Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Comartemis]

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*Drops package and runs*

Spoiler for Battle Fantasia:

It was strange that the only thing she could think about as the elevator rose was the question of if her mother had read her will yet. She had posted it through her parent's letterbox only an hour or so ago before she had gone and caught the train to central Tokyo. She wondered if her parents had even bothered to read the letter... or if they had simply tossed it aside like they had with her - their delinquent daughter.

She had quite a while to think on the subject as the elevator took a long time to reach its highest floor. Hardly surprising given it was located a good three hundred feet off the ground, half-way up the as yet incomplete Tokyo Sky Tower. She had chosen this place because it was prominent and being under construction meant that at this time of the day it was relatively abandoned. Admittedly she had needed to use every bit of her skill to sneak into the place to begin with but once inside she had been able to avoid most of the workers as they were clocking off for the evening.

Eventually the lift came to a stop and she was forced to walk the rest of the way up because the next lift was a construction one she couldn't work out how to use. The stairs would take her another three hundred or so feet up and were she a normal person she would have likely collapsed of exhaustion half-way.

But she wasn't normal - that was why she was here.

It didn't take her too long to reach the upper floors of the tower, not when she was capable of leaping up whole staircases in one jump. Even so she was panting heavily when she reached the top and the chained door which led out onto the sky high construction site that was building the tower ever higher. The chains and locks were pretty easy to get though and within moment she was standing outside on a vast ledge looking out over the city so far below.

Carefully she reached into a pocket and pulled out a pink cellphone. Earlier she had used it, unsuccessfully, to try and contact someone - anyone - who could convince her that her plan was one she shouldn't go through with... but that wasn't what she was going to use it for now. Staring out at the horizon she took a deep breath and dialed a number and held the phone to her ear.

There was no backing out now.

"Hello? Tokyo Police Force?" She said with a false cheer that simply did not match her dead-seeming eyes. "I'd like to report a suicide jumper. Yes, that's right. Uh-huh. Where?"

She sniffled slightly. "She's at the top of the Tokyo Sky Tower."

The call finished she closed her phone and raised one arm to wipe at her eyes with her sleeve. Then she opened her phone again and dialed in a new number.

"Is this the Japanese Broadcasting Corporation? I'd like to report a story in progress..."

***

It wasn't long until she heard the helicopters approaching; a quick check of her cell told her it had taken almost fifteen minutes. She smirked darkly at that, had she been here for the reason she had called them then they would have come too late... but she needed them, needed the cameras the news helicopter carried.

It was hard to explain why she hadn't just gone through with things, why she was putting on the big production she had in mind... but in the end it came down to the fact that she needed to be seen, needed to let everyone know.

It was the only thing she could do now.

She stood up from where she had been sitting against a wall, face buried against her knees. Picking herself up she took a few unsteady steps towards the edge of the ledge and wiped at her eyes and face with a now terribly damp sleeve. She winced slightly as both helicopters let loose with floodlights to illuminate her and a good chunk of the building she stood on.

She tried hard not to cringe in fear - she remembered the last time she had been blinded by bright lights like this... it was not a pleasant memory.

The police helicopter was yelling something to her over a speaker but she ignored it in favor of glancing down at her cellphone, which she had already set to pick up the Japanese Broadcasting Corporation, or as it was better known the NHK, broadcast.

Though tiny it was easy to make out that what was on the screen was a live feed from the news camera.

The future, one way or another, was here.

***

It would be broadcast upon television sets all over the country watched by hundreds, even thousands of people - and with luck the video would hit the internet and be seen by millions.

Just as she had wanted.

She stepped forward, putting the edge of the ledge and the horrifyingly long drop beyond it literally an inch from her feet. The height didn't scare her as she had enough things she feared already, rather it represented an end to her fears - one way or another.

She twitched her fingers in preparation of her next move.

All around the country she hoped that people would watch as a teenage girl stood above a lethal drop. That they will take in the way her long black hair and baggy casual clothing whipped about in the high winds caused by the two helicopters hovering nearby.

Of course many would immediately dismiss her as some crazy or drug-addled person, she knew that - but as long as some people could be made to believe then she would be content. At least it meant that some people out there might have a chance when the Nightmare Factory began slaughtering their way to world conquest.

"My name," she yelled out, far louder than should have been possible, "Is Yamaguchi Akiko!"

