Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

The way mages in Nanoha use their magics is based on the 800+ systems that exist, which vary from system to system. Mid-Childan from what I can tell is about range, while Belka focuses more on the CC-aspects of magic.

Expanding a bit more upon that, Mid-style focuses on fine-tuning and control of magic while the more prevalent aspects of Belkan-style is on enhancement of physical properties.

It always did bother me that there should be more subtle aspects of utilizing both systems, unless both had been engineered solely for combat.

Btw, great work on your fic ghaz. Great fun reading it. =3

Originally Posted by Comartemis

800+ systems = 800+ different ways to use magic, linker cores not required. At least, that's how I interpreted that particular line; this is the multiverse, for god's sake, there's got to be tens of thousands more systems waiting to be documented. CCS's Chinese magic, Nasuverse magic, both of Negima's primary magic systems, Harry Potter magic, Lina Freaking Inverse and Slayers magic, I could go on and on. Yet we limit ourselves to what's in canon for some bizarre reason.

Pretty much what ghaz said. Besides, working with canon stuff is easier with a set of fixed boundaries so that it's fair to everyone. Sure it's fun coming up with new stuff but there's always a need to consider the inherent rules and necessity of creating stuff. Magic systems would need quite alot of work as well as the constant reminder of possible retcon for whatever reasons that might arise later on.

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Expanding a bit more upon that, Mid-style focuses on fine-tuning and control of magic while the more prevalent aspects of Belkan-style is on enhancement of physical properties.

It always did bother me that there should be more subtle aspects of utilizing both systems, unless both had been engineered solely for combat.

Btw, great work on your fic ghaz. Great fun reading it. =3

Application outside of combat....

YOU'VE JUST GIVEN ME AN IDEA!!!!!!!

Or rather, you've helped me expand on Rue's magic system, Alocnos :3 If you want to know who Rue is, just look her up in the link in my Signature :3

And I'm glad you are enjoying my works :3

[Sheba]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Yet we limit ourselves to what's in canon for some bizarre reason.

YES! You hit the nail.

We are trying to work within limits laid by the canon. Most of people are trying to make characters that doesn't make Aces redundants, in term of role and power, and doesn't PWNLOLNOOBS them, especially if they intend them to be protagonists.

The only reason people here accept more powerful characters are 1. Those characters are antagonists, therefore a challenge for both canon characters and original characters. 2. VERY, oh so VERY, well written and characterized (better if they has been shown how they work in nanoha fanfictions).

People are hounding your characters or cringing over them because for whatever reason they are either avatars of creator of all, equivalents of Orlando etc...

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

800+ systems = 800+ different ways to use magic, linker cores not required. At least, that's how I interpreted that particular line; this is the multiverse, for god's sake, there's got to be tens of thousands more systems waiting to be documented. CCS's Chinese magic, Nasuverse magic, both of Negima's primary magic systems, Harry Potter magic, Lina Freaking Inverse and Slayers magic, I could go on and on. Yet we limit ourselves to what's in canon for some bizarre reason.

Because if we don't limit ourselves to canon, we're going to have unending dickfights between OC writers on how their charecters can pwn the aces. By sticking to Canon and a set of established general principles, we can keep things in line and limit power wanking and munchkin-ing.

Let me also point out something: Master Chief. All round badass. When I brought him into OC I had avery right to make him fuck powerful. Instead, he's remained true to Halo specifications on him (with some nerfing) and is, at the time of MSLN Alpha, A-ranked... after almost 15 years of service.

Don't feel too bad about this process: everybody who comes to OC will get themselves and their charecters broken down by the haxbusters.

Then said haxbusters will help to build them back up, and the new kid returns with V.2 of their OC's profile, all the better for the experience. It's the experience that all of us have gone through on these boards, a rite of passage, if you will...

...particularly if it's Tk3997 doing the haxbusting. I remember how he busted one of Kagerou's ideas, requiring the junking of a month's work, or how he busted a finished fanfic of mine: in TK's words" Just because I like you doesn't mean I won't break you when you do something stupid." :P

With regards to a practical standpoint: 75lbs is a lot of weight to be carrying around. You OC is going to be having problems swinging his sword around and getting it up in time to block, etc etc.

There are more issues with Rei and Rena that need to be dealt with, but I'll get back to those later after dinner and a chance to unwind.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Wait wait... 75 lb SWORD? I missed that skimming. How big and what's it made of?

Because it's not just strength in this issue, it's a considerable shift in Center of Mass at every move. Think of it as swining half again your weight around. Maintaining control is a bigger issue than strength.

[Sheba]

Even the heaviest sword in real world are not heavier than 5 kilogramms.

A 40-Pound Sword?

By C. Jarko

One of the most outrageous (and wildly incorrect) statements made about Medieval swords is that they were heavy and weighed as much as 40 pounds. While the fact that this statement even came once from a respected scholar and expert on Medieval warfare is surprising, it's not at all an uncommon claim. Let's take a look at just how large a sword would have to be to weigh that much or anywhere close to it.

Simple Science (with a little algebra thrown in): How do we know Medieval swords weren't 40 pounds (or for that matter, even 15 or 20 pounds)? The answer is density. Density is a way of expressing how much an object (of a certain size and of a given material) weighs. The size of the object is expressed in terms of its volume. Volume is the size of an object as measured by its length, width and thickness (or height) and is expressed in cubic inches. Written as a mathematical equation, it looks like this:

V = L x W x H.

One cubic inch is one inch long by one inch wide by one inch thick.

For the purpose of this discussion, we can use a simple three-dimensional rectangle to represent our sword. Let's pick a typical longsword with an overall length of 48 inches and a general width of 2 inches (the widest part of the blade). We'll get to the height later.

Swords were made of carbon steel, which has a known density of roughly 0.284 pounds per cubic inch (lbs/per cubic inch). If we know how much weight we have (in this case "40" pounds), we can figure out how many cubic inches the object would have:

40 pounds divided by 0.284 (the density of steel) = 140.85 cubic inches (the volume or "V" of a 40 pound sword).

Our sword is 48 inches long, 2 inches wide and "H" inches thick, thus: V = 48 x 2 x H. Using our volume of 140.85, we can solve for H for which we get:

140.85 = 48 x 2 x H

140.85 = 96 x H

H= 1.47 inches (140.85 divided by 96)

This means our steel sword is 48 inches long, 2 inches wide and 1.47 inches thick along its entire length. This would definitely be a blunt object and not a sharp cutting instrument like a sword.

Just for fun, let's see what we get when we say a sword (again 48 inches long and 2 inches wide) weighs 15 pounds or 10 pounds:

15 pounds divided by 0.284 (the density of steel) = 52.82 cubic inches (the volume "V" of a 15 pound sword).

Using our volume of 52.82, we can solve for H:

52.82 = 48 x 2 x H

52.82 = 96 x H

H = 0.55 inches (52.82 divided by 96)

That's over half an inch thick, still a blunt object. Let's try one more time for 10 pounds.

10 pounds divided by 0.284 (the density of steel) = 35.21 cubic inches (the volume "V" of a 15 pound sword).

Again, we can solve for H:

35.21 = 48 x 2 x H

35.21 = 96 x H

H = 0.37 inches

That's almost three eighths of an inch thick. If you look at three eighths of an inch on a ruler, you'll see we are now starting to get "sword-like" but we're still not there.

If we do the math using the thickness of a real sword (say an average 1/8th inch thick across a roughly 48" by 2" rectangle) it turns out such it weighs a reasonable 3.408 pounds. Which, when you take into account things like differential cross-section, distal taper, edge bevel and overall taper of the blade geometry, as well as the weight of the pommel and cross, then an average weight of 2.5 - 3.5 pounds works out just about right. So, the next time

When someone says "a longsword weighs 15 pounds", you can reply, "Oh, like this?" as you hand them 15 pounds of a half-inch thick steel slab four feet long and two inches wide. There's nothing like holding the truth in your hands. If there were really battle swords that actually weighed 40 pounds, or even just 15 or 20 pounds, then where are they? Why don't we have a single historical example as proof? It would be such an easy thing to prove. So, if you have a modern made sword which you bought and it weighs far more than the real life working versions of history, no matter what the manufacture claims, that sword is just not made correctly.

When we use the mathematical proof, we need to understand that there are variables which we aren't taking into account here, but this line of argument works well enough to debunk the more outrageous claims about sword weight. The next time you're arguing with someone who refuses to budge off their claim that swords were very heavy and unwieldy, you can tell them: "Hey, you do the math!"

Source

Even one of my D&D3 Barbarian NPCs doesn't swing a 40 lbs two-handed sword. It's like 10 lbs/5 kg at most, and he is by no means short, at the contrary he is like 230 cm tall (another race than human, they are like three-eyed, and their eyecolors are like those of Arrakis' Fremen, I did want to do away from eternal elves/dwarves/orcs trope).

My final word, such heavy swords (blame Cloud for making it trendy) are too often wank materials and it's hard for me to buy a character wielding them with no effort even with a strong deal of suspension of disbelief.

[Tk3997]

Originally Posted by Sheba

That's why I listen Queen, The Bee Gees or Mika while doing that. It prevent me from imagining death scenes. Instead, I end up with mentally picturing goofy s-o-l FABULOUS scenes.

I tend to listen to all sorts of crap while writing profiles, but it dosen't seem to affect much allot of the following was written while listening to a mix of J-pop, classic rock, modern pop music, orchestral scores, and even some country...

Originally Posted by Keroko

The real question is: Did I ever deny it?

Never, but lord do we wish you would...

Since we seem to be on the topic of magic and such I might as well throw some of my own recent stuff into the fray to give some examples of new magic systems that are IMO at least balanced.


First off we have a very partial profile of a new OC but the big focus is the shooting arts of Planine.

