So here's something for Thunderbird and Satashi that will hopefully be useful for their visual novel projects:
I took them from Hiyotama Goten's Lyrical Days doujinshi, cropped them out, added some smiles. There's also Fate, Vita, and Alisa too, but they're being covered by the others. I couldn't do much about Nanoha and Shamal's legs, so perhaps some one else could take a stab at removing the text?
Well, like Moczo said, even just a few words are enough to let some one know you're actually reading something.
Well, I used to be a bit more open and casual like that with my reviews. However, you see, some authors whose stories I reviewed were... how should I put it... less than appreciative.
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Originally Posted by 00-Raiser
Heh, well I've had part of chapter 2 done for awhile... I guess I could post it.
The story so far: Nanoha and Fate go on a romantic getaway, leaving Yuuno to babysit Vivio.
Spoiler for Three's Company chapter 2 Partial:
When Yuuno woke up, he felt an unfamiliar weight on his arm. He peeked under the covers to see that the small child had latched onto him at some point during the night; her angelic face remained lax with sleep.
Not wanting to wake her, Yuuno lay back down and closed his eyes. He couldn’t remember the last time he let himself sleep in.
…
……
He suddenly felt like he was forgetting something.
………
…………
Didn’t Vivio have to go to school?
“Crap!” Yuuno shot up and looked at his clock. It was twenty after seven and school started at eight. “Vivio, wake up!” He gently prodded the girl.
“Good morning…” She mumbled, rubbing her eyes. She looked confused for a moment, but then remembered where she was. “… Yuuno-san.”
“Hurry up and put your uniform on.” He instructed, quickly grabbing clothes for himself. “Aaah… We’re going to be late…” Things had gone so well the night before that Yuuno had let his guard down. He rushed out of the room to change while Vivio slowly went over to her bag and took out her school uniform.
Yuuno made it to the kitchen before she did, but there was no time to make a decent breakfast. He imagined that Nanoha and Fate would cook a balanced meal every morning, but today Vivio would have to settle for a bowl of cereal.
Yuuno shovelled his cold meal into his mouth, while Vivio didn’t seem to be in any particular rush. They went about brushing their teeth in a similar manner.
“Do you have everything, Vivio?” He asked, checking his clock. It was seven thirty-five.
“I don’t have a lunch.” She said, prompting Yuuno to slap a hand over his face. He hadn’t planned for a bento, so he fished out his wallet and gave the girl some money.
“You’re going to have to buy something at the school store, ok? I’ll make sure you have a lunch tomorrow.”
“Ok!” Vivio replied as she stuffed the bills into her pocket. They hurried off and went through the procedure to get down to the surface, and Yuuno slowed down when the Saint Church run magic school was in sight.
“Looks like we made it…” He sighed.
“Good morning, Vivio!”
Vivio turned around at the call. “Ah! Corona! Good morning!”
Corona noticed Yuuno and gave him a polite bow. He returned the gesture.
“Well, Vivio, I guess we’ll part here.” He said. “I’ll be back to pick you up when school is out.”
“Ok! See you later, Yuuno-san!” She waved as he departed.
“Who was that person?” Corona asked her friend.
“That’s Yuuno-san, some one who’s known my mamas for a long time! I’m staying with him while my mamas are on vacation.”
“I see.” Corona replied. “How is it so far?”
“Good!” Vivio beamed. “I like Yuuno-san! He’s really nice!”
---
Yuuno finally relaxed as he sunk into his chair at the library. It certainly had been one hectic morning, and he would make sure history didn’t repeat itself. But he had gotten the girl safely to her school on time so now he could focus on the stack of books on his desk.
As usual, Chrono had requested a mountain of material from him, however compared to Vivio, it was certainly an easier task. Yuuno searched for the list he had made of the books the admiral wanted, but he couldn’t quite remember where it had ended up.
He eventually found it after getting on all fours and looking under his desk. When he rose, his eyes met a familiar rear end that had propped itself up on the corner of his desk.
