Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by WarpObscura

Yuuno doesn't seem to be too concerned about Seikou having blood on her hands.

You never did explicitly name the two Huckebein at the start, did you? The description of the female one back then didn't ring a bell.

Considering that he's friends with the Wolkenritter and knows the Numbers, I'm sure that Yuuno probably can see things in a different light than most people. (Hell, Cinque has a confirmed kill in the series and she's not a bad person.)

No, they weren't named when they first showed up.

Page claim for bad guys.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by Kaijo

No, actually I wasn't going for constant fear.^^;; The idea was to show a family doing decently well; it's just that the father was bribing officials to keep his daughters from being tested (especially since he knew Marin was a mage). Up until that point, I had pretty much already shown broken homes and families. So technically, they were in a certain fear, but considered themselves okay as long as Jari could keep bribing the Enforcers to look the other way.

You'd shown broken families such that the audience had seem them sure, but Fate hadn't (unless my memory is faulty). It just doesn't seem enough to inspire an upcoming Heel Face Turn, which seems to be where her storyline wants to head.

[itanshi1]

Fate's been questioning things since the start iirc. If she's been doing anything its rationalizing for the sake of duty. It might make more sense if she took a chance with nanoha then to somehow line up her thoughts with her. Hmm, I'd have to more thoroughly evaluate this maybe.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by itanshi1

Fate's been questioning things since the start iirc. If she's been doing anything its rationalizing for the sake of duty. It might make more sense if she took a chance with nanoha then to somehow line up her thoughts with her.

True; but then why the sidetrip?

[itanshi1]

Makes sense to me if I put myself in Kaijo's shoes. Nanoha told her to see things from their shoes, so she did. I think the only way to fix this, if it even needs fixing (or at least for the sake of growing as a writer) is to experiment a bit.

[Nanya01]

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 9:

"Welcome to the Midoriya Cafe, how can..." Miyuki trailed off as she saw the person who walked into the store. "Um..." She looked the person up and down. "What's with all the pink?" She chuckled nervously as the person looked at her seriously.

"I'm looking for a Lina... Takamachi." He said, shuffling something from under the cloak he was wearing.

"Someone want me?" Lina asked as she walked out, before stopping and staring at the person. "Sirius? What are you doing here?"

"...I need a place to stay." A rather uncomfortable look came to his face as he said that.

Lina blinked and nodded. "Sure... Miyuki, why don't we close up a little early tonight?"

"Sure." Her daughter nodded, glad that they were closing down. It had been a slow night and anything was better than just standing around doing nothing after all.

A few minutes later and Sirius was sitting at one of the tables and looking at Lina curiously. "I see that your son is growing well." She blinked at him in confusion. "You don't know?"

"Well, no, I was going to go in for a sonogram tomorrow..." Lina rubbed her belly and smiled softly. "A boy, huh? How do you know?"

Sirius shrugged at her. "I am a god, after all. Things like this aren't too hard for me to figure out. as for why I am here..." He trailed off. "Remember the spell that you cast to stop Dark Star?"

"How could I forget?" Lina muttered softly as her mind drifted back to that day. "I'm just glad that it stopped Dark Star."

"Yes..." Sirius trailed off. "Sadly, the spell destroyed my universe." Seeing the shocked looks on Lina and Miyuki, he nodded. "It was surprising. When I returned, I found my world going through... What was it called? Ah, yes, the "Big Crunch" as I heard it."

"Isn't that when the universe collapses in on itself?" Miyuki asked, getting a nod from Sirius.

"Yes... When I returned, my world was already suffering from it. In our attempt to stop Dark Star... We destroyed our world."

"I'm sorry..." Lina said softly as she looked at him sympathetically. "He would have destroyed all of the universes. I wish that your universe didn't get destroyed in the process."

"I know. I am not upset at you, not after what I saw." Sirius couldn't believe that everything was the way it was because of that reason, but, it made a lot of sense.

"What did you see?" Miyuki asked and Sirius closed his eyes. "What was it?"

"The Golden Mother." Sirius said, causing Lina's eyes to widen in shock.

*Flash*

"No!" Sirius stared as he saw the universes starting to darken and collapse. "Why? We did everything we could to stop Dark Star! This... How could this..."

"Your world was doomed to die." A voice, a beautiful and horrifying voice, spoke up. Spinning around, the Dark Star weapons floating around him, Sirius stared at the form of a little girl, who had a shovel and a long golden hair. "Regardless if you would have succeeded or not, my children left this universe in such a state that the only thing that can be done is... Reset the whole thing."

"Who are you?" Sirius asked, before gasping in shock as she looked at him, her eyes open to reveal golden depths that were visible, even from how far away he was.

"Darkness Beyond Blackest Pitch, Deeper than the Deepest Night. That is how you describe me."

When she stopped looking at him, Sirius found himself able to move again. "The Lord of Nightmares!" He gasped as she disappeared, only to shudder as he felt her hand on his shoulder from behind. "Tell me something, why? Why allow something like this to happen? Why do the Mazoku and Shinzoku fight?"

"Curious, aren't you?" Her voice was both amused and bored, scolding, yet gentle. "Even if you found out, you couldn't change it. If you were to find out the truth, what would you do?"

"I don't know. I just want to find out why Lord Vorfeed merged with Dark Star."

"My children... Naughty to the core. I decided to punish them for their actions. Sadly, this universe had no time left, so, I sent them to another universe."

"You would let them go on a rampage again?!" Sirius asked, shocked that the Lord of Nightmares would allow that, before groaning as he felt his shoulder, both physical and astral, squeezed hard.

"Of course not... I have sealed them away... Into humans, similar to what Cephied did to Shabranigdo."

"They'll eventually be reborn..." Sirius said and blinked as she laughed at him. "What?"

