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risingstar3110 · 2015-07-13, 14:40

And it's chapter 7... (Edit: Gah, first post is too long to edit now, so i added it into 2nd post)

I ended up have to self-censored my own vocabularies and pick some more M/PG words simply due to the general writing tone so far.

Could make me sounds narcissist, but another thing I realised after starting writing these fanfict, is how much I enjoyed reading your own fanfic. Like you feel your imagination is further entrenched in your brain after rereading it

Spoiler for Chapter 7:

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My roommate is a denpa girl.

Name is Gokou Ruri, but she’s more well-known with her circle of friend as Kuroneko.

For social, she tended to wear dark and heavy gothic Lolita clothes, which she made herself. This was originally inspired from her early love of Maschera anime. But cosplaying purpose aside, I think it’s also strangely fitting on her, probably due to her white skin and small doll-like stature.

Since knowing me and Kirino, her wardrobe had been expanded quite a number, mostly for more general purpose. But overall she’s still quite rough when it comes to daily fashion, especially for college and part-time job in a local bookstore.

Despite saying that through, I found her fashion sense to be quite charming… In some way, I did admire her style as it gave her a traditional, but very independent and mature aura. Some of my friend even described her as Yamato Nadeshiko when seeing her in casual college dresses

Like her fashion, she also has a distinctive way to communicate.

Personally I could pick up most of what she meant. But her line often was littered with chuuni vocabularies, and more often than not would puzzle unfamiliar audiences.

Chuuni saying, you knows? Like “behold the Queen of Darkness” for introduction, or “let’s us rejoice this feast, Denizens of Dark Realms” for dinner, or ……

“Kukukuku. How does it feel to having your soul ensnared by the same mischievous ploy that you once beset on me, O Holy Dark Angel?”

…oh, I forgot to mention. But when there were only two of us, she had also showed some over-passionate enthusiasms into roleplaying of being my ruler or captor.

These were probably the only time for her to actually combine her chuuni talks with actions. As she would have been arrested in public otherwise…

And for what I did last time to her, today she did return me the whole full favour ….

“Hmmm, have to say through these ropes really look vulgar on you…”

“Then stop staring, you pervert. And uncuff me!!”

“Say, the one who didn’t even wear bra today…”

“It… it was because the bra strap was digging onto my skin last time…”

Kuroneko made an ‘Eh, really?’ gesture, and then while still having that mocking laugh, she started to wander around my bounded self like I’m some sort of decorative trophy. Ah… my ear is getting hot with embarrassment.

Stop staring; don’t look at my chest…

Ah, what did I even think dressing like this? I forgot that Kuroneko burst was smaller than mine, and she was wearing a padded one-piece swimsuit last time.

“Stop it, Kuroneko… I’m serious. This is too embarrassing”

“Wouldn’t that normally excite you?”

Don’t talk like I am such a deviant….

“..and relax… I have seen you naked before…”

It’s true. She had seen me naked several times before. The most recent is during our onsen trip to celebrate our graduation.

But the way I am now, it would have looked even more indecent than simply being naked

“Hmm, I want to take a picture of this and send to Kirino.”

“Don’t. I will kill you…. then kill myself…. if that happens”.

I was half-crying as I said that…

“…”

Kuroneko shrugged her shoulders. Did she seriously think of doing it?

“Either way. You really did a number on me last time, Dark Angel Ayase…”

She reverted back to her chunii mode

“…It’s now my turn to return the favour”

She pushed me laying down on my bed facing up. And after glanced at my arms to make sure that they were not in an uncomfortable position, she climbed on top of me and sat on my stomach.
And then she reached to her back pocket…

“Let’s see how you gonna deal with this, Dark Angel…”

“Kuroneko… ? You surely don’t mean to….”

In her hand was a while feather, the type she often used to make our cosplaying wing with.

“Kukuku. It’s not too late to apologise now…”

“Wait, this must be a joke….”

“…”

“No. Not my chest… not my chest…”

“…”

“Stop…ah…. or I will kill you… I will seriously kill you…”

“Ah… stop…ahhaha….please stop… Kuroneko…”

“Don’t… no… Kuroneko-samaaa…ah…”

“Kuroneko-sama… aha…. Queen of Darkness… please…stop…”

“Kuroneko…Kuroneko-nee sama… I was wrong… ah… please… forgive me… forgive Ayase…”

Ah…

Father… mother…. forgive me. Your daughter can’t become a bride anymore…

Kuroneko eventually satisfied and get off my body. As I lay lifelessly on my side, still bounded by the ropes… felt like my body and soul was totally violated

“Ayase, get up. Or the rope will block your arm’s blood circulation …”

“Please let me die… I don’t want to live anymore…”

“Stop being so dramatic… get up…”

Kuroneko tried to push me up, but my lifeless body just leaned right back at her….

So kneeling right behind my lifeless body, Kuroneko started to make a long sigh before moving her lips toward my left ear and whispered to it….

“Get up, Ayase….”

“… or I gonna grope those indecent breasts with my hands next …”

Eh…?

“Good. Stay still there, let me untie you…”

“…”

“Don’t be so tense… Ayase… relax a bit…”

“…”

Silence covered the room as Kuroneko started to slowly uncuffed, then untied the rope from me…

My body instinctively tensed up every time those small arms started to wrap around my body from behind to reach for a knot….

“And that is… done. Look, you should put those creams on that small rope mark on your right arm. It worked quite well the last time I tried it…”

“…”

“Ayase…?”

“…”

“Your face looked red, what happened…?”

“It’s.. it’s not Kuroneko-san’s business…”

“Why are you sulking…?”

“…”

“Kukuku, you want me to grope your breasts that much…?”

“That’s not it, stupid!”

“…”

“…”

“…did I overdo it?”

“…”

“I’m sorry…”

“It’s late already. Kuroneko-san. Good night…”

I lay back onto my bed, covered my whole body and my face with a blanket. Kuroneko just stood there for a bit, probably to reflect over her action. Then turned off the light, told me good night and left the room.

Stupid! Stupid! Stupid! Stupid!

Don’t say sorry now after all that, you pervert rapist…..

And why was I so frustrated for?

It’s all Kuroneko-san faults for saying all of those weird things.

How could anyone make such an indiscreet remark, and then just walked away like that?

Ah!!! I am too agitated to sleep….

…End of Chapter 7….

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-13, 23:50

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Originally Posted by risingstar3110

And it's chapter 7... (Edit: Gah, first post is too long to edit now, so i added it into 2nd post)

I ended up have to self-censored my own vocabularies and pick some more M/PG words simply due to the general writing tone so far.

Could make me sounds narcissist, but another thing I realised after starting writing these fanfict, is how much I enjoyed reading your own fanfic. Like you feel your imagination is further entrenched in your brain after rereading it

Another excellent installment, and I see the two of them have progressed to engaging in their rituals while fully undressed (or I'm assuming that's what you implied, or at least, that Ayase was topless). In either case, I'm looking forwards to seeing how Ayase will take her sweet sweet revenge.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-14, 01:19

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Another excellent installment, and I see the two of them have progressed to engaging in their rituals while fully undressed (or I'm assuming that's what you implied, or at least, that Ayase was topless). In either case, I'm looking forwards to seeing how Ayase will take her sweet sweet revenge.

Ah crap, thank for pointing that out.