Spoiler for Emil:

Name: Emil Macmillan
Other names/alias: None
Age: 29
Birthday: March 5th
Height: 5’10”
Weight: 165 pounds
Eye color: Green
Hair color: Brown
Origin: Administered World 56
Mage Rank: AA
Magic Type: Planine
Magic Color: Yellow-White
Element Preference: None
Affiliation: TSAB Intelligence
Position/rank in TSAB: Special Agent

History:

Personality:

World Background:
Planine, Administered World 56, is roughly in the middle of TSAB space halfway between he rim and the core and a member of the first expansion sphere that entered the TSAB around 60 years ago. It’s a world with one large mountainous super continent (roughly the size of Eurasia) and a few small inland chains. The world is on the younger side and still very geologically active. Most of the landmass is temperature with only a few tropical areas in the far south and artic areas in the far north despite this high elevation means much of the land suffers fairly harsh winters and makes travel difficult. On the upside the planet is very mineral rich with an unusual concentration of various heavy elements near the surface.

This rough terrain and large mineral wealth encouraged various smaller states to form and industrialize interpedently and as a result the world was at the time of discovery very Balkanized with no clear world leaders and several competing blocs of alliances. When discovered the world’s tech level was around mid 20th century and it was embroiled in a series of border conflicts that threatened to turn into full scale war. Learning of external threats though the world (which benefited from having some large cultural similarities at least) quickly closed ranks and unified against the “threat”. Since the world knew of magic, was rapidly industrializing, and had a large population base though the TSAB opted for diplomacy over force. Seeing the opportunity this presented (for advancement and to avoid a world war) the world agreed and was admitted into the TSAB.

Planine Martial Traditions:
Planine’s rough terrain tended to favor smaller scale infantry over huge open field warfare and combat for the most part and the world had large numbers of effective mages and conventional infantry. Due to the Terrain and fighting styles preferred by the inhabitants ranged weapons quickly lead to firearms on the discovery of explosives and the gun. The rough and often dangerous terrain quickly made a gun a vital tool for most citizens as well as soldiers and it became very much a part of the culture to own firearms.

The rough terrain and presence of quite number of aggressive animals, bandits, and often none to friendly locals also placed a premium on concealment and movement magic’s and many of the worlds mages focused quite a bit on these. These same skills proved extremely valuable during wars as well as they could move easily through the rough terrain observe and track enemy units for slower covenantal forces.

Many of these mages often utilized guns in addition to spells in battle too allowing them to focus on the above skills while still being able to strike at a distance. Oddly enough the need to relinquish these weapons was perhaps one of the biggest sticking points during it’s admission eventually a compromise that allowed certain sorts of guns to be retained for hunting and recreation was allowed though they where massively regulated and units working under the auspicious of the TSAB where still forbidden to use them.

Planine’s are a hardly and resourceful bunch though and were hardly going to give up there slug throwers so easily… Some quick skimming of the laws showed a loophole in it. Guns weren’t banned so much do to firing bullets as they where do to not using any magic to do so. Basiclly projectiles were okay, but firing them with gunpowder wasn’t.

Planine Shooting Arts:
Thus armed with the above knowledge various mages of the world began going about forming a new style of magic. Magic could be used to accelerate objects that wasn’t really its primary task of it nor was it used as a form of attack expect by a handful of odd applications, but it could be done all the same. Seizing on this Planine engineers began producing new prototype devices that used long barrels and specialized components purpose built to accelerate objects to great speeds. Effectively they were building real magic guns, but the thing that kept it legal was the weapon was still useless without a powerful mage to wield and power it.

Over the following years this style of magic became common among mages of the world and combined with the worlds other specialization in concealment and movement magic the world and the style gained a reputation for producing deadly snipers.

Users of this style can strike from long range with minimal warning and it can be very difficult to locate the shooter even if he’s not actively concealing himself. (one advantage of magical slug throwing is a lack of muzzle flash and less noise) AMFs are also basiclly worthless as the bullets are solid slugs accelerated by magic, but normally in free flight once clear of the barrel. Accelerating the rounds is also less energy intensive then forming most sorts of shooting spells and once fired the mage need not give any further input to them if he chooses so the user can put out quite a volume of fire.

On the downside the rounds aren’t that powerful in and of themselves most barriers can resist them easily if the defender knows to be on alert. The bullets can have magical effects added to them to counter this somewhat and the devices themselves can also fire more conventional spells, but both are vulnerable to AMF and other anti-magic tactics. Further the rounds while quick unless guided have trouble hitting fast moving targets at range and while guiding the bullets is certainly possible when doing so again an AMF or other defensive spells can be used to defeat this guidance and possibly send them off coruse or at least make them easier to dodge. Both of the above also demand significantly more energy and concentration put into the spell. The user also needs to carry the bullets themselves and if he runs out of ammo he has to fall back on more normal spells.

The ammunition itself is ordinary for the most part being simple metal slugs and any added effects imparted to it are entirely up the mage using it, that said larger are smaller bullets can be used to gain slightly different characteristics

Next We move onto some background of the Magic Styles of Yuushou the 14th Administered world.

Spoiler for Yuushou magic:

The 14th administered world is a very old member of the TSAB having joined within a decade of its founding. The world supports a large population of magic users and has a number of homegrown styles and variations in addition to the widely practiced systems originating on Mid-Childa. One of the more common styles and the one most associated with the world is a close combat oriented system that’s been widely practiced since the world’s earlier medieval periods right up the present. The system has become very fragmented over the years and though the various schools share certain elements teaching methods, goals, and politics are often radically different between them.

The style has some things in common with Belkan styles and it’s sometimes theorized that ancient Belkan’s may have influenced the early history of this type of magic. It focuses heavily on close combat and the devices used tend to resemble Belkan armed devices being sturdy but of limited intelligence and also lacking cartridge systems. (though some users have begun to experiment with them since exposure to concept, but most purists still dismiss there use.) However the devices are also very efficient and process magic quite quickly nearly on par with storage devices. This is in line with the overall approach of the world’s swordsmen who tends to favor speed and finesse over brute power. (Though some styles are more brutish then others…)

Also due to this emphasis long very complex spells are largely absent and most spells are designed to be used quickly with minimal warm up and warning in the heat of combat. The only problem with this is that doing these spells so quickly and successfully requires immense control, focus, and extensive training with the higher level spells taking years to master. (If the person can even physically attempt them to begin with...) The methods and functioning behind certain techniques and spells are also often guarded secrets of certain styles taught only to trusted members or heirs so called “Secret Techniques”.

The entirety of the worlds swordsmanship community doesn’t really have a unified name which has lead to it mostly being called “Yuushou Style” much like the Mid and Belkan styles are named for their places of origin. The individual schools and groups under that umbrella tend to have more proper names though such as the “Shinmei-ryu” or “Gods Cry” one of the older ones still in existence. Even before the world joined the TSAB the various schools already had a long history as monster killers, enforcers, and occasionally guns (swords) for hire to various governments and groups of the world.

As such its structure and traditions meshed well with the TSABs whom they’ve supplied with many fine swordsmen over the years. In fact at least a short stint in the TSAB military is now nearly required if one wishes to advance or be taken seriously within many of these styles.

And then a profile of a user of one of those styles who people that have read my recent fic should know.

Spoiler for Shin:

Shin


Name: Shin Ichimaru
Other names/Aliases: None
Age: 19
Birthday: June 15th
Height: 5’10”
Weight: 160 Pounds
Origin: Administered World 14 “Yuushou”
Mage Rank: A+
Magic Type: Yuushou Close Combat Style
Magic Color: Iridescent Green
Element Preference: None
Affiliation: TSAB Intelligence
Position/rank in TSAB: Intelligence Agent

History:
Shin is the first son of the founding family of one of Yuushou’s Ninja clans this also makes him heir apparent to said clan. In older days the clan often worked as spies and assassins, but by the time he was born it had long since gone fairly legitimate with most of its members either working for the state or in legal private sector jobs such as bodyguard. In fact by the time he came around the clan was downright respectable with it’s higher members consider pillars of the community and active in various civil projects and business ventures including oddly enough real estate... They often used to be paid in lands and still held many of them into the modern era when those lands began to become rather valuable and a good ninja never turns down a business opportunity.

As the heads of all this Shin family basiclly controlled the clan rather like a corporation and so had theoretical control of all its assets. While not extravagantly rich they were none the less of some means and most assuredly upper class. His parents were caring, but fairly strict and rather traditional and basiclly decided for him that he was going to be the next head of the family; whether he liked it or not.

As such he was raised from a very early age with this fact in mind and his initial training began as early as the age of six. His trainers didn’t find him a very good student though as despite being talented he seemed only vaguely interested in learning the magic and skills of his heritage. He also had an annoying habit of often using his increasingly honed sneaking skills to disappear out into the city at large to bum around with various other youths his age generally slacking off and doing stupid things as young boys and teens are want to do. While totally acceptable and understandable for most youths it wasn’t exactly seen as so for the heir to a ninja clan, but repeated discipline failed to break him of the habit and by his mid teens most of the family had given up that fight and where focusing on trying to get him to at least act properly at home and official functions.

That worked only marginally better and threats of physical violence where often required to gain proper behavior at various events. Most assumed it was just a phase or impudent youthful rebellion and that he’d grow out of it. This despite repeated examples and statements to the contrary no one seemed able to grasp that he really didn’t like the entire upper class life style and chaffed almost constantly under it. When the time came for him to be shipped off to the TSAB for a few years at about 16, as almost all students of the clan are, he was hardly reluctant to go.

He specifically hid his past as much as possible since his position could easily have gotten him special preference which was the last thing he really wanted. He largely managed to succeed in this and was assigned to the TSAB Intelligence branch on merit. He’s acutally found he rather likes the job and most of his co-workers, who are unaware of his upper class status and probably wouldn’t care even if they where. Acutally he likes it so much he has no real plans to go back to his homeworld and take over the clan… he hasn’t quite gotten around to mentioning this to his parents yet though.

Personality:
Shin is easy going more then anything else he can be motivated to do stuff, but he’s much more easily motivated to put it off until tomorrow. He takes most anything in stride always ready with a “witty” remark and generally just seems to be enjoying life while gliding along on cruise control. Some people mistake this for incompetence or a lack of willpower, but this is not the case at all when he acutally sets out to do something he’s extremely capable and will see it through. He also tends to hide is significant intelligence behind a façade of foolishness he’s acutally rather bright and quite sharp this ability has proved useful in his work in intelligence lulling targets into classing him as less of a threat then he is.

