Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Ok, the Crack (or Khrack) must be getting to me, either that or something else...
And yeah, maybe the Vivio part was a bit too much
But the amounts of DNA are small anyway.

Though, in Koji's case...did you read the incident that gave him that ability?
Scaglietti wasn't actually involved, but he did provide the Relic, that whole "Experimental Relic Weapon" stuff was just to mess with Koji, tease him and hit where it hurts the most.

Besides, I'm not going to develop it more than this, it's just to explain some events, like why hasn't Relic number 11 been found (though if there's a 4th season of Nanoha that talks about it, I'm gonna get ION CANON'ed, hard! ), and Scaglietti could be lying...

So, please don't worry about it...

Also, do explain that "Orochimaru Syndrome", I haven't heard about it yet...

"Orochimaru Syndrome" is a term form the Narutoverse. Before the revelation of the truths behind various important events like the attack of Kyuubi or the Uchiha massacre, Orochimaru was the main villain. As such, fanfiction usually blamed Orochimaru for anything evil happening. He was behind the Kyuubi attack, he was behind the Uchiha massacre, he was behind any wars that may or may not orccur in the fic, he controlled Danzou and so on and so on. He was basically behind everything that happened in the manga. Jail is now giving of similar vibes, behing behind every tragic event that happens. Why on earth would he even give away that Relic? What were his motivations? It's not like he'd care about an experiment that has nothing to do with his goals whatsoever. Jail is not the type to randomnly do things, everything he does is with his own goals firmly in mind.

The DNA thing with Treize was... completely unnecisary, even more so when you say it is 'only a small amount anyway' if it has no effect, why even have it?

Koji... is by far the worst of in this situation. He already has the 'everyone he encounters likes or loves him' atribute, and now he suddenly is an experimental weapon? Not only that, but he holds the illustrous Relic 11 to top it off? That is a major storyline impact there, concidering the importance the Relic had initially. Apparently it also gives him his amazing 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' powers... The amount of connections Koji has to CC's just keeps growing and growing, and that's not always a good sign.

Originally Posted by Kha

...isn't Number 11 inside Kha after Sophia asked him to swallow it in Nanoha/Cente Gravia...? Kha's named after the 11th Midchilda alphabet after all... Though you did make me realize that Kha has permanently yellow pupils and white hair...



*runs at ludicrious speed*

And why would Sophia be the one to 'allow' such a thing?

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Ok, the Crack (or Khrack) must be getting to me, either that or something else...
And yeah, maybe the Vivio part was a bit too much
But the amounts of DNA are small anyway.

Though, in Koji's case...did you read the incident that gave him that ability?
Scaglietti wasn't actually involved, but he did provide the Relic, that whole "Experimental Relic Weapon" stuff was just to mess with Koji, tease him and hit where it hurts the most.

Besides, I'm not going to develop it more than this, it's just to explain some events, like why hasn't Relic number 11 been found (though if there's a 4th season of Nanoha that talks about it, I'm gonna get ION CANON'ed, hard! ), and Scaglietti could be lying...

So, please don't worry about it...

DNA doesn't have to be in large amounts to have "interesting" effects on people.

And about that 4th season...somehow it doesn't look as though there'll be another one. The ending of StrikerS was surprisingly more "conclusive" in nature than the other 2, all plot holes nonwithstanding.

(I'm referring, of course, to the ending cinematics)

@Thread: How many Relics are there, and how many haven't been found?

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Also, do explain that "Orochimaru Syndrome", I haven't heard about it yet...

If it's the "mess with everything possible to be messed with" syndrome, and the "screw with everything possible to be screwed with" syndrome then I think I know it.

Although I don't really think that's what Keroko was talking about...

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Only Maren knows about it...no one else does
And it isn't an IS...just an uncontrolable ability, like that mind reader in Code Geass, Mao or Gao (or whatever his name was )

His name is Mao. He had the Power of the Listener, iirc.

Gao...The GaoGaiGar khrack must've gotten to you, somehow, FSZ...

XD

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

I smell Khrack in the air

*runs*

Ashcroft:Khrack is always in the air. I see Kha has recovered sufficiently to begin affecting the air in a manner like...before. That means over 50% recovery, unless Kha's Khrack units have increased since last calculation.
Xena: Indeed. Steal everything, ram everything together...a frightening technique.
Ashcroft: True...*whispers*Now, where did I put that manuscript for that Atrum Lucem sigil...it should be in the office somewhere.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Koji... is by far the worst of in this situation. He already has the 'everyone he encounters likes or loves him' atribute, and now he suddenly is an experimental weapon? Not only that, but he holds the illustrous Relic 11 to top it off? That is a major storyline impact there, concidering the importance the Relic had initially. Apparently it also gives him his amazing 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' powers... The amount of connections Koji has to CC's just keeps growing and growing, and that's not always a good sign.

Agreeing with Keroko...the Naruto parallels seem to be very strong. Not that Koji = Naruto, but Koji = too much the average shonen main character. It would also be better if Koji doesn't infect everybody with his "Koji AoE Happiness Spell" just as Naruto does his "Naruto AoE Ninja-Way Spell"...if you know what I mean.

The piece was nicely written, IMO, but also a little too cliched. Just to be blunt, I think I've seen this sort of thing before.

*waves hands* and yeah, don't offense, okay, FSZ? Just some comments.

Ashcroft: *smirks* Not that you write well anyway.
Xena: Shaddup already! You don't have to rub salt in my wounds all day, you arrogant prick!
Ashcroft: I'm being honest. You should be, too.
Xena: It's that book by Wilde, I swear it is. It's infecting you like Khrack infects the OC!
Ashcroft: It's not a bad thing. At least you lose to me more now.
Xena: *bad face aura* ....

*Xena starts chasing Ashcroft around like a bloodhound*

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- Still writing...schoolwork is killing me, but I shall resist!

EDIT: I somehow got the Orochimaru Syndrome correct?!

I must have the skill "Intuition" on level AAA or something...

[Keroko]

We don't know how many Relics there are, nor how much have been found. I think they're like Jewel Seeds in that regard, there could be thousands more out there.

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by Keroko

We don't know how many Relics there are, nor how much have been found. I think they're like Jewel Seeds in that regard, there could be thousands more out there.

Thanks! More plot holes! Yay...

Although this also means I have to be more careful now...

*rummages through his Inficio Logia drafts, and starts ripping some of them into tiny shreds, while keeping some in a private locker somewhere for future use*

EDIT: The number of viewers have risen...a good sign, Keroko?

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

Another F/SN super fan?

No, but I like good stories.

Yeah, you really should.... I'd like to read more of it It was good as far as I read

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Uh...huh. So he's some kind of badass, huh? what does he do to deserve such a title?