What i thought about that screen was not exactly Ayase being topless (sorry, have to disappoint you on that =(, i promise there will be some development next chapter on their relationship through ). More like because she was careless and came into the session wearing only a loose shirt and not wearing a bra. Which means when her upper chest was bounded with ropes. the shirt will hug tightly on her body and yeah, effectively Kuroneko would see everything, and her touch will be also as effective as direct touch

I didn't realise until you mentions it, so I probably should put an explanation on it into the chapter

Edit: added this paragraphs, hopefully it will make it more clear:

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The reason that I was so conscious about it right now is because without wearing a bra, and being strongly bounded by these ropes, my loose light-purple T-shirt ended up hugging tight onto my skin. And…. displaying the shape and… everything of my chest to naked eyes….

Because my writing style here was actually influenced a lot by the Oreimo light novel, and in there a lot of times how one dressed was illustrated by pictures, help the author to spend less time on describing the situation (how a place looks like, how one dress, and etc). I guess it's called 'Light' Novel for a reason as they strip out a lot of description part and only forcus on the plots

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-14, 03:15

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Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Ah crap, thank for pointing that out.

What i thought about that screen was not exactly Ayase being topless (sorry, have to disappoint you on that =(, i promise there will be some development next chapter on their relationship through ). More like because she was careless and came into the session wearing only a loose shirt and not wearing a bra. Which means when her upper chest was bounded with ropes. the shirt will hug tightly on her body and yeah, effectively Kuroneko would see everything, and her touch will be also as effective as direct touch

I didn't realise until you mentions it, so I probably should put an explanation on it into the chapter

Edit: added this paragraphs, hopefully it will make it more clear:

Because my writing style here was actually influenced a lot by the Oreimo light novel, and in there a lot of times how one dressed was illustrated by pictures, help the author to spend less time on describing the situation (how a place looks like, how one dress, and etc). I guess it's called 'Light' Novel for a reason as they strip out a lot of description part and only forcus on the plots

I see, I was wondering if this particularly chapter was causing me to get the yuri goggles. IDK, maybe it's also my preconceptions of BDSM- I know some people don't link it directly to sex, but when it comes to the relatively little experience I have with it in real life (which I am reluctant to discuss on an open thread- maybe by pm if you're interested), well, lets just say it was very sexual in nature.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-14, 11:00

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

I see, I was wondering if this particularly chapter was causing me to get the yuri goggles. IDK, maybe it's also my preconceptions of BDSM- I know some people don't link it directly to sex, but when it comes to the relatively little experience I have with it in real life (which I am reluctant to discuss on an open thread- maybe by pm if you're interested), well, lets just say it was very sexual in nature.

I do totally agree on this front, and that's why I think I can enjoy writing the rest of the story a fair bit.

I means generally you have to have a confirmed relationship , then intimidate acts, then go with more kinky. But here we pretty much having it go backward which is kinda a fascinated set up (and it's canon too, as the two actually started it before they even acknowledge each other as Kirino's friend, or became friend)

In some way, I guess it's quite similar to a standard anime/manga set up, where the mc is thrown into an unfamiliar ground before being equipped to deal with it. For example, Guys being transported to a fantasy world before he got his power awakened. Or girls were forced to stay with future love interests due to some reasons even before they shows affections to each other (and vice versa).

On the yuri front.... As long as you will still keep reading, then I won't spoil it...

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-16, 05:52

Was busy past few days, and probably will be well into the weekend. But got a bit of time, so I wrote the first half of chapter 8.

Too tired right now to reread/ proof-read. I probably will do it later before writing the 2nd part. Hopefully before or by latest the end of the weekend.

Got the rest of chapter 8 and chapter 9 planned. but still quite unclear about chapter 10 onward atm

Spoiler for Unfinished Chapter 8:

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Sigh….I wonder if I was just sexually frustrated….

“Sighing like that will make you losing happiness, you know?”

I slowly looked up toward the direction of the voice, and standing there was my class mate: Mai Tanaka making a finger-pointing pose…

“You were absent-minded a lot lately. Is it still the same love problem with last time?”

“No, it was different, and it was not lov…”

“Ayase, I think guy like that isn’t worth you paying attention to… Geez…. Making his girlfriend worried like this…”

“I said it’s not about love. And… why do you think it is a guy anyway….?”

“So, Ayase is into girls, eh…?”

“It... It’s not that…. And I said it was not about love…” I half screamed that out in embarrassment.

“Awww…. And I thought our love was mutual!!! But I guess it’s not really important anyway. As no matter it’s a guy or girl, that person should have been head-over-heel to such a perfect person like you.”

“Mai. Stop it. or I really will have to punish you…”

“Nooooo…I made Ayase angry!! ”

Mai, covered her head with both hands, while crack out a joking grin. What’s a trickster I had as friend…

“So, Ayase… honestly what’s in your mind…?”

I guess it’s not really matter if I tell her.

“I have this… friend. A very close friend. She recently has played some mean tricks on me…”
“…I mean, I don’t think it was out of malice or anything. And it’s not like I…..hate it. But because I didn’t know how to react, that friend thought that I was angry at her. “

“Ayase. If she’s your friend and it was simply just some fun teasing. Then just return the favour, it will send her a clear message that you don’t mind it…”

I almost jumped up from my seat

“Mai, you are a genius!! I never thought about it that way….”

“Eh…?? So my advice was useful? I only said whatever was in my head. Ehehehe, my advice solved Ayase’s love problem...”

I said it was not…. But well, I will let it go this time, since Mai just gave me such a good idea.

Yeah, there’s no point dwelling in the past. I just need to plan out well on what I should do to Kuroneko next time.

Maybe I should go to library and search for some new ideas. Wait for it Kuroneko!!

…………………………………………….

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-17, 03:42

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Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Was busy past few days, and probably will be well into the weekend. But got a bit of time, so I wrote the first half of chapter 8.

Too tired right now to reread/ proof-read. I probably will do it later before writing the 2nd part. Hopefully before or by latest the end of the weekend.

Got the rest of chapter 8 and chapter 9 planned. but still quite unclear about chapter 10 onward atm

A few typos I saw in there which I have fixed in bold on the version below:

Spoiler for unfinished chapter 8 119's edit:

Hmmmm.... Ayase has some new idea, this will be good. Assuming you're writers' block has to do with ideas for what sort of kinky adventures you want Ayase and Kuroneko to get up to, well, I can think of a few ways to mix chuunibyou and BDSM, mind you, you've probably thought of most of the ones that are tame enough for them to try at their current level of intimacy... Let just say I have quite the sadistic mind, so some of my ideas were rather... hardcore (though I would be willing to share the more hardcore ones by pm if you're interested).

But, as for some of the tamer ones, the first one that comes to mind is that candles are great for both chuuni psuedo-occult rituals and wax play!

Another possibility that comes to mind, this one really working best for Ayase's turn domming involves Kuroneko, nekomimi cosplay, a collar, and a leash.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-17, 18:45

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

A few typos I saw in there which I have fixed in bold on the version below:

Spoiler for unfinished chapter 8 119's edit:

Hmmmm.... Ayase has some new idea, this will be good. Assuming you're writers' block has to do with ideas for what sort of kinky adventures you want Ayase and Kuroneko to get up to, well, I can think of a few ways to mix chuunibyou and BDSM, mind you, you've probably thought of most of the ones that are tame enough for them to try at their current level of intimacy... Let just say I have quite the sadistic mind, so some of my ideas were rather... hardcore (though I would be willing to share the more hardcore ones by pm if you're interested).

