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[dniv]

Originally Posted by demino_hellsin

"Such misfortune!"

A young man's cries could be heard coming from a certain truck. This truck was all black. On closer inspection, it was less a truck and more of a van. This was the vehicle used by anti-skill in both deployment of operatives and arrest of criminals. This was a four wheel vehicle affectionately known as "the wagon". The wagon was wedged into an alleyway of district 7 of academy city. Considering how the brick walls were all scratched up and discolored, sparks literally flew when the driver of the wagon recklessly drove the vehicle into the alleyway. Inside, there was another voice other than that of a young man's. if one listened closely enough, this other voice was breathing heavily, as if it were in the middle of heavy activity. Those breaths in short gasps and from the pitch and tone, one could only tell it was from a grown woman.

"Urrghh! How did it end up like this!?"

The voice of the woman breathed heavily as she continued her labored breaths.

"That should be my line! I didn't ask for any of this!"

It was the young man, and he sounded very distraught.

"You looked like you were enjoying yourself just a little while ago though.", the woman flatly pointed out.

"I was relieved! I thought you guys were here to save the day! And me! Mostly me!"

The woman clucked her tongue at that comment. "Well that was assuming of you."

"I'm assuming!? Well I'm not the one going around cuffing people on a hunch!"

"Well we all make mistakes alright?"

The woman seemed to be pulling at the cute card as she played dumb in the slyest way she could.

"Don't you dare use that face with me! This position is uncomfortable enough as is!"

"It's not like I wanted to be in this position either!"

Both sighed exasperatedly. If only circumstances had been different.

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Spoiler for A night you'd want to forget:

She wasn't supposed to be out here tonight. Though she didn't really care, Yomikawa Aiho really wanted to get some sleep right about now. It was always well and good to skip a few days sleep for the good of the kids, and they were trained not to sleep for days on end. But it still didn't make them any less human. What's more, Aiho had just come back from a week long operation where she'd spent the last three sleepless nights cracking down on more labs doing illegal experiments on kids. Tonight's mission was another crackdown. It seemed there was a group of actively dangerous skill outs in district 17. Anti-skill was tasked to resolve the situation before any more incidents could occur. Due to past incidents, The assigned unit was sent out fully equipped with a 12 man squad.

"This is a bit too much isn't it?", Yomikawa grunted as she checked the straps on her stab-proof armor.

"Well not really.", an older anti-skill with a bald spot and glasses explained sitting next to her. "This particular group seems to be heavily armed themselves. Actually it might not be fair to call them a group. Sources say they number over thirty around these parts. All our regular patrols didn't stand a chance and got taken out through sheer numbers. They somehow manage to get away, but anti-skill vehicles and equipment were lost in the process.".

Aiho whistled, "They certainly sound dangerous. Is this why I was asked to tag along?".

A nod, "Yes, that's right. Originally, we only planned to send in a six man group to take down the whole group. But reports came in saying that they were being backed by a much larger team. We're unsure if its more skillouts but the anti-skill who've encountered them before said those children were very well armed even before stealing anti-skill equipment from the patrols. So we decided to increase the number at the last minute.".

"Ugh, what a pain. I like keeping the peace but I hate having to face off against children."

The man smiled pityingly and placed an encouraging hand on her shoulder.

"I know you're still hung up on that incident, but we need you here right now Aiho. Student suppression operations may have become your last choice of assignment but you're the best at this. We need those skills now."

"I know, I know."

Yomikawa blew away a stray strand of long hair that had escaped her ponytail.

"I just hope things don't go the way of the worst."

"Hahaha!", the oldder man laughed jovially. "Well if things do look like they'd go bad. I'm expecting you to pull this old timer out of there miss riot shield.".

Aiho gave a displeased look at the sudden nickname. All the same she just sighed. She had to focus on the upcoming operation. From that little talk and the thick dossier shoved into her hands the second she reached HQ, something told her that tonight was going to be far from just a regular operation.

