Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[An Hero in Disguise]

Good points there, Erio. I'm busy right now but will participate in the discussion later. Seems like I'll have to point out Serge's weaknesses this time

[Satty]

Wow...everyone's starting to go to this thread....

Originally Posted by Erio

Hello everyone. I have very little time for reading right now, so I apologize for not making comments on what you guys are talking about now...

However, I do have a few comments about what you guys were talking about yesterday (sorry ) which involves this thread's #1 target: the infamous Serge.

Yesterday I had some time so I read through all 5 acts of An Hero's scenario. That was very nice, An Hero. I liked how the whole battle played out, Serge's objectives and motivations, and how thoroughly you explained everything. HOW DARE YOU DO THAT TO NANOHA, YOU B-- err... oops, I didnt mean to say that out loud.

You know, I already had an idea of what special powers I was going to give Gaia by the time I created my 5 Relic users, but I did not have a good way to explain how his powers worked. However, thanks to An Hero's ideas about Serge's powers I now have a good way of describing how they work. You guys will not see Gaia in action until a couple of episodes from now, but expect some uber h4xness. I'm serious about this.

This leads to what I want to say now: How far should we develop our characters?
--First a disclaimer: while I will be using Serge to explain my points, I by no means am saying that he should be nerfed. In fact, I love Serge--he's just how I would do a badass villain.--
I dont know if you, An Hero, noticed while you were writing your combat scenario against the Aces, but I found out while writing my ficlets how... under-skilled (for the lack of a better word) the Aces are. What I'm trying to say is that our Aces only have about 4-5 major skills that they use in different ways. Example, Nanoha's offensive arsenal consists of Divine Buster, Accel Shooter, Starlight Breaker and Excelion Buster, and a few other, which are variations of these four main spells. The first three do about the same thing: attack the target directly with raw power. The fourth is Nanoha's attempt at melee combat. If we group her spells this way, we see that Nanoha's main ability is long range energy bombardment, and Excelion Buster is Raising Heart's attempt to give Nanoha another combat approach in battle. As you can see, Nanoha doesnt go too far away from her main combat style which is long range combat. She did reveal another spell, Stardust Fall (was it? forgot the name), so she might have other spells hidden from us right now, but I strongly believe that they will all fall into the long-range category.

Now, if we see characters like Serge, he has 10 known abilities (as An Hero obviously has a bunch others trump cards under his sleeve) all of which do different things. In his case, 7 of the spells counter 7 or more different types of attacks, which include melee, mid-range, and long-range. In other words, this guy is capable of handling almost every attack thrown at him! And we were proven this by An Hero's scenario. To think that he is only two years older than our Aces...

And what about characters like Kha? He has more spells, barrier jacket forms, and device modes than all our Aces combined. I cannot comment about Kha right now, though, as we have yet to see him in action. How does he handle his huge arsenal of spells? Is he a quick thinker? Can he actually remember all the spells he has and use each of them in the right circumstances? Does changing between barrier jacket forms and device modes affect his stamina?

This is why I like to create characters with a main strength or ability, and then make them learn new moves by modifying such ability or using the ability in different ways as the need arises. However, I've been trying to make my characters fit into the main canon without problems, as proven in my little fanfic, so I guess that's why my characters are all underdeveloped, as I take a different approach when creating a character.

BTW, these comments were all thought up after I tried to get Kha and Serge involved in my fanfic. They seem to be way out of my character's, and even the Aces', league.

What do you guys think?

I see your point, making characters have only one main ability and to use them in different ways. I try to have my characters have one ability that they can excel in, while giving them a secondary one on the pretense that if one of them becomes incapacitated, someone can fill the role, although with difficulty.

Now to get off my lazy bum and finish my 4th character's profile...

[Mow Yun]

Spoiler for shortened for long-ness:

Originally Posted by Satty

Wow...everyone's starting to go to this thread....



I see your point, making characters have only one main ability and to use them in different ways. I try to have my characters have one ability that they can excel in, while giving them a secondary one on the pretense that if one of them becomes incapacitated, someone can fill the role, although with difficulty.

Now to get off my lazy bum and finish my 4th character's profile...

I'd agree completely here. :X The problem as it appears to me, is that it seems some of our OC's are not only godly at one thing, they seem to have a strength in every area. It's gotten pretty bad as it seems many characters seem to lack significant weaknesses. They're not only versatile but they seem to be every single Nanoha character's strengths combined into a single package. They seem to have a very strong answer to any combat situation, which makes them seem...a little too extraordinary.

Now after that very short rant, I now feel like I'm speaking out of my ass because I only read and don't post at all much.

Even though I'm speaking against characters being strong in many areas, I feel slightly guilty because even though my character specializes in defense, I've given her a very powerful offensive spell.

[dkellis]

I haven't really been able to add anything to the general mayhem going on, mostly because of lack of time. (Why does everything choose to happen at once? Why?) Also, the vast majority of references are, I have to say, poorly-explained, and I don't really get any of them.

I've found that being a gamer, especially a MMOGamer, helps in creating relatively versatile characters. (Or maybe it's just City of Heroes, and no, this is not a subtle plug, even if it may be a blatant one). I pretty much just rip off certain powers and powersets from the game, and then use my experiences in how they were used, as well as my thoughts in "why can't they do this? Oh, must be game engine limitations". Rancer came about due to so very many thoughts about the Force Field powerset, and how powerful it actually was. But keeping in mind the inherent balance in the game helps in regulating power levels.

City of Heroes is especially helpful because essentially, the powersets are based off of one ability used in different ways. (Imagine if a Warrior gains new sword strokes and techniques as he levels; it's still the same sword, but his skill in it increases.)

And when it comes to defeating opponents, well, certain sorts of gamers tend to be known for coming up with extremely unorthodox ("cheap") tactics which make the devs scramble to "re-balance" the game. I'm not one of them, but I can steal their methods.

Or maybe I'm just rambling. I know several tabletop roleplayers who can manage to make even me go "wait, how did you come up with that? That's so... broken."

Coming up sometime, some minor extras featuring the 37th CIAA, in case anyone is wondering how they interact, although I can't imagine why. "Life in the TSAB" may be on hold until I settle on a way to present the skits; it's not really the same without snarky narration, but I haven't found a satisfactory way to translate that into text.

[Mow Yun]

dkellis - Personally, I really like versatile characters as well. I tend to create versatile characters over power characters when I play RPGs such as Diablo II, and RPG games of Warcraft III. However, when you give free reign to create characters, it seems that people like to create character stronger than the show characters.

Though, it's kind of hard to imagine that over 10 years, Nanoha still only focuses/specializes in long range attacks. I don't see how it is possible for characters such as Serge or Keroko can master/have very good proficiency in around the same amount of time.

Again, everytime after I type stuff like this, I end up feeling like I'm speaking out of my ass. : /

[Saint X]

@ Liana's Drink:

Kyla: Okay
*gulps drink in one go*
*Kyla drops the glass*
Kha: Admiral?
Minerva: Captain?
*Kyla stands there, eyes starting to jade over*
Minerva: Captain, are you okay?
Kyla: Jiiiiiiiiii~ *falls to the floor face down with at 'ka-blag'*

@ Erio

we know... Serge is a bit 'overpowered' so to speak, but luckily, most of us have coped. And as for my measures- most of my profiles are not yet complete so the true scope of the power of my OCs are not yet revealed- if you managed the read bits of the SSD vs AX bits- well you can say that Kha is not alone.

as for versatile characters- it depends on how their skills work and how they use it- even doing things they were not supposed to do. I'm also a MMO player, but my game's system is a bit different- level your skill, weapon mastery and level to gain new things. and even though skills are limited, one can use them in countless combos to pawn the opposing race. and the limitations of the world is the only thing limiting everything.

[An Hero in Disguise]

Well, Serge actually has one unique ability which he uses in different ways - that is Flow Manipulation And unlike most of the characters here he can't level a city with it But it provides huge advantages fighting against other magic users. I'll write more when I'm free.

I also have MMORPG experience but I'm kinda spoiled by it with my character having one of the most overpowered class combinations available in the setting. Most MMORPG aren't balanced that good

[USB500]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Ah~ busybusybusybusybusybusybusy with so many good ideas

Anyway...

Spoiler for A day off and date with Maren - Part 2:

They got off and began walking along the street.
"Well, it's still too early to have lunch, shall we go see a movie?" He asked her with some enthusiasm.
"Fine with me." As always, a reply that showed no amusement...
"I see..." *sweatdrop* "Okay then, a movie it is."

He chose the movie and bought two tickets.
"You didn't have to buy mine..." She said as she took the ticket.
"This is a date, it's obvious that I'm the one who's paying. After all, I'm the one who asked you out." He explained things while waving his ticket around.
"I see..." She said. "If that's how things work, then I'll accept it."

"Maren-san, you've never been on a date before?" He asked out of curiosity.
She nodded, "This is my first time..." Maren then looked at her ticket, "'Rice and Pasta'?" She said perplexed at the title of the movie.
"Yeah." He said ecstatic, "It's a comedy!" He added with a grin.
"I see..." She looked at her ticket again and blinked.
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They entered the room and went to their designated seats, Maren sat on Koji's right.
"Let's see how Maren-san handles a comedy flick and a room full of people laughing." He said to himself, glancing at her.
"Maybe she'll lighten up after this..." He smiled with high expectations.

The room darkened and the movie started...

Half hour later...
"It's pasta!!!!" The people were laughing hard, including Koji, who was holding onto his stomach.
But Maren....not a giggle, a meaningless expression on her face the whole time...

Then, near the end...
"Milady!" A man held onto a girls hands.
"Yes, my love?" The woman looked into his eyes.
"I cannot be with you!" He let her hands go and turned his back to her.
"Why not?" She stepped forward.
"Because...because I....I love pasta!" He shouted with a closed fist.
"No!" She falls on her knees, dramatically.
"But..." He turned face her.
"I am willing to try and eat rice for you!" He kneeled in front of her.
"My love! Then I shall prepare the most delicious rice meal you'll ever taste!" She said holding his hands. "I too shall try and eat pasta for you!"
"Then I will make the most delicious pasta dish you'll ever taste!" He said with determination.
"My love!"
"Milady!!!" and they hug.
"And so, the man who loved pasta and the woman who loved rice married and lived together for the rest of their lives...The End!"