He’s also very hard to rattle even in battle he tends to be detached and a tad jocular prone to cracking wise as bullets zip past and things explode. In general he just seems to lack the ability to take anything too seriously. He also enjoys unwinding when away from work, perhaps a bit too much though it’s only been legal for him to drink for a short while he has a history of it that goes back considerably further. When exposed to alcohol he tends to become even more jovial, but lose most of the intelligence hidden behind that. This makes him somewhat prone to doing stupid things when blitzed.

This carry’s over to his general attitude toward combat he’d really just assume rather not fight and prefers to talk first and then take subjects alive if it’s feasible. He’s not stupid though and if deadly force is needed he’ll get the job done. He tends to view this as a very much me or them kind of deal and while he doesn’t enjoy killing he also doesn’t angst about it much after the fact either.


Clan Ichimaru Martial Arts:
As noted above Shin’s family is the direct descendants of the founder of their clan several centuries ago and have maintained it’s traditions throughout that entire time. As originally founded the clan where fairly typical ninja clan charged with spying, assassinations, etc but unlike most such groups they had an important difference: they where state sponsored. This effectively made them a legitimate arm of their state, if often looked down upon, nearly on par with various Samurai families. (don’t say that to one of said families faces though, that could end… badly). They served rather like there lords secret service undertaking all manner of covert tasks and while what they did was widely know it wasn’t often acknowledged publicly.

This is one of the reasons the clan has remained so strong over the years as instruments of the state they adapted and where better able to change with the times as well as enjoying far less overt persecution. As the planet entered the modern age the clan became the foundation of and then important leaders and agents of a true intelligence service. A tradition they continue in the TSAB after the planets absorption into it, though many still serve locally as well.

The style of magic used by members of the clan varies a bit as it’s large size allows some specialization to occur, but the original style as still taught to heirs focuses on stealth to close in and then overwhelming force at close range to dispatch the enemy. It also forgoes almost any true long range skills for this and while its defense isn’t nonexistent it’s still weaker then many with the use relaying heavily on speed to avoid hits rather then tank them. For this reason many practitioners prefer smaller quick weapons that also have some useful defensive aspects to them Knives, Sai, Tanto, and the like are common and many also duel wield with both hands (sometimes with similar weapons sometimes dissimilar).



Compared to the increasingly common Belkan systems this style lacks raw power, but most of its user are quicker and better able to avoid attacks. On the downside they have to avoid them as there defense is weaker traditionalist also eschew the use of cartridges this reduces strain, but also deprives them of the ability to summon up a massive hit on short notice. Fights using the style are often somewhat drawn out with the user making many smaller attacks wearing an opponent down and looking for an opening to strike at. It rarely ends with one decisive strike and students are taught to avoid attempt to create or relying on such.

Combat Skills:
Despite his seemingly lackadaisical approach Shin is acutally extremely skilled in his families style arguably one of the strongest and most naturally gifted practitioners in several generations if he applied himself at all some of trainers feel he could be among the best the clan has ever produced, but even in his current state he’s among its elite and extremely dangerous in close combat and highly capable in infiltration missions.

Barrier Jacket:
In still another display of conformity, some would say disrespect, of tradition Shin favors a jacket of a more “modern” look then the almost stereotypical black ninja jump suits most of his order favors. It’s still black and it’s still tight fitting, but…


There are some minor stylistic differences. The jacket itself is as noted rather snug and is fairly light though the torso dose have some armor reinforcement over it and the gloves and boots are also armored to allow him to grab or block melee weapons with said appendages, the extra weight also improves the force of strikes with them as well. The goggles are also completely functional and provide a range of vision enhancements to aid operations at night these are covered under “spells” below.

Device(S):
Shin primarily wields what at first glance looks to be a fairly mundane Kama, but the weapon is acutally a Kusarigama since the device is really segmented with a weighted section at the bottom of the shaft popping off when needed and a length of chain connecting it to the remaining shaft and cutting head. The cutting head can also be retracted turning the weapon into a set of nunchakufor when bludgeoning is preferred over slashing. The chain portion of the weapon is extendable to a fairly ludicrous degree though wielding it at very long lengths gets unwieldy. Even so this form of attack is one of Shin’s only methods for engaging an enemy at a distance.

He also wields a large number of throwing knives which he uses in place of more traditional Shuriken these are as you would expect pretty short ranged though they can have a variety of effects added to them to provide some variety to his attacks.

His goggles also arguably count as a device, but are rather limited in what they can do.


Spells List:

In Progress.

Of course a magical world can't live on melee along so on that note we take a look at another school of magic from the 14th world via another of it's practitioners you all might also know.

Spoiler for Kou:

Name: Kou Kusanagi
Other names/alias: None
Age: 18
Birthday: September 20th
Height: 5’ 8”
Weight: 145 Pounds
Origin: Administered World 14 “Yuushou”
Mage Rank: A+
Magic Type: Yuushou Shooting Style
Magic Color: White
Element Preference: None
Affiliation: TSAB Intelligence
Position/rank in TSAB: Intelligence Agent

History and Personality: Caustic, that word would describe the larger part of Kou personality rather well. It’s not that surprising coming from a family that could be classed as dysfunctional at best, with his father enjoying getting drunk and beating him and his mother was too high most of the time to care. This has done little for his opinions of people or life in general. He left both at an early age once his growing magical potential became evident and provided an out for him, though not before savaging his father so brutally he was hospitalized for weeks, perhaps not surprisingly the police never really bothered him about that…

Thus out on his own at the age of about ten he became a bit of a street rat for a while before his skill with rudimentary illusion magic (which he used for petty theft) was noted when he attempted to rob a Whispering Death instructor, faced with the options of a beating or joining the school he chose the later. It was a raw deal though as they ended up beating him anyway in the interest of teaching him “self defense”.

Still he found the schools lack of bullshit, concern about there image, and general devil may care attitude somewhat to his liking and so he acutally stuck around. He’s also never been stupid and knew that with the skills he would learn he could make a career and find away out of the gutter his family had happily lived in for the last few decades… Which brings us to another aspect of his personality he’s very self serving and it takes considerable prodding to get him to do anything he can’t see benefit to himself in. He and joined the TSAB about two years ago when he finished his primary training and was graduated as a novice suitable for working in the field to gain practical experience.

Fitting into the above bit about being self serving he works for the TSAB not out an any sense of duty or desire to good, but merely because they were the easiest to get into and offered the best starting compensation package. At induction he only planed to serve a few years before leveraging his experience into a hopefully more lucrative profession in the private sector. As is the case with many like him his skills got him noticed and recruited by the Intelligence Branch.

Not long after he joined his superiors, in there infinite wisdom, figured that hey two Yuushou mages are better then one quickly paired him off with another recently inducted member from his planet in the form of Shin, this arrangement has not pleased him much, but to his dismay there skills are rather complimentary and they’ received rave reviews in AAR encouraging the partnerships continuation.

Yuushou Shooting Styles:
While the world of Yuushou is most know for producing swordsman and close combat mages of various sorts ranged combat has always been a recognized, if in some eyes lesser, form of combat since even it’s earliest days. Fewer schools of the style survive into the modern day due largely to something of a lack of glamour compared to the sword schools and also the larger number of competing systems for ranged combat luring away prospects (many that might once have learned the style now favor Mid type styles instead)

The style has advantages and drawbacks to the more widely practiced mid style it tend to be faster and has more options in the face of an AMF using foe for instance, but also it tends to lack the raw overwhelming firepower a high level practitioner of the mid can deliver in a similar vein higher level mid mages can often tank damage significantly better as well. On the other hand those that use the style might say that at least on the later bit those that complain are missing the entire point. The style has had to deal with close combat oriented foes for centuries these foes could nearly always overpower the user and so avoidance and evasion became valued over attempting to trade blow for blow with them and the various schools of the art have many provisions for just that.

The preferred devices of the art have always been bows (though most also train with and carry a short dagger as an emergency back up weapon). The modern bows are considerably more advanced then ancient versions which where little more then focuses and the best models are acutally bordering on being intelligent devices in many cases. The weapons aren’t nearly as sturdy as those used by there worlds swordsmen though they do tend to be more versatile and able to cast a wider range of magic. These devices are normally not close combat weapons in any sense though and using them to even block with is likely to damage them rapidly.

Whispering Death:
The Whispering Death school is one of the oldest still active on the planet and know for producing highly capable practitioners… and washing out a huge numbers of candidates to do so. The school in olden time’s basiclly trained assassins, much like several schools of swordsmen did, these warriors were in many ways similar to ninja’s though they tended to kill rather more like a modern sniper then the stereotypical ninja via stalking into an advantageous position and killing with a single shot when the right moment presented itself.

If done right the first indication anything was wrong would be the target keeling over with an arrow through their neck or skull. This sort of thing did little for there popularity and it’s practitioners were consider even worse then various Ninja’s who at least attacked the target at close range and gave them some minor chance to defend themselves. For many years its user effectively had a kill on sight order on them and being pegged as a member of the school was tantamount to a death sentence. This only seemed to make them more elusive and stealthy though and despite many proclamations to contrary by various rulers over the years the school remained strong and continuous throughout that era and into this one.

Nowadays they’ve backed off this heritage slightly playing up there status as “proven in combat” and less as “proven by centuries of cold blooded assassinations.” They’ve slacked off little in there training methods though which have variously been described as brutal, inhumane, and soul crushing. Incidentally there training camps tend to be located in rather remote regions away from most official supervision… Still the results are hard to argue with as despite a trend toward cranking out more, but largely less competent, mages seen in many schools on the planet the Whispering Death appear to have managed to keep very high standards among their’s.

Part of this probably has to do with them having a policy of headhunting potential prospects from other schools as unlike many of them they have no qualms about stealing talent that doesn’t happen to totally adhere to their doctrine, this might also be part of there continued vigor. Again though it dose little for there popularity which for this and just based on reputation is still rather low among many that know of them, but most of the users themselves don’t really seem to care.

