Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Dr_Tom]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?

My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.

Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.

ETA: Page Claimed in the name of my roommate deciding to use the bathroom just as I want to shower. D:

Generally, when I do write, I start with only a basic idea and go with it. I let the story write itself which can be a good thing or a bad thing. Good because generally when you just go with things, they seemed less forced. Bad because you can easily write yourself into a mental roadblock and not know where to take it from there. I do have an idea bouncing around in my head that I've been building on for a few years now but have never taken to writing it down in any form yet because I'm afraid the minute I do write it down I will start actually writing it and this needs to be planned and precisely executed if I want to get it the way it's in my head.


OH OH OH!! FIRST PAGE CLAIM!!!!....I claim this page in the name of...More MercurianAngel Nanoha drawings since we've been seriously lacking as of late....if she's willing to give us more of course

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

Hey guys, a question - I've got a writing notebook that I use for jotting down ideas while in class (or for doodling while I'm supposed to be participating in a critique) but I was wondering, how much of your fics are planned out before you write them?

My fics are usually unplanned when I start them and then I go walking around my block with my best friend and we bake them quite a bit. Usually, though, when I go into writing something, I have no idea what I'm doing.

Actually, when you think about it, my Nanoha Fic is sort of a grand experiment in the realms of planning fanfiction, as the plot is completely mapped out.

Week= unplanned 100% save the final part. I write on a whim with no prior planning

SbtB= small goals need to be reached, that's all. Everything else is thought of as I write ( that's why I screwed up the car thing)

all 6th divisions: planned out mentally and thoughts/ideas written down. I write and work in those things.

my one chapter stories: Sat down, started writing with nothing. Normally just one thought or picture.

Generally I don't plan at all ^^;

[Kaix]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Decided, Rise of Techno-Union will be Drawed, Vatican Knigths will be writted, that way the storyes will not interfiere with each other (Although in Vatican Knights maybe I can add some draws of the battles & characters) By the way, Rize of Techno-Union, 2) Skyes of Venganse is like 1/4 ready, it will bereleased in something like 20 of April. Now first chapter of the other:

Vatican Knights

Spoiler for Iniciation:

-cut-

Ah, that really caught my attention! Very, very good. There were some grammar mistakes that make it hard to read though. Maybe you should get somebody to read over it before posting it, or put it once thought a spell checker. Most of them were only typos, but it makes the whole thing hard to read and takes away from the enjoyment. Good job though! I can't wait to read more!

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.18:

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Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.19:

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Spoiler for Week pt.20:

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Hahaha! Fate must really be enjoying it all. I only wonder if it will all end okay... Nanoha seems to be taking the whole thing serious, but...

Originally Posted by ellenoir

Well, I attempted to answer my own challenge for Fatenum, but ultimately I just couldn't seem to get them together: Fate was too pre-occupied with Nanoha and Signum is.. well, Signum. I just couldn't see her hitting on the young Fate.

Spoiler for for Signum to Fate::

-cut-

Oh damn... I'm going to be late for class. I'm not happy with the ending, but I just pushed this out real quick trying to see if I could illuminate on Signum and Fate's relationship. What do you think?

That was good! XD The characters were very much themselves, although it doesn't feel as their relationship would evolve into more than this... But I can definitely see something like that happening!

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

hey everyone, it's April fools day. What sort of pranks would the Nanoha cast pull on each other?

Spoiler for lolz:

[I am fine.] Raising Heart announced. [I am currently playing a prank on my master.]

Nanoha's brow twitched, "I am going to murder that child."

That last part was hilarious! Raising Heart certainly can't keep something to herself!

Nanoha going White Devil mode after all?

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

Spoiler for you asked for it:

XD
Sorry for doing that without permission

OMG! Nanoha's expression... is priceless!!

[markesellus]

@ Evil Rick. I can read over Vatican Knights since its written and fix the mistakes if you want.

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

Spoiler for you asked for it:

XD
Sorry for doing that without permission

awesome picture
it really suits to the story

[Evil Rick]

Hey people, people relax. I was just kidding! >.<
Evil Rick's inner voice: Take note to never post something like that again!!!

O.k, let's forget Drahmin smashing Cage's head

Time to second part

Vatican Knights

Spoiler for Allies:

Time runs like water, to fast that you can't even hold it, but hold it wasn't my intention, I wanted to get stronger, I wanted to get stronger than the Slaves of the Dark, I wanted to get stronger to kill them all!

Years pass and that little girl grow up, I was 16 years old when it was time to my first mission, to my first strike, to my first stape for revenge

That day we all were very nervous, we knew we could die, yes, we... me and my friends, my family, my partners.

