Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[00-Raiser]

Heh, I still gotta finish Kaijo's Crisis before I even consider tackling Infinity

Well, heads up to anyone interested, but I'll be gone to a wedding for the weekend. I might be able to log in at the hotel, but if not I'll see you guys Sunday.

[Yasanagi]

Spoiler for Material Days 31:

Yuuno wasn’t sure if the planet had longer days or what but he had been sitting in the hot springs long enough to start feeling dizzy. He wasn’t sure if it was because of the heat or if it’s the fact that Material-S and Material-D were sharing the same pool but he did know that it was time to get out of there unless he felt like passing out and drowning. Chancing a glance into the sky, he found that the sun wasn’t even half way through the sky, so it was probably still morning at least.

Seikou watched him, not even trying to hide her interest, as he climbed out of the pool. Her face was slightly red as she looked at his naked body from the back and she mentally cursed for not getting a closer look. Yuuno reached for his towel that was on a nearby branch and wiped his body off before wrapping it around his waist. Then he picked up his clothes to go change behind a large boulder much to Seikou’s disappointment.

“Hmm, it is a good thing he decided to grab towels and wash cloths from the ship,” muttered Yami as she leaned back into the hot spring.

“I’m going to go check on Rai! She’s been gone for quite some time,” announced Yuuno from behind the rock.

“She’s perfectly capable of taking care of herself,” replied Material-S from her spot.

“I know that but I’m just worried, you know?”

There was a slight pause before Material-D snorted. “To worry over someone like Material-L… you really are a soft-hearted servant. Not that there’s anything wrong with that.”

“Heh…” He finally emerged, fully dressed. “I’m going to head out in the direction of that thunder clap. Hopefully, I shouldn’t be too long. In the mean time, can you stay within the area?”

“Understood,” replied the Nanoha replica as she watched Yuuno depart towards the forested area, his footsteps fading away until there was nothing but silence in the air.

That is… until she heard the movements of water behind her. The thing about those movements was that the person was trying to be as quiet as possible and was failing miserably. “Material-D, what were you trying to do?”

As Seikou turned around, she got a view of a horrified Yami who was using her left hand to restrain her right one which was groping for air in an open and closed gesture with the fingers. “Guh…! I… uh…”

It didn’t take her long to put two and two together. “Were you intending to grab my breasts?”

The Hayate replica shook her head wildly in denial. “No! I wasn’t… uh… this isn’t what it looks like!”

“A shame. I was rather disappointed that it didn’t happen,” said Material-S without even batting an eyelid causing the other woman to lose her balance from overextending and plunge into the hot water.

Gasping as she resurfaced, Yami got up close to Seikou and frowned at her as she stopped just short of their bodies touching. “What the hell, Material-S?”

“I… am not sure why. It was just the first thing that came to my mind.” Even the Nanoha replica herself was surprised. Normally she wasn’t so blunt but for some reason, she just couldn’t stop herself from making that comment. She looked up into the sky while tapping her chin. “Perhaps being so close to Yuuno-san while he was naked has influenced me somehow?”

Material-D sighed and her head slumped down. “Unbelievable, to think that you would talk to royalty in such a manner…” ‘And to think that for a brief second, I succumbed to the urge to feel her up like a common pervert!’

**********

“Rai-chan! Where did you go?” shouted Yuuno as he walked through the forest area. There was something about the atmosphere that rattled him but he couldn’t put a finger on it.

In the distance, he could make out some debris. Judging by how much of the scenery had been destroyed, it must have been one big fight. There was a lot of debris everywhere from shattered rocks to fallen trees.

Dammit, he couldn’t waste his time like this examining the scenery. A friend could be in trouble. “Rai-chan!!”

He was hoping that he would have been glomped on by now with her shouting “Here I am, Yuu-nii!” loudly in his ear. But instead, all he heard was a distorted and disturbing giggle from up ahead. The closer he got, the louder the giggling became in between heavy breathes of air.

After moving his way through, he finally managed to find Material-L who was bleeding in multiple places while her barrier jacket had many tears that exposed her flesh. And speaking of her flesh, that fresh tattoo on her bare left shoulder really stood out to him. Upon closer inspection, it resembled a three-headed dog… Cerberus, if he remembered correctly from reading some of Earth’s ancient myths. By her side was her device, somewhat damaged as well. “Hehehehe… I got… I got my doggy! D-doggy…”

“Rai-chan! Hold still while I heal you!” Yuuno moved in closer but as soon as his hand got close to one of her open wounds, her own hand shot up to grab his wrist in a painful grip.

“But… there’s something else… that I want. What is it that I want? I want… I want…” The way she was speaking in such a dazed tone was seriously getting on his nerves.

“Rai-chan, let me go! You’re…”

“Wait…! I got it! I know what I crave…!”

He never had a chance to figure it out as he got flipped over and landed on his back, knocking the breath out of him. In an instant, Material-L had straddled him and allowed him to see the red eyes that had been hidden by her blue hair bangs. They were the eyes of a berserk predator that had finally caught its prey and was savouring the moment of triumph.

“IT’S YOU, YUU-NII!!”

[Megaolix]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Material Days 31:

Yuuno wasn’t sure if the planet had longer days or what but he had been sitting in the hot springs long enough to start feeling dizzy. He wasn’t sure if it was because of the heat or if it’s the fact that Material-S and Material-D were sharing the same pool but he did know that it was time to get out of there unless he felt like passing out and drowning. Chancing a glance into the sky, he found that the sun wasn’t even half way through the sky, so it was probably still morning at least.

Seikou watched him, not even trying to hide her interest, as he climbed out of the pool. Her face was slightly red as she looked at his naked body from the back and she mentally cursed for not getting a closer look. Yuuno reached for his towel that was on a nearby branch and wiped his body off before wrapping it around his waist. Then he picked up his clothes to go change behind a large boulder much to Seikou’s disappointment.

“Hmm, it is a good thing he decided to grab towels and wash cloths from the ship,” muttered Yami as she leaned back into the hot spring.

“I’m going to go check on Rai! She’s been gone for quite some time,” announced Yuuno from behind the rock.

“She’s perfectly capable of taking care of herself,” replied Material-S from her spot.

“I know that but I’m just worried, you know?”

There was a slight pause before Material-D snorted. “To worry over someone like Material-L… you really are a soft-hearted servant. Not that there’s anything wrong with that.”

“Heh…” He finally emerged, fully dressed. “I’m going to head out in the direction of that thunder clap. Hopefully, I shouldn’t be too long. In the mean time, can you stay within the area?”

“Understood,” replied the Nanoha replica as she watched Yuuno depart towards the forested area, his footsteps fading away until there was nothing but silence in the air.

That is… until she heard the movements of water behind her. The thing about those movements was that the person was trying to be as quiet as possible and was failing miserably. “Material-D, what were you trying to do?”

As Seikou turned around, she got a view of a horrified Yami who was using her left hand to restrain her right one which was groping for air in an open and closed gesture with the fingers. “Guh…! I… uh…”

It didn’t take her long to put two and two together. “Were you intending to grab my breasts?”

The Hayate replica shook her head wildly in denial. “No! I wasn’t… uh… this isn’t what it looks like!”

“A shame. I was rather disappointed that it didn’t happen,” said Material-S without even batting an eyelid causing the other woman to lose her balance from overextending and plunge into the hot water.

Gasping as she resurfaced, Yami got up close to Seikou and frowned at her as she stopped just short of their bodies touching. “What the hell, Material-S?”

“I… am not sure why. It was just the first thing that came to my mind.” Even the Nanoha replica herself was surprised. Normally she wasn’t so blunt but for some reason, she just couldn’t stop herself from making that comment. She looked up into the sky while tapping her chin. “Perhaps being so close to Yuuno-san while he was naked has influenced me somehow?”

Material-D sighed and her head slumped down. “Unbelievable, to think that you would talk to royalty in such a manner…” ‘And to think that for a brief second, I succumbed to the urge to feel her up like a common pervert!’

**********

“Rai-chan! Where did you go?” shouted Yuuno as he walked through the forest area. There was something about the atmosphere that rattled him but he couldn’t put a finger on it.

In the distance, he could make out some debris. Judging by how much of the scenery had been destroyed, it must have been one big fight. There was a lot of debris everywhere from shattered rocks to fallen trees.

Dammit, he couldn’t waste his time like this examining the scenery. A friend could be in trouble. “Rai-chan!!”

He was hoping that he would have been glomped on by now with her shouting “Here I am, Yuu-nii!” loudly in his ear. But instead, all he heard was a distorted and disturbing giggle from up ahead. The closer he got, the louder the giggling became in between heavy breathes of air.

