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[Asuras]

Off the top of my head:

~Open your arms, let me in.
Don't you know insanity will always win?

Hear my words and pray with me now

My light is ever holy
Die with me in matrimony
Never will you see again
Without a haze, my disrupting grin

You see it as a beacon
The others they say otherwise
Trust in me and don't you stray
I can tell you there's no other way

You bear the brunt of a one to tame
And I, the way of a leader
My holy hand reaches for you
Your soul as its claim

Follow me and don't you question, my voice is that of God
He relays his will right through me
Spoken of dreams in bed
And I, my desire, thrust to you instead~

[idiffer]

Originally Posted by Asuras

Sounds to me like it describes the "chaos" involved with a balance between utter chaos and bleak and boring quietness in ones mind. It is hard to moderate ones thoughts, and only one of the two extremes seem like the only way to many.

sorry it took me so long to answer. i was waiting on myself to finish the darn poem. anyway. what i tried to describe in my poem was the feeling of chaos in my mind i sometimes have. its not general. i don't know if anyone else has felt that way. sometimes i just fall into this state, when my mind is filled with everything and nothing at the same time for a minute or two. i can't think straight, can't draw conclusions, can't tell what i want, WHY is this happening. and that kind of associates with chaos.
oh, and your poem is nice. i would have preffered it to rhyme and have consistent rythm, but if the idea is interesting, then well it doesn't matter. and once again i don't understand what it is you want to say. i get the feeling that you are god??? cause its from 1st person and all. feel free to correct me, please, really.
so here is my new poem.

Spoiler for poem:

Elders live in the past
Time’s remains do not last
To future the young
Praise all they have sung
The Future - not here
It’s what you cannot steer
The Past is so bleak
Pleasure pointless to seek
I Forgot them both
Learned that I to loathe
The time is now
Before which should bow
Ones who ask how
To live their life free
For yourself think and see…

[Garigari-kun]

Tsundere

Argh, you're so annoying!
But really…I'm glad you care for me so much.
Why can't you just leave me alone!
To tell the truth, I don't want to be alone.
Don't piss me off!
Whenever I have a bad day, you're the first to make me feel better.
I'm not doing this for you, you know.
How else can I repay you?
You want to know how I really feel about you? Do you?
I'm too afraid to let you know how I truly feel.
You're a jerk, a pervert, and an idiot!
You're a really kind, caring person.
I don't even know why I waste my time with you!
Don't you see? I've fallen for you.
Go away!
Don't leave me.
I hate you!…
I love you.

[RandySyler]

Originally Posted by Garigari-kun

Tsundere

Argh, you're so annoying!
But really…I'm glad you care for me so much.
Why can't you just leave me alone!
To tell the truth, I don't want to be alone.
Don't piss me off!
Whenever I have a bad day, you're the first to make me feel better.
I'm not doing this for you, you know.
How else can I repay you?
You want to know how I really feel about you? Do you?
I'm too afraid to let you know how I truly feel.
You're a jerk, a pervert, and an idiot!
You're a really kind, caring person.
I don't even know why I waste my time with you!
Don't you see? I've fallen for you.
Go away!
Don't leave me.
I hate you!…
I love you.

You could replace "Tsundere" with "Bipolar". It would work the same way.

[Garigari-kun]

Originally Posted by RandySyler

You could replace "Tsundere" with "Bipolar". It would work the same way.

Oh, alright! but it's closer to Yandere/Yangire for me xD

Spoiler for TSUNDERE:

GOD no, A.F.K! For God’s sake, “Tsundere” doesn’t translate to Bipolar! It just does not for god’s sake. You want bipolar? That’s Akira-sama, okay! And “kitsune udon” IS NOT literally “fox udon”!

[Asuras]

Originally Posted by idiffer

sorry it took me so long to answer. i was waiting on myself to finish the darn poem. anyway. what i tried to describe in my poem was the feeling of chaos in my mind i sometimes have. its not general. i don't know if anyone else has felt that way. sometimes i just fall into this state, when my mind is filled with everything and nothing at the same time for a minute or two. i can't think straight, can't draw conclusions, can't tell what i want, WHY is this happening. and that kind of associates with chaos.
oh, and your poem is nice. i would have preffered it to rhyme and have consistent rythm, but if the idea is interesting, then well it doesn't matter. and once again i don't understand what it is you want to say. i get the feeling that you are god??? cause its from 1st person and all. feel free to correct me, please, really.