First was Karil Nightstar, since that dark night she and me became like sisters, ja... all those years of training in the monastery were very funny with her, she always was at my side, grabbed of my leg or clothes, crying and saying "Vivio I'm scare!!!" She asked to me all nights if I could go and slept with her. My best friend, she had also grow up into a brave woman, but still she was looking for her friend Vivio in "Scary" times

Alphonse Cross was also a great friend of me and Karil, a very handsome boy, like 17 in that time, very pollite and well clothed, and also very skilled in the esgrima, although me and the other girls always make mock of him, he was very shy, God he got like a tomato every time we make him jokes like "Dear Alphonse, could you please hold this while I take my clothes of?" I will never forget my dear Alphonse, Along with him was Helga Daymon, like 16 in that time, very iperactive, always with some crazy idea, very sarcastic and of course, always waiting for any chance to torture the poor Alphonse, but she was always with a radiant smile in her face abalible to meelt any "Heart of Rock"

By last, It was Jasper Green, 17 in that time, the Optimist "It can be worse" was his leme, inside of me, he was like an example, when Jasper was a kid, he got burned in a Fire, he ended desfigurated and always be with us covered with bends in all his body, althoug he always saied "It can be worse"

This was my family, they were those who I wished to protect, the time was coming, our first challenge, our first task, our firsside by side fight...

I was not scare, I knew we were going to do it...

NOTE: Actually I'm working on Draws of Karil Nightstar, Alphonse Cross, Helga Daymon and Jasper Green, soon you will know how they look

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Vatican Knights

Spoiler for Allies:

Time runs like water, to fast that you can't even hold it, but hold it wasn't my intention, I wanted to get stronger, I wanted to get stronger than the Slaves of the Dark, I wanted to get stronger to kill them all!

Years pass and that little girl grow up, I was 16 years old when it was time to my first mission, to my first strike, to my first stape for revenge

That day we all were very nervous, we knew we could die, yes, we... me and my friends, my family, my partners.

First was Karil Nightstar, since that dark night she and me became like sisters, ja... all those years of training in the monastery were very funny with her, she always was at my side, grabbed of my leg or clothes, crying and saying "Vivio I'm scare!!!" She asked to me all nights if I could go and slept with her. My best friend, she had also grow up into a brave woman, but still she was looking for her friend Vivio in "Scary" times

Alphonse Cross was also a great friend of me and Karil, a very handsome boy, like 17 in that time, very pollite and well clothed, and also very skilled in the esgrima, although me and the other girls always make mock of him, he was very shy, God he got like a tomato every time we make him jokes like "Dear Alphonse, could you please hold this while I take my clothes of?" I will never forget my dear Alphonse, Along with him was Helga Daymon, like 16 in that time, very iperactive, always with some crazy idea, very sarcastic and of course, always waiting for any chance to torture the poor Alphonse, but she was always with a radiant smile in her face abalible to meelt any "Heart of Rock"

By last, It was Jasper Green, 17 in that time, the Optimist "It can be worse" was his leme, inside of me, he was like an example, when Jasper was a kid, he got burned in a Fire, he ended desfigurated and always be with us covered with bends in all his body, althoug he always saied "It can be worse"

This was my family, they were those who I wished to protect, the time was coming, our first challenge, our first task, our firsside by side fight...

I was not scare, I knew we were going to do it...

NOTE: Actually I'm working on Draws of Karil Nightstar, Alphonse Cross, Helga Daymon and Jasper Green, soon you will know how they look

I liked the first line. Some spelling mistakes that got me confused but still good. So are al the battle scenes coming in the next update?

[Kaix]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Time to second part

Vatican Knights

Spoiler for Allies:

Time runs like water, to fast that you can't even hold it, but hold it wasn't my intention, I wanted to get stronger, I wanted to get stronger than the Slaves of the Dark, I wanted to get stronger to kill them all!

Years pass and that little girl grow up, I was 16 years old when it was time to my first mission, to my first strike, to my first stape for revenge

That day we all were very nervous, we knew we could die, yes, we... me and my friends, my family, my partners.

First was Karil Nightstar, since that dark night she and me became like sisters, ja... all those years of training in the monastery were very funny with her, she always was at my side, grabbed of my leg or clothes, crying and saying "Vivio I'm scare!!!" She asked to me all nights if I could go and slept with her. My best friend, she had also grow up into a brave woman, but still she was looking for her friend Vivio in "Scary" times

Alphonse Cross was also a great friend of me and Karil, a very handsome boy, like 17 in that time, very pollite and well clothed, and also very skilled in the esgrima, although me and the other girls always make mock of him, he was very shy, God he got like a tomato every time we make him jokes like "Dear Alphonse, could you please hold this while I take my clothes of?" I will never forget my dear Alphonse, Along with him was Helga Daymon, like 16 in that time, very iperactive, always with some crazy idea, very sarcastic and of course, always waiting for any chance to torture the poor Alphonse, but she was always with a radiant smile in her face abalible to meelt any "Heart of Rock"

By last, It was Jasper Green, 17 in that time, the Optimist "It can be worse" was his leme, inside of me, he was like an example, when Jasper was a kid, he got burned in a Fire, he ended desfigurated and always be with us covered with bends in all his body, althoug he always saied "It can be worse"

This was my family, they were those who I wished to protect, the time was coming, our first challenge, our first task, our firsside by side fight...