After being able to laugh no more, the viewers started clapping, pleased with the movie, Koji was clapping too.

The room lit up and the people began to leave, Koji looked at Maren, and she was still staring at the screen, even though the movie ended.
"Maren-san?" Koji put a hand on her shoulder.
"Huh?" She said as she snapped out.
"Are you okay? You looked kind of sad." He asked her.
"It's...nothing..." She got up and headed to the exit.
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"So, what did you think of the movie?" Koji fetched a topic for a conversation.
"The movie didn't make any sense, and things kept popping up for no reason at all." She commented.
"Well, that's how comedy is..." He spoke in a tone that seems like he was apologizing.
"Man...I failed big time, maybe choosing the comedy was a bad move..." He said to himself, disappointed.
"But..." She paused.
"Huh?"
"The scene where the man and woman decide to try something new for the sake of being together was...touching." She finished her sentence with warmth.
Koji expression switch from disappointment to sheer joy, "Really?" He looked at her.
Maren nodded to confirm.
"Thank goodness..." He sighed with relief. "Oh!" He looked at his watch.
"Let's get something to eat." He grabbed her hand and pulled her along as he began running.

As Maren ran behind him, she looked at their hands, Koji's hand holding onto her's...she didn't know what to think of it.
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Yeah, I came up with the movie scene lame isn't it?

Ah, the old sweet "hand-holding" moment.

Good job! *Konata thumb-pose*

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Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yosh-to!

Part VI of Mai's Profile up, detailing spells and abilities:

Spoiler for length:

-TSAB Midchilda Main Command Base, Kuragana

*Smith parks jeep at open parking lot*

Smith: Can you stand up Wes?
Wesson: Somehow, I can. I’m much tougher than you think.
Mai: I see.

*Mai and Smith help Wesson up*

Wesson: Remember Mai, not even your Demon Form is a match for me!
Smith: Us you mean.
Wesson: I can’t be killed by you Mai!
Mai: *Chainsaw revs*

There are fates worse than death.

Wesson: *sweats profusely* never mind what I just said…
Mai: *stores Astaroth* Right.
Smith: You might want to keep that away in front of General Maxim.
Mai: Maxim-sama?
Smith: Yes the General. He’s the one we’re visiting to formally meet you.
Wesson: And also to hand over your applications.
Mai: I understand. *opens up holodisplay*
Smtih: You’re still reading that Mai?
Mai: *nods*
Wesson: But you already know your own powers and abilities. No reason to read them from a third party.
Mai: …

Someone once said to me, “You don’t need a reason to do something you like. Just do it.”

Smith: I wonder who said that…
Mai: …

You did.

Smith: Oh… go on then.
Mai: *blinks*

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As an Armed Device, Astaroth is equipped with a 3-round sliding bolt cartridge system, common in most staff weapons of its type. It is mounted at the bottom tip of the staff, using 5.56 caliber cartridges. Due to the unique condition of her Linker Core, Mai’s combat style is heavily reliant on cartridge use in order to conserve her own Linker Core energy – on average, Mai is required to use at least 3 cartridges for any spell ranked A and above, regardless of effects. Further improvements to the storage capacity of Mai’s Linker Core battery should enhance her energy management needs during spell casting, and the addition of an AI to her device should further reduce the strain on her condition.

Asides from Astaroth, Mai can also conserve energy using specially made glass charms, which resemble a caricature of the human body, with the symbol for Venus engraved in its center. These charms store a limited of magical energy inside them, and each preprogrammed with a single spell. When used, these charms form a string of light around the neck of the figure, which is then pulled to activate the programmed spell. Not only does this save time, the charms themselves can also be used by other people, even those without magic ability, simply by pulling the string. And because the magical energy is already stored using it requires no magic on Mai’s part.

(It is noted that these charms were inspired by similarly-designed straw dolls that Mai used as the Hell Girl).

Limitations to the use of these charms include the extensive preparation necessary to infuse the charm with the necessary magical energy and program the desired spell, and each charm can only be used a single time before requiring recharging and reprogramming. Also, due to the energy storage limits of the charms they can only be programmed with spells no higher than A+ rank.

Mai has three of these charms, one blue, one red, and one black, corresponding to the three types of Chaos magic disciplines that Mai is proficient at; namely Standard spells, Illusions and Demon Invocations respectively.

Individual details on her spells are as follows:

Standard Spells - These spells are similar to most Midchilda type effects, with the exception of using Chaos magics. They pack more power per rank than equivalent Mid spells, but sacrifices accuracy and range in the process.

Ranged Standard:

Doom Bolt: A multiple shooter spell, this spell creates multiple unguided energy balls, which can be used to bombard a target area. Additionally, the balls explode and splinter on impact, further devastating anyone caught in its blast radius.

Doom Flak: Similar to Doom Bolt, but explodes on command, making it useful as an anti-air area spell.

Doom Spike: A single shot spell which forms a spike of dark energy that is shot at hypersonic speed. Effective at penetrating heavy armor.

Doom Shotgun: Shoots several hundred tiny balls of unstable dark energy at the target area. Devastating at close range, but loses effectiveness after only a few meters. Instantaneous casting time and damage spread make it ideal for indoor combat.

Doom Blaze: Mai can shoot forth a jet of black flame that instantly burns anything it touches.

Doom Saber: In Eviscerator Form, Mai can concentrate spinning energy around Astaroth’s sawblade, before launching it at the target through a swing. Highly effective cutting spell, but very inaccurate.

Chaos Meteor: Mai forms a mass of dark energy that she discharges as a massive ball towards a target. Often used for demolition of large, heavily fortified structures. Due to the time it takes to cast it is not often used in direct combat.

Chaos Whip: Forms a solid whip of dark energy on Mai’s hands, used for mid-range combat and binding, as well as other utilities.

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Smith / Wesson: Whips?
*looks at each other*

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Meteor Hammer: Combining Chaos Meteor and Chaos Whip forms this weapon, where a condensed ball of dark energy is attached to a Chaos whip, granting Mai limited control over its movements. Used primarily as a mid-range demolition weapon.

Melee Standard:

Black Impact: Mai can charge her fists with dark energy, which enhances the power of her punches. Rarely used due to combat preferences.

Black Crozius: Charges the head of Astaroth with unstable dark magic. The magic explodes upon impact, dealing massive explosive damage to the target. Used rarely, as Astaroth itself is damaged when using this spell.

Black Chainsaw: Eviscerator Form’s extended mode. When active, a second roundsaw, made out of dark energy is created, and connected to Astaroth’s head via two energy chains, forming a large chainsaw. This variant is Mai’s most powerful melee weapon.

Attached Image:

Spoiler for Blade Chainsaw:

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Wesson: *shivers**holds on to manhood*
Mai: *hint of a smile*

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Bind Standard:

Chains of Torment: Mai’s most powerful bind spell, Chains of Torment unleashes dark energy chains that burst out from the ground and completely bind the target. The more the target resists, either physically or through magic, the tighter the chains wrap until the spell is cancelled or the victim is killed. This spell requires a large solid surface to be cast on, and has limited range, making it ineffective in air combat. Also it is easily dispelled by Divine magics.

Demon Grip: One of the most unusual bind spells ever recorded, Mai can use invisible dark energy to bind an opponent simply by gripping them, binding the body part affected. Traditional bind dispel techniques do not work on this spell, and unlike Chains of Torment can be used in midair. However, physical contact must be made for the spell to work.

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Smith: *whispers* Whips…
Wesson: And Binds…
Smith: With gothic Lolita…
Wesson: Dressed in black…

*chainsaw revs*

Smith/Wesson: *sweats* Maybe not…

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Defensive Standard:

Chaos Shield: Similar to traditional Round Shields, only using the Midchilda Chaos Circle.

Illusion spells – Chaos Illusion differ from standard Midchilda Illusion spells in their execution: while the latter aims to change the external appearance of an object via optical camouflage, the former directly implants the illusion into the target’s mind, creating a more visceral experience. Unlike with simple Illusions, Chaos Illusions can influence all five of a target’s senses, blurring the line between what’s real and what’s not. As a drawback though, Chaos Illusions require more power to affect multiple people than equivalent standard spells, and is thus most effective when used on less than two people. Mai has three different illusion spells available, all three of which requires eye contact, along with the proper spell activation to use:

Ocularis Infernum: This illusion type amplifies a person’s deepest negative feelings (fear, doubt, hate) and distorts it into visions of ugliness that further provokes that person’s emotions. This creates a feedback loop that traps the person inside the illusion unless he is able to reduce all trace of negative emotion within him, or after the spell expires within 3 minutes.

Ocularis Malum: More versatile than Ocularis Infernum, this spell allows Mai to trap a person inside any illusion of her making for one minute once they have made eye contact.

Ocularis Terribum: Mai’s ultimate terror spell, where she amplifies a person’s greatest fears and manifests in that person’s consciousness as physical beings. The psychological damage from this spell is evident in Mai’s victims during her time as Hell Girl. This spell also requires the most concentration from Mai in order to prevent the spell from collapsing, unlike with Malum or Infernum:

Demon Summoning- Chaos magic is unique amongst Midchilda-based disciplines for its ability to create living beings simply through a coalescence of dark energy, thus the tern Dark Energy Monsters, or D.E.MONS. Most Demons created in this manner are extremely unstable, and will eventually collapse and disintegrate after enough time in the material universe. However, the power of these Demons is formidable; Mai’s recollection from the archives of the Crozius Maleficus point to the ability of A-rank Chaos Magi to summon a Demon 2 ranks his own level in terms of power.

The shape and form of most Demons summoned via Midchild-Type Chaos magic tend to be wildly random; no two demons are alike, as per the unstable nature of Dark Energy. However, Mai can summon demons that fall into two categories: Ground and Aerial demons, which inhabit their respective elements. Ground demons are created with brute physical strength and durability, while Aerial Demons are created to serve as light, fast raiders that rely on numbers to overwhelm their prey-

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Smith: We’re here.
Mai: *looks up* Where are we?
Smith: The clerks up front told me this is the room where Glock was staying at the moment.
Wesson: Thought we’d drop by a surprise on him before we went to the General. He’d want to rest after his travels, so let's drop by!
Mai: … Indeed.
Smith: Shall we Wes?
Wesson: Ready when you are.
Smith: One!
Wesson: Two!
Smith / Wesson: THREE!!!

