Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion (second reincarnation)

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Keroko

*rubs eyes tiredly* I'm tired and going to sleep, but I managed to finish this before I go.

Spoiler for Syn Virage:

Name: Syn Virage
Mage rank: AAA
Military Rank:
Age: 12
Gender: Female
Magic type: Belkan
Magic colour: Blue
Hair color: Blue
Eye color: heterochromia, her right eye is red, while her left eye is blue.
Hair style: Syn’s hairstyle varies often, as both her mother and Vivio love to play with her hair.

Apearance:

Spoiler for Syn in casual clothing:

Spoiler for Syn with her mother, Elena Virage:

Personality:
Blunt, sharp with the tongue and a smartass to boot. The terror of teachers, you could say. Syn can be extremely annoying at times, driving people up the walls with smart remarks. Smartass she may be, though, she is not stupid. Most of the times when she is in one of her moods, she will drive to the edge, but never over it. If she is not in one of her moods –which must be said, is more often the case-, you will find that while she may poke fun at other people’s expense, she doesn’t mean it in a harmful way. When encountering Syn on one of her more calm moods, she is easy to get along with, albeit a bit stubborn.

Despite her tough-girl attitude, Syn can actually be a very shy girl, as she is very uncomfortable when it comes to physical contact. She won’t blush and faint, but you will clearly note that she gets very uncomfortable when people start getting intimate with her. A hand on her shoulder can make her slightly nervous, but not much, while a friendly hug makes her very nervous.

Background:
Syn is a Mid-Childan born girl, her parents being high-ranking officers in the navy, the talent for magic was quickly discovered and a career in the TSAB seems almost assured. However, when it came to picking a school, Syn was more interested in going to the far calmer school run by the Saint Church. Her parents agreed easily, possibly because they realized schools run, or otherwise funded by the TSAB may show favoritism.

When in the class, Syn felt isolated. With her mother being an Admiral in the navy, and her father a captain, she was treated with a certain amount of respect, awe, and unfortunately distance from her fellow classmates. This is probably why she quickly made friends with Vivio, whose mother was the even more famous Takamachi Nanoha. The two felt a shared connection between each other, and quickly they would work, eat and hang out together. It was during one of these hangout sessions that Vivio began to play with Syn’s hair, and developed a liking for it, much to Syn’s embarrassment.

Vivio quickly met Syn’s mother, Elena Virage, who had settled down for a desk job after becoming pregnant with Syn in order to raise their child. The two hit of perfectly, as Elena’s openness quickly accepted Vivio, and the two shared a liking for making sure the ‘plain’ Syn looked attractive.

To this day Syn still isn’t sure whether to bless or curse the fact that these two get along so fine.

A few years later, after successfully graduating, Syn applied to the TSAB along with Vivio. Their talent and heritage allowed them to bypass the lengthy Ground Force Training and the two were given the crash-course of several months. After successfully passing the AAA-rank test, the two quickly applied for the Armed Corps in the Main Branch.

Barrier Jacket:
Syn’s Barrier Jacket was designed by her mother and Vivio. Her initial idea was to simply use the standard Barrier Jacket the Armed Forces used, but the two would have none of that, and set of to design Syn her very own and personal Barrier Jacket.

The result was this:

Spoiler for Barrier Jacket:

Needless to say Syn was downright mortified, in fact at first she flatly refused to believe this was true, and frantically kept telling herself it was a dream and she would wake up soon. Syn’s Barrier Jacket is focused on high-defense, with as much maneuverability as possible, but only as a secondary concern.

Device:

Spoiler:

Hellskor is Syn’s Bow-type Device, its stored mode materializes as a bracelet worn on Syn’s right wrist. Hellskor is an Armed Device, and as such is not equipped with an AI as advanced as the types of Raising Heart and the like. Hellskor’s AI is more on the level of Levantine or Graff Eisen. Hellskor is made to specialize long-ranged bombardment magic, as well as physical shots. It allows Syn better control over her guided shots, and increases the accuracy of unguided high-speed and long-range projectiles.

Being in a Belkan school, and having a friend very important to Belkan history, Syn grew up favoring the Belkan school of magic. However, from her nature Syn had always been more of an archer then a swordfighter, so she decided to take a rare step for a Belkan mage: Become a ranged Belkan fighter.

Due to the nature of Belkan Reinforcement magic, this meant that her choice of weaponry was limited. Most gun-based Devices were build to support the Mid-style magic, and lacked any form of physical shots. Rescue came in the form of Signum, whom Vivio had told lots of stories about, and the Bow-form of her Device.

A bow allowed for the use of as many physical projectiles as the user could generate, and arrows were the perfect weapons to Reinforce, as they could take on any shape the mage desired with few restrictions.

Syn has virtually no melee skills, nor spells to support them, so she is completely dependant on getting her enemies from a far range.

Spells:
Offensive spells
Sperrfeuer -- Curtain Fire: A bombardment-type magic, while only one arrow is strung on the bow; many more arrows materialize around Syn, which can be fired simultaneously. These projectiles strike with high speed and strength, but cannot be controlled.

Flakfuer – Aerial Barrage: A controlled fire spell, while only one arrow is strung on the bow, multiple arrows, ranging from 3 to seven, materialize around Syn, which can be fired simultaneously. These shots have the lowest speed among Syn’s spells, but are controllable.

Caladbolg: A single-shot bombardment spell. It uses a single projectile, shaped like a strangely twisted sword-like arrow with a drill-like pattern, which is shot at high speed at the target. Its danger lies in that fact that it is a fast projectile, making it tricky to dodge. This is Syn’s most commonly used spell due to its low mana cost.

Hrunting: With little argue the most powerful of Syn’s offensive spells, with the longest of ranges in Syn’s arsenal. Despite firing only a single projectile, this spell can cause massive damage. Instead of spreading the damage over a large radius, as most bombardment spells do, this spell focuses all that damage in that single projectile, increasing its destructive qualities while lessening the damage radius. Hrunting is known for its high penetration, and few defences of its level can stand up against it.

Defensive/Movement
Movement Magic: Because Syn focuses on defence rather then mobility, she is not extremely fast. Using movement magic she is able to teleport away and reposition for another shot. The advantage of this is that it may throw an enemy of guard, the downside is that casting and coordinating the spell takes a short time.

Panzer Schild: A Belkan shield spell, this is arguably the most used defensive spell in Syn’s arsenal, using it to block her enemies attacks and counterattack afterwards. Syn is very talented in defensive spells, so her shield can take a pounding before going down.

Panzer Hindernis: A Belkan Barrier Spell, while less used then Panzer Schild, it often sees use to block attacks coming from the sides or attacks made while Syn’s hands are otherwise occupied.