The truck came to a silent stop in front of an alleyway. It looked like it was barely used. Trash and slimey fluids smattered all over the pavement. The smell was nauseating but to the anti-skill who worked this job for years, it was just something that came packed and parceled. Darkness stretched out in front of Aiho as she alighted the vehicle. The inky black anti-skill uniform blending in well. Sounds of weapons being armed and double checked brought uneasiness to Aiho's mind. She still didn't approve of using fire arms on children, even these are just rubber bullets.

What Smokingferret said. This is great

[SmokinFerret88]

The chatper...almost...completed....GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAH!~

Someone, please, shoot me!!!!!!!!!!

[dniv]

Originally Posted by SmokinFerret88

The chatper...almost...completed....GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAH!~

Someone, please, shoot me!!!!!!!!!!

Lol. I feel bad for you. I'm working on my story much less religiously so I find your work ethic rather impressive. Granted... it's partially because I have a job for the next 10 weeks ... my story/book needs better ideas... so I always like reading excellent things in order to get ideas...

[SmokinFerret88]

I've actually been slacking a lot lately, but that's mainly due to the fact that I'm distracted.

That I can blame on Tomb Raider, Mass Effect, and Battlefield 3. Yeah, those three = omg this game is awesome/omfg screw this game moments.

But it's pretty much done right now. Though I doubt a lot of people are gonna be happy with this entire chapter focusing around ORDER, but I could honestly care less. I didn't really have much time to give Sakurai and the rest a proper introduction; so this chapter's dedicated to putting a bit more depth into most of them. It's only fair in my opinion, since the previous chapter had all of ITEM, so doing the same for ORDER would give people some insight, you know?

The problem I have is that I don't know if I wanna end this chapter the way I have it. I could write more, but I've already extended passed my WC quota....so I'm at a loss.

[demino_hellsin]

Don't think too much bout word count. Just let the story progress as it should. Still workng on tht set of circumstances myself. You could say in this case that Touma is really... "Unfortunate"

[SmokinFerret88]

Word count helps me balance out things, progression, scene placement, those sorts of things. If I know I only have, say, 4000 words to use for one person's scene, then I apply the appropriate information. I'm wordy, yes, but the details and such that many people complain about are things that still serve a purpose in the scene.

Still working on that set of circumstances myself. You could say in this case that Touma is really... "Unfortunate"

Dare I ask, how unfortunate are we talkin' this time?

[R.LocK]

If you don't like how the chapter ends why not to continue it a bit further?
I don't have a problem with wordcount, eh... I'd drop a chapter if it has more than 17 parts, though... Hopefully, there won't be any chapter like that...except for transition chapters, maybe?

[Ilidsor]

So... I'm stuck at an impass again. I just can't decide what fic I want to write. I seem to have a serious problem If anybody wants to cast a vote I'll probably just pick that one.

1. Touma's Busy Day: Touma has a really really busy day. A ton of problems including; a Kihara trying to kill him, a magician mind controlling/kidnapping Fukiyose, an underground magic cult trying to summon a demon, Kuroko getting kidnapped by her own stalker, an Islamic magic cabal of four beautiful women trying to force him to marry them all, and much much more. Just how much trouble can Touma's misfortune give him one on measly day?

2. (Currently untitled): Accelerator is forced to act as the body guard to a super popular idol. Can he withstand the forces trying to kill her, WORST's teasing, Last Orders jealousy, and his own incredible annoyance at the situation?

I already lost the temptaion to do those other fics... I'm sure I'll do them eventually though.

[demino_hellsin]

@ferret: so much so that Touma will cry.

@Ilidsor: Touma's day sounds like Jack Bauer's 24

[dniv]

Originally Posted by Ilidsor

So... I'm stuck at an impass again. I just can't decide what fic I want to write. I seem to have a serious problem If anybody wants to cast a vote I'll probably just pick that one.

1. Touma's Busy Day: Touma has a really really busy day. A ton of problems including; a Kihara trying to kill him, a magician mind controlling/kidnapping Fukiyose, an underground magic cult trying to summon a demon, Kuroko getting kidnapped by her own stalker, an Islamic magic cabal of four beautiful women trying to force him to marry them all, and much much more. Just how much trouble can Touma's misfortune give him one on measly day?