"Unlike Cephied, my seal is a lot stronger. They will not be reborn as Darabringdu and Vorfeed until their punishment is done. For the next few centuries, they shall be reborn, over and over again, into humans, until they learn some humility." She let go of his shoulder and Sirius resisted the urge to rub it. "Love is not a reason to destroy everything."

"Love?" Sirius was shocked, even more so when she started giggling. "What?"

"Love, yes... The two of them were in love. After centuries of fighting, they did, in fact, fall in love with each other."

"But, that's not possible... Mazoku can't feel love."

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head and moved to right in front of him, her eyes were closed, thankfully, as she put her forehead against his. "My poor child... The truth... Do you want to know the truth about Mazoku and Shinzoku?"

"The truth..?" He blinked as she caressed his face.

"The four worlds... The pillar... I made them... By complete accident." His shock was so palatable that she nearly bust out laughing at him. "When I realized what I had done, I was going to destroy them... But, there were these creatures... Humans... On all the worlds... Something was interesting about them."

"What..?" If Sirius had been human, he would have found his throat very dry at that moment.

"A concept... Good and Evil. It was something that I had never even thought about before. As I studied humans, I wondered... If there were forces of Good and Evil in the world given physical form, what would happen?"

"So, you created the Shinzoku and the Mazoku... Because you were curious?!" Sirius couldn't believe it. "Why? All this suffering... Because you were CURIOUS?!"

She just smiled softly at him. "Shocking, isn't it? That the reason that this happened... Is because humans gave me the idea."

"But then... What... What have we... We just fought for your amusement?"

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head. "Not at all. I created Shinzoku and Mazoku to influence the worlds, to shape and change the worlds and see which path humans would take. But the four Mazoku and the four Shinzoku I made decided it would be easier to fight each other, than influence the world. Destruction of each other, instead of influencing the world. Mazoku desired destruction instead of destabilization and chaos. Shinzoku desired the Mazoku's destruction, rather than order and protection."

"We... Were wrong..?" Sirius asked her as she shrugged.

"While I could tell you, I could see this coming if I wanted to, but then, how would I be surprised by anything?" She smiled as she floated backwards, her hands trailing over his jaw softly. "Mazoku and Shinzoku... The reason humans exist between dark and light... Is because humans caused me to create the Flare Dragon, the Night Dragon, the Blue Dragon, the White Dragon, as well as Ruby-Eyes, Dark Star, Chaotic Blue, Death Fog... I made them as the purest essences of Good and Evil in the world."

Sirius looked as she started to retreat. "Wait! What will happen to this universe? Me? The weapons? Dark Star and Vorfeed?"

"Curious, aren't you? This universe will be absorbed by this... Big Crunch... And then be reborn. Without Mazoku or Shinzoku to influence it this time around. As for you and those weapons..." She pointed at him. "Take them and go to another world. Do what you wish to do, you're free from any obligations to this world now. My naughty children shall live as that. Children, until such a time that they have learned true humility." She paused and turned back to look at him. "If you wish to see them as humans, look for two children, a boy and a girl."

"What do I look for?"

She closed her eyes and smiled softly. "The source of their magic will be far too dense for any human to have."

Sirius just stared as she disappeared.

*Flash*

"And that's what happened." Sirius finished recounting the tale.

"That... Is pretty odd..." Lina admitted, before something came to her. "Wait a second... Why come here? Why not the White or Red worlds?"

"Because, having been here, this universe is closer to home than the other ones are." Sirius admitted to her.

"Ah... What about the Dark Star weapons?" Lina asked and she and Miyuki both gasped as Sirius pulled his cloak back and the weapons started floating around him. "I see..."

"Mine!" Miyuki grabbed the sword sheath. Seeing the bemused look of Sirius and Lina, she chuckled. "What? I said that I wanted a magic sword of my own, and this is a sword, right?"

"Sword of Light." Lina shook her head. "If you want to use it, call out "Light Come Forth"..." She frowned slightly. "Just make sure that you train with it, it's quite a bit different than your normal swords."

Miyuki nodded, glad that Lina wasn't stopping her.

"So, why do you want it?"

"The next time an adventure pops up, I want to be able to help out." Miyuki sighed softly. "I hate how you, Nanoha, dad, Fate and Yuuno are out there risking yourselves all the time, I just want to help too."

"Don't get in over your head." Lina sighed and giggled softly. "You don't want your little brother to not have a big older sister when he's born, do you?"

"Of course not." Miyuki nodded and blinked as Sirius handed the weapons to Lina. "What are you..?"

"I would rather that the Dark Star weapons remain in the hands of the one who stopped him." The god said to her. "As for me, I would like to explore... I hope you don't mind me leaving them in your hands."

"Not at all." Lina had a small grin on her face. It wouldn't be too hard to convince people that these were decorative pieces, rather than magical weapons.

Still... Lina wanted to grab them hand have some fun. If she wasn't pregnant, she probably would have hunted down some criminals and... Test them out.

Spoiler for Comments:

Really, it was my personal opinion that Dark Star and Vorfeed WERE in love with each other. It was the only reason that they bothered to fuse together, to end the fighting, because they couldn't break the cycle of fate that they were trapped in.

Though, if they realized that they could have done more than just fight, they might have been able to.

That's just my opinion, of course.

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 9:

"Welcome to the Midoriya Cafe, how can..." Miyuki trailed off as she saw the person who walked into the store. "Um..." She looked the person up and down. "What's with all the pink?" She chuckled nervously as the person looked at her seriously.

"I'm looking for a Lina... Takamachi." He said, shuffling something from under the cloak he was wearing.

"Someone want me?" Lina asked as she walked out, before stopping and staring at the person. "Sirius? What are you doing here?"

"...I need a place to stay." A rather uncomfortable look came to his face as he said that.

Lina blinked and nodded. "Sure... Miyuki, why don't we close up a little early tonight?"

"Sure." Her daughter nodded, glad that they were closing down. It had been a slow night and anything was better than just standing around doing nothing after all.