Panzer Geist: A Belkan field spell, most often used to block attacks coming from all around her. Syn also uses it for its intimidating effect, because there is nothing more intimidating then someone simply standing there and taking your attacks without even flinching.

Enkidu: A binding spell, capable of being cast both at short and long ranges. Enkidu has no magic sealing or magic repelling, abilities but as a trade-off it is a very tough bind to break. It manifests as steel chains rather then magical ribbons, as the steel chains can be reinforced with Belkan magic.

Rho Aius: The second claim for the most powerful spell in Syn’s arsenal, Rho Aius would best be described as a multi-layered Barrier Spell. When casting, it appears in the form seven petals, each of which is as powerful as a concentrated Barrier. Rho Aius is a purely defensive spell created to block high-level spells. Because of its immense power required, Rho Aius is not a spell cast on a whim, and has a casting time, limiting its use to blocking high-level bombardment spells, or other spells that require a casting time before being fired.

Is that more information on Syn TT-TT<= happy tears now I can write her properly in RebelS (maybe )

[Keroko]

Yup, that's Syn's profile. I may tweak a thing or two later on (most likely the history when I start writing myself), but that's the gist of it.

And Syn may have a role in RebelS? Awesome!

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Yup, that's Syn's profile. I may tweak a thing or two later on (most likely the history when I start writing myself), but that's the gist of it.

And Syn may have a role in RebelS? Awesome!

Well she's in ch 1 And I plan on using her more :3 Syn's too cool not to use

[LimitedEternal]

Thread...moves...so...fast...

*falls over*

Originally Posted by Keroko

Your loss, its a weekend of good fun playing around, creating scuffles, backstabbing people, being a merchant, you name it, and you can do it.

It does sound pretty fun.

Bleh. Healing set. Well, I'd go after it for the looks, maybe.

Hey, don't make fun of the healers.

But if it looks cool...why not?

*clucks tongue* My throat feels dry after reading this. It seems that even the creator himself feels like shafting Hayate.

His loss.

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

Unfortunately, FF.net and FP.net do not give enough character limits for me to write up a descent summary T.T

Your summary would be...longer than the character limit???

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

I may use Noland for a non-canon one-shot...in which Franz gets pwnt by Meido Guy Noland.

Now that I consider it about the only time canonically Franz has gone up against anyone in OC and not lost was during the events of BelkaRed vs AbareHunter, though Glen and Naomi combopwnt him before he could do too much damage there... Garh, poor Franz, you were once a haxxed and powerful Stu, and now even your own creator amuses himself by toying with you.

Such as assigning him ludicrous amounts of paperwork? :3

Originally Posted by Tk3997

The internet has divided weirdness by zero it can never be stopped now...

Divided weirdness by zero??? How does one do that, and more importantly, what's the result???

There are those that just go with the flow of life and then there are those that grab it by the throat and tell it to start heading where they want it to go. I like to think of myself as one of the later.

Good philosophy to follow...but sometimes it's as well to go with the flow.

See I actually do it by choice I like playing team doctor. Just don't piss me off: "Oh opps sorry I was a LITTLE late on that heal was out of mana! yeah that's it..." You'll be sorry as Team Medic I control life and death you best remember that lug heads!

Heh, that's like the Warrior forum for the WoW guild my lan's making - it's titled "Why'd I die? Oh, the healer was AFK."

Sometimes I get the feeling healers do "accidentally" look away during the raid...

Hmm indeed... *wanders off looking for sweet things*

Sweet tooth? Ya don't come across as the type...*shrug*

Indeed, fire VERY good... err.

Someone say "fire"?

*LE proceeds to incinerate everything within sight, laughing like an idiot*

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Ya know what, I'm glad I napped to prepare for working until midnight instead of following this discussion.

The above is also why when it relates to canon information I would rather the Canon Info section of OCNano be restricted to mods and admins only: the honor system is all fine and well for keeping out normal malicious edits (...mostly...) but it cannot protect against someone who has confused the line between his fanon interpretations and canon information.

Or to put it simply: Honor system cannot stop khrack.

...That may be true, but still...

This is why I think we need to come up with some concrete baseline for this stuff, so we don't have to fight over which "canon" is right...

And it would also save pages of wading through Barrier Jacket/Linker Core/what-have-you argument #umpteen-thousand.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Problem: for the purposes of Comacanon, all these things damn well do exist. I mentioned already that I'm trying to come up with a working definition for the purposes of usage in Comacanon right around the time I first mentioned the astral and material planes.

True, but you still have to work within the confines of true canon. Otherwise what's the point?

You're both right. Linked mana can be generated within the body by drawing on unlinked mana from outside the body. There, problem solved.

Hmm, that might work.

Originally Posted by Sheba

Thanks for the lovely mental image....

Wha- does not compute.

Originally Posted by Kha

When I said I was looking for a genderbent Fate, I was looking for a picture where'd you could see his face. Not this.

(I know its somebody else, but stop for a while, and look closely. )

No wonder everyone thinks you're out of your mind - you are. :3

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

The civility policy works two ways. -_-

There is a stark difference between a person who is annoying to some because of his normal manner of communication and a person who goes out of his way to annoy another person (and of course, plainly acting violently beyond his/her normal point of intensity). I'd appreciate it of this talk about my old warnings is stopped right now. It's not needed as far as I see how things are going here. Tk's always been blunt and sharp of tongue. But he has enough self-control to relent when needed or apologize when he goes too far. No need to press this matter any further like liingo said.

Let me clarify something, I made that warning not to make Cadia a No-harshness Angelic Utopia, but rather to keep a sufficiently high level of civility. That's the main point I care about. I don't really care if a person has a sharp tongue as long as I can gauge the intent and level of self-control as appropriate. And as such, I don't see any reason for unnecessary friction to arise right now.

That's all.:/

^This.

Long as we keep it civil, I don't really care. We're all gonna have our own opinions, ways of speaking, and views on different concepts. Variety is the spice of life, they say, and it'd be pointless if we all had no leeway to speak.

That said, keep it the hell down, folks.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Don't forget that the Mids have a different understanding of armor compared to us; in this case it appears that its referring to magical protection - IE the barriers and fields.

If they can make a protective field with a gem and a spell, why not?

Originally Posted by Reiji Tabibito

25 PAGE BACKLOG BREAKER!!!!!!!!!!!

Bleah, I don't have the patience to do breakers that long anymore. I barely go to ten pages anymore...

...you are cruel, Keroko.


And I'm going to get you for this.

What are you gonna do, expose him as a trap?

*pats Cadia Zwei's head*

Originally Posted by Kha

I lol'd when I dropped by the Wrath of the Lich King.

Remember when I had Jail as a Death Knight? Guess what? It's gonna fit, because DKs are gonna get this skill called Anti-Magic Field.

When I first saw that entry on WoWWiki, I knew it was just a matter of time...