Even more then most styles of this type the school emphasizes stealth, evasion, and hitting hard and fast at weak points in the enemy’s defense. Most of the users are excellent illusionists and marksmen though weak if cornered and forced to stand there ground in battle. Enclosed spaces and open country are also something of a bane to them as the style was created and perfected in crowded medieval cites and temperature forests and still works best in those and similar environs due to ample cover. Many of the users can fly as this does aid greatly in attaining shooting positions, but they aren’t really aerial mages in the sense the TSAB normally uses the word as they avoid fighting in the air at almost all costs. After all the sky is quite possibly the worst terrain to hide in short of deep space…

These talents have made them somewhat in demand by TSAB Intelligence (among other less reputable clients) and many of the practitioners acutally off world and in TSAB service can be found there. That said that sort of service is valued less among this school then many others and so large numbers of its user can also be found as independents, mercenaries, and even plain old thugs. The school has few standards for entry and even fewer after the student leaves and has specifically made efforts in recent years to emphasis the lack of ties with former students, largely in order to limit liability for those found working for the aforementioned less reputable clients. Despite what one might think this doesn’t seem to affect recruitment much, but then you know what they say about bad publicity...

Combat Skills:
As noted above Kou specializes in striking from concealment and avoiding retaliation via stealth as such his skill set is built around movement and illusion magic and hard hitting offensive powers with a pittance of more traditional defensive magic’s like shields and barriers.

Barrier Jacket:
Fitting into the above his jacket is a fairly flat neutral tone of grey that blends reasonably in a fair range of environments particularly urban one’s. The jacket itself is lose fitting allowing good maneuverability but its reasonable bulk and layers also provides fair protection though it could hardly be relied on to deflect any large spells.

Device:
As devices for his style goes Kou’s is fairly unremarkable it has only one form, that of a traditional Japanese long bow, and minimal intelligence the TSAB would class it as a storage device. The device itself handles most of the casting of his various illusion and movement spells but most attack spells acutally come from the arrows used in conjunction with it as these are where the attack spells themselves acutally activate.

The arrows themselves often have spell preparation pre-applied and drawing and firing them merely engages the spell with a shot of Mana from the mage (how much depends on what the arrow is intended to do). How many arrows he carries in total isn’t clear, but “a !%*& ton” would be a fair guess and he never really seems to worry about running out; at least of the more common ones he does ration the stronger specialized arrows though. The arrows are required for the entire style to work if somehow deprived of them the user would be nearly useless since as noted above the arrows themselves are where the attack spells acutally activate.

Yuushou magic also incorporates the use of a number of other sorts of spell activation medium mostly in the form of prepared paper strips similar to ofuda and Kou has some experience in these as well normally carrying a fair supply with him in combat.

Spells:
In Progress
Defensive and Movement:
Acceleration:
Imbues the user (mostly his legs) with magical energy that grants them basiclly superhuman speed and agility. When active the user can perform various typical ninja stunts like vaulting 20 foot walls, out running slow moving cars, etc this effect is strenuous though and stresses the muscle greatly overuse can result in strains, sprains, and in extreme cases even tear the muscle fibers apart effectively crippling the user.

Blink:
A short range teleport spell (50 meters max) quick to activate (for a spell of it’s type), though still a bit draining and used to move across short distance unnoticed, but the casting time while short is still too long for heated combat use making it more of a sneaking or positioning spell.

Flash Blink:
As with the above but the spell is paired with a burst of light and deafening sound that conceals the teleport making it more effective when used in direct contact with the enemy the teleport itself is also slightly quicker, but it’s more draining and can’t be used in rapid succession.

Concealing Haze:
A passive spell uses existing fog or haze to conceal the user by subtly drawing the moisture too him locally thickening it and thus more effectively hiding him, obviously needs a fairly thick fog to start with in order to work and not be overly noticeable. Was developed for us in Yuushou’s various forests where such fogs were very common its use on other worlds varies considerably.

Obstructing Fog:
This spell on the other hand quickly conjures a bank of fog on demand this fog is so dense it’s more like a smoke screen concealing the user from view and even magical scans have problems penetrating the veil. It’s still just fog though and dissipates quickly after being conjured with local weather conditions capable of either aiding or hampering its use (thought very rarely acutally stopping it).

Mirage:
An all purpose camouflage spell that can be used in varying degrees from simply breaking up an outline and making getting a solid beat on the user harder all the way up to effectively total invisibility and EM stealth. Demands on concentration and power escalate with increasing levels of stealth, at the perfect invisibility level it’s effectively all he can do at once, so it’s not that useful for any kind of attack, aside from perhaps a one off opening gambit. Lower levels of the spell that have minor distortion but still making spotting him difficult can be used in conjunction with his attack spells though and this combination is very deadly and one of the essential skills of his entire school.

This power also suppresses his magic signature and that part can be used on its own if he merely wishes it hide from scans attempting to locate him that way without any visual camouflage. This is considerably less intense then acutally having to bend light and can be maintain for a long period fairly easily it’s normally on by default anytime he’s sneaking about just as insurance.

Protection:
His sole mid style defensive spell it’s a fairly standard renditions of that stand by defense though he’s fairly adept with it able to shapes its form and area fairly well.

Attack Spells:
Most of these attack spells are rather straight forward that said the power of most of them can be adjusted by adjusting the amount of mana pumped into the arrow before firing. Most can also be fired several at a time by simply firing multiple arrows simultaneously this increases casting time significantly though unless the arrows are charged to a lower level. The specialist arrows are a bit of an exception in that most of them are somewhat charged before hand (a bit like single purpose cartridges) and so can be powered up to a higher level fairly quickly compared to normal shots. Most of these boosted arrows are variants of standard ones with more hitting power or some added effect. Almost all of them can also be fired either ballistic or guided to the target, but the later demands more mana as you might expect.

Most of the attacks are elemental in nature and since the arrows are prepared before hand and specialized the Archer can use a wider range of such spells more easily then most common mages that need to rely on lengthy rituals to conjure such elements. That said the Archer also lacks the kind of adaptability possessed by a true elemental user the arrows can only do one thing and this can’t really be modified in the heat of battle. The effect itself also normally pales a bit compared to what a master of that element could do.

Piercing Arrow: This arrow has no spells or special properties aside from being pointy and fast moving; though it’s acutally sort of like a missile in that they continue accelerating after release actually increasing there damage potential over distance (to a point). It dose its damage by piercing the target and either causing internal injury or damaging internal components. While barrier jackets and lighter armor provide only limited protection from hits most fields and barriers can easily bounce off even a storm of them making them most useful on targets caught flat footed, distracted, or lacking magical defenses.

Lightning Arrow:
Not exactly hard to figure out this arrow has a blunt head meant to cling to a target and then discharge current into them. The level of voltage can be varied allowing it to either be used as a sort of long range stun gun or as a lethal weapon that can burn victims, stop hearts, and short out machinery. The bolt itself is as noted blunt though and so if it affixes to something that insulates or grounds the target the effect is minimal. Also though it will stick to magic barriers (since the sticking effect is itself magical in nature) and discharge into them damaging the defense this won’t acutally effect the mage behind it in most cases.

Flame Arrow:

Gas Arrow:


Support Spells:
These are spells that don’t really fit into the above categories most of them are utility type things not really used outside of combat most of them are also based on traditional Yuushou ofuda rather then devices.

And this ends our little look at the magic stylings of the 14th world as envisioned by me I have one more OC from this world, but she'll be written up later and won't intro anything drastically different.

[Keroko]

New Keroko image! Courtesy of Mercurianangel.

Spoiler for Don't you just want to kiss her?:

That one's going in the profile. :3 Many many thanks Mercurianangel!

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Spoiler:

Hmmm...

>_>

<_<

Syn: A whole new world

Vivio: Don't you dare close your eyes

Syn: A hundred thousand things to see

Vivio: Hold your breath it gets better
I'm like a shooting star
I've come so far
I cant go back to where I used to be

A whole new world

Syn: Every turn a surprise

Vivio: With new horizons to pursue

Syn: Every moment red letter

Syn & Vivio: I'll chase them anywhere there's time to spare
Let me share this whole new world with you

Vivio: A whole new world

Syn: A whole new world
Thats where we'll be

Vivio: Thats where we'll be

Syn: A thrilling chase

Vivio: A wondrous place

Syn & Vivio: For you and me.........

>_>

*RUNS LIKE HELL*

*imagines Syn and Vivio flying around singing*

You... you.... that was low, bellow the belt, dirty.... and... and...

Oooh, I'm going to get you for this, Eva.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

See, this is what happens when I try to make characters. I start with a geomancer, and I end up with...

Spoiler for character data:

Name: Rena Ryuugu
Gender: Female
Species: Human
Age: 17
Height: 5’1”
Weight: 170 lbs
Skin: Pale
Hair: Red
Eyes: Blue
Device: Tarvos, Intelligent
Magic System: Modern Belka
Ranking: B+
Alignment: Neutral Good

Character Description
Rena is a troubled child who is currently stationed with Division Six in the care of Fate Testarossa.

Rena grew up the only child of a poor mother and and an abusive drunk of a father in one of Kranagan’s less well-off sectors. Beaten frequently and often denied meals for arbitrary reasons, Rena’s only supporter—her mother—was rarely present to defend her from her father’s drunken rages, leaving Rena to fend for herself.

When Rena was 12 years old, her father finally went too far, beating Rena’s mother to within an inch of her life and then leaving her to die. Driven beyond sanity by this senseless act of violence, Rena took up a kitchen knife and stabbed her father to death in his sleep, then fled the house with everything she could carry with her, headed for the airport to try to leave the city.

As fate would have it, Rena became caught up in the same fire that nearly killed Subaru and Ginga, only to be rescued by Fate Testarossa. Like Subaru, Rena was awed by her rescuer’s strength, though for slightly different reasons:

“Here is a woman who can’t be hurt by anything, not even her own parents.”

When Rena refused to let herself be split away from Fate, the mage took the girl aside and had a heart-to-heart talk with her, which eventually led to Rena confessing what she’d done and why. Fate responded by making Rena another one of the numerous children under her care, one that had to be watched a bit more closely than others.

After a fair amount of psychotherapy and spiritual healing, Fate helped Rena to enroll in the GFMA. Rena struggled greatly with the concept of teamwork, having had precious few friends prior to this point, and had to retake the B-rank examination several times. By the time she was ready for combat, the JS Incident was nearly over.