I was not scare, I knew we were going to do it...

NOTE: Actually I'm working on Draws of Karil Nightstar, Alphonse Cross, Helga Daymon and Jasper Green, soon you will know how they look

Quite, very good! I'm looking forward to see how they all look! (I like their names btw! They sound cool, yet 'ordinary' in the same time.)

[AshLikeSnow]

For those interested:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4171760/1/

A dark fic I wrote, which admittedly may not suit everyone. It was an experiment though, so feedback would be welcome.

[Enraptured]

Originally Posted by ellenoir

Well, I attempted to answer my own challenge for Fatenum, but ultimately I just couldn't seem to get them together: Fate was too pre-occupied with Nanoha and Signum is.. well, Signum. I just couldn't see her hitting on the young Fate.

Spoiler for Signum to Fate:

Once again, their swords clash with a resounding twang, both women being forced back from one another with the force. Signum feints, twirling to catch Fate off guard before sidestepping her sweeping return, putting out a hand to push the smaller girl to the ground, the sound of Bardiche hitting the ground echoing throughout the workout room. The woman watches with scorn as the blonde breathes heavy, eyes clenched as she stays on the ground, seemingly finished with the round.

"This is absurd, Testarossa," Signum says quietly, "No wonder you've failed both of your exams, you're a pathetic excuse for an officer right now."

Red eyes snap open, glaring balefully up at Signum at the insult, but the fire of defiance and competition that usually burns deep in those eyes, especially as they sparred, is absent; they are glassy and dull, full of pain. When Signum had called her out earlier in the day to spar with her, the girl had refused without so much as a look in her direction, sitting as she had sat for days: rigidly in a chair at Nanoha's side, waiting for the girl to wake up. Annoyance had flashed in those eyes when Signum had forcibly grabbed the girl by the collar and hauled her towards the gym, but she had given in with little real argument, half heartedly attempting to parry and return the advances the other woman had thrown at her, but it had ended up like this each time; with Bardiche knocked out of the girl's hands and Signum towering over her.

"You'll never be able to catch the people who hurt her, never be able to protect her in this state," Signum turns away as she says this, disgust apparent on her face.

Fate sits on the floor, sweat running in rivulets down the side of her face and along her back as she huffs, catching her breath. Loosely, she picks up Bardiche but she is weary of fighting, feeling a bone deep tiredness that aches to be through with the device in her hand, yearns to throw it aside. She grasps it tightly, the metal warm to the touch, the power coursing throughout it steady and familiar; more familiar than Nanoha, Arf... It had been the first thing her mother ever gave her, the first voice that had ever answered her call, but here and now she felt like snapping him in two, for he is silent, incapable of helping her like he always had in the past, as if he refused to talk to her while she was misusing him. Signum was right; there was no way she could protect Nanoha like this. Sighing, she lets her device clatter back to the floor, drawing her knees up disconsolately as she felt tears prick at her eyes.

Sheathing her sword, Signum watches this with a blank face; she is used to Hayate showing emotions such as these, but she has no idea what to do with her sparring partner. She feels a tightness in her chest and a pressure against her lungs at seeing the girl curled around herself, holding onto her knees and looking more like a child than Signum has ever seen her. She wants to knock the girl over and at the same time she wants to pick her up and never let go; Signum knows without a doubt, that other than her mistress, this girl holds her highest regard but she never thought that she would see her like this, broken and needy. Awkwardly, she kneels beside the blonde, rubbing her hands in uncertainty; she is unused to offering physical comfort but she can't find it inside herself to continue berating the girl into action, leaving her with little recourse. Snaking an arm around the girls shoulder, she stiffly pulls the younger girl to her chest, holding tight against the weak struggles until they both are settled on the floor, the blonde a heap in Signum's arms.

"She's going to need you to be strong when she wakes up, Testarossa, don't fail her now. And I can't stand to see you like this, so please don't fail me, either," Signum whispers against the blond hair, closing her eyes as she tightens her hold, glad to feel no resistance. Neither moves for an endless second as Fate gets her breathing under control, both content to hold onto eachother in this moment of weakness, unguarded and vulnerable.

Signum enjoys the warmth and the tickling sensation of Fate inhaling and exhaling onto her collarbone, but pulls back as soon as she feels the other girl calm herself. She wants to comfort Fate, but not take away her dignity. Pulling out of the embrace with a blush on her face, she picks up the girls weapon and stands quickly, offering a hand out for the blonde to take.

"Now fight me for real, okay? I can't wait around all day for you to get it together. If you're going to pass the exam this time around, you need to at least attempt to beat me, if you can," Signum says lightly, tugging the girl up and handing Bardiche over, before stepping back into her battle stance.