But, as for some of the tamer ones, the first one that comes to mind is that candles are great for both chuuni psuedo-occult rituals and wax play!

Another possibility that comes to mind, this one really working best for Ayase's turn domming involves Kuroneko, nekomimi cosplay, a collar, and a leash.

Ah thank. Other than the first word "love" as I intentionally leave it like Mai was interrupting Ayase speech. Maybe there's a better way to do it?

Feel free to pm me any ideas. But honestly i felt like false advertisement here. As I spent more time writing about their emotional struggle than on the BDSM act itself... Can't go too graphic too as the tone so far was pretty M (rating) ~ish

Anyway, chapter 8. All hell breaks lose. It struggled me quite a bit, one because it's really long, >1.5x of normal chapter. But another is i was in doubt over whether i should bring this up so soon. Like.. I don't know... when i first wrote the first few chapters... it felt like "Who care, I will just write whatever I thought down". But by now, there's a lots of doubting over "hmm, would this fit, how will i go from there..."

Spoiler for Chapter 8:

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Sigh….I wonder if I was just sexual frustrated….

“Sighing like that will make your happiness fly away, you know?”

I slowly looked up toward the direction of the voice, and standing there was my class mate, Mai Tanaka, as she made a finger-pointing pose…

“You were absent-minded a lot lately. Is it still that same love problem you had last time?”

“No, it was different, and it was not lov…”

“Ayase, a guy like that isn’t worth your attention to… Geez…. Making his girlfriend troubled like this…”

“I said it’s not about love. And… why do you think it is a guy anyway….?”

“So, Ayase is into girls, eh…?”

“It... It’s not that…. And I said it was not about love…” I half screamed that out in embarrassment.

“Awww…. And I thought our love was mutual!!! Still no matter if it’s a guy or girl, that person should have been head-over-heel to such a perfect person like you.”

“Mai. Stop it. or I really will have to punish you…”

“Nooooo…I made Ayase angry!! ”

Mai, covered her head with both hands, while cracking out a joking grin. What’s a trickster I had here…

“So, Ayase… honestly what’s in your mind…?”

I guess it’s not really matter if I tell her.

“I have this… friend. A very close friend. She recently has played some mean tricks on me…”
“…I mean, I don’t think it was out of malice or anything. And it’s not like I…..hate it. But because I didn’t know how to react, that friend thought that I was angry at her. “

“Ayase. If she’s your friend and it was simply just some fun teasing. Then just return the favour, it will send her a clear message that you don’t mind it…”

My eyes wide opened as I almost jumped up from my seat

“Mai, you are a genius!! I never thought about it that way….”

“Eh…?? So my advice was useful? I only said whatever was in my head. Ehehehe, my advice solved Ayase’s love problem...”

I said it was not love…. But well, I would let it go this time, since this girl just gave me such a good suggestion.

Yeah, I should not dwell into what happened. As long as I act normally for today session, Kuroneko won’t be troubled by what I happened last time.

Maybe I should go to library and make sure that I would be well-prepared today. Wait for it Kuroneko!!

…………………………………………….

“Kukuku, let’s me see what you have in stock for me today!!”

Kuroneko cracked her usual mocking smile again, as I entered her room. She once again was in her blue one-piece swimsuit, but this time lying flat on her stomach while reading a Maschera doujin.

Apparently the plan worked. Good job, Classmate #2!!

Since the last incident where she toyed with my… my chest; Kuroneko had been acting over-sensitive toward me these past few days. As if she tried to erase that incident from my mind… So it was only after today dinner, and after I enthusiastically told her to prepare, that Kuroneko has started to gain back some of her usual composure.

“I already can predict what is your Diabolic power made off, Dark Angel. None of your holy attribute attack will work on me today…”

‘We will see about that Kuroneko’. I was thinking that as I placed down the cardboard box that I was holding on my hands.

Still with a cold, expressionless face to hide my intention, I walked toward Kuroneko, asked her to kneel up from her position, and once gain handcuffed her arms to her back…

“So… we don’t go with rope today…?”

“This alone is enough.”

My cold voice, expression, and the sudden shift from our usual activities surely surprised Kuroneko, as I could sense that uncertain feeling in her voice. Yes. The plan worked quite well.

As I still maintained my silence and inexpression, I started to put her cosplaying cat ear and cat girl chokers on her.

With Kuroneko apparently still being puzzled with the selection, I took out my secret weapons and showing them to her.

“A blindfold and ear plugs…?”

Just waited for it Kuroneko….

“I had enough of your antic, Kuroneko. I will have to put you down to your place today…”

I kept a serious tone and a (practiced) cold dead starring, as I put those ear plugs on her. Already tested them myself, she would not hear a sound from now on…

Then as I put the blindfold on her, I took out my cell phone and make sure she saw that right before her eyes are completely covered.

Once set, I put my phone back to my back pocket. Then I slowly moved away from Kuroneko and sit on her study chair, then just patiently and quietly sit there observing her.

After a couple of minutes passed, as expected, Kuroneko was the first one to break silence…

“Hey… Ayase…this is… boring… let’s just do something else today…”

She repeated that a couple of times. The shivering in her voice indicated that she has fell right into my trap….

Haha, Kuroneko, even with all the wisdom in the world, most still couldn’t stand against things that unknown to them.

Especially one with such a vivid imagination as yours.

That’s why if your hearing, vision, and movement are robbed. You will be left with limitless number of possibilities on things that could happen to you.

And to assist on that, I purposely acted cold, and also gave her mind something to work with: that almost-empty cardboard over there, and the fact that I took out my cell phone just now….

Modern cell phones, such a device full with ultilities. That should put Kuroneko mind in great confuse over what could happen.

Maybe I took her pictures and post them onto her SNS?

Maybe I called up her friend up to show them this pathetic sign of her.

Or it could be some strangers that I met in college…

Ahaha, let’s your imagination playing with you today, Kuroneko…

After asking me a couple of time with no response, Kuroneko tried to stand up from her kneeling position. But without her arm, she immediately lost balance and fall flat forward down her futon.

She then struggled to turn her body around facing up and try to use her leg to sit up again. But as she realised something, she immediately close her leg, with an embarrassing look on her face…

I guess, if she thought that there are other people here, or if I am taking her pictures. That would have been a vulgar pose to display herself.

At time she would make some sharp head turn as if she could hear a voice from behind her. I think her mind already started to play trick on her head.

Seeing the usually-calm Kuroneko being frantic like this normally would have been satisfying enough….

But best of all is that expression she’s having. One with genuine fear and uncertainty, as she started to breathe harder and harder with every slight movement. As if her heart was racing and her chest gonna burst open anytime….

So cute, Kuroneko. You are so cute right now.

I wanted to lock her into a secret cage just like this. It would be a bliss coming home every day to this sight

Ah….. I would like to capture this look on her face with my phone. Bbut I didn’t want to share this expression of her to anyone. Not to her otaku friends. Not to oniisan. Not to even Kirino…

After a long while, Kuroneko’s breath started to slowly get back to normal. I guess the fact that nothing happened to her after so long, calmed her down a bit.

Now it’s my turn ….

I started to wear one of my thick winter glove on my right hand… moved toward her back, and grope her right breast with my gloved hand….

What’s a pity, I only felt a soft sensation with this thick glove

“Ekk….”

She fiercely response, but I then immediately move away from her and around to her front. This time I use my bare left hand to trace down her side-belly.