“Good morning, Yuuno-kun.” Owner of said rear end cheerfully greeted.
“Same to you, Hayate.” He said back, looking up at his visitor.
Of all his childhood friends, Hayate was the one who utilized the library the most. Being a special investigator, she was always assigned to the more rare and bizarre cases. As such, knowing what she was up against took a lot more research. She was a familiar enough face that the entire female staff would cover their chests when they saw her.
Naturally, Yuuno would assist her personally. Sometimes they’d spend hours in the stacks together, searching for relevant information. Yuuno might not have been that close to Hayate when they were kids, but now he considered her a friend on the same level as Nanoha and Fate.
“What can I do for you today?” He asked.
“Nothing, really.” She answered. “I just came to thank you. That information you got me really helped in closing that case I was working on.”
“Oh right, that one. That sure was an obscure item you came across.”
“Once I knew what it did, taking down the culprit was a breeze.”
“I’m glad I was able to assist you.”
“So in return I thought you’d like to know,” Hayate leaned in closer. “Your assistant’s bust has gained a centimetre.”
“Please stop groping my employees.” He frowned. If it was one thing his friend seemed to love the most, it was getting a rise out of him. Over time he had developed a bit of a tolerance to her teasing.
“No good, huh…? Ok, then how about I let you check on my growth?” She purred, puffing her chest out.
“Stop teasing me like that.” Yuuno flushed a little. It was just a bit of tolerance.
“Me? Tease you? Why, I have no idea what you’re talking about.” She fluttered her eyelashes innocently.
“Such a trouble maker as usual.”
“Oh? Whatever do you mean?” She stuck her tongue out this time.
“Remember last year’s Halloween party?”
“… At least everyone kept their clothes on that time.” She smirked. Yuuno groaned and covered his face with his hand to hide his blush.
“You had to remind me…”
“You know you enjoyed it.” Satisfied she’d gotten him that flustered, she laughed, the sound of it never failing to turn his frown upside down. One never stayed mad at Hayate Yagami for long. “Fine then. To make it up to you, how about I treat you to a fancy dinner tonight?”
Yuuno coughed, as he often did, to regain his composure. “Sorry, but I have to pass. I’m looking after Vivio now.”
“Oh yeah, that’s right.” Hayate bopped her fist into her upturned palm in realization. “Nanoha-chan and Fate-chan are on their little getaway right now. Guess I lost track of the date.” Her smile seemed to wane a little, but then grew into a grin. “Well, if that’s the case… I guess it can’t be helped.” She hopped down from the desk. “I’ll see you around then, Yuuno-kun.”
Yuuno was actually kind of surprised by the brevity of her visit. She wasn’t one to give up so easily.
---
As Yuuno was accustomed to working long hours into the night, he couldn’t remember the last time he clocked out when the sun was still up. He bid his employees good day and made his way to the school Vivio attended. When he arrived he saw the girl waiting for him at the gate.
“Yuuno-san!” She waved when she saw him.
“Hey Vivio,” he smiled when he reached her. “Are you all ready go to?”
“Yup!” She took his hand and they begun walking back.
“So how was school today?”
“It was a lot of fun!” She beamed. “We got to watch a movie about the founding of the Saint Church!”
“Oh? That must have been interesting, especially for you.”
“It was kinda weird.” She giggled. “But the Saint Kaiser was amazing!”
“I’m sure you’ll grow up to be a person just like her.” He assured her.
“I want to be more like Nanoha-mama, though!” She decided. “I’ll become a mage just like her!”
“… For everyone’s sake, I hope you become some one much more… reserved than Nanoha.” Yuuno chuckled nervously.
“What do you mean?” Vivio blinked up at him.
“Just remember, everything in moderation… especially attack magic.”
“Moderation…” The child repeated slowly, committing the word to memory.
---
When they returned to the apartment, Vivio quickly scampered off to change out of her uniform. Yuuno merely loosened the top buttons of his shirt and dropped down onto his couch. The child joined him there a few minutes later.