Fate stares at the staff in her hands, before looking intently at the pink haired woman. Blinking, she nods, incapable of saying anything; instead she raises Bardiche defiantly, a circle of magical energy growing out underneath her as she powers up properly, ready to go on the offensive. Signum smiles at this as she pulls her own device out of it's sheath, eager to test Fate's resolve. Stepping forward, she swings down, is blocked, sidesteps.With a grunt, she blocks an attack, twirling as she did earlier, a second too slow, this time finding Fate behind her, too quick to follow.

"Thank you," Fate whispers into her ear, causing a shiver to race down her back, before flashing away and attacking from the side. Signum vows that no matter what happens to Nanoha, she will always be here to pull Fate back up, to push her forward when the brunette couldn't, even if it meant beating her senseless. Twisting, she once again knocked Bardiche from Fate's hands, but this time the blonde quickly picks it up again, attacking back with vigor, a spark in her eyes that had been missing for weeks.

Oh damn... I'm going to be late for class. I'm not happy with the ending, but I just pushed this out real quick trying to see if I could illuminate on Signum and Fate's relationship. What do you think?

AHH finally some fatenum action! <3
Fatenum ftw! ;D That was awesome, it actually made me tear a bit
It really captures their relationship (or what I'd want it to be anyway xD)
Fatenum has got to be my fave pairing alongside nanofate
Anyway, really nice job on the story, and will there be a continuation? -pokes hopefully :K

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Week pt.19:

Dinner was relatively easy thanks to preparing everything earlier. Unfortunetly Nanoha had insisted on helping cook and I found myself wishing to spend more time in the kitchen with her. I had cooked with her several time before in the past but it was a little different this time. Purposely bumping into each other and being extra flirty about things we would have normally just ignored.

The food was delicious, mainly thanks to Nanoha's ability to cook a lot better than myself. Growing up I had always microwaved things or Arf prepared it for me. Once adopted my new mother had insisted on cooking every night and making my lunches as well. I should really learn how to cook, then I could make Nanoha lunch every day.

"You're doing it again," She spoke to me with a humorous tone in her voice. "You're all giddy again."

"Ah, sorry," I flushed, slowly chewing my last bite. "I've been a little out of it lately." A long gulp of milk helped me get my head on straight again and notice she was also finished.

Together we did the dishes and had a rather large bubble fight that ended with me losing. Although we were both drenched even after cleaning up the floor we still crashed back on my bed upstairs without drying off.

Nanoha leaned against my side, allowing my arm to rest over her shoulders without protest. "So," She began while wiggling her feet stretched out on the bed. "What now?"

That's a good question. "Um, I didn't think this far." I was embarrassed at the laugh but still found it cute that she didn't seem to mind. Maybe I could ask her how it's going? An update would be nice. "Ne, Nanoha, about this week-"

"Shh," She shushed me. "I told you before, Honey, that doesn't matter right now. I'm your girlfriend." To prove her point she wrapped both arms around my waist and buried her face against my chest. I leaned over a little onto my back and had her simply lay on me completely.

"Sorry," I apologized softly, stroking her damp hair that still had soap in it.

"Mm," She hummed and shifted slightly, eyes closing. "Ne?"

"Yes?"

"Can I stay the night?" A small yawn made me realize that she was about to fall asleep after eating so much and playing.

"Sure," I leaned back on the pillows but Nanoha only moved up enough to rest her head under my chin, still on top of me fully.

"Is this uncomfortable?" Her breath tickled my skin.

Honestly? It was a little hard to breathe. "No, you're fine." I wrapped my arms around her small waist and hugged her lightly. "Are you comfortable?"

"Very," Her voice trailed off. "Sweet dreams."

"You too." I kissed her hair softly and saw her shift enough to look at me. A gentle gaze yet again and slowly her lips descended to kiss just below my neck. Her body moved slightly and she rested against me yet again.

I wasn't sure how long I laid there, awake, stroking her hair, but I did know that her steady breathing against me and warmth of her body was keeping me up. How did lovers sleep like this? With their hearts pounding so hard? Here in my arms, the girl I dreamed about, was dreaming peacefully...

But I didn't want to sleep. I could enjoy this... I sighed contently and rested my eyes, concentrating on the gentle exhales against my neck, and the soft warm body against me...

and drifted off.

Spoiler for Week pt.20:

This was a first. I have slept with Nanoha several times since we became friends but this was defiantly the first time to awake like this. My eyes opened slowly, mind groggy. Nanoha was just waking up as well it seemed. Somehow during the night we had rolled onto our sides and cuddled. Her leg was bent at the knee and was brought all the way up between my legs. Her arms were around me completly and I had half a mouthfull of her hair.