A few minutes later and Sirius was sitting at one of the tables and looking at Lina curiously. "I see that your son is growing well." She blinked at him in confusion. "You don't know?"

"Well, no, I was going to go in for a sonogram tomorrow..." Lina rubbed her belly and smiled softly. "A boy, huh? How do you know?"

Sirius shrugged at her. "I am a god, after all. Things like this aren't too hard for me to figure out. as for why I am here..." He trailed off. "Remember the spell that you cast to stop Dark Star?"

"How could I forget?" Lina muttered softly as her mind drifted back to that day. "I'm just glad that it stopped Dark Star."

"Yes..." Sirius trailed off. "Sadly, the spell destroyed my universe." Seeing the shocked looks on Lina and Miyuki, he nodded. "It was surprising. When I returned, I found my world going through... What was it called? Ah, yes, the "Big Crunch" as I heard it."

"Isn't that when the universe collapses in on itself?" Miyuki asked, getting a nod from Sirius.

"Yes... When I returned, my world was already suffering from it. In our attempt to stop Dark Star... We destroyed our world."

"I'm sorry..." Lina said softly as she looked at him sympathetically. "He would have destroyed all of the universes. I wish that your universe didn't get destroyed in the process."

"I know. I am not upset at you, not after what I saw." Sirius couldn't believe that everything was the way it was because of that reason, but, it made a lot of sense.

"What did you see?" Miyuki asked and Sirius closed his eyes. "What was it?"

"The Golden Mother." Sirius said, causing Lina's eyes to widen in shock.

*Flash*

"No!" Sirius stared as he saw the universes starting to darken and collapse. "Why? We did everything we could to stop Dark Star! This... How could this..."

"Your world was doomed to die." A voice, a beautiful and horrifying voice, spoke up. Spinning around, the Dark Star weapons floating around him, Sirius stared at the form of a little girl, who had a shovel and a long golden hair. "Regardless if you would have succeeded or not, my children left this universe in such a state that the only thing that can be done is... Reset the whole thing."

"Who are you?" Sirius asked, before gasping in shock as she looked at him, her eyes open to reveal golden depths that were visible, even from how far away he was.

"Darkness Beyond Blackest Pitch, Deeper than the Deepest Night. That is how you describe me."

When she stopped looking at him, Sirius found himself able to move again. "The Lord of Nightmares!" He gasped as she disappeared, only to shudder as he felt her hand on his shoulder from behind. "Tell me something, why? Why allow something like this to happen? Why do the Mazoku and Shinzoku fight?"

"Curious, aren't you?" Her voice was both amused and bored, scolding, yet gentle. "Even if you found out, you couldn't change it. If you were to find out the truth, what would you do?"

"I don't know. I just want to find out why Lord Vorfeed merged with Dark Star."

"My children... Naughty to the core. I decided to punish them for their actions. Sadly, this universe had no time left, so, I sent them to another universe."

"You would let them go on a rampage again?!" Sirius asked, shocked that the Lord of Nightmares would allow that, before groaning as he felt his shoulder, both physical and astral, squeezed hard.

"Of course not... I have sealed them away... Into humans, similar to what Cephied did to Shabranigdo."

"They'll eventually be reborn..." Sirius said and blinked as she laughed at him. "What?"

"Unlike Cephied, my seal is a lot stronger. They will not be reborn as Darabringdu and Vorfeed until their punishment is done. For the next few centuries, they shall be reborn, over and over again, into humans, until they learn some humility." She let go of his shoulder and Sirius resisted the urge to rub it. "Love is not a reason to destroy everything."

"Love?" Sirius was shocked, even more so when she started giggling. "What?"

"Love, yes... The two of them were in love. After centuries of fighting, they did, in fact, fall in love with each other."

"But, that's not possible... Mazoku can't feel love."

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head and moved to right in front of him, her eyes were closed, thankfully, as she put her forehead against his. "My poor child... The truth... Do you want to know the truth about Mazoku and Shinzoku?"

"The truth..?" He blinked as she caressed his face.

"The four worlds... The pillar... I made them... By complete accident." His shock was so palatable that she nearly bust out laughing at him. "When I realized what I had done, I was going to destroy them... But, there were these creatures... Humans... On all the worlds... Something was interesting about them."

"What..?" If Sirius had been human, he would have found his throat very dry at that moment.

"A concept... Good and Evil. It was something that I had never even thought about before. As I studied humans, I wondered... If there were forces of Good and Evil in the world given physical form, what would happen?"

"So, you created the Shinzoku and the Mazoku... Because you were curious?!" Sirius couldn't believe it. "Why? All this suffering... Because you were CURIOUS?!"

She just smiled softly at him. "Shocking, isn't it? That the reason that this happened... Is because humans gave me the idea."

"But then... What... What have we... We just fought for your amusement?"

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head. "Not at all. I created Shinzoku and Mazoku to influence the worlds, to shape and change the worlds and see which path humans would take. But the four Mazoku and the four Shinzoku I made decided it would be easier to fight each other, than influence the world. Destruction of each other, instead of influencing the world. Mazoku desired destruction instead of destabilization and chaos. Shinzoku desired the Mazoku's destruction, rather than order and protection."

"We... Were wrong..?" Sirius asked her as she shrugged.

"While I could tell you, I could see this coming if I wanted to, but then, how would I be surprised by anything?" She smiled as she floated backwards, her hands trailing over his jaw softly. "Mazoku and Shinzoku... The reason humans exist between dark and light... Is because humans caused me to create the Flare Dragon, the Night Dragon, the Blue Dragon, the White Dragon, as well as Ruby-Eyes, Dark Star, Chaotic Blue, Death Fog... I made them as the purest essences of Good and Evil in the world."

Sirius looked as she started to retreat. "Wait! What will happen to this universe? Me? The weapons? Dark Star and Vorfeed?"