Basically? He converted a bunch of Jedi to help the republic in a war, then turned around and kicked the Republic when they thought they had won, but the icing on the cake is that you get to decide how badass he is.

And his armor rocks.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Heh, I remember you saying something about that. *begins scribbling "Get Tesla drunk" plans*

One glas is all it takes.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Keroko's actions have shifted his alignment OVER 9000 points towards Evil.

Most hilarious quote of that night: "I guess I'm no longer Lawfull Evil, am I?"

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

So why are we all blaming IRC and not the Genderbending thread?

Genderbend thread is checked ocasionally, IRC demands constant presence.

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

You say that now, but one of these days you'll get curious. You will come, and then you will be forever captured by "The Curse."

You underestimate my resentment for chat programs, young one.

Originally Posted by Kha

It's because Kha is the Shirou who had become a Hero of Justice but before encountering that betrayal that turned him into Archer. So he's like somewhere in between Shiro and Archer, that's the Original Kha. Clone Kha if he does get to grow up (like in Ghaz work) would be more like Archer, less talkative, but just as snarky.

Why not? The snarky is part of Archer's charm.

Originally Posted by Kha

SO they were passive skills? Ah well, I suppose Instinct is more like something able to be retained by Project F type beings with more experience than they have lived for due to their additional memories.

As for Mind's Eye... Whispers?

Whispers? No, strategical analysis. To see something and work out all possible solutions. To 'see the battle in one's mind' as it were. There are no 'whispers' involved.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

But, but! I only planted the poppies. And processed them... @_@

It's Kha that chose to sniff them.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

And the whole Mind's Eye + Instinct sounds a whole lot like Austin only that it's not really natural to him but learnt over more than a decade, and to a lesser extent, Saga as well. :3

Well, Instinct can be learned, it just can't be taught that easilly. Keroko learned it herself throughout her life, streetfighting helps at that. Knowing were to go, where not to go, when to dodge in fights where people aren't obeying 'rules', she had to learn.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Of course he's the most awesome, since... well... you know.

I still feel weird since my playthough of KoToR had me using my face template as a modded Anakin.

I went for the long haired guy for Revan myself.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

LOL, I always do that as well. And I often save-load to see multiple facets of HK's reaction to what I do.

My penchant for doing evil usually rises when HK is in the party.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

The biggest weakness with KoToR, and MOST games of such nature is how blatantly they make the good/evil line. Dammit, I want to be a sly evil like Papaltine, not some crazy ass genocidal let's kill them all monster.

But at least you know what's going to happen. Mass Effect can be more subtle in that regard, however as a downside, you generally don't know what Sheppard is going to say. For example, there could be an option labeled 'decline' and when you select it, Shepperd sticks a gun under someone's chin and gives a few choice words. Hardly the option I wanted.

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

You know, I need to start working on creating villains for my story work so my OCs have someone to clash with.

So here goes nothing.

Spoiler for Sektor 21:

"Sektor 21", the only known name to a faceless terror organization that continues to plague the TSAB.

Fueled by hatreds spawned by a war over a hundred and fifty years ago, this unknown faction of anarchistic terrorists have deep and far reaching roots across Mid-Childa, and throughout TSAB space. Attempts to investigate and isolate cells of this organization have gone nowhere. They have, time and again, been found in possession, and use of mass based weapons, sending fear and strife wherever they appear. How they accquire them is unknown, but one thing has been seen. They LOATHE mages, all mages, with few exceptions among their faceless numbers. Seeing mages and the magic civilization that has grown on the planet as an abomination, they have only one (admittedly ludicrous) goal. Annihilate the TSAB, and plunge Mid-Childa into a new era of 'freedom', while doing away with magic.

Admittedly, their priority to the TSAB has been low since they do not want anything to do with Lost Logia. And their lack of real capabilities have never placed them high on the TSAB's threat list, thinking them nothing more than annoying pests that constantly traffic illegal arms and incite skirmishes with Beaurau mages.

However, in recent months their activities have escalated, and their threat has become significantly greater.

With the end of the JS incident and the destruction of the Cradle, massive cleanup of the knocked out drones had to be performed... drones filled with examples of AMF tech. Recent incidents involving Sektor 21 's signature "Power Plant Attack" have shown the use of AMF to counter mages and cause more damage than ever before. In the power vaccume created by the death of LtG. Regius, they seem to be taking greater interest in destablizing the Beaurau's 'shaky' operations.
Limited intelligence suggests that this may be a precursor to something bigger.



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General qualities: Sektor 21 operates under a common doctrine of hate for mages in general (with few tolerated exceptions as required for them to get their deeds done.), and a hate for the TSAB. They have been attempting to destablize Mid-Childa through terror attacks, many focused on various power plants powering major cities.

In the events of the story, they are making a bold move, theft of leftover weapons grade nuclear matierals (Uranium 235) from an antarctic safe storage site, in an attempt to build a nuclear weapon and detonate it in Cranagan. An attempt they see as a decapitation move that will wipe out the beaurau's Ground Forces, and throw Mid-Childa into chaos.

I'll develope it in more detail from here. It's late, I'm tired, goodnight.

Oooh, antagonist factions. :3 it's been a while.

Will bust any details later, food first.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Only Maren knows about it...no one else does
And it isn't an IS...just an uncontrolable ability, like that mind reader in Code Geass, Mao or Gao (or whatever his name was )

You mean like Nunally's?

Originally Posted by Keroko

"Orochimaru Syndrome" is a term form the Nanohaverse. Before the revelation of the truths behind various important events like the attack of Kyuubi or the Uchiha massacre, Orochimaru was the main villain. As such, fanfiction usually blamed Orochimaru for anything evil happening. He was behind the Kyuubi attack, he was behind the Uchiha massacre, he was behind any wars that may or may not orccur in the fic, he controlled Danzou and so on and so on. He was basically behind everything that happened in the manga. Jail is now giving of similar vibes, behing behind every tragic event that happens. Why on earth would he even give away that Relic? What were his motivations? It's not like he'd care about an experiment that has nothing to do with his goals whatsoever. Jail is not the type to randomnly do things, everything he does is with his own goals firmly in mind.

The DNA thing with Treize was... completely unnecisary, even more so when you say it is 'only a small amount anyway' if it has no effect, why even have it?

Koji... is by far the worst of in this situation. He already has the 'everyone he encounters likes or loves him' atribute, and now he suddenly is an experimental weapon? Not only that, but he holds the illustrous Relic 11 to top it off? That is a major storyline impact there, concidering the importance the Relic had initially. Apparently it also gives him his amazing 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' powers... The amount of connections Koji has to CC's just keeps growing and growing, and that's not always a good sign.

/facefault

Me and X did that with Feiwang, and we've dragged him into the Nanohaverse after our CLAMP works started cross-infecting... Is this a problem? I've expanded it to a League, but still...

