Create Your Own Justsu or Naruto character

[Ninja_Nobody]

Thanks Keikan that was a comment I haven't gotten in a while. I actually am a member on multiple other fanon/fan fiction sites and I am a Fan fic writer, creating is a simple but fun task for me. Also hope this doesn't bother you Kekian but I just wanted to post a short fan fic involving some recent characters of mine.

Spoiler for Quick Fan Fic:

Holding up his hand he clenched it and placed it on his chest. Touketsu had a dream... he wanted to bring the Water Country to its glory. "I suggest you don't strain you're self" said a shady man stepping from a alley. "Who are you" asked Touketsu who grabbed a kunai from his waist. He took an offensive position and watched the man. "Me... My name is Gato and I can help you restore the Water Country to its former glory" he said holding up a small capsule. That day, Touketsu began working for Gato. Months later, Touketsu used his skills to pick pocket. "Hey look" he called pointing at the sky taking everyone's attention. He quickly got on his knee's and crept behind a man. He slipped a wallet from his back pocket and ran. "Hey, that boy stole my wallet" he called waving his fist angirly. "Shit!" thought Touketsu as he was spotted by multiple people. He felt a tug on his shoulder and fell back. Multiple people surronded him and hit him. "Teach him a lesson" called one. "Beat him" called another. He took multiple hits and felt a striking pain. Suddenly the people scattered. Standing infront was a tall man, mouth wrapped with bandage and carrying a large blade. "Thanks, Zabuza-kun" he said rubbing his head. "C'mon, Gato want's you" he said disappearing in a blast of water. He also disappeared in a blast of water and splashed the area. Standing outside a large hut, he stepped in and was welcomed by a short man. "Hey Gato" said Touketsu with a wave. "Ah, Touketsu I have a mission for you" said the small man. "What is it?" asked Touketsu obviosuly annoyed. "It involves a raid on the Land of Iron" he said smirking. There was a long silence followed by a quick flash. Touketsu appeared behind Gato and held a tanto to his throat. "Idiot, you expect me to infiltrate the largest Country Stronghold and escape alive" he said angrily. "I simply need you too assassinate someone, someone by the name of Kuririn Akahate." said Gato alarming Touketsu. "Kuririn Akahate! Are you stupid" screamed Touketsu. "No, If you want this Country to be restored I expect you to leave right know" said Gato causing Touketsu to back off. He turned and disappeared leaving a splash of water. He appeared miles away and smirked. "Perfect...." he said as he walked in the direction of the Land of Iron.

[Keikan]

Originally Posted by Ninja_Nobody

Thanks Keikan that was a comment I haven't gotten in a while. I actually am a member on multiple other fanon/fan fiction sites and I am a Fan fic writer, creating is a simple but fun task for me. Also hope this doesn't bother you Kekian but I just wanted to post a short fan fic involving some recent characters of mine.

Spoiler for Quick Fan Fic:

Holding up his hand he clenched it and placed it on his chest. Touketsu had a dream... he wanted to bring the Water Country to its glory. "I suggest you don't strain you're self" said a shady man stepping from a alley. "Who are you" asked the you Touketsu who grabbed a kunai from his waist. He took an offensive position and watched the man. "Me... My name is Gato and I can help you restore the Water Country to its former glory" he said holding up a small capsule. That day, Touketsu began working for Gato. Months later, Touketsu used his skills to pick pocket. "Hey look" he called pointing at the sky taking everyone's attention. He quickly got on his knee's and crept behind a man. He slipped a wallet from his back pocket and ran. "Hey, that boy stole my wallet" he called waving his fist angirly. "Shit!" thought Touketsu as he was spotted by multiple people. He felt a tug on his shoulder and fell back. Multiple people surronded him and hit him. "Teach him a lesson" called one. "Beat him" called another. He took multiple hits and felt a striking pain. Suddenly the people scattered. Standing infront was a tall man, mouth wrapped with bandage and carrying a large blade. "Thanks, Zabuza-kun" he said rubbing his head. "C'mon, Gato want's you" he said disappearing in a blast of water. He also disappeared in a blast of water and splashed the area. Standing outside a large hut, he stepped in and was welcomed by a short man. "Hey Gato" said Touketsu with a wave.

I'll Finish it Later, have to go work out

No probs mate, no probs at all and I don't mind. I know what you mean about it being a simple yet fun task. It's like that for me most of the time too, except when creative blocks set in .

If fact there are some suggestions that I could make;

asked the you Touketsu who

This sentence is incorrect, see red lettering. Also the setup is not what is usually done. Everytime a new person speaks it should be on the next line. I know you probably know all this already but hey I can't help myself . I also understand that the format may be due to you not wanting the segment to take up too much room no?

EDIT (Because I'm not making a new post just for this): Yeah I know what you mean about the short story over ten pages. I guess the format is just what I'm used to. Though I also find that with some stories it makes it difficult to follow whose talking though your story have no problem with that.