"Fate...-chan?" She was still mostly asleep, trying to blink away her tiredness while moving away just enough to look at me. As the realization dawned on both of us we each colored and looked downwards to escape each other's sight. "Um... morning..."

"Morning..." I felt suddenly cold when her leg retreated from between mine. "Sleep well?"

"Like a rock." We each spared a glance at the same time. She flushed and I smiled.

"Good," I moved closer to her, pulling her against my body again. "Want to sleep a little more?"

"Um," She fidgeted a little before going quiet. "...Yeah." This time I slid my knee between her legs and cuddled. Her top leg wrapped over mine and slid down to get comfortable. Arms laid over my back and her breath came against my neck again.

Neither of us slept. Instead we simply played with each other's hair, talking softly. I was flirting openly, running my finger along her spine up under her shirt, and then resting it on her side. In return she mimicked my actions and spoke against my neck. I wasn't really aware of how long we stayed like that but when we finally did pull apart I felt a strange sensation of emptiness grip at my front.

"Um," Nanoha blushed again, laughing lightly. "My bra is all out of whack." To prove her point she reached under her shirt and adjusted it. I wanted to tease her about it but mine was the same way. I was amazed we could even sleep in them like we did. But then again, I was sleeping with her... "H-Honey?" Nanoha covered her face with both hands. "Don't... don't look at me like that."

"But you're pretty," I insisted, slowly taking her wrist and encouraging her to reveal herself. "There you go."

"But... my hair is messy and my face hasn't been washed yet..." She looked at me with a half pout. Not being able to help it, I leaned forward and kissed her on the corner of her left eye. "Fate-chan..."

"Yes, My Angel?" Another small gasp and blush.

"D-don't..."

I moved forward and hugged her tightly. "Sorry," I told her gently, holding her to my body to sooth the cold that gripped me when we parted.

"... It's okay." She hugged me back. Several moments passed in silence before we parted, but she still hid herself form my sight. "Let's...Go do something?"

"Yeah, I'd like that." I tried to make her look at me but she covered her face again, ears burning red. "You're so cute."

Alrighttt, Week is back in action! xD
Awesome additions as usual, really sweet nanofate moments
Hopefully it ends well though, nanoha seems to be having doubts o_O
anw, gj on this one! (:

[Enraptured]

Yay I have finally perfected the art of multi-quoting!
Anyway, sorry for double posting, but

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

mmmm sorry it took long...had to finish some homework T_T

Spoiler for Eyepatch!Zafira:

DA Linky~

Arrgh that pict is so full of win! Zaffy needs more screentime :/
Anyway, loving the scar on the wolf-form's eye <3
Zaffy's pose is pwn too!

Originally Posted by AshLikeSnow

For those interested:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4171760/1/

A dark fic I wrote, which admittedly may not suit everyone. It was an experiment though, so feedback would be welcome.

I'm becoming more and more of a fan of your works
Though it's not the usual cheery sweet nanofate fluff I usually read, it's really good, I don't know, it made me feel depressed (in a good way I guess? ) abt the whole fate death thing, you can really pull the angst/drama off, good job!
...
Okay I don't think I make much sense, since I'm more used to lurking than posting reviews, but what I'm trying to say that your works are really moving

(did that help? xD)

[Satashi]

Title Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Fate
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links:Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4, Part 5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8, Part 9, Part 10, Part 11, Part 12, Part 13, Part 14, Part 15, Part 16, Part 17,

Title: Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Nanoha
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links: Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4, Part 5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8,

Title: Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Vivio
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links: Part 1

Fate:Unclaimed
Nanoha:Unclaimed
Vivio: Unclaimed

(Did I miss any?)

[mercurianangel]

Originally Posted by Dr_Tom

OH OH OH!! FIRST PAGE CLAIM!!!!....I claim this page in the name of...More MercurianAngel Nanoha drawings since we've been seriously lacking as of late....if she's willing to give us more of course

*blush*
Oh believe, me I'm willing XD
Tis just that I'm stuck in what's supposed to be the hardest quarter of pharm school T_T
However, Satashi and I (well...Satashi's part is technically already done XD) are working on the Emerald Bell project that I hope you will enjoy~

[Keroko]

Looking forward to that. ^_^

Oh, by the way, do you mind if I use your lovelly Hair Down Vivio art for one of my OC's? Adult Vivio and Keroko look a lot alike, so it would be great to use.

Blame Seven Arcs for making Vivio's design match my design for Keroko so much.

[Satashi]

So yeah, I'm in a playful mood today so....

Have a drunk Fate!

Spoiler for Drunk!Fate:

It was another one of those nights. Her head stung, vision slightly waving as she stumbled next to the wall with one hand on it for support. 'Why did I let them talk me into drinking so much?' Blond hair fell across her eyes and was moved away with a weak hand. 'Sure my friend got the promotion he had been working so hard for but... Seven shots? I'm shocked I didn't pass out...' Her tolerance for alcohol was low, and if not for her full stomach -which might be empty soon- she would have surely lost it at the bar.

