Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Kha]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Spoiler for OC character Data:

CINEMA of the Battery Device Test Incident: (Of course, the second part Incomplete)
P1: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1441314/
P2: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1506219/
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NAME: 'Crash' (Callsign)
GENDER: Male
Physical Appearance: Nondescript male, short haircut. Athletic build, scared up something fierce.
Allignment: Chaotic Good
DEVICE: Battery
POWERS: Walking Murphy's law. (AKA: Everything just goes WRONG around him.)
+ SKILLS: Evaision, Catastrohpic Survival

PROFILE:

Time Space Administration Beaurau Experimental Systems Test Force (T.S.A. B.E.S.T. F.) Test Pilot, leading unit (Unit 01) Callsign known only as 'Crash'. As a Cadet, he recieved this callsign as the first ever cadet to 'successfully' crash and wreck a full sized TSA Dimensional Cruiser, while it was still powered down and in drydock, resulting in massive damage to the docking facility, and terminal catastrophic damage to the cruiser.
'Crash' had somehow, survived the incident, not only alive, but for the most part, completely unhurt. (Discounting cuts and such.)
Crash had become known throughout his cadet days, as a man with a motto. He could break ANYTHING. Records, rules, equipment, vehicles. 'He's a walking murphy's law' some had said. Some younger cadets even suggested he was cursed or immortal, as he seemed to get into more crazy and violent accidents than it should have been physically possible to do, and even more physically impossible that he pretty much walked away from nearly all of them.

He was assigned to TSA BEST F, the Test Force which helped develope experimental magical technologies and equipment, putting his 'talent' to good use by finding the flaws in new equipment, vehicles, and technology. And find those flaws he did. Crash's test piloting has seen him litterally walk away from 126 'fatal' accidents with nothing more than a shrug, while the entire command staff gawked each and every time, and the test force commander commented about having a heart attack, each and every time... Including 34 'fatal' accidents that occured while the TSA was modernizing the Belkan cartraige system for current, stable use. These included seven dimensional incidents, four of which had class SS+ level magical explosions that rocked TSAGCOM itself.
His piloting is... unique. Crash isn't much of a fighter, but his talent for finding weird ways to break things has developed into a skill in which he can make vehicles and equipment do things that seem to defy logic itself. Often, the term 'The Unsung Aces' has been attatched to him and the test force for their abilities in general. His extensive testing of magical weapons has gained him moderate skill in their use all across the board, especially with most of the ranged magical firearms available.
In the few times he's been deployed in emergencies, he's somehow managed to find the most collatteral inducing and destructive way to deal with a situation. (Much to upper TSAGCOM's displeasure come budget time...)

As of late, Crash has been promoted to be the lead pilot of the Test force, working on the COMBAT BATTERY project to produce a device that can provide all around heavy combat effectiveness to even mages of negligable power levels. After a particularly violent accident during the project, which involved strangely enough, a PVC pipe, duct tape, a paperclip, and chewing gum as the triggers, Crash was quoted as calling the project... 'An absolute BLAST!'.
Whether or not that was because he'd just been blown 200 meters by a magical explosion, or because he thought it was fun, has never been determined.

In the late phase field testing of the BATTERY system, he was redirected to an active intercept role during a major flight test of the new system, where he was promptly cut off from Test Force Command and TSAGCOM before being engaged by six of the Imfamous 'Numbers' Combat Cyborgs. It was believed they were after some of the experimental tech being used in the battery, and was using their artifact raid on the auction to the east as cover. Crash managed to prove the effectiveness of the Battery system and its flexibility by not only actively engaging them, but surviving against these well trained killers for the eight and a half minutes it took to scramble reinforcements to assist him.
Crash has been awarded permenant use of his model of the Battery system for his actions in that incident. And strangely enough, he hasn't broken it yet...



DEVICE PROFILE:

Combat Battery (As in, Artillery Battery, or Weapons Battery.)
REFFERENCED NAME: "Battery"
DEVICE TYPE: Active AI Intelligent Magic Support Device [Test Type]
SYSTEM SPECS: Combat Oriented Armor and Weapons configurations.
AI TYPE: Modified F Type, limited personality, emphisized situational management. Dual Core Redundancy

COMPACT STATE: Dog Tags on a military necklace.

DEPLOYED STATES:
Armor Configurations of Heavy Ground Mode, Intercept, and Air Superiority Mode.
Weapon Configurations include STANDBY, Standard Rifle, Lance Rifle, Cerberus DFC, and Paladin Grand.

NOTES:
The Combat Battery is a self contained magic assisted power armor and weapon system. It includes all the trimmings of normal magical devices such as amplification and control, as well as boosting from the cartraige system. It also contains a number of non-magical systems such as the Grav Drive, a self sealed environment, physical high mass armor plating, and physical lifting capacity of two tons. It contains a magical and non-magical sensor suite and situational awareness system that matches a dimensional cruiser in all but range. The AI that operates the system is smart enough to work and understand as a decent partner with just about any master, gathering information needed, performing operations as required on its own, and essentially doing all the tasks required in the background of a combat situation, such as target profiling, threat assessment, and tracking.
Battery's voice is male, the engineers opting to have the more harsh, and critical tone to get the attention of its master as needed. Battery is programed to speak clearly in technical terms, often using informative commands such as 'PRIMED', 'AFFIRMATIVE', and 'NEGATIVE', allowing it to be understood and communicated with, even under situations where it may be difficult to hear or understand the device.

Configuration wise, the battery has a number of mission set modes enabling it to perform as well as an A rank Mage.

Internal Barrier Jacket: The primary, all purpose body glove barrier jacket is custom for the Battery, providing full body protection in a utilitarian manner that can be supported by modular add-ons of the main configurations. Unsurprisingly, it is not visually impressive compared to the more flamboyant jackets of the main TSA forces. However, it works.

ARMOR CONFIGURATIONS:

Heavy Ground Mode: The HG Mode consists of a strong overlayed combat exoskeleton over the barrier jacket. This armor is solid metal plating consisting of magic forged super density tungsten carbide and titanium alloys. It masses in at more than three times the weight of a large adult male human. However, it can withstand impact from up to S ranked attacks and still allow just about any pilot to walk away from the assault with only inconveniencing physical injuries. Granted, the armor is made for pilot survivability, not to withstand multiple heavy attacks, so armor functionality after S level hits is questionable.

Interceptor Mode: Power routing of the Battery is diverted from defenses to use of the inbuilt Grav-Drive system that allows the massive armor to gain flight mage ability. At a cost of defensive barrier power and magical weapons power, the armor can achieve straight flight performance surpassing the speed of aireal mages.

Air Superiority Mode: In the event of a manuever intensive air combat situation. The battery armor is designed to Jettison the heavy external armor and activate a lighter, more aerodynamic frame for the purpose of being able to direct more energy to airborne manuevering. Defenses are far weaker as a result, and the mode is suggested only for those who can keep up with the performance boost.

DEVICE WEAPON CONFIGURATIONS:

STANDBY: The weapon can be docked into the back of the armor and placed in standby mode when the pilot needs his/her hands free.

Rifle: The 'Device Mode' of the Battery weapon's system. Unsurprisingly, as a combat oriented device, it's highly utilitarian and rather spartan in non-combat features. The Rifle mode fires magical rounds with either single fire, or automatic/burst fire modes.

Lance Rifle: For the times when the mage just wants to reach out and touch someone, the Lance Rifle mode is an impressive peice of magical weapon's design. Ressembling a Barret M82A1 in design, the mode can fire a compact, high energy SS level projectile at three times the speed of sound at a range of twenty kilometers and hit a target the size of a sheet of paper dead center. This is achieved through the Battery's AI performing the critical targetting management operations such as calcularing horizon curviture, magnetic, optical, and magical interference, as well as digitally and magically stablizing the firing platform. A full power class SS shot requires four cartraiges, and significant charging time, but is capable of smashing just about any magical defense with enough leftover energy to overpenetrait right into other targets. The physical backblast from a single shot often sounds like an artillery cannon being fired and has a strong enough concussion to knock unprepared mages clear off their feet.

Cerberus DF Mode: The Dogfight Cannon configuration, known as Cerberus, employs pretty much a 'spray and pray' factor. In a situation where aireal magical dogfighting with high speed, snap manuever targets is a factor, leading and hitting with well aimed shots just isn't feasable. The rapid fire gatling setup in this mode sprays hundreds of low power, dumb magical shots a second, acting like brilliant tracers to attempt to hit targets in the fight. The overal logic is to overwhelm with numbers rather than overpower. The secondary fire mode, a high power homing shot known as the BloodHound Breaker, fires a fast moving magical missile object that will chase a selected target for up to five kilometers to inflict level A rank damage with a cartraige load.

Paladin Grand: When the mission calls for the Big Guns, the Paladin Grand artillery cannon is where it's at. Although it has almost no practical use in close range combat, it's few firing modes allow the pilot to engage in heavy fire support of any other mage group that requires it. The deadly accuracy of the Spectre Barrage allows light artillery level firepower to be repeatedly placed on target, rapidly firing a series of deadly high power explosive magic shells on the fly. It's final attack however, the deadly high energy Meteor Shower, fires a single round... the Ballistic magic round of the Meteor shower attack is a MIRV, the shot being calculated by the AI to be fired high into the sky, where it fractures at sub-orbital altitude to rain down on the target position with a devastating hail of magical explosions. The exact number and size of the fracturing can be controlled by the pilot or AI depending on what they want for area spread and damage per submunition. To fire a Meteor Shower however, requires a full five cartraiges, and is a difficult and time consuming attack to fire.


OTHER ABILITIES:

1 - The Battery device can duplicate a number of conventional magical attacks, ranging from the Divine Buster, to the Iron Howl, and does have an inventory of various attack propperties for magical bullets.

2 - M.A.C.H. STRAFE: The experimental emergency movement technique, known as the Magic Assisted Compression Hop, is being tested out with the Battery. This manuever uses sub-dimensional micro-compression to fold the space between two points for the pilot, and causes a rather sudden change in position. The rapid change in position often produces a sonic boom on entry into the strafe, and a loud crack of thunder at exit due to air moving out of the way of the pilot's body and or aerodynamics barrier. The manuever can be self sufficient from any mage pilot at a range of up to 500 meters before additional cartraige power loads are required. The nature of the move being a dimensional hop rather than a physical motion means that it also does not have any effects on momentum, or the conservation thereof. Meaning that it can be used to effectively change direction without bleeding speed in the conventional sense. Overall, the name 'MACH' Strafe, often misleads mages into thinking the pilot has performed a sudden, seemingly impossible high-supersonic short range manuever.

3 - HOWLER Flares: Special designed rapid fragmentation micro Iron Howls. Used to create a more or less confusing cloud of light and noise to dupe magical targetting and tracking. Since they're of significantly lower power than a full scale Iron Howl, they're much easier and quicker to deploy in an active high speed air battle.