*busts door open*

YO GLOCK!!!!!

...

Mai: ...

Smith: Where’s Glock?

Why wasn't I told that Mai uses a chainsaw blade as her Device?

Originally Posted by Kha

However, when I saw Black Chainsaw, I thought of this:

Mai: ...

Waga nawa Mai. Enna Mai. Akuma no CHAINSAW nari.

Imagine that using Minami Noto's voice.

Armstrong: this girl looks strong. *activates Forneus and unlocks Overdrive Mode*
USB500's OCs: .......
Armstrong: this will be fun. Forneus.
Overdrive Forneus: Command Acknowledged. Limiter Release. Divine Voltage.
Armstrong: *opens stance* saa.
All: OJIICHAN!!!!!!
Hikki: everyone, run for your LIFE!!

*after taking cover*
Fate: Kha, look what you've done!
Nanoha: now Ojiichan's gone berserk again!
Kha: I didn't do anything!

that reminds me, I need to look for VA for Forneus.

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Originally Posted by LoweGear

And more to come once IT has been MASS PRODUCED!!!!

Spoiler for Instant Death:

*imitates Chrono's scream in Cinderella Part 1*

TEH HORROR!!!!

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@ Erio:

Versatility over power? That's hard to think of. But judging from my OCs, I tend to go with power (except for Shin-chan's case, where he falls to the versatility category). That might just be me, though.

[Meophist]

Hrmm...

I'm trying to create characters with a balance of strengths and weaknesses(with the exception of Kana who's overpowered for the sake of being overpowered). Of course, when I'm thinking of how the characters are in battle, I think of their fighting style rather than their exact spells or capabilities. I don't plan out their strengths and weaknesses, I think of what the character will want do in a battle situation. That tends to become their strength and thier weakness then becomes the consequnce of those actions.

In any case, according to wikipedia, it's Autistic Pride Day, so I'm thinking of making an Autistic character sometime. It should be an interesting challenge.

[Nightengale]

Sorry about the delay on this one. And also for it's shortness. Life had been kind of a pain on me lately, so there's less time for me to indulge in writing and backlogs, other than the occasional appearances here and there.

Anyway, it's short, but I think it's better to post this in parts again like usual, so here goes Part 12 :1, I mean. :3

Spoiler for Part 12 : 1 Beginning :

~Part XII Verse 2: ~ Reenactment of Knighthood ~

~Lost Pages 317 : Diablo ~

“Pain is but an eternal cycle, a spiral of immortality…Who can save one from it?”

-Saga-

17th December, Year of the 11th Twilight Sky.

It was the beginning of the descent…

It was the beginning…to everything.

Our despair, our pains, our loss, our suffering, our darkness…even our hope.

It all began on that night.

Night of the Vergessenheit.

~Saga/Tiara~

A stampede of emotions and conflict born from bloodshed… That was what it was.

Countless knights from both sides, some as young as 10…some peaking even the 60s… woman, children, elders… people who should not be fighting… amidst the clash of power, born from the strength of a thousand knights, and the sound of clashing blades and shields…

A pitch of hardness, from the first clash of metallic sounds of the rushing stampede of spears and shields, amidst the thousands, almost simultaneous, like the first melody of the night.

“Hold your defenses! Balance the offensive and defensive fronts within 3 layers! Don’t let the enemy break through!”

Life never looked so small, and fragile.

Another sound, this time…low as the grounds crackle in anticipation…a sound of focused strength...a low, peaceful sound of weight being applied, a melody of 2 kinds…and with a fleeting second, the sound turned mellow with a sharp tune, as the skies are covered with a barrage of countless magical arrows, it’d almost cover the moon…

Accompanying was the fellow sound of cracks, and breaks… as shields, each individually small, and seemingly powerless, as a whole covers the entire earth from beyond what eyes can see, protecting the knights from the barrage of arrows…

A temporary silence following the ensuing exchange… Both sides were patient, pushing their games. Now…it was a test of true endurance.

“Load Cartridge!”

Under my orders, my knights, and similarly, the enemy’s as in a symphony of a march, without a split-second’s doubt, all boosted their weapons, with cartridges loaded as magical triangles scatter throughout the battlefield, almost a rainbow of colors on the night’s illuminated earth… The sound of it… the low sound of boosted cartridges, the falling sound of the metal core…and the blaze of thunderous clash that follows after…

A blaze of white… a multitude clash of energies fill the battlefield, it’s almost blinding.

In a way… this battle almost feels like an symphony… A musical symphony that honors the fallen of this war.

“Can all of you hear this, the knights who had passed on?”

It was uncharacteristic of me… but I feel that it’s only right to address it. Countless had died to see the end of the war, and here we are…at the beginning of it’s end.

Can you hear this?



This is the requiem by your fellow comrades.

A requiem to show to all of you… We are here now, at the pinnacle of the end.

Your deaths will not be in vain. Because today, it will end.

The next part shouldn't take too long...I hope.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Th-the god emperor of mankind!?!?!?!

*looks again*

Dammit Kha! You had me scared there for a sec!

*Sigh* Oh yeah, I finished the second part of the getting-Nanoha-to-relax fluff: Sisters by soul.

Spoiler for Sisters by soul:

*door buzzes*
Nanoha: *muffled from the other side of the door* Dozo!
Keroko: ojamashimasu!
Nanoha: Keroko-chan! What brings you here?
Keroko: Chrono told me you had to take a day of tomorrow or face the wrath of Shamal. I have a day off too, so I figured we could spend it together.
Nanoha: Ah, good idea. Let me finish these requests and-
Keroko: -Yappari-. Ano na, Nanoha-chan, the idea of a day off is that you don’t work for a change.
Nanoha: But-
Keroko: Ah! I brought chicken, and marinaded them too. All we need is some rice. Eto… where did I put it?
Nanoha: Did you bring vegetables?
Keroko: *raises hand dramatically, one finger pointing skywards* You don’t need vegetables when you have meat!
Nanoha: Ehehehe, I’ll go see what I have then.

*the sound of a lit stove, sizzling meat, boiling water and the chopping of vegetables fills the room*
Nanoha: It’s almost as if we’re back home, isn’t it? You do the meat, I make the vegetables.
Keroko: Un, ah, the rice is done.
Nanoha: I’ve got it.
Keroko: Hmm, the chicken is almost done, too. Let’s go set up the table.
Nanoha: Hai.

Nanoha: So how is Rogue Squadron?
Keroko: We’re doing pretty well. Ever since I got pushed for that promotion to Captain when the Squadron entered active duty, it’s been hectic. Trying to manage the Squadron, flying missions and doing my things as an instructor at the same time. Luckily things calmed down a bit after the first few months.
Nanoha: And they accuse me of working too hard.
Keroko: You are working too hard. Whatever I do as an instructor, you do the double. Granted, we recently balanced out a little, but you’ve been pushing yourself.
Nanoha: … Heh, here we are supposed to have a day off and we’re still talking about work.
Keroko: It’s because we have nothing else to talk about. Let’s change that tomorrow.
Nanoha: So where will we go?
Keroko: Hmm, we could go to that new movie that all the privates are talking about. Or we could go into the city, Tyria told me about the brilliant shopping center that opened up recently.
Nanoha: Un, sounds like fun. But let’s eat first.
Nanoha/Keroko: Itadakimasu!

*later that night*
Nanoha: That was delicious.
Keroko: Un, I can’t wait until tomorrow.
Nanoha: But let’s get some sleep first. I promised Shamal that I would try to go to sleep at 11.
*The two snuggle into the bed, facing each other with a smile.*
Nanoha: Oyasumi, onee-chan.
Keroko: Oyasuminasai, onee-chan.

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*Several blocks away, a group of people can be seen staring at the monitor.*
Hayate: Kawaiiiiii! Just look at the two of them!
Rein: Honto-desu! It was a good idea of Chrono-kun to let Keroko do this.
Chrono: Ma, I’m curious as to how tomorrow will end up, but for now it’s a ‘mission complete’
Signum: Desuga, who would have thought Keroko would succeed so easily?
Shamal: Tabun… because those two are true sisters. Despite not being related by blood, they care for each other just like blood siblings would do. Almost like you and Fate, Chrono-kun.
Chrono: *sighs* Tamashi no shimai… ka?

Aw... Yeah I am wondering how things work the next day...

But somebody's gotta nerf the Shari Home Video camera.

Originally Posted by Meophist

Got five more characters to fit with some previous characters. Will post two for now.

Spoiler for Zarithia Saah:

???: Argh! I'm bored! What to do, what to do… Hrmm… I guess I'll just look at my own profile. See what's there.

Profile — Zarithia Saah
Name: Zarithia Saah (ザリシア・サー)
D.O.B.: 02/01/0058
Hair Colour: Red
Eye Colour: Blue

TSAB Mage Rank: B (Air)
Magic Type: Midchildran

History:
Born and raised in Elseia, Zarithia is the second youngest of four sisters. She had relatively little interest in magic or magic training until her second oldest sister died in an accident while a part of the TSAB. From that point, Zarithia started to self-train herself and soon joined the TSAB.

Zarithia: Well, that sounds kinda cool, the two events are unrelated. Just a coincidence. I need to get into contact with the guy who wrote this and clear this up.

Once in, Zarithia showed ambition and talent which allowed her to quickly get through training and soon joined the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces. However, following a particular incident, the force was disbanded. Zarithia has since created a quick-response strike unit with Aetis Zast, who was her partner in the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: That's it? Well, I guess I still haven't done much. Let's see, next page…

About:
Zarithia is a kind, cheerful, and mostly carefree girl. When she considers somebody to be her friend, she will work hard to defend that person when possible.

Zarithia: It's nice to read good things about you.

However, Zarithia has shown an obsession with the colour blue…

Zarithia: Obsession? Favourite colour isn't an obsession!

…as she is frequently seen wearing blue, her barrier jacket is almost entirely blue, she decorates her room with mostly blue, she notices the mention of blue even if it's across the room, and tends to side with whoever has the most amount of blue on them during arguments(hair, eyes, clothing, etc.). It is thus recommend not to count her during arguements.

Zarithia: …I'm going to kill whoever wrote this. DIE! DIE! DIE!

Zarithia uses an only minimally modified standard issue storage device for combat. However, unlike most Midchildran users, Zarithia prefers combat in close-range and is surprisingly effective at such. Her style is more defensive than offensive, making her an effective front guard. Her specialties lie in speed and defense.