When the bureau accepted Division Six as a permanent member of the heirarchy, Hayate put in a request for additional mages to round out the Stars and Lightning squads and make them into separate-but-cooperative teams. Rena applied to join Lightning Squad, and was accepted as being qualified to take the role of Front Attacker. Her call sign is Lightning Six.

Rena gets along very well with her teammates, and has gotten over her initial difficulties with trusting her partners to back her up. Though memories of her father still haunt her now and again, the presence of her friends is more than enough to chase such shadows from her mind.

Powers
As the Front Attacker of Lightning Squad, Rena hits hard and fast, tearing through the opposition as quickly as possible and moving on to the next target. Rena is a well-balanced fighter, equally comfortable close up or at a distance, though she prefers to fight up close whenever possible. Her element is darkness, and her repertoire of spells includes several curses to complement Caro’s increase-type support spells.

Rena’s device is called Tarvos, after a boss (referred to as “The Avenger”) in the .hack// game series. Tarvos has four forms in total; its storage form (a hairpin), its’ Berserk form (a halberd similar to Bardiche), its’ Reaper form (a scythe), and its’ Onslaught form (a massive claymore that strongly resembles a billhook cleaver).

Miscellanious Abilities
Dek Vorma – A curse aimed at the target’s barrier jacket. A successful hit reduces the jacket’s protective strength until the barrier is dispersed and reformed. Also works on knight armor.

Dek Torma – A curse that paints a target with a magical homing signature. Friendly shooting spells will automatically home in on this target, allowing for fire-and-forget strategies until the target dispells the effect. Incredibly deadly with spells like Photon Lancer Phalanx Shift.

Gravira – A curse that restricts a mage’s ability to fly by selectively dispelling flight spells. This curse is particularly difficult to dispel, and Rena will often cast this on her opponents as soon as a battle starts, to ensure they can’t escape her by going aerial.

Defensive Abilities
Barrier Jacket – Rena’s standard defensive gear. A picture of Rena’s barrier jacket is available at the top of this post (spear not included).

Barricade – A run-of-the-mill defensive spell. Protects strongly in one direction.

Barricade Ex – A more powerful version of Barricade that also guards in all directions. It’s very mana-inefficient, though, so Rena tries not to use it unless she’s actually being attacked from more than one direction at once.

Offensive Abilities
Black Thunder – A moderately powerful attack spell with a wide area of effect. Rena pumps a charge of mana into her weapon, then smashes it into the ground, unleashing arcs of energy that travel along the ground in front of her, branching out into a 45° angle.

Shadow Buster – Rena’s take on Fate’s Thunder Smasher. The only perceivable difference is the color of the beam.

Midnight Edge – A weapon enhancement based on Fate’s Haken Slash. Rena cloaks Tarvos in black lightning, allowing his edge to slice through any virtually physical defense (barrier jackets, shields, etc.). Slicing through physical objects such as devices or walls is also possible but requires more effort.

Gust Step – Rena’s typical speed boost spell, equivalent to Flash Move.

Lotus Dance – A lower-powered version of Gust Step which Rena can apply to herself over long periods of time. The spell gives Rena a 50% increase in her attack speed as well as her movement speed, as opposed to instantaneous movement for a few seconds.

Demon’s Reign – A personal enhancement spell with a dangerous backlash. The spell creates the effect of a powered-up Lotus Dance, but also increases Rena’s strength and endurance significantly both magically and naturally by stimulating her body’s release of adrenaline and magically enhancing her body. The end result is a 100% increase in Rena’s speed, strength, and endurance. The immediate backlash comes from a dangerous shift in Rena’s state of mind. While using this spell, her mind becomes dangerously unstable, causing her to take on an “ax-crazy” persona obsessed with the destruction of her enemies. While she’s not so far gone as to confuse friends with enemies, it becomes almost impossible to get her to pull out of a situation in this state of mind. Worse, the constant release of adrenaline takes a huge tax on her body’s reserves. The first and only time Rena used this spell, she was forced to maintain it for approximately 5 minutes, then fell into a three day coma upon releasing it. Needless to say, Rena avoids using this spell unless she has no other choice. This spell’s effects can be visibly spotted by noting Rena’s eyes; if they have inexplicably become slitted and catlike, it’s definitely best to get out of her way.

...CLEAVER-CHAN!

I haven't even seen Higurashi and I already love this girl!

Ah, new profile?

Hmm, the first thing I notice is the line “Here is a woman who can’t be hurt by anything, not even her own parents.” does that mean Rena is lying to herself about Fate? Because Fate has very much been hurt by Precia.

Lightning six... that should fit, my OC Tesla occupies the Lightning five callsign, so it would round out.

On the subject of attacks, attacks based on Fate's would inherently be different, because Fate has a Lightning Affinity that allows her to use lightning with her magic. Unless Rena also has a lightning affinity (which should be possible) she can't just use Fate's attacks with a different collor.

Also, I advice you not to put solid numbers on spell powers. As you can see, that sets of alarmbells in some people (even though movement spells like Flash Move are more along the lines of 400% movement increase, really ) Just saying 'movement increase' and draw a comparison to an existing spell (stronger/weaker/equal to) is a solid solution.

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

50%? That's a bit much. I'm not exactly sure how to put it, but I'm sure there will be others who can make a comment on this one.

100%? You're basically ripping her apart then. I don't believe the body would be designed to move that those kinds of speeds. I don't even believe that Sonic Move and Flash Move have that kind of ludicrous speeds.

It's rather apalingly weak, actually. Spells like Sonic Move or Flash Move are far more then a mere 50% increase. They can. Usually they do so even faster, but note that that aplies to movement speed alone.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Meh. Just to top the character-who-I-don't-know, I'm bringing Etna into this in all her SSS+ h4xxed-out-the-arse glory.

Which will be shot down in a seconds notice, I assure you.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

*Notes post contents, frowns at character ideas notepad, crosses out "Reincarnated Saint King"*

What? You mean Vivio? She's already canon. :3

Originally Posted by Comartemis

*Stares at Nanoha's core coming out of her chest in A's 2*

I'm really not seeing where this organ idea is coming from. Last time I checked, getting an organ ripped out of your body was a very messy affair, and the organ in question wasn't usually a little glowing ball of light.

Linker Core
As the name suggests, an organ in a mage’s (knight’s) body which works to link and manifest Mana generated within themself.
The disposition of a mage thus depends on their Linker Core, and currently any analysis of a mage’s abilities are done by examining the Linker Core.

Official DVD booklet translation, so yes, Linker Cores are organs as far as Nanohaverse goes.

Originally Posted by Wibbles

A training session gone awry leaves Section 6 Headquarters in shambles.

Spoiler for Property Damage:

"Split Sphere! Thunder Smasher!" The beam of white-blue electricity passed through the conjured orb, and split into two, both beams narrowly missing Spada. The boy whistled.
"Niiice."
Lucius grinned. "I can make multiple spheres- up to about... oh, one hundred. Like this, see?" With a dramatic snap of his fingers, the older man summoned more of his orbs, placed at seemingly random intervals in the air around his son. Spada smirked.
"Volticca, calculate the beam paths."
"Of course." the feminine voice of the sword answered. Spada looked up at his father.
"How do you like that, old man?" he yelled. The man in question kept on grinning.
"You... just lost." he replied. Spada narrowed his eyes.
"Huh?"
Lucius raised Fulgardio into the air. "Photon Lancer...." he said, and Spada realized what was about to happen. The blood drained out of his face.
"LUNATIC SHIFT!!"

And then everything went to hell.


Hayate sunk to her knees as everyone else's jaws dropped. Lucius had used his combo directly above Section Six's main building. In a sphere of spinning blue-white bolts, the building was suddenly pockmarked with craters.

The trainingfield is quite a distance from the building though, and I doupt they'd be allowed to do something like that close to the main building.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

800+ systems = 800+ different ways to use magic, linker cores not required. At least, that's how I interpreted that particular line; this is the multiverse, for god's sake, there's got to be tens of thousands more systems waiting to be documented. CCS's Chinese magic, Nasuverse magic, both of Negima's primary magic systems, Harry Potter magic, Lina Freaking Inverse and Slayers magic, I could go on and on. Yet we limit ourselves to what's in canon for some bizarre reason.

That's because this is the Nanoha OC-thread, not the Harry Potter/Slayers/Sailor Moon OC-thread. We limit ourselves to what the Nanoha canon gives us to avoid needless hairpulling and overpowered characters ("my character doesn't have a Linker Core, so its immune to the Yami no Sho's capture, nya!")

On that note, its relatively easy to adjust magic systems (hell, Aspect Magic was practically inspired by Slayers Magic, but adjusted to fit the setting)

[Tormenk]

@Keroko: Awesome image there. =3

@ Tk: Tasty bluecheese there. Certainly great work detailing and setting down rules for a magic system. New age ninjas are great as well, certainly more lively profiles than the ones I'm going to introduce now.


Next two of the expanded Jack profiles, featuring Jas and Jec.

Spoiler for Jack of Clubs:

Name: Jas Ellen
Nickname: Jack of Clubs
Gender: Female
Home World: unknown
Birth date: unknown
Age: 23 as of MC 075
Relatives: estranged
Eye color: brown
Hair color: light purple
Height: 168cm
Build: slightly above average but well-built

Mage Information
Affiliations: The Prize
Magic Type: Mid
Magic Color: Orange
Mage Rank: AA
Combat style: fire support and suppression
Element Affiliation: none

Appearance:
Image basis is Revy from Black Lagoon. Younger with a wearier and more rugged appearance.

Background/History
A drunkard father and an uncaring mother made Jas’s childhood a terrible shamble. Marked as a delinquent and scarred by her parents deteriorating relationship, Jas suffered at the hands of her abusive parents throughout her childhood. After having had a gun pointed in her direction for trying to stop her mother from leaving the house, Jas took off soon after as well.

Recruited into the Prize about a year after, her path was the toughest out of the Jacks. Suffering from the setbacks of multiple failures and looked down upon by others before and now, Jas managed to suck it up and pushed harder henceforth. Learning from her mistakes and putting every ounce of her waking energy to sharpen herself, her skills as a marksman eventually trump over other competitors.