After moving his way through, he finally managed to find Material-L who was bleeding in multiple places while her barrier jacket had many tears that exposed her flesh. And speaking of her flesh, that fresh tattoo on her bare left shoulder really stood out to him. Upon closer inspection, it resembled a three-headed dog… Cerberus, if he remembered correctly from reading some of Earth’s ancient myths. By her side was her device, somewhat damaged as well. “Hehehehe… I got… I got my doggy! D-doggy…”

“Rai-chan! Hold still while I heal you!” Yuuno moved in closer but as soon as his hand got close to one of her open wounds, her own hand shot up to grab his wrist in a painful grip.

“But… there’s something else… that I want. What is it that I want? I want… I want…” The way she was speaking in such a dazed tone was seriously getting on his nerves.

“Rai-chan, let me go! You’re…”

“Wait…! I got it! I know what I crave…!”

He never had a chance to figure it out as he got flipped over and landed on his back, knocking the breath out of him. In an instant, Material-L had straddled him and allowed him to see the red eyes that had been hidden by her blue hair bangs. They were the eyes of a berserk predator that had finally caught its prey and was savouring the moment of triumph.

“IT’S YOU, YUU-NII!!”

A bit too late for Yuuno to remember that Rai has really big mood swings. Apart from that, I do hope the Materials will be able to control themselves better when it comes to sudden memories. We don't want them to be exact clones of the originals after all.

So, Rai can summon Cerberus now? Let's hope for Arf and Zafira that Rai won't feel the urge to see who's the best doggie.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Material Days 31:

Yuuno wasn’t sure if the planet had longer days or what but he had been sitting in the hot springs long enough to start feeling dizzy. He wasn’t sure if it was because of the heat or if it’s the fact that Material-S and Material-D were sharing the same pool but he did know that it was time to get out of there unless he felt like passing out and drowning. Chancing a glance into the sky, he found that the sun wasn’t even half way through the sky, so it was probably still morning at least.

Seikou watched him, not even trying to hide her interest, as he climbed out of the pool. Her face was slightly red as she looked at his naked body from the back and she mentally cursed for not getting a closer look. Yuuno reached for his towel that was on a nearby branch and wiped his body off before wrapping it around his waist. Then he picked up his clothes to go change behind a large boulder much to Seikou’s disappointment.

“Hmm, it is a good thing he decided to grab towels and wash cloths from the ship,” muttered Yami as she leaned back into the hot spring.

“I’m going to go check on Rai! She’s been gone for quite some time,” announced Yuuno from behind the rock.

“She’s perfectly capable of taking care of herself,” replied Material-S from her spot.

“I know that but I’m just worried, you know?”

There was a slight pause before Material-D snorted. “To worry over someone like Material-L… you really are a soft-hearted servant. Not that there’s anything wrong with that.”

“Heh…” He finally emerged, fully dressed. “I’m going to head out in the direction of that thunder clap. Hopefully, I shouldn’t be too long. In the mean time, can you stay within the area?”

“Understood,” replied the Nanoha replica as she watched Yuuno depart towards the forested area, his footsteps fading away until there was nothing but silence in the air.

That is… until she heard the movements of water behind her. The thing about those movements was that the person was trying to be as quiet as possible and was failing miserably. “Material-D, what were you trying to do?”

As Seikou turned around, she got a view of a horrified Yami who was using her left hand to restrain her right one which was groping for air in an open and closed gesture with the fingers. “Guh…! I… uh…”

It didn’t take her long to put two and two together. “Were you intending to grab my breasts?”

The Hayate replica shook her head wildly in denial. “No! I wasn’t… uh… this isn’t what it looks like!”

“A shame. I was rather disappointed that it didn’t happen,” said Material-S without even batting an eyelid causing the other woman to lose her balance from overextending and plunge into the hot water.

Gasping as she resurfaced, Yami got up close to Seikou and frowned at her as she stopped just short of their bodies touching. “What the hell, Material-S?”

“I… am not sure why. It was just the first thing that came to my mind.” Even the Nanoha replica herself was surprised. Normally she wasn’t so blunt but for some reason, she just couldn’t stop herself from making that comment. She looked up into the sky while tapping her chin. “Perhaps being so close to Yuuno-san while he was naked has influenced me somehow?”

Material-D sighed and her head slumped down. “Unbelievable, to think that you would talk to royalty in such a manner…” ‘And to think that for a brief second, I succumbed to the urge to feel her up like a common pervert!’

**********

“Rai-chan! Where did you go?” shouted Yuuno as he walked through the forest area. There was something about the atmosphere that rattled him but he couldn’t put a finger on it.

In the distance, he could make out some debris. Judging by how much of the scenery had been destroyed, it must have been one big fight. There was a lot of debris everywhere from shattered rocks to fallen trees.

Dammit, he couldn’t waste his time like this examining the scenery. A friend could be in trouble. “Rai-chan!!”

He was hoping that he would have been glomped on by now with her shouting “Here I am, Yuu-nii!” loudly in his ear. But instead, all he heard was a distorted and disturbing giggle from up ahead. The closer he got, the louder the giggling became in between heavy breathes of air.

After moving his way through, he finally managed to find Material-L who was bleeding in multiple places while her barrier jacket had many tears that exposed her flesh. And speaking of her flesh, that fresh tattoo on her bare left shoulder really stood out to him. Upon closer inspection, it resembled a three-headed dog… Cerberus, if he remembered correctly from reading some of Earth’s ancient myths. By her side was her device, somewhat damaged as well. “Hehehehe… I got… I got my doggy! D-doggy…”

“Rai-chan! Hold still while I heal you!” Yuuno moved in closer but as soon as his hand got close to one of her open wounds, her own hand shot up to grab his wrist in a painful grip.

“But… there’s something else… that I want. What is it that I want? I want… I want…” The way she was speaking in such a dazed tone was seriously getting on his nerves.

“Rai-chan, let me go! You’re…”

“Wait…! I got it! I know what I crave…!”

He never had a chance to figure it out as he got flipped over and landed on his back, knocking the breath out of him. In an instant, Material-L had straddled him and allowed him to see the red eyes that had been hidden by her blue hair bangs. They were the eyes of a berserk predator that had finally caught its prey and was savouring the moment of triumph.

“IT’S YOU, YUU-NII!!”

Oh dear, Rai's gone psycho energy vampire on us! How's Yuuno gonna get out of this one?

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Material Days 31:

Yuuno wasn’t sure if the planet had longer days or what but he had been sitting in the hot springs long enough to start feeling dizzy. He wasn’t sure if it was because of the heat or if it’s the fact that Material-S and Material-D were sharing the same pool but he did know that it was time to get out of there unless he felt like passing out and drowning. Chancing a glance into the sky, he found that the sun wasn’t even half way through the sky, so it was probably still morning at least.

Seikou watched him, not even trying to hide her interest, as he climbed out of the pool. Her face was slightly red as she looked at his naked body from the back and she mentally cursed for not getting a closer look. Yuuno reached for his towel that was on a nearby branch and wiped his body off before wrapping it around his waist. Then he picked up his clothes to go change behind a large boulder much to Seikou’s disappointment.

“Hmm, it is a good thing he decided to grab towels and wash cloths from the ship,” muttered Yami as she leaned back into the hot spring.

“I’m going to go check on Rai! She’s been gone for quite some time,” announced Yuuno from behind the rock.

“She’s perfectly capable of taking care of herself,” replied Material-S from her spot.

“I know that but I’m just worried, you know?”

There was a slight pause before Material-D snorted. “To worry over someone like Material-L… you really are a soft-hearted servant. Not that there’s anything wrong with that.”

“Heh…” He finally emerged, fully dressed. “I’m going to head out in the direction of that thunder clap. Hopefully, I shouldn’t be too long. In the mean time, can you stay within the area?”

“Understood,” replied the Nanoha replica as she watched Yuuno depart towards the forested area, his footsteps fading away until there was nothing but silence in the air.

That is… until she heard the movements of water behind her. The thing about those movements was that the person was trying to be as quiet as possible and was failing miserably. “Material-D, what were you trying to do?”

As Seikou turned around, she got a view of a horrified Yami who was using her left hand to restrain her right one which was groping for air in an open and closed gesture with the fingers. “Guh…! I… uh…”

It didn’t take her long to put two and two together. “Were you intending to grab my breasts?”

The Hayate replica shook her head wildly in denial. “No! I wasn’t… uh… this isn’t what it looks like!”

“A shame. I was rather disappointed that it didn’t happen,” said Material-S without even batting an eyelid causing the other woman to lose her balance from overextending and plunge into the hot water.

Gasping as she resurfaced, Yami got up close to Seikou and frowned at her as she stopped just short of their bodies touching. “What the hell, Material-S?”