2. (Currently untitled): Accelerator is forced to act as the body guard to a super popular idol. Can he withstand the forces trying to kill her, WORST's teasing, Last Orders jealousy, and his own incredible annoyance at the situation?

I already lost the temptaion to do those other fics... I'm sure I'll do them eventually though.

2 if you make the idol meigo.

1 otherwise. I want to see both badly. They sound hilarious!!! XD

[Ilidsor]

@Ilidsor: Touma's day sounds like Jack Bauer's 24

That's sort of of the idea. It'll be 2-3 chapters each depicting 4-6 hours.

2 if you make the idol meigo.

Nah I haven't seen the movie yet (I'm a english subs only purist), so I couldn't possibly do it right. The idol will be kind of shallow and expect Accelerator to act very subserviant and be all gaga over her. Which of course he won't be.

[dniv]

Originally Posted by Ilidsor

That's sort of of the idea. It'll be 2-3 chapters each depicting 4-6 hours.



Nah I haven't seen the movie yet (I'm a english subs only purist), so I couldn't possibly do it right. The idol will be kind of shallow and expect Accelerator to act very subserviant and be all gaga over her. Which of course he won't be.

Lol that works too. I haven't seen the movie either actually. I'm only a stream watcher when I already pretty much know the source material. Railgun S might be the only exception to this because I already do it every Friday morning anyway...

I was talking about from PSP and other materials including the Endymion manga in english. But I understand, I can't wait to see #2. #1 sounds great as well. BTW I didn't say this here. I loved your other story: it was great about the maids.

[SmokinFerret88]

Aaaaaaaaaaaand it's posted!

A Certain World of Darkness - Chapter 11

Hope you all enjoy a look into the minds of Sakurai and the others.

[Welsh_Dragon]

@Ilidsor I vote for Touma's Busy Day

[Ilidsor]

Well Touma's Busy Day wins. I just started the detailed plan for it. I'm 75% done it and I've even managed to work in a little crossover from the Accelerator fic. They'll be happening on the same day.

Originally Posted by SmokinFerret88

Aaaaaaaaaaaand it's posted!

A Certain World of Darkness - Chapter 11

Hope you all enjoy a look into the minds of Sakurai and the others.

Sweet, sucks to have no ITEM but I'll reserve my jugment until I read it tomorrow.

[demino_hellsin]

@ferret: still too much purple prose dude. Overall I found your OC's balanced and interesting. They aren't quite as charming as one would like them to be but they do their job well. I did enjoy the six-wing bisection though. Cheers!

[MrTerrorist]

Originally Posted by Ilidsor

So... I'm stuck at an impass again. I just can't decide what fic I want to write. I seem to have a serious problem If anybody wants to cast a vote I'll probably just pick that one.

1. Touma's Busy Day: Touma has a really really busy day. A ton of problems including; a Kihara trying to kill him, a magician mind controlling/kidnapping Fukiyose, an underground magic cult trying to summon a demon, Kuroko getting kidnapped by her own stalker, an Islamic magic cabal of four beautiful women trying to force him to marry them all, and much much more. Just how much trouble can Touma's misfortune give him one on measly day?

2. (Currently untitled): Accelerator is forced to act as the body guard to a super popular idol. Can he withstand the forces trying to kill her, WORST's teasing, Last Orders jealousy, and his own incredible annoyance at the situation?

I already lost the temptaion to do those other fics... I'm sure I'll do them eventually though.

One please!

[Ilidsor]

Well ask and you shall receive. Behold the power of a day off to write.

I was planning on doing several hours in a chapter but doing just one hour took a little over 3.5k words so I decided to just do one chapter an hour. Hopefully it goes well.

[Ihaxlikenoob]

Hah? So you're Icefriend? Didn't know lol.

[Knowledgeseeker01]

I updated my story, "Of Science and Magics: The Side Stories" a little while back, and it slipped my mind to mention it here. Anyway, here is a link to Chapter 14 for the story, and I hope you will read and enjoy it.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7771256/...e-Side-Stories