Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Rising Dragon]

The State of Affairs got its first review that included a request for the story to be NanoFate. Took a lot longer to get one of those than I thought it would. >.>

[SilentOutlaw]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Kaiser Mom 13:

'So she did have one more card up her sleeve.' Somehow Signum wasn't surprised although she was a little bothered that her earlier assessment of Olivie turned out different than expected. Even as open and honest as she is, she's still capable of concealing certain aspects of her power from the enemy until it's too late. Then again, that's basic common sense when it came to battle.

No use complaining about it. All she could do was weather the Kaiser's storm with what strength she had left. Right now, her defensive fields were lowered thanks to sacrificing a part of her armour earlier to create the opening. She had no more cartridges on her and even if she did, she wouldn't be able to use them right away until Laevatein had a chance to recover from the stress of their earlier technique.

But the last thing the Knight of the Sword had been expecting was Olivie asking for forgiveness. "My apologies. This result was due to my lack of training."

"... what?"

"I wanted to have a fair battle," explained Olivie. "Unfortunately, when your last attack broke your my shield, the Saint's Armour naturally activated in response to my heightened emotional state."

"I see. That's quite considerate of you to explain yourself but that's not necessary right now." She slowly got into position.

"But-"

"That's enough. I appreciate that you have attempted to carry out this trial fairly. But make no mistake..." Signum pointed her blade at the Kaiser. "Even with your Saint's Armour protecting you, I will show you beyond a reasonable doubt that we are not the ruthless Knights that you believe us to be."

“That won't be necessary. As far as I'm concerned, this trial has concluded,” said Olivie calmly before turning towards the observation window and waving a free hand. “We’re done in here!”

“That’s… it?” She was quite stunned by her opponent’s change in attitude to the point where she didn’t even notice the chamber doors opening. “The rules said the trial would end when someone is incapacitated or surrenders.”

“That’s true. Hmmmm…” It then came to the young woman. “Since I’m not in the habit of beating on someone who’s clearly in a weakened state, I surrender.”

For some reason, that got under Signum’s nerves. “Don’t mock me! Are you even taking me seriously?!”

“So you really prefer to be beaten into a pulp?” asked the puzzled Kaiser.

“No, she doesn’t!” shouted a flustered Hayate as she managed to make her way over with everyone else. “Signum, if she’s okay with stopping things here, then let it go!”

“But… it just feels like this didn’t end properly,” said the Knight of the Sword quietly before turning back to the other woman. “How is it that you were able to find what you were looking for?”

“During your last technique, I sensed your emotions. Love for your Master, anger at my accusations and regret for the lives that were taken to fuel the Book. That is proof enough for me to conclude that the killing machines I saw on that day no longer exist. And you have fulfilled your objective as well which was to prove that you are not the cold Knights who have spilled blood in the name of their Master.” The Kaiser paused for a moment. “I wonder if this will be good enough for those restless spirits. If they see that you’re trying to live your lives by a proper code of chivalry and make up for the crimes of old, perhaps they can rest in peace.”

“Signum, if you’re finished, then can you come back with me to the control room so I can properly check you over for injuries?” asked Shamal.

“Yes, of course.” Before she could be led away, she turned back to Olivie. “If possible, I would like a rematch so that a proper conclusion can be reached. I have something that I want to try against that Saint’s Armour of yours.”

Vita put it together. “You can’t mean… Agito?”

“Yes. I would like to put my Unisoned form to the limit. That is, if you have no objections.”

“You have a Unison Device too? I haven’t seen one of those in years. If time permits, I would be happy to fight you again.” Olivie had to admit that it would be interesting to throw down with a fighter using one of those devices.

“You don’t seem mad at her anymore, Mom. Are you now friends with her?” asked Touma while Shamal led Signum away with Vita following.

“I wouldn’t say we’re friends now but if anything, I understand her and her comrades a bit better. Maybe in the future, I wouldn’t mind having those Knights as friends.” She then shot the boy a bright smile. “But right now, you’re the best friend that I want by my side.”

He liked hearing that. And more importantly, he liked seeing how that smile she had on her face was directed at him and only for him. But…

“If anything, I guess we can call her Vivio’s biological mom?”

What if her real child took away that attention he was getting?

A concerned look settled upon the Kaiser’s fair features as she noticed her adopted son looking a little distracted. “Touma, what’s wrong?”

“Nothing…! Just thinking of stuff.”

“You shouldn’t hide what’s bothering you, young man. Otherwise, Nanoha-chan here would blast you until you started talking about your feelings properly,” said Hayate in a teasing manner.

This earned a twitch from Olivie. “Excuse me?”

“Geh…!” Why did Hayate-chan have to say that? And in front of the Sankt Kaiser of all people!

The sudden awkward gesture from Nanoha immediately drew Olivie’s attention towards her. “From the way you’re reacting, you must be this… Nanatoka!”