“Now, what should we do tonight?” He wondered out loud.
“Well, I have some homework to do.” Vivio informed him.
“Anything you need help with?”
“Hmmm… I don’t know.” She admitted.
“Well, if you need help just let me know, ok?”
“Ok!” Vivio ran off again and returned with her backpack. She sat on the floor, taking out her books and placing them on the coffee table in front of her.
Smiling when he saw her pull out a pencil with a bunny shaped eraser, Yuuno considered what he should do in the meantime. Going over to his bookshelf, he decided on a tome about the ancient Lucrecian Empire that he hadn’t read in awhile and sat back on the couch. It would serve as a decent time waster until he had to start preparing dinner.
Time passed in relative silence, only interrupted by the occasional “hmmm” and “aha!” from the little girl. Just when Yuuno slipped in a bookmark and got up to head to the kitchen, his doorbell rang.
“Hm? I’m not expecting anyone…” He wondered.
“I’ll get it!” Vivio bounced to her feet and dashed to the door.
“Hold on, Vivio.” Yuuno followed after her. “We don’t know who…”
“Ah!” He heard Vivio’s surprised squeak and quickly poked his head around the corner.
“Ah!” He also made a surprised noise when he saw the brunette in the threshold.
“Commander Hayate!” Vivio cheered, wrapping her arms around the older woman’s legs.
“Good evening Vivio, Yuuno-kun.” Hayate greeted, smiling down at the girl.
“Hayate?” Yuuno blinked. “What are you doing here?”
“Sorry for intruding.” She stepped in once Vivio let her go. “I hope you don’t mind.”
“No, it’s ok. I’m just confused.” He answered.
“I still need to show my thanks, remember? And since I can’t take out to dinner…” She lifted the plastic bag she held in one hand. Through the translucent plastic Yuuno could see vaguely make out various food wrappers. “I decided to take the dinner to you.”
“You didn’t need to…”
“Well, I did.” Hayate stuck out her tongue. “You don’t mind having dinner with me, right Vivio?”
“Not at all!” Vivio grinned.
“That settles it then!” Hayate grinned back. Yuuno sighed, clearly having no choice in the matter. Not that he was against it or anything; he would be a real moron if he turned down a chance to eat Hayate’s legendary cooking. He just didn’t want to trouble her.
“Well, if you’re ok with it…” Yuuno said.
“If I wasn’t I wouldn’t be here.” Hayate assured him before heading further inside. She had never been to her friend’s apartment before, but it was as sparsely decorated and efficient as she thought it would be. She easily spotted the kitchen with her initial sweep and entered it, setting her groceries on the table. She then spun around to the two blondes that had followed her.
“It’ll take a bit, so you two go find something to do, ok?” She said.
“Of course I’ll assist you.” Yuuno said.
“I’ll help too!” Vivio added.
“Thanks for the offer, but I’ll be just fine on my own.” Hayate smiled back.
“But…” Vivio began to protest but Hayate crouched down to the girl’s eyelevel.
“This is something special I’m doing just for you and Yuuno-kun, so it’s important that I do it on my own. I promise you can help me next time, ok?”
“Ok!” Vivio brightened upon hearing that last part and went back to her homework. Yuuno remained.
“I really should lend a hand.” He said.
“I appreciate it, Yuuno-kun, but like I said, this is something I’m doing for you, so it won’t mean as much if you help me with it.” Hayate replied, putting her hands on her hips before turning away from him. He watched silently as she went through his cupboards, learning where everything is.
“So your cutting board is up here…” She mumbled, opening the very top cupboard. Yuuno watched in amusement as Hayate attempted to reach the board on the top shelf but only grabbed air. Even hopping on her tip toes wasn’t enough.
Even if Hayate often got the better of him, there was one thing Yuuno could always, quite literally, hold over her.