Jat’s natural efficiency at claiming her kills gave her the recognition she sought and was one of the first to be considered as part of the Jacks from many other candidates.

Personality/Behavior
Jas is a loud and outspoken personality whose foul mouth is only overtaken by her fouler temper, though most of the times she manages to rein herself in before short-circuiting herself from anger. Also an independent individual, she hates to rely or own favors to others but makes sure that any debt to her is returned quickly in her choosing.

Jas respects Jac for holding the team together for so long and taking the ire of the higher-ups whenever the team screws up and tries not to give him any trouble beyond what she can manage reasonably well.

Her relations with the other members of the team are rather even, though her temper does flare up occasionally. She has a love-hate relationship with Jag since he’s always pestering her whenever he’s bored and this irritates her to no end every time. Her temper explodes whenever Jag goes off to do his own thing, which often results in her being busy covering his defenseless rear, in addition from her duties in combat. This often earns the latter a swing from her device into his face. Actually that happens every other day with the two of them.

Jas didn’t like Jec on first sight, regarding her as young and unsuitable, aggravated by the fact the younger girl was on equal standing with her. That fortunately changed over time with the two being partners and forced to look out for each other. In time the young woman came to regard Jec as the sister she never had and takes care of Jec whenever she can, in part not wanting the young girl to suffer the pain of negligence as she had. Jas tries her best to share Jec’s problems as well but has no one to turn to for her own problems and hence has a lot of built-up frustration and anger.

As a result, Jas frequently turns to alcohol and other vices to escape from her problems, some of them inflicted from young and others stemming from her lack of confidence. On the rare occasion she is able to forget about her problems though, Jat’s hyperactive manner is strong enough to affect everyone else, even indulging in some pretty crazy acts. Jag puts it best as he puts it

“When that girl’s happy, no one is happier than she is.”

Jag so far has only bore witness to this twice in their years of partnership.

On the other hand, Jas’s fury is truly one to behold when unleashed, magically speaking an S class bombardment spell with fire properties. As her most frequent agitator, Jag has often been on the receiving end of ‘SLC’ mode. The most memorable, and deadly display of SLC mode, came when Jag ate a week’s worth of Jas’s secret stash , painstakingly gathered from off-world missions. Needless to say, SLC mode Jas laid waste to their waiting area in short order and very nearly put a bullet through Jag’s thick skull. The offender was only saved by the advent of their night mission. Jas’s kills on that particular mission ran high, even beating out Jag’s by a wide margin in the end.

Jag had appropriately termed it 'She Lost Control' mode after that day.

Barrier Jacket
With the need to maintain a low profile, her jacket is completely decked out in black while loose enough to go running. Sleeveless jacket and undershirt, completed by pants, running boots and a pair of shades. Technically, the sunglasses are an extension of Vayeate that provides her with vital targeting and environmental information.


Fighting Style
Before becoming part of the Jacks, Jas often carried out the role of a sniper in missions and engagements. Taking down targets undetected and settling objectives in the shortest time possible is her forte. That has not changed after her addition into the Jacks, though she is responsible for fire support and suppression now as well.

Though capable of flight, Jas is much more comfortable on the ground where she has plenty of cover to take her shots from rather than duke it out in the air where she is much more exposed. It is also fairly awkward for someone of her style of fighting and device limitations to engage in aerial combat where the accuracy of her shots will inevitably suffer.

Arising from a combined need out of both necessity and adaptability, Jas has the widest array of spells in the team, focusing on range and accuracy to get the job done. Shooting-class spells are the bread and butter of her arsenal, and to cover each situation best as possible.

Due to her style of combat, Jas is the one most reliant on cartridges and her magical stamina for combat durability in the team. She’s a bona fide cartridge spammer and may carry a light backpack filled with additional cartridges and other equipment as necessary.

Device Name: Vayeate
Device Type: Storage Device
Device modes: Rifle Frame, Assault Frame, Short Sword Frame

Vayeate is Jas’s primary device, from which she performs the majority of her shooting spell. Rifle frame is the device’s setup mode and the most commonly used by Jas, most of the spells used in this form put a emphasis on range and accuracy while Assault frame is more suitable for short to mid range shooting, with properties such as better rate of fire and power. A short sword mode was included out of considerations for the need of melee combat should the need arise.

The device’s two shooting modes somewhat resemble weapons such as the sniper rifle and assault rifle found on N.A. World 97. Given that the device was modified off the standard device models used by most Prize ground troopers, it is unknown how the similarity is accounted for.

Secondary device: Snipe
Device Type: Storage Device
Device appearance: Pistol Frame and Twin Frame

Snipe is Jas’s backup pistol device in the event she is disarmed of or Vayeate runs out of cartridges, although it’s not uncommon to see Jas use both Sword Form and Snipe in close combat at the same time.

The device only employs an additional twin form. With stopping power and ease of operation in mind, Snipe uses cartridges of the same caliber as Vayeate.

Spoiler for spell list:

Offensive spells:

Rifle Frame

Barrel Shot
Vayeate’s default shooting spell, similar to those employed by other mages favoring shooting spells. Power is directly variable to range and coverage.

Power: C~A
Speed: A
Range: A~C
Accuracy: B~D

Barrel Shot: F
An explosive, homing magic bullet that locks on and pursues the designated magical signature, leaving the caster free to perform other actions.

Power: A
Speed: B
Range: A
Accuracy: A+
AoE

Barrel Shot: V
Coats bullets from Barrel Shot with several layers of magic barrier to penetrate magical fields.

Power: C~A
Speed: B
Range: A~C
Accuracy: B~D

Suppression Shot
Area suppression spell. An excellent AoE makes up for the relatively low-powered spell that requires two cartridges to fire off.

Power: B
Speed: AA
Range: AA
Accuracy: A
AoE: S

Head Shot
Jas’s most frequently used spells the name of the spell itself leaves little to imagination what the intended purpose is for. A extremely thin and fast moving beam aimed to take out the opposition in the shortest time possible. It is possible to load an extra four cartridges to penetrate defenses up to AAA strength easily.

Power: A
Speed: S
Range: S
Accuracy: AAA

Precision Shot
High-end precision sniper shot that launches an incredibly fast and powerful projectile.

Power: AA
Speed: AA+
Range: AAA
Accuracy: S+

Binding Shot
A long distance shooting spell with a binding spell as the payload.

Power: A
Speed: AA
Range: AAA
Accuracy: AAA

Assault Frame

Scatter Shot
Close quarter spell that delivers a cluster of magical projectiles. An extra expenditure of one cartridge extends the reach of the spell making it suitable to shoot down incoming projectiles.

Power: AA
Speed: B
Range: B~A
Accuracy: C

Force Bolt
A single high-impact magic projectile meant for close range striking power

Power: AA
Speed: B
Range: C
Accuracy: B

Force Burst
Rapid fire version of the above that delivers a continual stream of projectiles for sixty seconds per cartridge.

Power: A+
Speed: AA
Range: B
Accuracy: C+

Phase Stream
A low-powered flow of energy that surprisingly packs a great deal of knock-down power. The continual delivery of the beam can keep a person down for extended periods of time.

Power: D
Speed: AA+
Range: C
Accuracy: A+

Crossfire Shoot
One of the few spells that does not require her device, Jas conjures up to two dozen small projectiles at a time for close-range area bombardment.

Power: AA
Speed: AA
Range: B
Accuracy: A
AoE: B

Sword Frame

Impayr
Temporarily disable devices or prevent them from functioning properly. Jas’s version has longer stopping power and requires one cartridge upon contact.

Power: A
Range: Melee

Side Swing
A spell that Jas acquired from Jec. A mobile barrier spell in actual effect, it serves to repel opponents away while maintaining an offensive effect. One cartridge expenditure required.

Power: B+
Range: half a meter

Defensive spells:

Round Shield
Standard Mid-Childian shield type spell.

Power: AA
Area: two meters

Protection
Barrier spell that covers a wide area.

Power: A
Area: three meters


Support Spells:

Binding Hold
Jas’s version of a simple binding spell that emphasizes speed over strength.

Binding power: B
Speed: AA
Range: B

Bind Break
Attempts to deactivate a binding or imprisoning spell. The amount of time required to deactivate depends on the complexity of the target magic.

Skill: A

Snipe Shot
Jas controls the movement directions of her projectiles to guide and track her targets.

Skill: S

AT Shot
A beacon payload fired by Vayeate that will attract unguided projectiles toward the target it is adhered to. Also provides limited environmental information by active scanning.

Range: AA
Speed: S
Duration: three minutes

Flash Shot
A disruption spell that discharges large amounts of light and noise over an area.

AoE: S+

Area Scan
Scanning spell that searches and identifies the number of magical signatures.

Skill: AA

Camouflage Hide
A field spell that enables Jas to hide her presence from scans and visual detection. Commonly used in urban environments or situations that require her to remain unnoticed.

Duration: ten minutes

Spoiler for Jack of Diamonds:

Name: Jec
Nickname: Jack of Diamonds
Gender: Female
Home World: unknown
Birth date: unknown
Age: 16 as of MC 075
Relatives: dead, otherwise unknown
Eye color: faded purple
Hair color: black/light silver-ish
Height: 162cm
Build: thin and average

Mage Information
Affiliations: The Prize
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan, with heavy Mid influence
Magic Color: Violet
Mage Rank: Synthetic AAA
Combat style: defensive support and control
Element Affiliation: none

Appearance:
Image basis is Yin from Darker Than Black. Slightly older with her hair untied, reaching mid-back in length.

Background/History
Trained, and raised from young in a Prize training facility, Jec knows nothing about her past. Her family was murdered, by Prize recruiters scouring for potential mage candidates. Being the only one in her household to have the distinction of having a strong linker core, she was spared from death while the parents and two brothers that she never knew, did not.

Growing up in a organization one such as the Prize had been brutal for the frail girl but nevertheless Jec endured under the even hand and guidance of Jac, the man who would continued to watch over her growth to the current day.

Jec received special treatment from young, due to her remarkable ability in controlling and shaping the energy. Given an intelligent device after her apparent ease in utilizing magic, the distinction was great as the standard operative within the Prize made do with armed or storage devices. Given the rarity and difficulty of constructing a delicate piece of equipment as an ID, it was clear that Jec was strongly favored, even for one such as her.