“I… am not sure why. It was just the first thing that came to my mind.” Even the Nanoha replica herself was surprised. Normally she wasn’t so blunt but for some reason, she just couldn’t stop herself from making that comment. She looked up into the sky while tapping her chin. “Perhaps being so close to Yuuno-san while he was naked has influenced me somehow?”

Material-D sighed and her head slumped down. “Unbelievable, to think that you would talk to royalty in such a manner…” ‘And to think that for a brief second, I succumbed to the urge to feel her up like a common pervert!’

**********

“Rai-chan! Where did you go?” shouted Yuuno as he walked through the forest area. There was something about the atmosphere that rattled him but he couldn’t put a finger on it.

In the distance, he could make out some debris. Judging by how much of the scenery had been destroyed, it must have been one big fight. There was a lot of debris everywhere from shattered rocks to fallen trees.

Dammit, he couldn’t waste his time like this examining the scenery. A friend could be in trouble. “Rai-chan!!”

He was hoping that he would have been glomped on by now with her shouting “Here I am, Yuu-nii!” loudly in his ear. But instead, all he heard was a distorted and disturbing giggle from up ahead. The closer he got, the louder the giggling became in between heavy breathes of air.

After moving his way through, he finally managed to find Material-L who was bleeding in multiple places while her barrier jacket had many tears that exposed her flesh. And speaking of her flesh, that fresh tattoo on her bare left shoulder really stood out to him. Upon closer inspection, it resembled a three-headed dog… Cerberus, if he remembered correctly from reading some of Earth’s ancient myths. By her side was her device, somewhat damaged as well. “Hehehehe… I got… I got my doggy! D-doggy…”

“Rai-chan! Hold still while I heal you!” Yuuno moved in closer but as soon as his hand got close to one of her open wounds, her own hand shot up to grab his wrist in a painful grip.

“But… there’s something else… that I want. What is it that I want? I want… I want…” The way she was speaking in such a dazed tone was seriously getting on his nerves.

“Rai-chan, let me go! You’re…”

“Wait…! I got it! I know what I crave…!”

He never had a chance to figure it out as he got flipped over and landed on his back, knocking the breath out of him. In an instant, Material-L had straddled him and allowed him to see the red eyes that had been hidden by her blue hair bangs. They were the eyes of a berserk predator that had finally caught its prey and was savouring the moment of triumph.

“IT’S YOU, YUU-NII!!”

Maybe Rai-chan got jealous. At last both Seikou and Yami was "energised" by Yuuno and she won`t.

Not fair

[WarpObscura]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

Spoiler for Material Days 31:

Yuuno wasn’t sure if the planet had longer days or what but he had been sitting in the hot springs long enough to start feeling dizzy. He wasn’t sure if it was because of the heat or if it’s the fact that Material-S and Material-D were sharing the same pool but he did know that it was time to get out of there unless he felt like passing out and drowning. Chancing a glance into the sky, he found that the sun wasn’t even half way through the sky, so it was probably still morning at least.

Seikou watched him, not even trying to hide her interest, as he climbed out of the pool. Her face was slightly red as she looked at his naked body from the back and she mentally cursed for not getting a closer look. Yuuno reached for his towel that was on a nearby branch and wiped his body off before wrapping it around his waist. Then he picked up his clothes to go change behind a large boulder much to Seikou’s disappointment.

“Hmm, it is a good thing he decided to grab towels and wash cloths from the ship,” muttered Yami as she leaned back into the hot spring.

“I’m going to go check on Rai! She’s been gone for quite some time,” announced Yuuno from behind the rock.

“She’s perfectly capable of taking care of herself,” replied Material-S from her spot.

“I know that but I’m just worried, you know?”

There was a slight pause before Material-D snorted. “To worry over someone like Material-L… you really are a soft-hearted servant. Not that there’s anything wrong with that.”

“Heh…” He finally emerged, fully dressed. “I’m going to head out in the direction of that thunder clap. Hopefully, I shouldn’t be too long. In the mean time, can you stay within the area?”

“Understood,” replied the Nanoha replica as she watched Yuuno depart towards the forested area, his footsteps fading away until there was nothing but silence in the air.

That is… until she heard the movements of water behind her. The thing about those movements was that the person was trying to be as quiet as possible and was failing miserably. “Material-D, what were you trying to do?”

As Seikou turned around, she got a view of a horrified Yami who was using her left hand to restrain her right one which was groping for air in an open and closed gesture with the fingers. “Guh…! I… uh…”

It didn’t take her long to put two and two together. “Were you intending to grab my breasts?”

The Hayate replica shook her head wildly in denial. “No! I wasn’t… uh… this isn’t what it looks like!”

“A shame. I was rather disappointed that it didn’t happen,” said Material-S without even batting an eyelid causing the other woman to lose her balance from overextending and plunge into the hot water.

Gasping as she resurfaced, Yami got up close to Seikou and frowned at her as she stopped just short of their bodies touching. “What the hell, Material-S?”

“I… am not sure why. It was just the first thing that came to my mind.” Even the Nanoha replica herself was surprised. Normally she wasn’t so blunt but for some reason, she just couldn’t stop herself from making that comment. She looked up into the sky while tapping her chin. “Perhaps being so close to Yuuno-san while he was naked has influenced me somehow?”

Material-D sighed and her head slumped down. “Unbelievable, to think that you would talk to royalty in such a manner…” ‘And to think that for a brief second, I succumbed to the urge to feel her up like a common pervert!’

**********

“Rai-chan! Where did you go?” shouted Yuuno as he walked through the forest area. There was something about the atmosphere that rattled him but he couldn’t put a finger on it.

In the distance, he could make out some debris. Judging by how much of the scenery had been destroyed, it must have been one big fight. There was a lot of debris everywhere from shattered rocks to fallen trees.

Dammit, he couldn’t waste his time like this examining the scenery. A friend could be in trouble. “Rai-chan!!”

He was hoping that he would have been glomped on by now with her shouting “Here I am, Yuu-nii!” loudly in his ear. But instead, all he heard was a distorted and disturbing giggle from up ahead. The closer he got, the louder the giggling became in between heavy breathes of air.

After moving his way through, he finally managed to find Material-L who was bleeding in multiple places while her barrier jacket had many tears that exposed her flesh. And speaking of her flesh, that fresh tattoo on her bare left shoulder really stood out to him. Upon closer inspection, it resembled a three-headed dog… Cerberus, if he remembered correctly from reading some of Earth’s ancient myths. By her side was her device, somewhat damaged as well. “Hehehehe… I got… I got my doggy! D-doggy…”

“Rai-chan! Hold still while I heal you!” Yuuno moved in closer but as soon as his hand got close to one of her open wounds, her own hand shot up to grab his wrist in a painful grip.

“But… there’s something else… that I want. What is it that I want? I want… I want…” The way she was speaking in such a dazed tone was seriously getting on his nerves.

“Rai-chan, let me go! You’re…”

“Wait…! I got it! I know what I crave…!”

He never had a chance to figure it out as he got flipped over and landed on his back, knocking the breath out of him. In an instant, Material-L had straddled him and allowed him to see the red eyes that had been hidden by her blue hair bangs. They were the eyes of a berserk predator that had finally caught its prey and was savouring the moment of triumph.

“IT’S YOU, YUU-NII!!”

I see Hayate's influence is manifesting. Are we going to have more Dr. Strangelove-esque evil hand shenanigans?

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Well, at least Rai got her doggie, although she should probably get healed before exerting herself like that. If Yuuno's lucky maybe she'll pass out.

[RadiantBeam]

New chapter of "Shadowfire" is up and running: Straitjacket Feeling.

To be honest, I'd wanted to put off on updating "Shadowfire" until I'd posted the next chapter of LDG, but in a review left on the TVTRopes Rec page I pretty much got scolded for letting this drabble dump die. Granted, it wasn't a positive review to begin with, but he or she made a good point in mentioning I hadn't updated in awhile.

[Nanya01]

Spoiler for Material Days 32:

When Rai felt her awareness return to her, she noticed that she didn’t feel tired. In fact, if anything, she felt more energetic. “What?” She looked at her body and the cuts were healing themselves. “Did I get healed when I wasn’t looking?” She asked and looked down, her eyes widening at the slightly bloodied Yuuno.

"Unnggghhh..." Yuuno couldn't help but groan out loud. Dealing with that berserk side of hers was rather painful.

“Yuu-nii?” He cracked an eye open as he saw the naked woman straddling him. “Oh… Oh no…” Her eyes watered up and she hugged him tightly. “I did something bad, didn’t I?”

“Rai?” Sure, he was a little scared of her at that moment, but right now, she was acting more like a scared girl than some sort of monster. “What..?”