"Curious, aren't you? This universe will be absorbed by this... Big Crunch... And then be reborn. Without Mazoku or Shinzoku to influence it this time around. As for you and those weapons..." She pointed at him. "Take them and go to another world. Do what you wish to do, you're free from any obligations to this world now. My naughty children shall live as that. Children, until such a time that they have learned true humility." She paused and turned back to look at him. "If you wish to see them as humans, look for two children, a boy and a girl."

"What do I look for?"

She closed her eyes and smiled softly. "The source of their magic will be far too dense for any human to have."

Sirius just stared as she disappeared.

*Flash*

"And that's what happened." Sirius finished recounting the tale.

"That... Is pretty odd..." Lina admitted, before something came to her. "Wait a second... Why come here? Why not the White or Red worlds?"

"Because, having been here, this universe is closer to home than the other ones are." Sirius admitted to her.

"Ah... What about the Dark Star weapons?" Lina asked and she and Miyuki both gasped as Sirius pulled his cloak back and the weapons started floating around him. "I see..."

"Mine!" Miyuki grabbed the sword sheath. Seeing the bemused look of Sirius and Lina, she chuckled. "What? I said that I wanted a magic sword of my own, and this is a sword, right?"

"Sword of Light." Lina shook her head. "If you want to use it, call out "Light Come Forth"..." She frowned slightly. "Just make sure that you train with it, it's quite a bit different than your normal swords."

Miyuki nodded, glad that Lina wasn't stopping her.

"So, why do you want it?"

"The next time an adventure pops up, I want to be able to help out." Miyuki sighed softly. "I hate how you, Nanoha, dad, Fate and Yuuno are out there risking yourselves all the time, I just want to help too."

"Don't get in over your head." Lina sighed and giggled softly. "You don't want your little brother to not have a big older sister when he's born, do you?"

"Of course not." Miyuki nodded and blinked as Sirius handed the weapons to Lina. "What are you..?"

"I would rather that the Dark Star weapons remain in the hands of the one who stopped him." The god said to her. "As for me, I would like to explore... I hope you don't mind me leaving them in your hands."

"Not at all." Lina had a small grin on her face. It wouldn't be too hard to convince people that these were decorative pieces, rather than magical weapons.

Still... Lina wanted to grab them hand have some fun. If she wasn't pregnant, she probably would have hunted down some criminals and... Test them out.

Spoiler for Comments:

Really, it was my personal opinion that Dark Star and Vorfeed WERE in love with each other. It was the only reason that they bothered to fuse together, to end the fighting, because they couldn't break the cycle of fate that they were trapped in.

Though, if they realized that they could have done more than just fight, they might have been able to.

That's just my opinion, of course.

now after reading this, I got the sinking feeling this were Erio and Caro will fit in to your story nanya....

I mean Erio was made from Project Fate, so manipulation to have a greater Linker Core than average person in his age is possible while Caro is a very powerful dragon summoner, who is so powerful that her tribe was fearful of her and those idiotic pencil pushers from TSAB can say that she's good for tactical use.

And you did gave off that they're reborn as their own gender, so since 4 children was born after New arc. And if we check it out, we got Val, Lina's still unborn son, Erio and Caro. well, it easy who's the reincarnate of those 2 beings from L-Sama as Val was reborn from being a mazuko while Lina's son has a probability of having L-Sama's fragment with him like Nanoha but he's not fitting the criteria of having power beyond average human being since the kid will be born from our lovable person of mass destruction who gave birth to another person of mass destruction who prove love thru superior firepower and a gundam disguised as a magical girl....


I can't wait for the StrikerS arc... will Jail still can succeed in his 1st part of his plan or will get an Epicus Phailus out of it?

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 9:

"Welcome to the Midoriya Cafe, how can..." Miyuki trailed off as she saw the person who walked into the store. "Um..." She looked the person up and down. "What's with all the pink?" She chuckled nervously as the person looked at her seriously.

"I'm looking for a Lina... Takamachi." He said, shuffling something from under the cloak he was wearing.

"Someone want me?" Lina asked as she walked out, before stopping and staring at the person. "Sirius? What are you doing here?"

"...I need a place to stay." A rather uncomfortable look came to his face as he said that.

Lina blinked and nodded. "Sure... Miyuki, why don't we close up a little early tonight?"

"Sure." Her daughter nodded, glad that they were closing down. It had been a slow night and anything was better than just standing around doing nothing after all.

A few minutes later and Sirius was sitting at one of the tables and looking at Lina curiously. "I see that your son is growing well." She blinked at him in confusion. "You don't know?"

"Well, no, I was going to go in for a sonogram tomorrow..." Lina rubbed her belly and smiled softly. "A boy, huh? How do you know?"

Sirius shrugged at her. "I am a god, after all. Things like this aren't too hard for me to figure out. as for why I am here..." He trailed off. "Remember the spell that you cast to stop Dark Star?"

"How could I forget?" Lina muttered softly as her mind drifted back to that day. "I'm just glad that it stopped Dark Star."

"Yes..." Sirius trailed off. "Sadly, the spell destroyed my universe." Seeing the shocked looks on Lina and Miyuki, he nodded. "It was surprising. When I returned, I found my world going through... What was it called? Ah, yes, the "Big Crunch" as I heard it."

"Isn't that when the universe collapses in on itself?" Miyuki asked, getting a nod from Sirius.

"Yes... When I returned, my world was already suffering from it. In our attempt to stop Dark Star... We destroyed our world."

"I'm sorry..." Lina said softly as she looked at him sympathetically. "He would have destroyed all of the universes. I wish that your universe didn't get destroyed in the process."

"I know. I am not upset at you, not after what I saw." Sirius couldn't believe that everything was the way it was because of that reason, but, it made a lot of sense.

"What did you see?" Miyuki asked and Sirius closed his eyes. "What was it?"

"The Golden Mother." Sirius said, causing Lina's eyes to widen in shock.