Reaching out in front of her with one hand the girl, Akiko, concentrated for a brief moment. Almost immediately points of light seemed to spark up all around the girl where they hung for a moment before being drawn towards her outstretched hand. There they seemed to join together and mix into a shining mass which stretched itself into a thin shape before suddenly bursting outwards and fading into nothingness. What remained was a short silvery metal staff topped with what looked from a distance like a simple golden egg but up close appeared like a set of golden petals curled protectively around something.

"And I am a magical girl!"

Closing her eyes Akiko threw the staff-holding arm out to one side and, muttering under her breath, slowly swung her arm up and around to scribe a circle in the air with the end of it... As she did so her staff left a shining trail of light purple sparkles that was dense enough to appear as a solid line from a distance. Once the circle was complete the drew back her hand and staff before reaching out again and gently tapping the staff against what had previously been the empty air within the circle.

Only now it wasn't empty air anymore, instead it was a thick mass of purple lines and script packed so tightly together that it seemed like an almost solid wall of color. Pulling back once again the girl spared a moment to wipe at her eyes with her free hand... then viciously stabbed the end of her staff through the center of the circle - it stretched outwards as if made of rubber before the staff pierced through it.

The gold petals opened, a shining jewel revealed from within them that pulsed with light before letting out a bright flash which prompted the purple circle to return to it's original shape - albeit with the staff poking through the middle. Then the wall started moving, hitting the girl only to stretch and deform around her body. Finally it appeared to have stretched too much and it seemed to pop like a bubble.

People watching the news report would gasp at the sight of the girl. They would marvel at how her hair was no longer loose but done up in a tight pigtail that looped around her neck. Her watchers would be amazed at the fact that her clothes, previously a baggy sweater and sweatpants, had vanished only to be replaced with an elaborate purple and black costume that looked like it had come from a child's imagination.

Akiko hoped that this would be enough to make people believe in magic, she didn't really want to try any of her attacks as they tended to be on the... unpleasant side what with having been made to kill and kill and kill some more until she ran out of enemies.

She knew that many would of course laugh and say what an impressive trick it all was and comment on how amazing special effects or sleight of hand have improved over the years.

But... there would be some who wouldn't. Some who believed.

There just had to be!

"Born within the empty night," the girl continued, sniffling slightly, in a voice that was quiet yet somehow still overcame the noise of the helicopters. "To guard until the return of the light, my name is..." the girl's voice hitched as she seemed to suddenly choke up. "m...my name i-is... ma-magical guh-girl..." She froze and shook her head from side to side quickly before looking forward once more. "Magical girl," she yelled out, "Star Reverie!"

The news camera zoomed in then and for the first time people around the country would get good look at the girl's face - and the tears that she knew ran down it.

"I became this when I was eight years old!" She'd been so happy that day, when a tapir named Damarri had told her that she had been blessed with magical powers, that she was the one chosen to protect the world from the Church of Eclipse.

It was rather pathetic that the happiest day of her life had also marked the end of her happiness.

"I have been fighting evil alone every day since then!" She thought about the fights she had gone through, the endless almost daily battles... the injuries she had taken and the many sleepless nights lost to patrolling... the results of that constant fighting, being dropped from school for skipping so many lessons in order to save the world... being accused of delinquency, of drug taking and street fighting because of her constant injuries...

And in the end, being abandoned by her own parents - unable to keep putting up with her ill-deserved reputation and the rumors everyone seemed to be spreading about her.

"And I..." she choked up again, ducking her head and screwing her eyes shut in pain. "I... I'm not strong enough... to keep doing it anymore." she whispered, the magic she had cast right at the start enough to ensure even this quiet speech was clearly heard.

"I've lost everything I ever had, everything I ever cared about... and it's never stopped." fresh tears rolled down her face as she thought about the joy and relief she'd had when the Church had finally fallen. She cried as she remembered the despair that had run through her when the Bloody Carnival had risen to takes it's place with fresh plots and more vicious monsters... and how it had happened all over again when her final victory simply heralded the emergence of the Nightmare Factory.

"It never stopped! Do you hear me!" The girl screamed at the helicopters, "Every day! I thought it was over when I won and it wasn't! They just wouldn't stop! They wouldn't stop and I was all alone for seven years! Seven! Years!" She threw her staff around as she screamed, the end of it crackling with energy as her magic reacted to her emotions. "I can't take it anymore! I can't take how much it scares me! I can't take how much it hurts me! I can't take any of it!"