“Who…?”

“…”

“Ayase… right? Ayase…?”

I response to each of her question by groping her in various places, inner thigh, arm, cheeks, mixing with tracing her body using my left hand on her leg, back , chest and foreheads …

As I was dancing around her while randomly doing it, from Kuroneko perspective, she must feel like many people are touching her from every direction….

“Stop, not there “

“...”

“No!!! Don’t. ”

Yes, show me more of those expressions.

Now you know what I felt last time, Kuroneko!!

But even your most sincere apologies would not be able to stop me now!!

And then something which I didn’t anticipate happened…

*Sob…*

Eh…?

*Sob…sob…*

Kuroneko started to sob softly and then it quickly became uncontrollable….

“Ayase….”

“….”

“Help me…. Ayase…”

She tried to turn her head glancing around the room, as she called my name.,

“I’m sorry…” *sob* “Help me… Ayase….”

Oh… no….

There… there, don’t cry. I’m here…

I threw away the glove, got down and fully embraced her body with my arms from her right. Only then that I realised that her body was shivering uncontrollably, as she tried but failed miserably to keep her tears from rolling down…

“Sorry, Kuroneko… I went too far, didn’t I? I’m sorry… It was just that you were so cute… “

Kuroneko’s body went stiff at first but then started to soften out as I gently stroke her hair.

“You did well, Kuroneko. You were so brave. Sorry for teasing you like this…”

Kuroneko’s body was so warm. And she smelled so good…

“Ah, don’t cry. It will ruin your beautiful face… “

“….and these cheeks…and lips….”

I said that as I was tracing my finger along her cheeks and rest between her soft lips

Kuroneko tensed up again, probably was still traumatised by earlier actions. That’s when I realised she couldn’t hear my voices and was not entirely certain that it was me

It’s ok, it’s me…

As she started to calm down, I rested her body down to my left arm as I still trace my finger across her face. Such a cute little being I have in my arms here. Then I moved my lips to hers…

A wet and soft sensation. Then followed by more and more of it.

Did she like it? I guess it’s not really matter, as other than the initial resistance, a pleasant and sensual feeling was starting to spread from my head to around my body. It felt like I was just slowly sinking down to the bottom of the ocean as if nothing mattered anymore. Nothing else worthy to think about, but this kiss…

Kiss…?

I immediately moved my face away from Kuroneko’s, as my hand started to cover my lips with shock. Looking up at me was Kuroneko. Her blindfold was shifted upward during the motion freeing her left eyes vision, and now she is just staring at me with a trance look in her face…

“I’m sorry….”

I quickly took the blindfold, earplugs and the handcuffs off her. …

Kuroneko slowly raised her body, stood up, still with a trance look on her face…. As she started facing away from me, I was still kneeling in the same position in disbelief…

“I’m sorry… Kuroneko… I… I…your…I”

“It’s Ok…”

?

“I … I also… losing myself sometime when we do this….”

?!?!?

“ And… it’s.. it’s not strange for friends to kiss anyway… I think… right?”

“You are right, Kuroneko. Please excuse me…”

I quickly left Kuroneko room and shut the door….

Tears were streaming down my face as I kept my hand over my mouth to stop myself from bawling like a kid…

That’s so mean, Kuroneko.

That’s just so so mean.

It was my first kiss. I would never kiss any of my friends on the lip like that. Not even Kirino….

I rushed back to my room, and bury my face onto my pillow trying to prevent myself from uttering a sound….

The pillow cover was quickly dampened up, as streams of tears still uncontrollably flew out of my eyes.

You are so cruel Kuroneko…

What you said hurting me so much…

It’s so painful…

This pain in my chest… There’s no denying it…

This was the same feeling that I had after being rejected by Kirino’s onii-san…

It should not have happened. How could this even happen…?

Ah….

Since when did I fall in love with that denpa girl…?

…End of Chapter 8….

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-18, 08:16

I see things certainly are escalating in Kuroneko and Ayase's relationship. We have officially gone from yuri subtext to full-blown yuri! It definitely implies they will get more intimate in time, but I suppose you could go with something to do with them struggling over how they really feel about each other... When it does come time for them to get more intimate, I suspect the best route with regard to the more graphic stuff is to tastefully imply what they did, rather than go into lurid detail.

As for the false advertising, I suppose it could be, but it is nonetheless interesting and I am enjoying this so far. You're right about it being different from how normal BDSM relationships- essentially getting kinky before they get intimate. Still, looking forward to see how this works out.

As for the whole BDSM thing itself, I suspect it would be a while before they would be ready to graduate to anything like wax play- as much as the candles would fit into the whole chuuni ritual aspect. IDK, the pet play thing might work- i.e. placing her in something like cat ears, leash, collar, etc, and would fit the who Kuroneko thing. But really, in terms of kink, they haven't even gotten to the light spanking stage yet lol! That said, I suppose something like that could be part of Kuroneko's revenge... I would also mention that I almost wonder if Kuroneko would be into some light biting, but that might be a bit to cliche.

Only one typo I could see, at least in this read through:

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Ah….. I would like to capture this look on her face with my phone. Bbut I didn’t want to share this expression of her to anyone. Not to her otaku friends. Not to oniisan. Not to even Kirino…

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-18, 10:23

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

I see things certainly are escalating in Kuroneko and Ayase's relationship. We have officially gone from yuri subtext to full-blown yuri! It definitely implies they will get more intimate in time, but I suppose you could go with something to do with them struggling over how they really feel about each other... When it does come time for them to get more intimate, I suspect the best route with regard to the more graphic stuff is to tastefully imply what they did, rather than go into lurid detail.

As for the false advertising, I suppose it could be, but it is nonetheless interesting and I am enjoying this so far. You're right about it being different from how normal BDSM relationships- essentially getting kinky before they get intimate. Still, looking forward to see how this works out.

As for the whole BDSM thing itself, I suspect it would be a while before they would be ready to graduate to anything like wax play- as much as the candles would fit into the whole chuuni ritual aspect. IDK, the pet play thing might work- i.e. placing her in something like cat ears, leash, collar, etc, and would fit the who Kuroneko thing. But really, in terms of kink, they haven't even gotten to the light spanking stage yet lol! That said, I suppose something like that could be part of Kuroneko's revenge... I would also mention that I almost wonder if Kuroneko would be into some light biting, but that might be a bit to cliche.

Only one typo I could see, at least in this read through:

Hey thank once again

Checking this on my phone right now so I will go doing a more proper proof reading and fix that typo later.

I am well awarded that I am behind at the whole BDSM progress (we only gotten to abandonment play now which is fairly light as far as I have read). Basically was not even passing the confirmation of power exchange part. So still far from the more popular mental and physical pleasure side of BDSM. Still need for more intimacy level before they could move to any more advanced stage. If you have any light BDSM idea feel free to suggest, I already working my brain on some of your suggested idea, but can't promise I will be able to cooperate them yet

( and in my defence, it took the LN 9 volumes for hand-holding and 12 volume for that certain kiss to happens. I think the progress we have here already light speed in comparison)

In some ways I guess the BDSM has been used as plot device for relationship progression rather than as the main plot. Will love a day that I can go with more kinky stuffs, reread them and think "well it still fit well with the development".

But then I did not expect that I could go this far in their relationship when I first wrote Chapter 1. So finger-crossed that I can keep hold on my enthusiasm till we see the end of it.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-18, 19:56

Finally could have time to reread, fix and rewrite some parts of chapter 8. The event should flow much smoother now.