Her door was leaned against as she sluggishly tried to keep her hand on the scanner to unlock the entrance. "I'm home," She managed out softly. A few steps were taken in before she finally tripped over herself and fell into the arms of her room mate. "... 'allo." She groaned, way past the 'fun' part of being drunk.

"You're wasted," Nanoha giggled to herself while trying to pick Fate up without dropping her. "That's the third time this year, do you have a problem?"

"Don't.... don't tease me..." Fate let herself be picked up like a princess and fell against her friend's shoulder. "That's... that's once every... every...."

"About five months." Nanoha informed her with a grin.

"Right... five months... Yeah..." Her mind tried to work. "Mai.... mai bifday.... your... bifdai... an.....an...an..."

"And tonight." Nanoha snickered and sat her down on their bed. "Whoa, don't fall over!" She was glad Fate asked Hayate to take care of Vivio for the night just in case her fellow enforcers did talk her into drinking. "Can you sit here for me?"

"Yes." Fate nodded, watching Nanoha walk away form her and slowly start to turn sideways. Just when she thought her friend would topple over, her face hit the carpet and body fell after her. "Ow..."

"Fate-chaaaaan." Nanoha walked back over to her and lifted her back up to lay on the bed. "Here, I'll just change you myself." Her hands started undoing the buttons on the blonde's shirt.

"Mmm.... Undressing me? So bold."

Nanoha blushed hard, fumbling a moment before picking up. "Jeez, I forgot you get turned on like this..."

"I da' not." Fate purred out the words.

"Shush." She put a finger on her friend's lips. "Close your eyes and rest." To make sure they were closed she moved her face over her friend's and looked into deep red orbs. "Fate-chan?" Her lips were met in a quick kiss. "Mou." Another kiss, a third, and a fourth. Hands snaked around her and she was rolled over. "Fate-chan! Stop!" Another kiss. "Mou-mmph- You're acting- mmm- stop it!"

Fate finally stopped, face looking hurt. "but... I want to kiss you."

Face red, Nanoha shook her head. She and Fate were close, but had yet to cross the line of friends and lovers. "I don't... not like this..."

Fate didn't seem to understand, mind still groggy from the alcohol. "Oh-kai." Instead she smiled sweetly down at her. "Later? Win nut drank?"

Proposing to pick up later? Surely she would forget this..." Okay," She answered honestly. "We can kiss later."

Fate seemed proud. Her lips turned up in another smile and she hiccuped.

Nanoha knew that look. "Get off me! NOW!" shoving the blonde away, she grabbed Fate'swaist and hauled her to the bathroom to hold up the hair while Fate lost what was left in her stomach. "Oh gross!"

[krisslanza]

Ah drunk Fate is amusing indeed
Was a nice read And I suspect much more liked then the drunk Fate in School of Lyrical

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Satashi

So yeah, I'm in a playful mood today so....

Have a drunk Fate!

Spoiler for Drunk!Fate:

It was another one of those nights. Her head stung, vision slightly waving as she stumbled next to the wall with one hand on it for support. 'Why did I let them talk me into drinking so much?' Blond hair fell across her eyes and was moved away with a weak hand. 'Sure my friend got the promotion he had been working so hard for but... Seven shots? I'm shocked I didn't pass out...' Her tolerance for alcohol was low, and if not for her full stomach -which might be empty soon- she would have surely lost it at the bar.

Her door was leaned against as she sluggishly tried to keep her hand on the scanner to unlock the entrance. "I'm home," She managed out softly. A few steps were taken in before she finally tripped over herself and fell into the arms of her room mate. "... 'allo." She groaned, way past the 'fun' part of being drunk.

"You're wasted," Nanoha giggled to herself while trying to pick Fate up without dropping her. "That's the third time this year, do you have a problem?"

"Don't.... don't tease me..." Fate let herself be picked up like a princess and fell against her friend's shoulder. "That's... that's once every... every...."

"About five months." Nanoha informed her with a grin.

"Right... five months... Yeah..." Her mind tried to work. "Mai.... mai bifday.... your... bifdai... an.....an...an..."

"And tonight." Nanoha snickered and sat her down on their bed. "Whoa, don't fall over!" She was glad Fate asked Hayate to take care of Vivio for the night just in case her fellow enforcers did talk her into drinking. "Can you sit here for me?"

"Yes." Fate nodded, watching Nanoha walk away form her and slowly start to turn sideways. Just when she thought her friend would topple over, her face hit the carpet and body fell after her. "Ow..."

"Fate-chaaaaan." Nanoha walked back over to her and lifted her back up to lay on the bed. "Here, I'll just change you myself." Her hands started undoing the buttons on the blonde's shirt.

"Mmm.... Undressing me? So bold."

Nanoha blushed hard, fumbling a moment before picking up. "Jeez, I forgot you get turned on like this..."