“It’s Nanoha!”

“Whatever. The point is you can’t always force someone to talk about their feelings. Sometimes there are personal things that they can’t share. Maybe he has one of those… manly issues that can only be talked about between men.” She paused for a moment before noticing a young man in a green suit next to Carim who was furiously taking notes. “You there… you can talk manly issues with my son, can’t you?”

“I… guess?” Yuuno was getting rather confused at all this.

She smiled in approval. “Good, then that’s settled.”

Touma decided that he better step in and set things straight. “Mom, it’s not that sort of stuff that’s bugging me!”

“Then what is it, sweetie?”

“Well… apparently, I have a sister since they said stuff about you being her biological mom.”

“… … SAY WHAT?!”

YEAH! Does this mean we can finally get Vivio and Olivie meeting?!

[Endscape]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Kaiser Mom 13:

'So she did have one more card up her sleeve.' Somehow Signum wasn't surprised although she was a little bothered that her earlier assessment of Olivie turned out different than expected. Even as open and honest as she is, she's still capable of concealing certain aspects of her power from the enemy until it's too late. Then again, that's basic common sense when it came to battle.

No use complaining about it. All she could do was weather the Kaiser's storm with what strength she had left. Right now, her defensive fields were lowered thanks to sacrificing a part of her armour earlier to create the opening. She had no more cartridges on her and even if she did, she wouldn't be able to use them right away until Laevatein had a chance to recover from the stress of their earlier technique.

But the last thing the Knight of the Sword had been expecting was Olivie asking for forgiveness. "My apologies. This result was due to my lack of training."

"... what?"

"I wanted to have a fair battle," explained Olivie. "Unfortunately, when your last attack broke your my shield, the Saint's Armour naturally activated in response to my heightened emotional state."

"I see. That's quite considerate of you to explain yourself but that's not necessary right now." She slowly got into position.

"But-"

"That's enough. I appreciate that you have attempted to carry out this trial fairly. But make no mistake..." Signum pointed her blade at the Kaiser. "Even with your Saint's Armour protecting you, I will show you beyond a reasonable doubt that we are not the ruthless Knights that you believe us to be."

“That won't be necessary. As far as I'm concerned, this trial has concluded,” said Olivie calmly before turning towards the observation window and waving a free hand. “We’re done in here!”

“That’s… it?” She was quite stunned by her opponent’s change in attitude to the point where she didn’t even notice the chamber doors opening. “The rules said the trial would end when someone is incapacitated or surrenders.”

“That’s true. Hmmmm…” It then came to the young woman. “Since I’m not in the habit of beating on someone who’s clearly in a weakened state, I surrender.”

For some reason, that got under Signum’s nerves. “Don’t mock me! Are you even taking me seriously?!”

“So you really prefer to be beaten into a pulp?” asked the puzzled Kaiser.

“No, she doesn’t!” shouted a flustered Hayate as she managed to make her way over with everyone else. “Signum, if she’s okay with stopping things here, then let it go!”

“But… it just feels like this didn’t end properly,” said the Knight of the Sword quietly before turning back to the other woman. “How is it that you were able to find what you were looking for?”

“During your last technique, I sensed your emotions. Love for your Master, anger at my accusations and regret for the lives that were taken to fuel the Book. That is proof enough for me to conclude that the killing machines I saw on that day no longer exist. And you have fulfilled your objective as well which was to prove that you are not the cold Knights who have spilled blood in the name of their Master.” The Kaiser paused for a moment. “I wonder if this will be good enough for those restless spirits. If they see that you’re trying to live your lives by a proper code of chivalry and make up for the crimes of old, perhaps they can rest in peace.”

“Signum, if you’re finished, then can you come back with me to the control room so I can properly check you over for injuries?” asked Shamal.

“Yes, of course.” Before she could be led away, she turned back to Olivie. “If possible, I would like a rematch so that a proper conclusion can be reached. I have something that I want to try against that Saint’s Armour of yours.”

Vita put it together. “You can’t mean… Agito?”

“Yes. I would like to put my Unisoned form to the limit. That is, if you have no objections.”

“You have a Unison Device too? I haven’t seen one of those in years. If time permits, I would be happy to fight you again.” Olivie had to admit that it would be interesting to throw down with a fighter using one of those devices.

“You don’t seem mad at her anymore, Mom. Are you now friends with her?” asked Touma while Shamal led Signum away with Vita following.

“I wouldn’t say we’re friends now but if anything, I understand her and her comrades a bit better. Maybe in the future, I wouldn’t mind having those Knights as friends.” She then shot the boy a bright smile. “But right now, you’re the best friend that I want by my side.”

He liked hearing that. And more importantly, he liked seeing how that smile she had on her face was directed at him and only for him. But…

“If anything, I guess we can call her Vivio’s biological mom?”