My planned chapter 9 gonna be fairly short, i think. Unless I could expand them and combine it with whatever happens next in chapter 10, which I still have problem with planning them out.

Oh well, it should go well eventually. Not the first time things has gone differently with what i planned. Even the event of this chapter 8 was also fairly altered as i wrote it

Spoiler for Chapter 8 - updated:

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Sigh….I wonder if I was just sexually frustrated….

“Sighing like that will make your happiness fly away, you know?”

I slowly looked up toward the direction of the voice. Standing there while making a finger-pointing pose was my class mate, Mai Tanaka …

“You were absent-minded a lot lately. Is it still that same love problem you had last time?”

“No, it was different, and it was not lov…”

“Ayase, a guy like that isn’t worth for you to pay attention to… Geez…. Making his girlfriend worried like this…”

“I said it’s not about love. And… why do you think it is a guy anyway….?”

“So, Ayase is into girls, eh…?”

“It... It’s not that…. And I said it was not about love…” I half screamed that out in embarrassment.

“Awww…. And I thought our love was mutual!!! “

“…”

“Still no matter if it’s a guy or girl, that person should have been head-over-heel to such a perfect woman like you, Ayase.”

“Mai. Stop it. or I really will have to punish you…”

“Nooooo…I made Ayase angry!! ”

Mai, covered her head with both hands, while cracking out a joking grin. What’s a trickster I had as friend…

“So, Ayase… honestly what’s in your mind…?”

I guess it’s not really matter if I tell her.

“I have this… friend. A very close friend. She recently has played some mean tricks on me…”
“…I mean, I don’t think it was out of malice or anything. And it’s not like I…..hate it. But because I didn’t know how to react to her jokes, that friend thought that I was angry at her. “

“Ayase. If she’s your friend and it was simply just some fun teasing. Then just return the favour, it will send her a clear message that you don’t mind it…”

My eyes wide opened as I almost jumped up from my seat

“Mai, you are a genius!! I never thought about it that way….”

“Eh…?? So my advice was useful? I only said whatever was in my head just now. Ehehehe, my advice solved Ayase’s love problem...”

I said it was not love!! But well, I would let it go this time, since this girl just gave me such a good suggestion.

Yeah, I should not dwell into what happened. As long as I act normally for this coming session, Kuroneko won’t be troubled by what I happened last time.

Maybe I should go to library and make sure that I would be well-prepared today. Wait for it, Kuroneko!!

…………………………………………….

“Kukuku, let’s me see what you have in stock for me today!!”

Kuroneko cracked her usual mocking smile again, as I entered her room. She once again was in her blue one-piece swimsuit, but this time lying flat on her stomach while reading a Maschera doujin.

Since the last incident with my… my chest; Kuroneko had been acting over-sensitive toward me these past few days. As if she tried to avoid reminding me of it… So it was only after today dinner, and after I enthusiastically told her to prepare, that Kuroneko has started to gain back some of her usual composure.

So apparently the plan already started to work. Good job, Classmate #2!!

“I already can see though your true Diabolic ability, Dark Angel. None of your holy attribute attack will work on me today…”

‘We will see about that Kuroneko’. I was thinking that as I placed down the cardboard box that I was holding on my hands. Make sure she didn’t see the content inside

Still with a cold, expressionless front to hide my intention, I walked toward Kuroneko, asked her to kneel up from her position, and once gain handcuffed her arms to her back…

“So… we won’t go with rope today…?”

“This alone is enough.”

My emotionless voice, serious tone, then the sudden shift from our usual activities surely surprised Kuroneko, as I could sense that uncertain feeling in her voice. Yes. The plan was working quite well.

Still maintained my overall silence, I started to take out Kuroneko’s cosplaying cat ear and catgirl chokers from her drawer and put them on a now very confusing Kuroneko.

Finally I reached into the brought-over cardboard box, took out my secret weapons and showed them to her.

“A blindfold and ear plugs…?”

Just waited for it Kuroneko….

“I had enough of your antic, Gokou Ruri. I will have to put you down to your place today…”

As I was putting those ear plugs on her, I switched my speaking tone to a more spiteful one, and staring her down with my best impression of ‘you-are-dead-to-me’ look. Already tested the earplugs myself, that line should be the final thing that she could hear.

Then for the last piece, I took out my cell phone and make sure she saw that right before her eyes were completely covered with the blindfold.

Once set, I put my phone back to my back pocket. Then I slowly moved away from Kuroneko and sit on her study chair, and just patiently and quietly observe her from there.

It would only take a couple more of minutes, as expected, for Kuroneko to break the silence…

“Hey… Ayase…this is… boring… let’s just do something else today…”

“ Ah … I…. I just remember…. that I needed to do an assignment tonight….. So uncuff me… Ayase…”

She repeated that a couple of times. The shivering in her voice immediately gave her bluffs away, and indicated that she has fell right into my trap….

Haha, Kuroneko, even with all the wisdom in the world, none could stand against things that’s unknown to them.

This’s especially true to one with such a vivid imagination as yours.

That’s why if your hearing, vision, and movement are robbed. You will be left with limitless number of possibilities on things that could happen.

And to assist on that, I purposely acted cold, and also gave her mind something to work with: that almost-empty cardboard over there, and the fact that I took out my cell phone just now….

Modern cell phones. Such a magical device, full with practical ultilities. That alone should put Kuroneko mind in great confuse over what could happen.

Maybe I took her pictures and post them onto her SNS?

Maybe I called up her friend up to show them this pathetic sign of her.

Or even worse, it could be some deviant strangers that I met in college…

So, entertain me, Kuroneko, let’s your imagination playing with you today …

After asking me a couple of time with no response, Kuroneko tried to stand up from her kneeling position. But without her arm to keep the balance, she immediately fall flat forward down to her futon.

She then struggled to turn her body around facing up and try to use her leg to sit up again. But as she realised something, she immediately close her leg, with an embarrassing look on her face…

I guess, if she thought that I am taking her pictures, or there are other people in the room. That would have been a vulgar pose to display herself to.

At time she would make some sharp head turn as if she could hear a voice from behind her. I think her mind already started to play trick on her.

Seeing the usually-calm Kuroneko being frantic like this normally would have been satisfying enough….

But best of all is that expression she’s having. One with genuine fear and uncertainty, as she started to breathe harder and harder with every slight movement. As if her heart was racing and her chest gonna burst open anytime….

So cute, Kuroneko. You are so cute right now.

I wanted to lock her into a secret cage just like this. Wouldn’t it be a bliss coming home every day to this sight?

Ah….. I would like to capture this look on her face with my phone. But I didn’t want to risk showing this expression of her to anyone. Not to her otaku friends. Not to oniisan. Not to even Kirino…

After a while, Kuroneko’s breath started to slowly catch up on her. I guess the fact that nothing happened to her after so long, calmed her down a bit.

Of course I couldn’t let that happens,….

I started to wear one of my thick winter glove on my right hand… moved toward her back, and grope her right breast with it….

What’s a pity, I could only felt a soft sensation with this thick glove

“Ekk….”

She fiercely responsed, turned around and desperately hid her chest behind her shoulder, but I has already move away around to her side. This time I use my bare left hand to trace down her side-belly.

“Who…?”

“…”

“Ayase… right? Ayase…?”

