To Aru ... Fanfiction Discussion Thread

[SmokinFerret88]

It's a shipping of those two, but it's also one that's going to go at a semi-realistic pace. The text next to my signature kinda tells the tale as to how it's gonna go about. The rest (Kinuhata, Frenda, Takitsubo, esct.) are all just gonna be apart of his Darkness Harem (not to be confused with dark-harem where Touma turns evil. Just girl's who are in the Darkness of the city like Awaki, girl in the dress, esct.)

As for Frenda...heh, trust me, her and Touma are going to have a good number of funny moments together. Think of Hamazura and Kinuhata's interactions from the light novels and you can pretty much get the gist of it.

Now I've come across an issue which I need resolving. So, lurkers, speak up for me because I need some help. For this Touma/Mugino one-shot, what should the title for it be?

[demino_hellsin]

Definite ship. Commodore ferret of the toumaXmugino ship fleet.

[SmokinFerret88]

Originally Posted by demino_hellsin

Definite ship. Commodore ferret of the toumaXmugino ship fleet.

Demino, I seriously loled at this. XD

Sailor: Captain, The Mikoto fleet is over the horizon!

Me: Bring me...my red shirt.

[demino_hellsin]

I am of the minority wishing to see muginoXmikoto though. I imagined a daughter who inherited prts of their powers. And she bsically got subatomic manipulation abilities.

[SmokinFerret88]

Meh, to each their own I guess. Personally I'm not a fan of yuri. Not that I dislike it, I'm just not really all that into it.

[demino_hellsin]

For the most part I find it entertaining but I'm not too invested in it. Sometimes you just get bored and then wonder what would happen if this went this way...

[SmokinFerret88]

Very true friend, and it's that kinda mentality which creates stories like, oh I don't know....

Had Circumstances Been Different?

[demino_hellsin]

Yeah. But I donbt have it in me to write for some reason.

I actully had an idea involving Freya but... Eh.

[SmokinFerret88]

Doooooooo iiiiiiiiiiiit~

A lot of people loved it. I know I personally enjoyed it especially the last Vento one you wrote. So roll with it, you're a good writer, and I know I'm not the only person who wants to see more of you're work.

[demino_hellsin]

Vento and Carissa are the reasons I started Had Circumstances Been Different. More than Kanzaki or Orianna, I fell in love with their characters the most. Maybe because they werenbt depicted as stunning beauties. Excet maybe Carissa.

I'll try to put something together by the end of the week. I don't know if it'll be worth reading though.

[SmokinFerret88]

I'll try to put something together by the end of the week. I don't know if it'll be worth reading though.

Demino, trust me dude, you're a good writer. It'll be worth the read, I know it will. And if it does crop up, I'll be looking forward to it.

[omega253]

I'm with Comrade Ferret on this one. Your writing is interesting!

[SmokinFerret88]

The Price We Pay, as I'm choosing to call the One-Shot, is now posted.

I did some touch-ups on it but it's virtually the same as it was here. Though, I got lazy and just decided to put the 'Wake up' scene as a flashback opening scene.

Anyway, it should be up soon, but since most of you already read it here, I suppose it's kinda pointless to even mention it.

[furaiz]

For Ferret : Even Monsters have hearts
Or something along that kind of line - Since it seems to focus on Mugino as a character anyway.

And, Had circumstances been different was always an enjoyable read. I look forward to whatever else you write up. I'm sure it won't be as bad as you assume.

Edit*
Seems you decided already ^^
Sounds alright ^^

[SmokinFerret88]

I still appreciate the suggestion furaiz. I probably could have used that title in the whole 'monsters don't' segment near the end of though.

Probably would have been a good addition, but I think its still efficient even without it.

[furaiz]

Originally Posted by SmokinFerret88

I still appreciate the suggestion furaiz. I probably could have used that title in the whole 'monsters don't' segment near the end of though.

Probably would have been a good addition, but I think its still efficient even without it.

Mhm

There's always different POV's on things, but the Price we Pay suits the whole thing, rather than just the ending part, it seems.
It's a good choice.

