Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

What?
Please don't compare Koji to Yuuno

Not at all.Just that both has tremendous support in their pursuits (or half-assed ones in Yuuno's case ) of their other halves. :

June is a bit...
And...What comment?

The part of about June was referring to me and Chaos.

And the comment would be about Maren's possible future in reply to Chaos's question quite some time ago.

I'm not sure...It involves Koji tripping on a stone, Maren catches him but gets dragged alone and falls on top of him

*runs*

Alone and in a intimate position. I'm sure nothing will happen.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

I'm not sure...It involves Koji tripping on a stone, Maren catches him but gets dragged along and falls on top of him

*runs*

Nice position

And maybe they'll accidentally kiss, and then-

*runs*

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by USB500

Spoiler:

[CENTER]THE GEMINI SISTERS II
CHAPTER 1
*snip*

Well, this is definately interesting SHould be good to see how she handles stuff with her sisters

Originally Posted by Keroko

Takamachi sisters. Notice the plural.

Seems I've created quite the expectations. Now to see if I can create a believable scenario.

Well, there's an easy enough solution if you're so inclined.... Just get both of them drunk.... I might get stoned for this...

Spoiler for idea:

and you could always make Nanoha think Keroko is Fate

.

*runs at lightspeed*

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Huh? So now we are responsible for your juice resupplying? Then shall we go for a steamboat dinner every time you get writer's block?

I can think of worse ways to get over writers block...

He's the bluecheese bomber and I now apparently gave him more ammunition.

*good job*

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Version 2.0 of the History of the Order of Freelance Mages is more or less done. I'll be making some edits, of course, but this is probably the base I'm gonna use to make my characters.

Spoiler for The Beginning:

*snip*

Spoiler for The Ramza Incident:

*snip*

Just one problem with this. The ship must have been really close to begin with in order to be effected by the planet's combined gravitational fields, that it get's dragged towards the planets.

I don't have the time to do the calculations, but I can't see it happening within a year. Cloaking could be an option as to why it was so close to begin with, but then that raises the issue of why it didn't fail when the ship ai went down in the first place, in which case they would have noticed the really big ship that was floating close to their planet.

One other thing. If they couldn't scratch the ship, how exactly did they get on board? Unless their shield magically disappeared as they boarding craft approached

Spoiler for MC052:

*snip*

Spoiler for The Subjugation War:

*snip*

This is all of 2.0 for now. I haven't quite covered the landside of the war.
Suffice to say I think this is a more viable solution to the war. It's a far more "realistic" answer to the battle. The TSAB would inevitably have taken losses, but the Erusians would have suffered more.

First thing, you've started off saying that there were ~500 eurasian ships, but then you only had 200 warships involved in the fight agaisnt the TSAB. Then at the end, the eurasian count is 825 ships? Make up your mind.

Also, you've got the same problems with the TSAB. there was orginally 150 warships (3 fleets), then you said a further 3 fleets warped in bringing us to 300. 297 isn't three quarters of 300.... heck even if you count the troop transports that you mentioned, 297/350 != 3/4.

Further more, I think you're going to need more men for the land-campaign. Those 50 ships are going to have at most say ~800 ground troops each, with maybe 200 on the normal warships. That's what ~100k ground troops to try and conquer 2 whole worlds? I don't see that being anywhere near possible, especially if you keep the opposition as crazy as they were in your original. As as soon as one city's taken, they'd drop a few nukes on the place, effectively wiping out whatever force just took the city. Rinse and repeat and you'll be out of men long before they're out of cities/towns even on one world.

Unless of course you were planning on just having the TSAB navy provide aircover by vaping large areas of land Then by all means, you've probably got enough force there.

Overall much better than before, but still things to work on before it makes sense.

Originally Posted by Kyral

Somehow i start seeing my youth burried under tons of translation requests

I don't think I mentioned it before, but welcome to the thread If you haven't already, check out the very first page of the thread for lots of handy info, especially post 5; which has the list of most of the OC's in the thread.

Don't worry, we'll take things easy on you. Most of it will probably still be done with web-translators, but any extra things you point out would be handy!

@FLAME
Nothing like accidents for romance to occur right...

[Kha]

*a rock etched with "HOWDAREYOUBRINGMAIWAIFUIN THROW!!!" bounces off Liingo's head*

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Liingo

Well, there's an easy enough solution if you're so inclined.... Just get both of them drunk.... I might get stoned for this...

Spoiler for idea:

but you could always make Nanoha think Keroko is Fate

.

*runs at lightspeed*

Yes, a very good idea indeed

*runs*

Originally Posted by Liingo

@FLAME
Nothing like accidents for romance to occur right...

Quoted For Absolute Truth

Originally Posted by Kha

*a rock etched with "HOWDAREYOUBRINGMAIWAIFUIN THROW!!!" bounces off Liingo's head*

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yes, a very good idea indeed

*runs*

Quoted For Absolute Truth

I was running for a reason..

Originally Posted by Kha

*a rock etched with "HOWDAREYOUBRINGMAIWAIFUIN THROW!!!" bounces off Liingo's head*

Hmmm, when did Fate become your WAIFU? + you've got lots of competition on her from the FF thread... Satashi in particular...

*cries haxx at the throw of a rock at lightspeed*


Although you're going to have to do better than that to take me down

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Liingo

I was running for a reason..

Ah, so I don't need to run then?

