Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Tch, if you want to write Married!ViCia just PM me and I can give you all the details of the next 2-3 major stories I have in mind.

...

Which makes me realize just how close to the end my series is....

All good things must have ends. Lest they run forever and lose their focus and become craptastic.

Oh and btw Avatar day counter: 2

I think this might be a record

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[Demi.]

Originally Posted by Kaijo

Well, all that talk about Starlight Breakers and befriending hit me in a wrong way. A very wrong way. And as thanks, I shall share it with the rest of you.

It's a bit NSFW and lime-scented...

Spoiler for Gone a Bit Too Far:

Gone a Bit Too Far



“What's that?” Nanoha asked innocently. “I didn't hear you, Fate-chan.”

“Na.... Na...” Fate tried to say. “Na-noha...”

“Now now, that's not what you're supposed to say, Fate-slave,” Nanoha told her sternly, yanking on the other girl's leash. “Isn't that right, Raging Heart?”

“Call her, My Master,” the staff chirped happily.

“M.. my master...” Fate breathed with some difficulty.

“She didn't sound too sincere,” the master remarked sadly. “I think she needs to be punished.”

“It's so,” Raging Heart agreed.

Fate cried out, partly in pain, and partly in something else, as multiple Divine Shooter orbs hit her body. She collapsed to all fours, quivering and panting.

“I'm sorry, my master,” Fate told her, tears in her eyes. “I'll be good, I promise. Anything you want!”

Nanoha smiled, tenderly petting the girls head. “Now that's more like it. Perhaps you deserve a reward. What do you want?”

“I-I want...” Fate tried. “St... Sta...”

“Hmm? What's that, Fate-slave?”

“Let's shoot it,” Raging Heart offered. “Starlight Breaker.”

Nanoha raised an eyebrow. “Oh? Is that what you want, Fate-slave?”

The other girl's eyes went wide, and she swallowed slowly, but then nodded hesitantly.

Nanoha tenderly traced her staff down Fate's backside, taking aim as soft pink light began to gather. Fate's legs began to shake in anticipation.

“Knockout by Breaker,” Raging Heart informed her. “Right before that, orgasm.”

“Starlight...” Nanoha began.

Just then, the door flew open. “Nanoha, are you okay? I sensed the barrier in your room as I came in and-”

Yuuno paused, taking note of the positions of the two girls, the high heel shoes, the black leather that didn't leave much to the imagination, Nanoha aiming her staff at Fate, and did the only thing he could possibly do.

He collapsed backward as his nose produced a long stream of blood.

Nanoha sighed and canceled her attack. “Raging Heart, release Dominatrix Mode Barrier Jacket.”

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Author's notes:

Too much befriending can lead to unexpected outcomes. This author does not recommend the use of magical implements in unhealthy ways.

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Bonus Ending:

“And so sometimes we like to spice things up,” Nanoha explained, the two girls now in bathrobes and sitting on the couch.

A trembling Yuuno looked at both girls, their faces red, but Nanoha not quite as embarrassed as Fate. This was all too much, he thought, as he picked up his cup of tea and took a sip to calm his nerves.

That's when a communication window opened with Hayate's face. “Nanoha? Fate? Signum and Shamal will be over tonight, so I was asking if I can upload your special Barrier Jacket modifications to Schwertkreuz.”

The two girls managed to duck as Yuuno sprayed tea.

I'M SO SORRY!

/me runs

That was kind of sexy in it's own magical kind of way.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Oh and btw Avatar day counter: 2

I think this might be a record

Told you I was getting better.

Page Claim: FOR RADIANTBEAM! ... nope, no small text this time, I'm just claimin' the page for RB 'cause she's awesome and puts up with all of my teasing

I don't mind your teasing.

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Tch, if you want to write Married!ViCia just PM me and I can give you all the details of the next 2-3 major stories I have in mind.

...

Which makes me realize just how close to the end my series is....

Heh, outlining! The key to actually getting stories written. But honestly, I'd rather wait--I don't want to spoil the fun for the readers of your stories by referencing "past" events and so on. For example, Lutecia's future decision with regard to her life in the Shadows could go about three different ways, and it would be hard to write about their life together (heh...if they end up together), without knowing where Lulu's career ends up...Things like that.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Yuuno reminds me of my wife.

You're a lucky guy :3

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

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I don't mind your teasing.

That sounds like a flirt to m*shot*

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Satashi

That sounds like a flirt to m*shot*

I am the Harem Mistress, after all.

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

I am the Harem Mistress, after all.

*swoons* Oh I feel weak all of the sudden. Your aura has wooed me. :P

[Thunderbird]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Told you I was getting better.

I still give it another 4 hours

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Thunderbird

I still give it another 4 hours

And again, you're one to talk.

[Thunderbird]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

And again, you're one to talk.

But all those times *sniff* you dragged me away from the harem into the...the...the dungeon *shivers at the mention of the place* you made it clear *hic* every time that whip cracked that..that...*breaks down*

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Within Our Own Shadow--Chapter 5

I will admit to thinking Nanoha was being a bit cold for a bit, but then her kind realization that Vivio wasn't taking it well made me very happy. Watery-eyes happy. What? I can't really really like the warm fuzzies of relationships not of a sexual nature?

Also: Vita is awesome.

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Which makes me realize just how close to the end my series is....

It's actually just the beginning, but then again, not too many people can pull off an ~After Story~ like Clannad.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

It's actually just the beginning, but then again, not too many people can pull off an ~After Story~ like Clannad.

Um... what?

I guess I could continue the series longer, but really I'm running out of main storylines to develop. Lutecia's whole issue of "to be a Shadow or to not be a Shadow" resolves itself in the next two stories, and in the very last of those the Jail Bait Wait finally ends so she and Vivio can be together like that. Really, all I'd have to do to finish it beyond that is get them engaged....

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Um... what?

I guess I could continue the series longer, but really I'm running out of main storylines to develop. Lutecia's whole issue of "to be a Shadow or to not be a Shadow" resolves itself in the next two stories, and in the very last of those the Jail Bait Wait finally ends so she and Vivio can be together like that. Really, all I'd have to do to finish it beyond that is get them engaged....

And then you need to get them married... and then you need to get them pre--*shot repeatedly*

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

And then you need to get them married... and then you need to get them pre--*shot repeatedly*

But... but... I don't know how to write a wedding fic! Or how to write a fic where they get pre--*shot repeatedly*

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

But... but... I don't know how to write a wedding fic!

Which really sucks for us when we get to that point in "Day in the Life", huh?

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Or how to write a fic where they get pre--*shot repeatedly*

Hey, what about wha-- *exploded*

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

But... but... I don't know how to write a wedding fic! Or how to write a fic where they get pre--*shot repeatedly*

"Lutecia..." Vivio took her friend's hands. "I'm pregnant."

Lutecia went stiff. "You're..."

"Yes..." Vivio blushed and looked down and to the side. Three seconds, later, Lutecia fell off the couch, passed clean out. Vivio sighed and put a hand on her hip. "What IS it with me and girls passing out lately!?"

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

It's actually just the beginning, but then again, not too many people can pull off an ~After Story~ like Clannad.

Even Clannad's after story dragged on way too long and then it had that BS resolution.

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

But... but... I don't know how to write a wedding fic!

Oh you'll do fine! It'll never be as horrible as the one I wrote, so don't worry about it!

[Jimmy C]

If anything, After Story sped through the tale. And the resolution wasn't BS. But this isn't the place to discuss that.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

the Jail Bait Wait

I'm forever adopting this term for this concept.