Well... No. I'm not God.

The poem speaks as if its narrator were a religious preacher, and obviously has goals for his listeners other than holy divinity.

It's about using religion for one own purposes, rather than as a medium between heaven and Earth.

[idiffer]

Originally Posted by Garigari-kun

Tsundere

Argh, you're so annoying!
But really…I'm glad you care for me so much.
Why can't you just leave me alone!
To tell the truth, I don't want to be alone.
Don't piss me off!
Whenever I have a bad day, you're the first to make me feel better.
I'm not doing this for you, you know.
How else can I repay you?
You want to know how I really feel about you? Do you?
I'm too afraid to let you know how I truly feel.
You're a jerk, a pervert, and an idiot!
You're a really kind, caring person.
I don't even know why I waste my time with you!
Don't you see? I've fallen for you.
Go away!
Don't leave me.
I hate you!…
I love you.

cool! thats probably the first anime poem i've seen. the idea is very well executed actually. my personal preference of rhyme and rythm don't let me enjoy it as much as i would have liked to as always...but you did give me inspiration to write my own anime themed poem. so, thanks for that. its funny how i always need other ppl to make me do stuff i won't normally do.
here's a preview.
ponytails give you hard on's
while installing your add on's
eroge's with the loli/sis-con thing
satisfy i'll your every fling

and something i dug up in my notebook just now...

deceive and derange
all you want rearange
but nothing will change
you and yourself
alone on a shelf
consealed in your head
untill you are dead
all others are ghost
mere shadows at most
the walls and the ceiling
i know that damn feeling
you're fine with that
i still take off my hat...

[Garigari-kun]

Originally Posted by idiffer

cool! thats probably the first anime poem i've seen. the idea is very well executed actually. my personal preference of rhyme and rythm don't let me enjoy it as much as i would have liked to as always...but you did give me inspiration to write my own anime themed poem. so, thanks for that. its funny how i always need other ppl to make me do stuff i won't normally do.
here's a preview.
ponytails give you hard on's
while installing your add on's
eroge's with the loli/sis-con thing
satisfy i'll your every fling

and something i dug up in my notebook just now...

deceive and derange
all you want rearange
but nothing will change
you and yourself
alone on a shelf
consealed in your head
untill you are dead
all others are ghost
mere shadows at most
the walls and the ceiling
i know that damn feeling
you're fine with that
i still take off my hat...

Thanks for understanding

[idiffer]

well, i got drunk again and felt inspiration surging through me. 2 out of 3 times when i feel the need to write a poem, i want to write about everything at the same time. the impossibility of this drives me crazy. this is the furthest i've gotten in that regard...

Spoiler for long poem:

nothing, all
high and low
rise and fall
fly and flow
here and now
there and then
you raise a brow
how and when?
forbid, allow
this remember
this forget
and now dismember
your regret
be december or july
direct or sly
future, past
that and this
slow and fast
this is bliss
good or bad
live and die
happy or sad
where's the lie?
smile and sigh
all you are
and all you're not
all is far
and all is not
find in the end what you forgot
or never seen
all both and none
or inbetween
illusive seeming
and deceiving
it was
it will
it all has meaning.

[idiffer]

and here i am with another poem. it feels like this thread is becoming my personal blog. i'm okay with that. owning smth on a public forum is awesome. guests now and then don't make it too boring.
this poem was written at 6 a.m. after a major party with my friends. dunno how i had the strength to write anything at the time, when i was sleep deprived and wasted. anyway, strangely enough it turned out to have metre and rhyme, somewhat.

Spoiler for gg:

Word said be not
the slightest thing may make a change
A fallen leaf in early spring
the rain, the rainbow ever strange
A tear someone has dared to shed
A song someone has dared to sing
Enough the wound ignored has bled
of soul, of heart so burried deep
beneath my mask so fast asleep
Almost declared I was as dead
Enough the sorrow and the pain
Now I will say that I am sane
(for now i'll say that i am sane)
Word said be not, for i will make
the path my own, for my own sake
word said be not, there is no need
the ancient's warnings i won't heed
as wisdom lies as bright as day
beneath the snow amongst the hay
behind the smile, the loudest laugh
the sound of wood that's cut in half
the falling light of golden sun
the silent touch, the gentle stroke
the pitch black night that we all shun
the bard's guitar, the pleasant folk
tall grass, that which upon we run
the moment now has just begun

[Suomi]

I whipped this one out quickly as the inspiration hit me, based off a lyric from a song...nothing big but I like it.