In that case... Let's get both Nanoha, Keroko AND Fate drunk in the same room then...

Originally Posted by Liingo

Hmmm, when did Fate become your WAIFU? + you've got lots of competition on her from the FF thread... Satashi in particular...

*cries haxx at the throw of a rock at lightspeed*


Although you're going to have to do better than that to take me down

[haiz123321]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

FlameSparkZ isn't a roricon !>_<!


He just likes to make use of them!!

...

I mean! He just likes their company!!!

...

I MEAN! He just PREFERS them over grown women!!!!

...

I MEAN! H-HE... !!!!!

:O Flamesparkz!!! I didn't know you were this kind of person

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

OI OI! That's not it! It's the new list for the Blood Market!

But that doesn't matter! The point IS-!!!


... It's not from top to bottom.

considering who you are... i dont trust you

[Chaos2Frozen]

KAOS MAYHEM MONDAY MASSACRE!!!


~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Like Leona?
Leona: Oh Admiral Chrono, every night I sigh when I remember your manliness.

*runs*

I don't think that's quite it...

For one thing, Chrono isn't very manly unless he's giving the GAR speeches, or binding girls .

... Unless Leona swings that way then Forgot what I've said as I wish you happiness

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

*Wonders what was Chaos doing at that time.*

Taking advantage of a girl, you happy now?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Ouch.... That's exactly the kind of things that rile up the ah bengs here even more. I know because I use to have to deal with them on a daily basis.

I know. I usually just say a bunch of meanless well constructed sentences

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

The army said they don't wanna accept me. You're better off shipping Tormenk off to National Service.

Damn... >.>

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Hmm...It would be even better if you could just give me the link. Right now, I'm just blindly searching here and there. Google images doesn't seem to help either.

LoweGear gave up his soul to me for that link, what can you offer me ?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Itsuki: He hesitated.
Jean: He did.
Sylvia: Lost of words.

Jeno: "I hope you weren't expecting anything brilliant out of that "

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Overly Suggestive Works.

There seems to be alot of Chaos-styles...

-=[Trickster Mode]=-

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

I don't know about yutakas, but it is true that traditionally girls don't wear underwear under their kimonos. Though I'm sure that's changed in recent years, except for girls that are going out of their way for a "special night" with their boyfriends.

Sigh... That's just so nice...


I should find an image of Keroko in Yukata...

*cough*

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Why am I not surprised that you would have thought of this?

What else could I say?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Sometimes I don't experience Monday 'mornings' unless you count 3-5am in the morning as your kind of 'mornings'. I wake up feeling more blur and lethargic than cynical.

I used to have the power to wake up at 5 am regularly.

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

From wherever it is he generates those ideas.

Wanna know the secret to the dark side?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

*kicks lazy mode Chaos into the first page of the thread*

Couldn't you just sent it to me ?

Originally Posted by Keroko

Anyone can pick up a weapon and blast away. I prefer to be more... subtle. It's much more satisfying to see an enemy collapse while thinking he has won. Untill the very last moment, that is.

Battles of the mind are so much more pleasing.

No, I mean that you're tame

Originally Posted by Keroko

Good. Then you can hold them of a bit longer.

*Jeno grin a lustful grin*

Originally Posted by Keroko

I am... utterly and completely confused.

You will understand in due time...

For now, all you have to know is Dark Spica is very real...

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Good thing I didn't post T3H R3ST
*runs*

No matter, it has already played out in my head... Just answer this...

Is it like Matoko's scene from Kanan's game where it's out in the open? Or Saber's scene from the F/SN game where they found a place?

Foreplay would be light since Koji would have little resistance to go through... Interuptions would be no-no... But the aftermath would definitely be Fel's scene

I believe you know what I mean. Don't you, comrade... ?

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Actually...since it was September by the end of the JS Incident, and these fesivals only happen in the end of Summer, this would be in MC076

We also don't know what's the time gap between the graduation in April and the Epilogue where everyone has gone their own way

Oh come on, now you're just teasing me !

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

It can't be helped
But hey, at least Koji isn't Sakai Yuuji
*runs*

What we need... Is a super male character... Who is a fusion of Yuji and Saito... With all the good points, and none of the bad...

Originally Posted by Kyral

Somehow i start seeing my youth burried under tons of translation requests

Work your way up the food chain, youngling...

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I'm assuming he's your CP to have such a.. profound effect on you.

Actually no ;heh: He is a very good friend of mine that came to this school with me... I meant him when we're in sec 3

Originally Posted by Tormenk

And now I'm wondering whether every random guy I come across in school is you or not.

Enginnering

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I'll agree on this point.

Erio is different, NOBODY wants him to settle down yet

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Yes principles.

Jeno: "What ?"

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Mada mada. You ain't learnt anything from me yet.

I wasn't serious

Originally Posted by Tormenk

It's his creations on the main stage after all. Although between the two of us, it'll be June before it comes to fruition.

Though I have to ask, did my earlier comment on Maren spark off that idea?

Which idea? Koji and Maren doing it out in the open?

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Not from this avatar.

You don't have what I want.

*Kick into a hole*

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Chaos should have more than sufficient experience in riling up people. Or would that be vice versa?

Ah well... Lets just say I had fun... While I last... >.>

Originally Posted by Tormenk

@Chaos: What was the name of the manga you again?

Of the manga I what again ?

