but the same concept... ...and since belka existed in the far corners of history, does this mean the russians are decendants of belka? There's a rather cracky idea for you: russian knights
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