Originally Posted by Keroko

And why would Sophia be the one to 'allow' such a thing?

Because she's evil.



Jokes aside, here's the Khrack, and I'd like to point out that this is VERY old, even before Rebuilt was even conceived:

Spoiler for Khrack Relic:

The inspiration:

In Fate/Stay Night, Rin gave Shiro a jewel fom her collection to act as a switch that kept his magic circuit "always on" and allow him to better use magic, instead of having to recreate a new circuit every time he wanted to use magic.

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I reinterpretted that, and in Nanoha/Cente Gravia:

Sophia wanted to help Kha store his mana better, as his Reactive Linker was bleeding mana all over the shop, therefore causing his magic stamina to be much lower than it's supposed to be. After reading up, she found that treatment was to core the Linker Core with a special jewel, and Sophia had a stock of those gathered by her family over the years. She dug out the most powerful one and gave it to Kha to swallow.

Expected side effects aside, and Kha becoming able to Trace a few more times without suffering a heart attack, this was also the first step of Kha learning the incomplete Reality Marble, Infinite Spell Forge. It is from this platform that Kha springboards and learns more about his Rare Skill Tracing, and ultimately attaining Unlimited Blade Works in StrikerS.

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Then came the revelation of what Relic infusion meant in that episode of Vivio's memorable screaming (almost gave me tinitis. >_<). Now considering that Sophia's father worked with Jail in the Sacking of Renault, I'm not surprised that among those red gems was a Relic. And the way the Relic awoken Vivio's barrier IS is exactly the same as Kha finding "Infinite Spell Forge".

It made me fall flat on my face, as I realized that that innocent little red gem that Sophia gave Kha... worked exactly a Relic, and it might as well be one.

And there's one more coinciding factor: it was coincidence that Kha was named after a letter in the alphabet (see 3rd edition Codex for details), but the largest coincidence by far was that his name was the 11th letter of the alphabet...

...now ponder about Relic #11, then add Khrack of Jail being obsessed with Kha for a reason unrelated to Relics...

This is a very bad summary of events stretched over a long timeline, but I hope you see how it goes...

[Aaron008R]

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Been a while...

I'll tackle the backlog at a late time, but for now, I have to post my entry to Rebuilt.

-Entry to Rebuilt-

~Serena Avenir~

Spoiler for Serena:

Name: Serena Avenir
Nickname: Serene, Sere-chan (She dislikes being called like this), Ice Princess
Callsign: <to be decided by Kha>
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Birthday: September 12 in the Earth Calendar
Occupation/s: Riot Force 6 Forward/ Prospective Striker
Rankings: Registered mage ranking: B+
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 134 lbs.
Eyes: Bluish-gray
Hair: Grayish-blonde, Wavy, past shoulder length
Magic style: Mid-Childa
Magic Color: Pale Blue
Usual wear: TSAB Ground Forces Uniform/ a red sweater, a short blue skirt and knee-length brown boots
Specialization: Mid-Childa melee-offensive style
Devices: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Elemental Affinity: Ice
Seiyuu: Yui Sakakibara

Profile: She is the niece of General Maxim of the Ground forces, a mage-in-training with a rather high-standard upbringing. She was orphaned at a young age and learned to be self-sufficient even with financial support from her other relatives. Prior to StrikerS, she is a newly-graduated mage cadet who just passed her B-rank examination a few months before, her efficiency gaining her an additional + designation on her rank. She is 1 year Subaru and Teana’s senior. As of StrikerS, she is recruited into Riot Force 6, a Special Unit made by Yagami Hayate. She was recruited before Subaru and the other forwards in canon.


Personality: Serena usually has an aloof and elitist outlook in life. Her demeanor is outwardly cold and taciturn, but she’s generally gentle in mannerism. She puts self-sufficiency and order on high regard, which is reflected in her very meticulous lifestyle. She believes in the saying that ‘Actions speak louder than words…’ and thus seeks to prove herself thru advancing in as much fields as she can with minimal complaints. Obviously, she is very responsible, though to a fault. This is because part of her mentality unconsciously demands that she sees the same level of responsibility and professionalism from others. However, she seems to have a soft spot for young children, even having a tendency to unintentionally dote on some slightly (a fact that embarrasses her).


Relationships: Unlike typical girls from rich families, she is in no way a spoiled brat. More like the opposite. She is so by-the-book that she earns much favor from superiors though her socialization with her peers suffers as a result. She is one year Subaru and Teana’s senior from the academy, and is acquaintances with the two. Though their relationship is hardly one would call warm, she is familiar enough with the two to talk casually with them. However, she still addresses them by their surnames. She is noticeably in better terms with Teana compared to Subaru, since they are more alike and Subaru’s attitude more often than not raises Serena’s eyebrows. She also knows Ginga Nakajima, though they aren’t very familiar with each other.

Like most people, she holds admiration towards the Aces, particularly Yagami Hayate and her Wolkenritter. She was saved by Hayate and her Knights once, which left an impression on her. As such, she is very loyal to RF6 and strives hard to perform up to standards; believing fiercely in Hayate’s leadership. She is highly uncomfortable around Magitech Weapon and Spell Researcher Aurion Dauer, as his nonconformist disposition strikes the wrong chords with her. She does respect him though; she just can’t comprehend why he has such a strange personality.


Device: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Her intelligent device, Siegerion, much like Erio Mondial’s Strada and Caro Ru Lushe’s Kerykeion, was a base-form/basic-function device before being upgraded with AI by Shari Finieno and Reinforce Zwei. It takes the form of a mainly blue-and-silver broad one-sided blade with a perpendicular triggered handle such that the edge extends from her arm. A small barrel is located above the blunt edge of the blade for shooting spells. It has an automatic-pistol cartridge loader that hold up to four cartridges. The AI speaks in a well-modulated ma voice, much like a butler in speech pattern. He addresses Serena as ‘Madam’. Its portable form is a ring with a chibi-version of the device. She wears it on her right middle-finger.


Fighting Style: Serena is a practitioner of the uncommon Mid-Childa melee-style of combat. This style is reminiscent of Fate Testarossa Harlaown’s own; though her style focuses more on heavy strikes coupled with dilapidating effects of her Ice Magic. As such, Siegerion’s blade is usually blunt in setting. She couldn’t fly, though she is quite agile and quick on her foot. She likes to fight indirectly to minimize risks of brawl-like frontal encounters, striking in opportune moments. Her range is slightly more broad than Subaru’, but she can’t handle long-range too well. She tends to over-think strategies, but retains a cool demeanor as she was instructed in academy. Her position is Front Supporter.

Barebones as of now. Spells later.

