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demino_hellsin · 2012-02-01, 11:01

The battle with Silver Gospel didn't turn out as planned, not as Tabane planned anyway. Ichika and the girls won, but the Gospel is still on the loose. What will be its pilot's fate? The Gospel's fate? Whatever happens, the repercussions will be great.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 11:05

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demino_hellsin · 2012-02-01, 11:06

slightly updated version:

The battle with Silver Gospel didn't turn out as planned, not as Tabane planned anyway. Ichika and the girls won, but the Gospel is still on the loose. What of the pilot? The Gospel? Whatever happens, the repercussions may be greater than they thought.

well posting it now.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 11:08

Meteorology is not my field, can't answer.

As for the shield, not elaborated by canon, so you're very much free to exploit.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 11:11

@ Demi - Good luck

@ Senpai - Does rain make the sky darker during nighttime? Would that make it easier to sneak or would the water make you footsteps easier to hear?

Side note - Is it possible Cecilia can overpower a grown man? It doesn't have to be through pure physical force.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 11:17

Cecilia? Pfftt...at best she's using her entire body, lunge/charge, then run (she does have exceptional agility I remember)

Depends, sometimes the sky can be clear as hell and still raining. I believe it's easier to sneak if you careful not to step on water puddle.

demino_hellsin · 2012-02-01, 11:22

well I need to sleep. Have to wake up for school in 4 hours @_@

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 11:25

@ Senpai - Really? Shame, I wanted to portray her as more badass

My plan for the final fight was that the sky darkened due to the rain and the constant water pattering made it hard to see and hear the footsteps. This makes Irish's fight with Kyuukai more of a hit and run since staying in the open means getting caught and losing. Is it alright?

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 11:29

Uhh... I'm going to sleep

(fic progress today: 250 words)

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 11:32

Going to sleep. See ya guys later

agetreme · 2012-02-01, 12:11

@Eratas:

You miss out the important part: Drive/Push Main characters harder.

The enemies are only there to complicate matters.
Edit: Just like the canon story.

if that answer doesn't satisfy you:

Let me ask you, what is the plot of your story? So far, all I had been reading is: throwing Irish at IS users.....(need to know your definition of a plot before I can answer it precisely)

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 18:46

@ Treme - Plot? Okay, so far here's the plot.

PT is trying to incite a worldwide conflict using the infinite Stratos. This is just the main plot. The other plots deal with the experimentation of people in order to try and emulate Ichika's capabilities, how the different parts of the world use the IS for bpth public and secret affairs, and Ichika's origins as to how he can pilot the IS and whether this changes anything for him as a person. The only reason I ask abour Irish a lot is because his plot is the one I'm unsure of. Also, didn't you read my posts of Irish rarely fighting IS pilots now since a normal fighting an IS is a bit hard to swallow?

PT takes center stage here and they're the main antagonost force. However, that doesn't mean they're the only bad guys. Human's can do a lot if they're given big enough toys to play with.

Now, can you tell mw your plot please?

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 19:07

PLOT: There's no plot in Sacred Twins, absolutely not. It's all about a pair of opposite-sex twins growing and nurturing their shameful and forbidden relationship, and the despair of the girls hoping for his attention... which he wouldn't provide.

Or is there?

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 19:10

@'Senpai - So what about PT, the Orimura's effed up family, and dealing with a the girls problems?

@ Treme - My definition of a plot's simple: What's the main point, what's the conlflict, and what is the story trying to achieve?

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 19:12

See the link, of course I'm lying.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 19:15

Cerebus syndrome also hits your story. FI has random bursts of it depending on the character.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 19:21

What have been written so far about chapter 12 (and probably 13, split due to sheer size again) actually makes fight with laura look like an anti-climax... unless I can spice it up.

Eratas123 · 2012-02-01, 19:38

Why? It's not like it was a climax in canon with the one hit kills sword

ZeroXSEED · 2012-02-01, 19:47

Well, I amped up in Sacred Twins, besides the HOLY SHIT achievement Ichika get for defeating Image Interface Weapon (again), the final fought also involves... an epic swordfight between Ichika and mechanical copy of Mondo Grosso 1 era Chifuyu (Laura + VT System). Cementing the fact that Ichika will surpass her status as THE strongest pilot in the world.

blitz1/2 · 2012-02-01, 20:08

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

PLOT: There's no plot in Sacred Twins, absolutely not. It's all about a pair of opposite-sex twins growing and nurturing their shameful and forbidden relationship, and the despair of the girls hoping for his attention... which he wouldn't provide.