Zarithia: I don't care if you're starting to praise me now. You're not getting out of this alive, Mr. whoever-wrote-this. You're the reason nobody listens to me!
???: Actually, it's because of how you act.
Zarithia: Oh, hey blue~
???: He- hey, let go of my hair. So I'm guessing you were reading your own profile?
Zarithia:Ah, yeah. Hey, Aetis, you happen to know who wrote it? I want to kill him.
Aetis: No, but if you keep saying things like that, somebody's going to arrest you.
Zarithia: You're no fun. I'm bored. Maybe I'll check out your profile.
Aetis: Hey, wait! …You already opened it.
Zarithia: Hiding something?
Aetis: Not really. My life isn't that interesting though.

Zarithia: Well, let's see…

Spoiler for Aetis Zast:

Profile — Aetis Zast
Name: Aetis Zast (エィテス・ザースト)
D.O.B.: 26/06/0057
Hair Colour: Blue

Zarithia: Blue~
Aetis: Cut it out.

Eye Colour: Green

TSAB Mage Rank: A (Mixed)
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan

Zarithia: Miss high-rank.
Aetis: You'll be A-rank too if you'd just try. Your apparent determination from training seems to be all gone now, though.

About:
Born in Kranagan, Aetis is an only child. She has always shown a desire to be a TSAB officer like her parents and joined early.

Zarithia: Hrmm… only child. Your mom and dad are here too?
Aetis: Well, yeah.
Zarithia: Cool! I want to meet them. Do they have blue hair too?
Aetis: Mom does… Is that the only reason why you want to meet them?

After training, Aetis joined the Emergency Response Force - Blue team, but left after 2 months to join 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: Huh? You were a part of the ERF Blue team? For two months? What happened?
Aetis: It's… a little complicated.
Zarithia: But why did you leave? It's blue!
Aetis: Not everyone shares your enthusiasm for the colour.
Zarithia: Well, because you left, I get to meet you. So it's all good.
Aetis: …
Zarithia: Alright, I'm skipping over to the next page.

About:
Aetis is perceived to be often serious but enjoys conversation and tends to get along with others. She has a strong sense of duty and responsibility and is good a following orders but sometimes becomes lost during the absense of orders. She has trouble when the situation requires going beyond what the normal rules allow.

Zarithia: You don't seem to be mad about it badmouthing you.
Aetis: It's not badmouthing, it's valid flaw that I need to work on.
Zarithia: …Boring

Aetis uses a heavily modified version of the standard issue spear-type armed device, increasing its effective range as well as its power output to better handle longer range attacks. Aetis mostly concentrates on powerful medium-range attacks in battle, focusing on off-balancing her opponent. However, she is weak in defense so she prefers countering attacks with her own attacks rather than bringing up a defensive shield or barrier.

Zarithia: Hrmm… it's not a very interesting profile.
Aetis: What did I tell you?
Zarithia: Oh yeah, why did you come here anyways?
Aetis: I just thought I'd check up on you.
Zarithia: Hrmm… ok. Oh! There's this book I thought you might like. Here! It's a comic book my cousin on Earth gave me.
Aetis: "Magic Knight Rayearth"? Is this about Belkan practiciners or something?
Zarithia: No, they don't have magic on Earth, much less Midchildran or Belkan. It's all fantasy. Anyways, one of the characters in it has blue hair and…
Aetis: Blue again, huh? Hrmm… the main girl looks kinda like you. She has a sword… come to think of it, I think a sword-type device could suit you.
Zarithia: Really? A sword… huh?
Aetis: Don't take it too seriously. Your staff works fine as it is.
Zarithia: Hrmm… a sword…
Aetis: You're not listening…
Zarithia: Oh right! Tomorrow I'm going to meet a friend of mine from school. I thought maybe you can come too.
Aetis: Tomorrow? I should be alright. Who's your friend?
Zarithia: Her name is Subaru Nakajima. She's really fun person to be with. 'Said she's going to try to bring her partner along too!

Wow I like you names! Because I've no idea where on Earth did they come from, it adds to the alien-ness of them. Looks like they're going to be a fine addition (and a BIG headache to me, having so many OCs in my head. Really, this is almost like SRW in this aspect. ). Let's see what you got!

Originally Posted by Erio

Hello everyone. I have very little time for reading right now, so I apologize for not making comments on what you guys are talking about now...

However, I do have a few comments about what you guys were talking about yesterday (sorry ) which involves this thread's #1 target: the infamous Serge.

Yesterday I had some time so I read through all 5 acts of An Hero's scenario. That was very nice, An Hero. I liked how the whole battle played out, Serge's objectives and motivations, and how thoroughly you explained everything. HOW DARE YOU DO THAT TO NANOHA, YOU B-- err... oops, I didnt mean to say that out loud.

You know, I already had an idea of what special powers I was going to give Gaia by the time I created my 5 Relic users, but I did not have a good way to explain how his powers worked. However, thanks to An Hero's ideas about Serge's powers I now have a good way of describing how they work. You guys will not see Gaia in action until a couple of episodes from now, but expect some uber h4xness. I'm serious about this.

This leads to what I want to say now: How far should we develop our characters?
--First a disclaimer: while I will be using Serge to explain my points, I by no means am saying that he should be nerfed. In fact, I love Serge--he's just how I would do a badass villain.--
I dont know if you, An Hero, noticed while you were writing your combat scenario against the Aces, but I found out while writing my ficlets how... under-skilled (for the lack of a better word) the Aces are. What I'm trying to say is that our Aces only have about 4-5 major skills that they use in different ways. Example, Nanoha's offensive arsenal consists of Divine Buster, Accel Shooter, Starlight Breaker and Excelion Buster, and a few other, which are variations of these four main spells. The first three do about the same thing: attack the target directly with raw power. The fourth is Nanoha's attempt at melee combat. If we group her spells this way, we see that Nanoha's main ability is long range energy bombardment, and Excelion Buster is Raising Heart's attempt to give Nanoha another combat approach in battle. As you can see, Nanoha doesnt go too far away from her main combat style which is long range combat. She did reveal another spell, Stardust Fall (was it? forgot the name), so she might have other spells hidden from us right now, but I strongly believe that they will all fall into the long-range category.

Now, if we see characters like Serge, he has 10 known abilities (as An Hero obviously has a bunch others trump cards under his sleeve) all of which do different things. In his case, 7 of the spells counter 7 or more different types of attacks, which include melee, mid-range, and long-range. In other words, this guy is capable of handling almost every attack thrown at him! And we were proven this by An Hero's scenario. To think that he is only two years older than our Aces...

And what about characters like Kha? He has more spells, barrier jacket forms, and device modes than all our Aces combined. I cannot comment about Kha right now, though, as we have yet to see him in action. How does he handle his huge arsenal of spells? Is he a quick thinker? Can he actually remember all the spells he has and use each of them in the right circumstances? Does changing between barrier jacket forms and device modes affect his stamina?

This is why I like to create characters with a main strength or ability, and then make them learn new moves by modifying such ability or using the ability in different ways as the need arises. However, I've been trying to make my characters fit into the main canon without problems, as proven in my little fanfic, so I guess that's why my characters are all underdeveloped, as I take a different approach when creating a character.

BTW, these comments were all thought up after I tried to get Kha and Serge involved in my fanfic. They seem to be way out of my character's, and even the Aces', league.

What do you guys think?

Kha: Someone says we're perfect.
Sak: That's of course! Wii~~
Kha: If that's the case, why do I have the need for something like Schneiderform?

Kha, like the Aces, had 11 years to build up his skill tree, and unlike Hayate, his Tome was never reformatted, so he learned everything from it. The skills may be a lot, but were basically a rip of a Lv 70 Paladin from WoW, with a few extras drawn from other anime and games. Kha is a Velka knight first and foremost; that means he has (and does have) way more short ranged attacks than long ranged attacks. He used to have 2 ranged spells, and a lot of offensive skills on top of defensive, but for StrikerS several were supposedly deleted to make way for a 3rd Knight Armor form. 3 armor forms = 3 stats differences was something you'd expect from a mecha-fanboy like Kha, wouldn't you? As of now, Kha has 1 ranged spell with 2 applications (weakness is that each cast is 1 cartridge; very inefficient), a motley of melee attacks and all that only totals 25% of his entire skill tree. The remaining 75% is dedicated to healing (but he can't heal himself), strong shields (with a God-imposed cooldown), buffing (like Caro) and his unique supportive attack Siegels, which depend on his weapon strikes for effects, and therefore counts as melee too.

GTG first, more on Kha later!

Originally Posted by Mow Yun

I'd agree completely here. :X The problem as it appears to me, is that it seems some of our OC's are not only godly at one thing, they seem to have a strength in every area. It's gotten pretty bad as it seems many characters seem to lack significant weaknesses. They're not only versatile but they seem to be every single Nanoha character's strengths combined into a single package. They seem to have a very strong answer to any combat situation, which makes them seem...a little too extraordinary.

Now after that very short rant, I now feel like I'm speaking out of my ass because I only read and don't post at all much.

Even though I'm speaking against characters being strong in many areas, I feel slightly guilty because even though my character specializes in defense, I've given her a very powerful offensive spell.

It's okay really. Nanoha has several ranged skills, but her one melee is quite potent too. Fate has the opposite side, but we know how many permutations of Plasma Zamber she has, and that thing punches hard.

Originally Posted by An Hero in Disguise

Well, Serge actually has one unique ability which he uses in different ways - that is Flow Manipulation And unlike most of the characters here he can't level a city with it But it provides huge advantages fighting against other magic users. I'll write more when I'm free.

I also have MMORPG experience but I'm kinda spoiled by it with my character having one of the most overpowered class combinations available in the setting. Most MMORPG aren't balanced that good

And Kha has the Whispers, which is his unique person skill. Has its own big fat nerf too.

ALLLLLLLLRRRRRRRIGGGHT!!! Moeru ze!!!! Time to build that Cleric-Knight Codex! Be back in 10 hrs!

[KBTKaiser]

Well, after a lengthy discussion with Aaron, it's time to let the cat peer out of the bag.

Spoiler for Um...O-KAY....:

After a few days in which Mabiko settled in(And Vinson lost more blood), Aurion was working on some prototypes when Mabiko came into the lab with a datapad.