Angel in the Darkness
I do
I hear only one voice
calling in the darkness
but that voice, that voice
is you
the voice is yours, calling me out
calling me up
out of the darkness
telling me "I love you"
and wrapping your beautiful angel's wings
around me

[Ricky Controversy]

For the sake of preserving formatting, since it's crucial to the meaning of the poem, I am simply linking you to this morning's update to my site.

http://rickycontroversy.squarespace....gentle-as.html

[Rakhool]

well mine's not really a poem, had made this 2 years ago @_@ juz wanna share~
so here it goes~

Rakhool's beginning
Reborn from the white tree of holyness...
Awaken from the mystical astral...
Crossing through the endless sacred reamls...
Finaly there reach the gift of god...
Eager to discover...
Eager to protect...
Eager to fight...
But not eager to be defeated...
Just beyond these moutains...
Finaly meets the fate of death itself...
I'll strike!
I'll strife!
I'll give it all i got!!!
Finaly...
Limping out of the central of evil...
With no one to turn to...
Nothing to turn to...
... ...
But I was suddenly knock out...
At my first sight...
I saw a nymph besides me...
I know that this isn't my time to die yet...
I've been gifted!
This is just my beginning!

[careph]

Originally Posted by Asuras

Spoiler for for brevity:

Whipped this one up in one of my philosophical moods. Kudos to anyone who can decipher its meaning.

-----------------------------------------
"HumaniFix"

I'm in here by the cavern
My wilderness sanctity
Far away from troubles
Society made for me
That hospital of denial, that cruel twist of nature
It denies me the greatness, of ascending my torture

Im advancing, preparing, I'm thinking this through
Those silly dumb monkeys dont have a ___ clue
With each coming line, a sickening gen
"Survival of the fittest" my motto, always been

Steel and thunder
Tar and their drugs
Mans bodies no further than a year once torn asunder
Tanks of consistency, and puddles of, "Nothing new,"
My friends my family, they join in the stew

Mankind will unfavor, my ideals denying "their" truth
They're petrifying, so denying, never minding
They are
Sinking ever deeper into the septic pool

Their jeans will grow filthy, thier models will crumble
Thine legs incapable of holding thier stumble
My god whats become?
The world lost its fervor
Mother bring back our destiny, beyond simple utters
Of, "Money" and "Fame" and those god damned "Games"
Time is much too short to fall right and under...

Cause Im advancing, preparing, I'm thinking this through
Those silly dumb monkeys dont have a ___ clue
With each coming line, another sickening gen
"Survival of the fittest" my motto, always been

Apologies for taking this up so late.

In a nutshell, the I of the poem is not happy about what he/she perceives to be the current state of humanity, citing decadence, superficiality, indifference, incompetence and ignorance as core issues which will eventually lead to its doom. From an isolated, curative position the voice is devising a plan to save humanity from its demise; a plan to fix humanity - “HumaniFix”.

[idiffer]

this first one was written on a whim when i was answering a post here on animesuki, and you may have seen it in the "dating " thread some time ago. i didn't ever think that i could reply with a poem, but i did, spending less then 5 min. to write it. its definitely shit, won't deny that...

Spoiler for poem 1:

Words on the walls
you don't need life for it to feel like life
u don't need to hear for it to be music
u don't need to see for it to be a painting
we'll put words on the walls
and ideas in head
we'll drift in the halls
healthy and fed

this one...uhh..i don't remember if i wrote it yesterday or the day before yesterday, or 3 days ago...i guess i have a subconcious thing for love themes, with me being single and all. it doesn't have a meaning, just momentary thoughts and feelings.

