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Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 17:20

Thanks for the feedback ZeroXSEED, I'm already writing what you planned out so please read it on ff.net once it's out, another thing though; do you have any idea what I can do in regards to Rin? I'm stumped cause she's the only heroine that I have trouble writing romance about.
side note- I put way too much comedy in the first and second chapter now that I reread them, kinda doesn't match with the summary

blitz1/2 · 2011-09-09, 18:01

@Zero: I sent you a message regarding my opinion on char.

@eratas: Rin is not really that much harder to write, just have a mirror reflection character of Houki but add a bit more possessiveness, more tsun and have her have an issue about her chest.
If you want me to read it over, send me the link and I'll go over it like I did with Zero's story.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 18:13

More Tsun than Houki! that's easier said than done.
The reason I have a hard time is cause I'm trying to make every haremette at least slightly unique compared to everyone else and all i've been able to get from Rin is Yandere loli which I'm trying to avoid in the story to make her a more relatable character.
I'll send you my draft on Rin once I finish typing it, I'm still finishing chapter 2 actually, Thank you for the advice Blitz.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-09, 19:00

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Originally Posted by blitz1/2

@Zero: I sent you a message regarding my opinion on char.

@eratas: Rin is not really that much harder to write, just have a mirror reflection character of Houki but add a bit more possessiveness, more tsun and have her have an issue about her chest.
If you want me to read it over, send me the link and I'll go over it like I did with Zero's story.

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

More Tsun than Houki! that's easier said than done.
The reason I have a hard time is cause I'm trying to make every haremette at least slightly unique compared to everyone else and all i've been able to get from Rin is Yandere loli which I'm trying to avoid in the story to make her a more relatable character.
I'll send you my draft on Rin once I finish typing it, I'm still finishing chapter 2 actually, Thank you for the advice Blitz.

I tone down everyone's penchant for violence in Sacred Twins (read chapter 4's Houki), Ling and Laura indeed will be included.

Truth to be told, canon Ling is not a good girlfriend material, not only Tsundere BUT also a Yandere, and of all harem, she's the one that is hardest to control.

And they said Yuuno Gasai is scary....wait until she say "Urusai!" 3x to Yukiteru.....

blitz1/2 · 2011-09-09, 19:23

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

I tone down everyone's penchant for violence in Sacred Twins (read chapter 4's Houki), Ling and Laura indeed will be included.

Truth to be told, canon Ling is not a good girlfriend material, not only Tsundere BUT also a Yandere, and of all harem, she's the one that is hardest to control.

And they said Yuuno Gasai is scary....wait until she say "Urusai!" 3x to Yukiteru.....

The only time I can imagine Yuuno saying "urusai" x 3 is when she is on top of her target, stabbing it repeatedly for the victim to shut up while dying.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 19:27

Just got an Idea regarding Rin.
The reason she's so clingy to Ichika (other than being in love with him) is because he reminds her of how her life was before she was her parents divorced and she became a representative candidate.
e.g. When she was just a regular middle school student with a friend who came over for sleepovers, parents who were happy together and when she didn't have to worry about the IS.

What do you guys think?

blitz1/2 · 2011-09-09, 19:33

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eratas123

Just got an Idea regarding Rin.
The reason she's so clingy to Ichika (other than being in love with him) is because he reminds her of how her life was before she was her parents divorced and she became a representative candidate.
e.g. When she was just a regular middle school student with a friend who came over for sleepovers, parents who were happy together and when she didn't have to worry about the IS.

What do you guys think?

Interesting, I haven't thought of that. I also thought that Ichika was the only person she "left" of the once happy life she once had in the past. I assume she doesn't have a good relationship with either of her parents. I guess that is why she's so possessive over Ichika is that if he leaves too, she would be isolated/completely lonely.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 19:43

I guess I'll push through with it then, I haven't thought of anything else and it's a good way to "justify" her yandere tendenies.
The second chapter is halfway done and I'm about to fill it with loads of Cecilia ship tease and some foreshadowing

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-09, 19:54

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eratas123

Just got an Idea regarding Rin.
The reason she's so clingy to Ichika (other than being in love with him) is because he reminds her of how her life was before she was her parents divorced and she became a representative candidate.
e.g. When she was just a regular middle school student with a friend who came over for sleepovers, parents who were happy together and when she didn't have to worry about the IS.

What do you guys think?

Ichika is her anchor to the happy times in the past, part of her character development is that she began to realize it and became less and less possessive, so, Ling letting go Ichika is a metaphor for her leaving her past and embracing the happy future waiting for her....

.....now that's one hell of change in this thread's mood.

blitz1/2 · 2011-09-09, 20:39

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Originally Posted by ZeroXSEED

Ichika is her anchor to the happy times in the past, part of her character development is that she began to realize it and became less and less possessive, so, Ling letting go Ichika is a metaphor for her leaving her past and embracing the happy future waiting for her....

.....now that's one hell of change in this thread's mood.

No no! The wincest must flow!!!!

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-09, 21:13

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Originally Posted by blitz1/2

No no! The wincest must flow!!!!

Check my PM on ff.net then.

Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 21:40

The letting Ichika go and moving on with her life route will happen if she loses him to anybody else.
In the route where she wins; Ichika will realize that despite her reasons for being clingy towards him that he still loves her and they both try to get a new start in their relationship.

Too corny?

HasuMasu · 2011-09-09, 21:41

Well this is one hell of a sub-forum revive.