The underlying reason was the huge magical potential Jec carried, and her natural ability to use it effectively. To monitor her growth and condition, the scientists chose the perfect equipment for such a need, an intelligent device.

Taught and trained in the skills of being a Prize operative by Jac, the man was also a guardian of sorts to the young girl, having watched her longer than anyone else. The former remains as distanced to Jec as any person who has regular contact with him, however. Fortunately, Jec found a confiding person in Jas after the formation of the Jacks.

Ironically, Jec is treated as the ‘younger sister figure’ in the Jacks from being the youngest in the group. Not so much from Jac of course. Concern for her well-being stands strong, as well as all of the related behavior attached. A good example would be the last time Jec got injured badly in the field. The one responsible was identified and hunted down with extreme prejudice by the rest of the team in short order, Jac included. There wasn’t enough of him left to bury afterwards.

Personality/Behavior
Perceived as a cold and quiet person, the misconception resulted from the lack of contact with other people. Jac wasn’t of much help, in part only looking after her physical welfare and ignoring her mental growth. Luckily Jec is still quite open to people, albeit slow to warm up, and a need to learn tact in her words.

Admittedly, Jec does carry a cold mask around most of the time. That being a result of her experiences in the Prize. As for being quiet, if she’s not saying anything, it’s only because she’s thinking hard about the subject posed to her rather than unwilling to response. In reality Jec is strongly curious and naïve , even if a tad cynical in thinking . Making for a rather bad combination of traits, even if fortunate in someway.

An untold reason is present of course. Jec took her first life when she was ten, inevitably altering her from then on. Though her spirit dulled, she endured that particular trial.

Ingrained from young, Jec is highly obedient to authority, appearing as overly stiff and serious to those who have worked with her. Luckily, this is balanced out by her natural flexibility to work around the given parameters and accommodate her should it work out unfavorably.

Of course that does not make her an absolute puppet. She will carry out her duty, and orders to whatever extent is needed to achieve success in a cold manner, Jec has her share of issues with what she does, questioning and debating at length with herself frequently.

With regards to her teammates, Jec looks up to Jac as the guardian figure in her life, even if he did ignore aspects of his duty. Jec understands well his reasons and is thankful, if only for his efforts.

With Jec being the ‘younger sister’, Jag and Jas acts as her older siblings. Both take the extra effort to shelter her from the reality of a world that she has only begun realizing, the two having experienced well the pains possible. Jag does it the way he knows best, eliminating possible dangers before they become so. Jas handles the internal aspects on the other hand, dispelling doubts and answering any questions Jec might have.

The girl’s first memory of the outside world was a nighttime training exercise out in the desert world the facility was based on. Upon reaching the surface, the first thing Jec saw was the massive moon of the planet. Mesmerized by the natural satellite and basically the nighttime environment, she would have continued being utterly absorbed by the experience of her first time to the surface, if not for the more urgent matter at hand.
Several hours later had her trudging under the burning sun to reach a far-out designated location, which left her dehydrated to the point of collapse. This pretty much left her in admiration of moons and nighttime while very much detesting daylight.

Barrier Jacket
A full body black leather-like suit covering from neck to feet and to wrists. The obligatory combat boots of course, and a purple ribbon to secure her hair into a ponytail. The form-fitting jacket attracts unwanted attention from the male population of the Prize, even diverting attention from the more well-endowed Jas, much to her chagrin. The suit has no effect on Jac though both girls have caught Jag with his gaze lingering on Jec in her suit a tad too long sometimes.

Fighting Style
Taking after her guardian’s trait of odd complements, Jec is a user of the Neo-Belkan system while employing the use of an intelligent device. While proficient in the use of Nighthawk, her first device she used as a weapon, it is now relegated to a secondary purpose after the addition of Mercurius as her main device.

Jec hangs back in combat to provide defensive support, leaving the fighting to her much more capable teammates while maximizing the defensive potential of Mercurius to assist her team and impede the opposition.

When it comes down to it, Jec is able to hold her own against much stronger fighters and easily subdue the rest, as demonstrated by her sparring sessions against her team and the average Prize trooper. No mean feat considering that she is at best A+ in actual combat rank.

Intelligent Device: Mercurius

Mercurius is essentially an add-on combat frame to the actual intelligent device Jec uses. The device components materializes as twelve small, disc-shaped storage devices, equally distributed and carried on the sides of Jec’s forearms and waist of her suit. The device core is located on the back of her right hand, an extension from the carrier portion of the discs.

Mercurius was designed in mind to complement Jec’s incredible skill in remotely controlling multiple objects at the same time to effective standards and so features the unique usage of twelve storage devices to aid her in spell-casting.

The discs are able to operate independently or in groups once active and serve as multi-purpose tools in this state. The discs are fairly fast and quite durable, being able to withstand a good amount of punishment. However anyone with a decent aim or able to catch them in a bombardment/AoE/Buster spell can easily damage or take them out easily.

Jec is able to employ her device to great defensive capability, if only because of device limitations hampering her from using Mercurius offensively.

Armed Device: Nighthawk

With the necessity of being prepared in mind, Jec kept Nighthawk as a secondary device after receiving Mercurius. Equipped with the standard cartridge system slightly below the head, Nighthawk is a short hafted spear with a V-shaped head to dislodge opposing weapons, and an extendable hidden dagger link from behind.

Spoiler for spell list:

Offensive :

Stinger Bolt
Mainly used as a distraction, a low-powered mid-range bolt is released from the disc.

Power: C
Speed: B
Range: A
Accuracy: B

Swarm Rush
Employing the discs as projectiles, Jec can rapidly wear down targets by using the discs to physically collide into them under the effect of enhancement magic.

Power: B
Speed: AA
Range: AA

Remote Buster
Using at least two of her discs, Jec can remotely fire off buster-class spells away from her position. Power depends on the number of discs used.

Power: B~AA
Speed: B+
Range: A
Accuracy: A

Crossfire Shoot
A spell Jec picked up from Jas, it is often used as a countermeasure to shoot down incoming projectiles.

Power: A
Speed: AA
Range: AA
Accuracy: AA

Assault Charge
Activated together with Sonic Move, Jec dashes forward with Nighthawk in a burst of speed. One cartridge expenditure required.

Power: A+
Speed: AA
Range: B+
Accuracy: B

Side Swing
A mobile barrier spell in actual effect, it serves to repel opponents away while maintaining an offensive effect. One cartridge expenditure required.

Power: A
Range: half a meter


Support:

Leech Bind
Using the discs to latch onto a device or mage, electrical energy is discharged into the target promising temporary incapacitation at the same time.

Binding power: B~AAA
Speed: A
Range: AA

Prism Prison
A capture type spell that uses four discs to encase an area in the shape of a physical pyramid.

Power: AAA
Speed: B
Range: AA

Defense Net
A strong defensive spell that uses all twelve of the discs to construct a physical wall of shields. It is also possible to double as a capture type barrier.

Power: S
Speed: C
Range: AA

Sonic Move
Enables the caster to move in a sudden burst of speed.

Skill: AA

Bind Break
A standard maneuver performed to break binds, process is greatly cut down by the aid of the discs.

Skill: AAA

Area Scan
A spell that serves to pinpoint the exact locations of targets as well as hidden objects by active scanning.

Skill: AAA


Defensive:

Barricade Wall
A spell of ingenuity and incredible difficulty, the spell employs at least three discs to create a moving physical wall to repel objects or opponents away. The challenge of maintaining mobile shields and barriers is a testament of Jec’s forte.

Power: AAA
Speed: S
Range: AA

Force Shield
Barrier type-spell that guards over an area. Can be overlapped with the discs to cover a much larger area.

Power: A
Range: three meters.

Round Shield
Materializes a shield type spell with the Belkan signil. The discs are able to create similar versions as well that can be quickly overlapped.

Power: AA~AA+
Range: two meters

Giant Round Shield
Using at least eight of her discs, Jec can create a much larger and stronger version of Round Shield.

Power: S
Range: seven meters

I'll leave the Jacks short and revised write up about the Prize for next time. The effort of revising Katrina's profile still looms though.

[Kha]

An interesting discussion in WoW made me realize a little problem with Kia's return. I've got a crack idea to fix it; and that means work on Codex Alienhunters has finally begun...

Now if only I can finish all 4 Codex, we'd be able to have the Forces of the Imperium around for once.

But whatever, there's been quite a bit of backlog. Time for...

Deed, Dieci and Wendi:

JETTO STREAM ATTACK!!!

...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Not necisarely, it is very much possible to write StrikerS with the inclusion of OC's and not fandamentally change the story. However, this would defeat the purpose of Rebuilt, which was basically to rewrite StrikerS and fix the many mistakes 7Arcs introduced.

Well I'm still trying...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Okay, the first thing we ned to do is decide what you want. Do you want an insertion of characters that run with the story? Or do you want to re-qrite StrikerS and clear 7arcs mistakes? Either is fine, but the second would definetely make it go AU. Now, there is nothing wrong with that. If an S4 will arive, Alpha has a high chance of going AU. Ghaz's fic is already AU, does that make it any less fun to read? No. Go with what suits you the best, what you feel the most comfortable writing.

I wonder... If I keep making mistakes how is that possible...

...and there's yet another error. Erio's confession about his past is much later in StrikerS; the conversation with Keira in Episode 1 might retcon that......

AAAAAARRRRRGH!!!

WTB Bigger Mind's Eye to think of StrikerS as a whole. -_-

Originally Posted by ghazghkull

*Walks in*

Spoiler for MGLN Riot Force 6:

Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Riot Force 6
Chapter IX New Mission

*Leaves*

Two new OCs, and the evil faction appears. Sata-nyan will be proud. :3

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

...who are you and what have you- wait.

...why am I not surprised Kha is attempting to insert more crack?

Wait wait wait you're getting me wrong!!!

I meant look at that Gatling! Isn't that not allowed? But the design is so mesmerizing it's hard to resist...

But don't worry; that new OC from the Band of Khrack will be using an MG and not a Gatling as originally planned.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Oh hell yea . I also watched the Tokyo Revelations OVA...holy crap she is GAR

And a CCS fic, huh? Mind sharing? :3 PM me!!!

