2012-01-11, 07:57 | Link #17581 | |||
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If the stab went to the large artery, then the kick will takes the cake and make it instant defeat (also, loud, loud scream). If not treated in 3 minutes, may result of dying. Nom nom nom, I have the copy from Blitz's mediafire link remember? :|
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2012-01-11, 08:06 | Link #17582 |
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@ Senpai - You know, what are the chances that Ran has a Kohai that likes her, stalks her, and acts Yandere on any perceived "competition"?
Act intimidating? How does she try to intimidate someone who got stabbed and beat up on a daily basis? He actually angsts very little after finding out he's been fighting his remaining parents and siblings. He remarks that since he doesn't remember anything about his childhood, then he has no reason to care about people he doesn't remember. What on the foot itself or just above it? Side note - Is it the same doujin? I thought Blitz gave you a different one. I got mine from Tempest35.
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2012-01-11, 08:12 | Link #17583 | |||
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if that big red line got stabbed, game over in 3 minutes... no, 2 minutes (it's a picture of hip) No, mine has same title and Chifuyu introduction scene.
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2012-01-11, 08:27 | Link #17586 |
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@ Senpai - She's been described as an honor student, the student council prez, and an "Onee-sama" in her school.
Kirino's brother doesn't have experience in street fighting and dangerous situations. How else would he react? "I feel so conflicted fighting a family I've never heard about and is working for the people who treated me like a dog for a year!" or something? Looks like hitting the foot itself or very lower leg is safe. I'm assuming it still stuns a person even if it's not on the artery.
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2012-01-11, 08:27 | Link #17587 | |||
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Anyway, change the whole 'Ran involved in teh bloodbath' stuff. The first time Ran saw Ichika and Dan in their blood frenzy is in chapter 12. :| Quote:
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2012-01-11, 08:47 | Link #17590 |
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@ Senpai - Is their dad alive here or on a bus trip somewhere?
I'm afraid I made Irish a bit too.......blank. He rarely ever seems to emote and never seems to angst no matter how many things he finds out in the story. That's how the plane fight ends Who says you can't bring a knife to a gunfight @ Demi - You just made a draft that's good enough to be a chapter prologue. Why not post it?
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2012-01-11, 08:52 | Link #17592 | ||||
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EDIT: really? I don't see it being more than T, pushing a little bit but not breaking the limit. -------------------------------- Also, local track I found that fits Sacred Twins somehow, will post the translated lyric later.
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2012-01-11, 08:57 | Link #17595 |
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@ Senpai - What did Dan have to do about his Dad not being there? What do you mean reckless?
Most of those were anger and he rarely ever shows anything else. Is that sufficient enough for a character to go on? @ Demi - Why? Just because of that one d-bag who trolls every OC fic out there? He did it on the Index archive as well.
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2012-01-11, 09:03 | Link #17596 |
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If I'm going back to IS section of the site, it's going to be with a male OC story. Though I'll probably never get one off the ground. Writing it's annoying, like groping around in the dark and the only light to guide you is the one that keeps saying you're going the wrong way.
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2012-01-11, 09:06 | Link #17597 |
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@ Demi - have you seen the recent fics right now? Both of them are male IS pilots and none of them have any complaints. The ones who keep saying negative things and troll comments left a while ago and you're pretty much free to do what you want. Why not go against the grain here and do a fic that shows an (initially) uninvolved, untrained, and inexperienced OC? That's new and allows for character growth.
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2012-01-11, 09:08 | Link #17598 | ||
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Reckless as in, he could die at any moment if shit hits the fan and students brawl turned into a blood carnage (like what happened in the flashback and chapter 12 in general) Quote:
I remember Irish tend to be confused how to act to kindness and positive attitude. @ Demi I agree with Eras, I'm going as far as changing the MOST popular heroine into a guy, then inserting a full fledged Marty Stu to add extra salt for the butthurt. But they're essential to the plot, so I did it anyway. However, if you want to do it, best if the character has growth potential, not already matured. The stray Gospel for example has a lot of potential, even if it guarantees bittersweet/downer ending.
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2012-01-11, 09:12 | Link #17599 |
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Probably why I'm wracking my brain for a new idea on a male pilot But I don't want it to be an IS or IS derivative. It's going to be something that fights directly against IS. No hiding, no scheming.
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2012-01-11, 09:19 | Link #17600 |
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@ Demi - It doesn't have to be a mech. Airplanes could probably foght against an IS if they're tricked out enough and the pilot is good enough. This also prevents the whole Marty Stu thing since they can't say he can summon it out of his ass whenever he wants.
@ Senpai - .......Wouldn't that Role go to Gen instead? He has the overportectiveness and hamminess down already Does shyness to perverted things count? He acts like Ichika in regards to those. Also, I just remembered amnesiac mode which is very emotional.
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