Around the country hundreds upon hundreds of television sets showed a girl simply breaking down on live television.

There were some watching who would dismiss her rantings as crazy talk, some who'd believe it to be a set-up or some kind of theatrical thing, still others who'd simply flip the channel to watch sports or something else - but there would inevitably be a good number who would look on in a mix of horror and sympathy.

But right now the girl had gone past caring about all that.

"I just..." the girl continued, sniffing loudly and calming down as she wiped at her face with one bare arm. "I just want it to stop."

She looked up at the helicopters, straight into the cameras of the news crew.

"I... I want..."

She clutched her staff in both hands now, her knuckles visibly tight as they gripped the metal shaft.

"I want someone to save me."

The girl edged forward slightly, until her toes were over the edge of the brick ledge.

"Because if there is no-one," she whispered, "If I am truly alone..."

Her arms fell to her sides and her head dropped.

"Then I... I just... I just can't anymore."

One foot was lifted and time seemed to slow down for everyone watching.

"If there is anyone else... then please..."

The foot swung forwards and started to come down as if taking a step into open air.

"... please... save me."

And then, she fell.

***

"Nanoha!" Fate yelled as her friend practically hurtled from the hotel room they had been sharing. Nanoha's family had been treating their daughter to an overnight visit to Tokyo and Lindy, being her current guardian had insisted on paying them to allow Fate to join their trip. Possibly she was fed up of how she and Chrono had been at each other's throats lately, or maybe she just wanted her to see the sights she had never been able to see before - she didn't really know.

What she doubted the Admiral had expected, however, was the live broadcast of a girl - a magical girl - throwing herself off the top of the tallest building in the city.

Nanoha, naturally, had decided she was going to save her but there was really no way for the girl to get there in time with her flight speed.

Fate made a decision.

"Nanoha!" she yelled, rushing out of the room herself, and heading straight towards the stairs leading to the roof of the hotel, stairs her friend was already running up. "I'll go! I'm faster than you! Bardiche!"

"Barrier Jacket. Sonic Form."

Read the rest here. Or join the fun here. And don't worry about the backlog, we've got links ready for you.

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Spoiler for Battle Fantasia:

Nanoha, naturally, had decided she was going to save her but there was really no way for the girl to get there in time with her flight speed.

Fate made a decision.

"Nanoha!" she yelled, rushing out of the room herself, and heading straight towards the stairs leading to the roof of the hotel, stairs her friend was already running up. "I'll go! I'm faster than you! Bardiche!"

"Barrier Jacket. Sonic Form."

Remember to set up the correct angle of approach, match your velocity with hers, and then gradually decelerate, deary, otherwise the falling girl will become instant tomato paste

[Rising Dragon]

If Fate can't catch her in time, all she needs to do is borrow that bounce spell of Signum's...

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

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*Drops package and runs*

Spoiler for Battle Fantasia:

It was strange that the only thing she could think about as the elevator rose was the question of if her mother had read her will yet. She had posted it through her parent's letterbox only an hour or so ago before she had gone and caught the train to central Tokyo. She wondered if her parents had even bothered to read the letter... or if they had simply tossed it aside like they had with her - their delinquent daughter.

She had quite a while to think on the subject as the elevator took a long time to reach its highest floor. Hardly surprising given it was located a good three hundred feet off the ground, half-way up the as yet incomplete Tokyo Sky Tower. She had chosen this place because it was prominent and being under construction meant that at this time of the day it was relatively abandoned. Admittedly she had needed to use every bit of her skill to sneak into the place to begin with but once inside she had been able to avoid most of the workers as they were clocking off for the evening.

Eventually the lift came to a stop and she was forced to walk the rest of the way up because the next lift was a construction one she couldn't work out how to use. The stairs would take her another three hundred or so feet up and were she a normal person she would have likely collapsed of exhaustion half-way.

But she wasn't normal - that was why she was here.

It didn't take her too long to reach the upper floors of the tower, not when she was capable of leaping up whole staircases in one jump. Even so she was panting heavily when she reached the top and the chained door which led out onto the sky high construction site that was building the tower ever higher. The chains and locks were pretty easy to get though and within moment she was standing outside on a vast ledge looking out over the city so far below.