I response to each of her question by groping her in various places, inner thigh, arm, cheeks, mixing with lightly tracing her body using my left hand on her leg, back , chest and foreheads …

As I was dancing around her while randomly doing it, from Kuroneko perspective, she must feel like many people are touching her from every direction….

“Stop, not there “

“...”

“No!!! Don’t. ”

Yes, they are marvellous. Those scared and terrified expressions of yours, Kuroneko. Your normally adorable face always looked the most charming with them on.

More, show me more of them…

Now you know what I felt last time, Kuroneko!! But even your most sincere apologies would not be able to stop me now….!!

And then something which I didn’t anticipate, happened…

*Sob…*

Eh…?

*Sob…sob…*

Kuroneko started to sob softly at first, but soon, it quickly grew to uncontrollably weeping….

“Ayase….”

“….”

“Help me…. Ayase…”

She turned her head glancing around the room, as she desperately called for my name…

“I’m sorry…” *sob* “Help me… Ayase….”

Oh… no….

There… there, don’t cry. I’m here…

I threw away the glove, got down to her sideand fully embraced her body with my arms. Only then that I realised: her small body was shivering violently as she tried but failed miserably to keep more of her tears from rolling down…

“Sorry, Kuroneko… I went too far, didn’t I?”

“…”

“ I’m sorry… It was just that you were so cute… I couldn’t stop.. “

Kuroneko’s body went stiff at first but then started to soften out as I gently stroked her hair.

“You did well, Kuroneko. You were so brave by yourself. Sorry for teasing you like this…”

Kuroneko’s body was so warm. And she smelled so good…

“Ah, don’t cry. It will ruin your beautiful face… “

“….and these cheeks…and lips….”

I said that as I was tracing my finger along her cheeks and rest between her soft lips

Kuroneko tensed up again, probably was still traumatised by what happened earlier. That’s when I realised she couldn’t hear my voices and was still not certain that it was me

“It’s ok, it’s me…” I whispered softly to her ear, but not sure if she could hear through those plugs

As she started to calm down, I rested her body down to my left arm as I still trace my finger across her face with my right. Such a cute little being I have in my arm here. Then I moved my lips to hers…

A wet and soft sensation. Then followed by more and more of it.

Did she like it? I guess it’s not really matter, as other than some initial resistance, I was then given reign to do as I wished. A pleasant and sensual feeling soon would start to spread from my head to around my body, submerge myself in it. And It felt like I was just slowly sinking down to the bottom of the ocean as if nothing would matter anymore. Nothing else worthy to think about, nothing but this kiss…

Kiss…?

I immediately moved my face away from Kuroneko’s, with my right hand instinctively moving up to cover my lips. Looking upward at me was Kuroneko. Her blindfold was slightly shifted during the motion, liberating her left eye vision. And now she was just lying there on my left arm staring at me with a trance look in her face…

“I’m sorry….”

I quickly lift her up, took the blindfold, earplugs and the handcuffs off her. …

Kuroneko slowly stood up, still with a trance look on her face…. She then turned away from me, leaving me still kneeling in the same position in disbelief…

“I’m sorry… Kuroneko… I… I…your…I”

“It’s Ok…”

?

“I … I also lost myself sometime when we do this….”

?!?!?

“ And… it’s.. it’s not strange for friends to kiss anyway… right? I think. ”

Every of those words were like a stab at my heart

“You are right, Kuroneko. Please excuse me…”

I quickly got up, left Kuroneko room and made sure I fully shut the door….

As I walked away from it, tears were streaming down my face, as I kept a hand over my mouth to stop myself from bawling out like a kid…

That’s so mean, Kuroneko.

That’s just so so mean.

It was my first kiss. I would never kiss any of my friends on the lip like that. Not even Kirino….

I rushed back to my room, and bury my face onto the pillow trying to prevent myself from uttering a sound….

The pillow cover was quickly dampened up, as streams of tears still violently flew out of my eyes.

You are so cruel Kuroneko…

What you said… hurted me so much…

It’s so painful…

This pain in my chest… There’s no denying it…

This was the same feeling that I had after being rejected by Kirino’s onii-san…

It should not have happened. How could this even happen…?

Ah….

Since when did I fall in love with that denpa girl…?

…End of Chapter 8….

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-20, 19:08

Let's start on Chapter 9. Still unfinished through, and Kirino make a reapperance:

Spoiler for Unfinished Chapter 9:

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“Hmm… it’s certainly rare for you to call me up for private face-to-face talk like this, Kuroneko. What happened…”

“Well… “

Sitting opposite to me was Kirino Kousaka . The bitchest girl that I had ever met. She’s also a hopeless brocon. And a shameless siscon… unsure how that even worked. A brainless airhead, who has no style or any artistic sense.

Incidentally she is also my dearest friend.

One of the few that I would gladly put their happiness before mine

We were meeting in a café shop near Kaoru’s place. I had insisted to come to her place for this talk, but I guessed this sly pervert didn’t want me to intrude the Kousaka love nest. So we ended up meeting somewhere in the middle instead.

We could have met at our usual spot in Akihabara, but I don’t want to risk any chances of Ayase walking on us…

“So… Kirino… I want to consult you on something”

“Go ahead”

“I have this friend of mine, and she has been in a bit trouble lately…”

“Yeah … yeah… I know this friend of yours; tell me what happened to her…”

Kirino still casually sipped on her straw…

I instinctively glanced down on the table while fidgeting with my fingers…

“Hmmm…”

“?”

“ I… I think she has just triggered a yuri flag…”

No response…

I slowly raised my heads up. And in front of me was an utterly shocked Kirino, with both eyes and mouth wide open.

“What… you… I mean your friend…? Who… Ayas…no…it can’t be… Wait!!”

Like trying to catch on her thought, Kirino close her eyes and rest her wide forehead on her fingers tips… Before trying her best to form a clear question.

“What made you… ah... I means…your friend think that she triggered a yuri flag?”

“Her roommate kissed her… on the lip…”

“You pervert cat!! You stole my Ayase’s first kiss…”

Kirino almost jumped up from her seat, leaned forward and pull myself up by my collar. Aghh!! This girl had more strength in her arm than I thought… she was seriously choking me …

“…how dare you, pervert… Make a move on my pure pure innocent Ayase…..”

“It… it’s not me…. It’s my … friend. Remember? It’s not me…”

….

…

…

After felt like 10 minutes, and the commotion died down. Kirino finally released me. But now she is sitting flat on her seats, bury her face in both of her hands in silence, while occasionally mumbling ‘I can’t believe it…’ and ‘How could this happen….’

“So… eh… Kirino…?”

“Could it be just a joke…”

Kirino finally spoke out, still buried her face on her arms

“You means..?”

Kirino looked up and stared at me

“I said… could it be just a friendly kiss? A joke? An accident? That girl fell on top of... your friend and accidentally their lips touched?”

“Not possible, that was a very adult kiss, with tongue and such…”

“…”

“… and I think…”

“…”

I glanced down and started swirling my drink.

“…I think the other girl was crying ….”

….

….

We were surrounded by silence again. Before Kirino finally broke it.

“Aghhhhh!!!!”

Kirino started to half-screaming, while messing up her own hair with both hands.

“It can’t be helped!”

“Kirino?”

Kirino faced then turned dead serious as she looked straight into my eyes

“So how did your friend feel about it…?”