“I’m sorry…” She whimpered as she hugged him more. “I get… urges to destroy things… Hurt things… People…”

“What do you mean?” This was a twist, he wasn’t sure what to make of it, but maybe she’d actually talk to him more seriously instead of her half-insane self. When she just held him and trembled, he sighed and went quiet. He didn’t think that she cared too much about anything, but, as he closed his eyes and held her, he decided that if she considered him one of the things she cared about, he could live with it.

He just hoped that she wouldn’t go insane like that again. It was very scary.

(---)

Yami raised an eyebrow as she saw a ship, a rather large vessel, come out of the sky and land on the planet. “Now what?” She and Seikou had gotten out of the hot springs and had gotten dressed. The ship landed down only a short bit away from where their busted up ship was at.

“Maybe it’s some locals coming back from vacation?” Material-S blinked as the outer hatch opened up and a group of about six people exited the ship.

“Reverend Maru Kovanich, there seems to be some people on this world.” A man with feminine features said to another man dressed in a black suit and a white collar around his neck.

“I see that, Bishop Patrick Haru.” The man nodded, he walked up to Seikou and Yami and smiled. “Welcome to the hot spring planet Tenrei. I’m surprised to see others here as this isn't a world that well known to outsiders which is why we have chosen this location for our first religious retreat."

“It wasn’t by choice.” Seikou said, ignoring the man as she looked at the ship that he came in. “Impressive ship.”

“Isn’t it? Our members were generous enough to donate the funds to construct it.” Maru smiled, very pleased with himself. “Forgive me for not introducing ourselves properly. We are the Seekers of Absolute Truth, a religion dedicated to discovering and deciphering the riddles of the universe left behind by the Almighty. Our membership is rather small... just this group right now but we hope to grow as we go along!”

“A truth religion?” Yami raised an eyebrow and wished that Material-L was here now. She could have a field day with these people. “Do go on. What absolute truths do you preach about?”

“There are quite a few that we have discovered so far on our journey but the most prominent one would be this one." The bishop closed his eyes as he seemed to become extremely friendly and happy. “That two women, who raise a child together are obviously a family and in love with each other.”

“Indeed, for if one woman lost the one she obviously loved, she would not go and shack up with a man and bear his demon spawn,” continued the Reverend.

Seikou blinked and looked at Yami, who was giving them a half-lidded stare. “But, what if the women aren’t in love with each other like that?”

The whole group looked at her aghast while the bishop and the reverend had upset looks on their faces. “How dare you!?” Patrick exclaimed and stepped up to the two Materials, shaking a finger at them. “How dare you not see the wonder and beauty that is two women?! They don’t need a man…” He looked at the two of them. “And judging by the two of you, you two are obviously lovers.” He ignored the way that Yami blanched and glared at him. “So, you can obviously see where we’re coming from.”

“…As much as the thought of being with her is enticing, I’d prefer to be with Yuuno-san.” Next to her, Yami blanched even more as Seikou's blank blue eyes narrowed, slowly examining each and every member of this religious group. “They don’t seem to be very strong… may I?”

Material-D's only response was a shrug of indifference. “Go ahead. I’m good for awhile.” Then she gave a nasty little smile. “And please take your time.”

“Thank you.” The Nanoha replica then turned her attention to the Bishop and slowly walked up to him. "You insulted myself, Yami-"

"Call me 'Your Majesty'!"

Seikou ignored her friend's complaint. "...Yuuno-san and Rai at the same time…"

“And what are gullrk!” Patrick Haru’s eyes widened as Seikou’s hand seemed to disappear into his chest before pulling out a small glowing ball and consuming it. While the bishop's body slumped to the ground, the Nanoha replica's face slightly grimaced in disgust.

"How weak... but I suppose I cannot complain too much when this is all that is available." Seikou shook her head and snapped her fingers while pointing at the rest of the people, binding them all up in very strong and heavy binds. "Too weak to escape those binds?"

"Most likely they let any sort of magical development fade away and dedicated their lives to this 'religion' of theirs," commented Material-D from the side.

“No, no, NOOOO!” Maru screamed as Seikou’s eyes glowed brightly.

"By the time our companions return, your ashes will be scattered across this world and there will be nobody else to spread your gospel. That is your absolute truth," hissed Material-S before she plunged her hand into another member's body and consumed that Linker Core. “One down.” She seemed to smile slightly as she moved over to the Reverend who gazed defiantly at her.

“You’ll go to hell for this!!”

“I was in Hell once. Ate the devil and escaped.” Seikou then grabbed his Linker Core, getting him to scream in pain before she stuck it into her mouth and swallowed it whole. “Not very much here either. And certainly not very appetizing.”

Yami shrugged at that. “Just hurry it up before that peon comes back. He won’t like seeing you do this.”

Seikou raised an eyebrow at Yami, before nodding and smiling softly. “Of course.”

Material-D looked at the two dead bodies before kicking Maru Haru on top of the dead reverend. “Make sure to kick them over here when you’re done.” She smirked as Seikou did, in fact, kick over the dead bodies once she finished with them. Once every dead body was gathered, the Hayate replica spoke only two words. “Diabolic Emission.” As soon as the bodies disappeared in the sphere of darkness, she turned towards her companion. "So how are you feeling?"

“The energy those people gave wasn’t very much.” Material-S sighed and wondered why it was so hard to find people with decent Linker Cores these days. She then saw at the ship that they had come in. “Are you thinking what I’m thinking?”

Yami smirked and nodded. “If it means getting out of here, I’m all for it… Plus it looks like it might have more room than the peon’s ship.”

“Let’s get everything out of Yuuno-san’s ship and move it over here then.”

Yami frowned at her. “What right do you have ordering me around?!” Seikou ignored her, since Yami helped her out anyway.

(---)

Nanoha sighed as she practically paced around her room. She couldn’t believe that Chrono had ordered her to not go out there and look for Yuuno personally. How could he stand it? He knows that his friend was in danger so why wasn’t he willing to go out and look for Yuuno personally?

“I know how you feel.” Fate said, tiredly as she stood by the door. “I’m not happy about it either, but I’m sure that my brother has his reasons.”

“Yuuno-kun’s our friend, Fate-chan. How can any of us turn a blind eye to him?” Nanoha was practically tearing up. “What if those 'Materials' decide that they don’t need him anymore and leave him on some sort of abandoned planet without any supplies?! That is if they don’t kill him first.” She blinked as she felt Fate hug her. “Fate…chan?”

“Shh… Yuuno will be alright.” Fate wasn’t sure about that herself. She was worried about him as well, but if she let Nanoha know that, the other woman would likely tear a few heads off and go looking for Yuuno personally.

And that was the last thing any of them needed at that moment.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Spoiler for Material Days 32:

When Rai felt her awareness return to her, she noticed that she didn’t feel tired. In fact, if anything, she felt more energetic. “What?” She looked at her body and the cuts were healing themselves. “Did I get healed when I wasn’t looking?” She asked and looked down, her eyes widening at the slightly bloodied Yuuno.

"Unnggghhh..." Yuuno couldn't help but groan out loud. Dealing with that berserk side of hers was rather painful.

“Yuu-nii?” He cracked an eye open as he saw the naked woman straddling him. “Oh… Oh no…” Her eyes watered up and she hugged him tightly. “I did something bad, didn’t I?”

“Rai?” Sure, he was a little scared of her at that moment, but right now, she was acting more like a scared girl than some sort of monster. “What..?”

“I’m sorry…” She whimpered as she hugged him more. “I get… urges to destroy things… Hurt things… People…”

“What do you mean?” This was a twist, he wasn’t sure what to make of it, but maybe she’d actually talk to him more seriously instead of her half-insane self. When she just held him and trembled, he sighed and went quiet. He didn’t think that she cared too much about anything, but, as he closed his eyes and held her, he decided that if she considered him one of the things she cared about, he could live with it.

He just hoped that she wouldn’t go insane like that again. It was very scary.

(---)

Yami raised an eyebrow as she saw a ship, a rather large vessel, come out of the sky and land on the planet. “Now what?” She and Seikou had gotten out of the hot springs and had gotten dressed. The ship landed down only a short bit away from where their busted up ship was at.

“Maybe it’s some locals coming back from vacation?” Material-S blinked as the outer hatch opened up and a group of about six people exited the ship.

“Reverend Maru Kovanich, there seems to be some people on this world.” A man with feminine features said to another man dressed in a black suit and a white collar around his neck.

“I see that, Bishop Patrick Haru.” The man nodded, he walked up to Seikou and Yami and smiled. “Welcome to the hot spring planet Tenrei. I’m surprised to see others here as this isn't a world that well known to outsiders which is why we have chosen this location for our first religious retreat."