It's only 4 chapters done, and all I got to was fanservice.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

~It all returns to nothing
It just keeps tumbling down
...tumbling down
...tumbling down~

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Damn...now I need to figure out how to farm gold for that tabard .
Hell, I need to LVL my hunter more first >_<. Damn Sunwell dailies are eating up my time

...took the pic in the Barrens? Or near that Horde major city?

Barrens. Now if only I could cross my avatar's arms and find a set of orange sunglasses...

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Hmmm...

>_>

<_<

Syn: A whole new world

Vivio: Don't you dare close your eyes

Syn: A hundred thousand things to see

Vivio: Hold your breath it gets better
I'm like a shooting star
I've come so far
I cant go back to where I used to be

A whole new world

Syn: Every turn a surprise

Vivio: With new horizons to pursue

Syn: Every moment red letter

Syn & Vivio: I'll chase them anywhere there's time to spare
Let me share this whole new world with you

Vivio: A whole new world

Syn: A whole new world
Thats where we'll be

Vivio: Thats where we'll be

Syn: A thrilling chase

Vivio: A wondrous place

Syn & Vivio: For you and me.........

>_>

*RUNS LIKE HELL*

EPIC KHRACK EVA SINCE NIGHTY'S A WHOLE NEW GUNDAM!!!

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

WoW...it's a curse, I say! A bloody curse!!!

Joooin usssss....

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

C'mon Kha, didn't they tell you Teana got her Full Drive up and running? :3

Do you guys seriously think I wanted to give Teana a gatling? Is that even in chara?! If I wanted I'd go as far as a Silencer mode that allows her to launch invisible and silent magical rounds that travel very fast.

Yes, THAT is her unKhracked Limiter Break. Dual semiautomatic handguns with silencers.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

It's official: Keroko is not only a trap, s/he openly advertises it.

It's old news buddy.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

I'll be blunt this time - DO NOT bring an SSS character in here. This is coming from someone who was stupid enough to try it himself. Just...don't.

Take it from him, and the guy speaking now, who once faked an X rank for lulz and got far more than he bargained for.

[Wibbles]

Originally Posted by Keroko

The trainingfield is quite a distance from the building though, and I doupt they'd be allowed to do something like that close to the main building.

Damn. Well, it was a fun idea.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Sheba

I so want to make a OC villain that is obsessed by his own beauty while raving about how he is the strongest, smartest, most cunning and most beautiful man of the multiverse. And is actually strong. Not BS strong, don't worry. Hummmmmmm.
I wonder I wonder.

Hmm...interesting concept . This could prove...interesting.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

WoW...it's a curse, I say! A bloody curse!!!

No, it's not A mage's Decurse won't work so it's not a curse...

*RUNS*

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

It's official: Keroko is not only a trap, s/he openly advertises it.

Originally Posted by Wibbles

A training session gone awry leaves Section 6 Headquarters in shambles.

Spoiler for Property Damage:

"Split Sphere! Thunder Smasher!" The beam of white-blue electricity passed through the conjured orb, and split into two, both beams narrowly missing Spada. The boy whistled.
"Niiice."
Lucius grinned. "I can make multiple spheres- up to about... oh, one hundred. Like this, see?" With a dramatic snap of his fingers, the older man summoned more of his orbs, placed at seemingly random intervals in the air around his son. Spada smirked.
"Volticca, calculate the beam paths."
"Of course." the feminine voice of the sword answered. Spada looked up at his father.
"How do you like that, old man?" he yelled. The man in question kept on grinning.
"You... just lost." he replied. Spada narrowed his eyes.
"Huh?"
Lucius raised Fulgardio into the air. "Photon Lancer...." he said, and Spada realized what was about to happen. The blood drained out of his face.
"LUNATIC SHIFT!!"

And then everything went to hell.


Hayate sunk to her knees as everyone else's jaws dropped. Lucius had used his combo directly above Section Six's main building. In a sphere of spinning blue-white bolts, the building was suddenly pockmarked with craters.

Poor Hayate...poor building

Originally Posted by Keroko

New Keroko image! Courtesy of Mercurianangel.

Spoiler for Don't you just want to kiss her?:

That one's going in the profile. :3 Many many thanks Mercurianangel!

So...so...CUTE~~~~

Originally Posted by Keroko

*imagines Syn and Vivio flying around singing*

You... you.... that was low, bellow the belt, dirty.... and... and...

Oooh, I'm going to get you for this, Eva.

What? It's cute. Really!

Don't kill!! I'm too young to die!!

Originally Posted by Kha

But whatever, there's been quite a bit of backlog. Time for...

Deed, Dieci and Wendi:

JETTO STREAM ATTACK!!!

*snicker*

BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

Originally Posted by Kha

It's only 4 chapters done, and all I got to was fanservice.

Nothing wrong with fanservice

Originally Posted by Kha

EPIC KHRACK EVA SINCE NIGHTY'S A WHOLE NEW GUNDAM!!!

[Comartemis]

Has anything been done with dual-element linker cores? I'm thinking of a fire/wind combo that provides a synergy boost to a spell's effects.

[Keroko]

We haven't, no, mainly because we don't concider it possible. Elemental affinities are pretty much decided on birth, and so far even a single elemental affinity is concicered a rarity. Multiple ones are deemed impossible.

Of course, a mage capable of casting multiple elemental spells is perfectly viable, but they'd have to be chanted spells.

[Comartemis]

We haven't, no, mainly because we don't concider it possible.

Bah, still more limitations. How the heck am I supposed to make something interesting if all the good stuff is impossible?

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Bah, still more limitations. How the heck am I supposed to make something interesting if all the good stuff is impossible?

When life gives you lemons, you make lemonades.

(Tempted to say kick reason to the curb but that won't make sense in this situation no?)

[tshouryuu]

Originally Posted by Sheba

I so want to make a OC villain that is obsessed by his own beauty while raving about how he is the strongest, smartest, most cunning and most beautiful man of the multiverse. And is actually strong. Not BS strong, don't worry. Hummmmmmm.
I wonder I wonder.

Sounds like you want to create this guy or even this one.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Bah, still more limitations. How the heck am I supposed to make something interesting if all the good stuff is impossible?

Oh please, there are so many ways to make interesting characters even with the limitations in place. You just have to exercise your mind a bit. And imo, you have this tendency for wanting to create Mary-sues If you want something powerful, you have to put in effort to justify it

[Comartemis]

If you want something powerful, you have to put in effort to justify it

Like so?

This is a race of metahumans borrowed from Troy Stanton's fanfic "Sailor Moon V".

Spoiler for Denizens:

Denizens are a race of metahumans from one of the TSAB’s Non-Administered worlds. Thought to be the product of extensive genetic manipulation (possibly even a legacy of Al Hazard), denizens are most noted for their unstable genetic structures. When a denizen reaches what amounts to puberty for them, their genetic structure begins to break down and rearrange itself in an excruciatingly painful process which typically lasts for several weeks, as the denizen’s body is essentially reprogrammed cell by cell. Many do not survive the process, and many more do not survive the aftermath.

When this process, called the Chaos Factor, reaches its’ conclusion, the denizen emerges a changed individual. Sometimes these changes are subtle; a change in hair color, cat-like eyes, etc. For most, however, the changes are decidedly more abrupt. A great many denizens change in physical ways, sprouting wings or talons, sometimes even transforming completely into hulking monstrosities. The particularly unlucky ones acquire potentially fatal physical defects. Still others gain special powers or abilities. These can range from kinetic manipulation or enhanced control of pheromone output, all the way up to weather manipulation and psionic abilities. There is quite literally no end to the powers a denizen can acquire from the Chaos Factor.

Ironically, however, those gifted with special abilities are the ones who (on average) live the shortest lives. The denizen’s newfound powers do not come with instinctive instruction manuals, and the nature and extent of a denizen’s powers must be learned through trial and error. Many denizens survive the Chaos Factor only to destroy themselves attempting to control their powers.

Denizens make up for this extremely high death rate by being extremely long-lived and reproducing frequently throughout their lifespan. The typical denizen lives close to 300 years, and often much more than that, though the Chaos Factor often shortens a denizen’s lifespan by a significant degree, usually by increasing the denizen’s body’s rate of cellular decay. The current record is held by the Overlord, King Krichevskoy, who is nearly 1500 years old

Denizens are naturally born without linker cores, and so are unable to use magic. Occasionally, however, a denizen will acquire a linker core through the Chaos Factor. This is actually one of the more frequently documented changes denizens experience (along with psionic talents and flight), occurring in approximately 1/1500 denizens (not counting those who don’t survive the Chaos Factor). Those who acquire linker cores often find that they have one or more elemental affinities, usually shaped by their personalities. The most recent example of this trend is Etna Darkhart, a hot-blooded, free-spirited denizen who acquired a fire and wind affinity after her Chaos Factor.

[Keroko]

You forgot to mention that Denizens also mature and learn a lot slower.

Anyway, I'm not sure if we should introduce the Chaos Factor. We still need to look deeper into the Chaos Factor itself, and how it would work in conjunction with Nanohaverse magic ('its not magic so its immume to AMF' is not allowed for example). A better way to adapt it would be to make the Denizens Chaos Factor a part of Nanohaverse magic (there are ore then 800 types out there after all) the basics are the same, but the Denizens could develop 'specialties' ranging from what is listed.

And of course Etna will need restrictions on other parts of her powers if she recieves two elemental affinities.

[Wibbles]

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

Oh please, there are so many ways to make interesting characters even with the limitations in place. You just have to exercise your mind a bit. And imo, you have this tendency for wanting to create Mary-sues If you want something powerful, you have to put in effort to justify it

Exactly. Balance things out. One of my characters has a spell stronger than Starlight Breaker (at least, I think it's stronger. If it's not, I'll alter it a bit), but the resulting magic drain will leave him out of commission for at least three months. It's the same with other powerful spells- there has to be a reasonable consequence.

Also, if your characters are too strong, you'll get bored, and others will get angry. If you keep the blatant h4xx up, we might have to have our OCs attack yours en masse. Hopefully, it won't come to that.