Keroko-chan's gonna have some fun re-educating her to be more outgoing.

And Kha, she's packing her stuff in episode 1. Maybe talking to some relatives would do. Maxim is Lowe's OC.

And before other questions, Serena is currently a Rebuilt of StrikerS-only character.

[krisslanza]

*Sneaks in whistling*

Spoiler for Arc-en-Ciel: Canon Character:

Name: Vivio Takamachi (Takamachi Vivio)
Age: 11
Gender: Female
Race: ?
Mage style/rank: Belkan/A
Device: Long/bastard (Undecided) sword - Joyeuse/Excalibur (Again undecided)
Spells (WIP)
o Divine Shatter: A charged attack adept at breaking barriers at the cost of a cartridge.
o Northern Blades: Creates a trio of swords that Vivio can control as if she were holding them. They aren't particularly powerful and can be shattered easily but each is exceptionally sharp - you could split hairs with these.
o Binds of Light: A bind that targets the arms and legs.
o Final Cross: A ranged energy slash in the shape of a cross. Its quite quick and can cleave stone.
o Western Moon: Another ranged energy slash that resembles Final Cross but on contact instead explodes with power to pulverize stone into fine powder and sunder iron.
o Vengeance: A interesting 'support' spell. Improves Vivio's natural physical abilities (i.e. strength and speed) for a five minute duration - however at the end the exhaustion will catch up with her.
o Holy Shield: Full-body defense spell that prevents movement but is extremely powerful - costs a cartridge.
o Crusade: Essentially a more powerful Vengeance that costs a cartridge and increases Vivio's physical prowess even more. Vivio's speed is essentially that of using a constant Sonic Move and is strong enough to split steel like wax paper. It however only lasts a minute and fatigues her far worse.

*Runs like hell*

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Keroko

"Orochimaru Syndrome" is a term form the Nanohaverse. Before the revelation of the truths behind various important events like the attack of Kyuubi or the Uchiha massacre, Orochimaru was the main villain. As such, fanfiction usually blamed Orochimaru for anything evil happening. He was behind the Kyuubi attack, he was behind the Uchiha massacre, he was behind any wars that may or may not orccur in the fic, he controlled Danzou and so on and so on. He was basically behind everything that happened in the manga.

I see...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Jail is now giving of similar vibes, behing behind every tragic event that happens. Why on earth would he even give away that Relic? What were his motivations? It's not like he'd care about an experiment that has nothing to do with his goals whatsoever. Jail is not the type to randomnly do things, everything he does is with his own goals firmly in mind.

Now now...he's not behind everything

Originally Posted by Keroko

The DNA thing with Treize was... completely unnecisary, even more so when you say it is 'only a small amount anyway' if it has no effect, why even have it?

Well...maybe, but her IS is about analyzing data a replicating it.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Koji... is by far the worst of in this situation. He already has the 'everyone he encounters likes or loves him' atribute, and now he suddenly is an experimental weapon? Not only that, but he holds the illustrous Relic 11 to top it off? That is a major storyline impact there, concidering the importance the Relic had initially. Apparently it also gives him his amazing 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' powers... The amount of connections Koji has to CC's just keeps growing and growing, and that's not always a good sign.

dakara...
I should have been more specific when I wrote the last part...

Also, that 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' isn't as simple as it looks...

and...CC?

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

DNA doesn't have to be in large amounts to have "interesting" effects on people.

True.

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

@Thread: How many Relics are there, and how many haven't been found?

Before the attac to the TSAB Ground Central, Scaglitti had about 40~50 Relic in his lab...talk about HAX

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

His name is Mao. He had the Power of the Listener, iirc.

I see

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Gao...The GaoGaiGar khrack must've gotten to you, somehow, FSZ...

Never seen it, except for the short YouTube videos.

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Agreeing with Keroko...the Naruto parallels seem to be very strong. Not that Koji = Naruto, but Koji = too much the average shonen main character. It would also be better if Koji doesn't infect everybody with his "Koji AoE Happiness Spell" just as Naruto does his "Naruto AoE Ninja-Way Spell"...if you know what I mean.

I've never seen Naruto (except for episode 1 and some random YouTube clips), so I don't really know about that

And yeah, Koji is pretty much like an averge shounen main character, take Emiya Shirou for example, with his "wanting to save everyone" mentality, Koji not only wants to save everyone he wants to carry the burden all by himself, solve the problems on his own...and he stubborn about it, as seen in this last part. It's not like he wants the glory all for himself, he just doesn't want anyone to get hurt anymore...it all goes to something that happened in his childhood (I'm hinting again ) before he met Signum or anyone else.

In a way, Koji is like Hayate, she lost someone important to her and doesn't want it to happen again, so she pushes herself further to protect those she cares about.

Also...Koji's ability it isn't an AoE Spell
It just happens that Koji's personality is compatible with the ability the got...in the worst case scenario, if Koji wasn't Koji, he could have manipulated people into doing his bidding and stuff (the horror )

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

The piece was nicely written, IMO, but also a little too cliched. Just to be blunt, I think I've seen this sort of thing before.

*waves hands* and yeah, don't offense, okay, FSZ? Just some comments

Oh...no worries...none at all
*puts Death Note away*

Originally Posted by Kha

You mean like Nunally's?

What?

Anyway (I'm using this word a lot )...I just want to get this over with and go back to Maren Route

Don't worry, I'll clean this up good in the following part
*goes back to work*

[krisslanza]

CC = Canon Character

You know maybe someone should make an official "Nanoha Character Creation Dictionary" or something with all the terms you guys all use

[Kha]

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Ashcroft:Khrack is always in the air. I see Kha has recovered sufficiently to begin affecting the air in a manner like...before. That means over 50% recovery, unless Kha's Khrack units have increased since last calculation.
Xena: Indeed. Steal everything, ram everything together...a frightening technique.
Ashcroft: True...*whispers*Now, where did I put that manuscript for that Atrum Lucem sigil...it should be in the office somewhere.

You just made me think of the Khrack Standard Index (KSI) of the air here...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Why not? The snarky is part of Archer's charm.

I've a feeling Clone Kha is going to be much more popular than the original...

After all, he's the one who went out in style.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Whispers? No, strategical analysis. To see something and work out all possible solutions. To 'see the battle in one's mind' as it were. There are no 'whispers' involved.

I see... I guess that skill is redundant then.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

:3

:3 :3

:3 :3 :3

:3 :3 :3 :3 :3 :3


Been a while...

I'll tackle the backlog at a late time, but for now, I have to post my entry to Rebuilt.