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Dwah?! Okay that CANNOT be a coincidence...

So Kha's some kind of double agent-



[Heavy]I see Spy!!![/Heavy]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Kha, you are an incredibly lucky person who manages to turn everything into Keikakku doori. Luck is just that: luck.

Stop. Gloating.

Oh lighten up. What's the point of an ego if you can't stroke it now and then?

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

It's quiet....too quiet....

Quiet, eh...

*takes a long, slow breath*

BURN TO OBLIVIOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!

*a cataclysmic fire blast engulfs everything*

Originally Posted by Keroko

Bleh, I see no reason to play Whack-a-coma, I just find porting Ki in Nanoha to be completely useless. Belkan mages virtually are Ki users already, and adding Ki to a show centered around magic doesn't atract me at all, so I'll just handwave it as a MSN crossover gone haywire and let it pass, no reasons for hissy fits if other authors see the merrits where I don't.

You could even write it in as an alternative kind of magic - now that I think of it, it could work like the multiple alchemy styles in FMA.

Originally Posted by Sheba

Never thought of it that way.

/still ponder how to adapt berserk rage, as shown in D&D or Diablo 2, in Nanoverse.

Enrages at 5 minutes, berserks at 10.

*runs*

Originally Posted by Sheba

I think I'll go the Warp Spasm or historical berserker route, maybe a bit shamanic. Remember San in her first appearance in Mononoke Hime? We could only see her mask and hood, and it was very animal-like. When the frontier between the man and animal is blurred, when the berserker can't even talk but just howl and growl like a raging wolf or bear, that's something I found more impressive.

Shaman, huh...

...you've just given me an idea.

Originally Posted by Sheba

Well, "Prototype" is usually a plot excuse for Mary Sue-ing up a character. After all, Sol Badguy was the prototype of all Gears and was accused of being a Mary Sue (not to mention that Daisuke has made it clear that sol is partially based on himself). And don't get me started on Gundam prototypes that are ALL assumed to be better than their production models. IRL, a prototype will be more flawed than production models.

True. If you're gonna do the "proto" route you have to do it right.

Originally Posted by Keroko

On the subject of self-control, when was the last time I exploded on the forums? Anyway, like I said, 'vivid imagination' that, and I have this skill that allows me to ignore pretty much everything I want to ignore, to the point where those guys damn near do become invisible to me.

I envy you now...self-control has never been one of my strong points.

I guess it depends on how detailed you want the explanation. "Barrier Jackets generate Barriers and Fields" is enough for me to explain everything from how a bikini can offer high-grade protection to explaining why the people in Nanoha get up after getting chucked through concrete.

Yup. Simple and explains the majority of everything.

...

.....

Ahahahaha! Genius! Now I am definetely rolling a Deathknight!

It took you that long? I was hooked from the name "Death Knight."

I'm not that bad, actually. You should see my sister. Most girls find ponies and kitties cute, she thinks humongous scaly fire breathing creatures are cute.

That's like this girl I know who plays games with us...she has an immense fascination with the shotguns...and is damn dangerous with them to boot...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Hmm... Now that I think about it, both Kha and Keroko made their own Aces to go with the young Ace Trio of Canon...

Now why didn't I make a similar Ace as well...?

Looks like I shafted myself there as well...<.<

Why not think of it as deeper devotion to Hayate-sama? :3

*runs*

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Pish...I can still MC people off cliffs and such. Like the bridge to the backdoor of KZ...

A little to the left...little more...there!

*jumps MC'd player off and it breaks allowing then to flail around right before they hit the river bank*

*runs up to MC-ing Priest, drops totems, and proceeds to Windfury him to death*

HK for the day. :3

And on a little sidenote, looks like FUNimation is going to be releasing Nanoha

Hm. Nice. 'Bout time.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

In my defense, it seemed like a good idea at the time....

Famous last words, Comar, famous last words.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Keroko: "Yuuno-kun's late.. "

Chrono: "Ah Keroko there you are. Yuuno said he couldn't make it at the last second so he asked me to replace him."

Keroko:"Oh..I suppose it can't be helped then. Work takes precedence after all."

Chrono: "Shall we ?"

*around the corner Yuuno lies gagged and Struggle Bound*

Yuuno: "Chrughh urgh urghtrd !"

...Why does this scene compute more than it has a right to?

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Eat... mushrooms

Nanoha: But which is the real Vivio? The pink one, the blue one?
Fate: I think its the rainbow one. All the pretty colors look~ it's a prettiful magical Kharckacorn let's ride on it! Wee!
Everyone else: >.> Let's leave them here -_-;

Stay away from 'shrooms kids they'll screw with your head.

Oh no...now someone's gonna write a crack one-shot where everyone gets high...*facepalms*

Originally Posted by Keroko

*rubs eyes tiredly* I'm tired and going to sleep, but I managed to finish this before I go.

Spoiler for Syn Virage:

*snip*

Syn's new and improved build, hm?

A bit jarring going from her Alpha build to this straight ranged one, but I guess you know what you're doing. I like the build, though - glad to see she's still a smartass.

Is her spell list supposed to be that small, though?

Originally Posted by Sheba

Could be worse like.... Fate speeding across roller coaster-like levels to collect rings, free loli clones at the end of stages and giving a beating to Dr Jail. Then optionally turn into Super Fate after collecting the seven Jewel Seeds hidden all over the game.

...

...I facepalmed. -_-;

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Well she's in ch 1 And I plan on using her more :3 Syn's too cool not to use

Heh. Can't wait. :3

[Comartemis]

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

True, but you still have to work within the confines of true canon. Otherwise what's the point?

"The confines of canon" are far too constricting. Much better to extrapolate on what we see and try to explain it with good old fashioned fanon than to say "it's not canon so you can't use it! Nyah!" Contradictions to canon are all that should really be left out, and on rare occasions, not even those should be excluded if it makes a story better than it would be without them.

This is why I'm including a decidedly religious bent in Comacanon like what Kha's done. The Saint Church is one of the most unexplored aspects of the Nanohaverse, and if we've got ourselves an interdimensional religion, why not expand on it and put some truth into the teachings? Hence the mentioning of angels and demons and celestial beings back in my examination of the Planes; these will be showing up in some form in the post-StrikerS timeline, becoming more and more likely to make appearances as Vivio grows up and starts to make her own waves in the Bureau. Hell, the way things are now, there might be a demonic meddler poking his nose into Jail's business even during StrikerS, perhaps working for Original Jail... or perhaps not.

Anybody wanna see Xellos show up every now and then, acting--as usual--on his own agenda?

You could even write it in as an alternative kind of magic - now that I think of it, it could work like the multiple alchemy styles in FMA.

A possibility, but it negates the point of creating an alternate energy source to be used with mana to create Kanka. This could easily be left out, though, since it seems my Void Magic concept is being better received than anything else I've created for Asuna so far.