Or is there?

You want me to make a plot? >: )

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ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Meteorology is not my field, can't answer. As for the shield, not elaborated by canon, so you're very much free to exploit. __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Demi - Good luck @ Senpai - Does rain make the sky darker during nighttime? Would that make it easier to sneak or would the water make you footsteps easier to hear? Side note - Is it possible Cecilia can overpower a grown man? It doesn't have to be through pure physical force. __________________

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ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Cecilia? Pfftt...at best she's using her entire body, lunge/charge, then run (she does have exceptional agility I remember) Depends, sometimes the sky can be clear as hell and still raining. I believe it's easier to sneak if you careful not to step on water puddle. __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Senpai - Really? Shame, I wanted to portray her as more badass My plan for the final fight was that the sky darkened due to the rain and the constant water pattering made it hard to see and hear the footsteps. This makes Irish's fight with Kyuukai more of a hit and run since staying in the open means getting caught and losing. Is it alright? __________________

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demino_hellsin That one guy Join Date: Nov 2011	The battle with Silver Gospel didn't turn out as planned, not as Tabane planned anyway. Ichika and the girls won, but the Gospel is still on the loose. What will be its pilot's fate? The Gospel's fate? Whatever happens, the repercussions will be great.

2012-02-01, 11:06	Link #20463
demino_hellsin That one guy Join Date: Nov 2011	slightly updated version: The battle with Silver Gospel didn't turn out as planned, not as Tabane planned anyway. Ichika and the girls won, but the Gospel is still on the loose. What of the pilot? The Gospel? Whatever happens, the repercussions may be greater than they thought. well posting it now.

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demino_hellsin That one guy Join Date: Nov 2011	well I need to sleep. Have to wake up for school in 4 hours @_@

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ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Uhh... I'm going to sleep (fic progress today: 250 words) __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Going to sleep. See ya guys later __________________

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agetreme Just another Idiot Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Delusion world	@Eratas: You miss out the important part: Drive/Push Main characters harder. The enemies are only there to complicate matters. Edit: Just like the canon story. if that answer doesn't satisfy you: Let me ask you, what is the plot of your story? So far, all I had been reading is: throwing Irish at IS users.....(need to know your definition of a plot before I can answer it precisely) __________________ Ara Han

2012-02-01, 18:46	Link #20472
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Treme - Plot? Okay, so far here's the plot. PT is trying to incite a worldwide conflict using the infinite Stratos. This is just the main plot. The other plots deal with the experimentation of people in order to try and emulate Ichika's capabilities, how the different parts of the world use the IS for bpth public and secret affairs, and Ichika's origins as to how he can pilot the IS and whether this changes anything for him as a person. The only reason I ask abour Irish a lot is because his plot is the one I'm unsure of. Also, didn't you read my posts of Irish rarely fighting IS pilots now since a normal fighting an IS is a bit hard to swallow? PT takes center stage here and they're the main antagonost force. However, that doesn't mean they're the only bad guys. Human's can do a lot if they're given big enough toys to play with. Now, can you tell mw your plot please? __________________

2012-02-01, 19:07	Link #20473
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	PLOT: There's no plot in Sacred Twins, absolutely not. It's all about a pair of opposite-sex twins growing and nurturing their shameful and forbidden relationship, and the despair of the girls hoping for his attention... which he wouldn't provide. Or is there? __________________

2012-02-01, 19:10	Link #20474
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@'Senpai - So what about PT, the Orimura's effed up family, and dealing with a the girls problems? @ Treme - My definition of a plot's simple: What's the main point, what's the conlflict, and what is the story trying to achieve? __________________

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ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	See the link, of course I'm lying. __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Cerebus syndrome also hits your story. FI has random bursts of it depending on the character. __________________

2012-02-01, 19:21	Link #20477
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	What have been written so far about chapter 12 (and probably 13, split due to sheer size again) actually makes fight with laura look like an anti-climax... unless I can spice it up. __________________

2012-02-01, 19:38	Link #20478
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Why? It's not like it was a climax in canon with the one hit kills sword __________________

2012-02-01, 19:47	Link #20479
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Well, I amped up in Sacred Twins, besides the HOLY SHIT achievement Ichika get for defeating Image Interface Weapon (again), the final fought also involves... an epic swordfight between Ichika and mechanical copy of Mondo Grosso 1 era Chifuyu (Laura + VT System). Cementing the fact that Ichika will surpass her status as THE strongest pilot in the world. __________________