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-21, 11:34

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You pervert cat!! You stole my Ayase’s first kiss…

I see we have another addition to the many faces of Kuroneko:

Kuroneko, Shironeko, Denpaneko, Kamineko, Yamineko, Kinkyneko, Yurineko, and now Hentaineko! Looking foward to see how her (and Ayase) develop from here.

I can see how this was a bit of a shock, even if Kirino's reaction seems a bit extreme, especially for someone strongly implied to be in an incestuous relationship with her brother! But, on the other hand, it seems like she saw it coming, when she figured out (though Kuroneko denied it), that it was, in fact Kuroneko herself who kissed Ayase, so she must have kinda seen this coming since she discovered their BDSM lifestyle. It am interested to see how Kirino comes to terms with this... maybe once she takes it upon herself to read up on Kuroneko and Ayase's lifestyle herself, she'll even come home to onii-chan with some ideas!

Also, I wonder if Mai is going to find out about Ayase's relationship, and what her reaction would be.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-22, 17:02

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

I see we have another addition to the many faces of Kuroneko:

Kuroneko, Shironeko, Denpaneko, Kamineko, Yamineko, Kinkyneko, Yurineko, and now Hentaineko! Looking foward to see how her (and Ayase) develop from here.

I can see how this was a bit of a shock, even if Kirino's reaction seems a bit extreme, especially for someone strongly implied to be in an incestuous relationship with her brother! But, on the other hand, it seems like she saw it coming, when she figured out (though Kuroneko denied it), that it was, in fact Kuroneko herself who kissed Ayase, so she must have kinda seen this coming since she discovered their BDSM lifestyle. It am interested to see how Kirino comes to terms with this... maybe once she takes it upon herself to read up on Kuroneko and Ayase's lifestyle herself, she'll even come home to onii-chan with some ideas!

Also, I wonder if Mai is going to find out about Ayase's relationship, and what her reaction would be.

Yeah I also do feel that Kirino reaction will be sorta extreme when she first heard about it

Because considering Ayase was looking up toward her, and Kirino was treating Ayase almost as a younger sister in the LN. It make sense if she would ended up a bit overreacting and sorta feel betrayed, when her best friend (whom she entrusted her 'sister' to) make a move on her 'younger sister' behind her back... Then the fact that Kuroneko and Ayase are both girls, and they both showed interests toward guy before, making it even less expected for her (even when she should have felt something strange on them)

Don't think she's against relationship that is outside of social norm through

On the chapter writing itself, actually I plan to cut short chapter 9 like the above, and keep the content of their talk for near future revelation. Gonna make the length of the chapter all wacky through ( chapter 8 was twice as long, while chapter 9 is twice as short)

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-23, 19:07

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Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Yeah I also do feel that Kirino reaction will be sorta extreme when she first heard about it

Because considering Ayase was looking up toward her, and Kirino was treating Ayase almost as a younger sister in the LN. It make sense if she would ended up a bit overreacting and sorta feel betrayed, when her best friend (whom she entrusted her 'sister' to) make a move on her 'younger sister' behind her back... Then the fact that Kuroneko and Ayase are both girls, and they both showed interests toward guy before, making it even less expected for her (even when she should have felt something strange on them)

Don't think she's against relationship that is outside of social norm through

On the chapter writing itself, actually I plan to cut short chapter 9 like the above, and keep the content of their talk for near future revelation. Gonna make the length of the chapter all wacky through ( chapter 8 was twice as long, while chapter 9 is twice as short)

Nothing wrong with varying length chapters- I have a couple fics that have been in cold storage on my hard drive for a while now, but the point is, I have plenty of variable length chapters in those. So does pretty much anything written in a chapter format.

In any case, I'm looking forward to the next installment as always, though I will be on vacation for a couple weeks starting tomorrow, but I will have access to the internet for most of it, but I my replies might slow down. Still, I will be checking back and give feedback as much as I can.

As for the sudden reaction, I can understand how it might be a bit of a surprise if two of friends of the same sex essentially revealed they were attracted to each other, but I guess I'm more laid back, as I would be a bit surprised perhaps, but supportive. I suspect after the initial shock wears off, I suspect Kirino will eventually become more supporting Ayase and Kuroneko.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-26, 16:40

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Nothing wrong with varying length chapters- I have a couple fics that have been in cold storage on my hard drive for a while now, but the point is, I have plenty of variable length chapters in those. So does pretty much anything written in a chapter format.

In any case, I'm looking forward to the next installment as always, though I will be on vacation for a couple weeks starting tomorrow, but I will have access to the internet for most of it, but I my replies might slow down. Still, I will be checking back and give feedback as much as I can.

As for the sudden reaction, I can understand how it might be a bit of a surprise if two of friends of the same sex essentially revealed they were attracted to each other, but I guess I'm more laid back, as I would be a bit surprised perhaps, but supportive. I suspect after the initial shock wears off, I suspect Kirino will eventually become more supporting Ayase and Kuroneko.

Got some sudden family commitment so ended up missing out the whole weekend and messed up my plan. But it turned well eventually so felt like it's worth it.

So i'm typing chapter 10 right now (as I decided to keep the chapter 9 short). Hopefully nothing will interrupt and i will finish in couple of hours. There is a part midway I'm still stuck with through, so it could take longer, gonna depend on my mood xD

Yeah just take your holiday properly, sounded like you deserved it after those busy weeks ^^

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-26, 19:36

Chapter 10, first draft. I literally haven't even reread it for proof reading yet. Probably will do it later when I have refreshed my mind:

Spoiler for Chapter 10:

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Soon after we finished our talks and Kirino had given me some useful advice. I got a call from Ayase asking me to pick up some sugar on the way home as we were running out.

It was Ayase’s turn to cook today, and that call just confirmed that she will be home for dinner.

Such a good timing. Everything definitely flew my way today….

Not to mention, at least there is still 50-50 chance that Kirino didn’t know that I was talking about me and Ayase. It’s not like in high school where she knew exactly how many friends do I have outside of our circle…

…or that’s what I hoped….

Anyway…

I missed the train back so couldn’t get home till near dinner time. As I opened up the door to our apartment, Ayase was right there near the door step waiting for me, still wearing her pink apron and animal slipper…

“Ah, Kuroneko. Welcome home.”

“I’m…back”

“I just finished up cooking dinner, please sit down. Dinner will be ready in minutes…”

“Wait… that...”

“Don’t be so formal. Let me take your bag back to your room for you. Sit down, Kuroneko… Your favourite show will start soon.”

Ayase took my bag, and my coat off me. Then smiled back as she walked toward my room…

“I also cooked your favourite burger today, you said it was delicious last time right…?”

“…”

Gulp

This was actually the reason why I had to go consulting it with Kirino, rather than trying to handle it myself.

Since our last time, Ayase had started to act really friendly toward me…

…over friendly in fact…

She has been going out of her way to do her part of the housework. And specifically did everything to please me whenever she can. And she always kept that business smile on her the whole time…

Professional model is scary, how could they manage to smile like that 24/7?

I didn’t realise that being treated like one of those heroine in host clubs manga would feel so suffocate .

…..

“Here is yours Kuroneko..”

“Ah, thank”

“Taste that burger, Kuroneko. I tried something special today…”

“Ah, ok. Thank you for the meal”

“How does it taste….?”

“It is really good, the spicing was perfect…”

It really is…

“Ehehehe… I am glad that it’s to your liking…♪♪♪”

Ayase didn’t even start eating until a bit later, and just spent the first couple of minutes there to watch me eating….