“It wasn’t by choice.” Seikou said, ignoring the man as she looked at the ship that he came in. “Impressive ship.”

“Isn’t it? Our members were generous enough to donate the funds to construct it.” Maru smiled, very pleased with himself. “Forgive me for not introducing ourselves properly. We are the Seekers of Absolute Truth, a religion dedicated to discovering and deciphering the riddles of the universe left behind by the Almighty. Our membership is rather small... just this group right now but we hope to grow as we go along!”

“A truth religion?” Yami raised an eyebrow and wished that Material-L was here now. She could have a field day with these people. “Do go on. What absolute truths do you preach about?”

“There are quite a few that we have discovered so far on our journey but the most prominent one would be this one." The bishop closed his eyes as he seemed to become extremely friendly and happy. “That two women, who raise a child together are obviously a family and in love with each other.”

“Indeed, for if one woman lost the one she obviously loved, she would not go and shack up with a man and bear his demon spawn,” continued the Reverend.

Seikou blinked and looked at Yami, who was giving them a half-lidded stare. “But, what if the women aren’t in love with each other like that?”

The whole group looked at her aghast while the bishop and the reverend had upset looks on their faces. “How dare you!?” Patrick exclaimed and stepped up to the two Materials, shaking a finger at them. “How dare you not see the wonder and beauty that is two women?! They don’t need a man…” He looked at the two of them. “And judging by the two of you, you two are obviously lovers.” He ignored the way that Yami blanched and glared at him. “So, you can obviously see where we’re coming from.”

“…As much as the thought of being with her is enticing, I’d prefer to be with Yuuno-san.” Next to her, Yami blanched even more as Seikou's blank blue eyes narrowed, slowly examining each and every member of this religious group. “They don’t seem to be very strong… may I?”

Material-D's only response was a shrug of indifference. “Go ahead. I’m good for awhile.” Then she gave a nasty little smile. “And please take your time.”

“Thank you.” The Nanoha replica then turned her attention to the Bishop and slowly walked up to him. "You insulted myself, Yami-"

"Call me 'Your Majesty'!"

Seikou ignored her friend's complaint. "...Yuuno-san and Rai at the same time…"

“And what are gullrk!” Patrick Haru’s eyes widened as Seikou’s hand seemed to disappear into his chest before pulling out a small glowing ball and consuming it. While the bishop's body slumped to the ground, the Nanoha replica's face slightly grimaced in disgust.

"How weak... but I suppose I cannot complain too much when this is all that is available." Seikou shook her head and snapped her fingers while pointing at the rest of the people, binding them all up in very strong and heavy binds. "Too weak to escape those binds?"

"Most likely they let any sort of magical development fade away and dedicated their lives to this 'religion' of theirs," commented Material-D from the side.

“No, no, NOOOO!” Maru screamed as Seikou’s eyes glowed brightly.

"By the time our companions return, your ashes will be scattered across this world and there will be nobody else to spread your gospel. That is your absolute truth," hissed Material-S before she plunged her hand into another member's body and consumed that Linker Core. “One down.” She seemed to smile slightly as she moved over to the Reverend who gazed defiantly at her.

“You’ll go to hell for this!!”

“I was in Hell once. Ate the devil and escaped.” Seikou then grabbed his Linker Core, getting him to scream in pain before she stuck it into her mouth and swallowed it whole. “Not very much here either. And certainly not very appetizing.”

Yami shrugged at that. “Just hurry it up before that peon comes back. He won’t like seeing you do this.”

Seikou raised an eyebrow at Yami, before nodding and smiling softly. “Of course.”

Material-D looked at the two dead bodies before kicking Maru Haru on top of the dead reverend. “Make sure to kick them over here when you’re done.” She smirked as Seikou did, in fact, kick over the dead bodies once she finished with them. Once every dead body was gathered, the Hayate replica spoke only two words. “Diabolic Emission.” As soon as the bodies disappeared in the sphere of darkness, she turned towards her companion. "So how are you feeling?"

“The energy those people gave wasn’t very much.” Material-S sighed and wondered why it was so hard to find people with decent Linker Cores these days. She then saw at the ship that they had come in. “Are you thinking what I’m thinking?”

Yami smirked and nodded. “If it means getting out of here, I’m all for it… Plus it looks like it might have more room than the peon’s ship.”

“Let’s get everything out of Yuuno-san’s ship and move it over here then.”

Yami frowned at her. “What right do you have ordering me around?!” Seikou ignored her, since Yami helped her out anyway.

(---)

Nanoha sighed as she practically paced around her room. She couldn’t believe that Chrono had ordered her to not go out there and look for Yuuno personally. How could he stand it? He knows that his friend was in danger so why wasn’t he willing to go out and look for Yuuno personally?

“I know how you feel.” Fate said, tiredly as she stood by the door. “I’m not happy about it either, but I’m sure that my brother has his reasons.”

“Yuuno-kun’s our friend, Fate-chan. How can any of us turn a blind eye to him?” Nanoha was practically tearing up. “What if those 'Materials' decide that they don’t need him anymore and leave him on some sort of abandoned planet without any supplies?! That is if they don’t kill him first.” She blinked as she felt Fate hug her. “Fate…chan?”

“Shh… Yuuno will be alright.” Fate wasn’t sure about that herself. She was worried about him as well, but if she let Nanoha know that, the other woman would likely tear a few heads off and go looking for Yuuno personally.

And that was the last thing any of them needed at that moment.

Whoo, hotel has wireless! Now if all goes well I should be hanging out with Yasanagi in a few hours

Anyways, onto this bit. I gotta say you should stop with all the did-they-or-didn't-they sex stuff. Getting kind of old, and since you've done it for all 3 Materials now I think it'd be a good time to stop.

I also think you can lay off the zealot bashing. You've done that several times already too. Well, atleast this time it has plot relevence. I wonder how they're going to explain where this new ship came from

Still a bit worrying with regards to Seikou's character development though, since she was able to kill those guys with no remorse. It's clear she now has a fondness for Yuuno, so the thought that he'd disapprove of her actions should cause some hesitation. Maybe she'll have to struggle with guilt when she lies to him about it. That would be good.

[Megaolix]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Whoo, hotel has wireless! Now if all goes well I should be hanging out with Yasanagi in a few hours

Anyways, onto this bit. I gotta say you should stop with all the did-they-or-didn't-they sex stuff. Getting kind of old, and since you've done it for all 3 Materials now I think it'd be a good time to stop.

I also think you can lay off the zealot bashing. You've done that several times already too. Well, atleast this time it has plot relevence. I wonder how they're going to explain where this new ship came from

Still a bit worrying with regards to Seikou's character development though, since she was able to kill those guys with no remorse. It's clear she now has a fondness for Yuuno, so the thought that he'd disapprove of her actions should cause some hesitation. Maybe she'll have to struggle with guilt when she lies to him about it. That would be good.

Considering that I think they represent the NanoFate hordes, they would probably have attacked first after seeing their truth denied. I know we all hate them, but let's try to not piss them of too much, alright?

[vic-vic]

Woo-hoo, Heroic Sociopath vibes, i like Material-S more and more.

Way to go Nanya.

[00-Raiser]

Well, it's come to light that certain things happened, and I would like to address why I think it was a poor decision that harms the fic over all.

Spoiler for MD:

So if you look at addventure, Yuuno did indeed have sex with Material D and now Material L.

Well, first off this makes the whole "new method of transfering mana" thing completely pointless. Why just use it the one time but not the others?

I also think that it screws up Yuuno's characterization. Okay, maybe he would do that if he absolutely had no choice, but I doubt he'd be so okay with it. I mean, he sleeps with Yami and then acts like nothing happened afterwards. The way he is around her doesn't change a bit. I don't think Yuuno's a guy who'd be all "Yup, I just nailed this chick I just met. Just another day in my life!" Maybe it's just me but I think he'd be all gloomy and go "Aaaah... I can't believe I just did that... I'm sorry Nanoha, I betrayed you..."

So, okay, I really don't like he idea of him having sex with the Materials period, but treating it like it was nothing is even worse. If you really insist on including the sex, then I think you've handled the consequences poorly.

*sigh* Honestly, I'm considering whether or not I should drop this fic...

My suggestion would be to have an 'all ages' version for the FF.net release at least with the sex replaced with partial linker core drainage or something.

This is just my opinion, so feel free to ignore it.

[Moczo]

Well, if everyone else is updating, I can hardly be less awesome! Let's clown it up, baby.

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 7:

"'We have to do the right thing', you said." Hayate said bitterly, sitting in her prison cell. "'We have to call the proper authorities', you said."

"How was I supposed to know it would turn out like this?" Nanoha asked defensively.