Carefully she reached into a pocket and pulled out a pink cellphone. Earlier she had used it, unsuccessfully, to try and contact someone - anyone - who could convince her that her plan was one she shouldn't go through with... but that wasn't what she was going to use it for now. Staring out at the horizon she took a deep breath and dialed a number and held the phone to her ear.

There was no backing out now.

"Hello? Tokyo Police Force?" She said with a false cheer that simply did not match her dead-seeming eyes. "I'd like to report a suicide jumper. Yes, that's right. Uh-huh. Where?"

She sniffled slightly. "She's at the top of the Tokyo Sky Tower."

The call finished she closed her phone and raised one arm to wipe at her eyes with her sleeve. Then she opened her phone again and dialed in a new number.

"Is this the Japanese Broadcasting Corporation? I'd like to report a story in progress..."

***

It wasn't long until she heard the helicopters approaching; a quick check of her cell told her it had taken almost fifteen minutes. She smirked darkly at that, had she been here for the reason she had called them then they would have come too late... but she needed them, needed the cameras the news helicopter carried.

It was hard to explain why she hadn't just gone through with things, why she was putting on the big production she had in mind... but in the end it came down to the fact that she needed to be seen, needed to let everyone know.

It was the only thing she could do now.

She stood up from where she had been sitting against a wall, face buried against her knees. Picking herself up she took a few unsteady steps towards the edge of the ledge and wiped at her eyes and face with a now terribly damp sleeve. She winced slightly as both helicopters let loose with floodlights to illuminate her and a good chunk of the building she stood on.

She tried hard not to cringe in fear - she remembered the last time she had been blinded by bright lights like this... it was not a pleasant memory.

The police helicopter was yelling something to her over a speaker but she ignored it in favor of glancing down at her cellphone, which she had already set to pick up the Japanese Broadcasting Corporation, or as it was better known the NHK, broadcast.

Though tiny it was easy to make out that what was on the screen was a live feed from the news camera.

The future, one way or another, was here.

***

It would be broadcast upon television sets all over the country watched by hundreds, even thousands of people - and with luck the video would hit the internet and be seen by millions.

Just as she had wanted.

She stepped forward, putting the edge of the ledge and the horrifyingly long drop beyond it literally an inch from her feet. The height didn't scare her as she had enough things she feared already, rather it represented an end to her fears - one way or another.

She twitched her fingers in preparation of her next move.

All around the country she hoped that people would watch as a teenage girl stood above a lethal drop. That they will take in the way her long black hair and baggy casual clothing whipped about in the high winds caused by the two helicopters hovering nearby.

Of course many would immediately dismiss her as some crazy or drug-addled person, she knew that - but as long as some people could be made to believe then she would be content. At least it meant that some people out there might have a chance when the Nightmare Factory began slaughtering their way to world conquest.

"My name," she yelled out, far louder than should have been possible, "Is Yamaguchi Akiko!"

Reaching out in front of her with one hand the girl, Akiko, concentrated for a brief moment. Almost immediately points of light seemed to spark up all around the girl where they hung for a moment before being drawn towards her outstretched hand. There they seemed to join together and mix into a shining mass which stretched itself into a thin shape before suddenly bursting outwards and fading into nothingness. What remained was a short silvery metal staff topped with what looked from a distance like a simple golden egg but up close appeared like a set of golden petals curled protectively around something.

"And I am a magical girl!"

Closing her eyes Akiko threw the staff-holding arm out to one side and, muttering under her breath, slowly swung her arm up and around to scribe a circle in the air with the end of it... As she did so her staff left a shining trail of light purple sparkles that was dense enough to appear as a solid line from a distance. Once the circle was complete the drew back her hand and staff before reaching out again and gently tapping the staff against what had previously been the empty air within the circle.

Only now it wasn't empty air anymore, instead it was a thick mass of purple lines and script packed so tightly together that it seemed like an almost solid wall of color. Pulling back once again the girl spared a moment to wipe at her eyes with her free hand... then viciously stabbed the end of her staff through the center of the circle - it stretched outwards as if made of rubber before the staff pierced through it.