I envy you now...self-control has never been one of my strong points.

Nor mine. I like to think I've been improving on that lately, though.

Famous last words, Comar, famous last words.

Don't I know it. I believe I said something similar when I first created Rico Sachara. Remember him? My first character, Mr. "I'm too cool to use magic systems"?

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

*facepalms*

KHAAA!!!

Are you screaming at Khalthuzad, of the Scaglettis?

Originally Posted by Keroko

'wasn't not a Sue?' Which is it?

Somebody cast Memory Lapse on me. I meant Keroko was the Ace who wasn't a Sue. The other 5 have rep in varying degrees to be one; Keroko's agreed Sue rating is 0.

Originally Posted by Keroko

It is a little known fact that Keroko and Chrono were dating at one point in time.

*Runs like crazy while dodging red blasts of magic*

Hayate had a crush on Kha before choosing Grandis. Sophia was actually dere for Artei once. Arisa was confused between Nanoha, Suzuka and Artei. Yuuno also went for Keroko. Kha had a soft spot for Carym. Keira admired Signum a lot. Shamal and Zafira were hinted, and so was Arf and Zafira. Keroko was egging Nanoha to date Kha, despite herself being a little interested. Erio found himself staring at Fate. And the list goes on, Cardcaptor Convoluted Style.

That entire web evolved and ironed out, finally arriving at the set point at end of Cente Gravia. Hence why relationshipwise, StrikerS onwards are all focused on the new cast, but there ins't much to fool around with. Teana goes for Dylandy who in turn is after someone we don't know yet. Subaru is stubbornly Teana. Vivio is free game for a while. Juliet Scagletti is too sly to be committed. Serena is too cold, and her tsun-affection for Allie is more onee-chan than anything else. Allie's just running free. So our main fun may well be from the Erio x Lutecia x Caro Macross Triangle.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Thread...moves...so...fast...

*falls over*

WEEK. :3

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Heh, that's like the Warrior forum for the WoW guild my lan's making - it's titled "Why'd I die? Oh, the healer was AFK."

Sometimes I get the feeling healers do "accidentally" look away during the raid...

I can give a wakeup call by bubbling and sending the boss at the errant healer.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

So Kha's some kind of double agent-



[Heavy]I see Spy!!![/Heavy]

What first you guys accused me of being a double agent for 7Arcs, now Blizzard? I'm honored!

[Spy]And this will be the last time you see me. *backstabs LE*[/Spy]

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

*runs up to MC-ing Priest, drops totems, and proceeds to Windfury him to death*

HK for the day. :3

I heard a loud Squish there.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

...Why does this scene compute more than it has a right to?

Because it does, like Lyrical Fate.

[PhoenixFlare]

Originally Posted by Liingo

@PF: Thoughts on my re-read of all of it below, separted into chapters and scenes for easy reference. Also random spelling points

Spoiler for Questions:

C-> Chapter S-> Scene

Prologue S2
Reason for the scene being 5 years earlier?
Info in C3 S3 would suggest that the scene is in the present since they’ve gone and stolen a star before we know about the prophecy.
C1 S2
How are you Mmilady (Milady)
C1 S5
I advice (advise) you not to underestimate the GF <- Subaru
C2 S5
I take it that you’re not altering the story to accommodate the new info about enforcers. Although it's easily solved since you don't have a slew of them in your story.
54 min pass between end of this scene and C3 S3? Seems a bit long...
C3 S3
I find the shift from angst/despair etc to happy happy joy joy a little weird once they know Nanoha is at the door… but not really a major issue.
C4 S3 Cont
You know my father (knew) <- Chrono
C4 S5
I’m amazed at the speed of bureaucracy shown in getting the unit together… 1000 members in less than 3-4 days. Where did they all come from? Or more importantly, do these 1000 members get used other than a 10th of them.

- Couldn't see any major pitfalls while I was re-reading it all, but it'll be best to see what the others say first.
- I do have questions on the plot... although i'm certain that those will be answered eventually in the next couple of chapters

Liingo.

That's fast!

Anyway, here's the response.

Spoiler for Answers:

Prologue, Scene II

• No, it didn't take place five years earlier. Zakharov Alexei Chevaron, Central Laboratories' Head of the Consortium of Lost Logia Research and also Noble Fellow of the Consortium, obtained all nine Jewels from a space expedition some time ago (exactly a year earlier before GuardianS) and made them unavailable for public information, even to the Bureau (Chapter Six, Scene VII). This was the information that Carim managed to get during the prologue (Prologue, Scene I), but she could only confirm it later because of the labs' stringent information security. The Templars made their move three months before Carim used Profeitin Shrifti and managed to steal two of the nine Jewels. The losses were covered up by the lab authorities who could not let the information about the Jewels slip, per Zakharov's orders (Chapter Three, Scene III). Hopefully, this makes sense.
• A spelling error I note myself is that I wrote Tomes (my original intent for the Lost Logia) somewhere there when it's supposed to be Jewels. Silly me, doing the correction later.

Chapter One, Scenes I and V

• Errors noted. (Why didn't I notice them before?)

Chapter Two, Scene V

• I'm sorry, Liingo, but I can't find the reference about the Enforcers that you're talking about. Mind to point me to it?
• Yep, time-stretch is definitely weird. Thanks for the look-up, changing them.

Chapter Three, Scene III

• The angst/despair wasn't deep to begin with, and it was sidelined by the fact that they could not confirm the issues at hand. When they started to formulate plans, the atmosphere supposedly lifted somewhat. Moreover, Nanoha and Verossa didn't know what they were discussing about, so they came in looking cheerful. Fate and Hayate quickly warmed up to their friends. It's not helped by Verossa's joke (perhaps it's too dry, I can't really write jokes if it cost me my life ).

Chapter Four, Scene III (cont.)

• Again, noted.

Chapter Four, Scene V

• They are picked up from various departments who have manpower to spare. Most of them (around 60%) comprise of Ground Forces (since Chrono made it his priority to have less friction with the Ground Forces' leader), a handful from Air Force, Navy, and Enforcers. Part of them were also drafted from reserves that were approved by their respective chiefs. von Khrull doesn't have much problem with the Ground Forces' units, but he paid extra attention to those that Chrono wanted to bring in from other departments.
• As it is, the thousand-strong members also include housekeepers, cooks, general staff, pages, and maintenance crews. I made it a point for them to be present as well, since it's their inaugural inception, and despite them being not as detailed as the frontline, they would be used. I already have their representatives worked out.

Thanks, Liingo, this helps a lot.

By the way, if you do have questions about the plot, I don't mind you asking. If it's a major one, I'll probably say so, though minor ones are perfectly all right.