“Need help?” he couldn’t help asking with a grin. The girl turned to him with that pouty expression she always wore when he pointed out her lack of height.
“Geeze Yuuno-kun, I said I can handle it!” She huffed, making her way over to him and pushing him out of the room. “You just go play with Vivio.”
Yuuno knew she wouldn’t listen to any objections, so he let himself be kicked out of his own kitchen. He chuckled softly upon hearing the sound of a chair being dragged across the floor and then he rejoined Vivio who had resumed scribbling in her notebook.
It looks complete enough, or at least you reached a logical stopping point. When I get inspiration to write it usually hits me in sections all over the chapter, if not across chapters, which I have to piece together afterwards.
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Originally Posted by NeoEevee
...so, assuming there are any other Kingdom Hearts fans here, what does everybody think of these conspiracy theories/Wild Mass Guessings that I'm incorperating into my crossover fics?
*Snip*
And then the rest are purely fanfic-type things, like Master Xehanort having the Darklings of Nanoha, Fate, and Yuuno on stand-by, or Sora's outfit in KH2 functioning as a Barrier Jacket.
Or an alternate universe that plays like a Fusion Fic of KH and Nanoha. >w>;
So... what's up? xD; *shot*
That's certainly a larger scope than a simple "Nanoha is a 'World' in the KH-verse" thing. You got any existing material up already?
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Originally Posted by 00-Raiser
So here's something for Thunderbird and Satashi that will hopefully be useful for their visual novel projects:
*Snip*
I took them from Hiyotama Goten's Lyrical Days doujinshi, cropped them out, added some smiles. There's also Fate, Vita, and Alisa too, but they're being covered by the others. I couldn't do much about Nanoha and Shamal's legs, so perhaps some one else could take a stab at removing the text?
The story so far: Nanoha and Fate go on a romantic getaway, leaving Yuuno to babysit Vivio.
Spoiler for Three's Company chapter 2 Partial:
When Yuuno woke up, he felt an unfamiliar weight on his arm. He peeked under the covers to see that the small child had latched onto him at some point during the night; her angelic face remained lax with sleep.
Not wanting to wake her, Yuuno lay back down and closed his eyes. He couldn’t remember the last time he let himself sleep in.
…
……
He suddenly felt like he was forgetting something.
………
…………
Didn’t Vivio have to go to school?
“Crap!” Yuuno shot up and looked at his clock. It was twenty after seven and school started at eight. “Vivio, wake up!” He gently prodded the girl.
“Good morning…” She mumbled, rubbing her eyes. She looked confused for a moment, but then remembered where she was. “… Yuuno-san.”
“Hurry up and put your uniform on.” He instructed, quickly grabbing clothes for himself. “Aaah… We’re going to be late…” Things had gone so well the night before that Yuuno had let his guard down. He rushed out of the room to change while Vivio slowly went over to her bag and took out her school uniform.
Yuuno made it to the kitchen before she did, but there was no time to make a decent breakfast. He imagined that Nanoha and Fate would cook a balanced meal every morning, but today Vivio would have to settle for a bowl of cereal.
Yuuno shovelled his cold meal into his mouth, while Vivio didn’t seem to be in any particular rush. They went about brushing their teeth in a similar manner.
“Do you have everything, Vivio?” He asked, checking his clock. It was seven thirty-five.
“I don’t have a lunch.” She said, prompting Yuuno to slap a hand over his face. He hadn’t planned for a bento, so he fished out his wallet and gave the girl some money.
“You’re going to have to buy something at the school store, ok? I’ll make sure you have a lunch tomorrow.”
“Ok!” Vivio replied as she stuffed the bills into her pocket. They hurried off and went through the procedure to get down to the surface, and Yuuno slowed down when the Saint Church run magic school was in sight.
“Looks like we made it…” He sighed.
“Good morning, Vivio!”
Vivio turned around at the call. “Ah! Corona! Good morning!”
Corona noticed Yuuno and gave him a polite bow. He returned the gesture.