The gold petals opened, a shining jewel revealed from within them that pulsed with light before letting out a bright flash which prompted the purple circle to return to it's original shape - albeit with the staff poking through the middle. Then the wall started moving, hitting the girl only to stretch and deform around her body. Finally it appeared to have stretched too much and it seemed to pop like a bubble.

People watching the news report would gasp at the sight of the girl. They would marvel at how her hair was no longer loose but done up in a tight pigtail that looped around her neck. Her watchers would be amazed at the fact that her clothes, previously a baggy sweater and sweatpants, had vanished only to be replaced with an elaborate purple and black costume that looked like it had come from a child's imagination.

Akiko hoped that this would be enough to make people believe in magic, she didn't really want to try any of her attacks as they tended to be on the... unpleasant side what with having been made to kill and kill and kill some more until she ran out of enemies.

She knew that many would of course laugh and say what an impressive trick it all was and comment on how amazing special effects or sleight of hand have improved over the years.

But... there would be some who wouldn't. Some who believed.

There just had to be!

"Born within the empty night," the girl continued, sniffling slightly, in a voice that was quiet yet somehow still overcame the noise of the helicopters. "To guard until the return of the light, my name is..." the girl's voice hitched as she seemed to suddenly choke up. "m...my name i-is... ma-magical guh-girl..." She froze and shook her head from side to side quickly before looking forward once more. "Magical girl," she yelled out, "Star Reverie!"

The news camera zoomed in then and for the first time people around the country would get good look at the girl's face - and the tears that she knew ran down it.

"I became this when I was eight years old!" She'd been so happy that day, when a tapir named Damarri had told her that she had been blessed with magical powers, that she was the one chosen to protect the world from the Church of Eclipse.

It was rather pathetic that the happiest day of her life had also marked the end of her happiness.

"I have been fighting evil alone every day since then!" She thought about the fights she had gone through, the endless almost daily battles... the injuries she had taken and the many sleepless nights lost to patrolling... the results of that constant fighting, being dropped from school for skipping so many lessons in order to save the world... being accused of delinquency, of drug taking and street fighting because of her constant injuries...

And in the end, being abandoned by her own parents - unable to keep putting up with her ill-deserved reputation and the rumors everyone seemed to be spreading about her.

"And I..." she choked up again, ducking her head and screwing her eyes shut in pain. "I... I'm not strong enough... to keep doing it anymore." she whispered, the magic she had cast right at the start enough to ensure even this quiet speech was clearly heard.

"I've lost everything I ever had, everything I ever cared about... and it's never stopped." fresh tears rolled down her face as she thought about the joy and relief she'd had when the Church had finally fallen. She cried as she remembered the despair that had run through her when the Bloody Carnival had risen to takes it's place with fresh plots and more vicious monsters... and how it had happened all over again when her final victory simply heralded the emergence of the Nightmare Factory.

"It never stopped! Do you hear me!" The girl screamed at the helicopters, "Every day! I thought it was over when I won and it wasn't! They just wouldn't stop! They wouldn't stop and I was all alone for seven years! Seven! Years!" She threw her staff around as she screamed, the end of it crackling with energy as her magic reacted to her emotions. "I can't take it anymore! I can't take how much it scares me! I can't take how much it hurts me! I can't take any of it!"

Around the country hundreds upon hundreds of television sets showed a girl simply breaking down on live television.

There were some watching who would dismiss her rantings as crazy talk, some who'd believe it to be a set-up or some kind of theatrical thing, still others who'd simply flip the channel to watch sports or something else - but there would inevitably be a good number who would look on in a mix of horror and sympathy.

But right now the girl had gone past caring about all that.

"I just..." the girl continued, sniffing loudly and calming down as she wiped at her face with one bare arm. "I just want it to stop."

She looked up at the helicopters, straight into the cameras of the news crew.

"I... I want..."

She clutched her staff in both hands now, her knuckles visibly tight as they gripped the metal shaft.

"I want someone to save me."

The girl edged forward slightly, until her toes were over the edge of the brick ledge.

"Because if there is no-one," she whispered, "If I am truly alone..."

Her arms fell to her sides and her head dropped.

"Then I... I just... I just can't anymore."

One foot was lifted and time seemed to slow down for everyone watching.

"If there is anyone else... then please..."

The foot swung forwards and started to come down as if taking a step into open air.

"... please... save me."

And then, she fell.