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@Keroko: Don't worry about it, Tesla has a lot more in store for her. She has romantic partnership; she cooks (in the next chapter, no less ); she makes a particularly useful insight during their meeting; she leads a small squadron against the enemy; and she fights the battle of her lifetime against a Magus two ranks higher than she is. I always find character development in Nanohaverse shouldn't just revolve around their fighting abilities, so Tesla pretty much gets an all-round development. Hopefully, it's up to your taste and imagination.

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Kha

I am damn glad you didn't; or the HAYAURION pairing made of epic wrongness would've never been born!!!

-_-

:3

That is just one of the things that make him awesome and special. And notice that he is father-figure to 2 Aces. Kha as well, if you remember why.

Yeah.

And the end of A's Destiny, is a photo of all 6 characters. And if you didn't know them, you'd think that Aurion is a proud father of 5 boisterous kids.

HAYAURION!

=_=

LYRIANDIS!!!

Hold on a damned second there... =_=
That's not gonna work.

*RRRRRRRUNZ*

*stabs Kha with Hatchet. -_-*

Deshou? More points of distinction.

And an irreplaceable one at that.

Originally Posted by stormturmoil

Even if Hayate Is paired with Grandis Now, that does nothing to prove that she wasn't previously involved with Aurion in the past (fell apart because of the age gap?)

Hey, I took this into consideration too considering I made Hayate had a crush on Chrono at one time...

And the ones with Aurion were just rumors.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Indeed good point storm raised up. Even then implied relationships don't always have to work out; or can't work out in the future after failing once.

And as for pairings/relationships, I do believe everyone here has one they want to write out but hasn't due to any combination of reasons. On my end I have been stuck at setting the scenario for a cursed love between device and master that I have been wondering lately if I should just jump the gun and straight into it. >_>

Device and... Master...?

*stares at Null's one-sided love for the oblivious Daddy Saga...>.>*

*RUNS!!!*

Originally Posted by Keroko

Keep working on Grandis then.

But he's more of Knight-turned-Skilled-Maverick-turned-Knight compared to an Ace-class.

But will do.

It is a little known fact that Keroko and Chrono were dating at one point in time.

*Runs like crazy while dodging red blasts of magic*

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@______________________________@

ZOMG EPIC BRAINWAVE!!!! @___@

So... that's how it was...

Hayate, whom those that read my GenerationS version of her would find out that she had a crush on Chrono during her early pubescent years mainly because of how much he stood up for her in front of Graham's plan... Not to mention completely brushing aside her unneeded guilt with Clyde's death (which she had nothing to do with in the first place)... And then she actually later gave up on him because she was still kinda hooked up on that unnecessary large amount of selflessness schtick when she finds out that Keroko and Chrono had been getting along... Just when she almost manages to get over that minor heartbreak, Kha comes along and then puts on the harem-lead-patented 'Nice to all the girls' charm (as in being nice to Hayate a bit more than usual because of her gloominess) and manages to score a lot of affection points from her. But then Hayate desists yet again in favor of Fate... That second heartbreak kinda gives her a small trauma that she decides to focus fully in her career even more (120%!!!) instead of pursuing romance. But then, there comes this time that her playful flirting with Aurion gets misinterpreted and they get rumored to have a relationship when there is actually nothing of the sort happening...

This is...@_@

(In a good way...)

*is bashed with the Tome on the head by a blushing Hayate*

X_x

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Keroko: "Yuuno-kun's late.. "

Chrono: "Ah Keroko there you are. Yuuno said he couldn't make it at the last second so he asked me to replace him."

Keroko:"Oh..I suppose it can't be helped then. Work takes precedence after all."

Chrono: "Shall we ?"

*around the corner Yuuno lies gagged and Struggle Bound*

Yuuno: "Chrughh urgh urghtrd !"

XD XD XD

Originally Posted by Keroko

*rubs eyes tiredly* I'm tired and going to sleep, but I managed to finish this before I go.

Spoiler for Syn Virage:

*snip*

MASSIVE TURNAROUND OF STYLE?!?!

Well... Though I was jarred by the AAA-rank when I read it, I eventually read thru the entire profile. And what can I say, I like Tsun-tsun Archer Syn compared to eyepatch brawler Syn!

Her relationship with Vivio is interesting, more so with Elena. Her Barrier Jacket is CUUUUTTTEEE~!!!

*dodges Hrunting*

Good work. And I find Rho Aius to be my favorite spell in her list.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

^This.

Long as we keep it civil, I don't really care. We're all gonna have our own opinions, ways of speaking, and views on different concepts. Variety is the spice of life, they say, and it'd be pointless if we all had no leeway to speak.

That said, keep it the hell down, folks.

Exactly.

Why not think of it as deeper devotion to Hayate-sama? :3

*runs*

Originally Posted by Kha

Hayate had a crush on Kha before choosing Grandis.

Hayate had a crush on CHRONO before giving up on him in favor of Keroko (and eventually Amy), then had some attraction to Kha before giving up for Fate, been rumored to have a relationship with Aurion (which happens to be NOT the case), and then eventually settles down with Grandis.



Aaron: Broken Heart much, Hayate...?

Hayate: Don't remind me...

Aurion: There's a fine line between reasonable selflessness and plain gratuitous martyrism...

Grandis: Well, that turned out to be interesting...

Sophia was actually dere for Artei once. Arisa was confused between Nanoha, Suzuka and Artei. Yuuno also went for Keroko.

Kha had a soft spot for Carym.

Grandis actually regards Carym with some amount of reverence...

Keira admired Signum a lot.

Onee-sama?

Shamal and Zafira were hinted, and so was Arf and Zafira.

Keroko was egging Nanoha to date Kha, despite herself being a little interested.

Grandis eventually becomes really buddy-buddy with Keroko while he reminds Nanoha of Kyouya (*coughMidorikawacough* >.>)...

Erio found himself staring at Fate.

And the list goes on, Cardcaptor Convoluted Style.

That entire web evolved and ironed out, finally arriving at the set point at end of Cente Gravia. Hence why relationshipwise, StrikerS onwards are all focused on the new cast, but there ins't much to fool around with. Teana goes for Dylandy who in turn is after someone we don't know yet. Subaru is stubbornly Teana. Vivio is free game for a while. Juliet Scagletti is too sly to be committed.

Serena is too cold, and her tsun-affection for Allie is more onee-chan than anything else. Allie's just running free. So our main fun may well be from the Erio x Lutecia x Caro Macross Triangle.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Good lordy your head's gonna fall off from all the nodding Aaron.

[Wild Goose]

Ah forget it. I have to go to work and won't be back until late. The pitfalls of being the noob at work.

Can't really complain; my manager's working from 9.30 am to 1.00am tomorrow. I'm only going in at 2 pm.