4 - Variable Magnitude Cartraige Loader: Also in the list of Battery's inventory, it the new experimental VMC Loader, designed to be able to feed different SIZED magical cartraiges in expectation of an eventual shift into more mission specific power levels for cartraiges, ranging from conventional, to triple charge high power loads. The larger, reinforced jetison plate and active force ejection port ensure that spent cartraiges are moved clear of the device more more effectively.

CAUTIONS:

Battery Device is still in the Test Phase. Although functional, it still contains a variety of unproven techniques and unforseen problems. The use of the compact Grav. Drive simultaniously while activating a long range dimensional transport is among many of the untested features. Also, due to the high stress nature of the systems of the Battery, the operational time between maintanance operations on the device and armor is under careful review. It would be catastrophic to give the device to a non-flying mage of low power in the event the Grav. Drive has a total system failure in mid-operation. Until these systems are thoroughly tested for dependability and cleared for C rank or lower mages, the Battery Device will remain classified as a Special Operations and Test Division magical device only.

That should keep it all compact.

I'm impressed. Everything here is pretty much in order. If you don't mind, Sak-chan's designation for Crash would be Murphy-tan.

Just one little thing: I think the thread's a little edgy about the feasibility of deploying a gravity drive on a small device. I remember someone getting gunned down for wanting to loading a gravity engine into one of his characters, and I got shot for wanting to use Tronium on things smaller than a starship.