Aurion: Why, commander, what brings you to my humble abode? Certainly it's not to hide from Cressida, is it? Or is it to avoid Liana's health drink?

Mabiko: Spare me the drama, "uncle". I need you to take a look at this function I had Shari at RF6 cook up for my familiars' devices.

Mabiko handed the datapad over to Aurion who frowned over the information displayed.

Aurion: Quite a piece of work you got here, ojou-chan...from what Hayate says of you, however, it's just like you to make this fatal flaw.

Mabiko: eh?

Aurion: This structural layout puts all the burden on yourself. You can't shield your familiars forever...

Mabiko: To be honest, I never wanted them to fight...I wanted them to stay near me so that I could protect them. It's the least I could do with my full abilities.

Aurion: That may be so, girl, but those familiars of yours won't be coddled for long...

Aurion returned his attention to the datapad.

Aurion: However, I might be able to whip up something of a booster device for each of your familiars. This way you can focus on yourself and not worry about the girls.

Mabiko: How long would it take to fashion such supplementary devices?

Aurion: Hrm...two...maybe three weeks for the prototypes.

Mabiko: Consider yourself commisioned then. I'll await the results.

Mabiko turned and left the lab in a brisk step, leaving Aurion to look over the data some more...

Aurion: ...Talk about a firebrand...no wonder Hayate likes to poke fun at her so much...

...Plus parts, anyone?

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Keroko

*Sigh* Oh yeah, I finished the second part of the getting-Nanoha-to-relax fluff: Sisters by soul.

Spoiler for Sisters by soul:

*door buzzes*
Nanoha: *muffled from the other side of the door* Dozo!
Keroko: ojamashimasu!
Nanoha: Keroko-chan! What brings you here?
Keroko: Chrono told me you had to take a day of tomorrow or face the wrath of Shamal. I have a day off too, so I figured we could spend it together.
Nanoha: Ah, good idea. Let me finish these requests and-
Keroko: -Yappari-. Ano na, Nanoha-chan, the idea of a day off is that you don’t work for a change.
Nanoha: But-
Keroko: Ah! I brought chicken, and marinaded them too. All we need is some rice. Eto… where did I put it?
Nanoha: Did you bring vegetables?
Keroko: *raises hand dramatically, one finger pointing skywards* You don’t need vegetables when you have meat!
Nanoha: Ehehehe, I’ll go see what I have then.

*the sound of a lit stove, sizzling meat, boiling water and the chopping of vegetables fills the room*
Nanoha: It’s almost as if we’re back home, isn’t it? You do the meat, I make the vegetables.
Keroko: Un, ah, the rice is done.
Nanoha: I’ve got it.
Keroko: Hmm, the chicken is almost done, too. Let’s go set up the table.
Nanoha: Hai.

Nanoha: So how is Rogue Squadron?
Keroko: We’re doing pretty well. Ever since I got pushed for that promotion to Captain when the Squadron entered active duty, it’s been hectic. Trying to manage the Squadron, flying missions and doing my things as an instructor at the same time. Luckily things calmed down a bit after the first few months.
Nanoha: And they accuse me of working too hard.
Keroko: You are working too hard. Whatever I do as an instructor, you do the double. Granted, we recently balanced out a little, but you’ve been pushing yourself.
Nanoha: … Heh, here we are supposed to have a day off and we’re still talking about work.
Keroko: It’s because we have nothing else to talk about. Let’s change that tomorrow.
Nanoha: So where will we go?
Keroko: Hmm, we could go to that new movie that all the privates are talking about. Or we could go into the city, Tyria told me about the brilliant shopping center that opened up recently.
Nanoha: Un, sounds like fun. But let’s eat first.
Nanoha/Keroko: Itadakimasu!

*later that night*
Nanoha: That was delicious.
Keroko: Un, I can’t wait until tomorrow.
Nanoha: But let’s get some sleep first. I promised Shamal that I would try to go to sleep at 11.
*The two snuggle into the bed, facing each other with a smile.*
Nanoha: Oyasumi, onee-chan.
Keroko: Oyasuminasai, onee-chan.

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*Several blocks away, a group of people can be seen staring at the monitor.*
Hayate: Kawaiiiiii! Just look at the two of them!
Rein: Honto-desu! It was a good idea of Chrono-kun to let Keroko do this.
Chrono: Ma, I’m curious as to how tomorrow will end up, but for now it’s a ‘mission complete’
Signum: Desuga, who would have thought Keroko would succeed so easily?
Shamal: Tabun… because those two are true sisters. Despite not being related by blood, they care for each other just like blood siblings would do. Almost like you and Fate, Chrono-kun.
Chrono: *sighs* Tamashi no shimai… ka?

Awww. The exchange of goodnights part was pretty damned cute. And Keroko doing the Tendou Souji pose was nice. So she's mainly a meat-eater then? Nice work.

Originally Posted by Meophist

Got five more characters to fit with some previous characters. Will post two for now.

Spoiler for Zarithia Saah:

???: Argh! I'm bored! What to do, what to do… Hrmm… I guess I'll just look at my own profile. See what's there.

Profile — Zarithia Saah
Name: Zarithia Saah (ザリシア・サー)
D.O.B.: 02/01/0058
Hair Colour: Red
Eye Colour: Blue

TSAB Mage Rank: B (Air)
Magic Type: Midchildran

History:
Born and raised in Elseia, Zarithia is the second youngest of four sisters. She had relatively little interest in magic or magic training until her second oldest sister died in an accident while a part of the TSAB. From that point, Zarithia started to self-train herself and soon joined the TSAB.

Zarithia: Well, that sounds kinda cool, the two events are unrelated. Just a coincidence. I need to get into contact with the guy who wrote this and clear this up.

Once in, Zarithia showed ambition and talent which allowed her to quickly get through training and soon joined the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces. However, following a particular incident, the force was disbanded. Zarithia has since created a quick-response strike unit with Aetis Zast, who was her partner in the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: That's it? Well, I guess I still haven't done much. Let's see, next page…

About:
Zarithia is a kind, cheerful, and mostly carefree girl. When she considers somebody to be her friend, she will work hard to defend that person when possible.

Zarithia: It's nice to read good things about you.

However, Zarithia has shown an obsession with the colour blue…

Zarithia: Obsession? Favourite colour isn't an obsession!

…as she is frequently seen wearing blue, her barrier jacket is almost entirely blue, she decorates her room with mostly blue, she notices the mention of blue even if it's across the room, and tends to side with whoever has the most amount of blue on them during arguments(hair, eyes, clothing, etc.). It is thus recommend not to count her during arguements.

Zarithia: …I'm going to kill whoever wrote this. DIE! DIE! DIE!

Zarithia uses an only minimally modified standard issue storage device for combat. However, unlike most Midchildran users, Zarithia prefers combat in close-range and is surprisingly effective at such. Her style is more defensive than offensive, making her an effective front guard. Her specialties lie in speed and defense.

Zarithia: I don't care if you're starting to praise me now. You're not getting out of this alive, Mr. whoever-wrote-this. You're the reason nobody listens to me!
???: Actually, it's because of how you act.
Zarithia: Oh, hey blue~
???: He- hey, let go of my hair. So I'm guessing you were reading your own profile?
Zarithia:Ah, yeah. Hey, Aetis, you happen to know who wrote it? I want to kill him.
Aetis: No, but if you keep saying things like that, somebody's going to arrest you.
Zarithia: You're no fun. I'm bored. Maybe I'll check out your profile.
Aetis: Hey, wait! …You already opened it.
Zarithia: Hiding something?
Aetis: Not really. My life isn't that interesting though.

Zarithia: Well, let's see…

Spoiler for Aetis Zast:

Profile — Aetis Zast
Name: Aetis Zast (エィテス・ザースト)
D.O.B.: 26/06/0057
Hair Colour: Blue

Zarithia: Blue~
Aetis: Cut it out.

Eye Colour: Green

TSAB Mage Rank: A (Mixed)
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan

Zarithia: Miss high-rank.
Aetis: You'll be A-rank too if you'd just try. Your apparent determination from training seems to be all gone now, though.

About:
Born in Kranagan, Aetis is an only child. She has always shown a desire to be a TSAB officer like her parents and joined early.

Zarithia: Hrmm… only child. Your mom and dad are here too?
Aetis: Well, yeah.
Zarithia: Cool! I want to meet them. Do they have blue hair too?
Aetis: Mom does… Is that the only reason why you want to meet them?

After training, Aetis joined the Emergency Response Force - Blue team, but left after 2 months to join 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: Huh? You were a part of the ERF Blue team? For two months? What happened?
Aetis: It's… a little complicated.
Zarithia: But why did you leave? It's blue!
Aetis: Not everyone shares your enthusiasm for the colour.
Zarithia: Well, because you left, I get to meet you. So it's all good.
Aetis: …
Zarithia: Alright, I'm skipping over to the next page.

About:
Aetis is perceived to be often serious but enjoys conversation and tends to get along with others. She has a strong sense of duty and responsibility and is good a following orders but sometimes becomes lost during the absense of orders. She has trouble when the situation requires going beyond what the normal rules allow.

Zarithia: You don't seem to be mad about it badmouthing you.
Aetis: It's not badmouthing, it's valid flaw that I need to work on.
Zarithia: …Boring

Aetis uses a heavily modified version of the standard issue spear-type armed device, increasing its effective range as well as its power output to better handle longer range attacks. Aetis mostly concentrates on powerful medium-range attacks in battle, focusing on off-balancing her opponent. However, she is weak in defense so she prefers countering attacks with her own attacks rather than bringing up a defensive shield or barrier.

Zarithia: Hrmm… it's not a very interesting profile.
Aetis: What did I tell you?
Zarithia: Oh yeah, why did you come here anyways?
Aetis: I just thought I'd check up on you.
Zarithia: Hrmm… ok. Oh! There's this book I thought you might like. Here! It's a comic book my cousin on Earth gave me.
Aetis: "Magic Knight Rayearth"? Is this about Belkan practiciners or something?
Zarithia: No, they don't have magic on Earth, much less Midchildran or Belkan. It's all fantasy. Anyways, one of the characters in it has blue hair and…
Aetis: Blue again, huh? Hrmm… the main girl looks kinda like you. She has a sword… come to think of it, I think a sword-type device could suit you.
Zarithia: Really? A sword… huh?
Aetis: Don't take it too seriously. Your staff works fine as it is.
Zarithia: Hrmm… a sword…
Aetis: You're not listening…
Zarithia: Oh right! Tomorrow I'm going to meet a friend of mine from school. I thought maybe you can come too.
Aetis: Tomorrow? I should be alright. Who's your friend?
Zarithia: Her name is Subaru Nakajima. She's really fun person to be with. 'Said she's going to try to bring her partner along too!