*Flash*

"No!" Sirius stared as he saw the universes starting to darken and collapse. "Why? We did everything we could to stop Dark Star! This... How could this..."

"Your world was doomed to die." A voice, a beautiful and horrifying voice, spoke up. Spinning around, the Dark Star weapons floating around him, Sirius stared at the form of a little girl, who had a shovel and a long golden hair. "Regardless if you would have succeeded or not, my children left this universe in such a state that the only thing that can be done is... Reset the whole thing."

"Who are you?" Sirius asked, before gasping in shock as she looked at him, her eyes open to reveal golden depths that were visible, even from how far away he was.

"Darkness Beyond Blackest Pitch, Deeper than the Deepest Night. That is how you describe me."

When she stopped looking at him, Sirius found himself able to move again. "The Lord of Nightmares!" He gasped as she disappeared, only to shudder as he felt her hand on his shoulder from behind. "Tell me something, why? Why allow something like this to happen? Why do the Mazoku and Shinzoku fight?"

"Curious, aren't you?" Her voice was both amused and bored, scolding, yet gentle. "Even if you found out, you couldn't change it. If you were to find out the truth, what would you do?"

"I don't know. I just want to find out why Lord Vorfeed merged with Dark Star."

"My children... Naughty to the core. I decided to punish them for their actions. Sadly, this universe had no time left, so, I sent them to another universe."

"You would let them go on a rampage again?!" Sirius asked, shocked that the Lord of Nightmares would allow that, before groaning as he felt his shoulder, both physical and astral, squeezed hard.

"Of course not... I have sealed them away... Into humans, similar to what Cephied did to Shabranigdo."

"They'll eventually be reborn..." Sirius said and blinked as she laughed at him. "What?"

"Unlike Cephied, my seal is a lot stronger. They will not be reborn as Darabringdu and Vorfeed until their punishment is done. For the next few centuries, they shall be reborn, over and over again, into humans, until they learn some humility." She let go of his shoulder and Sirius resisted the urge to rub it. "Love is not a reason to destroy everything."

"Love?" Sirius was shocked, even more so when she started giggling. "What?"

"Love, yes... The two of them were in love. After centuries of fighting, they did, in fact, fall in love with each other."

"But, that's not possible... Mazoku can't feel love."

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head and moved to right in front of him, her eyes were closed, thankfully, as she put her forehead against his. "My poor child... The truth... Do you want to know the truth about Mazoku and Shinzoku?"

"The truth..?" He blinked as she caressed his face.

"The four worlds... The pillar... I made them... By complete accident." His shock was so palatable that she nearly bust out laughing at him. "When I realized what I had done, I was going to destroy them... But, there were these creatures... Humans... On all the worlds... Something was interesting about them."

"What..?" If Sirius had been human, he would have found his throat very dry at that moment.

"A concept... Good and Evil. It was something that I had never even thought about before. As I studied humans, I wondered... If there were forces of Good and Evil in the world given physical form, what would happen?"

"So, you created the Shinzoku and the Mazoku... Because you were curious?!" Sirius couldn't believe it. "Why? All this suffering... Because you were CURIOUS?!"

She just smiled softly at him. "Shocking, isn't it? That the reason that this happened... Is because humans gave me the idea."

"But then... What... What have we... We just fought for your amusement?"

The Lord of Nightmares shook her head. "Not at all. I created Shinzoku and Mazoku to influence the worlds, to shape and change the worlds and see which path humans would take. But the four Mazoku and the four Shinzoku I made decided it would be easier to fight each other, than influence the world. Destruction of each other, instead of influencing the world. Mazoku desired destruction instead of destabilization and chaos. Shinzoku desired the Mazoku's destruction, rather than order and protection."

"We... Were wrong..?" Sirius asked her as she shrugged.

"While I could tell you, I could see this coming if I wanted to, but then, how would I be surprised by anything?" She smiled as she floated backwards, her hands trailing over his jaw softly. "Mazoku and Shinzoku... The reason humans exist between dark and light... Is because humans caused me to create the Flare Dragon, the Night Dragon, the Blue Dragon, the White Dragon, as well as Ruby-Eyes, Dark Star, Chaotic Blue, Death Fog... I made them as the purest essences of Good and Evil in the world."

Sirius looked as she started to retreat. "Wait! What will happen to this universe? Me? The weapons? Dark Star and Vorfeed?"

"Curious, aren't you? This universe will be absorbed by this... Big Crunch... And then be reborn. Without Mazoku or Shinzoku to influence it this time around. As for you and those weapons..." She pointed at him. "Take them and go to another world. Do what you wish to do, you're free from any obligations to this world now. My naughty children shall live as that. Children, until such a time that they have learned true humility." She paused and turned back to look at him. "If you wish to see them as humans, look for two children, a boy and a girl."

"What do I look for?"

She closed her eyes and smiled softly. "The source of their magic will be far too dense for any human to have."

Sirius just stared as she disappeared.

*Flash*

"And that's what happened." Sirius finished recounting the tale.

"That... Is pretty odd..." Lina admitted, before something came to her. "Wait a second... Why come here? Why not the White or Red worlds?"

"Because, having been here, this universe is closer to home than the other ones are." Sirius admitted to her.

"Ah... What about the Dark Star weapons?" Lina asked and she and Miyuki both gasped as Sirius pulled his cloak back and the weapons started floating around him. "I see..."

"Mine!" Miyuki grabbed the sword sheath. Seeing the bemused look of Sirius and Lina, she chuckled. "What? I said that I wanted a magic sword of my own, and this is a sword, right?"

"Sword of Light." Lina shook her head. "If you want to use it, call out "Light Come Forth"..." She frowned slightly. "Just make sure that you train with it, it's quite a bit different than your normal swords."

Miyuki nodded, glad that Lina wasn't stopping her.

"So, why do you want it?"

"The next time an adventure pops up, I want to be able to help out." Miyuki sighed softly. "I hate how you, Nanoha, dad, Fate and Yuuno are out there risking yourselves all the time, I just want to help too."