EDIT:

~~~Several hours later...~~~

It's... so... quiet...

Well since I'm bored, I decided to try and make Sheesh player work for once, and after some browser fiddling...

Needless to say, I have a job for Samurai Penguins. Interested in doing some Outer Cadia Soundstages?

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Yes... But more... complete.
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Anywho, I got my OC written up, so I'll put it up here before I turn in for the night. Of course, it's a monster length data bit, but I tend to do that. So what you guys want to do with him...

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Spoiler for OC character Data:

*snip*

That should keep it all compact.

First things first, welcome to the thread XD. I'm pretty sure the others have covered the relevenant info already so I won't bother with that.

On to the OC review.

1) Why wasn't he kicked out after causing said damage in the first place? This was something that would have cost millions/ billions even.... Unless you're saying that the TSAB can afford to just throw away said money without batting an eyelid..

2) SS+ magical explosions? Riight...... SS isn't something that you throw around lightly. Roughly speaking, it would be something like the SLB that Nanoha used in ep 25 of strikers and despite the claims of 'magic damage' it still left a damm big crater in the floor of the cradle. The way I see it, the only reason Vivio survied was because of the use of plot shields (yay fun.) Even then I can's see the explosions rocking the HQ unless of course they were so bloody idiotic that they decided to conduct the test right on top of the place..

3) Lol Macguyver...

4) Reading through the device details, it seems like you're trying to build a gundam (or something similar..) How about no? You're putting far too much into your device. Look, Barrier jacket is fine, staff/weapon is fine. Say 5-10 kg. The things that you're talking about it going to be a lot more that this... Armour plating? Sensors equivalent to a battleship? Seriously WTF?

5) Attacks, they're too powerful. TONE THEM DOWN! 4 cartridges for SS? Yeah maybe for the cream of the crop (Nanoha, Hayate etc.) DEFINATELY NOT FOR THE FODDER. (C-Rank mages)

Sorry, this is just waayyy out of the Nanoha standards that have been shown in canon to even think about this as it currently stands. What you're proposing is essentially a mini-GUNDAM or something equally equivalent.

You asked what we want to do with him? I'm not even sure about the character. Sure it sounds fine but I just can't see someone who's just wrecked a frickin spacehip getting welcomed with open arms into the TSAB. I'm even more agaisn't the device.

I'm not sure what show you've been watching...... It's obviously a lot different to the one that I sat through a few months ago..



Right...

now that's done with, I'll post the prologue to my new fic(no OC's).. since none of you guys seemed to have saw it in the ff thread...

Spoiler for Our Mistress:

Prologue: Aftermath

Beep….Beep….Beep…

It was a sparse room, lightly furnished, designed for ease of access. A cluster of displays hovered in the air just over the centre line of the room. It didn’t matter that the information that they displayed was available elsewhere, just that those who were in charge felt more comfortable with them there. All of them had met her personally at one stage or another during their careers, a meeting that had changed them all for the better.

He entered the door closing behind him silently until it hit the wall with a muffled thud. He looked up hopefully towards the figure lying peacefully beneath the displays, wondering if there was any change. The figure showed no sign of having heard the door. ‘Well, it’s still early days after all. Given the extent of her injuries, it’s a small miracle that she’s alive at all.’

Bathed in the soft green glow of the displays, she looked a hundred times better than how she had looked when she arrived early in the morning. It was nowhere near her true condition, but the vision of her there bathed in such a glow gave him hope that the danger had passed, at least for the moment. A team of doctors and surgeons had worked for nearly half the day, even with the times where breaks had to be taken for fresh nurses to come in and take over. She was out of the worse of it, but time would tell how well she would recover. ‘And even if she does recover physically, none of us are sure whether she is going to be able to live on after what has happened.’

As he moved closer to the bed, the faint hiss of the ventilator could be heard. It was but one of a slew of devices that surrounded her. Satisfied that the devices were all functioning correctly, he doubled checked that all the catheters were firmly secured, before pulling the cover further up her body. He turned away from her after uttering a short prayer over her, heading for the door. If anyone had been watching, the glow of the devices would have revealed the tears flowing down his face.

He made sure that the door closed softly as he exited the room. ‘Time to get some rest, I’ll be glad once this night is over.’ As he made to move away from the patient’s room, a figure came around the corner.

“How is she?” they asked.

“As good as can be expected by one in her position. Better in fact. I’ve never dealt with injuries like these but some of the others have remarked that she’s a good few hours ahead of what they’ve experienced in these cases.”

The tension in the figure facing him eased considerably, “It’s going to ok right, she’d going to get better?”

He scratched the back of his head, “Well it looks good so far, I can’t make any guarantees though. Can you please get some rest now; you’re in no position yourself to be up at this hour, not with those injuries.”

“She’s going to live. No matter what. Their sacrifice is not going to be in vein.” With that they headed back in the direction of their room.

‘I hope you’re right. I really hope you do.’

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Pain coursed through Agito’s body as she finally made it back to her room. Despite her bravado, the possibility that she wouldn’t make it was ever present in the back of her mind. While the doctor was correct that letting her body rest and recover was the best thing to do, what had happened kept playing in her mind, preventing her from getting to sleep.

We are the Wolkenritter, sworn guardians of the Mistress of the Night Sky. Death to those that attempt to harm her. Seeing that she has been hurt already, I’ll just have to make sure you have a fate worse than death.

You're probably all aware already, but don't expect updates for a little while..
Comments, flames, etc welcome.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Liingo

I'm not sure what show you've been watching...... It's obviously a lot different to the one that I sat through a few months ago..

Ah the Gurren Lagann craze really burned things up here. I can still smell the gunpowder coming from the Revolvers...

S&W: *sneeze*



I do hope my planned OC surge doesn't beget this gigantic assault... >_<

Admiral, don't give up k? Just polish it up a little and we'll see again.

@Fic: I didn't manage to comment on it, but it kinda took me a while to get what is going on... And to think we just had a nasty round of "Hayate no Naku Koro ni" , I hope the release of ur fic isn't gonna upset Aaron's stomach.

[SpaceBrotha]

Originally Posted by Kha

And to think we just had a nasty round of "Hayate no Naku Koro ni" , I hope the release of ur fic isn't gonna upset Aaron's stomach.

What's so nasty about hayate no naku koro ni?

And Aaron will tough it out, pain and trials make growth for humans... and those two are also the easiest ways to get some emotion into a story

Though i'm sensing a whole lot of and quite a bit of coming our way...

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Kha

Ah the Gurren Lagann craze really burned things up here. I can still smell the gunpowder coming from the Revolvers...

S&W: *sneeze*

What so we need more hot blood to get the posting up again. Then again.. that might be the final straw that gets this place locked down since the mods are now prowling around in here from time to time...

I do hope my planned OC surge doesn't beget this gigantic assault... >_<

Depends on how ridiculous the ideas are... Knowing you though... I'm not even going to be able to get past the copy-pasta to want to comment on your OC's..

Admiral, don't give up k? Just polish it up a little and we'll see again.

:nods: Don't take it too personally... there's just lines that really shouldn't be crossed... Sure it's fun to thrown things into the characters, but not to the point where one of them is capable of wiping the floor with the canon cast (who are essentially the best of the best that are available.)

@Fic: I didn't manage to comment on it, but it kinda took me a while to get what is going on... And to think we just had a nasty round of "Hayate no Naku Koro ni" , I hope the release of ur fic isn't gonna upset Aaron's stomach.

He already had a look at it in the ff thread. He didn't seem to have to much of a problem there. There are differences between my crack and Tormenks crack though. The time and also the scenarios are totally different.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

What's so nasty about hayate no naku koro ni?

Simply because I didn't get my USOOOOODAAAAA response, and ended having to eat my words.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

And Aaron will tough it out, pain and trials make growth for humans... and those two are also the easiest ways to get some emotion into a story

Though i'm sensing a whole lot of and quite a bit of coming our way...

Oh definitely.

Originally Posted by Liingo

What so we need more hot blood to get the posting up again.

SONOTORI!

ORETACHI WO DARE DA--

Originally Posted by Liingo

Then again.. that might be the final straw that gets this place locked down since the mods are now prowling around in here from time to time...

*cough**ack*

*watches Skyfall's cat Prowl past*

*whistles innocently*

Originally Posted by Liingo

Depends on how ridiculous the ideas are... Knowing you though... I'm not even going to be able to get past the copy-pasta to want to comment on your OC's..

I'll surprise you then. ...

...as long as you don't read Rebuilt Kha's dossier first. Among his new nicknames is the Copycat Knight after all...

And to preserve the twist in Rebuilt of StrikerS, I'll have to delay the release of Rebuilt Artei's dossier. Hope you guys don't mind. :3

Originally Posted by Liingo

He already had a look at it in the ff thread. He didn't seem to have to much of a problem there. There are differences between my crack and Tormenks crack though. The time and also the scenarios are totally different.

Oh yeah slipped my mind. Na I was just pulling ye leg there.

[Sheba]

Originally Posted by Liingo

Sorry, this is just waayyy out of the Nanoha standards that have been shown in canon to even think about this as it currently stands. What you're proposing is essentially a mini-GUNDAM or something equally equivalent.

Not wanting to spark some flames, but don't I see mechs getting drilled in it, tho? I have been thinking about slapping in some characters as exercise for character design but that stuff is shying me into doing it. My influences are more Conan the Barbarian, Elric the Necromancer, Dune, Lodoss War and movies like Braveheart, Gladiator and Kingdom of Heaven than mech anime.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Sheba

Not wanting to spark some flames, but don't I see mechs getting drilled in it, tho? I have been thinking about slapping in some characters as exercise for character design but that stuff is shying me into doing it. My influences are more Conan the Barbarian, Elric the Necromancer, Dune, Lodoss War and movies like Braveheart, Gladiator and Kingdom of Heaven than mech anime.

Oh HELL no.

It's just me and a few others who try every means to dodge, bribe, kill just can't resist the draw of it. Don't let our likings put you off, just shoot. We all want the OC thread to be as varied as ever, otherwise it would either be a sentai Metal Hero or a Mobilesuit creation thread.

Lingo for one is the best example of a non-mecha OCer. See why he's policing things here? And there's Tk, our dear (gruff) Sergeant Major bent on instilling discipline in our cadres, and Aaron doing his part on holding the fort. All of them aren't that mechy, so feel free to post urs. We might not get the refs, but it'll still be fun to read.

Besides, the less we get the refs, the more it'll look original and stand out, ne?

As for me, I just ripoff so much its my sad trademark now...

So bottomline: JUST SHOOT IT!

[Erio]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Our own device voiced by Donna Burke

*runs*

HU3G SPOIL3R!!

Originally Posted by Kha

It's my little take on it, as the events widely deviate, like the earlier appearances of the Numbers, better foreshadowing and battling NMs and Ex-Numbers.

That's fine by me, just refer to "Kerokanon" as the "default" OC canon timeline to prevent future confusions.

I chose Clotho because Kha and him are all speed types.

So Kha will be using his speed BJ form (forget the name) against Clotho? This will be interesting.

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Yes... But more... complete.
---
Anywho, I got my OC written up, so I'll put it up here before I turn in for the night. Of course, it's a monster length data bit, but I tend to do that. So what you guys want to do with him...

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Spoiler for OC character Data:

CINEMA of the Battery Device Test Incident: (Of course, the second part Incomplete)
P1: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1441314/
P2: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1506219/
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NAME: 'Crash' (Callsign)
GENDER: Male
Physical Appearance: Nondescript male, short haircut. Athletic build, scared up something fierce.
Allignment: Chaotic Good
DEVICE: Battery
POWERS: Walking Murphy's law. (AKA: Everything just goes WRONG around him.)
+ SKILLS: Evaision, Catastrohpic Survival

PROFILE:

Time Space Administration Beaurau Experimental Systems Test Force (T.S.A. B.E.S.T. F.) Test Pilot, leading unit (Unit 01) Callsign known only as 'Crash'. As a Cadet, he recieved this callsign as the first ever cadet to 'successfully' crash and wreck a full sized TSA Dimensional Cruiser, while it was still powered down and in drydock, resulting in massive damage to the docking facility, and terminal catastrophic damage to the cruiser.