Originally Posted by haiz123321

considering who you are... i dont trust you

Like I've said... It's not from top to bottom.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Hmm. Makes me think of a scenario where the Cradle does that. Interesting no?

Working scenario, actually.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Good good. Takamachi sisters come in a package now.

In BJs no less.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Some liken it to be a battle. Others take it as a game. And the rare few take pleasure in just observing.

Well, to quote Pellaeon: "It isn't the killing, you know. It's the beauty of battles that I love—the choreography and the challenge of executing everything just right—and the challenge of matching your wits against a capable opponent. I guess I carry a little more Thrawn with me than I'd like to believe."

Probably the reason why I'm loving Legend of Galactic Heroes at the moment.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Thats where Dark Spica came from.

... and what does that have to do with KeroNano?

Originally Posted by Liingo

Well, there's an easy enough solution if you're so inclined.... Just get both of them drunk.... I might get stoned for this...

Spoiler for idea:

and you could always make Nanoha think Keroko is Fate

.

*runs at lightspeed*

I'm neutral, so no stones from me.

Though as a solution, the getting drunk seems to be the best option. Nanoha seeing Keroko as Fate does not compute concidering Nanoha has known Keroko since they were seven. And what motivation would Keroko have then.

No, getting horendously drunk and seeing 'sisterly love' bloom seems a tad less complex.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Taking advantage of a girl, you happy now?

When aren't you doing that?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

LoweGear gave up his soul to me for that link, what can you offer me ?

*points up to the sky, where Keroko-tan's satelite is still hovering.* Your life?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

I should find an image of Keroko in Yukata...

*cough*

*rolls eyes* I'll see what I can do...

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

No, I mean that you're tame

*smiles* Sure I am.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

*Jeno grin a lustful grin*

Powerfull emotion, that lust.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

You will understand in due time...

For now, all you have to know is Dark Spica is very real...

Not. Helping.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Liingo

@FLAME
Nothing like accidents for romance to occur right...

Right...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Quoted For Absolute Truth

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Ah, so I don't need to run then?

In that case... Let's get both Nanoha, Keroko AND Fate drunk in the same room then...

That's....dangerous

Originally Posted by haiz123321

:O Flamesparkz!!! I didn't know you were this kind of person

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

No matter, it has already played out in my head... Just answer this...

Is it like Matoko's scene from Kanan's game where it's out in the open? Or Saber's scene from the F/SN game where they found a place?

Foreplay would be light since Koji would have little resistance to go through... Interuptions would be no-no... But the aftermath would definitely be Fel's scene

I believe you know what I mean. Don't you, comrade... ?

You mean Kanon, right?
Saber's scene...not sure about that

Though...the words 'on top' come to mind
And Fel's aftermath scene would rock
*runs*

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Oh come on, now you're just teasing me !

I'll see what I can do

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

What we need... Is a super male character... Who is a fusion of Yuji and Saito... With all the good points, and none of the bad...

Such a champion is yet to be born


Ok, some teasing on the next part (I think )

Spoiler for teaser:

(k-kawaii...) Koji said to himself.
The girl's left eye twitched, she walked to him, looked at him in the eyes and kicked him in the shin.
"Ouch!" He winced as he held his shin.
"Don't call me cute!" She sneered.

Mind reader tsundere
*runs*

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

HOLY SHI-

* @ 2nd Pic*

See-thru...

*runs*

Originally Posted by USB500

Ginga in see-through? HOLY SHI-

Originally Posted by Kagerou

That is...
...is...

WHY IS THERE BLOOD COMING OUTTA MY NOSE?!

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

*nosebleeds after looking at 2nd pic*
Itsuki (pokes creator-san): How was it?
Creator-san: Saikou da!! *give two thumbs up and faints*

Originally Posted by Kyral

HOLY SHI*!!!!

*dies a bloody, but sweet death*

Sorry, but one of you requested more... If that 'wolf' is reading this, anymore and you'll have to get the uncut version from the website yourself

Spoiler for Not for the weak hearted:

Spoiler for size:

Spoiler for size:

Spoiler for size:

[Kyral]

Originally Posted by Liingo

I don't think I mentioned it before, but welcome to the thread If you haven't already, check out the very first page of the thread for lots of handy info, especially post 5; which has the list of most of the OC's in the thread.

Don't worry, we'll take things easy on you. Most of it will probably still be done with web-translators, but any extra things you point out would be handy!

Hm... i'm sure you welcomed me already... but thanks anyway!

Oh well... feel free to ask if i can help!

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Work your way up the food chain, youngling...

Somehow i'm scared now

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Sorry, but one of you requested more... If that 'wolf' is reading this, anymore and you'll have to get the uncut version from the website yourself

Spoiler for Not for the weak hearted:

Spoiler for size:

Spoiler for size:

Spoiler for size:

Wow thanks! You killed me... again!
*blood spray*

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by Kyral

Wow thanks! You killed me... again!
*blood spray*

Always a pleasure

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Keroko

I'm neutral, so no stones from me.

Though as a solution, the getting drunk seems to be the best option. Nanoha seeing Keroko as Fate does not compute concidering Nanoha has known Keroko since they were seven. And what motivation would Keroko have then.

No, getting horendously drunk and seeing 'sisterly love' bloom seems a tad less complex.

No problems It was only a suggestion anyways...

Although if they get drunk enough, my idea could theroretically happen...
Never mind that last statement..