Also, I roll eyes at Comartemis and Kha and their inclusion of church. They're probably going to get it all mostly wrong, seeing as how neither of them have had the level of exposure to churches that I have had.

Ironic, innit, that the guy with the most immersion in religious life makes no reference to organised religion in his work, but two guys who know zilch beyond stereotypes and supposed coolness are intent on turning the saint church into a mockery of christianity.

RE: Soldiers of the Wasteland: I'm kicking myself for not thinking of the idea of a crack assault team (in the military context, unlike here, "crack" means AAA to S-ranked) breaking up a cosplay party. SotW is a lot darker and grimmer than stuff I normally write, and is not for the faint of heart.

Nanoha is out of the picture, having been wounded in the ambush that was sprung on her as she tried to save Vivio. She was also sent a message by the kidnappers not to intervene, and was given a present from Vivio and the kidnappers.

A small, bloody cross.

Made from fusing two of Vivio's fingers together.

It's now up to a small team of 7 men to get in there and save Vivio.

Erick von Long, first Erusian recruited into the TSAB, the Flawless Gunslinger. A. J. Ivanovich, Mage Hunter of North Point. Glen Schattenmann, the Fire Knight. Master Chief John-117, the Green Demon. Yuuno Scrya. Franz Jaeger. And one man, seeking his redemption: Noland Reineger, the Calamity Knight.

Noland will walk into that Wasteland, with only one purpose: to rescue his beloved Sankt Kaiser.

And Death follows behind him.

[Comartemis]

Now wait just a goddamn second, Goose. Who ever said I was planning on turning the Saint Church into a mockery of Christianity, or even making it anything like Christianity? There appear to be a few stylistic similarities, true, but it's obviously a completely different religion with its' own set of rules. We don't even know if the SC holds a regular mass or anything of the like.

Basically the only thing we know about it is that it's a very liberal religion dedicated to the Kaiser. Beyond that, it's pretty much a total unknown and I intend to take advantage of that fact to create a unique religion more or less from scratch.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

*stabs Kha with Hatchet. -_-*

I don't recall Axe weapons having a Stab animation.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

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@______________________________@

ZOMG EPIC BRAINWAVE!!!! @___@

So... that's how it was...

Hayate, whom those that read my GenerationS version of her would find out that she had a crush on Chrono during her early pubescent years mainly because of how much he stood up for her in front of Graham's plan... Not to mention completely brushing aside her unneeded guilt with Clyde's death (which she had nothing to do with in the first place)... And then she actually later gave up on him because she was still kinda hooked up on that unnecessary large amount of selflessness schtick when she finds out that Keroko and Chrono had been getting along... Just when she almost manages to get over that minor heartbreak, Kha comes along and then puts on the harem-lead-patented 'Nice to all the girls' charm (as in being nice to Hayate a bit more than usual because of her gloominess) and manages to score a lot of affection points from her. But then Hayate desists yet again in favor of Fate... That second heartbreak kinda gives her a small trauma that she decides to focus fully in her career even more (120%!!!) instead of pursuing romance. But then, there comes this time that her playful flirting with Aurion gets misinterpreted and they get rumored to have a relationship when there is actually nothing of the sort happening...

This is...@_@

(In a good way...)

*is bashed with the Tome on the head by a blushing Hayate*

X_x

*smacks Aaron on the back*

It didn't want to say this just now, but its already all Keikakudoori...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Hayate had a crush on CHRONO before giving up on him in favor of Keroko (and eventually Amy), then had some attraction to Kha before giving up for Fate, been rumored to have a relationship with Aurion (which happens to be NOT the case), and then eventually settles down with Grandis.



Aaron: Broken Heart much, Hayate...?

Hayate: Don't remind me...

Aurion: There's a fine line between reasonable selflessness and plain gratuitous martyrism...

Grandis: Well, that turned out to be interesting...

To me, both crush and attraction mean the same thing, the only thing outside of my in-action plans was Chrono weighing in more than Kha did.

No battle plan survives contact with battle, but the wise will adapt.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Grandis actually regards Carym with some amount of reverence...

I see we both agree on Carym's Yukito power.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Onee-sama?

Yup. Omake-wise, throw in a Signum Kissu.

But not so much now; Keira's taken to fussing over little Anya Ashley.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Grandis eventually becomes really buddy-buddy with Keroko while he reminds Nanoha of Kyouya (*coughMidorikawacough* >.>)...

Keikakudoori...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Good lordy your head's gonna fall off from all the nodding Aaron.

Don't worry he's well-practiced.

Subete wo keikakudoori...

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Now wait just a goddamn second, Goose. Who ever said I was planning on turning the Saint Church into a mockery of Christianity, or even making it anything like Christianity? There appear to be a few stylistic similarities, true, but it's obviously a completely different religion with its' own set of rules. We don't even know if the SC holds a regular mass or anything of the like.

Basically the only thing we know about it is that it's a very liberal religion dedicated to the Kaiser. Beyond that, it's pretty much a total unknown and I intend to take advantage of that fact to create a unique religion more or less from scratch.

Sorry, was referring to Kha and his Ecclesiarch and Inquisition, which is pulled from 40k and pretty much a mockery of Christianity. You got hit in the crossfire. My bad.

[Kha]

C.S. Lewis had it hard for Chronicles of Narnia, and so did anything out there from vaguely parallel to directly contravening Christianity. Valid arguments, been there done that. To be honest, hearing all those criticisms now seem "about time", after plain-sailing so long in the OC. Or in my decade of fanfiction for that matter, since while the exact lore for each universe changes, the theme of Naaru and Ces'rauva hasn't.

Belka is unique in that this belief is the first I've worked on to center around a divine being, and the first where I've painstakingly tried to build a lore around. Like you said Goose, the more I wrote, the more conflict I'll generate. I've always been a controversial figure, so get used to it. And thanks for helping me get used to criticism.

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Ah forget it. I have to go to work and won't be back until late. The pitfalls of being the noob at work.

Can't really complain; my manager's working from 9.30 am to 1.00am tomorrow. I'm only going in at 2 pm.

Also, I roll eyes at Comartemis and Kha and their inclusion of church. They're probably going to get it all mostly wrong, seeing as how neither of them have had the level of exposure to churches that I have had.

Ironic, innit, that the guy with the most immersion in religious life makes no reference to organised religion in his work, but two guys who know zilch beyond stereotypes and supposed coolness are intent on turning the saint church into a mockery of christianity.

RE: Soldiers of the Wasteland: I'm kicking myself for not thinking of the idea of a crack assault team (in the military context, unlike here, "crack" means AAA to S-ranked) breaking up a cosplay party. SotW is a lot darker and grimmer than stuff I normally write, and is not for the faint of heart.

Nanoha is out of the picture, having been wounded in the ambush that was sprung on her as she tried to save Vivio. She was also sent a message by the kidnappers not to intervene, and was given a present from Vivio and the kidnappers.