[Ninja_Nobody]

..Thanks for the heads up on the mistake. And about the skipping each line for each person that speaks is not the format I use. I use that when roleplaying but for Fanfiction I tend to right in paragraph form. I don't know why I'm just used to it. Also the taking up room is also right because I hate having a short story last 10 pages (Ugh).

Edit: I understand what your getting at, I stopped doing the line skipping after I lost Word Perfect, and know I'm just used to paragraph form.

[yondaime95]

okay, so i figured i'd put some details into those beasts i mentioned in kaisaku's profile. there are 5 in total, one for each element(fire, water, wind, etc.) all 5 of them currently have hosts, Kaisaku being one of them. usually, when they are sealed inside of someone, instead of them getting some sort of weird mark on their face, their left arm, from the fingers up to the elbow, transforms into that of the beast. Kaisaku and the other organization members, however, don't have that, because they just sealed the beasts in statues, and then have 2 identical seals, one on the statue, and one on themselves, so that they can transfer the beasts chakra from the statue to themselves. thus, they don't have as much power from the beasts as Raikou and Kyousei do, for since they have the beasts inside of them, with their arms, they can use special jutsus. here is roughly what the beasts look like.

fire:salamander, with a red metal helmet, and a cone on the end of the tail, with a crescent shaped blade at the end.
water:???
wind:a large half human, half falcon creature, with silver bands on the wrists and ankles, and silver over the wings that is lined with spikes
earth:humanoid figure made of rock, with spikes on the shoulders and all over the back, and bronze, metal armour that covers the hand and part of the forearm
thunder:white tiger with gold armour around the ankles, with a band around the tail.also has shoulder pads on all 4 shoulders, with small spikes at the top.

if you can think of an idea for the water beast, please post it or email me. also, kaisaku does end up getting his beast sealed inside of him, and the other 2 have the jinchuriki's slain, and are released from the statues when the organization is taken down(man i need a name for that), and are released in the wild, with chakra restraints on them so they can't cause too much trouble. so if you anyone wants to make characters for them, go ahead, i'll add them to my storyline.

[Ninja_Nobody]

...Since when do Tigers have 4 shoulders

Water: A Great White Shark with a blue helmet that has a cross shaped slit on it. (BTW there are no visible eye holes). The dorsal fin has several rips in it and there is a blade attached to each fin by a blue piece of metal. The tail has multiple bands around it that also emit a poisonous black gas. It also has multiple rows of extremly sharp teeth that a jagged and serrated.

[Kytherno]

Rasen yo-yo.

Rasengan made with a tough chakra shell on the outside so it could be thrown. And with chakra strings, it could be used as a projectile.

[Mitsu]

Kyntherno: No. Just no. I haven't seen a rasegan rip-off in a long time and I was hoping they wouldn't come back. Good general idea though, I have to say.

[Kyubi Jinchuuriki]

Originally Posted by Mitsu

Kyntherno: No. Just no. I haven't seen a rasegan rip-off in a long time and I was hoping they wouldn't come back. Good general idea though, I have to say.

Lol, I think the last Rasengan rip-off was mine on page 136, but it was my first post mind you. (Anyway I thought it was a cool idea)

[Mitsu]

Originally Posted by Kyubi Jinchuuriki

Lol, I think the last Rasengan rip-off was mine on page 136, but it was my first post mind you. (Anyway I thought it was a cool idea)

Lol, seriously? I never noticed......... and I just looked it up. Yeah, I think alot of pplz first posts were pretty bad but then they got better. (I am one of those people... well not rip-off but...>.>)Rasengan rip-off party!

EDIT: You know what, I was just thinking about random stuff and I was wondering if we'll do the same thing we did for pg. 100 on pg. 200. Anybody think that'd be cool? I mean it would let the newer people on the thread be able to participate in the fun! (And stress of trying to create multiple chara's...)

[Keikan]

Woot I'll join that party.

Jutsu:
Name: Pain Rasengan of Pain ... PAIN
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: SSS
Effect: Creates a mega rasengan that pwns all, it even breaks Madara's time/space jutsu. MUHUWAHAHAHAHA
Advantages: Everything
Disadvantages: None
Hand Seals: Who needs them

Hehehehe that was awesome.

DISCLAIMER: Yes I know that I sounded like a complete ass but it was deliberate. I don't mean to put anyone down by it.

And I would just like to point out that my first post wasn't a rip off at all, he just had a doujutsu, not Sharingan or Byakugan my own doujutsu.

@Mitsu: Of course we are, that's a given especially for page 200, we could have a minor one for page 150 but that would mean creating fast and I'm too lazy for that. Btw good work coming up with it so early and at the average rate this thread is moving I think it's a race between me getting by Degree and completing uni and page 200 .

[Mitsu]

LOL Okay now Keikan, that actually made me laugh alittle bit. Very...erm... powerful... I don't wanna get hit by it!