"I da' not." Fate purred out the words.

"Shush." She put a finger on her friend's lips. "Close your eyes and rest." To make sure they were closed she moved her face over her friend's and looked into deep red orbs. "Fate-chan?" Her lips were met in a quick kiss. "Mou." Another kiss, a third, and a fourth. Hands snaked around her and she was rolled over. "Fate-chan! Stop!" Another kiss. "Mou-mmph- You're acting- mmm- stop it!"

Fate finally stopped, face looking hurt. "but... I want to kiss you."

Face red, Nanoha shook her head. She and Fate were close, but had yet to cross the line of friends and lovers. "I don't... not like this..."

Fate didn't seem to understand, mind still groggy from the alcohol. "Oh-kai." Instead she smiled sweetly down at her. "Later? Win nut drank?"

Proposing to pick up later? Surely she would forget this..." Okay," She answered honestly. "We can kiss later."

Fate seemed proud. Her lips turned up in another smile and she hiccuped.

Nanoha knew that look. "Get off me! NOW!" shoving the blonde away, she grabbed Fate'swaist and hauled her to the bathroom to hold up the hair while Fate lost what was left in her stomach. "Oh gross!"

hm, I think Nanoha will have some problems in the future
I don't think Fate will forget the promise

Originally Posted by AshLikeSnow

For those interested:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4171760/1/

A dark fic I wrote, which admittedly may not suit everyone. It was an experiment though, so feedback would be welcome.

good work
I really enjoyed to read it, you catch ultimate Evil!Nanoha very well
even though the background was very sad

[Kaix]

Originally Posted by AshLikeSnow

For those interested:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4171760/1/

A dark fic I wrote, which admittedly may not suit everyone. It was an experiment though, so feedback would be welcome.

Wow... that was something different. The whole thing was really moving and you did a great job portraying the mood. The ending was simply perfect!

I'll now have to go read your other stuff as well.

Originally Posted by Satashi

So yeah, I'm in a playful mood today so....

Have a drunk Fate!

Spoiler for Drunk!Fate:

It was another one of those nights. Her head stung, vision slightly waving as she stumbled next to the wall with one hand on it for support. 'Why did I let them talk me into drinking so much?' Blond hair fell across her eyes and was moved away with a weak hand. 'Sure my friend got the promotion he had been working so hard for but... Seven shots? I'm shocked I didn't pass out...' Her tolerance for alcohol was low, and if not for her full stomach -which might be empty soon- she would have surely lost it at the bar.

Her door was leaned against as she sluggishly tried to keep her hand on the scanner to unlock the entrance. "I'm home," She managed out softly. A few steps were taken in before she finally tripped over herself and fell into the arms of her room mate. "... 'allo." She groaned, way past the 'fun' part of being drunk.

"You're wasted," Nanoha giggled to herself while trying to pick Fate up without dropping her. "That's the third time this year, do you have a problem?"

"Don't.... don't tease me..." Fate let herself be picked up like a princess and fell against her friend's shoulder. "That's... that's once every... every...."

"About five months." Nanoha informed her with a grin.

"Right... five months... Yeah..." Her mind tried to work. "Mai.... mai bifday.... your... bifdai... an.....an...an..."

"And tonight." Nanoha snickered and sat her down on their bed. "Whoa, don't fall over!" She was glad Fate asked Hayate to take care of Vivio for the night just in case her fellow enforcers did talk her into drinking. "Can you sit here for me?"

"Yes." Fate nodded, watching Nanoha walk away form her and slowly start to turn sideways. Just when she thought her friend would topple over, her face hit the carpet and body fell after her. "Ow..."

"Fate-chaaaaan." Nanoha walked back over to her and lifted her back up to lay on the bed. "Here, I'll just change you myself." Her hands started undoing the buttons on the blonde's shirt.

"Mmm.... Undressing me? So bold."

Nanoha blushed hard, fumbling a moment before picking up. "Jeez, I forgot you get turned on like this..."

"I da' not." Fate purred out the words.

"Shush." She put a finger on her friend's lips. "Close your eyes and rest." To make sure they were closed she moved her face over her friend's and looked into deep red orbs. "Fate-chan?" Her lips were met in a quick kiss. "Mou." Another kiss, a third, and a fourth. Hands snaked around her and she was rolled over. "Fate-chan! Stop!" Another kiss. "Mou-mmph- You're acting- mmm- stop it!"

Fate finally stopped, face looking hurt. "but... I want to kiss you."

Face red, Nanoha shook her head. She and Fate were close, but had yet to cross the line of friends and lovers. "I don't... not like this..."

Fate didn't seem to understand, mind still groggy from the alcohol. "Oh-kai." Instead she smiled sweetly down at her. "Later? Win nut drank?"

Proposing to pick up later? Surely she would forget this..." Okay," She answered honestly. "We can kiss later."