Spoiler for poem 2:

Today i don't care
today i won't scare
today i met a girl
that came up
and gave a whirl
to what most
can't seize
she spoke most
in chineese
no sense was made
to words attention
wasn't paid
by tone, by fire in eyes
we knew what needs to be conveyed
with nothing sacred to invade

Originally Posted by Rakhool

well mine's not really a poem, had made this 2 years ago @_@ juz wanna share~
so here it goes~

Rakhool's beginning
Reborn from the white tree of holyness...
Awaken from the mystical astral...
Crossing through the endless sacred reamls...
Finaly there reach the gift of god...
Eager to discover...
Eager to protect...
Eager to fight...
But not eager to be defeated...
Just beyond these moutains...
Finaly meets the fate of death itself...
I'll strike!
I'll strife!
I'll give it all i got!!!
Finaly...
Limping out of the central of evil...
With no one to turn to...
Nothing to turn to...
... ...
But I was suddenly knock out...
At my first sight...
I saw a nymph besides me...
I know that this isn't my time to die yet...
I've been gifted!
This is just my beginning!

damn, i liked this one. the theme is one i associate with. and i even found a certain rythm after i read it 3 times out loud to myself. although i would have chosen better wording. as in, your grammar seems to be a bit wrong a few times...
and it is a poem. anything can be a poem these days, really. the classic style is being ignored because it can no longer convey the thoughts and troubles of our generation, of course partially because it IS a style of an OLD generation. free verse has been and always will be, for that matter.

[Ricky Controversy]

As with my last poem, submitting the url here for the sake of not having to reformat everything all over again.

http://rickycontroversy.squarespace....ous-thing.html

[idiffer]

Originally Posted by Ricky Controversy

As with my last poem, submitting the url here for the sake of not having to reformat everything all over again.

http://rickycontroversy.squarespace....ous-thing.html

i think the spacing made it hard to read, and most of all it didn't put emphesis on anything, as it should. it felt random, disconnected. the theme felt okay, but not with this kind of sophisticated formatting. rain, train, holes in the sky...nothing warranting any kind of experimental approach. sorry if i seem offensive, its just what i feel. no hate for u as a poet or person.

[Asuras]

Originally Posted by careph

Apologies for taking this up so late.

In a nutshell, the I of the poem is not happy about what he/she perceives to be the current state of humanity, citing decadence, superficiality, indifference, incompetence and ignorance as core issues which will eventually lead to its doom. From an isolated, curative position the voice is devising a plan to save humanity from its demise; a plan to fix humanity - “HumaniFix”.

Very good. You are spot on, but not quite there.

I feel it may be a little too complicated and vague for anyone to truly figure out. So I'll tell the tale.

In a nutshell, it's about human evolution, and how it has stagnated. In a natural world, it is "survival of the fittest" where those with good genes ("jeans") survive. Because the "hospital of denial," those that were not fit to live are kept alive, and their "bad" genes are passed on. This man ("I") is in his wilderness sanctity; an old hermit who seems crazy. He revels over societies frivolous activities, and their ignorance to nature.
Do realize I am no eugenicist. Merely a boy who has realized what modern medical advancements mean to our evolution as a species.

[Afternoon Tea]

Can someone help me with poetry? I'm not very good at it, and I don't know to structure/start one. Can someone help me? The reason why, is because i want to write music lyrics, but I can't do it if I don't have a good understanding of poetry, How should I start, where do I start, and how do you structure these things. Like I remember doing this in 8th grade like rhyming the last word for ever other sentence or something ( i dont even know the terms) like that, but that was 4 years ago when i did not give a crap about poetry

sorry if this is off topic i'll delete this post if it is

[Ricky Controversy]

Originally Posted by CaptnAwesomee

Can someone help me with poetry? I'm not very good at it, and I don't know to structure/start one. Can someone help me? The reason why, is because i want to write music lyrics, but I can't do it if I don't have a good understanding of poetry, How should I start, where do I start, and how do you structure these things. Like I remember doing this in 8th grade but that was 4 years ago when i did not give a crap about poetry

sorry if this is off topic i'll delete this post if it is

There isn't really one definitive 'how' to poetry, and frankly, the best way someone can foster your development as a poet is to work with you piece by piece and gradually encourage you to push your boundaries and try different things. Basically, shaking up your comfort zone--which will initially always be something very generic and mechanical because, hey, we all start off clueless!--is all that can be done.

So why not post a sample of your work, or whip up something right now and keep yourself receptive to critique.