@Mitsu: Of course we are, that's a given especially for page 200, we could have a minor one for page 150 but that would mean creating fast and I'm too lazy for that. Btw good work coming up with it so early and at the average rate this thread is moving I think it's a race between me getting by Degree and completing uni and page 200 .

Yay! Yeah, it's way to close to even have a minor one. Thank you. Oh my god, that's just sad... haha. Well, at least this thread is moving kinda faster than it used to, huh?

[Kyubi Jinchuuriki]

Originally Posted by Keikan

Woot I'll join that party.

Jutsu:
Name: Pain Rasengan of Pain ... PAIN
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: SSS
Effect: Creates a mega rasengan that pwns all, it even breaks Madara's time/space jutsu. MUHUWAHAHAHAHA
Advantages: Everything
Disadvantages: None
Hand Seals: Who needs them

Hehehehe that was awesome.

THat just kinda reminds me of jutsu DTM's Bud Awesome would use lol

[yondaime95]

Originally Posted by Ninja_Nobody

...Since when do Tigers have 4 shoulders

Water: A Great White Shark with a blue helmet that has a cross shaped slit on it. (BTW there are no visible eye holes). The dorsal fin has several rips in it and there is a blade attached to each fin by a blue piece of metal. The tail has multiple bands around it that also emit a poisonous black gas. It also has multiple rows of extremly sharp teeth that a jagged and serrated.

i mean above each of the legs. they have 4. and i think that's a great idea, thx.

[Lilly_raven]

I have not seen any Rasengan rip-off. What are you talking about.



I am lost

[Mitsu]

Lilyraven: Rasen yo yo is a Rasengan rip-off if that's what you were looking for. (And Keikan's, but that doesn't count lol)

[yondaime95]

okay, so i'm making my stuff, into a series, but i need help making names. i was gonna go with 1stgen, 2nd gen, and 3rd gen, but 3rd gen didn't have a translation. i need help thinking of names for the 3 parts(can be anything)

okay, so i have 1 and 3, but i still need 2. i made 1 Saisho, which means beginning. i made 3 Oni Kaisen, which means demon battles, because that's the part with the 5 bijuu's i made up(well, the 4 i made, and the 1 ninja_nobody made), so thats where i got the idea.

[Lilly_raven]

So the one Saske uses is a rip off

[Ninja_Nobody]

...I see this is the Rasengan page, I know I'll regret it but here it goes

Name- Su-pa Sugoi Rasengan (lit. Super Great Spiraling Sphere)
Rank- A Rank
Description- A powerful Rasengan created by an unknown master of Rasengan. It is done by creating a regular Rasengan with hundreds of layers. It is held in one hand and can only be used by someone who has trained for 25 years.

Yes... I went there

[Kyubi Jinchuuriki]

just for the hell of it, I'm joining the Rasengan rip off party

Name: Fuuton: Rasengan Wave (Wind Style)
Rank: S
Description: The user makes a rasengan in both hands, puts them together to shoot out a powerful wind beam.

[Dan the Man]

Originally Posted by Mitsu

EDIT: You know what, I was just thinking about random stuff and I was wondering if we'll do the same thing we did for pg. 100 on pg. 200. Anybody think that'd be cool? I mean it would let the newer people on the thread be able to participate in the fun! (And stress of trying to create multiple chara's...)

Sounds good. I know I don't frequent these parts much these days, but I can probably whip something up by then. At least, I hope so. I'd be rather angry at myself if I didn't come up with anything after 50 pages...

Originally Posted by Keikan

Woot I'll join that party.

Jutsu:
Name: Pain Rasengan of Pain ... PAIN
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: SSS
Effect: Creates a mega rasengan that pwns all, it even breaks Madara's time/space jutsu. MUHUWAHAHAHAHA
Advantages: Everything
Disadvantages: None
Hand Seals: Who needs them

Hehehehe that was awesome.

DISCLAIMER: Yes I know that I sounded like a complete ass but it was deliberate. I don't mean to put anyone down by it.

And I would just like to point out that my first post wasn't a rip off at all, he just had a doujutsu, not Sharingan or Byakugan my own doujutsu.

@Mitsu: Of course we are, that's a given especially for page 200, we could have a minor one for page 150 but that would mean creating fast and I'm too lazy for that. Btw good work coming up with it so early and at the average rate this thread is moving I think it's a race between me getting by Degree and completing uni and page 200 .

Well, MY first post had a guy who summons Gundams. If that's not as lame as a Rasengan rip-off, it's pretty close.

Also, I'll have you know Bud Awesome's going to use his lawyer-nin summon on you...

Originally Posted by Kyubi Jinchuuriki

THat just kinda reminds me of jutsu DTM's Bud Awesome would use lol

Lawyer-nin gain extra power with witnesses. You wanna know how the 4th sealed the Kyuubi? It was from Lawyer-nin convicting it of an attempted murder charge. BAM! Prison in a kid's gut.