[MrTerrorist]

So i'm back and decided to read what i missed.

I should congratulate SmokinFerret88 for making the idea i suggested into reality. And thanks for giving credits at when you posted this fanfic on fanfiction.net.

Maybe i should give people ideas and they start writing about it.

[faiz blaster]

Originally Posted by SmokinFerret88

Well then, brother Welsh, allow me then to provide you and everyone else with something to read.

Spoiler for Hospital Stakeout:

Regardless of what most people would often times suspect, Misaka wasn’t typically someone who went out of her way to the same extent as she was currently. In most cases, i.e whenever she wasn’t required to take any action, she would leave certain matters alone and go on with her day as pre-usual. That did not entail that she wasn’t curious, but for the most part she did as little prying as she could.

When it concerned a certain spiky-haired high-school boy, however, that sort of mentality went away quite fast.

It was especially true if he just so happened to be in the presence of another girl.

But this time was different as opposed to the normal circumstances that involved him and members of the opposite sex. It wasn’t like those times where she was un-admittedly jealous; though subconsciously she probably was even in this situation. The reason behind her actions this time actually had some grounds that warranted her to keep tabs on him. Reason being that the individual among the fairer sex was someone whom Mikoto had encountered in the past and was fully aware of how dangerous she truly was.

Mugino Shizuri, if memory served, was the name of that Level 5 who had once-upon-a-time been an obstacle in putting an end to the Level 6 Shift.

So yes, she had every reason to be concerned when she had caught sight of both her and Touma traversing out in public. She wasn’t aware of the reason behind their meeting or what was bound to take place, so she had taken it upon herself to follow in the event that things turned for the worst.

Needless to say, when both teens had arrived at the hospital, Mikoto had become far less concerned about Touma’s safety and more concerned as to why both of them were there together in the first place.

What made this whole issue more frustrating?

“Oi, quit pulling on my hair, it hurts you know!”

“Nya~ Essentially, I’m hungry Hamazura! That family restaurant is having a dessert special and I essentially want to try each one and see which is best!”

“Didn’t you visit a dentist not long ago!? Do you really wanna repeat that experience a second time so soon!?”

“I super agree with the idea of going to a restaurant though. I’m sure Hamazura doesn’t mind paying for us either; do you Hamazura?”

“Stop goading her! And why do I need to cover for you anyway!? You have money; I, on the other hand, am still scraping off change just to get by here!”

Apparently, Mikoto wasn’t the only person who had found the odd pair unusual and had thus opted to follow her lead in tailing after the two. Mikoto, having never met any of these individuals, was under the assumption that they were associated in some way with Touma. That thought might have changed if one particular member of ITEM had been present at the time, but Takitsubo herself was absent from the group in question; having chosen to taking a nap at the apartment the group shared.

Not that it really mattered all that much really; the group on its own was still annoying enough to deal with whey they were creating so much racket to being with.

“Shhh!” Hissed Mikoto, succeeding in gartering the group’s attention and forcing three sets of eyes to shift towards her person. “Do you want them to hear us!?”

“Essentially, are we playing a game?”

“I think she’s super stalking that guy there.”

“Eh!?”

“Oi, Kinuhata, isn’t that the uniform those super-rich girls from Tokiwadai wear?”

“Geh!”

“A super-rich girl acting like a super stalker; I didn’t think I’d ever see the day that happened.”

“W-w-who are you calling a stalker!?”

“Nya, essentially, what’s a stalker Hamazura?”

“Well, em, they’re-”

A sudden spark of electricity was all it took to silence whatever sort of response the blonde was planning to provide. He of course was still aware that the girl herself was one of the people who had accompanied Touma and Accelerator to Hawaii, so he wasn’t too ignorant as to what her ability was. That said, when he turned his gaze over, he was met with the ferocious glare of the young adolescent girl who could, on all accounts, turn him into a charred heap in an instant. Her eyes were practically daring him to continue with his explanation, and should he do so then she would not hesitate in showing him why she was called Railgun.