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Ok, some teasing on the next part (I think )

Spoiler for teaser:

(k-kawaii...) Koji said to himself.
The girl's left eye twitched, she walked to him, looked at him in the eyes and kicked him in the shin.
"Ouch!" He winced as he held his shin.
"Don't call me cute!" She sneered.

Mind reader tsundere
*runs*

So this is the red-eyed person from before?

That's going to be a tough ask for Koji to stop thinking....

@KYRAL
Just remember to have fun that's all that matters!

[Nightengale]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Jeno: "I'm not possessive !! I just... I just..."

???: Loss of words.

Jeno: Uguu.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

LAAAAAAAAZZZZZZZZZZZZZYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY ......... >.>

Your loss. >.>

Spoiler:

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

@Nightengale


It just occured to me, that you didn't seem to push for Null

I assumed she has a Full-to-Over sized mode ?

Compared to some heavy-weights in this thread, Null would be a total-underdog.

OVER-sized mode is something I don't intend to introduce yet, since it's not canonically proven that it can grow beyond just size... but assuming there is, then Null could be a competitor...

If she becomes oversize on her own, while hiding her Unison features... (( tail, pointy ears, etc ))

Spoiler for with Agito:

However, if Null pulls a Unison-take-over, and say... takes control over Saga like how Reinforce took control over Hayate... >_>

Spoiler for OVERSIZE:

*runs*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

...

I smell SagaxNull ...

You don't know how true that statement...

Since the pinnacle of OVERSIZE can only be achieved through being one with Saga...

Originally Posted by Kagerou

That is...
...is...

WHY IS THERE BLOOD COMING OUTTA MY NOSE?!

Originally Posted by USB500

Alright, then, to complete the Gemini Sisters' Seto no Hanayome vibe, I present to you...

Spoiler for oneesama?:

Name: Galatea (real name unknown)
Age: appears to be 19; actual creation date unknown
Birthday: unknown
Origin: 42nd Administered World -- Narulia
Affiliation: Lawful Good
Position/rank in TSAB: none
Height: 168cm
Weight: 42kg
Eye colour: ruby
Hair colour: jet black
Magic system: Mid-Childa
Magic symbol: circle
Device name: Sao
Device type: Lost Logia - Unison Device
Device appearance:

• (normal form) humanoid (height: 16cm; weight: 45kg; eye colour: purple)
• (Combat Mode) Oxtongue Rifle
• (Full Mode) Unison Armour

Other devices: Roger (Automata, panda plush doll)
Appearance: see picture (left: Sao; right: Galatea)
Personalities: despite her cold demeanours, Galatea is in reality a warm-hearted girl who cares very much of her sisters. The reason she chooses not to display her emotion is to show people that unnecessary emotional breakdown can -- and will -- be very dangerous to one’s survival, although she admits “there is nothing wrong for a girl to cry”. She can tolerate alcohol and loves rice wine, even having the special talent to identify each product she takes.
Combat style: Galatea is specialized in long-range, hit-and-run combat style. She employs Sao’s full capability in its Combat Mode and uses her exceptionally accurate sniping technique to take out enemies from far away.
Relationship: Aura (sister); Freya (sister); Poseidon (partner); Takeru (rival); Frieda (rival); Nagasumi Yutaro (rival).
Possible voice actors:

• (Galatea) Kitamura Eri (Shiranui Akeno, Seto no Hanayome)
• (Sao) Kuwashima Houko (Clare, Claymore)
• (Roger) Ueda Yuji (Mugi-maru, Nurse Witch Komugi-chan)

Notes:

• Galatea is afraid of cockroaches.
• Galatea has weak spot against MANLY man. This fact has been exploited a lot by Sao and Roger “to cheer up their somewhat cold master.”
• Galatea spends her pastime making pottery and reading classical poetry.
• Sao is among a few Devices to have Unison Armour mode. The other Devices are Baron’s Bamidman, Maxim’s Trombe Dei and the Linebackers. It is believed that Armstrong’s device, Forneus, also possesses its own Unison Armour mode but it cannot be confirmed as no evidence of its usage exists.
• Galatea’s name comes from the sea-nymph of the same name in Greek story ‘Acis and Galatea’.

No background detail is available ATM, but I bet everyone wants more of Freya's oneesama, right?

*dodges Sao's Oxtongue Rifle B-Mode*

ARMSTRONG ALERT!? *runs*

What rank though?

Originally Posted by USB500

I think I'm beginning to like doing Galatea-oneesama's story.

Spoiler:

THE GEMINI SISTERS II
CHAPTER 1

// Belkan Knights HQ //

Takeru dodged Signum’s attack and counter-fired with Schwarz Todd’s Rapid Fire. The Wolkenritter hastily jumped out of firing range and tossed a Hiryu Issen. The young gunslinger rolled across the floor and continued firing at Signum’s position, reloading the dual handguns in quick succession.

Outside the arena, the Gemini Sisters and Yutaro were watching the duel in amazement. Frieda was also present, monitoring Takeru’s progress with the help of the Belkan Knights’ psychiatrist and computer expert (both of whom, Kyoko Asakura and Matilda McLeod, happened to be her friends). The rest of the Wolkenritters were also there, cheering and rooting for Signum.

“Well, I didn’t know Takeru is a good combatant,” Yutaro commented.