"Don't get in over your head." Lina sighed and giggled softly. "You don't want your little brother to not have a big older sister when he's born, do you?"

"Of course not." Miyuki nodded and blinked as Sirius handed the weapons to Lina. "What are you..?"

"I would rather that the Dark Star weapons remain in the hands of the one who stopped him." The god said to her. "As for me, I would like to explore... I hope you don't mind me leaving them in your hands."

"Not at all." Lina had a small grin on her face. It wouldn't be too hard to convince people that these were decorative pieces, rather than magical weapons.

Still... Lina wanted to grab them hand have some fun. If she wasn't pregnant, she probably would have hunted down some criminals and... Test them out.

Spoiler for Comments:

Really, it was my personal opinion that Dark Star and Vorfeed WERE in love with each other. It was the only reason that they bothered to fuse together, to end the fighting, because they couldn't break the cycle of fate that they were trapped in.

Though, if they realized that they could have done more than just fight, they might have been able to.

That's just my opinion, of course.

I really liked the Lord of Nightmares in this chapter, I don't know why but I did.

Also I thnk that if Dark Star and Vorfeed were in love then their solution to the problem was genius, I mean sure it didn't work and they became a world devouring monster that had to be destroyed but it could have worked.

Them being reborn as humans is an interesting idea, not only does it give them the punishment that L-sama decided upon but it gives them their chance at redemption. Mazoku and Shinzoku might have been the personification of absolute good and absolute evil but humans stand on the border of light and shadows and thus have the right to choose, so they could both become decent people in the coming years.

[SilentOutlaw]

Originally Posted by Kaijo

Here we go again; time to get this long-awaited party started....

Future Tense

Chapter 29: The Longest Night

In which connections are made, and Nanoha comes full circle in her quest to set right what once went terribly wrong...

Previous chapters can be found here.

Spoiler for Future Tense, Chapter 29: The Longest Night:

MGLN: Future Tense
Chapter 29: The Longest Night

Xx~~*~~xX

"I love writing but hate starting. The page is awfully white and it says, "You may have fooled some of the people some of the time but those days are over, giftless. I'm not your agent and I'm not your mommy. I'm a white piece of paper, you wanna dance with me?" And I really, really don't." - Aaron Sorkin

Next chapter is going to be epic, I personally thought Fate's little side trip was fine, and since Future Tense!Fate had a ton of Darth Vader vibes, a Heel Face Turn is expected. That and she got re-befriended not too long ago.

Hopefully next chapter will come out soon *hint hint*

[Justin_Brett]

Read up to chapter fifteen in Future Tense.

...really, Kaijo? What was the point of that?

[itanshi1]

not a fan of time travel? it's actually pretty ingeniously introduced, but from the way things stand at chapter 29, i wonder if its even needed, hmm

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by itanshi1

not a fan of time travel? it's actually pretty ingeniously introduced, but from the way things stand at chapter 29, i wonder if its even needed, hmm

Heh, and here I was thinking he meant the Fate/Yuuno/Shari romantic history. I would point out, though, that the people who suffered under fifty years of hellish oppression from an increasingly tyrannical TSAB (not to mention the actual victims of the schemers who manipulated things to make it that way), would probably be very much in favor of consigning this reality back to AU status via time travel.

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

Heh, and here I was thinking he meant the Fate/Yuuno/Shari romantic history. I would point out, though, that the people who suffered under fifty years of hellish oppression from an increasingly tyrannical TSAB (not to mention the actual victims of the schemers who manipulated things to make it that way), would probably be very much in favor of consigning this reality back to AU status via time travel.

Well, luckily, if Yuuno is right and Nanoha manages to succeed, Time travel alters history, and if the timeline splits off, the head of the serpent will have been cut off so the oppressed can have a bettter future. Everyone wins.

[itanshi1]

Spoiler for More thoughts on this issue:

Only from the point of view of the ignorant unoppressed, old timeline continues, but will be ruefully ignored. The only DBZ thing I like. They handle time travel very very well. Especially when Trunks goes back and it still sucks. Not to ruin a good fic by mentioning DBZ, gotta give credit where its due.

[Justin_Brett]

Actually, I just meant going "Oh no, Agito is dead! Oh wait, Signum is still alive and her sacrifice was pointless! Oh wait, they're BOTH still alive, here's another subplot!"

I mean, did Seikou really need another person dying on her behalf (as far as she knows)? Even she's getting a little tired of it.

Although Yuuno/Fate WAS pretty what the hell, although at least it's admitted such in the next one.

[Laith]

Originally Posted by Justin_Brett

I mean, did Seikou really need another person dying on her behalf (as far as she knows)? Even she's getting a little tired of it.

Easiest way to break a heroic character like Seikou in a cynical story is to have people sacrifice for her. That way you manipulate her into acting for whatever reason the other party sacrificed themselves. In other words she would feel guilty if she stops because their sacrifce was senseless yadda yadda yadda.

[Nanya01]

Not a very long part, but, hey, it's what I got.

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Shine Part 9

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 10:

Meanwhile...

Filia rubbed her arm as the nurse smiled at her softly and left the room, telling her that she could put her shirt back on. "You can see your wife now." The nurse said, getting a flush from Filia and a sputtering from Chrono, who was just outside the room.

"She's not my wife!"

"Oh?" The nurse sounded confused. "I apologize, most men wouldn't bring in a woman when her baby is being born and convince them to see a doctor as well. I guess I was wrong, I'm sorry."

Chrono walked in, twitching. The thought, well, it didn't disgust him, he would admit that, Filia was quite attractive, it was just that he didn't think that he was going to get married anytime soon.

She wasn't even in the same species, he didn't know if anything would or could come of it. In his hands was Val, sleeping soundly and Filia couldn't help but smile as she saw him carrying the little Dragon. "Sorry, guess the nurse was confused." Chrono chuckled nervously as the blonde Dragon just continued to smile at him. "Um..."