A small, bloody cross.

Made from fusing two of Vivio's fingers together.

It's now up to a small team of 7 men to get in there and save Vivio.

Erick von Long, first Erusian recruited into the TSAB, the Flawless Gunslinger. A. J. Ivanovich, Mage Hunter of North Point. Glen Schattenmann, the Fire Knight. Master Chief John-117, the Green Demon. Yuuno Scrya. Franz Jaeger. And one man, seeking his redemption: Noland Reineger, the Calamity Knight.

Noland will walk into that Wasteland, with only one purpose: to rescue his beloved Sankt Kaiser.

And Death follows behind him.

... Hehe. This makes me grin. Though it's spelled "Reiniger," German for Purifier.

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Kha

C.S. Lewis had it hard for Chronicles of Narnia, and so did anything out there from vaguely parallel to directly contravening Christianity. Valid arguments, been there done that. To be honest, hearing all those criticisms now seem "about time", after plain-sailing so long in the OC. Or in my decade of fanfiction for that matter, since while the exact lore for each universe changes, the theme of Naaru and Ces'rauva hasn't.

Belka is unique in that this belief is the first I've worked on to center around a divine being, and the first where I've painstakingly tried to build a lore around. Like you said Goose, the more I wrote, the more conflict I'll generate. I've always been a controversial figure, so get used to it. And thanks for helping me get used to criticism.

Pretty much, Kha. Plain sailing has to end at some point - may as well be now. ;D

To be honest though, whatever Kha writes really has no effect on anything I write, precisely because I stay away from such religious bents.

Part of the conflict Kha, is also that you tend to throw things into your work without thinking them through, which is VERY painful for me, because:

[Dojo]You remind me of my old and stupid self, the me that I left behind.[/Dojo]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

... Hehe. This makes me grin. Though it's spelled "Reiniger," German for Purifier.

Ah, I knew I was forgetting something.

But yeah, despite being serious dark crack, this is a story, in a way, of, Noland's redemption. It's a long process and a long road, but redemption has always IMO been about the journey and less the destination. Take FFVIIAC, which was essentially Cloud's journey of coming to terms with himself and the whole destination of self-forgiveness; we knew he was going to be forgiven in the end, but it's the journey that made Advent Children so interesting.

...okay, I also didn't like the idea of calamity Noland and wanted to redeem him. It's sorta been because of my upbringing, but I kinda believe that all people deserve redemption - but they need to want it.

Incidentally, if you don't mind, Noland will be learning one borderline-ranged spell in Soldiers of the Wasteland. It's based on a little-used spell of Franz's (which I'll be using a bit more inTF6), and is called... Sturm Bolter.

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Ah, I knew I was forgetting something.

But yeah, despite being serious dark crack, this is a story, in a way, of, Noland's redemption. It's a long process and a long road, but redemption has always IMO been about the journey and less the destination. Take FFVIIAC, which was essentially Cloud's journey of coming to terms with himself and the whole destination of self-forgiveness; we knew he was going to be forgiven in the end, but it's the journey that made Advent Children so interesting.

...okay, I also didn't like the idea of calamity Noland and wanted to redeem him. It's sorta been because of my upbringing, but I kinda believe that all people deserve redemption - but they need to want it.

Hey, that's cool man. Redemption is going to be a future theme of Gospel too, once I get to that part of the story. I'm excited to see how this plays out though, so don't disappoint me.

Incidentally, if you don't mind, Noland will be learning one borderline-ranged spell in Soldiers of the Wasteland. It's based on a little-used spell of Franz's (which I'll be using a bit more inTF6), and is called... Sturm Bolter.

Haha nice. Well... depending on what it does, it may be the same as Noland's Gatling Raze spell. I was using the gauntlet mounted Storm Bolters that Grey Knights use as inspiration when I was making the spell up.

[Kha]

I just don't have the volume of writing to show otherwise. I'm not in Year 1 Medicine anymore, I'm Year 2, so those who wondered why I had so much time last year, don't rub it in!!!

[Comartemis]

Alright gang, my muse went and hit me over the head with something akin to a lead pipe of an idea, and I’d like some opinions on it before I give it serious consideration. I’ve been kicking this idea around in my head for a few hours and I think it has the potential to be viable if used properly.

Spoiler for Possible plans:

Comacanon as it stands now diverges from established canon several months after A’s with the Fate Incident replacing the Nanoha Incident. Well, what if I put the divergence a considerable distance farther back? As in all the way back to first contact with the TSAB and Earth?

Here’s what my muse is pushing on me: change the Earth of Nanoha canon into the Earth of Mahou Sensei Negima canon and see where things go from there. The early divergence point begins when Earth is discovered by the TSA to have a sizable population of mages living in secret amongst the mundanes. Contact with the Terran mage community occurs long before the series begins, but the mages of Earth express a desire to maintain the status quo and keep the public in the dark about magic, something the TSA agrees with. The end result is that Earth becomes a “work-in-progress” Non-Administered World where the local mages are left to their own devices, but are allowed to make contact with the TSAB and join up if they should wish to do so.

If I were to go with this idea, Nanoha canon would occur several years before the start of Negima canon; Negi himself would still be a newborn while Nanoha is attending Mahora Academy’s primary school with Suzuka and Arisa. In this universe, the Ala Rubra would be working for the Saint Church as agents in Earth’s magic world, which is where Asuna would be encountered and eventually turned over to the Church for safekeeping (What exactly the Ala Rubra are doing there in the first place still needs to be discerned, as I can’t seem to find any data on their activities in the manga). She retains her Void Magic abilities but also has the “older than she looks” quality to her, so she’s still only about 14 or so when StrikerS rolls around.

Anyways, Nanoha, Suzuka, and Arisa attend Mahora Academy. Yuuno comes looking for the Jewel Seeds and Nanoha joins up with him. This is where things start to get interesting, because it’s not very long before Nanoha encounters a 10-year old Alex, a young knight of the Saint Church ordered to come to Earth on Carim Gracia’s orders (Carim’s following a prophecy, as usual). Alex joins up with Nanoha and assists her with the Jewel Seed collecting, but right around the time Fate first shows up, Nanoha and Alex have the distinct misfortune of catching the attention of Miss Evangeline A.K. McDowell, who's still in a really bad mood over being caught in the Infernus Scholaticus curse for what will probably be the rest of eternity.

Evangeline doesn’t care much for the TSAB butting in on her territory, nor is she particularly sympathetic to Fate’s plight, so whenever the three of them meet on Mahora’s campus grounds, the fight turns into a three-way battle royale, usually pitting Alex against Eva (with the Infernus Scholasticus curse on her, so no uberspells yet), Fate against Nanoha, and Arf against Yuuno. Eventually the situation is resolved when the Asura shows up in orbit and the school dean all but orders Eva to stand down and let the bureau take control of the situation.