“Of course he is,” Aura said and blushed. “Because he had captured my heart, I shall never run away from her no matter where I hide. He is my hunter…”

Freya could only sigh. She had nothing more to say regarding her twin sister’s obsession towards big gun, and she did not want to start an argument with her.

“Takeru’s performance has increased since he underwent the special training,” Kyoko spoke. “But he seems to be having a personality conflict of sorts.”

“Come on, Kyoko!” Matilda uttered. “You can’t be that serious. Takeru I know is always dead serious. Right, Frieda?”

The spectacled woman simply giggled. “We’ll see.”

“AH!”

Everybody turned back to the arena. Signum repelled Takeru’s melee attack and delivered a hard kick onto the boy’s torso in a counterattack manoeuvre. The boy was sent flying across the arena before he crashed on the floor.

“Takeru!” Aura gasped.

Signum approached Takeru, who was recovering from the attack. “What’s the matter, Takeru? You seem to be losing concentration,” she said and offered the boy her hand.

“I don’t know,” Takeru replied and was pulled up as he took the hand. “I thought I saw something flashing in my eyes, but I can’t understand.”

“That is only your illusion. Never lose your concentrate in fighting your opponent, or you will lose your life,” Signum replied and resumed her stance. “So, shall we resume?”

Takeru grinned and opened his Gun Kata pose. “Sure. Why not?”

The mock duel continued. Everyone continued their observation on the clash, commenting on each combatant’s ability and cooing at their exchanges of blows. Occasionally Zafira and Shamal shouted for Signum and flagged banners with her names, which was later followed by some knights who were a big fan of the Pink Cloud Knight.

“Does that mean Takeru is in love with that girl?”

“Impossible! I thought Takeru’s only into older woman!”

“But Erio said in his report that the girl… what’s her name? Aura? Ah, whatever! She gave him a kiss and told him not to forget it!”

(Aura overheard the conversation and hid her face in embarrassment. “They’re saying it out loud… hatsukashi…”)

“No freaking way! This is blasphemy!”

Takeru stopped. His concentration on the mock duel thwarted, he simply glared at the knights. His face was burning with embarrassment. The knights were embarrassing him in front of Riot Force 6. They were embarrassing him right in front of Yutaro and the Gemini Sisters.

Right in front of Aura.

“So does that mean…” The knights cheered and threw their fists high above their head. “OUR GUNSLINGER BOY HAS GROWN UP!! TAKERU! PIERCE THROUGH THE HEAVENS WITH YOUR BIG GUN! NOTHING IN THIS WORLD IS IMPOSSIBLE!”

“Hey, what do you think you’re doing?” Signum asked, and was promptly ignored as the knights continued cheering for their gunslinger boy.

“Meister?” Silberkugel asked.

Takeru closed his eyes. “…do it.”

“Ja. Panzer Faust Form.”

Panzer Faust Silberkugel killed “fan boy-mode” knights with Blitzkrieg: Kugelregen.

Yutaro and the Gemini Sisters looked at the charred remains of the knights. “Can we say, owned?” Yutaro said.

-x-x-x-x-x-

The woman remained silent. Having seated outside the mansion for the entire night, her only activity was to drink rice wine and recite classical Japanese poems. Her beauty was unspoken: silky hair flowing down her shoulders; ruby eyes that seemed to glitter with the stars; vibrant lips that seem to carve out a natural smile; her all-black dresses that simply added spice in her splendour.

A pink-haired maid came out of the mansion. “It’s getting late, Master. You should be going to sleep by now,” she reminded as she approached the woman. “What’s the matter?”

The black-haired woman shook her head. “It’s nothing,” she replied and gazed into the night sky. “But the stars… they brought in memories I thought I had forgotten,” she spoke and continued drinking rice wine.

“Now, now, Master,” the maid said and poured in another cup of rice wine into the ceramic cup the woman was holding. “It’s because you’re missing them, it is not? Besides it has been a long since they left this mansion, isn’t it?”

She chuckled. “I think I should pay my precious twin sisters a visit. What do you think, Sao?”

“I will follow whatever words you say, Master,” the maid replied.

“Well, then,” she said and finished the last of the rice wine. “What should we do first?”

Ah~ as expected of USB... Though it's nice to see a more natural piece from you, after a good overblow of crack.

Originally Posted by Keroko

He's Nighty, nuff said.

Originally Posted by Kagerou

Version 2.0 of the History of the Order of Freelance Mages is more or less done. I'll be making some edits, of course, but this is probably the base I'm gonna use to make my characters.

Spoiler for The Beginning:

In the early days of the TSAB's expansion and influence over their little slice of galaxy, many of their ships were lost to the void. Sometimes AI would malfunction; sometimes a small error in the calculations would bounce a ship into a star or a supernova; and sometimes, the ship's crew would simply revolt and have to be brought down by other nearby TSAB ships.

In this endless void known as space, one ship, the cruiser Ramza, and its sister ship, the Alma, were travelling together through this endless void. They had jumped just ouside of a star system known at the time as Non-Administered System 457, and was under observation. Two planets within the system seemed to be in a constant state of war. Using non-magical, advanced technology (though not quite on the level of the TSAB), they fought each other tooth and nail. Laser cannons the size of tractor-trailers fired at each other through the void; space fighters weaved between the blasts and fired missiles and railgun slugs at the other in a constant dance of death; even the planets themselves seemed to be at odds with each other. The Ramza's crew saw that the orbits of the planets were oddly-shaped: In fact, the orbits intercepted each other, and it was a wonder the two planets hadn't collided. The planets themselves, due to the odd pull of both the system's local star and their own planetary mass, plus years of war, had taken a toll on the shape and face of the celestial bodies. Not only were they raked with scars from weapons, they seemed to be pulled and pushed into an odd shape that was less of a sphere or an oval and more of a really massive asteroid.