-Entry to Rebuilt-

~Serena Avenir~

Spoiler for Serena:

Name: Serena Avenir
Nickname: Serene, Sere-chan (She dislikes being called like this), Ice Princess
Callsign: <to be decided by Kha>
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Birthday: September 12 in the Earth Calendar
Occupation/s: Riot Force 6 Forward/ Prospective Striker
Rankings: Registered mage ranking: B+
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 134 lbs.
Eyes: Bluish-gray
Hair: Grayish-blonde, Wavy, past shoulder length
Magic style: Mid-Childa
Magic Color: Pale Blue
Usual wear: TSAB Ground Forces Uniform/ a red sweater, a short blue skirt and knee-length brown boots
Specialization: Mid-Childa melee-offensive style
Devices: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Elemental Affinity: Ice

Profile: She is the niece of General Maxim of the Ground forces, a mage-in-training with a rather high-standard upbringing. She was orphaned at a young age and learned to be self-sufficient even with financial support from her other relatives. Prior to StrikerS, she is a newly-graduated mage cadet who just passed her B-rank examination a few months before, her efficiency gaining her an additional + designation on her rank. She is 1 year Subaru and Teana’s senior. As of StrikerS, she is recruited into Riot Force 6, a Special Unit made by Yagami Hayate. She was recruited before Subaru and the other forwards in canon.


Personality: Serena usually has an aloof and elitist outlook in life. Her demeanor is outwardly cold and taciturn, but she’s generally gentle in mannerism. She puts self-sufficiency and order on high regard, which is reflected in her very meticulous lifestyle. She believes in the saying that ‘Actions speak louder than words…’ and thus seeks to prove herself thru advancing in as much fields as she can with minimal complaints. Obviously, she is very responsible, though to a fault. This is because part of her mentality unconsciously demands that she sees the same level of responsibility and professionalism from others. However, she seems to have a soft spot for young children, even having a tendency to unintentionally dote on some slightly (a fact that embarrasses her).


Relationships: Unlike typical girls from rich families, she is in no way a spoiled brat. More like the opposite. She is so by-the-book that she earns much favor from superiors though her socialization with her peers suffers as a result. She is one year Subaru and Teana’s senior from the academy, and is acquaintances with the two. Though their relationship is hardly one would call warm, she is familiar enough with the two to talk casually with them. However, she still addresses them by their surnames. She is noticeably in better terms with Teana compared to Subaru, since they are more alike and Subaru’s attitude more often than not raises Serena’s eyebrows. She also knows Ginga Nakajima, though they aren’t very familiar with each other.

Like most people, she holds admiration towards the Aces, particularly Yagami Hayate and her Wolkenritter. She was saved by Hayate and her Knights once, which left an impression on her. As such, she is very loyal to RF6 and strives hard to perform up to standards; believing fiercely in Hayate’s leadership. She is highly uncomfortable around Magitech Weapon and Spell Researcher Aurion Dauer, as his nonconformist disposition strikes the wrong chords with her. She does respect him though; she just can’t comprehend why he has such a strange personality.


Device: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Her intelligent device, Siegerion, much like Erio Mondial’s Strada and Caro Ru Lushe’s Kerykeion, was a base-form/basic-function device before being upgraded with AI by Shari Finieno and Reinforce Zwei. It takes the form of a mainly blue-and-silver broad one-sided blade with a perpendicular triggered handle such that the edge extends from her arm. A small barrel is located above the blunt edge of the blade for shooting spells. It has an automatic-pistol cartridge loader that hold up to four cartridges. The AI speaks in a well-modulated ma voice, much like a butler in speech pattern. He addresses Serena as ‘Madam’. Its portable form is a ring with a chibi-version of the device. She wears it on her right middle-finger.


Fighting Style: Serena is a practitioner of the uncommon Mid-Childa melee-style of combat. This style is reminiscent of Fate Testarossa Harlaown’s own; though her style focuses more on heavy strikes coupled with dilapidating effects of her Ice Magic. As such, Siegerion’s blade is usually blunt in setting. She couldn’t fly, though she is quite agile and quick on her foot. She likes to fight indirectly to minimize risks of brawl-like frontal encounters, striking in opportune moments. Her range is slightly more broad than Subaru’, but she can’t handle long-range too well. She tends to over-think strategies, but retains a cool demeanor as she was instructed in academy. Her position is Front Supporter.

Barebones as of now. Spells later.

Keroko-chan's gonna have some fun re-educating her to be more outgoing.

And Kha, she's packing her stuff in episode 1. Maybe talking to some relatives would do. Maxim is Lowe's OC.

And before other questions, Serena is currently a Rebuilt of StrikerS-only character.

T3h General of MAN MAXIM?! Is she close to the General? You DO know that Maxim is gonna die in CrosyS do you? I smell EMO coming!!!

Allie and her are polar opposites! Looks like the Drake Squad IS gonna be very different from the first two! :3 I do hope she can be convinced to do the Gothlolion dance with Allie; her device is Siegerion after all! :3 :3

+1 for Hayate fanclub. At least Allie and Serene have something in common. :3 :3 :3

Alrightt! Got her settings out, now to fit things in. I believe Drake 3 Serena is gonna flip when she discovers who Drake 4 is. :3 :3 :3 :3

Get that spell and combat data out soon; otherwise I'll jam at the training sessions like how things are now.

But bottomline: :3

*scurries off to grow more Khrack*

Originally Posted by krisslanza

*Sneaks in whistling*

Spoiler for Arc-en-Ciel: Canon Character:

Name: Vivio Takamachi (Takamachi Vivio)
Age: 11
Gender: Female
Race: ?
Mage style/rank: Belkan/A
Device: Long/bastard (Undecided) sword - Joyeuse/Excalibur (Again undecided)
Spells (WIP)
o Divine Shatter: A charged attack adept at breaking barriers at the cost of a cartridge.
o Northern Blades: Creates a trio of swords that Vivio can control as if she were holding them. They aren't particularly powerful and can be shattered easily but each is exceptionally sharp - you could split hairs with these.
o Binds of Light: A bind that targets the arms and legs.
o Final Cross: A ranged energy slash in the shape of a cross. Its quite quick and can cleave stone.
o Western Moon: Another ranged energy slash that resembles Final Cross but on contact instead explodes with power to pulverize stone into fine powder and sunder iron.
o Vengeance: A interesting 'support' spell. Improves Vivio's natural physical abilities (i.e. strength and speed) for a five minute duration - however at the end the exhaustion will catch up with her.
o Holy Shield: Full-body defense spell that prevents movement but is extremely powerful - costs a cartridge.
o Crusade: Essentially a more powerful Vengeance that costs a cartridge and increases Vivio's physical prowess even more. Vivio's speed is essentially that of using a constant Sonic Move and is strong enough to split steel like wax paper. It however only lasts a minute and fatigues her far worse.

*Runs like hell*

Excalibur for GREAT JUSTICE! :3

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

What?

Ok wrong interpretation.


