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blueinkalchemist · 2006-09-08, 13:09

Hello everyone, here is the first chapter of my fanfic. Follow the links! Enjoy!!

Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 1 {Mysterious Reunion}
Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist
Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~!
Pairing(s): Wait and see!
Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes. Reader discretion advised.
Status: Incomplete (2.5 of ?? completed as of 9/8/2006)
Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters.
Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is.

Summary: A mysterious figure appears outside the Urahara Shop. Is he friend or foe? Where has Urahara seen him before? And why is Ichigo insisting on picking a fight with him? The story begins in that darkened alley as the Prodigal Shinigami returns...

Comments are welcome, please post them below! Arigatou!

(I'll give you my apology when you beat it out of me!!)

Lord Raiden · 2006-09-08, 15:55

Can't see much wrong with it. Looks good, but feels a bit chatty in places, like I'm listening to a narrator rather than reading an actual story. You need to do more "show" than "tell" in other words. It's something I get harped at a lot about and it's an easy form to fall into because showing is a lot harder than it sounds since we naturally use the "tell" form in our everyday speach. So it's a bit more challenging to do for certain, but not impossible. I've got a bunch of novels under my belt to prove it too.

blueinkalchemist · 2006-09-12, 13:08

Thanks for the comment, I've tried to clean this next chapter up a bit.

Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 2 {Urahara's Rukongai Discovery}
Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist
Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~!
Pairing(s): Wait and see!
Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes. Reader discretion advised.
Status: Incomplete (3.5 of ?? completed as of 9/12/2006)
Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters.
Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is.

Summary: Ichigo awakens after his duel to Urahara playing host to his friends and his opponent, and the shopkeeper begins to tell the tale of his former fukutaichō...

Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou!

(They call me Ishikawa Yūshū.)

blueinkalchemist · 2006-09-14, 11:13

Been writing up a storm! Please comment...

Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 3 {In Darkness And In Doubt}
Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist
Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~!
Pairing(s): Wait and see!
Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes/situations. Reader discretion advised.
Status: Incomplete (5 of ?? completed as of 9/14/2006)
Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters, possible slight cracks, lime (as of this writing).
Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is.

Summary: Urahara continues the tale of his former vice-captain's fall from grace and reveals his tragic connection to the Quincy...

Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou!

(You are using me, Urahara... and in this moment, I hate you for it.)

tkdtiger · 2006-09-15, 17:25

cool I liked it : )

blueinkalchemist · 2006-10-03, 06:59

Sorry for the delay, been quite busy...

Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 4 {Farewell to New Friends}
Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist
Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~!
Pairing(s): Wait and see!
Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes/situations. Reader discretion advised.
Status: Incomplete (6 of ?? completed as of 10/2/2006)
Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters, possible slight cracks, lime (as of this writing).
Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is.

Summary: The prodigal shinigami makes a fateful decision...

Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou!

(What sort of shinigami can I be if I do not believe in why my sword cuts?)

2006-09-08, 13:09	Link #1
blueinkalchemist The Blue Ink Alchemist Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Pennsylvania Age: 45	Fanfic: Prodigal Shinigami Hello everyone, here is the first chapter of my fanfic. Follow the links! Enjoy!! Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 1 {Mysterious Reunion} Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~! Pairing(s): Wait and see! Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes. Reader discretion advised. Status: Incomplete (2.5 of ?? completed as of 9/8/2006) Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters. Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is. Summary: A mysterious figure appears outside the Urahara Shop. Is he friend or foe? Where has Urahara seen him before? And why is Ichigo insisting on picking a fight with him? The story begins in that darkened alley as the Prodigal Shinigami returns... Comments are welcome, please post them below! Arigatou! (I'll give you my apology when you beat it out of me!!)

2006-09-08, 15:55	Link #2
Lord Raiden Uber Coffee for da win! Join Date: May 2003 Location: Middle of insanity	Can't see much wrong with it. Looks good, but feels a bit chatty in places, like I'm listening to a narrator rather than reading an actual story. You need to do more "show" than "tell" in other words. It's something I get harped at a lot about and it's an easy form to fall into because showing is a lot harder than it sounds since we naturally use the "tell" form in our everyday speach. So it's a bit more challenging to do for certain, but not impossible. I've got a bunch of novels under my belt to prove it too.

2006-09-12, 13:08	Link #3
blueinkalchemist The Blue Ink Alchemist Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Pennsylvania Age: 45	Thanks for the comment, I've tried to clean this next chapter up a bit. Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 2 {Urahara's Rukongai Discovery} Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~! Pairing(s): Wait and see! Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes. Reader discretion advised. Status: Incomplete (3.5 of ?? completed as of 9/12/2006) Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters. Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is. Summary: Ichigo awakens after his duel to Urahara playing host to his friends and his opponent, and the shopkeeper begins to tell the tale of his former fukutaichō... Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou! (They call me Ishikawa Yūshū.)

2006-09-14, 11:13	Link #4
blueinkalchemist The Blue Ink Alchemist Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Pennsylvania Age: 45	Been writing up a storm! Please comment... Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 3 {In Darkness And In Doubt} Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~! Pairing(s): Wait and see! Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes/situations. Reader discretion advised. Status: Incomplete (5 of ?? completed as of 9/14/2006) Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters, possible slight cracks, lime (as of this writing). Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is. Summary: Urahara continues the tale of his former vice-captain's fall from grace and reveals his tragic connection to the Quincy... Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou! (You are using me, Urahara... and in this moment, I hate you for it.)

2006-09-15, 17:25	Link #5
tkdtiger Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In Florida	cool I liked it : )

2006-10-03, 06:59	Link #6
blueinkalchemist The Blue Ink Alchemist Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Pennsylvania Age: 45	Sorry for the delay, been quite busy... Title: Prodigal Shinigami - Episode 4 {Farewell to New Friends} Author/Artist: The Blue Ink Alchemist Theme(s): Angst, anguish, love, protection, abandonment, sacrifice and death. Wooo~! Pairing(s): Wait and see! Rating: R for violence, language, sexual innuendo and adult themes/situations. Reader discretion advised. Status: Incomplete (6 of ?? completed as of 10/2/2006) Warnings: Manga only, deviation from canon, original characters, possible slight cracks, lime (as of this writing). Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach, please don't sue me, I don't have much money as it is. Summary: The prodigal shinigami makes a fateful decision... Comments are welcome, please post them below or at the LJ community. Arigatou! (What sort of shinigami can I be if I do not believe in why my sword cuts?)