In effect, the planets were tearing each other apart. Apparently, this applied to the citizens as well. Intercepted radio transmissions revealed that the citizens were in a constant state of hatred at the other planet. The peoples' homeworld, Erusia, and the other planet, Sotoa, hated each other so much that their hate was palatable, even from this far in space. The crews of the TSAB ships were slightly disgusted at this, but made a note of the planets' location in their logs. Assuming that both planets still existed in a few decades, maybe they would be ready for administration, and peace would rule this system.

And then the Ramza Incident happened.

Spoiler for The Ramza Incident:

It wasn't really anything major, at least not to the ships involved. In the early days of the TSAB, ships malfunctioned all the time for one reason or another. Sometimes the magitech reactors powering the ships would malfunction and go berserk, sometimes shutting down permenantly... or sometimes exploding in a violent flash of light and heat. Sometimes the AI would stop functioning, perhaps due to a virus or simply because at the time advanced AI was still in its early stages. Sometimes the crew would revolt, or something decidedly human would occur.

In these cases, the TSAB had certain regulations set up. Since most ships were designed for defense and not salvage, few except the biggest of ships had tractor beams loaded. In the event of a reactor malfunction, the crew would evacuate the ship and get as far away from it as possible before it exploded - or if it didn't. In the event of something else, the crew would attempt to send out a distress signal. In the event of a distress signal being unusable, they would again evacuate to the nearest TSAB ship. It was why scouts traveled in groups of two, and why those ships were always undermanned.

It's not for certain what happened to the Ramza back then; perhaps it was a reactor malfunction, or maybe the AI tried to kill everyone, or maybe something else happened. No one knows for sure. All that's known is that something happened, and when it happened, the captain deemed it wise to drop everything and run for the Alma. Certain precautions that should have been taken weren't due to neglect. For example, the AI's database should have been wiped out, but in whatever panic that occured this was not done. Any and all Devices were also supposed to have been taken off of the ship, but again, this was not done. Instead, all that occured was a mass evacuation to the accompanying ship as mentioned in the log... then nothing. Shortly after this, the Alma also disappeared into the void of space. They haven't been seen since.

Whatever happened, though, and the crew's reaction to it, would cause a shift in the way war worked for the people of Un-Administered System 457. The Ramza, despite being left derelict and drifting in space, nonetheless succumbed to the star's faint, but existant, gravitational pull. The ship slowly made its way to the warring planets. In a year's time, it literally drifted into the middle of a large-scale firefight between both sides.

This was the Ramza Incident. When two warring sides stopped fighting when something alien, something inhuman to them, drifted into their battle. Their lasers and missiles never even hurt the vessel, its armor or shields too thick and hard for them to penetrate. Both sides conveted the strange craft as they sent their salvage ships after it, using their tractor beams to hold it in place as scientists from both sides were forced into the ship, to uncover its secrets. With their limited knowledge, they couldn't have, shouldn't have learned anything from the Ramza.

But then, the planet was supposed to have been found. It was supposed to have been recorded. But it never was.

And over one-hundred years later, the fruits of constant research and attention would reveal to the people of Un-Administered System 457 the secrets of this vessel.

Spoiler for MC052:

It had been a century since the Ramza Incident. The place where System 457 lay was at the edge of the Yellow Zone now, far away from the eyes of the TSAB.

It had taken them a hundred years of time and research and effort, but finally, the people of System 457 were unified. They had taken the time and the effort, over five generations, to take apart and put back together the Ramza, learning everything they could about it. They learned the Mid-Childan language, learned how to use Devices (well, some of them did. Roughly 17% of the collective population of the system was theorized to have the ability to use the Devices), and even learned how to make crude versions of the Ramza itself. Somewhere along the way, they ripped out the Magitech reactor and placed within the ship a block of standard fusion reactors, then, after they gleaned everything they could from the AI, they erased it the best they could and installed their own within the ship. Putting their best crew on it, they made the ship, the "Erusian Flag Ship Berkut", theirs. It wasn't perfect by any means, but to them, it was the best they had.

Meanwhile, the TSAB had been sending out ships to find their lost ones in an effort to make sure no damage had been done. Just in case, they were sending fleets of ships, five cruisers apiece, to the far reaches of the galaxy. Many ships were recovered in this method - or pieces of ships. One fleet, the 5th Fleet, stumbled upon System 457 in their travels, having learned of the missing Ramza.

What greeted them was a much different sight than what had greeted them before. Instead of a constant war raging between two worlds, instead there was peace. Both worlds united under one banner, and despite their large warfleets, they seemed to be unassuming in appearance. The fleet approached, having detected the Ramza within the orbit of one of the worlds. As soon as they were in sensor range, they were contacted by the Captain of the former Ramza.

This was First Contact for these people, known as Erusians. They were cautious but willing to listen.