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-09, 22:14

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

The letting Ichika go and moving on with her life route will happen if she loses him to anybody else.
In the route where she wins; Ichika will realize that despite her reasons for being clingy towards him that he still loves her and they both try to get a new start in their relationship.

Too corny?

Nah, yer choice:

> Make the drama subtler, realistic, and so heart wrenching it punching the reader until they cry. Write 500-1000 words long prose for the description of Ling's old home and make the environment subtly empathic when Ichika finally able to find her there, cue cherry blossom. (Contact Makoto Shinkai)

> Make the drama over the top, with many explosion, chase scene, armed forces of four countries, orbital elevator and have Norio Wakamoto as Ling's pops when he challenged Ichika in an ooooverrrrr the top cooking matches!!!! (contact Michael Bay for this one)

*Cough*

why not make your fic omnibus with multiple endings like Amagami SS or Yosuga no Sora?

HasuMasu · 2011-09-09, 23:06

I bet formatting all that was a bitch, props to you.

Anyway, we're experiencing a surge of fics right now, I'd like to get mine out of Development Hell sooner.

DarkJak2050 · 2011-09-09, 23:09

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Originally Posted by Detective-san

I bet formatting all that was a bitch, props to you.

Anyway, we're experiencing a surge of fics right now, I'd like to get mine out of Development Hell sooner.

Which ones you looking forward to?

Eratas123 · 2011-09-09, 23:27

What fic do you have in mind Detective-san?

ZeroXSEED · 2011-09-09, 23:28

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Originally Posted by Detective-san

I bet formatting all that was a bitch, props to you.

Anyway, we're experiencing a surge of fics right now, I'd like to get mine out of Development Hell sooner.

Quote:

Originally Posted by DarkJak2050

Which ones you looking forward to?

Everyone's, no exception. Still haven't posting yours Jak????

Anyway, this is more like writers' lounge than fanfic discussion thread, but works as both, now I'm have more inspiration for my fic.

BTW, currently writing a paper of "Organic Soybean" now, schoolwork is a bitch! Because of typing trance on updating both the fics and forum while wearing a red sweater, now I'm exhausted and my typing speed reduced to 33%.

DarkJak2050 · 2011-09-09, 23:36

Let's just say that I'm working on the last few "bugs" before posting it.

But yeah, Detective. Which Fanfics are you looking forward to with all these new ones in the works?

HasuMasu · 2011-09-09, 23:39

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

What fic do you have in mind Detective-san?

Well, I'd like to finish the baker thing first,
then maybe an AU where Chifuyu dies.

(Although, I'm not sure that would work.)

I still have some thinking to do.

After reading all the chapters of One Piece from the start.

EDIT: As for which I'm looking forward to, well, I read everyone's secretly.

2011-09-09, 18:01	Link #1122
blitz1/2 Tenshi's Defense Squadron Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Fighting against those who oppress the system	@Zero: I sent you a message regarding my opinion on char. @eratas: Rin is not really that much harder to write, just have a mirror reflection character of Houki but add a bit more possessiveness, more tsun and have her have an issue about her chest. If you want me to read it over, send me the link and I'll go over it like I did with Zero's story. __________________ hai, hai. Onii-chan has his work cut out for him.

2011-09-09, 21:41	Link #1133
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	Well this is one hell of a sub-forum revive. __________________

2011-09-09, 23:06	Link #1135
HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	I bet formatting all that was a bitch, props to you. Anyway, we're experiencing a surge of fics right now, I'd like to get mine out of Development Hell sooner. __________________

2011-09-09, 17:20	Link #1121
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Thanks for the feedback ZeroXSEED, I'm already writing what you planned out so please read it on ff.net once it's out, another thing though; do you have any idea what I can do in regards to Rin? I'm stumped cause she's the only heroine that I have trouble writing romance about. side note- I put way too much comedy in the first and second chapter now that I reread them, kinda doesn't match with the summary

2011-09-09, 18:13	Link #1123
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	More Tsun than Houki! that's easier said than done. The reason I have a hard time is cause I'm trying to make every haremette at least slightly unique compared to everyone else and all i've been able to get from Rin is Yandere loli which I'm trying to avoid in the story to make her a more relatable character. I'll send you my draft on Rin once I finish typing it, I'm still finishing chapter 2 actually, Thank you for the advice Blitz.

2011-09-09, 19:27	Link #1126
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Just got an Idea regarding Rin. The reason she's so clingy to Ichika (other than being in love with him) is because he reminds her of how her life was before she was her parents divorced and she became a representative candidate. e.g. When she was just a regular middle school student with a friend who came over for sleepovers, parents who were happy together and when she didn't have to worry about the IS. What do you guys think?

2011-09-09, 19:43	Link #1128
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	I guess I'll push through with it then, I haven't thought of anything else and it's a good way to "justify" her yandere tendenies. The second chapter is halfway done and I'm about to fill it with loads of Cecilia ship tease and some foreshadowing

2011-09-09, 21:40	Link #1132
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	The letting Ichika go and moving on with her life route will happen if she loses him to anybody else. In the route where she wins; Ichika will realize that despite her reasons for being clingy towards him that he still loves her and they both try to get a new start in their relationship. Too corny?

2011-09-09, 23:27	Link #1137
Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	What fic do you have in mind Detective-san?

2011-09-09, 23:36	Link #1139
DarkJak2050 Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2011	Let's just say that I'm working on the last few "bugs" before posting it. But yeah, Detective. Which Fanfics are you looking forward to with all these new ones in the works?