Boy oh boy, suddenly it's all coming to me now... This Thread shall be saved, in the name of the Kaiser!

:3

[Tk3997]

Originally Posted by Keroko

No, but I like good stories.

I've only seen the anime though I've read through other things about the series as well. It's pretty good, but I've already got reams of crap floating around my head form other universes. (I own or have read like every piece of Halo fiction ever for instance.)

Basically? He converted a bunch of Jedi to help the republic in a war, then turned around and kicked the Republic when they thought they had won, but the icing on the cake is that you get to decide how badass he is.

And his armor rocks.

The Republic was acting pretty stupid though (shocking I know.), but he did take it a little too far perhaps.

Most hilarious quote of that night: "I guess I'm no longer Lawfull Evil, am I?"

Well not unless some loophole in the laws of that kingdom allows genocide.

Why not? The snarky is part of Archer's charm.

Everyone loves Snark! Well expect for the guy getting snarked, him not so much.

My penchant for doing evil usually rises when HK is in the party.

That happened to me a little with Wrex in Mass Effect his whole “I don’t give a shit let’s just shot them all.” attitude could be infectious. He also gave me one of my favorite lines in the entire game about halfway through the Feros mission.

“This was my kind a mission. Kill a bunch of Geth and end things off with a huge crash.”

I was grinning ear to ear when I heard that on my first play through.

But at least you know what's going to happen. Mass Effect can be more subtle in that regard, however as a downside, you generally don't know what Sheppard is going to say. For example, there could be an option labeled 'decline' and when you select it, Shepperd sticks a gun under someone's chin and gives a few choice words. Hardly the option I wanted.

I don't know I found the options pretty close to what I wanted in all cases, but I played a hardcore Paragon basiclly the entire game.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

:3

:3 :3

:3 :3 :3

:3 :3 :3 :3 :3 :3


Been a while...

I'll tackle the backlog at a late time, but for now, I have to post my entry to Rebuilt.

-Entry to Rebuilt-

~Serena Avenir~

Spoiler for Serena:

Name: Serena Avenir
Nickname: Serene, Sere-chan (She dislikes being called like this), Ice Princess
Callsign: <to be decided by Kha>
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Birthday: September 12 in the Earth Calendar
Occupation/s: Riot Force 6 Forward/ Prospective Striker
Rankings: Registered mage ranking: B+
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 134 lbs.
Eyes: Bluish-gray
Hair: Grayish-blonde, Wavy, past shoulder length
Magic style: Mid-Childa
Magic Color: Pale Blue
Usual wear: TSAB Ground Forces Uniform/ a red sweater, a short blue skirt and knee-length brown boots
Specialization: Mid-Childa melee-offensive style
Devices: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Elemental Affinity: Ice

Profile: She is the niece of General Maxim of the Ground forces, a mage-in-training with a rather high-standard upbringing. She was orphaned at a young age and learned to be self-sufficient even with financial support from her other relatives. Prior to StrikerS, she is a newly-graduated mage cadet who just passed her B-rank examination a few months before, her efficiency gaining her an additional + designation on her rank. She is 1 year Subaru and Teana’s senior. As of StrikerS, she is recruited into Riot Force 6, a Special Unit made by Yagami Hayate. She was recruited before Subaru and the other forwards in canon.


Personality: Serena usually has an aloof and elitist outlook in life. Her demeanor is outwardly cold and taciturn, but she’s generally gentle in mannerism. She puts self-sufficiency and order on high regard, which is reflected in her very meticulous lifestyle. She believes in the saying that ‘Actions speak louder than words…’ and thus seeks to prove herself thru advancing in as much fields as she can with minimal complaints. Obviously, she is very responsible, though to a fault. This is because part of her mentality unconsciously demands that she sees the same level of responsibility and professionalism from others. However, she seems to have a soft spot for young children, even having a tendency to unintentionally dote on some slightly (a fact that embarrasses her).


Relationships: Unlike typical girls from rich families, she is in no way a spoiled brat. More like the opposite. She is so by-the-book that she earns much favor from superiors though her socialization with her peers suffers as a result. She is one year Subaru and Teana’s senior from the academy, and is acquaintances with the two. Though their relationship is hardly one would call warm, she is familiar enough with the two to talk casually with them. However, she still addresses them by their surnames. She is noticeably in better terms with Teana compared to Subaru, since they are more alike and Subaru’s attitude more often than not raises Serena’s eyebrows. She also knows Ginga Nakajima, though they aren’t very familiar with each other.

Like most people, she holds admiration towards the Aces, particularly Yagami Hayate and her Wolkenritter. She was saved by Hayate and her Knights once, which left an impression on her. As such, she is very loyal to RF6 and strives hard to perform up to standards; believing fiercely in Hayate’s leadership. She is highly uncomfortable around Magitech Weapon and Spell Researcher Aurion Dauer, as his nonconformist disposition strikes the wrong chords with her. She does respect him though; she just can’t comprehend why he has such a strange personality.


Device: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Her intelligent device, Siegerion, much like Erio Mondial’s Strada and Caro Ru Lushe’s Kerykeion, was a base-form/basic-function device before being upgraded with AI by Shari Finieno and Reinforce Zwei. It takes the form of a mainly blue-and-silver broad one-sided blade with a perpendicular triggered handle such that the edge extends from her arm. A small barrel is located above the blunt edge of the blade for shooting spells. It has an automatic-pistol cartridge loader that hold up to four cartridges. The AI speaks in a well-modulated ma voice, much like a butler in speech pattern. He addresses Serena as ‘Madam’. Its portable form is a ring with a chibi-version of the device. She wears it on her right middle-finger.


Fighting Style: Serena is a practitioner of the uncommon Mid-Childa melee-style of combat. This style is reminiscent of Fate Testarossa Harlaown’s own; though her style focuses more on heavy strikes coupled with dilapidating effects of her Ice Magic. As such, Siegerion’s blade is usually blunt in setting. She couldn’t fly, though she is quite agile and quick on her foot. She likes to fight indirectly to minimize risks of brawl-like frontal encounters, striking in opportune moments. Her range is slightly more broad than Subaru’, but she can’t handle long-range too well. She tends to over-think strategies, but retains a cool demeanor as she was instructed in academy. Her position is Front Supporter.

Barebones as of now. Spells later.

Keroko-chan's gonna have some fun re-educating her to be more outgoing.

And Kha, she's packing her stuff in episode 1. Maybe talking to some relatives would do. Maxim is Lowe's OC.

And before other questions, Serena is currently a Rebuilt of StrikerS-only character.

Nice don’t see any problems so far though all this talk kind of makes me want to jam one of my guys into the mix; most of them are probably too powerful though they’d skew the balance. Alan is the only guy that could sort of fit as he was only like A rank at the start of Strikers.