'Crash' had somehow, survived the incident, not only alive, but for the most part, completely unhurt. (Discounting cuts and such.)
Crash had become known throughout his cadet days, as a man with a motto. He could break ANYTHING. Records, rules, equipment, vehicles. 'He's a walking murphy's law' some had said. Some younger cadets even suggested he was cursed or immortal, as he seemed to get into more crazy and violent accidents than it should have been physically possible to do, and even more physically impossible that he pretty much walked away from nearly all of them.

He was assigned to TSA BEST F, the Test Force which helped develope experimental magical technologies and equipment, putting his 'talent' to good use by finding the flaws in new equipment, vehicles, and technology. And find those flaws he did. Crash's test piloting has seen him litterally walk away from 126 'fatal' accidents with nothing more than a shrug, while the entire command staff gawked each and every time, and the test force commander commented about having a heart attack, each and every time... Including 34 'fatal' accidents that occured while the TSA was modernizing the Belkan cartraige system for current, stable use. These included seven dimensional incidents, four of which had class SS+ level magical explosions that rocked TSAGCOM itself.
His piloting is... unique. Crash isn't much of a fighter, but his talent for finding weird ways to break things has developed into a skill in which he can make vehicles and equipment do things that seem to defy logic itself. Often, the term 'The Unsung Aces' has been attatched to him and the test force for their abilities in general. His extensive testing of magical weapons has gained him moderate skill in their use all across the board, especially with most of the ranged magical firearms available.
In the few times he's been deployed in emergencies, he's somehow managed to find the most collatteral inducing and destructive way to deal with a situation. (Much to upper TSAGCOM's displeasure come budget time...)

As of late, Crash has been promoted to be the lead pilot of the Test force, working on the COMBAT BATTERY project to produce a device that can provide all around heavy combat effectiveness to even mages of negligable power levels. After a particularly violent accident during the project, which involved strangely enough, a PVC pipe, duct tape, a paperclip, and chewing gum as the triggers, Crash was quoted as calling the project... 'An absolute BLAST!'.
Whether or not that was because he'd just been blown 200 meters by a magical explosion, or because he thought it was fun, has never been determined.

In the late phase field testing of the BATTERY system, he was redirected to an active intercept role during a major flight test of the new system, where he was promptly cut off from Test Force Command and TSAGCOM before being engaged by six of the Imfamous 'Numbers' Combat Cyborgs. It was believed they were after some of the experimental tech being used in the battery, and was using their artifact raid on the auction to the east as cover. Crash managed to prove the effectiveness of the Battery system and its flexibility by not only actively engaging them, but surviving against these well trained killers for the eight and a half minutes it took to scramble reinforcements to assist him.
Crash has been awarded permenant use of his model of the Battery system for his actions in that incident. And strangely enough, he hasn't broken it yet...



DEVICE PROFILE:

Combat Battery (As in, Artillery Battery, or Weapons Battery.)
REFFERENCED NAME: "Battery"
DEVICE TYPE: Active AI Intelligent Magic Support Device [Test Type]
SYSTEM SPECS: Combat Oriented Armor and Weapons configurations.
AI TYPE: Modified F Type, limited personality, emphisized situational management. Dual Core Redundancy

COMPACT STATE: Dog Tags on a military necklace.

DEPLOYED STATES:
Armor Configurations of Heavy Ground Mode, Intercept, and Air Superiority Mode.
Weapon Configurations include STANDBY, Standard Rifle, Lance Rifle, Cerberus DFC, and Paladin Grand.

NOTES:
The Combat Battery is a self contained magic assisted power armor and weapon system. It includes all the trimmings of normal magical devices such as amplification and control, as well as boosting from the cartraige system. It also contains a number of non-magical systems such as the Grav Drive, a self sealed environment, physical high mass armor plating, and physical lifting capacity of two tons. It contains a magical and non-magical sensor suite and situational awareness system that matches a dimensional cruiser in all but range. The AI that operates the system is smart enough to work and understand as a decent partner with just about any master, gathering information needed, performing operations as required on its own, and essentially doing all the tasks required in the background of a combat situation, such as target profiling, threat assessment, and tracking.
Battery's voice is male, the engineers opting to have the more harsh, and critical tone to get the attention of its master as needed. Battery is programed to speak clearly in technical terms, often using informative commands such as 'PRIMED', 'AFFIRMATIVE', and 'NEGATIVE', allowing it to be understood and communicated with, even under situations where it may be difficult to hear or understand the device.

Configuration wise, the battery has a number of mission set modes enabling it to perform as well as an A rank Mage.

Internal Barrier Jacket: The primary, all purpose body glove barrier jacket is custom for the Battery, providing full body protection in a utilitarian manner that can be supported by modular add-ons of the main configurations. Unsurprisingly, it is not visually impressive compared to the more flamboyant jackets of the main TSA forces. However, it works.

ARMOR CONFIGURATIONS:

Heavy Ground Mode: The HG Mode consists of a strong overlayed combat exoskeleton over the barrier jacket. This armor is solid metal plating consisting of magic forged super density tungsten carbide and titanium alloys. It masses in at more than three times the weight of a large adult male human. However, it can withstand impact from up to S ranked attacks and still allow just about any pilot to walk away from the assault with only inconveniencing physical injuries. Granted, the armor is made for pilot survivability, not to withstand multiple heavy attacks, so armor functionality after S level hits is questionable.

Interceptor Mode: Power routing of the Battery is diverted from defenses to use of the inbuilt Grav-Drive system that allows the massive armor to gain flight mage ability. At a cost of defensive barrier power and magical weapons power, the armor can achieve straight flight performance surpassing the speed of aireal mages.

Air Superiority Mode: In the event of a manuever intensive air combat situation. The battery armor is designed to Jettison the heavy external armor and activate a lighter, more aerodynamic frame for the purpose of being able to direct more energy to airborne manuevering. Defenses are far weaker as a result, and the mode is suggested only for those who can keep up with the performance boost.

DEVICE WEAPON CONFIGURATIONS:

STANDBY: The weapon can be docked into the back of the armor and placed in standby mode when the pilot needs his/her hands free.

Rifle: The 'Device Mode' of the Battery weapon's system. Unsurprisingly, as a combat oriented device, it's highly utilitarian and rather spartan in non-combat features. The Rifle mode fires magical rounds with either single fire, or automatic/burst fire modes.

Lance Rifle: For the times when the mage just wants to reach out and touch someone, the Lance Rifle mode is an impressive peice of magical weapon's design. Ressembling a Barret M82A1 in design, the mode can fire a compact, high energy SS level projectile at three times the speed of sound at a range of twenty kilometers and hit a target the size of a sheet of paper dead center. This is achieved through the Battery's AI performing the critical targetting management operations such as calcularing horizon curviture, magnetic, optical, and magical interference, as well as digitally and magically stablizing the firing platform. A full power class SS shot requires four cartraiges, and significant charging time, but is capable of smashing just about any magical defense with enough leftover energy to overpenetrait right into other targets. The physical backblast from a single shot often sounds like an artillery cannon being fired and has a strong enough concussion to knock unprepared mages clear off their feet.

Cerberus DF Mode: The Dogfight Cannon configuration, known as Cerberus, employs pretty much a 'spray and pray' factor. In a situation where aireal magical dogfighting with high speed, snap manuever targets is a factor, leading and hitting with well aimed shots just isn't feasable. The rapid fire gatling setup in this mode sprays hundreds of low power, dumb magical shots a second, acting like brilliant tracers to attempt to hit targets in the fight. The overal logic is to overwhelm with numbers rather than overpower. The secondary fire mode, a high power homing shot known as the BloodHound Breaker, fires a fast moving magical missile object that will chase a selected target for up to five kilometers to inflict level A rank damage with a cartraige load.

Paladin Grand: When the mission calls for the Big Guns, the Paladin Grand artillery cannon is where it's at. Although it has almost no practical use in close range combat, it's few firing modes allow the pilot to engage in heavy fire support of any other mage group that requires it. The deadly accuracy of the Spectre Barrage allows light artillery level firepower to be repeatedly placed on target, rapidly firing a series of deadly high power explosive magic shells on the fly. It's final attack however, the deadly high energy Meteor Shower, fires a single round... the Ballistic magic round of the Meteor shower attack is a MIRV, the shot being calculated by the AI to be fired high into the sky, where it fractures at sub-orbital altitude to rain down on the target position with a devastating hail of magical explosions. The exact number and size of the fracturing can be controlled by the pilot or AI depending on what they want for area spread and damage per submunition. To fire a Meteor Shower however, requires a full five cartraiges, and is a difficult and time consuming attack to fire.


OTHER ABILITIES:

1 - The Battery device can duplicate a number of conventional magical attacks, ranging from the Divine Buster, to the Iron Howl, and does have an inventory of various attack propperties for magical bullets.

2 - M.A.C.H. STRAFE: The experimental emergency movement technique, known as the Magic Assisted Compression Hop, is being tested out with the Battery. This manuever uses sub-dimensional micro-compression to fold the space between two points for the pilot, and causes a rather sudden change in position. The rapid change in position often produces a sonic boom on entry into the strafe, and a loud crack of thunder at exit due to air moving out of the way of the pilot's body and or aerodynamics barrier. The manuever can be self sufficient from any mage pilot at a range of up to 500 meters before additional cartraige power loads are required. The nature of the move being a dimensional hop rather than a physical motion means that it also does not have any effects on momentum, or the conservation thereof. Meaning that it can be used to effectively change direction without bleeding speed in the conventional sense. Overall, the name 'MACH' Strafe, often misleads mages into thinking the pilot has performed a sudden, seemingly impossible high-supersonic short range manuever.

3 - HOWLER Flares: Special designed rapid fragmentation micro Iron Howls. Used to create a more or less confusing cloud of light and noise to dupe magical targetting and tracking. Since they're of significantly lower power than a full scale Iron Howl, they're much easier and quicker to deploy in an active high speed air battle.

4 - Variable Magnitude Cartraige Loader: Also in the list of Battery's inventory, it the new experimental VMC Loader, designed to be able to feed different SIZED magical cartraiges in expectation of an eventual shift into more mission specific power levels for cartraiges, ranging from conventional, to triple charge high power loads. The larger, reinforced jetison plate and active force ejection port ensure that spent cartraiges are moved clear of the device more more effectively.

CAUTIONS:

Battery Device is still in the Test Phase. Although functional, it still contains a variety of unproven techniques and unforseen problems. The use of the compact Grav. Drive simultaniously while activating a long range dimensional transport is among many of the untested features. Also, due to the high stress nature of the systems of the Battery, the operational time between maintanance operations on the device and armor is under careful review. It would be catastrophic to give the device to a non-flying mage of low power in the event the Grav. Drive has a total system failure in mid-operation. Until these systems are thoroughly tested for dependability and cleared for C rank or lower mages, the Battery Device will remain classified as a Special Operations and Test Division magical device only.

That should keep it all compact.

lol This is one of the most fun profiles I have read, similar to that of Tais. And hey, this guy is similar to Tais as well.

I like the concept, but as Liingo has said, you may need to tone it down a little to fit the Nanohaverse.

Originally Posted by Liingo

now that's done with, I'll post the prologue to my new fic(no OC's).. since none of you guys seemed to have saw it in the ff thread...

Spoiler for Our Mistress:

Prologue: Aftermath

Beep….Beep….Beep…

It was a sparse room, lightly furnished, designed for ease of access. A cluster of displays hovered in the air just over the centre line of the room. It didn’t matter that the information that they displayed was available elsewhere, just that those who were in charge felt more comfortable with them there. All of them had met her personally at one stage or another during their careers, a meeting that had changed them all for the better.

He entered the door closing behind him silently until it hit the wall with a muffled thud. He looked up hopefully towards the figure lying peacefully beneath the displays, wondering if there was any change. The figure showed no sign of having heard the door. ‘Well, it’s still early days after all. Given the extent of her injuries, it’s a small miracle that she’s alive at all.’

