2012-01-28, 20:47 | Link #19823 |
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@ Eratas: You'd probably get complaints if they were all girls, as well...
Or not. I'm having some difficulties with the writing of HotM... I'm finding that writing and rewriting chapter 17 has become a serious chore, and I'm having much more fun writing other stories that have a broader possible storyline. HotM... It's slowly not becoming fun to write. I'll finish it eventually, but for now... I doubt I'll even get to it. I'm not going to push myself to getting to it, so for now... I'm on Infinite Stratos Fic hiatus. I'll still show for this forum though. |
2012-01-28, 20:55 | Link #19826 |
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Nasuverse is way too complicated I'll probably make a kingdom hesrts fic and continue my Index fic at some point. Maybe a Dragon age fic as well.
Also, FI was supposed to have a darker plot, but it eventually turned to humor. Only Kazuma's the remnant of that.
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2012-01-28, 21:00 | Link #19827 |
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I've got a good understanding of the nasuverse, and I've got a fic idea that will work excellently (well, at least to me).
Also, humor isn't bad. Darkness can create character development, so some spices of that might be good. Your fic idea has so much potential for character development in the background (or foreground) of the humor. |
2012-01-28, 21:04 | Link #19829 |
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@ Rain - It's a bit too mood whiplash. Later on, the kids explain what they were doing before they got warped. Most of these are average. However, Kazuma says nothing unusual was happening with him......then the flashback shows Ichika's recently dead corpse and kazuma trying to do CpR to it even if he knows he's already dead.
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2012-01-28, 21:07 | Link #19830 |
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@ Yachiyo: May the fastest poster claim it!
@ Eratas: Try to slow the whiplash so you don't break your readers figurative necks. Make it seem like a fair possibility, instead of bringing it out of nowhere. Over the chapters, make it a point to see why he acts awkwardly around Ichika, and seems to avoid questions about his past and any questions regarding his relationship with Ichika. |
2012-01-28, 21:10 | Link #19831 |
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His intro with Shouta's already markedly different from the rest. Shouta takes note of the fact that Kazuma seems to be injured, but ue keeps saying he's not and they should look for someone. Then they meet Tatenashi and he absolutely flips and runs away wjen he sees her uniform.
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2012-01-28, 21:15 | Link #19832 |
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That could just mean he's shy, aside from the potential injuries.
Or that could portray to the audience he might have come from a universe where, dare I say it, he might have come from a universe where he was abused by his "parents". Even though we know that's not the case, and he doesn't have parents. |
2012-01-28, 21:16 | Link #19833 |
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I started playing iDOLM@STER Cinderella Girls. There goes my spare time...
Trying to cut down though lol But with my Nanoha fic in progress, with LOADS of inspiration, Vandam is on a short hiatus, cos I usually run out of steam pretty fast, which then oscillates back to Vandam.
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2012-01-28, 21:33 | Link #19836 |
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His world is basically the IS warfare and dominance up to ten thousand. He's an imperfect clone of Ichika, so he has no actual parents. He runs from Tatenashi because her uniform has the ISA symbol, which just about everyone from his world pisses their pants in fear of. That and he's hopped up n tranqs. He's not thinking the most logically.
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2012-01-28, 21:40 | Link #19839 |
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@ Demi - That's why he fails to notice that he's in ISA in the first place. It took seeing the symbol to make him realize it. Also, seeing Shouta made him doubt it since he has no reason to believe a male would be in ISA. Shouta remarks that he's walking like he's sleepy or sluggish, so he's already being affected.
@ Senpai - Meh, I'm stuck as well since I'm wondering how to implement Madoka>_< Nasuverse doesn't have much of a following nowadays due to the fact that no games have been released recently. Also, is your story an OC one again?
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