During Classic, Eva becomes intrigued with Nanoha’s extremely rapid progress as a mage and decides to take Nanoha under her wing following the end of the Jewel Seed incident. Alex stays on Earth with Nanoha and spends several months training with her family, who are still somewhat involved in the bodyguard business in this timeline, so Alex winds up learning a bit of Fuwa-style kenjutsu to match Nanoha’s experience with Evangeline. When the Wolkenritter enter stage left, Eva decides to use them to test Nanoha’s progress and sides with the Wolkenritter, just to keep the fight from getting too off-balance for the Wolks when Fate and company return.

After A’s, things more or less return to normal in Mahora. Comacanon picks up where it’s supposed to with the onset of the Fate Incident, and Eva now takes Hayate under her wing despite misgivings about her personality. The match between them is actually eerily similar, not only because Hayate’s and Eva’s specialties are both with Dark and Ice-elemental spells, but also because Eva’s attitude starts to rub off ever-so-slightly on Hayate. Devious!Hayate plays occasional pranks on her friends just for the lulz but also displays uncanny tactical abilities in magical combat, a bit like Lelouch but more focused on single combat than on commanding armies.

In the StrikerS timeskip, Suzuka and Arisa wind up becoming involved with the activities of Class 3-A (Arisa as Baka Red?) and will most likely become powerful Terran mages in their own right. While they won’t play any role in StrikerS RemiX (formerly known as Nanoha BladeS), they will almost certainly have some role to play in the post-StrikerS timeline. This will become easier to discern as I gain access to more of the post-Chao Negima manga volumes (Speaking of Chao…) and see where the story is going; it’s possible that Fate Averrnicus and his associates may have some history with the TSAB, but that will have to wait until I can get a clearer picture of the events of the Second Term.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Alright gang, my muse went and hit me over the head with something akin to a lead pipe of an idea, and I’d like some opinions on it before I give it serious consideration. I’ve been kicking this idea around in my head for a few hours and I think it has the potential to be viable if used properly.

Spoiler for Possible plans:

Comacanon as it stands now diverges from established canon several months after A’s with the Fate Incident replacing the Nanoha Incident. Well, what if I put the divergence a considerable distance farther back? As in all the way back to first contact with the TSAB and Earth?

Here’s what my muse is pushing on me: change the Earth of Nanoha canon into the Earth of Mahou Sensei Negima canon and see where things go from there. The early divergence point begins when Earth is discovered by the TSA to have a sizable population of mages living in secret amongst the mundanes. Contact with the Terran mage community occurs long before the series begins, but the mages of Earth express a desire to maintain the status quo and keep the public in the dark about magic, something the TSA agrees with. The end result is that Earth becomes a “work-in-progress” Non-Administered World where the local mages are left to their own devices, but are allowed to make contact with the TSAB and join up if they should wish to do so.

If I were to go with this idea, Nanoha canon would occur several years before the start of Negima canon; Negi himself would still be a newborn while Nanoha is attending Mahora Academy’s primary school with Suzuka and Arisa. In this universe, the Ala Rubra would be working for the Saint Church as agents in Earth’s magic world, which is where Asuna would be encountered and eventually turned over to the Church for safekeeping (What exactly the Ala Rubra are doing there in the first place still needs to be discerned, as I can’t seem to find any data on their activities in the manga). She retains her Void Magic abilities but also has the “older than she looks” quality to her, so she’s still only about 14 or so when StrikerS rolls around.

Anyways, Nanoha, Suzuka, and Arisa attend Mahora Academy. Yuuno comes looking for the Jewel Seeds and Nanoha joins up with him. This is where things start to get interesting, because it’s not very long before Nanoha encounters a 10-year old Alex, a young knight of the Saint Church ordered to come to Earth on Carim Gracia’s orders (Carim’s following a prophecy, as usual). Alex joins up with Nanoha and assists her with the Jewel Seed collecting, but right around the time Fate first shows up, Nanoha and Alex have the distinct misfortune of catching the attention of Miss Evangeline A.K. McDowell, who's still in a really bad mood over being caught in the Infernus Scholaticus curse for what will probably be the rest of eternity.

Evangeline doesn’t care much for the TSAB butting in on her territory, nor is she particularly sympathetic to Fate’s plight, so whenever the three of them meet on Mahora’s campus grounds, the fight turns into a three-way battle royale, usually pitting Alex against Eva (with the Infernus Scholasticus curse on her, so no uberspells yet), Fate against Nanoha, and Arf against Yuuno. Eventually the situation is resolved when the Asura shows up in orbit and the school dean all but orders Eva to stand down and let the bureau take control of the situation.

During Classic, Eva becomes intrigued with Nanoha’s extremely rapid progress as a mage and decides to take Nanoha under her wing following the end of the Jewel Seed incident. Alex stays on Earth with Nanoha and spends several months training with her family, who are still somewhat involved in the bodyguard business in this timeline, so Alex winds up learning a bit of Fuwa-style kenjutsu to match Nanoha’s experience with Evangeline. When the Wolkenritter enter stage left, Eva decides to use them to test Nanoha’s progress and sides with the Wolkenritter, just to keep the fight from getting too off-balance for the Wolks when Fate and company return.

After A’s, things more or less return to normal in Mahora. Comacanon picks up where it’s supposed to with the onset of the Fate Incident, and Eva now takes Hayate under her wing despite misgivings about her personality. The match between them is actually eerily similar, not only because Hayate’s and Eva’s specialties are both with Dark and Ice-elemental spells, but also because Eva’s attitude starts to rub off ever-so-slightly on Hayate. Devious!Hayate plays occasional pranks on her friends just for the lulz but also displays uncanny tactical abilities in magical combat, a bit like Lelouch but more focused on single combat than on commanding armies.

In the StrikerS timeskip, Suzuka and Arisa wind up becoming involved with the activities of Class 3-A (Arisa as Baka Red?) and will most likely become powerful Terran mages in their own right. While they won’t play any role in StrikerS RemiX (formerly known as Nanoha BladeS), they will almost certainly have some role to play in the post-StrikerS timeline. This will become easier to discern as I gain access to more of the post-Chao Negima manga volumes (Speaking of Chao…) and see where the story is going; it’s possible that Fate Averrnicus and his associates may have some history with the TSAB, but that will have to wait until I can get a clearer picture of the events of the Second Term.

Well that certainly sounds interesting. I don't know what your original plans were but those plans seem to take the best of both worlds and make them uberly awesome. Besides Evangeline Vs Fate sounds too cool for my mind to process much more :uhoh. And I just thought of this, of course there's no real relevance but since Nanoha and Negima started in the same year they're both about the same age.