On this note though I’ve decided to demote and power down some of my guys a bit as they’re a bit too strong IMO and it was hard to make viable threats for them.

That’s also why post strikers I’m trimming and reorganizing my stable a bit it was rather overpowering IMO so I’m breaking up my guys post strikers and having them shuffle around to various different bits of the TSAB so they can’t really mass in one place; several them also get power nerfs. (Cipher, Pixy, and to a somewhat lesser extent Felix mostly) Since as I said I was finding it was a bit difficult to come up with credible threats with them all together at their former levels; even the Haxbuster himself isn’t invulnerable to power creep…

Anyway the basic gist is:
Pixy: Ships off as the muscle for a lower ranked enforcer (a new OC)
Cipher: goes into Special Investigations (he’s such a monster I acutally want to keep him out of combat as much as possible)
“SG-1”: Largely disbands with everyone but Mitchell being put on a bus Daniel goes to work at the main branch, Carter spends most of her time in the R&D division, and Teal’c heads home to help stabilize the situation on his home world.
Felix: His post StrikerS actives will be the center of my new fic. (which is at around 7,000 words now and I expect to put out the first part sometime this week)
Alan: Bounces around a number of Air Force units right after Strikers gaining field experience in operating in normal units though he also appears in the fic and will be around quite a bit.
O’Neil: Continues amassing more power and influence then someone like him should really be trusted with and abusing it in amusing ways. He also appears a bit in the fic though more as background character.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Keroko

It's the IRC I tell you, its evil. Eeeeevil.

Random sometimes (ok...maybe more than sometimes ), but I wouldn't really say 3V1L...

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Heh, I remember you saying something about that. *begins scribbling "Get Tesla drunk" plans*

*peers over at plans*

Originally Posted by LimitedEternal

Keroko's actions have shifted his alignment OVER 9000 points towards Evil.

Originally Posted by Kha

Found it somewhere, and had to use it. GARamelladansen anyone? [/COLOR][/I]

*suddenly has an image of Ideon, Gunbuster, DieBuster, Genesis GaoGaiGar, VF-1J, and RX-78-2 doing Caramelldansen*

Originally Posted by Nightengale

But, but! I only planted the poppies. And processed them... @_@

It's Kha that chose to sniff them.

So it WAS you!

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Redheads....ARE HOT!

*flees the mighty blade of IGNIZ*

You forgot to also run from Asuka and her very red Eva 02...

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

:3

:3 :3

:3 :3 :3

:3 :3 :3 :3 :3 :3


Been a while...

I'll tackle the backlog at a late time, but for now, I have to post my entry to Rebuilt.

He's back!

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

-Entry to Rebuilt-

~Serena Avenir~

Spoiler for Serena:

Name: Serena Avenir
Nickname: Serene, Sere-chan (She dislikes being called like this), Ice Princess
Callsign: <to be decided by Kha>
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Birthday: September 12 in the Earth Calendar
Occupation/s: Riot Force 6 Forward/ Prospective Striker
Rankings: Registered mage ranking: B+
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 134 lbs.
Eyes: Bluish-gray
Hair: Grayish-blonde, Wavy, past shoulder length
Magic style: Mid-Childa
Magic Color: Pale Blue
Usual wear: TSAB Ground Forces Uniform/ a red sweater, a short blue skirt and knee-length brown boots
Specialization: Mid-Childa melee-offensive style
Devices: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Elemental Affinity: Ice

Profile: She is the niece of General Maxim of the Ground forces, a mage-in-training with a rather high-standard upbringing. She was orphaned at a young age and learned to be self-sufficient even with financial support from her other relatives. Prior to StrikerS, she is a newly-graduated mage cadet who just passed her B-rank examination a few months before, her efficiency gaining her an additional + designation on her rank. She is 1 year Subaru and Teana’s senior. As of StrikerS, she is recruited into Riot Force 6, a Special Unit made by Yagami Hayate. She was recruited before Subaru and the other forwards in canon.


Personality: Serena usually has an aloof and elitist outlook in life. Her demeanor is outwardly cold and taciturn, but she’s generally gentle in mannerism. She puts self-sufficiency and order on high regard, which is reflected in her very meticulous lifestyle. She believes in the saying that ‘Actions speak louder than words…’ and thus seeks to prove herself thru advancing in as much fields as she can with minimal complaints. Obviously, she is very responsible, though to a fault. This is because part of her mentality unconsciously demands that she sees the same level of responsibility and professionalism from others. However, she seems to have a soft spot for young children, even having a tendency to unintentionally dote on some slightly (a fact that embarrasses her).


Relationships: Unlike typical girls from rich families, she is in no way a spoiled brat. More like the opposite. She is so by-the-book that she earns much favor from superiors though her socialization with her peers suffers as a result. She is one year Subaru and Teana’s senior from the academy, and is acquaintances with the two. Though their relationship is hardly one would call warm, she is familiar enough with the two to talk casually with them. However, she still addresses them by their surnames. She is noticeably in better terms with Teana compared to Subaru, since they are more alike and Subaru’s attitude more often than not raises Serena’s eyebrows. She also knows Ginga Nakajima, though they aren’t very familiar with each other.

Like most people, she holds admiration towards the Aces, particularly Yagami Hayate and her Wolkenritter. She was saved by Hayate and her Knights once, which left an impression on her. As such, she is very loyal to RF6 and strives hard to perform up to standards; believing fiercely in Hayate’s leadership. She is highly uncomfortable around Magitech Weapon and Spell Researcher Aurion Dauer, as his nonconformist disposition strikes the wrong chords with her. She does respect him though; she just can’t comprehend why he has such a strange personality.


Device: Reinforced-frame Intelligent Device: Siegerion
Her intelligent device, Siegerion, much like Erio Mondial’s Strada and Caro Ru Lushe’s Kerykeion, was a base-form/basic-function device before being upgraded with AI by Shari Finieno and Reinforce Zwei. It takes the form of a mainly blue-and-silver broad one-sided blade with a perpendicular triggered handle such that the edge extends from her arm. A small barrel is located above the blunt edge of the blade for shooting spells. It has an automatic-pistol cartridge loader that hold up to four cartridges. The AI speaks in a well-modulated ma voice, much like a butler in speech pattern. He addresses Serena as ‘Madam’. Its portable form is a ring with a chibi-version of the device. She wears it on her right middle-finger.


Fighting Style: Serena is a practitioner of the uncommon Mid-Childa melee-style of combat. This style is reminiscent of Fate Testarossa Harlaown’s own; though her style focuses more on heavy strikes coupled with dilapidating effects of her Ice Magic. As such, Siegerion’s blade is usually blunt in setting. She couldn’t fly, though she is quite agile and quick on her foot. She likes to fight indirectly to minimize risks of brawl-like frontal encounters, striking in opportune moments. Her range is slightly more broad than Subaru’, but she can’t handle long-range too well. She tends to over-think strategies, but retains a cool demeanor as she was instructed in academy. Her position is Front Supporter.