"You'll be a good father." Filia said suddenly and Chrono found himself suddenly stiffening and paling, getting a laugh from her in response. Filia had to admit, Lindy was right, teasing a guy about being a good father and they just went stone stiff. "I'm sorry." Filia said as she walked up to him and hugged him gently. "You're good with Val though."

"I wonder if he's alive..." Chrono admitted as the baby Dragon just slept, dead to the world. If it wasn't for his tail twitching, he could be confused for dead.

(---)

"Ah, excellent..." the doctor said as he looked over the reports that his nurse had given him.

"I'm taking a half-day, remember?" She smiled at him and the doctor nodded in remembrance.

"Ah, yes, well, have a good day." He nodded to her as he took another look at the papers and tilted his head in confusion. "Did I order blood work for that woman?" He must have, his signature was on the papers, but he couldn't recall saying that he wanted it done.

(---)

As the nurse got into her car, she patted a metal briefcase before driving off. As she drove, her form changed, her short dark hair becoming long and blonde, her frame toned itself, her eyes went from brown to amber even as her clothes changed from a nurse's outfit into stylish pants and a shirt.

Due might have followed Jail's orders, but that didn't mean that she liked the bodysuit all that much. Not when she wasn't on missions. Now if she could just convince Tre to wear something other than that suit when not on missions... Oh well, if she couldn't get Tre to lighten up somewhat, she would just have to make sure that all her cute little sisters didn't end up like her.

"Darn frowny face..." Due muttered as she stopped the car near a cliff and grabbed the briefcase, and getting out.

"What about my face?" Tre asked as she walked out from behind a rock. She smirked slightly as Due shrieked in shock. "I might not smile that much, Due, but you don't need to point it out all the time."

"Meh, you're just frowning all the time." Due made an exaggerated angry scowl on her face. "One of these days I'm going to tie you down and torture you until you stop frowning."

"You'd have to catch me." Tre shook her head and looked at the car. "So, now what?"

Due rolled her eyes and pulled out a small cylinder from her pocket before throwing it into the car, shattering the glass and causing it to start lighting up. "Pure magnesium."

Tre kicked the car over the edge and the two cyborgs watched as it flipped, end over end, on fire. "How did you get that stuff? I thought you couldn't get it in the hospital."

Due rolled her eyes. "The doctor gave it to me. Now, let's get back, I need to give him this stuff."

Tre looked at it in confusion. "Just what's in there?" She asked as the two walked over to the designated teleportation spot.

Due grinned. "The DNA of a baby Dragon and the DNA of a Dragon that can turn into a human woman. Even that baby Dragon can turn into a human, at least according to her." She then threw her free arm around Tre's shoulders, much to the taller cyborg's shock. "When we get back, you and I are going to take a bath."

"Huh?" Tre blinked as the teleportation energy started to surround them.

"You stink, and I'm sore." Due stuck her tongue out at her before the two disappeared in a flash of light.

[Kaijo]

Originally Posted by Justin_Brett

Actually, I just meant going "Oh no, Agito is dead! Oh wait, Signum is still alive and her sacrifice was pointless! Oh wait, they're BOTH still alive, here's another subplot!"

Well, you got Agito in StrikerS telling Signum that if she ever betrayed the ideals that Zest talked about... and Signum replied that she would want Agito to kill her with her flame. I really couldn't avoid the consequences of that one (and to my knowledge, I haven't really seen any fic take up the consequences of that fatal promise). And Signum did die and come back to life once in A's already, so was her "sacrifice" pointless there? ;p

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Not a very long part, but, hey, it's what I got.

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Shine Part 9

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 10:

Meanwhile...

Filia rubbed her arm as the nurse smiled at her softly and left the room, telling her that she could put her shirt back on. "You can see your wife now." The nurse said, getting a flush from Filia and a sputtering from Chrono, who was just outside the room.

"She's not my wife!"

"Oh?" The nurse sounded confused. "I apologize, most men wouldn't bring in a woman when her baby is being born and convince them to see a doctor as well. I guess I was wrong, I'm sorry."

Chrono walked in, twitching. The thought, well, it didn't disgust him, he would admit that, Filia was quite attractive, it was just that he didn't think that he was going to get married anytime soon.

She wasn't even in the same species, he didn't know if anything would or could come of it. In his hands was Val, sleeping soundly and Filia couldn't help but smile as she saw him carrying the little Dragon. "Sorry, guess the nurse was confused." Chrono chuckled nervously as the blonde Dragon just continued to smile at him. "Um..."

"You'll be a good father." Filia said suddenly and Chrono found himself suddenly stiffening and paling, getting a laugh from her in response. Filia had to admit, Lindy was right, teasing a guy about being a good father and they just went stone stiff. "I'm sorry." Filia said as she walked up to him and hugged him gently. "You're good with Val though."

"I wonder if he's alive..." Chrono admitted as the baby Dragon just slept, dead to the world. If it wasn't for his tail twitching, he could be confused for dead.

(---)

"Ah, excellent..." the doctor said as he looked over the reports that his nurse had given him.

"I'm taking a half-day, remember?" She smiled at him and the doctor nodded in remembrance.

"Ah, yes, well, have a good day." He nodded to her as he took another look at the papers and tilted his head in confusion. "Did I order blood work for that woman?" He must have, his signature was on the papers, but he couldn't recall saying that he wanted it done.

(---)

As the nurse got into her car, she patted a metal briefcase before driving off. As she drove, her form changed, her short dark hair becoming long and blonde, her frame toned itself, her eyes went from brown to amber even as her clothes changed from a nurse's outfit into stylish pants and a shirt.

Due might have followed Jail's orders, but that didn't mean that she liked the bodysuit all that much. Not when she wasn't on missions. Now if she could just convince Tre to wear something other than that suit when not on missions... Oh well, if she couldn't get Tre to lighten up somewhat, she would just have to make sure that all her cute little sisters didn't end up like her.

