2013-04-18, 01:59 | Link #906 | |
A random-man
Join Date: Aug 2009
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Anyway,if the atmosphere of ancient Japan rather than Muvluv sci-fi is intentional,then you did well on it.From your writing,I can clearly see that Yuuhi and this certain someone have been together for quite awhile.There's also repeated mentionings of Yuuhi's nobility that have been described in a elegant way.And then there's Yuuhi yandere side....yah,she's clearly insane. Overall,it's a very good oneshot. |
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2013-04-18, 05:19 | Link #907 |
Truth Martyr
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Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Doing Anzu's paperwork.
Age: 38
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Actually it's pretty good. I mean, it's a little rough, don't get me wrong, and you need the polish, but you've got your wooden table out, and all you need is sanding, polish and varnish.
....also I am imagining this as the start of an ero manga. Next will be scenes drawn by, hmmm. Kima-Gray, Homunculous, Hisashi, Cuvie, Tony Taka, Takayuki, Gunma Kisaragi, Napata, ... ...nah, this is waff, that means Homunculous and Napata tied for first place. Also their proposal reminds me of Demon Queen and Hero. Basic tl;dr version: awesome sauce, write MOAR. Also I find it amusing that the two most recent snips here have been about couples sneaking away to be with each other.
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2013-04-18, 16:31 | Link #911 |
Idar Lead
Join Date: Sep 2012
Location: World Marshall bureau
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I'd really think the Japanese, for all their faults, would put someone mentally unstable in charge of the country (and yandere is mentally unstable, IMO). Too much is at stake to be jeopardized by a temper tantrum of a teenaged girl. That, or Japanese politicians like their monopoly on screwing things up.
But the promise is interesting, regardless. Keep at it.
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2013-04-18, 21:15 | Link #913 |
Truth Martyr
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Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Doing Anzu's paperwork.
Age: 38
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Regards common sense, I'd just note this discussion on Spacebattles, on the discipline of the Imperial Japanese forces.
tl;dr, your average IJA junior officer (JO, from 2LT to CPT), was an insubordinate little fuck who'd ignore orders to be YAMATO DAMASHII and ran around half-cocked. Note how many assassinations and military coups were run by junior officers in the 20s and 30s - and that's before we get into how the IJA and IJN would assassinate each other's officers. They didn't see America as the enemy, they saw the enemy as being the IJA and IJN. (I can't remember if I've actually posted this before.) On Yuuhi, I don't see her as being too yandere in that snip, btw. Well, she's not yet at the YAN stage. She's being more dereyan in that snip. Well until the end. Wait what am I saying I need coffee and breakfast. That said, you could argue that being forced into the role of Shogun has warped her, especially given the kind of teachings noble families fill the heads of their children with.
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2013-04-19, 01:27 | Link #915 |
Fairy Legion
Join Date: Jul 2008
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well she's still 16 years old in this snip and the young man is implied to be 13 years old(???)(needs to be proven)... it happened during Yui's tenureship in IRG academy in kyoto 1997 while the scene happened somewhere near/inside Kyoto. He's Yui's only male classmate BTW
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2013-04-19, 02:37 | Link #917 |
エーレンフェストの聖女
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: Dollars
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Finally caught up with one last loop.. they EXTRA part still seem somewhat weird like what I remembered, but it's still a good read.
Oh and I almost thought that Iilfride was killed in his story but I guess she survives shame that she wouldn't be able to see Makabe again though.
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2013-04-19, 03:23 | Link #919 |
Idar Lead
Join Date: Sep 2012
Location: World Marshall bureau
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@Goose
Yes, I am very well aware of it. It also did not extended much to the upper ranks - which arguably was encouraging the whole affair by using said junior officers to settle their own power plays.
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2013-04-19, 03:50 | Link #920 |
Fairy Legion
Join Date: Jul 2008
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I was thinking of a scenario of an orphan without an orphanage, since the government doesn't know what to do with him, they decided to test if he is applicable to be added in the ranks, new recruits are always welcome this days. TO their surprise the orphan boy has a very high aptitude to be an eishi... you know the rest
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