Well, it's quite a refreshing change to see that you've made some fun-loving OC's. Zarithia's blue-obsession is very amusing. Good job.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Ah, well, can't disagree with the Serge thing. Heck, it's actually one of the topics of the moment who would fight how and win or lose against Serge.

Blah, my discussion skills are low at the moment, I blame sleep. I'll come back with good arguments tommorow.

Originally Posted by Erio

I'll probably have a good contender soon. Gotta wait until I get back home, though.

Well, internet time is over now. Be back in 20 hours... when the discussions are over, as always.

See ya guys later.

Won't Gwen-chan and Co. be more than enough? Gwendolyn has INFINITE POWAA!

Originally Posted by An Hero in Disguise

Good points there, Erio. I'm busy right now but will participate in the discussion later. Seems like I'll have to point out Serge's weaknesses this time

Well, what can I say, An Hero. You're viral marketing is a smashing success! Now you have a large chunk of the OC thread after Serge's neck. Ever think of needing to upgrade Niddhogg's shields anytime soon?

Originally Posted by Saint X

@ Liana's Drink:

Kyla: Okay
*gulps drink in one go*
*Kyla drops the glass*
Kha: Admiral?
Minerva: Captain?
*Kyla stands there, eyes starting to jade over*
Minerva: Captain, are you okay?
Kyla: Jiiiiiiiiii~ *falls to the floor face down with at 'ka-blag'*

It's always the most respected and cool characters that get the knockout reaction in SRWverse. I guess it applies here too.

Originally Posted by USB500

Why wasn't I told that Mai uses a chainsaw blade as her Device?



Armstrong: this girl looks strong. *activates Forneus and unlocks Overdrive Mode*
USB500's OCs: .......
Armstrong: this will be fun. Forneus.
Overdrive Forneus: Command Acknowledged. Limiter Release. Divine Voltage.
Armstrong: *opens stance* saa.
All: OJIICHAN!!!!!!
Hikki: everyone, run for your LIFE!!

*after taking cover*
Fate: Kha, look what you've done!
Nanoha: now Ojiichan's gone berserk again!
Kha: I didn't do anything!

AAAAAAAAARRRRRRGGGGGHHH!!!
*gets caught in the blast*
*clambers out of smoldering wreckage*

Okay, just what is with Armstrong-jiisan and the RAMPAGING OVERPOWERED OLD MAN WITH THE BATTLE-MANIAC TENDENCY?!

Seriously. How do you guys manage to keep him in check?
He's chucking out Breaker moves like no tomorrow at the mere sight of a challenge.


@KBTKaiser: Fits. And a nice touch on calling Aurion 'Uncle'. Please go ahead with the plans.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Kha

Just another thought that has been spinning in my head ever since one Espada referred to Vivio as "Seijou":

Spoiler for Vivio...?:

(bullets and spellfire ricochet)

Kha: (strained) Go! I'll hold them off. Hurry.
Viv: (frightened) Kha-tan is hurt!
Kha: Never mind me! Quick to the transport! I won't let them kill you!
Viv: ...

(Several IVA radicals emerge and fire at him. Kha casts his shield, but with each blow bits and pieces of it was falling off)

Kha: Vivio!!! What are you doing?! GO!!!

(stray RPG headed for the girl)

Kha: NOO!!! (jumps in the way)

(Dramatic explosion, then Kha finds himself in a world of pure light. He cannot make anything out from the blinding glare.)

?????: (echoing) Kha...

Kha: Empress...?

?????: Kha... You know that you are not one of us... You know that you belong to another order... Why is it that you help us...

Kha: The Light is the same no matter how you look at it. At the end of the day, as long as I am true to the Light, it doesn't matter who you serve. I have followed you all my life; nothing shall change that.

?????: For that you are willing to risk everything for this child, who may crush your original beliefs if she lived...

Kha: I believe in her.

?????: To believe in the Star Child... It is time. Rise, Kha, rise a true Cleric-Knight...

Dust cloud clears slowly, and the radical terrorists look at the blast zone, then...

Kha steps out, wearing an upgraded version of his Knight Armor.

()

Kha: You have been judged guilty, and by the will of the God Empress I shall mete Justice! (raises hand)

Song of a Thousand Mourning Angels...

Spoiler for What's this?:

REQUIEM BREAKER!!!

Ladies and gentlemen, I present to you, the TRUE Schneiderform. (And Kha's Breaker)

For God Empress H*****, and the Star Child VIVIO!!!

H-SHE LIVES!!!! THE GOD EMPRESS LIVES!!!! THE STAR CHILD HAS RETURNED!!!!!! THE RISE OF THE IMPERIUM HAS BEGUN!!!

Watch out for the ION CANON though...

Originally Posted by Keroko

*Sigh* Oh yeah, I finished the second part of the getting-Nanoha-to-relax fluff: Sisters by soul.

Spoiler for Sisters by soul:

*door buzzes*
Nanoha: *muffled from the other side of the door* Dozo!
Keroko: ojamashimasu!
Nanoha: Keroko-chan! What brings you here?
Keroko: Chrono told me you had to take a day of tomorrow or face the wrath of Shamal. I have a day off too, so I figured we could spend it together.
Nanoha: Ah, good idea. Let me finish these requests and-
Keroko: -Yappari-. Ano na, Nanoha-chan, the idea of a day off is that you don’t work for a change.
Nanoha: But-
Keroko: Ah! I brought chicken, and marinaded them too. All we need is some rice. Eto… where did I put it?
Nanoha: Did you bring vegetables?
Keroko: *raises hand dramatically, one finger pointing skywards* You don’t need vegetables when you have meat!
Nanoha: Ehehehe, I’ll go see what I have then.

*the sound of a lit stove, sizzling meat, boiling water and the chopping of vegetables fills the room*
Nanoha: It’s almost as if we’re back home, isn’t it? You do the meat, I make the vegetables.
Keroko: Un, ah, the rice is done.
Nanoha: I’ve got it.
Keroko: Hmm, the chicken is almost done, too. Let’s go set up the table.
Nanoha: Hai.

Nanoha: So how is Rogue Squadron?
Keroko: We’re doing pretty well. Ever since I got pushed for that promotion to Captain when the Squadron entered active duty, it’s been hectic. Trying to manage the Squadron, flying missions and doing my things as an instructor at the same time. Luckily things calmed down a bit after the first few months.
Nanoha: And they accuse me of working too hard.
Keroko: You are working too hard. Whatever I do as an instructor, you do the double. Granted, we recently balanced out a little, but you’ve been pushing yourself.
Nanoha: … Heh, here we are supposed to have a day off and we’re still talking about work.
Keroko: It’s because we have nothing else to talk about. Let’s change that tomorrow.
Nanoha: So where will we go?
Keroko: Hmm, we could go to that new movie that all the privates are talking about. Or we could go into the city, Tyria told me about the brilliant shopping center that opened up recently.
Nanoha: Un, sounds like fun. But let’s eat first.
Nanoha/Keroko: Itadakimasu!

*later that night*
Nanoha: That was delicious.
Keroko: Un, I can’t wait until tomorrow.
Nanoha: But let’s get some sleep first. I promised Shamal that I would try to go to sleep at 11.
*The two snuggle into the bed, facing each other with a smile.*
Nanoha: Oyasumi, onee-chan.
Keroko: Oyasuminasai, onee-chan.

---------------------------------------------------------------

*Several blocks away, a group of people can be seen staring at the monitor.*
Hayate: Kawaiiiiii! Just look at the two of them!
Rein: Honto-desu! It was a good idea of Chrono-kun to let Keroko do this.
Chrono: Ma, I’m curious as to how tomorrow will end up, but for now it’s a ‘mission complete’
Signum: Desuga, who would have thought Keroko would succeed so easily?
Shamal: Tabun… because those two are true sisters. Despite not being related by blood, they care for each other just like blood siblings would do. Almost like you and Fate, Chrono-kun.
Chrono: *sighs* Tamashi no shimai… ka?

Chrono is acting more like Kyon every second Anyways, nice to see more of the sibling relationship between Nanoha and Keroko, very touching . And what the - Why are Chrono and the others watching?

Originally Posted by Meophist

Got five more characters to fit with some previous characters. Will post two for now.

Spoiler for Zarithia Saah:

???: Argh! I'm bored! What to do, what to do… Hrmm… I guess I'll just look at my own profile. See what's there.

Profile — Zarithia Saah
Name: Zarithia Saah (ザリシア・サー)
D.O.B.: 02/01/0058
Hair Colour: Red
Eye Colour: Blue

TSAB Mage Rank: B (Air)
Magic Type: Midchildran

History:
Born and raised in Elseia, Zarithia is the second youngest of four sisters. She had relatively little interest in magic or magic training until her second oldest sister died in an accident while a part of the TSAB. From that point, Zarithia started to self-train herself and soon joined the TSAB.

Zarithia: Well, that sounds kinda cool, the two events are unrelated. Just a coincidence. I need to get into contact with the guy who wrote this and clear this up.

Once in, Zarithia showed ambition and talent which allowed her to quickly get through training and soon joined the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces. However, following a particular incident, the force was disbanded. Zarithia has since created a quick-response strike unit with Aetis Zast, who was her partner in the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: That's it? Well, I guess I still haven't done much. Let's see, next page…

About:
Zarithia is a kind, cheerful, and mostly carefree girl. When she considers somebody to be her friend, she will work hard to defend that person when possible.

Zarithia: It's nice to read good things about you.

However, Zarithia has shown an obsession with the colour blue…

Zarithia: Obsession? Favourite colour isn't an obsession!

…as she is frequently seen wearing blue, her barrier jacket is almost entirely blue, she decorates her room with mostly blue, she notices the mention of blue even if it's across the room, and tends to side with whoever has the most amount of blue on them during arguments(hair, eyes, clothing, etc.). It is thus recommend not to count her during arguements.

Zarithia: …I'm going to kill whoever wrote this. DIE! DIE! DIE!