Barebones as of now. Spells later.

Keroko-chan's gonna have some fun re-educating her to be more outgoing.

And Kha, she's packing her stuff in episode 1. Maybe talking to some relatives would do. Maxim is Lowe's OC.

And before other questions, Serena is currently a Rebuilt of StrikerS-only character.

Oh, yes. Re-educating hr is going to be fun. You don't want to be an extreme by-the-book type of person around Keroko.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Now now...he's not behind everything

You get my point though.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Well...maybe, but her IS is about analyzing data a replicating it.

She doesn't need Vivio's DNA for that, Vivio's genetic skill is a defensive measure limited to analysising attacks and defending against them. Why not create an OC that would have been Treize's original? All the other numbers were based of someone.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

dakara...
I should have been more specific when I wrote the last part...

Also, that 'I can understand everyone and make everyone happy' isn't as simple as it looks...

Could've fooled me. So far Koji's harem is showing no sign of slowing down.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

I've never seen Naruto (except for episode 1 and some random YouTube clips), so I don't really know about that

And yeah, Koji is pretty much like an averge shounen main character, take Emiya Shirou for example, with his "wanting to save everyone" mentality, Koji not only wants to save everyone he wants to carry the burden all by himself, solve the problems on his own...and he stubborn about it, as seen in this last part. It's not like he wants the glory all for himself, he just doesn't want anyone to get hurt anymore...it all goes to something that happened in his childhood (I'm hinting again ) before he met Signum or anyone else.

In a way, Koji is like Hayate, she lost someone important to her and doesn't want it to happen again, so she pushes herself further to protect those she cares about.

Now we arive at the core of the problem: Koji is too much a shounen main character. Fandom is always a lot stricter in this regard, but shounen type characters are often frowned upon and labeled Mary Sues (even though main characters of that very series often fit the bill themselves) My theory is that it's mainly because we are using an established universe. Our character is not the main character, someone else is. When we take actions that form our characters to become the main characters (like what is happening to Koji at the moment, who is suddenly connected to everyone and everything) things go wrong. The main characters shift, and the story is no longer about him or her.

Now, I'm not saying it wrong to have connections to CC's (like I'm one to complain about that ) but too many connections kill a characters sense of realism. Koji is now past the edge, this incident connected him directly to Jail, Lutecia and Alphino, which means he will inadvertedly become connected closely to Erio and Caro. Combine that with Koji's growing harem of CC's (this is slightly more personal, though, I'm always hesitant of OC/CC pairings and with Rein, Cinque and now Lutecia, Koji is starting to hog them all. It's... selfish, for a lack of better words.)

Originally Posted by Tk3997

The Republic was acting pretty stupid though (shocking I know.), but he did take it a little too far perhaps.

When hasn't the Republic acted stupid? Revan wasn't too bad though, he was leaving most of the galaxy intact. It was when Malak took over that global destructions decided to show their face.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Well not unless some loophole in the laws of that kingdom allows genocide.

Which would still make me Chaotic Evil for abusing them. :3

Originally Posted by Tk3997

That happened to me a little with Wrex in Mass Effect his whole “I don’t give a shit let’s just shot them all.” attitude could be infectious. He also gave me one of my favorite lines in the entire game about halfway through the Feros mission.

“This was my kind a mission. Kill a bunch of Geth and end things off with a huge crash.”

I was grinning ear to ear when I heard that on my first play through.

Oh yes, definetely.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

I don't know I found the options pretty close to what I wanted in all cases, but I played a hardcore Paragon basiclly the entire game.

Mine weren't, I was playing a Renegade/Paragon mix (About 70% Renegade, 30% Paragon) Sometimes the actions were a little more... blunt then the description sugested.

Ended up killing the council though. That certainly made my day.

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

You know, I need to start working on creating villains for my story work so my OCs have someone to clash with.

So here goes nothing.

Spoiler for Sektor 21:

"Sektor 21", the only known name to a faceless terror organization that continues to plague the TSAB.

Fueled by hatreds spawned by a war over a hundred and fifty years ago, this unknown faction of anarchistic terrorists have deep and far reaching roots across Mid-Childa, and throughout TSAB space. Attempts to investigate and isolate cells of this organization have gone nowhere. They have, time and again, been found in possession, and use of mass based weapons, sending fear and strife wherever they appear. How they accquire them is unknown, but one thing has been seen. They LOATHE mages, all mages, with few exceptions among their faceless numbers. Seeing mages and the magic civilization that has grown on the planet as an abomination, they have only one (admittedly ludicrous) goal. Annihilate the TSAB, and plunge Mid-Childa into a new era of 'freedom', while doing away with magic.

Admittedly, their priority to the TSAB has been low since they do not want anything to do with Lost Logia. And their lack of real capabilities have never placed them high on the TSAB's threat list, thinking them nothing more than annoying pests that constantly traffic illegal arms and incite skirmishes with Beaurau mages.

However, in recent months their activities have escalated, and their threat has become significantly greater.

With the end of the JS incident and the destruction of the Cradle, massive cleanup of the knocked out drones had to be performed... drones filled with examples of AMF tech. Recent incidents involving Sektor 21 's signature "Power Plant Attack" have shown the use of AMF to counter mages and cause more damage than ever before. In the power vaccume created by the death of LtG. Regius, they seem to be taking greater interest in destablizing the Beaurau's 'shaky' operations.
Limited intelligence suggests that this may be a precursor to something bigger.



*********

General qualities: Sektor 21 operates under a common doctrine of hate for mages in general (with few tolerated exceptions as required for them to get their deeds done.), and a hate for the TSAB. They have been attempting to destablize Mid-Childa through terror attacks, many focused on various power plants powering major cities.

In the events of the story, they are making a bold move, theft of leftover weapons grade nuclear matierals (Uranium 235) from an antarctic safe storage site, in an attempt to build a nuclear weapon and detonate it in Cranagan. An attempt they see as a decapitation move that will wipe out the beaurau's Ground Forces, and throw Mid-Childa into chaos.

I'll develope it in more detail from here. It's late, I'm tired, goodnight.

Sektor?
Like...

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

Sektor?
Like...

No.



Like...

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Like...

A demolition Corporation?

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

A domolition Corporation?

*Sigh...*

Spoiler for Not even close...:

[Tk3997]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

*Sigh...*

Spoiler for Not even close...:

You have to admit it was a pretty funny answer though.

[Keroko]

Actually, that was the first thing to pop into my mind at that image as well.