***

"Nanoha!" Fate yelled as her friend practically hurtled from the hotel room they had been sharing. Nanoha's family had been treating their daughter to an overnight visit to Tokyo and Lindy, being her current guardian had insisted on paying them to allow Fate to join their trip. Possibly she was fed up of how she and Chrono had been at each other's throats lately, or maybe she just wanted her to see the sights she had never been able to see before - she didn't really know.

What she doubted the Admiral had expected, however, was the live broadcast of a girl - a magical girl - throwing herself off the top of the tallest building in the city.

Nanoha, naturally, had decided she was going to save her but there was really no way for the girl to get there in time with her flight speed.

Fate made a decision.

"Nanoha!" she yelled, rushing out of the room herself, and heading straight towards the stairs leading to the roof of the hotel, stairs her friend was already running up. "I'll go! I'm faster than you! Bardiche!"

"Barrier Jacket. Sonic Form."

Read the rest here. Or join the fun here. And don't worry about the backlog, we've got links ready for you.

I tried getting the flow of the story but my mind got brain rape, screwed and bleached trying to go with the flow...

But i see quite a promising story Battle Fantasia will bring. If I ever get which chapter goes first and which will go next...

[Comartemis]

Originally Posted by mega1987

I tried getting the flow of the story but my mind got brain rape, screwed and bleached trying to go with the flow...

But i see quite a promising story Battle Fantasia will bring. If I ever get which chapter goes first and which will go next...

You may find this to be useful.

[Sunder the Gold]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

If Fate can't catch her in time, all she needs to do is borrow that bounce spell of Signum's...

Don't you mean Yuuno's?

I don't recall Signum knowing Floater Field.


In any case, I'm very interested in the story. Looks like a bit of Madoka without making the realities worse than they needed to be, and now the magical girl is getting back-up of the best kind.

Kind of like that excellent Sailor Moon / Nanoha crossover.

[Comartemis]

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

Don't you mean Yuuno's?

I don't recall Signum knowing Floater Field.


In any case, I'm very interested in the story. Looks like a bit of Madoka without making the realities worse than they needed to be, and now the magical girl is getting back-up of the best kind.

You have no idea.

Kind of like that excellent Sailor Moon / Nanoha crossover.

You mean the one where Luna is an idiot who aggros everything in sight, the Senshi are utterly incompetent and the author switches between anime and manga canons on the basis of which one makes the Senshi and Serenity look worse? I know this is collaborative fiction, but I don't think we're that bad.

[Sunder the Gold]

My biggest and perhaps only complaint about "White Devil of the Moon" is how it fumbles Yuuno's feelings for Nanoha.

Whatever your own opinions of that fic are, take my comment as a compliment.


Heh. After reading the second chapter, if Fate wasn't grounded for life BEFORE, she certainly is NOW. And this time, she'd actually deserve it.

The stuff with Hayate and the Wolkenritter was awesome.

[Justin_Brett]

Yeah, a lot of that story is basically 'man, these girls sure do suck, good thing Nanoha, who is way better than Serena in every way, is here!', even if he intended otherwise.

Vivio beating up Rini was pretty funny though, so it's not all bad.

[Comartemis]

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

My biggest and perhaps only complaint about "White Devil of the Moon" is how it fumbles Yuuno's feelings for Nanoha.

Well as of yet there's no shipping happening in this series one way or the other save for ships that are absolutely unquestionably canon (i.e. Usagi/Mamoru). If you get it into your head to swing by and join the development team you'll find that we're very pairing-neutral for just about every series involved, in fact the only argument we've had on that front was the question of Sayaka/Kyouko vs Sayaka/Kyousuke, and we started this whole thing back in March, so I'd say we're doing pretty good in that regard.

Originally Posted by Justin_Brett

Yeah, a lot of that story is basically 'man, these girls sure do suck, good thing Nanoha, who is way better than Serena in every way, is here!', even if he intended otherwise.

It's worse because he tries to pretend he isn't doing it. The Senshi are supposedly A-ranks now even though all four of them together struggled to take down even one of Precia's drones (the ones that Chrono and Nanoha cleaved through by the dozens in season 1), and they top out around AAA-rank in potential, which is pathetic for a set of MGs who are supposed to be the avatars of the planets themselves.