"I wanted to dump the body in the woods. Nobody would have ever found her." Hayate said. "We could have chopped it up, dug some holes..."

"I'd have carried the shovel." Vita said.

"Vita would have carried the shovel!" Hayate repeated.

"Once? Some guy tried to rob the snack stand, and I hit him in the knees with a shovel." Vita said proudly.

"And that is why I keep you on the payroll." Hayate said, patting her on the head. "Because you are an idea woman. Not like the dual Ms. Goody-two Shoes over there."

"Hey, this is as much your fault as ours." Fate said. "Verossa is your friend. If he hadn't broken like cheap glass the first time that Interpol agent made a bad pun, maybe we wouldn't be in this mess." '

'This mess' was, in fact, the communal holding cell in the Cranagan City Woman's Penitentiary. The majority of the circus staff was currently crammed into the structure. This actually sort of made them happy (well, it made most of them happy. Erio was very annoyed that nobody had bothered to take him to a prison for men) because they took up the whole cell, and this meant that real criminals were being held elsewhere while they were all processed. Some of the performers wouldn't have been safe around hardened felons, after all. The poor felons might have gotten seriously wounded.

Nanoha nodded in agreement with Fate's assessment. "And you're the one who hired Shari, don't forget. It was her lunacy that really started the whole problem."

Shari pouted. She wasn't just pouting because of the accusation; she was still in a straitjacket, which she didn't really like. So she had multiple reasons to pout, is my point. "Hey, all I did was make a laser cannon. It's not my fault that Vivio murdered somebody with it!"

"You told me it shot water!" Vivio wailed.

"And it was an accident in any event! All she did was point it and push the button, she wasn't aiming it anyone and she certainly didn't murder anyone!" Fate protested, pulling her daughter into a comforting hug.

"Yeah, at most it was involuntary manslaughter. They'll only put her away for like, ten years." Vita agreed.

"Waaaaaaaaaah!" Vivio said.

"They're not putting her away for ten years." A new voice said, entering the room. "They're not putting her away at all, if I have anything to say about it."

Fate let out a sigh of relief. "Big brother, thank God. Could you please clear this up?"

Chrono Harlaown, Cranagan City's chief of police, strode into the room, which was a great source of hope. He was flanked on either side by Verossa and Vice, which did not provide much hope but was... well, not bad. There were worse people who could have been following him. They weren't wearing sunglasses, possibly as punishment.

"Believe me, I'm trying." Chrono said. "Unfortunately, my efforts are complicated somewhat by the fact that, well, you actually did kill this woman."

"... well, yes, but not on purpose." Hayate said defensively. "Besides, it's only Due. It's not like anybody really cares."

"I care!" A furious feminine voice screeched.

Chrono sighed in annoyance. "Oh. Look. She's here too."

Agent Fourington, who absolutely was not Quattro, strode angrily into the room. "Really, Miss Yagami! Must you disrespect the dead so?"

"... why do you care? Weren't you trying to arrest her for her many, many brutal murders?" Hayate asked.

"Well, yes, but that doesn't mean I didn't respect her!" Agent Quattrington said. "It doesn't mean I didn't admire her tenacity! Her intelligence! Her effortless grace and beauty! Indeed, to know her was to love her, whether she your enemy or your beloved older sister."

Nanoha blinked a few times. "Older sist-" She began.

"That was just a randomly chosen example!" Agent Disguised-Quattro said. "She certainly wasn't my sister, no sir! Just another criminal I had to bring in... not that I ever would have succeeded, given how cunning and ruthless she was. Far too amazing to ever be brought down by dolts like the law. No... no, only the cruel caprices of God could lay her low. Only sheer, blind luck... luck in the hands of an idiot child, no less. To die in such an undignified manner, slain by a loathesome little brat who didn't deserve to be in the same country as her, much less end her distinguished career. And that brat will pay for what she's done. She will pay."

"... ... ..." Everyone else in the room said.

"Um... sorry, went off on a tangent there." Agent Barely-even-bothering-at-all said. "Where was I?"

"Honestly not sure." Chrono admitted.

Fate raised her hand. "Er... Agent Fourington? Not to put too fine a point on it, but would you happen to be Quattro in disguise?"

"We just ask because you really, really seem like Quattro in disguise." Nanoha said.

"... wait, disguise? What disguise?" Vita asked. "I thought that it was a given that she's Quattro."

"I don't know who this 'Quattro' is, though she sounds brilliant and gorgeous." Agent Liar said. "I am merely here as a representative of corrupt, decadent human law."

"Okay, yes, she's Quattro." Teana chimed in. "Does anybody here think she isn't Quattro?"

Subaru raised her hand.

"... put your hand down before I smack you." Tea said coldly.

"I just didn't think I should go along with the crowd, that's all. Peer pressure is bad." Subaru said sheepishly.

"She does have a little Quattro around the eyes." Shamal said hesitantly.

"Quattro." Signum said.

"... why am I in woman's prison? Zafira got to go prison for men, why not me?" Erio asked. Caro patted him on the back consolingly.

"Chrono, recent debate in the cell here seems to indicate that we're pretty sure Agent Fourington is a plant." Hayate said.

"Be that as it may, I'm afraid all of her identification checked out." Chrono said.

Verossa chimed in, "And she also has sunglasses."

"Of justice." Vice agreed.

Chrono winced, as if briefly overcome by a long-time pain. "Yes. Yes, she does." He said through gritted teeth. "Look, I personally agree with you all, but her clearances all checked out and the mayor is... ::sigh::... a huge fan of puns, so I've been instructed to give her my full cooperation. I suppose it's possible that she's somehow managed to infiltrate Interpol... though that's incredibly unlikely..."

"As unlikely as a man using advanced cybernetic implants and illegal genetic engineering to spice up his circus acts?" Hayate muttered bitterly. "God, I hate that guy."

"But until I get word from Interpol stating that she's not who she says she is, I've got to play along." Chrono finished.

"Fortunately, I am who I say I am. Just a common agent serving the meaningless laws of the lowly human animals." Agent Quattro Literally Means Four, It's Really Not Even A Good Pseudonym said. "Totally innocent."

"... I'm sure." Chrono said dryly. "Now, if it's not too much trouble, might you explain why you're actually here?"

"Ah! That's right. I came to tell you that my experts have finished analyzing the crime scene."

Verossa looked at his watch. "Really? It's only been like, thirty minutes, and twenty of those were getting all these people back to the station. I mean, that's really not enough time to finish..."

"My experts have finished analyzing the crime scene." Agent Fouringliar said meaningfully. "Haven't you, experts?"

As if on cue... well, okay, not 'as if', just on cue, three women entered the room to flank Agent Totally-Not-A-Villain.

Vivio's breath caught in her throat.

"Oh, crap." Nanoha said, recognizing that reaction and immediately spotting the source. All three women were wearing formal business attire like Agent Yes, That Is Quattro, up to and including the glasses for whatever reason. Two of the three women were redheads, but one of them had a long mane of purple hair that anyone who'd ever seen a poster for Scaglietti Bros. circus would instantly recognize.

"These are my personal panel of experts." Agent I'm Sick of Thinking Up Funny Things to Put Here said. She motioned to her panel of 'experts'. "Agent Wendolyn Evelen, my crime scene analyst."

"Yo, hi!" Wendi said.

"Agent Nina McBeef, head of prisoner transport."

"McBeef?" Nove snarled. "You gave me the last name McBeef?"

"What do you mean, Nina? Clearly that is your name that nobody gave to you!" Quattro said, smiling warmly.

"But it sounds so stupid! What kind of a lame fake name is that?"

Quattro's smiled grew rather strained. "One that's appropriate to the dumb cow who can't remember not to say things like 'fake name'!"

"It's all right. You're fooling precisely nobody." Hayate said.

"Why are they talking about fake names?" Verossa asked.

"Nobody worth fooling, anyway." Hayate corrected herself.

"I still say that's a crap name. How come Wendi gets the good name?" Nove sulked. Wendi smacked her upside the head. "Ow! What was that for!"

"You're breaking character, stupid!" She chided. "You gotta remember to stay cool, like me!"

Teana blinked a few times. "You know, this is actually morbidly interesting. It's like watching a trainwreck that just keeps rewinding itself and then wrecking again."

"Why are they talking about fake names?" Subaru asked.

"... ... ..." Teana said. "I'd explain it to you, but I don't think I could keep the venom out of my voice and then I'd feel like I was kicking a puppy."

"There's a puppy?" Subaru asked, eyes gleaming.

Teana tried her hardest not to cry.

"And finally," Agent Fourington said, continuing her introductions, "My staff psychiatrist, Doctor Veronica Klondike."

"Her too? How come I'm the only one whose fake name sucks?" Nove snapped. She then said, "Ow!" as Wendi cuffed her on the back of the head again.