…Still with that smile on her face…

Uhhh…..

This is too awkward….

If that was really Ayase. Not some shape-shifting creature sent by the dark realm to assassin me. Then I need someone to kill me right now…

I planned to wait until after dinner, but I don’t think I can alst till then…

“Say, Ayase. Can I ask you something..?

“Don’t be silly, Ku.Ro.Ne.Ko . Ask me anything…”

Let’s see. What did Kirino say again?

‘…that girl sounded like a very innocent and naïve girl. So tell your friend don’t be so upfront with it. Just keep things subtle and slowly confirm the other girl’s true feeling first’.

Got it, Kirino…

“Ayase, do you want to *beep* me”

Ayase dropped her chopstick. Her eyes wide open with shock…

“…Kuroneko…what did you just say…?”

“I mean, Ayase. Do you want us to %$^&, or &@#$&, or…”

“I heard it the first time already….”

Ayase face turned as red as a cooked shrimp as she buried her face into her hands in embarrassment and muttered out:

“That is sexual harassment, Kuroneko. I will kill you. Then call police on you….”

Ah. Welcome back, Ayase.

“So… Ayase, about that…”

“…please stop saying those vulgar words… ”

Even her ears and neck is red with embarrassment now. As she still buried her face completely onto both hands

“Sorry, Ayase….”

“…”

“I’m sorry that I tried to brush it off when you kissed me last time.”

“…”

“So I just wanted to be real straight forward with you today.”

Actually I already anticipated this level of responses from her. I guess I did secretly want to tease her up a bit

“So Ayase, let’s put it in a more pleasant way… “

I tried to select the words more carefully this time

“Would it turn you on if I let you embracing my naked body …”

“…”

“…”

“A minute…”

“?!?”

“Give me a minute to recollect my mind…”

So still burying her face inside her palms, Ayase started to make some deep breath to calm herself down. Then as a minute nearly passed, she looked up toward me, still blushed all over her face, before glanced her eyes side way….

“I don’t know…. I never had such dirty thought about you, Kuroneko….”

“But you gave me such a lewd deep kiss last time right…?”

“I don’t know. I don’t know….”

She shook her head vigorously…

“I… I just thought that you were so cute. And before I realised it, I have already kissed you.”

Ayase now glanced down the table….

“… but. But after you just brushed it off, my chest started to hurt so much… So… maybe I…”

“…I’m sorry…”

“You were a jerk that time, Kuroneko…. How could you response… that way…to a maiden… first kiss…”

That probably reminded Ayase of that painful memory, as tears started to roll down her cheeks…

I get up my seat, and walked to her side of table. Still standing up, I swing my arms around Ayase head and embrace her face it into my chest…

“I’m sorry. Because you looked like you were regretting that kiss… So … I didn’t know ….”

Ayase started to sob a bit more in my arm. This poor girl…

“I …*sob*…. I thought that I was rejected…*sob*… I was afraid that you…you … will be disgusted by me… *”

“There’s no way I would….”

“… *sob*….I don’t want you… to leave…..*sob* Loneli… … I was so afraid ….you will *sob* … So I tried to be… a good friend…”

And I thought she was trying to seduce me these past few days…

“Don’t leave ….Kuroneko… I will try….Anything …*sob*… you want”

“Stop being silly, Ayase. There’s no way that I will leave you…”

“…”

“You already bid your soul to me. I have that eternal contract to uphold to”

“…”

My words slowly calmed Ayase down, as Ayase has stopped crying, but she still buried her face deep inside my chest.

“… Ayase…”

Kirino’s words started to play inside my head: ‘So how did ‘you’ feel about it…?’

“You know….that kiss…. I didn’t hate it…”

“…”

“…however….”

“…despite my wisdom has lasted for millenniums, but unfortunately this body of mine is still of a mortal…”

“…. I myself still struggle to define a human romantic relationship… or the nature of our ritual even…. “

“That’s why…Ayase….”

Kirino advices once again flashed on my heads

“…how’s about we try going out until the end of this year…?”

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-26, 20:51

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“Ayase, do you want to *beep* me”

Ayase dropped her chopstick. Her eyes wide open with shock…

“…Kuroneko…what did you just say…?”

“I mean, Ayase. Do you want us to %$^&, or &@#$&, or…”

OK, well that was definitely a very forward of her! Give it time Kuroneko, Give it time. You've clearly triggered all the right flags with Ayase though.

Once again, another excellent installment in the continuing story of Ayase and Kuroneko's relationship. I look forward to seeing what they get up to next and, for that matter, how their other friends- particularly Mai- react to it.

risingstar3110 · 2015-07-27, 04:50

Still haven't gotten time to proof-reading yet.... I probably will do it later >_<

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Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

OK, well that was definitely a very forward of her! Give it time Kuroneko, Give it time. You've clearly triggered all the right flags with Ayase though.

Once again, another excellent installment in the continuing story of Ayase and Kuroneko's relationship. I look forward to seeing what they get up to next and, for that matter, how their other friends- particularly Mai- react to it.

Thank for the feedback as always. That's what i like about Kuroneko (in the LN) through. Like she fairly bold, and she generally don't like to beat around the bush too much. Still she's a quiet cooldere

One of the reason it took me a fair bit to write this chapter, is I was actually considering whether i should milk on the angst a bit more. But i kinda feel sorry for Ayase if i have to spend a chapter or so write about her coming to term with her defeat. And will make the series a bit over drama~ish and too mood-swinging. So kinda skip that. When planning I also thought of writing the whole conversation between Kirino and Kuroneko out. But I think it's better to keep it hiding from the audience and only revealing it a bit at time (make it feel less repetitive too). Not to mention, I think the main narrator of the series is still Ayase, so we should not know too much about what Ayase doesn't...

It gonna be a short Volume. As i am planning for the Vol 2 Epilogue next. Probably a good time to start the next arc? Hopefully this time with some more BDSM. As their relationship progression should allow things to step up a bit (but not too much through, it should be a big gap going between light BDSM and more hardcore stuffs, unless i go for time skip)

SPARTAN 119 · 2015-07-27, 22:25

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Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Still haven't gotten time to proof-reading yet.... I probably will do it later >_<

Thank for the feedback as always. That's what i like about Kuroneko (in the LN) through. Like she fairly bold, and she generally don't like to beat around the bush too much. Still she's a quiet cooldere

One of the reason it took me a fair bit to write this chapter, is I was actually considering whether i should milk on the angst a bit more. But i kinda feel sorry for Ayase if i have to spend a chapter or so write about her coming to term with her defeat. And will make the series a bit over drama~ish and too mood-swinging. So kinda skip that. When planning I also thought of writing the whole conversation between Kirino and Kuroneko out. But I think it's better to keep it hiding from the audience and only revealing it a bit at time (make it feel less repetitive too). Not to mention, I think the main narrator of the series is still Ayase, so we should not know too much about what Ayase doesn't...

It gonna be a short Volume. As i am planning for the Vol 2 Epilogue next. Probably a good time to start the next arc? Hopefully this time with some more BDSM. As their relationship progression should allow things to step up a bit (but not too much through, it should be a big gap going between light BDSM and more hardcore stuffs, unless i go for time skip)

As for time skips, really, it is up for you. I will say, however, unless the exposition is properly written, time skips can be confusing to readers. That said, I suspect it would be better to go from light to more "mid-tier" activities over the next volume or two before Ayase and Kuroneko really go hardcore into BDSM.