[Sunder the Gold]

To be clear, I did NOT say my complaint was that "White Devil of the Moon" developed a Nanoha/Fate pairing.

My complaint was how Yuuno's response to that was merely to shrug. And how, before that, news that Nanoha had almost killed herself was met with a sigh.

In the first case, Yuuno should have been jealous and depressed. In the second case, he should have been frantic and rushing to help.

Both of these are Yuuno's canonical reactions to Nanoha displaying any possibly-romantic interest in someone else (or someone else displaying the same for her) and for Nanoha being in danger. It's not a matter of shipping.

In the same way, it would be out-of-character if Sayaka was not unhappy with Kyosuke seeing another girl, or was completely unphased by news that he had nearly died.

[Akiyoshi]

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

Even in the present day, Nanoha uses the Flier Fins. Fate's regular barrier jacket retains a cape (or coat?), and her Sonic Form has the Sonic Sails. Hayate herself has the black seraph wings of Sleipnir.

These are flight aids -- additional spells added to the barrier jacket to improve speeds and manueverability.

Just to make a point. Fate's Sonic Form doesn't include the Sonic Fins anymore whe she's an adult.

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

Don't you mean Yuuno's?

I don't recall Signum knowing Floater Field.

I think he was refering to that spell Signum used after Zest kicked her butt in order to avoid crashing into the pavement by casting three "panzeschids" that worked as a spring/coil bouncing Signum out of danger.

...of course, she was unisoned with Rein at the time so we don't know if the spell belongs to Rein instead of her.

[shiroi mahotsukai]

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Later...

As she looked over the reports that Vita had given her, Leti grimaced at the rather... Vivid description Vita had put together in only an hour. Considering how shaken up Vita was over the dead bodies, it was amazing that she was able to write up such a coherent report so quickly. She had requested that the bodies be looked at, documented and disposed of properly. Nanoha's report was far less indicative of anything, other than Vita had pulled rank and forced her to leave.

But who would murder all those people? And what purpose did it serve?

(---)

As the last 'supplier' dropped to the ground, his eyes unseeing and mouth foaming as his body twitched while the last of his life left him, she rolled her eyes and snarled. "Humans, so annoying."

Still, they did serve her purposes as she looked over the various crates that her summoner's creations were carrying off. 'Ancient technology certainly is amazing.' She thought to herself as she looked at one of her robotic minions that stood watch over her. Not that she needed it.

"Master." She turned to see her summoner look at her. "We have everything loaded into the transporter."

"Very well." She smirked and walked up to the girl and put her hands on the girl's shoulders. "You've done quite well today." It was almost amusing when the girl pressed herself forward and her body gave off various 'signals'. "Perhaps I'll reward you when we get back."

"Thank you, Master." The girl smiled before gasping as her master squeezed her chest. "Nnngh..."

"Good... There will be more later, Lutecia." Her eyes glinted as Lutecia nodded and gulped softly.

"Thank you, Master Qua..." She gulped when her master glared at her. "I apologize, Master Levi. Please forgive me."

"I will discipline you later for this, but for now, get on the transport." Lutecia nodded and turned to walk away. She wondered what her master was going to do to her and hoped that it wouldn't be too horrible.

Levi smirked as she watched Lutecia's rear end while walking away. It wasn't even the fact that she could manipulate Lutecia's body so perfectly that made her do this. It was the thought of corrupting such an innocent personality into something that would desire her and only her that made everything she was doing worthwhile.

She was almost certain her late master, Death Bringer Garoth, would approve of such a tactic.

One thing that annoyed her was the fact that Due was spending so much time with Lutecia lately. The girl was almost... Independent in her thoughts. An invisible aura surrounded her as she imagined what she would do to Due for setting her plans back somewhat.

'If everything had gone well, I'd have a willing little sex pet of my own by now.' Levi thought to herself before snorting. Pulling out a small data pad, she looked over the data that she had gathered and frowned heavily. "What kind of technology did they use in Al Hazard?" If only something had survived Garoth's 'purging' years ago.

"Oh well, looks like I won't be able to turn people into extra power sources for the Megah." She smirked, if such a technology did exist to turn humans into Unison Devices, it was almost certainly lost by now.

So what if she had to sacrifice a couple hundred people to find out that answer? It wasn't like they were important anyway.

