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Yumi Chan · 2009-01-01, 22:07

Hello. I have made these storys. I did NOT make the picture's though. By the way if it is bad, in your post,just post the positive things. i hope you Enjoy! Oh also, i will update some post's once in a while.^^

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Spoiler for Part 2:

TerranReaper · 2009-01-01, 23:05

This is interesting. I'd like to see more of it.

Yumi Chan · 2009-01-03, 22:25

Ok people. all people that veiw,please just read and rate. you don't need to post it. but you can read it at least. so please rate and read.
Thanks,
~Yumi Chan

Shana · 2009-01-03, 23:41

I was bored

and started reading this; I think the story's okay. Though I think there should be some things you should try to improve, like developing it more. I mean, like instead of saying "Amanda and Kimmy are good friends." you should use "Amanda and Kimmy are good friends. They've been friends since they were 2 years old." or something. And btw, the note that was left by Mrs. April, why was it directed to *just* Amanda and not the rest of the classroom too?

Oh yeah, instead of using the three options the poll has, why don't you make it like ranting it from 1 to 10? I think it'd be better. And sorry for all the criticism

Keep on writing!

aahhsin · 2009-01-08, 03:13

hahaha what a nice cute story. I'm liking it, but I won't rate it yet, i'm going to wait how it turns out.

read mine too! in my signature!

asuki-chan · 2009-01-17, 18:42

So far so good! i can't wait untill the next chapter

TerranReaper · 2009-01-18, 20:27

Keep 'em coming.

Yumi Chan · 2009-01-29, 19:45

Im still thinking 4 part 3..... keep writing though!

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2009-01-01, 22:07	Link #1
Yumi Chan Konata Rule's! Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Orlando Age: 28	My Story's Hello. I have made these storys. I did NOT make the picture's though. By the way if it is bad, in your post,just post the positive things. i hope you Enjoy! Oh also, i will update some post's once in a while.^^ Spoiler for Character/Profile: Name:Amanda Robinsin Age:10 Special: see's ghost's Hobby:seeing her parents souls. Dislike's: Death Bio:Her Faimly died off and she is alone. she see only good souls. bad souls never come by,and she has a special neclace from her mom.Her mom said it would keep Amanda safe,and it has so far.Nothing bad has happend to Amanda exept the Death of her parents. she take's long way's around school too a route the gate. it's one place she see's her parents. Spoiler for Story: "... i think i will be going off now..."Amanda has just been normal now a days. her parent's died because of age.I have too do something about this problem on my hands... Amanda has a problem. she has lost a importent thing. A charm from her father. it's memorys that she has."I guess i will start looking on my way to school..."Amanda space's out when she thinks.This world is full of things,even things different."Hmmm, what's this? ahhh!my charm!"Amanda said it with glee.She opened the school doors and went to class as a regular 4th grader would."What do we have here?"Amanda saw no teacher or student's. She spotted a note on the bourd."Amanda,we are off for a week now!sorry if your late!have a great week! Mrs.April" "Awesome!a vacation! just what i need." Just then Amanda spotted something in the hallway! it was.... To Be continued in Part 2 Spoiler for Part 2: It was... a soul! "w-who are you?"Amanda has never been so afraid in her life.She looked closer and it was a cousin."A-a-Amanda, you have grown..."Her cousin had said it in a faint voice.The soul went away after that." so i'm going to Sunrise Park."Amanda was saying she would meet her friends there. But no one was there,it was closed.She went to her friends house. Amanda and Kimmy are very good friends.after playing,Amanda walked home. but she saw something at the back of her eye."whatever it was, it fled."Amanda walked away. she saw a evil ghoul and she knew it. but the ghoul came back and came closer and.... To be Continued in part 3 Last edited by Yumi Chan; 2009-01-02 at 11:15.

2009-01-03, 22:25	Link #3
Yumi Chan Konata Rule's! Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Orlando Age: 28	Please Rate! Ok people. all people that veiw,please just read and rate. you don't need to post it. but you can read it at least. so please rate and read. Thanks, ~Yumi Chan

2009-01-03, 23:41	Link #4
Shana Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2006	I was bored and started reading this; I think the story's okay. Though I think there should be some things you should try to improve, like developing it more. I mean, like instead of saying "Amanda and Kimmy are good friends." you should use "Amanda and Kimmy are good friends. They've been friends since they were 2 years old." or something. And btw, the note that was left by Mrs. April, why was it directed to just Amanda and not the rest of the classroom too? Oh yeah, instead of using the three options the poll has, why don't you make it like ranting it from 1 to 10? I think it'd be better. And sorry for all the criticism Keep on writing! __________________

2009-01-01, 23:05	Link #2
TerranReaper I am of the Blood Ravens Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: XB-0 Hresvelgr	This is interesting. I'd like to see more of it.

2009-01-08, 03:13	Link #5
aahhsin Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2003	hahaha what a nice cute story. I'm liking it, but I won't rate it yet, i'm going to wait how it turns out. read mine too! in my signature!

2009-01-17, 18:42	Link #6
asuki-chan Only in my eyes... Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: Orlando,Fl. Age: 29	So far so good! i can't wait untill the next chapter

2009-01-18, 20:27	Link #7
TerranReaper I am of the Blood Ravens Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: XB-0 Hresvelgr	Keep 'em coming.

2009-01-29, 19:45	Link #8
Yumi Chan Konata Rule's! Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Orlando Age: 28	Im still thinking 4 part 3..... keep writing though!