It was for this reason that maybe there was a chance for what the future held for the Erusian people to change. During the conversation between the two captains (the Erusians had even taken Mid-Childan as their second or third language over the century), they agreed that a peace conference from the TSAB would be sent, and the fate of the Ramza and the Erusians would be discussed. The 5th Fleet left without worry.

The fleet would return a year later, this time with a sixth ship. This ship, a ship of peace, launched a shuttle to the Erusian homeworld. Together, they met with a delegation from the Erusians, and together, the two groups began to talk about peace.

But there was a problem. The translation of Erusian to Mid-Childan was not perfect. Many words were misused or mistaken. One of these words would spark a conflict that would mean the end of the Erusians as a free people. That word, was "Administration." This word was mistaken, to the Erusians. To them, it meant something in their language.

Delat' Nevol'nikov. Roughly Translated: "Enslavement."

The TSAB delegation never made it off the planet. After a heated argument, the leaders of Erusia made a grave mistake; they had the delegation killed. The TSAB peace officers had not brought their Devices with them. Had they done so, they may have made it back alive.

Shortly after the delegation was killed, the 5th Fleet noticed that at one point or another, they had become surrounded by Erusian warships. The leader of the fleet quickly sent out the order to raise shields, but by the time the message was relayed, the former Ramza and all the battleships of the Erusian fleet opened fire.

A century had been kind to both sides. For the Erusians, it saw a steady increase in their knowledge and their design of war. Against the TSAB, however, it was an outdated concept, the Ramza was. Nominally, one ship like the Ramza taking on its descendant would be a heated, but the victor would be easy to determine. However, even a TSAB ship cannot withstand the sheer force that twenty battleship-sized weapons have on her hulls. One of the 5th Fleet's warships were quickly lost to the planetary weapons.

This sparked a quick battle between both sides. Even with their older technology, the Erusians put up a sizeable threat due to one thing alone: Sheer numbers. The Erusians had been bred for war, it seemed. For every destroyer that would be swatted aside, a cruiser would take its place. The Erusians knew that, individually, there was no way they could win. However, if they directed their fire consistently on one ship, it would go down. They may not have had Magitech for their ships (that was limited to the Devices found onboard the Ramza itself; as of that time, they still only had a limited understanding of the Devices themselves, only the results), but they had weapons they had been refining for centuries. The Erusians themselves lost 12 ships in that conflict. The TSAB lost four out of six by the time they decided to get help.

Spoiler for The Subjugation War:

The TSAB quickly came to a conclusion on how to deal with something like this. They were going to subjugate and take over Erusia in retaliation for what they had done. They amassed an equal number of warships compared to what Erusia had.

Erusia had approximately five-hundred ships of various ages and sizes, ranging from ships that were active when the Ramza drifted into orbit to knockoff versions of the Ramza itself. Each ship bristled with weaponry; it seemed that to the Erusians, location was no object. They were extremely heavily armed, compared to the TSAB's more modest but more advanced arms.

The TSAB wasnted this battle over and quickly. They amassed three fleets of warships, approximately fifty ships apiece. Then they assembled a fourth fleet, one primarily filled with troop transports, to land on the Erusian world and take it over from the ground.

This took time. By the time the gathering of the fleet was over, the year was MC056. Among the people involved were Admiral Graham and a young Lindy Harlown, along with a few select Enforcer Units and the last users of Belkan magic. The numbers were heavily lopsided - 150 warships of cruiser and destroyer class versus 200 Erusian warships.

The combined TSAB warped in on the dawn of June MC056.

War began with a flash. Both sides instantly raised shields and begun to fight each other. The Erusians were less advanced than the TSAB, but from their inception into the Navy the average Erusian was taught centuries of fighting strategies and tactics. This, along with holding their strategy of destroy-one-ship-at-a-time, was actually a threat to the TSAB. A few barrages of weaponry would rupture and destroy shields, and another few would cause the hull to leak and crack under pressure.

But this time it was the TSAB that had advantage of numbers. Partway through the fight, three more fleets for the TSAB had warped in compared to the one for the Erusians. It was at this point, when reinforcements arrived, that the TSAB sent the Erusians a message.

"You can't win. But there are alternatives to fighting. Surrender now, and we can save countless lives."

Less than 30 seconds later, the Fleet Commander for the Erusians responded.

"An Erusian would die rather than surrender. We will fight until the last possible ship is destroyed!"

And this they did.

It took hours. Both sides fought each other down, destroying ships everywhere. The void of space was scattered with mixed TSAB and Erusian ship parts. More reinforcements for both sides came, and it wasn't long before the Erusians were outnumbered 3 to 1... then 5 to 1... then 10 to 1.

Eventually, it all came down to one ship: the Berkut. As two TSAB Cruisers flanked it, they were offered one last chance of surrender.

"No harm will come to the crew." They promised/lied. "If you surrender now, we will not invade your homeworld."

And then, agonizing silence. It seemed like the Erusians were going to agree; the Berkut powered down her battered shields, lowered her dead/empty weapons, released a few escape pods toward the planet below, and brought the engines to a full stop. Soon, a transmission opened to the two flagships flanking it. The Fleet Commander smiled to them bitterly.

"Didn't I tell you? We would rather die!"

Within the bowels of the Ramza/Berkut, the eight blocks of Fusion reactors overheated. Eight blocks of fusion reactors were simultaneously forced to detonate. The Ramza/Berkut glowed bright white, and before they could react, the Berkut exploded.