Bathed in the soft green glow of the displays, she looked a hundred times better than how she had looked when she arrived early in the morning. It was nowhere near her true condition, but the vision of her there bathed in such a glow gave him hope that the danger had passed, at least for the moment. A team of doctors and surgeons had worked for nearly half the day, even with the times where breaks had to be taken for fresh nurses to come in and take over. She was out of the worse of it, but time would tell how well she would recover. ‘And even if she does recover physically, none of us are sure whether she is going to be able to live on after what has happened.’

As he moved closer to the bed, the faint hiss of the ventilator could be heard. It was but one of a slew of devices that surrounded her. Satisfied that the devices were all functioning correctly, he doubled checked that all the catheters were firmly secured, before pulling the cover further up her body. He turned away from her after uttering a short prayer over her, heading for the door. If anyone had been watching, the glow of the devices would have revealed the tears flowing down his face.

He made sure that the door closed softly as he exited the room. ‘Time to get some rest, I’ll be glad once this night is over.’ As he made to move away from the patient’s room, a figure came around the corner.

“How is she?” they asked.

“As good as can be expected by one in her position. Better in fact. I’ve never dealt with injuries like these but some of the others have remarked that she’s a good few hours ahead of what they’ve experienced in these cases.”

The tension in the figure facing him eased considerably, “It’s going to ok right, she’d going to get better?”

He scratched the back of his head, “Well it looks good so far, I can’t make any guarantees though. Can you please get some rest now; you’re in no position yourself to be up at this hour, not with those injuries.”

“She’s going to live. No matter what. Their sacrifice is not going to be in vein.” With that they headed back in the direction of their room.

‘I hope you’re right. I really hope you do.’

****

Pain coursed through Agito’s body as she finally made it back to her room. Despite her bravado, the possibility that she wouldn’t make it was ever present in the back of her mind. While the doctor was correct that letting her body rest and recover was the best thing to do, what had happened kept playing in her mind, preventing her from getting to sleep.

We are the Wolkenritter, sworn guardians of the Mistress of the Night Sky. Death to those that attempt to harm her. Seeing that she has been hurt already, I’ll just have to make sure you have a fate worse than death.

You're probably all aware already, but don't expect updates for a little while..
Comments, flames, etc welcome.

I like it so far...but is that Hayate?! I now wonder what happened to her. Will be looking forward for the next chapter.

Aaron better not read this...

Originally Posted by Sheba

Not wanting to spark some flames, but don't I see mechs getting drilled in it, tho? I have been thinking about slapping in some characters as exercise for character design but that stuff is shying me into doing it. My influences are more Conan the Barbarian, Elric the Necromancer, Dune, Lodoss War and movies like Braveheart, Gladiator and Kingdom of Heaven than mech anime.

First, welcome to the thread.

Just read what Kha said. Dont worry about mechs or even technology. The Nanohaverse has unlimited possibilities. Just as there are civilizations that make use of technomagic (Mid-Childa), there are others that make use of only technology (Earth), as well as others that make use of only magic.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Erio

HU3G SPOIL3R!!

At the moment I can only wonder why a sniper RH is a huge spoiler...

Originally Posted by Erio

That's fine by me, just refer to "Kerokanon" as the "default" OC canon timeline to prevent future confusions.

I don't know... Do we want to widely deviate from the original? I thought what I was doing was just filling in the gaps in Keroko's profiles in the different stages of her life. After all, I think I haven't deviated from what Keroko-kun has written.

Originally Posted by Erio

So Kha will be using his speed BJ form (forget the name) against Clotho? This will be interesting.

Kha wears the new Vex suit as an additional layer over the base form of his summoned Knight Armor during the Battle of Cradle. The suit boosts all of his attributes evenly, but as such is just a "Jack of All Trades but Master of None" kinda setting. Hence, against Clotho, that is not enough, so we'll definitely have Cast Off into Jaegerform, the speed armor.

Cheesy Announcer: But with Fate a little "tied up", even THAT is not enough. Can the Cleric rise above this dire challenge? Can he conquer his own demons and emerge victorious?

All this and more, on the next, The Cleric Forever!

*cues cheesy 1960s Batman theme*

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Like you guys are going to scare me... Drill sergeants are more frightening.

Anywho, addressing the issues.

Originally Posted by Liingo

1) Why wasn't he kicked out after causing said damage in the first place? This was something that would have cost millions/ billions even.... Unless you're saying that the TSAB can afford to just throw away said money without batting an eyelid..

This is one of those 'WHY INDEED' things. Nobody rightly knows why he didn't get kicked out. But I think it had something to do with the fact that he was at the center of a 'parked', powered down starship, and wasn't actually 'doing anything wrong' when he somehow wrecked it.

2) SS+ magical explosions? Riight...... SS isn't something that you throw around lightly. Roughly speaking, it would be something like the SLB that Nanoha used in ep 25 of strikers and despite the claims of 'magic damage' it still left a damm big crater in the floor of the cradle. The way I see it, the only reason Vivio survied was because of the use of plot shields (yay fun.) Even then I can's see the explosions rocking the HQ unless of course they were so bloody idiotic that they decided to conduct the test right on top of the place..

Nah, but your perspective helps. I see SS as tactical nuclear level firepower. In this case, testing would be condcuted in the middle of nowhere. But the resulting massive explosion isn't intentional, it is after all, a test accident. Just like how the Jewel Seed going off in the first series was an accident. Weird things happen at test ranges in real life.

EDIT:

"But CRAAAZY stuff happens in nowhere! It's up to Crash to save his new home!"

3) Lol Macguyver...

Gotta have the humor.

4) Reading through the device details, it seems like you're trying to build a gundam (or something similar..) How about no? You're putting far too much into your device. Look, Barrier jacket is fine, staff/weapon is fine. Say 5-10 kg. The things that you're talking about it going to be a lot more that this... Armour plating? Sensors equivalent to a battleship? Seriously WTF?

Yes, armor plating. May seem like too much, but we're talking about something that's being built to military spec. And I don't mean TSAB Military Spec, I mean, military spec where the military wants equipment that simply WTFOMGPWNS the enemy, just like the real world US Military. It's got Tungsten Carbide and Titanium Alloy attatched to a powered exoskeleton with an internal gravity propulsion system to assist it. It's heavy as sin, but it's addressed. Now, if I REALLY wanted to weigh that thing down and put heavy armor on it, there's always Depleted Uranium and Chobholm Armor. I'm building a Mantank after all.

Anywho, as for sensors, you're probably right, I can tone that down easily enough. Maybe toss in an extra clause that asside from range, resolution as well is inferior to a cruiser's suite. That should allow the armor to retain the ability to do all the detecting that a cruiser can do, but it can't do it as far away (IE, maybe the advanced sensors only work to the horizon) , or with as much clarity (by an order of magnitude) as a Cruiser. One would figure that after the number of times the TSAB has had Enforces and the like caught in sensor blocking barriers, someone by now should have built a mobile platform that can provide the same tracking suite to the mages. That leaves me with a question though... what kind of sensor system is a magical sensor... they seem to be passive scanning systems rather than active scans, as they seem to detect things only after it becomes a serious problem.

5) Attacks, they're too powerful. TONE THEM DOWN! 4 cartridges for SS? Yeah maybe for the cream of the crop (Nanoha, Hayate etc.) DEFINATELY NOT FOR THE FODDER. (C-Rank mages)

I'll address that one by tripling the cartraige load, how's that sound? (Twelve carties for a SS shot plus something like thirty seconds prep time to fire...) Plus I'll toss in 'if the pilot can handle it' clause on the end to deal with it. That way we don't get any C rank mages firing off a Meteor Shower unless they're willing to pass out after the first shot.

Sorry, this is just waayyy out of the Nanoha standards that have been shown in canon to even think about this as it currently stands. What you're proposing is essentially a mini-GUNDAM or something equally equivalent.

Nah, just a power armor powered by magic really. And as for Nanoha standards, you've got a better more in depth perspective on it, so you're helping me to scale power levels and refine the mechanics.

EDIT 2

Okay, so I did the modifications, plus another review on Grav. Drive... just so it doesn't 'break the bank'.

For some clarity, Grav. Drive systems in device form cannot be functional on their own, as that alone will not allow flight performance... However, it can be used to assist existing flight magic when you're dealing with massive flight loading such as heavy armor. It is still experimental (Why do you think it's TEST PHASE Equipment?) and not available without special clearance.

Now for the updated segment, issues addressed, powers nerfed accordingly, cautions put into place to better scale it back.

Spoiler for OC Character Data Revised.:

NAME: 'Crash' (Callsign)
GENDER: Male
Physical Appearance: Nondescript male, short haircut. Athletic build, scared up something fierce.
Allignment: Chaotic Good
DEVICE: Battery
POWERS: Walking Murphy's law. (AKA: Everything just goes WRONG around him.)
+ SKILLS: Evaision, Catastrohpic Survival

PROFILE:

Time Space Administration Beaurau Experimental Systems Test Force (T.S.A. B.E.S.T. F.) Test Pilot, leading unit (Unit 01) Callsign known only as 'Crash'. As a Cadet, he recieved this callsign as the first ever cadet to 'successfully' crash and wreck a full sized TSA Dimensional Cruiser, while it was still powered down and in drydock, resulting in massive damage to the docking facility, and terminal catastrophic damage to the cruiser.
'Crash' had somehow, survived the incident, not only alive, but for the most part, completely unhurt. (Discounting cuts and such.)
Crash had become known throughout his cadet days, as a man with a motto. He could break ANYTHING. Records, rules, equipment, vehicles. 'He's a walking murphy's law' some had said. Some younger cadets even suggested he was cursed or immortal, as he seemed to get into more crazy and violent accidents than it should have been physically possible to do, and even more physically impossible that he pretty much walked away from nearly all of them. Even more puzzling is that despite the Dock Incident, that he wasn't discharged from the force altogether.
( - Official reports state that no existing records from the Incident can prove he was the actual cause of the accident, and no charges could be pressed. He was given six months remedial training.)


He was assigned to TSA BEST F, the Test Force which helped develope experimental magical technologies and equipment, putting his 'talent' to good use by finding the flaws in new equipment, vehicles, and technology. And find those flaws he did. Crash's test piloting has seen him litterally walk away from 126 'fatal' accidents with nothing more than a shrug, while the entire command staff gawked each and every time, and the test force commander commented about having a heart attack, each and every time... Including 34 'fatal' accidents that occured while the TSA was modernizing the Belkan cartraige system for current, stable use. These included seven dimensional incidents, two of which had class SS+ level magical explosions that rocked TSAGCOM itself.
( - The actual test range is located on the McGreggor Archipelligo in the Sea 2,000 km southwest of the main continent. The Two SS+ blasts, which occured at Block Five, and Block Seven of BEST Force's Third Magical Test Facility on Manning Is. produced siesmic disturbances which were litterally felt by officials at TSAB HQ.)


His piloting is... unique. Crash isn't much of a fighter, but his talent for finding weird ways to break things has developed into a skill in which he can make vehicles and equipment do things that seem to defy logic itself. Often, the term 'The Unsung Aces' has been attatched to him and the test force for their abilities in general. His extensive testing of magical weapons has gained him moderate skill in their use all across the board, especially with most of the ranged magical firearms available.
In the few times he's been deployed in emergencies, he's somehow managed to find the most collatteral inducing and destructive way to deal with a situation. (Much to upper TSAGCOM's displeasure come budget time...)

As of late, Crash has been promoted to be the lead pilot of the Test force, working on the COMBAT BATTERY project to produce a device that can provide all around heavy combat effectiveness equal to an A rank mage, to even mages of negligable power levels. After a particularly violent accident during the project, which involved strangely enough, a PVC pipe, duct tape, a paperclip, and chewing gum as the triggers, Crash was quoted as calling the project... 'An absolute BLAST!'.
Whether or not that was because he'd just been blown 200 meters by a magical explosion, or because he thought it was fun, has never been determined.