Zarithia uses an only minimally modified standard issue storage device for combat. However, unlike most Midchildran users, Zarithia prefers combat in close-range and is surprisingly effective at such. Her style is more defensive than offensive, making her an effective front guard. Her specialties lie in speed and defense.

Zarithia: I don't care if you're starting to praise me now. You're not getting out of this alive, Mr. whoever-wrote-this. You're the reason nobody listens to me!
???: Actually, it's because of how you act.
Zarithia: Oh, hey blue~
???: He- hey, let go of my hair. So I'm guessing you were reading your own profile?
Zarithia:Ah, yeah. Hey, Aetis, you happen to know who wrote it? I want to kill him.
Aetis: No, but if you keep saying things like that, somebody's going to arrest you.
Zarithia: You're no fun. I'm bored. Maybe I'll check out your profile.
Aetis: Hey, wait! …You already opened it.
Zarithia: Hiding something?
Aetis: Not really. My life isn't that interesting though.

Zarithia: Well, let's see…

Spoiler for Aetis Zast:

Profile — Aetis Zast
Name: Aetis Zast (エィテス・ザースト)
D.O.B.: 26/06/0057
Hair Colour: Blue

Zarithia: Blue~
Aetis: Cut it out.

Eye Colour: Green

TSAB Mage Rank: A (Mixed)
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan

Zarithia: Miss high-rank.
Aetis: You'll be A-rank too if you'd just try. Your apparent determination from training seems to be all gone now, though.

About:
Born in Kranagan, Aetis is an only child. She has always shown a desire to be a TSAB officer like her parents and joined early.

Zarithia: Hrmm… only child. Your mom and dad are here too?
Aetis: Well, yeah.
Zarithia: Cool! I want to meet them. Do they have blue hair too?
Aetis: Mom does… Is that the only reason why you want to meet them?

After training, Aetis joined the Emergency Response Force - Blue team, but left after 2 months to join 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: Huh? You were a part of the ERF Blue team? For two months? What happened?
Aetis: It's… a little complicated.
Zarithia: But why did you leave? It's blue!
Aetis: Not everyone shares your enthusiasm for the colour.
Zarithia: Well, because you left, I get to meet you. So it's all good.
Aetis: …
Zarithia: Alright, I'm skipping over to the next page.

About:
Aetis is perceived to be often serious but enjoys conversation and tends to get along with others. She has a strong sense of duty and responsibility and is good a following orders but sometimes becomes lost during the absense of orders. She has trouble when the situation requires going beyond what the normal rules allow.

Zarithia: You don't seem to be mad about it badmouthing you.
Aetis: It's not badmouthing, it's valid flaw that I need to work on.
Zarithia: …Boring

Aetis uses a heavily modified version of the standard issue spear-type armed device, increasing its effective range as well as its power output to better handle longer range attacks. Aetis mostly concentrates on powerful medium-range attacks in battle, focusing on off-balancing her opponent. However, she is weak in defense so she prefers countering attacks with her own attacks rather than bringing up a defensive shield or barrier.

Zarithia: Hrmm… it's not a very interesting profile.
Aetis: What did I tell you?
Zarithia: Oh yeah, why did you come here anyways?
Aetis: I just thought I'd check up on you.
Zarithia: Hrmm… ok. Oh! There's this book I thought you might like. Here! It's a comic book my cousin on Earth gave me.
Aetis: "Magic Knight Rayearth"? Is this about Belkan practiciners or something?
Zarithia: No, they don't have magic on Earth, much less Midchildran or Belkan. It's all fantasy. Anyways, one of the characters in it has blue hair and…
Aetis: Blue again, huh? Hrmm… the main girl looks kinda like you. She has a sword… come to think of it, I think a sword-type device could suit you.
Zarithia: Really? A sword… huh?
Aetis: Don't take it too seriously. Your staff works fine as it is.
Zarithia: Hrmm… a sword…
Aetis: You're not listening…
Zarithia: Oh right! Tomorrow I'm going to meet a friend of mine from school. I thought maybe you can come too.
Aetis: Tomorrow? I should be alright. Who's your friend?
Zarithia: Her name is Subaru Nakajima. She's really fun person to be with. 'Said she's going to try to bring her partner along too!

There is a song for this kind of situation...ahah...

"I'm Blue dabadeebadudaa..." And Subaru... Oh no... Zarithia's gonna cling on you now

Originally Posted by dkellis

I haven't really been able to add anything to the general mayhem going on, mostly because of lack of time. (Why does everything choose to happen at once? Why?) Also, the vast majority of references are, I have to say, poorly-explained, and I don't really get any of them.

I've found that being a gamer, especially a MMOGamer, helps in creating relatively versatile characters. (Or maybe it's just City of Heroes, and no, this is not a subtle plug, even if it may be a blatant one). I pretty much just rip off certain powers and powersets from the game, and then use my experiences in how they were used, as well as my thoughts in "why can't they do this? Oh, must be game engine limitations". Rancer came about due to so very many thoughts about the Force Field powerset, and how powerful it actually was. But keeping in mind the inherent balance in the game helps in regulating power levels.

City of Heroes is especially helpful because essentially, the powersets are based off of one ability used in different ways. (Imagine if a Warrior gains new sword strokes and techniques as he levels; it's still the same sword, but his skill in it increases.)

And when it comes to defeating opponents, well, certain sorts of gamers tend to be known for coming up with extremely unorthodox ("cheap") tactics which make the devs scramble to "re-balance" the game. I'm not one of them, but I can steal their methods.

Or maybe I'm just rambling. I know several tabletop roleplayers who can manage to make even me go "wait, how did you come up with that? That's so... broken."

Coming up sometime, some minor extras featuring the 37th CIAA, in case anyone is wondering how they interact, although I can't imagine why. "Life in the TSAB" may be on hold until I settle on a way to present the skits; it's not really the same without snarky narration, but I haven't found a satisfactory way to translate that into text.

On references... well they're references. There's no loss if you don't get them, but you'll appreciate it much better if you do. They should have no further explanation other than being there

@ Issue of Balance and Skill:

I agree on most of the points presented here, especially by Elio, Moy Yun and dkellis on the power levels of recent characters, and the trend of overpowering characters. A certain amount of balance must be enforced when creating character spell skillsets and abilities, such that they are powerful, but due to how the spell's effects are used, and not due to the spell itself, and also the circumstances of that spell.

Like Meophist, when thinking of a character skillset I first try and imagine what their fighting style would be like, then work out what individual spells would that character have to allow them to perform that style. RPG's give you a very good idea of how to proceed with this approach. Although I admit I'm rather random at giving out spells

For my characters as examples... I think that asides from dkellis' Library Girls, Kaylin is one of the weakest base mages here in terms of innate skillset. While Tais has a much lower magic rank, he does have Yui with him to get through (or get him into )most... *ehem* situations. Kaylin's combat skillset though is pathetic compared to most of the others here, but because she's not meant to get into lots of battles (more like get herself out of them), it's not like she requires overly powerful spells. However, her skillset is unusually versatile despite their limited functions, because she can use them outside of combat as well for utility reasons. Also, because she's an archaeologist she'll need to have a skillset that'll allow her to FIND anything, which is why she has the most types of search spells here

Glock's a much different case... I don't have a unique skillset for him yet, because I imagined him as someone who doesn't have much in the way of unique abilities, and so takes stock TSAB spells and runs with them. His Necron powers are more technological than magical, which means Belka magic-wise Glock isn't anything special.

And Mai... going by the Chaos Magic motif I molded her skillset to use powerful yet unstable powers, which results in short-ranged, short-lived and imprecise spells. Her "Doom" skills are basically just basic buster spells with the same effects (aka splinter on impact), but designed for different types of enemies and situations. And despite her signature Chain Staff, she only has three melee spells because that's her weakest area in combat (although it works wonders for terrorizing people ).

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Sorry about the delay on this one. And also for it's shortness. Life had been kind of a pain on me lately, so there's less time for me to indulge in writing and backlogs, other than the occasional appearances here and there.

Anyway, it's short, but I think it's better to post this in parts again like usual, so here goes Part 12 :1, I mean. :3

Spoiler for Part 12 : 1 Beginning :

~Part XII Verse 2: ~ Reenactment of Knighthood ~

~Lost Pages 317 : Diablo ~

“Pain is but an eternal cycle, a spiral of immortality…Who can save one from it?”

-Saga-

17th December, Year of the 11th Twilight Sky.

It was the beginning of the descent…

It was the beginning…to everything.

Our despair, our pains, our loss, our suffering, our darkness…even our hope.

It all began on that night.

Night of the Vergessenheit.

~Saga/Tiara~

A stampede of emotions and conflict born from bloodshed… That was what it was.

Countless knights from both sides, some as young as 10…some peaking even the 60s… woman, children, elders… people who should not be fighting… amidst the clash of power, born from the strength of a thousand knights, and the sound of clashing blades and shields…

A pitch of hardness, from the first clash of metallic sounds of the rushing stampede of spears and shields, amidst the thousands, almost simultaneous, like the first melody of the night.

“Hold your defenses! Balance the offensive and defensive fronts within 3 layers! Don’t let the enemy break through!”

Life never looked so small, and fragile.

Another sound, this time…low as the grounds crackle in anticipation…a sound of focused strength...a low, peaceful sound of weight being applied, a melody of 2 kinds…and with a fleeting second, the sound turned mellow with a sharp tune, as the skies are covered with a barrage of countless magical arrows, it’d almost cover the moon…

Accompanying was the fellow sound of cracks, and breaks… as shields, each individually small, and seemingly powerless, as a whole covers the entire earth from beyond what eyes can see, protecting the knights from the barrage of arrows…

A temporary silence following the ensuing exchange… Both sides were patient, pushing their games. Now…it was a test of true endurance.

“Load Cartridge!”

Under my orders, my knights, and similarly, the enemy’s as in a symphony of a march, without a split-second’s doubt, all boosted their weapons, with cartridges loaded as magical triangles scatter throughout the battlefield, almost a rainbow of colors on the night’s illuminated earth… The sound of it… the low sound of boosted cartridges, the falling sound of the metal core…and the blaze of thunderous clash that follows after…

A blaze of white… a multitude clash of energies fill the battlefield, it’s almost blinding.

In a way… this battle almost feels like an symphony… A musical symphony that honors the fallen of this war.