Despite all their technology, a point-blank Fusion explosion is still extremely powerful. Shields crumpled, hull melted, and the last known Erusian ship detonated in a blaze of fury, taking with it two TSAB flagships.

The numbers were counted. Counting the reinforcemnts, the Erusians had whittled the TSAB to 3/4s their number. They were down to a total of 297 ships. Of course, the Erusian ships numbered at 100% destruction... all 825 of them.

This is all of 2.0 for now. I haven't quite covered the landside of the war.
Suffice to say I think this is a more viable solution to the war. It's a far more "realistic" answer to the battle. The TSAB would inevitably have taken losses, but the Erusians would have suffered more.

I like... but for some reason, I'm finding it hard to comment on... like there's SOMETHING I want to say, but can't find it.

It's a good read though.

Originally Posted by Kha

*a rock etched with "HOWDAREYOUBRINGMAIWAIFUIN THROW!!!" bounces off Liingo's head*

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

For one thing, Chrono isn't very manly unless he's giving the GAR speeches, or binding girls .

Well, 10 years ago.

Too bad other than Vice and Zest, pretty much every other male in Nanohaverse got the sthick treatment. We saw what was for most parts, what we were expected to see and know, but beyond that,

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

What we need... Is a super male character... Who is a fusion of Yuji and Saito... With all the good points, and none of the bad...

No Akio? *runs*

[Kha]

*another rock wrapped in a note bounces off Liingo*

~~~~~~

"If I really wanted to bring you down, I'd use something bigger. Besides, I was merely following your own suggestion.

Who do you trust Fate to, the rabid rabbits of the FF lunar surface, or my well-worn and tender-loving hands who have labored hard for this unison?

Fate is everyone's, not just mine. ...

...feels weird to be lurking. "

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

You mean Kanon, right?
Saber's scene...not sure about that

Hmmm, yeah... To both.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Though...the words 'on top' come to mind
And Fel's aftermath scene would rock
*runs*

Fel aftermath scene is a must

As for on top... If Maren took advantage when she's on top, that would give Koji the green lights to go all the way... ESPECIALLY with no undergarments.

Well played

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Such a champion is yet to be born

Sigh...


Wait, there might be one though...

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Ok, some teasing on the next part (I think )

Spoiler for teaser:

(k-kawaii...) Koji said to himself.
The girl's left eye twitched, she walked to him, looked at him in the eyes and kicked him in the shin.
"Ouch!" He winced as he held his shin.
"Don't call me cute!" She sneered.

Mind reader tsundere
*runs*

Come to think of it, even if the test is different person to person, Erio would still meet her right?

What if he passed... Something else.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

???: Loss of words.

Jeno: Uguu.

Jeno: "URUSAI!"

Jeno: "Erm... I'm just... 'Selectively Courteous'?"

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Your loss. >.>

Spoiler:

*GIKU* !

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Compared to some heavy-weights in this thread, Null would be a total-underdog.

OVER-sized mode is something I don't intend to introduce yet, since it's not canonically proven that it can grow beyond just size... but assuming there is, then Null could be a competitor...

If she becomes oversize on her own, while hiding her Unison features... (( tail, pointy ears, etc ))

Spoiler for with Agito:

However, if Null pulls a Unison-take-over, and say... takes control over Saga like how Reinforce took control over Hayate... >_>

Spoiler for OVERSIZE:

*runs*

"I've got a black magic woman, trying to make a devil out of me~..."

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Well, 10 years ago.

Too bad other than Vice and Zest, pretty much every other male in Nanohaverse got the sthick treatment. We saw what was for most parts, what we were expected to see and know, but beyond that,

I'm just going to assume he's still a sly one

Somethings never change, for everything else, there's ambiguousity... A word I made up

Originally Posted by Nightengale

No Akio? *runs*

Dare ?

Originally Posted by Kha

Who do you trust Fate to, the rabid rabbits of the FF lunar surface, or my well-worn and tender-loving hands who have labored hard for this unison?

Nah, Fate has been far too over-used... She's no longer any fresh...


P.S - Without realizing it, we're about to cross into 15K territory

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Nah, Fate has been far too over-used... She's no longer any fresh...

Quite true... Comes with being the most popular character and mai waifu.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

P.S - Without realizing it, we're about to cross into 15K territory

Of course! Who the hell do you think we are?!

And with this post, I claim the 14,999th post by the grace of Seiou!

~~~~~~

Too easy really. We should be more concerned with dealing with the Naruto forums IMO.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Liingo

So this is the red-eyed person from before?

That's going to be a tough task for Koji to stop thinking....

Yeah

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Hmmm, yeah... To both.

I thought so.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Fel aftermath scene is a must

As for on top... If Maren took advantage when she's on top, that would give Koji the green lights to go all the way... ESPECIALLY with no undergarments.

Well played

We'll see

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Sigh...


Wait, there might be one though...

Who

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Come to think of it, even if the test is different person to person, Erio would still meet her right?

What if he passed... Something else.

If things go the same way as they did for Koji
Knowing Erio, he just might see her too

Here's a hint to what's going to happen and also how that area works.

Spoiler for Hint:

It'll be similar to when Fate got absorved by the Book of Darkness in A's

[EDIT:]
Take this! My most powerful attack!

Spoiler for HISATSU!!!:

空我! 風神一閃!!!

*breaks through the 15k Barrier*