“Well, Vivio, I guess we’ll part here.” He said. “I’ll be back to pick you up when school is out.”
“Ok! See you later, Yuuno-san!” She waved as he departed.
“Who was that person?” Corona asked her friend.
“That’s Yuuno-san, some one who’s known my mamas for a long time! I’m staying with him while my mamas are on vacation.”
“I see.” Corona replied. “How is it so far?”
“Good!” Vivio beamed. “I like Yuuno-san! He’s really nice!”
---
Yuuno finally relaxed as he sunk into his chair at the library. It certainly had been one hectic morning, and he would make sure history didn’t repeat itself. But he had gotten the girl safely to her school on time so now he could focus on the stack of books on his desk.
As usual, Chrono had requested a mountain of material from him, however compared to Vivio, it was certainly an easier task. Yuuno searched for the list he had made of the books the admiral wanted, but he couldn’t quite remember where it had ended up.
He eventually found it after getting on all fours and looking under his desk. When he rose, his eyes met a familiar rear end that had propped itself up on the corner of his desk.
“Good morning, Yuuno-kun.” Owner of said rear end cheerfully greeted.
“Same to you, Hayate.” He said back, looking up at his visitor.
Of all his childhood friends, Hayate was the one who utilized the library the most. Being a special investigator, she was always assigned to the more rare and bizarre cases. As such, knowing what she was up against took a lot more research. She was a familiar enough face that the entire female staff would cover their chests when they saw her.
Naturally, Yuuno would assist her personally. Sometimes they’d spend hours in the stacks together, searching for relevant information. Yuuno might not have been that close to Hayate when they were kids, but now he considered her a friend on the same level as Nanoha and Fate.
“What can I do for you today?” He asked.
“Nothing, really.” She answered. “I just came to thank you. That information you got me really helped in closing that case I was working on.”
“Oh right, that one. That sure was an obscure item you came across.”
“Once I knew what it did, taking down the culprit was a breeze.”
“I’m glad I was able to assist you.”
“So in return I thought you’d like to know,” Hayate leaned in closer. “Your assistant’s bust has gained a centimetre.”
“Please stop groping my employees.” He frowned. If it was one thing his friend seemed to love the most, it was getting a rise out of him. Over time he had developed a bit of a tolerance to her teasing.
“No good, huh…? Ok, then how about I let you check on my growth?” She purred, puffing her chest out.
“Stop teasing me like that.” Yuuno flushed a little. It was just a bit of tolerance.
“Me? Tease you? Why, I have no idea what you’re talking about.” She fluttered her eyelashes innocently.
“Such a trouble maker as usual.”
“Oh? Whatever do you mean?” She stuck her tongue out this time.
“Remember last year’s Halloween party?”
“… At least everyone kept their clothes on that time.” She smirked. Yuuno groaned and covered his face with his hand to hide his blush.
“You had to remind me…”
“You know you enjoyed it.” Satisfied she’d gotten him that flustered, she laughed, the sound of it never failing to turn his frown upside down. One never stayed mad at Hayate Yagami for long. “Fine then. To make it up to you, how about I treat you to a fancy dinner tonight?”
Yuuno coughed, as he often did, to regain his composure. “Sorry, but I have to pass. I’m looking after Vivio now.”
“Oh yeah, that’s right.” Hayate bopped her fist into her upturned palm in realization. “Nanoha-chan and Fate-chan are on their little getaway right now. Guess I lost track of the date.” Her smile seemed to wane a little, but then grew into a grin. “Well, if that’s the case… I guess it can’t be helped.” She hopped down from the desk. “I’ll see you around then, Yuuno-kun.”
Yuuno was actually kind of surprised by the brevity of her visit. She wasn’t one to give up so easily.
---
As Yuuno was accustomed to working long hours into the night, he couldn’t remember the last time he clocked out when the sun was still up. He bid his employees good day and made his way to the school Vivio attended. When he arrived he saw the girl waiting for him at the gate.