In the late phase field testing of the BATTERY system, he was redirected to an active intercept role during a major flight test of the new system, where he was promptly cut off from Test Force Command and TSAGCOM before being engaged by six of the Imfamous 'Numbers' Combat Cyborgs. It was believed they were after some of the experimental tech being used in the Battery, and was using their artifact raid on the auction to the east as cover. Crash managed to prove the effectiveness of the Battery system and its flexibility by not only actively engaging them, but surviving against these well trained killers for the eight and a half minutes it took to scramble reinforcements to assist him.
Crash has been awarded permenant use of his model of the Battery system for his valient actions (Albiet, sealed unless authorized.) in that incident. And strangely enough, he hasn't broken it yet...



DEVICE PROFILE:

Combat Battery (As in, Artillery Battery, or Weapons Battery.)
REFFERENCED NAME: "Battery"
DEVICE TYPE: Active AI Intelligent Magic Support Device [Test Type]
SYSTEM SPECS: Combat Oriented Armor and Weapons configurations.
AI TYPE: Modified F Type, limited personality, emphisized situational management. Dual Core Redundancy

COMPACT STATE: Dog Tags on a military necklace.

DEPLOYED STATES:
Armor Configurations of Heavy Ground Mode, Intercept, and Air Superiority Mode.
Weapon Configurations include STANDBY, Standard Rifle, Lance Rifle, Cerberus DFC, and Paladin Grand.

NOTES:
The Combat Battery is a self contained magic assisted power armor and weapon system. It includes all the trimmings of normal magical devices such as amplification and control, as well as boosting from the cartraige system. It also contains a number of non-magical systems such as the Grav Drive, a self sealed environment, physical high mass armor plating, and physical lifting capacity of two tons. It contains a magical and non-magical sensor suite and situational awareness system that matches a dimensional cruiser in coverage and complexity. Though it lacks, by an order of magnitude, the resolution and range of the full sized suites on the naval vessels. The AI that operates the system is smart enough to work and understand as a decent partner with just about any master, gathering information needed, performing operations as required on its own, and essentially doing all the tasks required in the background of a combat situation, such as target profiling, threat assessment, and tracking.
Battery's voice is male, the engineers opting to have the more harsh, and critical tone to get the attention of its master as needed. Battery is programed to speak clearly in technical terms, often using informative commands such as 'PRIMED', 'AFFIRMATIVE', and 'NEGATIVE', allowing it to be understood and communicated with, even under situations where it may be difficult to hear or understand the device.

Configuration wise, the battery has a number of mission set modes enabling it to perform as well as an A rank Mage with mages as low as C rank.

Internal Barrier Jacket: The primary, all purpose body glove barrier jacket is custom for the Battery, providing full body protection in a utilitarian manner that can be supported by modular add-ons of the main configurations. Unsurprisingly, it is not visually impressive compared to the more flamboyant jackets of the main TSA forces. However, it works.

ARMOR CONFIGURATIONS:

Heavy Ground Mode: The HG Mode consists of a strong overlayed combat exoskeleton over the barrier jacket. This armor is solid metal plating consisting of magic forged super density tungsten carbide and titanium alloys. (Depleted Urnaium and Chobham Composite armors were considered, but ultimately deemed far too expensive, toxic, or massive even for the Grav Drive System and the overall 'survivability' of the armor.) It masses in at more than three times the weight of a large adult male human. However, it can withstand impact from up to S ranked attacks and still allow just about any pilot to walk away from the assault with only inconveniencing physical injuries. Granted, the armor is made for pilot survivability, not to withstand multiple heavy attacks, so armor functionality after S level hits is questionable, and highly doubted.
( - Armor test performance without an operator showed an 80% mission-kill rate to its integrity after taking an S impact to the primary deflection breast plate. This was through a high density directional barrier on a level A setting. The dummy material inside the armor and the barrier jacket only recieved minor physical damage equal to taking a strong punch to the chest.)

Interceptor Mode: Power routing of the Battery is diverted from defenses and physical power reinforcement of the armor, to use of the inbuilt Grav-Drive system that allows the massive armor to gain flight mage ability. At a cost of defensive barrier power and magical weapons power, the armor can achieve straight-&-level flight performance surpassing the speed of aireal mages. Flying cannot be achieved in full defense mode however. So any situation where the armor is actually airborne automatically means significant portions of the full defensive power are redirected to the Grav Drive.
SPECIAL CAUTION: - The Grav. Drive Mechanism is compact, but experimental. It is not actually a full gravity drive, and cannot produce flight on its own. (Full size drive units being far too large to feasably deploy on a man-sized frame. The mage using the drive must have at least minimum flight ability from the start. Otherwise they just get a massive jump ability.

Air Superiority Mode: In the event of a manuever intensive air combat situation. The battery armor is designed to Jettison the heavy external armor and activate a lighter, more aerodynamic frame for the purpose of being able to direct more energy to airborne manuevering. Defenses are far weaker as a result, and the mode is suggested only for those who can keep up with the performance boost.

DEVICE WEAPON CONFIGURATIONS:

STANDBY: The weapon can be docked into the back of the armor and placed in standby mode when the pilot needs his/her hands free.

Rifle: The 'Device Mode' of the Battery weapon's system. Unsurprisingly, as a combat oriented device, it's highly utilitarian and rather spartan in non-combat features. The Rifle mode fires magical rounds with either single fire, or automatic/burst fire modes.

Lance Rifle: For the times when the mage just wants to reach out and touch someone, the Lance Rifle mode is an impressive peice of magical weapon's design. Ressembling a Barret M82A1 in design in this configuration, the mode can fire a compact, high energy SS level projectile at three times the speed of sound at a range of twenty kilometers and hit a target the size of a sheet of paper dead center. This is achieved through the Battery's AI performing the critical targetting management operations such as calcularing horizon curviture, magnetic, optical, and magical interference, as well as digitally and magically stablizing the firing platform. A full power class SS penetraitor shot requires twelve cartraiges, and significant charging time, but is capable of smashing just about any magical defense with enough leftover energy to overpenetrait right into other targets. The physical backblast from a single shot often sounds like an artillery cannon being fired and has a strong enough concussion to knock unprepared mages clear off their feet. It is cautioned that use of SS level shots not be attempted by mages with Ranks at, or lower than B. The power boost from the cartraige system is extreme, and can have detrimental results to a class C or lower rank's ability to fight, or in some cases just stay concious.

Cerberus DF Mode: The Dogfight Cannon configuration, known as Cerberus, employs pretty much a 'spray and pray' factor. In a situation where aireal magical dogfighting with high speed, snap manuever targets is a factor, leading and hitting with well aimed shots just isn't feasable. The rapid fire gatling setup in this mode sprays hundreds of low power, dumb magical shots a second, acting like brilliant tracers to attempt to hit targets in the fight. The overal logic is to overwhelm with numbers rather than overpower. The secondary fire mode, a high power homing shot known as the BloodHound Breaker, fires a fast moving magical missile object that will chase a selected target for up to five kilometers to inflict level A rank damage with a cartraige load or two. (This depends on the base level of the Pilot operating Battery.)

Paladin Grand: When the mission calls for the Big Guns, the Paladin Grand artillery cannon is where it's at. Although it has almost no practical use in close range combat, it's few firing modes allow the pilot to engage in heavy fire support of any other mage group that requires it. The deadly accuracy of the Spectre Barrage allows light artillery level firepower to be repeatedly placed on target, rapidly firing a series of deadly high power explosive magic shells on the fly. It's final attack however, the deadly high energy Meteor Shower, fires a single round... the Ballistic magic round of the Meteor shower attack is a MIRV, the shot being calculated by the AI to be fired high into the sky, where it fractures at sub-orbital altitude to rain down on the target position with a devastating hail of magical explosions. The exact number and size of the fracturing can be controlled by the pilot or AI depending on what they want for area spread and damage per submunition. To fire a Meteor Shower however, requires a full fifteen cartraiges, and is a difficult and time consuming attack to fire, and should not be attempted by any mage below B rank. In fact, the entire Paladin Grand configuration should be used sparingly to mages lower than B rank, and cautiously for B rank mages, where physical strain is an issue for high energy management.


OTHER ABILITIES:

1 - The Battery device can duplicate a number of conventional magical attacks, ranging from the Divine Buster, to the Iron Howl, and does have an inventory of various attack propperties for magical bullets for expanded combat options. Though generally, the default setting for magical bullet is physical damage.

2 - M.A.C.H. STRAFE: The experimental emergency movement technique, known as the Magic Assisted Compression Hop, is being tested out with the Battery. This manuever uses sub-dimensional micro-compression to fold the space between two points for the pilot, and causes a rather sudden change in position. The rapid change in position often produces a sonic boom on entry into the strafe, and a loud crack of thunder at exit due to air moving out of the way of the pilot's body and or aerodynamics barrier. The manuever can be self sufficient from any mage pilot at a range of up to 500 meters before additional cartraige power loads are required. The nature of the move being a dimensional hop rather than a physical motion means that it also does not have any effects on momentum, or the conservation thereof. Meaning that it can be used to effectively change direction without bleeding speed in the conventional sense. Overall, the name 'MACH' Strafe, often misleads mages into thinking the pilot has performed a sudden, seemingly impossible high-supersonic short range manuever.

3 - HOWLER Flares: Special designed rapid fragmentation micro Iron Howls. Used to create a more or less confusing cloud of light and noise to dupe magical targetting and tracking. Since they're of significantly lower power than a full scale Iron Howl, they're much easier and quicker to deploy in an active high speed air battle.

4 - Variable Magnitude Cartraige Loader: Also in the list of Battery's inventory, it the new experimental VMC Loader, designed to be able to feed different SIZED magical cartraiges in expectation of an eventual shift into more mission specific power levels for cartraiges, ranging from conventional, to triple charge high power loads. The larger, reinforced jetison plate and active force ejection port ensure that spent cartraiges are moved clear of the device much more effectively to prevent potential jamming. (Though there are few records of cartraige jamming outside of test facilities.)

CAUTIONS:

Battery Device is still in the Test Phase. Although functional, it still contains a variety of unproven techniques and unforseen problems. The use of the compact Grav. Drive simultaniously while activating a long range dimensional transport is among many of the untested features. Also, due to the high stress nature of the systems of the Battery, the operational time between maintanance operations on the device and armor is under careful review. It would be catastrophic to give the device to a non-flying mage of low power in the event the Grav. Drive has a total system failure in mid-operation. Until these systems are thoroughly tested for dependability and cleared for C rank or lower mages, the Battery Device will remain classified as a Special Operations and Test Division magical device only. It should also be noted that testing is done on with a well trained Level A ranked pilot, and the strain of using high power functions such as the SS level abilities is extremely tiring and not repeated for safety reasons.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

But the Covenant have PLASMA GRENADES.

Ph34r the "Blue Spiders"

Originally Posted by LoweGear

No matter, it's not the breast that matters, it's the heart

Aww...such a sweet thing to say

Originally Posted by LoweGear

I Stand Corrected

Bwahaha!

Originally Posted by Reiji Tabibito

<sigh> You need to work on your timing - your jabs have no impact to them whatsoever...practice swings. Now.

Shamsel: Timing?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

@xgouki: Managed to read your finalized piece on the theme park outing for Yuunoha. All I can say is Vivio >>> Yuuno. Don't worry ferret boy...there's always next time.

I just had to have a lot of Vivio in it. She's just so CUTE!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

And don't forget

HENSHIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I blame my watching Den-O for the sudden crack thought:

Nanoha: Fin Funnel Form (blue)

Fate: Scythe Form (black)

Hayate: Blasting Form (white)

Originally Posted by USB500

Rider JUMP! Reider KICK!
Kamen Rider! Kamen Rider!
RIDER! RIDER!!!

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Anywho, I got my OC written up, so I'll put it up here before I turn in for the night. Of course, it's a monster length data bit, but I tend to do that. So what you guys want to do with him...

----

Spoiler for OC character Data:

*snip*

That should keep it all compact.

Yay! A new OC

Originally Posted by Liingo

What so we need more hot blood to get the posting up again. Then again.. that might be the final straw that gets this place locked down since the mods are now prowling around in here from time to time...