"Good afternoon." Lutecia said, her eyes firmly fixed on Vivio. "I'm here to examine the suspects' state of mind in relation to this crime. I'm especially looking forward to speaking with the young miss Takamachi. I... conducted my graduate thesis on clown psychology. It was very interesting... paradoxically, many clowns are far more seriously devoted to their craft than less comedic professions. Serious, bitter rivalries can form between clowns of comparable skill, even if they've never met. They just... naturally seek to undo one another, to prove that they are the funnier. Neither can rest while the other still performs. Do you know what I mean... Vivio Takamachi?" Lutecia said meaningfully. Her voice was soft, almost intimate, and yet laced with the unmistakable air of challenge.

"Flurgle glfooah." Vivio said, her face going as red as her eye. She couldn't help it... she could smell Lutecia's perfume, she could see the way her hair spilled over her shoulders, she was looking her right in the eyes. And Vivio was making a fool of herself, she knew she was making a fool of herself, but the part of her brain that handled conscious thought was currently in second place to the part of her brain that handled spazzing out.

"... ... ... excuse me?" Lutecia asked. She wasn't quite certain what response she'd been expecting to her veiled challenge... fear, anger, confidence. But it certainly wasn't... whatever the heck this was. "Are you feeling all right?"

Oh, God. Lutecia seemed worried about her. Well, that was the last straw, wasn't it? Her mind exploding in some combination of joy and terror, Vivio fainted.

"I honestly wish I could say I didn't see that coming." Nanoha said. "Okay, this isn't so bad; that time Caro dressed up like Lutecia for Halloween as a prank, Vivio only got out half that many nonsense syllables. Somebody help me elevate her head, and if we could get some water..."

Fate, assured that her daughter was in good hands, looked at her brother pleadingly. "Chrono... about these... individuals."

CHrono sighed sadly. "Yes, yes, I know. Ladies, while I'm sure all of your identification and credentials check out, I don't suppose you could be helpful and show me some sign that you're all actually affiliated with law enforcement."

The three women took off their pointless glasses... and...

Chrono, seeing where this was going, sighed again. "Dammit."

... put on shades.

"They look like law enforcement to me." Verossa said approvingly.

EDIT: Also to be found on FF.net here.

[Megaolix]

Originally Posted by Moczo

Well, if everyone else is updating, I can hardly be less awesome! Let's clown it up, baby.

Spoiler for Center Ring, Part 7:

"'We have to do the right thing', you said." Hayate said bitterly, sitting in her prison cell. "'We have to call the proper authorities', you said."

"How was I supposed to know it would turn out like this?" Nanoha asked defensively.

"I wanted to dump the body in the woods. Nobody would have ever found her." Hayate said. "We could have chopped it up, dug some holes..."

"I'd have carried the shovel." Vita said.

"Vita would have carried the shovel!" Hayate repeated.

"Once? Some guy tried to rob the snack stand, and I hit him in the knees with a shovel." Vita said proudly.

"And that is why I keep you on the payroll." Hayate said, patting her on the head. "Because you are an idea woman. Not like the dual Ms. Goody-two Shoes over there."

"Hey, this is as much your fault as ours." Fate said. "Verossa is your friend. If he hadn't broken like cheap glass the first time that Interpol agent made a bad pun, maybe we wouldn't be in this mess." '

'This mess' was, in fact, the communal holding cell in the Cranagan City Woman's Penitentiary. The majority of the circus staff was currently crammed into the structure. This actually sort of made them happy (well, it made most of them happy. Erio was very annoyed that nobody had bothered to take him to a prison for men) because they took up the whole cell, and this meant that real criminals were being held elsewhere while they were all processed. Some of the performers wouldn't have been safe around hardened felons, after all. The poor felons might have gotten seriously wounded.

Nanoha nodded in agreement with Fate's assessment. "And you're the one who hired Shari, don't forget. It was her lunacy that really started the whole problem."

Shari pouted. She wasn't just pouting because of the accusation; she was still in a straitjacket, which she didn't really like. So she had multiple reasons to pout, is my point. "Hey, all I did was make a laser cannon. It's not my fault that Vivio murdered somebody with it!"

"You told me it shot water!" Vivio wailed.

"And it was an accident in any event! All she did was point it and push the button, she wasn't aiming it anyone and she certainly didn't murder anyone!" Fate protested, pulling her daughter into a comforting hug.

"Yeah, at most it was involuntary manslaughter. They'll only put her away for like, ten years." Vita agreed.

"Waaaaaaaaaah!" Vivio said.

"They're not putting her away for ten years." A new voice said, entering the room. "They're not putting her away at all, if I have anything to say about it."

Fate let out a sigh of relief. "Big brother, thank God. Could you please clear this up?"

Chrono Harlaown, Cranagan City's chief of police, strode into the room, which was a great source of hope. He was flanked on either side by Verossa and Vice, which did not provide much hope but was... well, not bad. There were worse people who could have been following him. They weren't wearing sunglasses, possibly as punishment.

"Believe me, I'm trying." Chrono said. "Unfortunately, my efforts are complicated somewhat by the fact that, well, you actually did kill this woman."

"... well, yes, but not on purpose." Hayate said defensively. "Besides, it's only Due. It's not like anybody really cares."

"I care!" A furious feminine voice screeched.

Chrono sighed in annoyance. "Oh. Look. She's here too."

Agent Fourington, who absolutely was not Quattro, strode angrily into the room. "Really, Miss Yagami! Must you disrespect the dead so?"

"... why do you care? Weren't you trying to arrest her for her many, many brutal murders?" Hayate asked.

"Well, yes, but that doesn't mean I didn't respect her!" Agent Quattrington said. "It doesn't mean I didn't admire her tenacity! Her intelligence! Her effortless grace and beauty! Indeed, to know her was to love her, whether she your enemy or your beloved older sister."

Nanoha blinked a few times. "Older sist-" She began.

"That was just a randomly chosen example!" Agent Disguised-Quattro said. "She certainly wasn't my sister, no sir! Just another criminal I had to bring in... not that I ever would have succeeded, given how cunning and ruthless she was. Far too amazing to ever be brought down by dolts like the law. No... no, only the cruel caprices of God could lay her low. Only sheer, blind luck... luck in the hands of an idiot child, no less. To die in such an undignified manner, slain by a loathesome little brat who didn't deserve to be in the same country as her, much less end her distinguished career. And that brat will pay for what she's done. She will pay."

"... ... ..." Everyone else in the room said.

"Um... sorry, went off on a tangent there." Agent Barely-even-bothering-at-all said. "Where was I?"

"Honestly not sure." Chrono admitted.

Fate raised her hand. "Er... Agent Fourington? Not to put too fine a point on it, but would you happen to be Quattro in disguise?"

"We just ask because you really, really seem like Quattro in disguise." Nanoha said.

"... wait, disguise? What disguise?" Vita asked. "I thought that it was a given that she's Quattro."

"I don't know who this 'Quattro' is, though she sounds brilliant and gorgeous." Agent Liar said. "I am merely here as a representative of corrupt, decadent human law."

"Okay, yes, she's Quattro." Teana chimed in. "Does anybody here think she isn't Quattro?"

Subaru raised her hand.

"... put your hand down before I smack you." Tea said coldly.

"I just didn't think I should go along with the crowd, that's all. Peer pressure is bad." Subaru said sheepishly.

"She does have a little Quattro around the eyes." Shamal said hesitantly.

"Quattro." Signum said.

"... why am I in woman's prison? Zafira got to go prison for men, why not me?" Erio asked. Caro patted him on the back consolingly.

"Chrono, recent debate in the cell here seems to indicate that we're pretty sure Agent Fourington is a plant." Hayate said.

"Be that as it may, I'm afraid all of her identification checked out." Chrono said.

Verossa chimed in, "And she also has sunglasses."

"Of justice." Vice agreed.

Chrono winced, as if briefly overcome by a long-time pain. "Yes. Yes, she does." He said through gritted teeth. "Look, I personally agree with you all, but her clearances all checked out and the mayor is... ::sigh::... a huge fan of puns, so I've been instructed to give her my full cooperation. I suppose it's possible that she's somehow managed to infiltrate Interpol... though that's incredibly unlikely..."

"As unlikely as a man using advanced cybernetic implants and illegal genetic engineering to spice up his circus acts?" Hayate muttered bitterly. "God, I hate that guy."

"But until I get word from Interpol stating that she's not who she says she is, I've got to play along." Chrono finished.

"Fortunately, I am who I say I am. Just a common agent serving the meaningless laws of the lowly human animals." Agent Quattro Literally Means Four, It's Really Not Even A Good Pseudonym said. "Totally innocent."