“Yuuno-san!” She waved when she saw him.
“Hey Vivio,” he smiled when he reached her. “Are you all ready go to?”
“Yup!” She took his hand and they begun walking back.
“So how was school today?”
“It was a lot of fun!” She beamed. “We got to watch a movie about the founding of the Saint Church!”
“Oh? That must have been interesting, especially for you.”
“It was kinda weird.” She giggled. “But the Saint Kaiser was amazing!”
“I’m sure you’ll grow up to be a person just like her.” He assured her.
“I want to be more like Nanoha-mama, though!” She decided. “I’ll become a mage just like her!”
“… For everyone’s sake, I hope you become some one much more… reserved than Nanoha.” Yuuno chuckled nervously.
“What do you mean?” Vivio blinked up at him.
“Just remember, everything in moderation… especially attack magic.”
“Moderation…” The child repeated slowly, committing the word to memory.
---
When they returned to the apartment, Vivio quickly scampered off to change out of her uniform. Yuuno merely loosened the top buttons of his shirt and dropped down onto his couch. The child joined him there a few minutes later.
“Now, what should we do tonight?” He wondered out loud.
“Well, I have some homework to do.” Vivio informed him.
“Anything you need help with?”
“Hmmm… I don’t know.” She admitted.
“Well, if you need help just let me know, ok?”
“Ok!” Vivio ran off again and returned with her backpack. She sat on the floor, taking out her books and placing them on the coffee table in front of her.
Smiling when he saw her pull out a pencil with a bunny shaped eraser, Yuuno considered what he should do in the meantime. Going over to his bookshelf, he decided on a tome about the ancient Lucrecian Empire that he hadn’t read in awhile and sat back on the couch. It would serve as a decent time waster until he had to start preparing dinner.
Time passed in relative silence, only interrupted by the occasional “hmmm” and “aha!” from the little girl. Just when Yuuno slipped in a bookmark and got up to head to the kitchen, his doorbell rang.
“Hm? I’m not expecting anyone…” He wondered.
“I’ll get it!” Vivio bounced to her feet and dashed to the door.
“Hold on, Vivio.” Yuuno followed after her. “We don’t know who…”
“Ah!” He heard Vivio’s surprised squeak and quickly poked his head around the corner.
“Ah!” He also made a surprised noise when he saw the brunette in the threshold.
“Commander Hayate!” Vivio cheered, wrapping her arms around the older woman’s legs.
“Good evening Vivio, Yuuno-kun.” Hayate greeted, smiling down at the girl.
“Hayate?” Yuuno blinked. “What are you doing here?”
“Sorry for intruding.” She stepped in once Vivio let her go. “I hope you don’t mind.”
“No, it’s ok. I’m just confused.” He answered.
“I still need to show my thanks, remember? And since I can’t take out to dinner…” She lifted the plastic bag she held in one hand. Through the translucent plastic Yuuno could see vaguely make out various food wrappers. “I decided to take the dinner to you.”
“You didn’t need to…”
“Well, I did.” Hayate stuck out her tongue. “You don’t mind having dinner with me, right Vivio?”
“Not at all!” Vivio grinned.
“That settles it then!” Hayate grinned back. Yuuno sighed, clearly having no choice in the matter. Not that he was against it or anything; he would be a real moron if he turned down a chance to eat Hayate’s legendary cooking. He just didn’t want to trouble her.
“Well, if you’re ok with it…” Yuuno said.
“If I wasn’t I wouldn’t be here.” Hayate assured him before heading further inside. She had never been to her friend’s apartment before, but it was as sparsely decorated and efficient as she thought it would be. She easily spotted the kitchen with her initial sweep and entered it, setting her groceries on the table. She then spun around to the two blondes that had followed her.
“It’ll take a bit, so you two go find something to do, ok?” She said.
“Of course I’ll assist you.” Yuuno said.
“I’ll help too!” Vivio added.