You can never have enough HOT BLOOD

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

You can never have enough HOT BLOOD

Never enough... And I'm feeling inspired like I haven't in a long time... when was the last time I was inspired to make one of my semi comical AMVs? Year and a half?

Because I'm tempted, oh I'm tempted here to make a Nanoha AMV to 'Taste The Blood from Devil May Cry 3."

Spoiler for The following is Restricted:

And if you can't find the restricted comment, I pity you.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=98KN8WyIIIk

Think I should make a Nanoha AMV with that song?

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Kha

*watches Skyfall's cat Prowl past*

*whistles innocently*

I'll surprise you then. ...

...as long as you don't read Rebuilt Kha's dossier first. Among his new nicknames is the Copycat Knight after all...

And to preserve the twist in Rebuilt of StrikerS, I'll have to delay the release of Rebuilt Artei's dossier.

Like I said, we'll get to it when you give us the details.

Originally Posted by Sheba

Not wanting to spark some flames, but don't I see mechs getting drilled in it, tho? I have been thinking about slapping in some characters as exercise for character design but that stuff is shying me into doing it. My influences are more Conan the Barbarian, Elric the Necromancer, Dune, Lodoss War and movies like Braveheart, Gladiator and Kingdom of Heaven than mech anime.

You're more than welcome to join in. How harsh the critique of the characters posted in here depends on just how wacky it is in comparison to Nanoha mechanics. As long as it's within the limits of canon(well what we've seen of it) then it's not going to get too mcuh criticism.

Like the others have said, feel free to post an OC. References are fine, as long as they're not so obvious that they're a complete ripoff of what ever it is that you're trying to pay homage to *coughkhacough*

Originally Posted by Erio

I like it so far...but is that Hayate?! I now wonder what happened to her. Will be looking forward for the next chapter.

Aaron better not read this...

Yes that's Hayate... details to come in a reverse timeskip...

Aaron's already read it.. he's not dead yet...

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

You can never have enough HOT BLOOD

Oh fun..

Tigerclaw I'll get to looking through it fully later, not much time at the moment, but although you've toned it down slightly, it looks like it's still way over canon, even the crazy canon that exists in here...

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Sheba

Not wanting to spark some flames, but don't I see mechs getting drilled in it, tho? I have been thinking about slapping in some characters as exercise for character design but that stuff is shying me into doing it. My influences are more Conan the Barbarian, Elric the Necromancer, Dune, Lodoss War and movies like Braveheart, Gladiator and Kingdom of Heaven than mech anime.

Originally Posted by Kha

Oh HELL no.

It's just me and a few others who try every means to dodge, bribe, kill just can't resist the draw of it. Don't let our likings put you off, just shoot. We all want the OC thread to be as varied as ever, otherwise it would either be a sentai Metal Hero or a Mobilesuit creation thread.

Lingo for one is the best example of a non-mecha OCer. See why he's policing things here? And there's Tk, our dear (gruff) Sergeant Major bent on instilling discipline in our cadres, and Aaron doing his part on holding the fort. All of them aren't that mechy, so feel free to post urs. We might not get the refs, but it'll still be fun to read.

In the same way, while Kagerou and I are mecha fans, the main influence on our OCs, the Order of Freelance Mages, has been the Halo universe: the OFM's Assault Platoon's barrier jackets are ODST armor, they use Halo weapons, and Halo references are rife everywhere (the Sergeant Major was a former Marine sniper, his name, Ivanovich, translates as "Son of John" - aka Johnson - and his rifle device is a BR55HB fused with a Storage Device core.)

...oh, and we have Master Chief as well. And Pelicans. And Warthogs. And plasma grenades. ^^;;

@Tigerclaw: Okay, looks quite good, and I think it would be quite handy if the bugs could be worked out. And a Jacket Purge option? *grins* Well, Nanoha IS chock-full of mecha refs - like the Jacket Purge option of Wildwurger....

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

@Tigerclaw: Okay, looks quite good, and I think it would be quite handy if the bugs could be worked out. And a Jacket Purge option? *grins* Well, Nanoha IS chock-full of mecha refs - like the Jacket Purge option of Wildwurger....

Most of the kinks I think are ironed out on this round myself.

The major issue was mainly the Overpower deal. And that's not really actual functional issue, but just me slapping 'numbers' onto paper. (Or rather whatever Rank sounds good.)

What I like about devices, and machines of this manner, is that technically, there is no real limitation to it. You can build on whatever you want to a machine and get away with it. The nice thing is, that doesn't make the machine overpowered, it gives it overpower POTENTIAL. A machine still requires an operator. And if your operator doesn't have the epic skills to use the machine to its full potential, the the team of Machine and Operator just don't fill out to that overpower factor.

As an example, you could have Keitaro Urashima from Love Hina and Master Chief from HALO, and a Spartan II's MJLNOR Armor. Now, if you stick Chief in that armor, you can see just how wicked it is. You stick Keitaro in that armor, and I doubt he'll last very long against even a single Grunt. (Assuming of course, we're handwaving away the fact that your practically NEED to be a supersoldier just to survive wearing the armor.)

I like to think of the OC I'm working on as a character who, you've given a Leatherman Multitool to... but he only uses the knife and the screwdriver on it most of the time, and doesn't really deal with most of the other functions outside of necessity or familiarization. Of course, he's got, when he needs it, the ability to make the knife pick an electronic lock, but that's under crazy circumstances that would be tied directly to plot events.

That's one thing I think about for equipment though. You should design it so it can bring full potential from the top tier, but still function for your overwhelming masses of the Lowest Common Denominator.

The question is now: How much more nerfing can I do without sacrificing the potential... Reminds me of MOD balance for BF2 Dcon. How to give that helicopter the edge you want when it's got the right operator, but not make it easy enough to utilize that just any pilot can hop in and start killing tanks.

[dkellis]

Originally Posted by Kha

Oh HELL no.

It's just me and a few others who try every means to dodge, bribe, kill just can't resist the draw of it. Don't let our likings put you off, just shoot. We all want the OC thread to be as varied as ever, otherwise it would either be a sentai Metal Hero or a Mobilesuit creation thread.

Lingo for one is the best example of a non-mecha OCer. See why he's policing things here? And there's Tk, our dear (gruff) Sergeant Major bent on instilling discipline in our cadres, and Aaron doing his part on holding the fort. All of them aren't that mechy, so feel free to post urs. We might not get the refs, but it'll still be fun to read.

Besides, the less we get the refs, the more it'll look original and stand out, ne?

As for me, I just ripoff so much its my sad trademark now...

So bottomline: JUST SHOOT IT!

To add on to this, I've mentioned before (early on in the thread's life; I think it's among my first posts in here, actually) that it would be best if the references are kept as independent as possible from the action. In other words, don't assume that your readers know what the reference is.

Spoiler for Warning: incoming rant.:

For a lot of the OCs and scenarios introduced in this thread, I have the odd and probably unenviable position of Not Getting It. The characters have some strangely-named super moves which they shout out and seems to be kind of flashy, and the thread goes wild with how "hot-blooded" or "awesome" it is, and I'm just sitting here completely confused by all the reactions. This may be aggravated by the large fonts sometimes used, which I always associate in my head as someone screaming right in my face, with the result that I'm feeling like I've been shouted at continuously for a significant period of time, and my ears are ringing despite not actually having heard anything as such.

Now, this is not saying that references are Bad. Off the top of my head, I have stuff from The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya (possibly the most recognizable for people in this thread, since it's the one I've pushed the most), Lucky Star, the Marathon series of games, the System Shock games, Slayers, Ranma 1/2, Revolutionary Girl Utena, the Discworld books, the new World of Darkness systems (primarily Mage: The Awakening and Changeling: The Lost), ReBoot, the City of Heroes MMORPG...

An advantage I've had with all this is that apart from maybe The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya and Lucky Star, I'm assuming that nobody else will have heard of whatever I'm drawing inspiration from, and so I try to make it my own as much as possible, such that the reader does not have to have seen whatever it is that special move came from in order to appreciate why it is special.

Therefore, I can make the characters like someone else from an established series, but with their own quirks and flair. Ivey is like Konata from Lucky Star, but she isn't Konata with a name change. Reiz is like Mikuru from MoHS, but she has her own personality that diverges from Mikuru's. (For one thing, Reiz has a spine, and has been known to lose her temper.)

References are fun, but they should not be important enough to take over a significant plot point. A throwaway line or two is fine, but if you turn it into a major aspect of the story, please provide enough context for the rest of us to understand.

tl;dr: References should be references. Crossovers should be crossovers. Neither are bad, but the two are not the same thing.

As for the mecha-references thing, I'm not a mecha anime fan, and in fact I don't really like mecha anime. My favourite mecha anime would probably be Magic Knight Rayearth, and that's about it.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by dkellis

To add on to this, I've mentioned before (early on in the thread's life; I think it's among my first posts in here, actually) that it would be best if the references are kept as independent as possible from the action. In other words, don't assume that your readers know what the reference is.

Spoiler for Warning: incoming rant.:

For a lot of the OCs and scenarios introduced in this thread, I have the odd and probably unenviable position of Not Getting It. The characters have some strangely-named super moves which they shout out and seems to be kind of flashy, and the thread goes wild with how "hot-blooded" or "awesome" it is, and I'm just sitting here completely confused by all the reactions. This may be aggravated by the large fonts sometimes used, which I always associate in my head as someone screaming right in my face, with the result that I'm feeling like I've been shouted at continuously for a significant period of time, and my ears are ringing despite not actually having heard anything as such.

Now, this is not saying that references are Bad. Off the top of my head, I have stuff from The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya (possibly the most recognizable for people in this thread, since it's the one I've pushed the most), Lucky Star, the Marathon series of games, the System Shock games, Slayers, Ranma 1/2, Revolutionary Girl Utena, the Discworld books, the new World of Darkness systems (primarily Mage: The Awakening and Changeling: The Lost), ReBoot, the City of Heroes MMORPG...

An advantage I've had with all this is that apart from maybe The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya and Lucky Star, I'm assuming that nobody else will have heard of whatever I'm drawing inspiration from, and so I try to make it my own as much as possible, such that the reader does not have to have seen whatever it is that special move came from in order to appreciate why it is special.

Therefore, I can make the characters like someone else from an established series, but with their own quirks and flair. Ivey is like Konata from Lucky Star, but she isn't Konata with a name change. Reiz is like Mikuru from MoHS, but she has her own personality that diverges from Mikuru's. (For one thing, Reiz has a spine, and has been known to lose her temper.)

References are fun, but they should not be important enough to take over a significant plot point. A throwaway line or two is fine, but if you turn it into a major aspect of the story, please provide enough context for the rest of us to understand.

tl;dr: References should be references. Crossovers should be crossovers. Neither are bad, but the two are not the same thing.

As for the mecha-references thing, I'm not a mecha anime fan, and in fact I don't really like mecha anime. My favourite mecha anime would probably be Magic Knight Rayearth, and that's about it.

If you want to rip, make sure you explain every detail, such that a purely Nanohaverse fan can understand you.

For example: I notice SRW get referenced a lot here. The advantage of that is that their attacks have videos to back them up with, and quoting those videos in your character profiles helps people who think SRW stands for Something Really Weird will have a better grasp of the character.

Another example is how LoweGear builds his OCs. They are really really descriptive, such that you have a mental picture forming in your head without having to be a big fan of Jigoku Shoujo and the Gainax works that feature in his efforts.

Most of all, none of them require you to know the story of origin that the character was based from. People yell at me "COPYPASTAAAAA!!!" all the time , but I hope that every time that happened, be it during a short exchange between characters, the conflicts they face, or ever a wider premise as a whole, I stayed true to my above words.

No matter how unoriginal, no matter how mind-blowing, I want to bring you in and share with you my vision, the scene I play in my twisted mind. And to do that, I must make sure I's as descriptive as I can.

Something like that I believe.

EDIT:

~~~Several hours later...~~~

Is it me, or did Kotomi's violin recital kill the thread as well? (Am watching CLANNAD...)



EDIT2:

~~~Two hours later...~~~

*crickets*

It's too quiet here... Silence means... Time for some crack!

*sudden silence*

So... it was me all along huh...?

[Wild Goose]

Well, while I’m working on stuff, here's THE MAN's profile.

I would like to credit TK for the original profile, which for the most part I've chosen to follow, save for a few things here and there which I've changed for story purposes and some other stuff to make his profile more relevant to the OFM. In the end, what has happened is that both TK and I have given our own twists and spin onto the charecter, refitting him into the Nanoverse, departing in a few places from Halo canon. Sort of.

But he's still the Master Chief. And he will kick ass most righteously.

Spoiler for John-117, Non Comissioned Officer of the Order:

Name: John
Other/Ace names: SPARTAN-117 / The Green Demon
Callsign: Sierra 117 (independant operations), Bravo 22 (As part of Bravo Squad)
Gender: Male
Origin: First encountered on Non-Administered World 142
Age: Unknown. Presumably late 20s to late 30s, appears around 21 physically due to having been kept in “Cold storage” for significant lengths of time during his captivity when he wasn’t needed.
Birthday: Unknown (celebrated as the day he joined the OFM)
Affiliation: Order of Freelance Mages, Time Space Administration Bureau
Position: Assault Platoon Mage
Rank: Master Chief

Mage Class: Shooter (OFM class: Assault)
Mage Rank: B overall (Ground Combat rating AA)
Magic System: Mid-childa
Magic Color: Green
Magic Affinity: Real Man Badass
Magic Style: Quick shooting. Lots of shooting. At all ranges. And a rifle smack to the face if you dare get close enough.
Magic Device: Unnamed Rifle Device

Conventional Style: Special Operations, Bravo Squad member
Conventional Weapons: While originally ignorant of conventional weapons when he first joined the OFM, the Master Chief whole-heartedly threw himself into the study of a new form of warfare, and is rated Expert in all weapons listed below. While his exact weapons loadout will depend on his mission role, the Master Chief favors the MA5C, the standard-issue rifle of the OFM and Erusian Marines. In addition, like all OFM mages, he has been trained in the operation of OFM crew-served weapons.

- MA5C Assault rifle, chambered for 7.62x51mm, with optional flashlight, underslung 40mm grenade launcher, or shotgun attachment
- Pistol, chambered for 12.7x40mm, loaded with Semi Armor-Piercing High Explosive rounds or hollowpoint rounds
- BR55HB battle rifle, chambered for 9.5x45mm Semi Armor Piercing and 2x ACOG scope.
- M7 SMG, chambered for 5.23mm caseless
- M90 8-gauge combat shotgun
- SRS99C 14.5mm sniper rifle
- M41 "Spanker" rocket launcher
- Combat knives of varying sizes and types

Height: 6'8" (unarmored, barefoot), 7'1" (armored)
Weight: 350 lbs
Eye color: Green
Hair color: Brown
Facial Features: Very ordinary looking face; pale skintone due to being in armor for extended periods of time.
Clothing: John prefers to wear his Armor, explaining that he feels naked without it. He will, however, wear OFM camoflage fatigues while on-base, simply because there are no pieces of furniture that can support his weight while fully armored. Only one picture of John in his TSAB Blues exists.

Spoiler for Hail to the Chief:

TSAB Profile:
A Senior Non Comissioned Officer in the Order, and second only to the venerable Sergeant Major in terms of respect, Master Chief John-117 is one of the few Navy transfers to serve with the OFM, and the only Navy mage in the Assault Platoon. He is quiet, calm under fire, and a rock of strenght and hope to his fellow soldiers: many, including Assault Platoon Leader 2LT Franz Jaeger, believe that together, the Sergeant Major and the Master Chief are invincible. While he doesn't talk much, the Master Chief backs himself up with deeds not words, always in the thick of the fighting with his fellow soldiers.

Despite his weak magic rank and relative youth, the Master Chief is a dedicated soldier, an example and motivation to all who know him - in his own way, more inspirational than the Aces. Afterall, it's hard to argue with a man who can lift a Warthog with his own two hands.

While normally a quiet and stoic individual, the Master Chief has been known to comment with dry and wry humor on events - a rare occurrence indeed. It is unknown if he has ever become drunk.

Although a quiet and distant man by nature, the three years with the Order and his friendship with Ivanovich are slowly influencing him, and it is possible that in time he may in fact become a well-adjusted human being. Or not - he is in the Order, afterall.

Whenever engaged in combat, Master Chief's main overriding concerns are accoplishing his objectives and keeping his comrades alive so far as possible.

Personality:
--Alignment: Lawful Neutral
"He's the Master Chief. There ain't nobody who can beat him - except for maybe the Sergeant Major."

As a result of his indoctrination process, the Master Chief isn't really a big thinking on moral issues. He will follow orders - so long as they are given lawfully - and is neutral on the subject of good guys or bad guys. His number one priority are simple: complete the mission. Unlike the majority of the TSAB's mages, he has no qualms about killing, and will do so if necessary without a second thought. Conversely, the Master Chief gains no enjoyment from killing. He kills simply because he has to, because the mission needs it, because if he does not kill, his comrades will be endangered. This approach to killing has resulted in him being ostracized by the mainstream TSAB units that have come into contact with him; apart from his old unit, only the Order of Freelance Mages have accepted him whole-heartedly: because Death is their business.

John is a very quiet person who speaks rarely, only when he needs to, and lives simply, deriving simple pleasure from such mundane things as cleaning and servicing his armor. One of the things that gives him pleasure is his at times strange friendship with Sergeant Major Ivanovich (a friendship which has sealed his reputation as a Man among men).

Spoiler for History, Part 1:

Master Chief John-117 was first discovered around 10 years ago during a raid on an illegal bio-engineering lab hidden on a non-administered world. Although the lab held a wide range of “specimens”, according to the lab's database he was the most complete model to be produced, and more importantly, the most stable. He was not actually artificial in nature; he was a subject kidnapped from the local population for experimentation (as his number indicates he was one of many), but few other specimens had fared nearly as well as him. He was so effective in fact, he was to be the template upon which "mass production models" were to begin production in just a few more years - the lab considered him to be the prefect "Jack of all Trades."

The TSAB raid ended this plan, but the question still lingered what to do with the liberated prisoners: in addition to being experimented and augmented, most had been drilled intensely for combat and were not in any psychological condition to be safely set loose back into society. Furthermore, the nature of their modifications made that impossible on their home planet, disregarding that the lab had carefully destroyed all records of where the subjects had been taken from. Thus it was decided they would become wards of the TSAB until such time as they could be rehabilitated.

That was the plan.

Much to the surprise and consternation of the officials charged with that task most of them didn’t want to be “rehabilitated”. The reason soon became clear: It was learned that their training had always been conducted with the understanding at some point, the SPARTANs would be sold to the highest bidder and expected to follow the new owner's orders to the letter. Thus, they simply assumed they where now TSAB property and kept insisting they be given something to do: The manifold attempts to make them “normal” were simply confusing them. After much time and effort had been spent, the therapists concluded that this level of psychological damage was not going to be fixed anytime soon and advised that they at least be used for something productive in the meantime since they seemed to want to fight anyway.

The liberated SPARTANs were thus quietly formed into a special unit and began undertaking small scale operations while attempts to normalise them continued. Progress was slow throughout the years, and very rudimentary, hampered in part by the codes and mini-launguage that had grown among the SPARTANs and their insular view of the world, believing themselves to have no need of interactions with normal people. All this changed one day, the day the SPARTANs were all wiped out on a mission gone horribly wrong, save for one. He was their team leader, their elder brother.

His name was John.

Spoiler for History, Part 2:

After recovering from his injuries and physical rehabilitation, attempts were made to intergrate John-117 into the mainstream TSAB forces; it was thought that without his fellow SPARTANs, the Master Chief would be forced to interact with normal people and become normal himself. The plan backfired; few units wanted to have a "freak" amongst their carefully-ordered rosters, especially one who was physically formidable but merely a B-ranked mage geared solely towards combat. Eventually a certain Colonel heard of his plight and pulled several strings, and John found himself inside that man's office. To this day, he remembers the first words that man spoke to him:

"What's yer name, son?"

"Sir, Sierra 117, Sir."

"Not that name, son. You're a man, with a man's name. What's yer name? Say it loud, an' hold it up, lift it with pride. Yer a man, wit' a man's name. They can take everything from you - but they can't take yer pride and yer name! Always remember that!"

Upon joining the Order's Assault Platoon, John made waves by knocking Assault Platoon Leader Franz Jaeger unconscious with one blow, lifting a Warthog with his bare hands, and for having a natural talent for marksmanship, to the astonishment of the Erusian mages of the Assault Platoon, who had until that moment believed that nobody could shoot as well as an Erusian. His augmentations allowed him to keep pace with - and surpass - the Assault Platoon on their physically demanding PT drills and obstacle course runs, earning jealousy and grudging respect from some, and downright hostility from others.

Then his first combat mission with the Order happened.

Like many Order missions, this mission was a classified sanction, but it was after this mission that John was fully accepted into the Order's ranks - having proved himself to the Assault Platoon, he was welcomed as part of them, a full-fledged member of the Order. For a time, he was the most junior member of the Order, until Naomi Jaeger joined the OFM in MC0072. Since his first mission with the Order, John has performed superbly, earning the respect and friendship of his comrades; awarded with that simple, understated compliment and recognition of being a Real Man, a Badass, and a Man among men. (The last primarily because of his friendship with Ivanovich - even today no one is quite sure how the two men, fundamental opposites, became such good friends. Franz suspects that neither of them really knows either.)

Now, more than three years since he joined the OFM, the Master Chief's reputation is becoming the stuff of legend, and as Erick, Glen and Ivanovich plan the uncertain future expansion of the Order, one thing is for sure: there is no way in hell the Master Chief won't be leading a platoon of his own. And when the shit has hit the fan and the chips are down, he'll be there to kick ass and take names.

"You see him manning that Gauss Gun or the Warthog Gatling and you start to make jokes about compensating for something, then you stop and go, 'god, look at the size of that codpiece! He's gotta have hugeass steel balls!'" - A Romeo Echo Mike Foxtrot assigned to the Order's support staff.

"I thought it was all over... that we were going to die. If the enemy was strong enough to defeat Shamal and Zafira, two of the Volkenritter, what chance did we have? Then he appeared and showed to us all that heroes exist, that we can fight against the odds..." - Riot Force 6 medical personnel.

Device: As of the time of the last update of profile, updated just prior to the Order's 2-week Joint Training deployment with Riot Force 6, the Master Chief uses an unnamed rifle-shaped Storage Device. This Device uses 15-round magazines for its cartridges, and is a simple yet robust weapon. In its original form it was a slightly tuned Device based on a bullpup rifle; in the three years since he joined the OFM his Device has been periodically upgraded and tuned. It posesses the barest rudiments of an AI - just the bare software protocols needed to regulate mana processing - granting it fast charging time and a high rate of fire. It has only one form, as said rifle, and has been strengthened for use in parrying and striking as John tends to favor close quaters battle over the bombadment duels favored by many shooting specialists. It is a tough weapon, having parried blows from Glen's Sword Device Phoenix and is capable of good accuraccy. Master Chief has never named his Device, calling it "my rifle"; neither has it bothered to request a name, simply adressing him as "Sir."

Unlike Cross Mirage, the command trigger for his spells can be either verbal or with the squeezing of the trigger. The default spell is Barrett Shoot. Master Chief prefers to squeeze the trigger, allowing him to shoot just a second faster than, say, Teana.

Visually, the Device resembles an MA5C assault rifle, but without the abovebarrel electronic ammo display, navigation system and intergrated sight. Order armorer "Lurch" has compared it to the MA5K carbine variant of the Assault Rifle and the older MA2B carbine; however the Order has not been able to pursue inquiries into the lab and John's background due to a lack of time. The resemblence to both Erusian weapons is uncanny...and perhaps, was a sign of things to come.

The rest of the Armor, skills, etc will be posted later. Comments welcome.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by dkellis

tl;dr: References should be references. Crossovers should be crossovers. Neither are bad, but the two are not the same thing.

Kha doesn't seem to have gotten that yet unfortunately.... his references are so deep that with a slight push they end up in the cross over department...


Anywho.. heading back to the new OC(Tigerclaws);

-Comments on each of the numbers as follows.
1) So basically just one of those things that I have to accept huh... Can't say that I like it much... but I'll let it through.

2) You do realise that there's nothing to suggest that SS is of that order of magnitude... You said 12 cartridges? Tell me exactly when that many cartdiges are ever loaded in sucession? I'd really like to know.
Nothing much to say on the accident issue..

4) Umm, ok sure. But you're building a tank/mech of all things in a magical girl show.. Yes, it might be the best option in terms of brute power and a slew of other things. THIS ISN'T MAGICAL GUNDAM GIRL NANOHA!!! Is it so hard to take Nanoha or one of the other members in the powerful cast list and create a character(s) that uses magic/other flashy abilities with the said reference character as the yardstick as to how powerful they are.

5) SS attacks are still over board. The level of the attack that they're going to use is going to be limitted by the rank that the pilot holds. The cartridges will only provide the power necessary for the attack. there's no indication that just because cartridges are used that they're going to be able to harness that much energy in the first place/ shape the energy into something that can be used as an attack.

Think of it this way, someone gives a civ(no training what so ever) a rifle and get's told to go shoot something (consistently). Even with a couple of magazines of ammo, it's going to be a long time before he get's anywhere near the target ( unless of course they get a lucky shot but that's another matter entirely).
Of course, in the hands of someone who knows what they're doing, it's not going to be as much of a problem.

Believe me, I'm as annoyed at all the crap that they've thrown in to the series as everyone else (limiters, stupid squad design, writers who don't have a clue what it it that they're writing about..) but you work with the limitations that you've been given. with what you're suggesting, even the mightest of bosses are going to get blown away before they're even capable of doing anything because it's going to have a bunch of redshirts pummel it with SS attacks as it appears on the horizon. Even if they somehow manage to get attacked, the armour that they're wearing is going to keep them safe long enough for them to return fire.

Look, the profile itself is fine, I can't be bothered spotting things in it at the moment. You say though that it's supposed to augment C ranks up to A ranks. YET you then give them a weapon that outperforms every known cannon character wh o fights at range in terms of damage, range and projectile speed..

Dogfighting mode is just a spam mode, which again is outperforming the canon characters which are for all intents and purposes the best of the best. Spam fire on the levels that you're proposing has never been seen, and the range of the auto homing deivces is also out there.

Next up if your artillery mode, which is just as ridiculous as the other modes. We;ve seen one character do this, ONE. She's an exception because of the plot.

The other abilities aren't helping your case at all.

We've seen the use of 'magical damage' Why would they suddenly switch over to physical damage?

So what we're left with is some random is a suit that has stupid levels of protection while boasting attacks from Nanoha and Hayate while also having the ability to move at Fate's sonic form speeds in addition to Vita's handy flashbang technique.

Yep, that's so not overpowered.

It's not personal or anything, but as it stands, this has no place what so ever in the Nanoha verse, at least not for another 10-20 years.. (both canon and RL..)

Start nerfing it. HEAVILY!

Done with it for now. Bleh, where's TK when you need him..

Goose: Nice job on the chief. Looks good from what I saw of it during my skim through. I'll read the last sections properly once I'm more awake..