“…something I’ll explain later, Fremea.”

“Wuss.”

“Bite me Kinuha-aaaah! Foot, foot, get off my foot!”

Obviously, being covert was not this group’s strong point. At least not now and by most standards this was probably tolerable. They had no reason to be this way and if they really wanted answers they would have just gone up and asked about it like normal people. There wasn’t any reason to act like this and the only reason they were even here was for the sake of boredom. Personally, Hamazura was actually looking to speak to Kamijou on a few matters himself. One of which being the reason for him getting shot and the whole mess that happened in Hawaii. There were still a large number of things that needed to be sorted out and Kamijou seemed like the best person to talk to about them.

That and he wanted to know where he had disappeared to that night they had decided to drink.

It was a subject that had perplexed him since Kamijou had been pretty wasted at the time. Having witnessed what happened the last time he had gotten drunk, he was curious to know just how many of those girl’s had jumped on him since they all seemed to flock onto him like vultures. Hamazura, like any guy, wondered how someone could possess such an overwhelming amount of WIN like Touma did and was curious to see if such a thing happened again.

Call him what you will, but Hamazura was still a normal guy like Touma. If he had scored that night then as a good friend he was (or believed himself to be) then it was only fair to be informed.

Mikoto, on the other hand, just wanted to know what the hell was going on.

“Would you guys just shut up and keep it down!”

“Mi-sa-ka-san~☆”

And just like that, her day went from bad to worse.

“Please, oh please, tell me that’s not her.”

“Is that Misaka-san I see there? It surely must be Misaka-san, as there are so few here who have the same uncivilized powers as she does~”

Once more, sparks generated around Mikoto’s form as she turned to face the indivudal who had spoken out. She wasn’t surprised to find a rather attractive young woman in a sailor uniform staring back at her with what looked like stars in her eyes. Clear signs that the woman was under the Mental Out’s control, and as it further fuel Mikoto’s ire; the girl had chosen a girl who was both older and far from lacking in the chest area.

This little encounter had thankfully, in Hamazura’s case, caused the rest of the group to observe as things unfolded.

“What do you want Shokuhou?”

“Me?” Asked the girl in a sugary tone laced with innocence, even going as far as to press her finger against her bottom limp to portray that image. “I was just taking a stroll when I happened to find Misaka-san with my vision ability. Why do you ask, Misaka-san? Is there something wrong with my ability to be here or are you practicing you’re hiding power from the gentleman over there☆?”

“Wh-wh-wh-what are you talking about!? I’m not hiding from anyone!”

“You could have fooled me, super rich girl.”

“Quiet you!”

It probably could go without being said, but Misaka’s face was tented in a healthy shade of red by this point. What couldn’t go without being said was how Hamazura already seen both Touma and Mugino leaving the waiting area right around when the new arrival had appeared. He probably would have interjected at some point to inform the middle-school girls of this, but….well,

“Th-the-there so…huge!”

Let’s just say he was distracted.

Somewhere in Academy City, a certain girl in a track suit suddenly found herself wide awake as a sense of apprehension filled her entire being.
But that was irrelevant for one a particular reason.

“Ugh, gahaow, what was that for?”

That reason being a firm right straight into his ribs with a minor dose of Offense Armor backing up the attack.

“No reason…”

“Ah, I see, well then, I guess if you’re not hiding then you must be here for no particular reason at all. If you have no business here, then I will use the allure ability of this one and converse with the gentleman ove-”

“Oh no you don’t! You said you don’t have a reason to be here, but you’ve clearly been following him this entire time. What do you want with him and why the hell should I let you even get close to him?”

“Weren’t you super doing the same thing?”

“I told you to be quiet!”

“Nya, she essentially sounds mad.”

“That’s because I am!”

Startled mainly be the sparks that were still flaring about, the little girl in question sank herself low enough while trying vainly to hide behind Hamazura’s head. All this action did was readjust the angle in which the aforementioned teen’s head was, resulting in him crying out as the small girl was unintentionally tugging on his hair to the point that it was bound to be ripped off his scalp. The reaction itself did earn Mikoto a harsh look from the girl in the knitted dress, though it was hardly necessary.