“Thanks for the offer, but I’ll be just fine on my own.” Hayate smiled back.
“But…” Vivio began to protest but Hayate crouched down to the girl’s eyelevel.
“This is something special I’m doing just for you and Yuuno-kun, so it’s important that I do it on my own. I promise you can help me next time, ok?”
“Ok!” Vivio brightened upon hearing that last part and went back to her homework. Yuuno remained.
“I really should lend a hand.” He said.
“I appreciate it, Yuuno-kun, but like I said, this is something I’m doing for you, so it won’t mean as much if you help me with it.” Hayate replied, putting her hands on her hips before turning away from him. He watched silently as she went through his cupboards, learning where everything is.
“So your cutting board is up here…” She mumbled, opening the very top cupboard. Yuuno watched in amusement as Hayate attempted to reach the board on the top shelf but only grabbed air. Even hopping on her tip toes wasn’t enough.
Even if Hayate often got the better of him, there was one thing Yuuno could always, quite literally, hold over her.
“Need help?” he couldn’t help asking with a grin. The girl turned to him with that pouty expression she always wore when he pointed out her lack of height.
“Geeze Yuuno-kun, I said I can handle it!” She huffed, making her way over to him and pushing him out of the room. “You just go play with Vivio.”
Yuuno knew she wouldn’t listen to any objections, so he let himself be kicked out of his own kitchen. He chuckled softly upon hearing the sound of a chair being dragged across the floor and then he rejoined Vivio who had resumed scribbling in her notebook.
Heh, like I told you before, this was cute. Hayate needing help to reach stuff makes me laugh.
I think I found it more interesting though, that Yuuno could recognize Hayate by just looking at her rear-end. Makes me wonder how many times he's gotten a close-up view of her rear-end. XD
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It looks complete enough, or at least you reached a logical stopping point. When I get inspiration to write it usually hits me in sections all over the chapter, if not across chapters, which I have to piece together afterwards.
Well the plan is to have the chapter cover the rest of their evening together. I pretty much have that already all thought out. But we'll see how long it ends up being. I may split it...
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Originally Posted by WarpObscura
Like this?
It was a slapchop job.
Doesn't look too bad, especially when it gets shrunk to fit in the game's window.
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Originally Posted by Nanya01
Heh, like I told you before, this was cute. Hayate needing help to reach stuff makes me laugh.
Yeah, that girl is just so damn short... I'm actually quite fixated on that fact Well, I like short girls anyways.
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Originally Posted by Nanya01
I think I found it more interesting though, that Yuuno could recognize Hayate by just looking at her rear-end. Makes me wonder how many times he's gotten a close-up view of her rear-end. XD
Oh I'm sure she makes certain he sees it as often as possible
That's certainly a larger scope than a simple "Nanoha is a 'World' in the KH-verse" thing. You got any existing material up already?
Ehehehe... that's the thing. x3;;; I've put a lot of thought into all of it... but I haven't actually written anything yet. *shot dead*
Most of that actually no, ALL of it was written for a four-part megacrossover fanfiction series. I've written the beginning of the first fic... but it's not online, I have a lot of editting to do, and it doesn't involve KH or Nanoha at all, except for Shout Outs and foreshadowing.
I just wanted to get into the discussion and wasn't really sure how to start. But yeah, my brain seems to be hardwired for crossovers. And KH and Nanoha are prime targets, what with their "multiple worlds" aspects. That and I have a tendency to put a lot of thought into these things... a little too much thought. Like that Nanoha/KH Fusion Fic? It won't ever get a story of its own, though the characters will get zapped to the canon dimensions and wreck havoc there. I could've just stopped at sticking the Nanoha cast into the lives of the KH cast, but I didn't. I redesigned outfits, I made Keyblades, I've reimagined entire scenes with the soundtracks of both series... and I want to try and animate them someday. >> Because my brain is like a Plot Bunny factory, made by Plot Bunnies, for Plot Bunnies, and run by the Energizer Bunny; it just keeps going and going and going...