What if her real child took away that attention he was getting?

A concerned look settled upon the Kaiser’s fair features as she noticed her adopted son looking a little distracted. “Touma, what’s wrong?”

“Nothing…! Just thinking of stuff.”

“You shouldn’t hide what’s bothering you, young man. Otherwise, Nanoha-chan here would blast you until you started talking about your feelings properly,” said Hayate in a teasing manner.

This earned a twitch from Olivie. “Excuse me?”

“Geh…!” Why did Hayate-chan have to say that? And in front of the Sankt Kaiser of all people!

The sudden awkward gesture from Nanoha immediately drew Olivie’s attention towards her. “From the way you’re reacting, you must be this… Nanatoka!”

“It’s Nanoha!”

“Whatever. The point is you can’t always force someone to talk about their feelings. Sometimes there are personal things that they can’t share. Maybe he has one of those… manly issues that can only be talked about between men.” She paused for a moment before noticing a young man in a green suit next to Carim who was furiously taking notes. “You there… you can talk manly issues with my son, can’t you?”

“I… guess?” Yuuno was getting rather confused at all this.

She smiled in approval. “Good, then that’s settled.”

Touma decided that he better step in and set things straight. “Mom, it’s not that sort of stuff that’s bugging me!”

“Then what is it, sweetie?”

“Well… apparently, I have a sister since they said stuff about you being her biological mom.”

“… … SAY WHAT?!”

Another nice update. I was particularly amused by Carim taking notes. Will that be the Saint Church's New Testament?

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

The State of Affairs got its first review that included a request for the story to be NanoFate. Took a lot longer to get one of those than I thought it would. >.>

At least they asked rather than demanded

You should hurry up and post chapter 2.

Or at least post a spoiler saying who Fate's affair was with.

[Rising Dragon]

I need to get chapter 1 up first. >.> And I'm trying; the only thing holding me back is the necessary flashback.

[00-Raiser]

Oh, I thought what you posted before was chapter 1 but it was just a prolouge. Should have just said "post the next chapter."

Could you PM me who the affair is with, though? I'd really like to know.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

The State of Affairs got its first review that included a request for the story to be NanoFate. Took a lot longer to get one of those than I thought it would. >.>

Heh, well, it was only a matter of time, after all. Do refresh my memory if I'm wrong, though, but State isn't really supposed to have one specific pairing, is it? Just the affair and the fallout of it?

[Rising Dragon]

The story will have several flashbacks concerning the affair, so technically there is a pairing.

I just don't want to give that pairing away until chapter 1's done, as that will reveal who Fate was with.

[RadiantBeam]

Ahh, okay, gotcha. For some reason I thought besides the affair, there was no official pairing for the actual story itself.

[Rising Dragon]

Dunno about that yet, but I do know how the story ends. So we'll see in the long run, and hopefully I won't get so many flames from FF.net that my house burns down.

[RadiantBeam]

Eh, all things considered, I think you'll be fine. Pairings aside, "State" is a very good story. No reason for it to be flamed much beyond the pairing issue.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Dunno about that yet, but I do know how the story ends. So we'll see in the long run, and hopefully I won't get so many flames from FF.net that my house burns down.

Since I haven't been turned into Shishio Makoto yet, I'd say you're definitely fine.

[DezoPenguin]

Posted Take Her Best Shot to fanfiction.net.

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Posted Take Her Best Shot to fanfiction.net.

hehee I still have trouble wrapping my mind around the revolver form, to be honest. However, Burning Glory is adorable in the omake

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

hehee I still have trouble wrapping my mind around the revolver form, to be honest. However, Burning Glory is adorable in the omake

Are you at all familiar with Black Cat? If not, I think someone (RB?) needs to get this woman a few links, 'cause like I mentioned in my A/N, Revolver Form didn't make any sense to me until I read that series.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Are you at all familiar with Black Cat? If not, I think someone (RB?) needs to get this woman a few links, 'cause like I mentioned in my A/N, Revolver Form didn't make any sense to me until I read that series.

Yeah. I came up with the idea of Burning Glory's Revolver Form while reading Black Cat, which is why for a good long while every time he transformed he didn't shoot, since Train often uses Hades for close range attacks as well as firing.

[00-Raiser]

I wanted to get at least one review of my last short before I uploaded this one, but oh well. Put up Three anyways.

No one's posted about being interested in a lemon, so... =/

[Yasanagi]

I wouldn't mind reading it if you want to write it.

[RadiantBeam]

Blah. A state of apathy is not a good mindset for trying to write fluff pieces or confrontation pieces. x_x

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Blah. A state of apathy is not a good mindset for trying to write fluff pieces or confrontation pieces. x_x

It's good for contemplation of navel scenes, though.

I hate it when I'm in a mood and I don't know what kind of scene would benefit most from it.