"Darn frowny face..." Due muttered as she stopped the car near a cliff and grabbed the briefcase, and getting out.

"What about my face?" Tre asked as she walked out from behind a rock. She smirked slightly as Due shrieked in shock. "I might not smile that much, Due, but you don't need to point it out all the time."

"Meh, you're just frowning all the time." Due made an exaggerated angry scowl on her face. "One of these days I'm going to tie you down and torture you until you stop frowning."

"You'd have to catch me." Tre shook her head and looked at the car. "So, now what?"

Due rolled her eyes and pulled out a small cylinder from her pocket before throwing it into the car, shattering the glass and causing it to start lighting up. "Pure magnesium."

Tre kicked the car over the edge and the two cyborgs watched as it flipped, end over end, on fire. "How did you get that stuff? I thought you couldn't get it in the hospital."

Due rolled her eyes. "The doctor gave it to me. Now, let's get back, I need to give him this stuff."

Tre looked at it in confusion. "Just what's in there?" She asked as the two walked over to the designated teleportation spot.

Due grinned. "The DNA of a baby Dragon and the DNA of a Dragon that can turn into a human woman. Even that baby Dragon can turn into a human, at least according to her." She then threw her free arm around Tre's shoulders, much to the taller cyborg's shock. "When we get back, you and I are going to take a bath."

"Huh?" Tre blinked as the teleportation energy started to surround them.

"You stink, and I'm sore." Due stuck her tongue out at her before the two disappeared in a flash of light.

Hoh... now I`m really want to know, what Jail want to achieve?

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Not a very long part, but, hey, it's what I got.

New

Shine Parts 1-5

Shine Part 6

Shine Part 7

Shine Part 8

Shine Part 9

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Shine Part 10:

Meanwhile...

Filia rubbed her arm as the nurse smiled at her softly and left the room, telling her that she could put her shirt back on. "You can see your wife now." The nurse said, getting a flush from Filia and a sputtering from Chrono, who was just outside the room.

"She's not my wife!"

"Oh?" The nurse sounded confused. "I apologize, most men wouldn't bring in a woman when her baby is being born and convince them to see a doctor as well. I guess I was wrong, I'm sorry."

Chrono walked in, twitching. The thought, well, it didn't disgust him, he would admit that, Filia was quite attractive, it was just that he didn't think that he was going to get married anytime soon.

She wasn't even in the same species, he didn't know if anything would or could come of it. In his hands was Val, sleeping soundly and Filia couldn't help but smile as she saw him carrying the little Dragon. "Sorry, guess the nurse was confused." Chrono chuckled nervously as the blonde Dragon just continued to smile at him. "Um..."

"You'll be a good father." Filia said suddenly and Chrono found himself suddenly stiffening and paling, getting a laugh from her in response. Filia had to admit, Lindy was right, teasing a guy about being a good father and they just went stone stiff. "I'm sorry." Filia said as she walked up to him and hugged him gently. "You're good with Val though."

"I wonder if he's alive..." Chrono admitted as the baby Dragon just slept, dead to the world. If it wasn't for his tail twitching, he could be confused for dead.

(---)

"Ah, excellent..." the doctor said as he looked over the reports that his nurse had given him.

"I'm taking a half-day, remember?" She smiled at him and the doctor nodded in remembrance.

"Ah, yes, well, have a good day." He nodded to her as he took another look at the papers and tilted his head in confusion. "Did I order blood work for that woman?" He must have, his signature was on the papers, but he couldn't recall saying that he wanted it done.

(---)

As the nurse got into her car, she patted a metal briefcase before driving off. As she drove, her form changed, her short dark hair becoming long and blonde, her frame toned itself, her eyes went from brown to amber even as her clothes changed from a nurse's outfit into stylish pants and a shirt.

Due might have followed Jail's orders, but that didn't mean that she liked the bodysuit all that much. Not when she wasn't on missions. Now if she could just convince Tre to wear something other than that suit when not on missions... Oh well, if she couldn't get Tre to lighten up somewhat, she would just have to make sure that all her cute little sisters didn't end up like her.

"Darn frowny face..." Due muttered as she stopped the car near a cliff and grabbed the briefcase, and getting out.

"What about my face?" Tre asked as she walked out from behind a rock. She smirked slightly as Due shrieked in shock. "I might not smile that much, Due, but you don't need to point it out all the time."

"Meh, you're just frowning all the time." Due made an exaggerated angry scowl on her face. "One of these days I'm going to tie you down and torture you until you stop frowning."

"You'd have to catch me." Tre shook her head and looked at the car. "So, now what?"

Due rolled her eyes and pulled out a small cylinder from her pocket before throwing it into the car, shattering the glass and causing it to start lighting up. "Pure magnesium."

Tre kicked the car over the edge and the two cyborgs watched as it flipped, end over end, on fire. "How did you get that stuff? I thought you couldn't get it in the hospital."

Due rolled her eyes. "The doctor gave it to me. Now, let's get back, I need to give him this stuff."

Tre looked at it in confusion. "Just what's in there?" She asked as the two walked over to the designated teleportation spot.

Due grinned. "The DNA of a baby Dragon and the DNA of a Dragon that can turn into a human woman. Even that baby Dragon can turn into a human, at least according to her." She then threw her free arm around Tre's shoulders, much to the taller cyborg's shock. "When we get back, you and I are going to take a bath."

"Huh?" Tre blinked as the teleportation energy started to surround them.

"You stink, and I'm sore." Due stuck her tongue out at her before the two disappeared in a flash of light.

Once again Jail has got something up his sleeve, and once again I bet we're not going to find out what it is until the plan has almost come to fruition. It amazes me how much Filia has changed since she was introduced it's just incredible.

Oh, and I like the Due from this world, she's highly amusing.