Mikoto had already realized her own folly and it showed on her face.

“S-sorry.”

“Just watch it, rich girl.”

“My, my, I didn’t think you’re vulgarity power was so high you would raise your voice at children too Misaka-san. And just when I was about to use my praising power to commend you on becoming a bit more lady-like then I recalled.”

“You’re avoiding my question; stop playing games and answer me alrea-rea-”

A few seconds later, three different people of the same gender all sneezed simultaneously.

“That was super weird.”

Beside her, both Hamazura and Fremea couldn’t find much else to say and simply chose to nod their head in agreement.

“Well, that was embarrassing.” Admitted the Mental Out, though it did serve as a means of putting everything back into perspective. To be more precise, it served to show just how Misaka’s presence here had distracted her; for her prize was now nowhere present in the waiting area. “W-wha? Where did he go?”

“Eh?” Seemed that Mikoto was also put off by this statement, as she too turned back to find both Kamijou and Mugino missing from the area. “That crazy hag is missing too.”

Internally, Hamazura felt a shiver run up and down his spine upon hearing someone using a term like that to describe Shizuri. He might not have known the history behind Mikoto and Shizuri, but even someone like him could conclude that the past the two shared obviously wasn’t one filled with good memories. Depending on how far back these two girl’s went, then it was likely that the Tokiwadai student here had crossed paths with Mugino when she really was less tame than she was now.

He was just glad the girl wasn’t around to hear that insult; less the building crumble to its foundation as a result of Mikoto provoking the beast that was the Meltdowner.

“Moh, this will not do!” Much like a child, the teen under Misaki’s control stomped her foot down as if being denied candy from the checkout line in a supermarket. “If only she had a telepathy power I could easily have found them by now!”

“Like I’d have let you get even too feet towards him to begin with!”

“As much as I frown upon you’re presence, I would much rather have you than the #4 being so close to him.”

“The feeling is not mutual; I don’t trust either of you near him.”

“Oi, Kinuhata, is it just me or is there a lot of tension building up here that’s taking away our screen-time?”

Don’t fucking break the forth wall, Hamazura!

“Hamazura, I think that is the greatest observation you’ve made in your super pointless existence! We’re not minor characters, we have our spot in this scene, why are those two hogging it all!?”

Stop it damn it!

“If that is to be the case, then whoever finds him first will be allowed to spend an entire day with him undisturbed.”

“Wh-wha-a-an entire day?”

“Ready, set, Go☆!”

“O-oi, stop running, this is a hospital you know!”

And just like that, the Queen and the Ace of Tokiwadai charged headfirst in the laberanth of corridors that made up the hospital’s interior.

“Hamazura, I super am not going letting our screentime go to waste; we’re going to find them both first.”

“Wha-why? I’d rather spend an entire day with Takitsubo undisturbed and off-screen than I would Kamijou…no offense to him.”

Screw it, I give up!

“Essentially, it’s not about the prize, but the challenge! And if we win, it means they have to treat us to a desserts special nya~!”

“You just said it’s not about the prize, but you’re already deciding on one! And stop talking about those desserts specials; it’s not gonna happen!”

In the end, as with all things, Hamazura was eventually outvoted two-to-one in the search for Kamijou and Mugino’s whereabouts.

Been away for a while, so this is the first time I'm reading this masterpiece. Great job as always ferret!

I just have one question: this particular scene pictures 3 people sneezing. I get that two of them are Misaka and Shokuhou, but who is the third?

[SmokinFerret88]

Hehehehe, so you saw that.

Well, originally, I was just going to say the girl Misaki had possessed sneezed because Shokuhou did. But, when I thought about it, wouldn't it amusing if the person under her control was someone worth mentioning?

Like, for example, Fukiyose Seiri?

[Ravagerblade]

I got to admit ferret, The Price We Pay was pretty good. Just read it on FFN.