"... I'm sure." Chrono said dryly. "Now, if it's not too much trouble, might you explain why you're actually here?"

"Ah! That's right. I came to tell you that my experts have finished analyzing the crime scene."

Verossa looked at his watch. "Really? It's only been like, thirty minutes, and twenty of those were getting all these people back to the station. I mean, that's really not enough time to finish..."

"My experts have finished analyzing the crime scene." Agent Fouringliar said meaningfully. "Haven't you, experts?"

As if on cue... well, okay, not 'as if', just on cue, three women entered the room to flank Agent Totally-Not-A-Villain.

Vivio's breath caught in her throat.

"Oh, crap." Nanoha said, recognizing that reaction and immediately spotting the source. All three women were wearing formal business attire like Agent Yes, That Is Quattro, up to and including the glasses for whatever reason. Two of the three women were redheads, but one of them had a long mane of purple hair that anyone who'd ever seen a poster for Scaglietti Bros. circus would instantly recognize.

"These are my personal panel of experts." Agent I'm Sick of Thinking Up Funny Things to Put Here said. She motioned to her panel of 'experts'. "Agent Wendolyn Evelen, my crime scene analyst."

"Yo, hi!" Wendi said.

"Agent Nina McBeef, head of prisoner transport."

"McBeef?" Nove snarled. "You gave me the last name McBeef?"

"What do you mean, Nina? Clearly that is your name that nobody gave to you!" Quattro said, smiling warmly.

"But it sounds so stupid! What kind of a lame fake name is that?"

Quattro's smiled grew rather strained. "One that's appropriate to the dumb cow who can't remember not to say things like 'fake name'!"

"It's all right. You're fooling precisely nobody." Hayate said.

"Why are they talking about fake names?" Verossa asked.

"Nobody worth fooling, anyway." Hayate corrected herself.

"I still say that's a crap name. How come Wendi gets the good name?" Nove sulked. Wendi smacked her upside the head. "Ow! What was that for!"

"You're breaking character, stupid!" She chided. "You gotta remember to stay cool, like me!"

Teana blinked a few times. "You know, this is actually morbidly interesting. It's like watching a trainwreck that just keeps rewinding itself and then wrecking again."

"Why are they talking about fake names?" Subaru asked.

"... ... ..." Teana said. "I'd explain it to you, but I don't think I could keep the venom out of my voice and then I'd feel like I was kicking a puppy."

"There's a puppy?" Subaru asked, eyes gleaming.

Teana tried her hardest not to cry.

"And finally," Agent Fourington said, continuing her introductions, "My staff psychiatrist, Doctor Veronica Klondike."

"Her too? How come I'm the only one whose fake name sucks?" Nove snapped. She then said, "Ow!" as Wendi cuffed her on the back of the head again.

"Good afternoon." Lutecia said, her eyes firmly fixed on Vivio. "I'm here to examine the suspects' state of mind in relation to this crime. I'm especially looking forward to speaking with the young miss Takamachi. I... conducted my graduate thesis on clown psychology. It was very interesting... paradoxically, many clowns are far more seriously devoted to their craft than less comedic professions. Serious, bitter rivalries can form between clowns of comparable skill, even if they've never met. They just... naturally seek to undo one another, to prove that they are the funnier. Neither can rest while the other still performs. Do you know what I mean... Vivio Takamachi?" Lutecia said meaningfully. Her voice was soft, almost intimate, and yet laced with the unmistakable air of challenge.

"Flurgle glfooah." Vivio said, her face going as red as her eye. She couldn't help it... she could smell Lutecia's perfume, she could see the way her hair spilled over her shoulders, she was looking her right in the eyes. And Vivio was making a fool of herself, she knew she was making a fool of herself, but the part of her brain that handled conscious thought was currently in second place to the part of her brain that handled spazzing out.

"... ... ... excuse me?" Lutecia asked. She wasn't quite certain what response she'd been expecting to her veiled challenge... fear, anger, confidence. But it certainly wasn't... whatever the heck this was. "Are you feeling all right?"

Oh, God. Lutecia seemed worried about her. Well, that was the last straw, wasn't it? Her mind exploding in some combination of joy and terror, Vivio fainted.

"I honestly wish I could say I didn't see that coming." Nanoha said. "Okay, this isn't so bad; that time Caro dressed up like Lutecia for Halloween as a prank, Vivio only got out half that many nonsense syllables. Somebody help me elevate her head, and if we could get some water..."

Fate, assured that her daughter was in good hands, looked at her brother pleadingly. "Chrono... about these... individuals."

CHrono sighed sadly. "Yes, yes, I know. Ladies, while I'm sure all of your identification and credentials check out, I don't suppose you could be helpful and show me some sign that you're all actually affiliated with law enforcement."

The three women took off their pointless glasses... and...

Chrono, seeing where this was going, sighed again. "Dammit."

... put on shades.

"They look like law enforcement to me." Verossa said approvingly.

EDIT: Also to be found on FF.net here.

I bet Chrono is just wishing this day would end. And that line?

Spoiler for Line:

"Believe me, I'm trying." Chrono said. "Unfortunately, my efforts are complicated somewhat by the fact that, well, you actually did kill this woman."

Golden.

Now I just remembered we haven't seen Carim yet. My money on her being teh one who'll clear this mess up.

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Well, it's come to light that certain things happened, and I would like to address why I think it was a poor decision that harms the fic over all.

Spoiler for MD:

So if you look at addventure, Yuuno did indeed have sex with Material D and now Material L.

Well, first off this makes the whole "new method of transfering mana" thing completely pointless. Why just use it the one time but not the others?

I also think that it screws up Yuuno's characterization. Okay, maybe he would do that if he absolutely had no choice, but I doubt he'd be so okay with it. I mean, he sleeps with Yami and then acts like nothing happened afterwards. The way he is around her doesn't change a bit. I don't think Yuuno's a guy who'd be all "Yup, I just nailed this chick I just met. Just another day in my life!" Maybe it's just me but I think he'd be all gloomy and go "Aaaah... I can't believe I just did that... I'm sorry Nanoha, I betrayed you..."

So, okay, I really don't like he idea of him having sex with the Materials period, but treating it like it was nothing is even worse. If you really insist on including the sex, then I think you've handled the consequences poorly.

*sigh* Honestly, I'm considering whether or not I should drop this fic...

My suggestion would be to have an 'all ages' version for the FF.net release at least with the sex replaced with partial linker core drainage or something.

This is just my opinion, so feel free to ignore it.

*sigh* It's comments like this that makes me want to drop this fic.

Why do you think I didn't even MENTION the lemons before?! Because I KNEW that all i would get would be people complaining about it!

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

*sigh* It's comments like this that makes me want to drop this fic.

Why do you think I didn't even MENTION the lemons before?! Because I KNEW that all i would get would be people complaining about it!

Hm, i don`t find anything dab with lemon and actualy like the "hot" scenes between Yuuno and Materials.

2Nanya. hey, don`t feel bad, pal. Everybody have they standarts of "right" or "wrong", but it`s not mean that they want to force them on you. 00-Raiser just stated his thought.

I totaly support you and Yasanagi in your story, and only you two can deside what "right" and waht "wrong" in your story.

[Yasanagi]

I took some time to reflect on Raiser's comments (and it was nice of him to express his concerns to me face to face during our meeting earlier).

Spoiler for MD discussion:

After giving it some thought, I came to the conclusion that yes, there is some plot value with the lemons but I'm already weaving in new consequences and a new element which can explain some of Yuuno's earlier OOCness. With some luck, I can start foreshadowing it next episode when I get around to writing it.

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

I took some time to reflect on Raiser's comments (and it was nice of him to express his concerns to me face to face during our meeting earlier).

Spoiler for MD discussion:

After giving it some thought, I came to the conclusion that yes, there is some plot value with the lemons but I'm already weaving in new consequences and a new element which can explain some of Yuuno's earlier OOCness. With some luck, I can start foreshadowing it next episode when I get around to writing it.

New plot horizons, always good to see.

Hmm, Seikou-chan still didn`t have her "time" with Yuuno, not fair

[Megaolix]

Originally Posted by Yasanagi

I took some time to reflect on Raiser's comments (and it was nice of him to express his concerns to me face to face during our meeting earlier).

Spoiler for MD discussion:

After giving it some thought, I came to the conclusion that yes, there is some plot value with the lemons but I'm already weaving in new consequences and a new element which can explain some of Yuuno's earlier OOCness. With some luck, I can start foreshadowing it next episode when I get around to writing it.

Well, I won't complain anymore if the OOCness is taken care of. Besides, I understand the Materials need to be at 100% when they reach Mid or else they'll be destroyed in battle, expecially if they have to hold back.