'If I got my hands on a human that was turned into a Unison Device...' Levi smirked as she and her Megah walked over to the transport, which disappeared in a flash after they were on it.

The thought of being able to experiment on such a device would be quite...

Interesting.

(---)

Elsewhere...

Reinforce Eins suddenly shivered and looked around. 'What was that?' She thought to herself as she and Hayate were looking out at some sort of blast site.

"You okay, Reinforce?" Hayate blinked and the taller Unison Device nodded at her. "Are you sure?"

"Hayate..." Reinforce shook her head and mentally smiled at how kind Hayate really was. It reminded her of some of the better masters that she and the Wolkenritter had in the past. "I would not worry about it. I suddenly got a chill for no reason, it could have been something as simple as a speck of dust running across my neck that caused it."

Hayate didn't look completely convinced, but decided to drop it as she turned and floated down to the center of the blast site, followed by Reinforce. "...what is this?"

Reinforce looked around and shook her head. "I don't know." Idly, she kicked some dirt and blinked as a small black crystal appeared from under the sand. "What is this?" Bending over, she touched it before jumping away, her eyes wide as she felt what that crystal was.

"Reinforce?" Hayate looked at Reinforce with worry before looking at the crystal. "What is..."

"That," the silver-haired device panted and gripped her hand as though it had been either burned or frozen, "felt like the protection program." Reinforce said as she flew up and away from the ground, Hayate joining her a moment later. Reinforce shivered and looked at the blast site. "This... There was some sort of Mazoku power here. I'm sure of it."

Hayate turned back to look at the blast site and wondered just what was at that site. 'What is going on here? I thought there weren't many Mazoku in this universe.'

Whatever it was, Hayate was starting to get extremely worried.

Spoiler for Comments:

Poor Lu-chan.

I started out angry about what Levi was doing but now I'm just disgusted. She's lost all sense of anything remotely human Quattro's starting to look quite sympathetic by comparison at the moment.

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

Don't you mean Yuuno's?

I don't recall Signum knowing Floater Field.

Originally Posted by Akiyoshi

I think he was refering to that spell Signum used after Zest kicked her butt in order to avoid crashing into the pavement by casting three "panzeschids" that worked as a spring/coil bouncing Signum out of danger.

Yeah, that's the one I was referring to.

[Sunder the Gold]

Originally Posted by Akiyoshi

Just to make a point. Fate's Sonic Form doesn't include the Sonic Fins anymore whe she's an adult.

But even a non-flyer like Subaru sprouts wing-like constructs when she wants to enhance her speed.

[Koveras Alvane]

Originally Posted by Sunder the Gold

But even a non-flyer like Subaru sprouts wing-like constructs when she wants to enhance her speed.

Bad example: her wings are a feature of the Accelerate Charge System, which is only built into Mach Caliber and Raising Heart.

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by shiroi mahotsukai

I started out angry about what Levi was doing but now I'm just disgusted. She's lost all sense of anything remotely human Quattro's starting to look quite sympathetic by comparison at the moment.

Levi IS a Mazoku... They're supposed to be monsters in heart... So they say...
*looks at Xellos, Dolphin, Riksfalto and Zelas.*
Although These guys are bidding their time and waiting for the whole universe to stop wanting to live before Ragnarok begins...

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

You mean the one where Luna is an idiot who aggros everything in sight, the Senshi are utterly incompetent and the author switches between anime and manga canons on the basis of which one makes the Senshi and Serenity look worse?

Oh, that one. What I never understands from that fic is how Nanoha seemed pretty calm about killing Jad...Kun...whoever the general was (it's been a while). Now I understand that she might be pretty pissed emotional because of the threat to her family, but even after the fight is over she never seemed to think back and go "wait, I killed someone, didn't I?"

Nanoha is not a character that would be unfazed after taking a life.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

You may find this to be useful.

So I've read the rest at ff.net. Pretty interesting beginning . Is there a list on what magical girl series will be part of this mega-crossover?

[Justin_Brett]

I was kind of surprised that outright killed him in the first place. Dude got ran over by a plane and lived to talk about it, not to mention how tired Nanoha was when she fired it.

[Craxuan]

Whoa, that list o_O, it's mind boggling to think how much effort has been put into this Battle Fantasia.

That being said, collaborating to write a fic is just not my thing though, even though I can see much benefit from it.