Even if you're not a crossover fan (such as myself), if you spend any time at all on TVtropes, you know that three series always inevitably cross over with every other series ever created!
Those three series are Dr. Who, Warhammer 40,000... and Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha.
Edit: For those of you curious or interested, I posted to FF.net the three complete chapters of Altered Course, the "what-if" AU re-make of MGLN Season One that I started writing some time ago. It's currently on hold, but I'll pick it back up after false light is done and I'll give Celica a break for a while.
Even if you're not a crossover fan (such as myself), if you spend any time at all on TVtropes, you know that three series always inevitably cross over with every other series ever created!
Those three series are Dr. Who, Warhammer 40,000... and Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha.
Really now? I've seen some of the Dr. Who and Warhammer 40k ones, but only a few Nanoha ones. Specific links, please?
Honestly, I don't think it's complete, but I'll see what (if any) comments I get for it.
Spoiler for Day in the Life Chapter 37:
her hair went from pink to green (you say this twice)
a large fireball filled the sky (you use 'the sky' again too soon)
She was worried that something bad was happening and she didn't know what to do at that time. ('at that time' sounds awkward. I suggest removing it)
his coat was nothing but tatters (and his coat)
Subaru was just glad that no one was inside the building (don't reuse 'the building', just say 'it')
to scortch and burn . (remove space before period)
only blink as Zafira (blinked)
Groaning, Hayate flopped onto her back, shuddered and groaned in discomfort (don't use groaning twice)
She stomped on the ground (use 'floor' instead of 'ground', further, you use 'ground' 3 times in the same sentence. Try to vary up the wording)
I wonder how many people want to kill me right now...
*Claims the page in the name of protective shields*
Errors left in quote. A general thing is that you reuse the same words multiple times in a single sentence. Watch out for that in the future.
Well this chapter was certainly action packed! You've left us with some evil cliffhangers too. For an extra dose of evilness, I'd suggest saving the bit where that woman is killed for the next chapter, instead leaving the scene off with her attack going at Shamal's neck. Can't wait to see how our heros will make it out of this one
Even if you're not a crossover fan (such as myself), if you spend any time at all on TVtropes, you know that three series always inevitably cross over with every other series ever created!
Those three series are Dr. Who, Warhammer 40,000... and Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha.
Not sure about two of those series, but... Try Ranma 1/2... THAT series has been crossed over with damn near EVERYTHING else out there.
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How about Sailor Moon? I vividly remember a large variety of Sailor Moon crossovers with pretty much everything under the sun (even Star Wars of all things).
Cute, though I think you should do more work on the longer, more central core fics!
Hard to do since "Shadowfire" is specifically a drabble dump that doesn't deal in anything long, or central, or core. Unless that was a jab at me to update LDG.
Sorry. I've kind of had to take a step back and realize just how fucked up in the head Lutecia really is, so it's made me do some rewrites for the next chapter.
How about Sailor Moon? I vividly remember a large variety of Sailor Moon crossovers with pretty much everything under the sun (even Star Wars of all things).
Really now? I've seen some of the Dr. Who and Warhammer 40k ones, but only a few Nanoha ones. Specific links, please?
I've seen a few Nanoha ones... some are more out there than others, and most are on the trope page for Nanoha fanfics. Though I wouldn't object to reading more - I love crossovers, in moderation - and I think the idea for a Kingdom Hearts cross is a good one, depending on the Bureau's hold over the setting. As far as I could think, there are a number of different approaches that could have various effects on either setting; my nightmare thinking on it a bit is Donald with a device. The universe is doomed. Though, on the flip side, Nanoha would be able to justify riding along for Sora's missions under the guise of protecting the fabric of space-time...? Seems reasonable enough, really.
Oh, and I need to read stories from about 30 pages of backlog. Mainly false light and the Lyrical Days pre-alpha. And I don't think I ever read Day in the Life or anything that came before it, might be high time to look those up.