Fate seemed proud. Her lips turned up in another smile and she hiccuped.

Nanoha knew that look. "Get off me! NOW!" shoving the blonde away, she grabbed Fate'swaist and hauled her to the bathroom to hold up the hair while Fate lost what was left in her stomach. "Oh gross!"

Drunk Fate is funny!

Wait... Fate... drunk... *endless possibilities come to mind*

[Junkedcat]

Got some free time so i'll ClaimNanoha for Mirrored Souls

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by AshLikeSnow

For those interested:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4171760/1/

A dark fic I wrote, which admittedly may not suit everyone. It was an experiment though, so feedback would be welcome.

Tsss... Dark Indeed O3O

Originally Posted by Satashi

Title Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Fate
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links:Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4, Part 5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8, Part 9, Part 10, Part 11, Part 12, Part 13, Part 14, Part 15, Part 16, Part 17,

Title: Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Nanoha
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links: Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4, Part 5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8,

Title: Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha: Mirrored Souls: Vivio
Genre: Joint fanfiction
Summary: Do to a time paradox, Nanoha somehow swaps places with her nine year old self.
Rating: T
Links: Part 1

Fate:Unclaimed
Nanoha:Unclaimed
Vivio: Unclaimed

(Did I miss any?)

I'ts my imagination or since 2 pages ago no one had want to continue Mirrored Souls?

Originally Posted by Satashi

So yeah, I'm in a playful mood today so....

Have a drunk Fate!

Spoiler for Drunk!Fate:

It was another one of those nights. Her head stung, vision slightly waving as she stumbled next to the wall with one hand on it for support. 'Why did I let them talk me into drinking so much?' Blond hair fell across her eyes and was moved away with a weak hand. 'Sure my friend got the promotion he had been working so hard for but... Seven shots? I'm shocked I didn't pass out...' Her tolerance for alcohol was low, and if not for her full stomach -which might be empty soon- she would have surely lost it at the bar.

Her door was leaned against as she sluggishly tried to keep her hand on the scanner to unlock the entrance. "I'm home," She managed out softly. A few steps were taken in before she finally tripped over herself and fell into the arms of her room mate. "... 'allo." She groaned, way past the 'fun' part of being drunk.

"You're wasted," Nanoha giggled to herself while trying to pick Fate up without dropping her. "That's the third time this year, do you have a problem?"

"Don't.... don't tease me..." Fate let herself be picked up like a princess and fell against her friend's shoulder. "That's... that's once every... every...."

"About five months." Nanoha informed her with a grin.

"Right... five months... Yeah..." Her mind tried to work. "Mai.... mai bifday.... your... bifdai... an.....an...an..."

"And tonight." Nanoha snickered and sat her down on their bed. "Whoa, don't fall over!" She was glad Fate asked Hayate to take care of Vivio for the night just in case her fellow enforcers did talk her into drinking. "Can you sit here for me?"

"Yes." Fate nodded, watching Nanoha walk away form her and slowly start to turn sideways. Just when she thought her friend would topple over, her face hit the carpet and body fell after her. "Ow..."

"Fate-chaaaaan." Nanoha walked back over to her and lifted her back up to lay on the bed. "Here, I'll just change you myself." Her hands started undoing the buttons on the blonde's shirt.

"Mmm.... Undressing me? So bold."

Nanoha blushed hard, fumbling a moment before picking up. "Jeez, I forgot you get turned on like this..."

"I da' not." Fate purred out the words.

"Shush." She put a finger on her friend's lips. "Close your eyes and rest." To make sure they were closed she moved her face over her friend's and looked into deep red orbs. "Fate-chan?" Her lips were met in a quick kiss. "Mou." Another kiss, a third, and a fourth. Hands snaked around her and she was rolled over. "Fate-chan! Stop!" Another kiss. "Mou-mmph- You're acting- mmm- stop it!"

Fate finally stopped, face looking hurt. "but... I want to kiss you."

Face red, Nanoha shook her head. She and Fate were close, but had yet to cross the line of friends and lovers. "I don't... not like this..."

Fate didn't seem to understand, mind still groggy from the alcohol. "Oh-kai." Instead she smiled sweetly down at her. "Later? Win nut drank?"

Proposing to pick up later? Surely she would forget this..." Okay," She answered honestly. "We can kiss later."

Fate seemed proud. Her lips turned up in another smile and she hiccuped.

Nanoha knew that look. "Get off me! NOW!" shoving the blonde away, she grabbed Fate'swaist and hauled her to the bathroom to hold up the hair while Fate lost what was left in her stomach. "Oh gross!"

My bifd... Your bif.. bifd.. bifadu... ...
O.K really funny I wonder if beeing drunked makes Fate more bulnerable to...
Evil Rick's inner voice: I see you!

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NOTE: I just realise that yesterday I pass like 35 minutes wrriting Vatican Knights and when I take a look to it today it looks to... small T3T