“Can all of you hear this, the knights who had passed on?”

It was uncharacteristic of me… but I feel that it’s only right to address it. Countless had died to see the end of the war, and here we are…at the beginning of it’s end.

Can you hear this?



This is the requiem by your fellow comrades.

A requiem to show to all of you… We are here now, at the pinnacle of the end.

Your deaths will not be in vain. Because today, it will end.

The next part shouldn't take too long...I hope.

Rather short yeah... so this entire piece is from both Saga and Tiara's perspective, further emphasizing that both somehow feel the same way about this war. And Beginning? Beginning of the End maybe

Originally Posted by USb500

Armstrong: this girl looks strong. *activates Forneus and unlocks Overdrive Mode*
USB500's OCs: .......
Armstrong: this will be fun. Forneus.
Overdrive Forneus: Command Acknowledged. Limiter Release. Divine Voltage.
Armstrong: *opens stance* saa.
All: OJIICHAN!!!!!!
Hikki: everyone, run for your LIFE!!

*after taking cover*
Fate: Kha, look what you've done!
Nanoha: now Ojiichan's gone berserk again!
Kha: I didn't do anything!

Mai: *Dodges Divine Voltage*

*Sees her uneaten Tayaki on her hand burnt by Divine Voltage*

...

*Stares Ojii-chan directly in the eye*

Your pitiful shadow is cloaked in darkness
You have caused great pain and suffering
Your hollow soul drowns in your sins

... Would you like to try dying onc-

*Mai dissapears from her spot*

Smith / Wesson: *Running out the door with Mai at light speed*
WE'RE SORRY GENERAL, SHE MEANT NO HAAAAAAAAAAARM!!!!!
*Doppler Effect*

Originally Posted by KBTKaiser

Well, after a lengthy discussion with Aaron, it's time to let the cat peer out of the bag.

Spoiler for Um...O-KAY....:

After a few days in which Mabiko settled in(And Vinson lost more blood), Aurion was working on some prototypes when Mabiko came into the lab with a datapad.

Aurion: Why, commander, what brings you to my humble abode? Certainly it's not to hide from Cressida, is it? Or is it to avoid Liana's health drink?

Mabiko: Spare me the drama, "uncle". I need you to take a look at this function I had Shari at RF6 cook up for my familiars' devices.

Mabiko handed the datapad over to Aurion who frowned over the information displayed.

Aurion: Quite a piece of work you got here, ojou-chan...from what Hayate says of you, however, it's just like you to make this fatal flaw.

Mabiko: eh?

Aurion: This structural layout puts all the burden on yourself. You can't shield your familiars forever...

Mabiko: To be honest, I never wanted them to fight...I wanted them to stay near me so that I could protect them. It's the least I could do with my full abilities.

Aurion: That may be so, girl, but those familiars of yours won't be coddled for long...

Aurion returned his attention to the datapad.

Aurion: However, I might be able to whip up something of a booster device for each of your familiars. This way you can focus on yourself and not worry about the girls.

Mabiko: How long would it take to fashion such supplementary devices?

Aurion: Hrm...two...maybe three weeks for the prototypes.

Mabiko: Consider yourself commisioned then. I'll await the results.

Mabiko turned and left the lab in a brisk step, leaving Aurion to look over the data some more...

Aurion: ...Talk about a firebrand...no wonder Hayate likes to poke fun at her so much...

...Plus parts, anyone?

Putting all the responsibility on herself for the sake of the Kitsune Musume, that's sweet Now waiting for what these "Plus-Parts" will look like.

IKUSE! VARIABLE FORMATION!

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

AAAAAAAAARRRRRRGGGGGHHH!!!
*gets caught in the blast*
*clambers out of smoldering wreckage*

Okay, just what is with Armstrong-jiisan and the RAMPAGING OVERPOWERED OLD MAN WITH THE BATTLE-MANIAC TENDENCY?!

Seriously. How do you guys manage to keep him in check?
He's chucking out Breaker moves like no tomorrow at the mere sight of a challenge.

He's like Geese. He'll take on any challenge.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Mai: *Dodges Divine Voltage*

*Sees her uneaten Tayaki on her hand burnt by Divine Voltage*

...

*Stares Ojii-chan directly in the eye*

Your pitiful shadow is cloaked in darkness
You have caused great pain and suffering
Your hollow soul drowns in your sins

... Would you like to try dying onc-

*Mai dissapears from her spot*

Smith / Wesson: *Running out the door with Mai at light speed*
WE'RE SORRY GENERAL, SHE MEANT NO HAAAAAAAAAAARM!!!!!
*Doppler Effect*

seconds later, Armstrong reverts to his old self.
Armstrong: *sees the mess* what happened?
Everyone: *whispers* you started the mess and you DIDN'T remember??????
Chrono: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!
Armstrong: *notices Chrono* are you alright, Admiral?
Chrono: here goes my monthly salary again.....

========================

Originally Posted by Meophist

Got five more characters to fit with some previous characters. Will post two for now.

Spoiler for Zarithia Saah:

???: Argh! I'm bored! What to do, what to do… Hrmm… I guess I'll just look at my own profile. See what's there.

Profile — Zarithia Saah
Name: Zarithia Saah (ザリシア・サー)
D.O.B.: 02/01/0058
Hair Colour: Red
Eye Colour: Blue

TSAB Mage Rank: B (Air)
Magic Type: Midchildran

History:
Born and raised in Elseia, Zarithia is the second youngest of four sisters. She had relatively little interest in magic or magic training until her second oldest sister died in an accident while a part of the TSAB. From that point, Zarithia started to self-train herself and soon joined the TSAB.

Zarithia: Well, that sounds kinda cool, the two events are unrelated. Just a coincidence. I need to get into contact with the guy who wrote this and clear this up.

Once in, Zarithia showed ambition and talent which allowed her to quickly get through training and soon joined the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces. However, following a particular incident, the force was disbanded. Zarithia has since created a quick-response strike unit with Aetis Zast, who was her partner in the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: That's it? Well, I guess I still haven't done much. Let's see, next page…

About:
Zarithia is a kind, cheerful, and mostly carefree girl. When she considers somebody to be her friend, she will work hard to defend that person when possible.

Zarithia: It's nice to read good things about you.

However, Zarithia has shown an obsession with the colour blue…

Zarithia: Obsession? Favourite colour isn't an obsession!

…as she is frequently seen wearing blue, her barrier jacket is almost entirely blue, she decorates her room with mostly blue, she notices the mention of blue even if it's across the room, and tends to side with whoever has the most amount of blue on them during arguments(hair, eyes, clothing, etc.). It is thus recommend not to count her during arguements.

Zarithia: …I'm going to kill whoever wrote this. DIE! DIE! DIE!

Zarithia uses an only minimally modified standard issue storage device for combat. However, unlike most Midchildran users, Zarithia prefers combat in close-range and is surprisingly effective at such. Her style is more defensive than offensive, making her an effective front guard. Her specialties lie in speed and defense.

Zarithia: I don't care if you're starting to praise me now. You're not getting out of this alive, Mr. whoever-wrote-this. You're the reason nobody listens to me!
???: Actually, it's because of how you act.
Zarithia: Oh, hey blue~
???: He- hey, let go of my hair. So I'm guessing you were reading your own profile?
Zarithia:Ah, yeah. Hey, Aetis, you happen to know who wrote it? I want to kill him.
Aetis: No, but if you keep saying things like that, somebody's going to arrest you.
Zarithia: You're no fun. I'm bored. Maybe I'll check out your profile.
Aetis: Hey, wait! …You already opened it.
Zarithia: Hiding something?
Aetis: Not really. My life isn't that interesting though.

Zarithia: Well, let's see…

Spoiler for Aetis Zast:

Profile — Aetis Zast
Name: Aetis Zast (エィテス・ザースト)
D.O.B.: 26/06/0057
Hair Colour: Blue

Zarithia: Blue~
Aetis: Cut it out.

Eye Colour: Green

TSAB Mage Rank: A (Mixed)
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan

Zarithia: Miss high-rank.
Aetis: You'll be A-rank too if you'd just try. Your apparent determination from training seems to be all gone now, though.

About:
Born in Kranagan, Aetis is an only child. She has always shown a desire to be a TSAB officer like her parents and joined early.

Zarithia: Hrmm… only child. Your mom and dad are here too?
Aetis: Well, yeah.
Zarithia: Cool! I want to meet them. Do they have blue hair too?
Aetis: Mom does… Is that the only reason why you want to meet them?

After training, Aetis joined the Emergency Response Force - Blue team, but left after 2 months to join 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: Huh? You were a part of the ERF Blue team? For two months? What happened?
Aetis: It's… a little complicated.
Zarithia: But why did you leave? It's blue!
Aetis: Not everyone shares your enthusiasm for the colour.
Zarithia: Well, because you left, I get to meet you. So it's all good.
Aetis: …
Zarithia: Alright, I'm skipping over to the next page.

About:
Aetis is perceived to be often serious but enjoys conversation and tends to get along with others. She has a strong sense of duty and responsibility and is good a following orders but sometimes becomes lost during the absense of orders. She has trouble when the situation requires going beyond what the normal rules allow.

Zarithia: You don't seem to be mad about it badmouthing you.
Aetis: It's not badmouthing, it's valid flaw that I need to work on.
Zarithia: …Boring

Aetis uses a heavily modified version of the standard issue spear-type armed device, increasing its effective range as well as its power output to better handle longer range attacks. Aetis mostly concentrates on powerful medium-range attacks in battle, focusing on off-balancing her opponent. However, she is weak in defense so she prefers countering attacks with her own attacks rather than bringing up a defensive shield or barrier.

Zarithia: Hrmm… it's not a very interesting profile.
Aetis: What did I tell you?
Zarithia: Oh yeah, why did you come here anyways?
Aetis: I just thought I'd check up on you.
Zarithia: Hrmm… ok. Oh! There's this book I thought you might like. Here! It's a comic book my cousin on Earth gave me.
Aetis: "Magic Knight Rayearth"? Is this about Belkan practiciners or something?
Zarithia: No, they don't have magic on Earth, much less Midchildran or Belkan. It's all fantasy. Anyways, one of the characters in it has blue hair and…
Aetis: Blue again, huh? Hrmm… the main girl looks kinda like you. She has a sword… come to think of it, I think a sword-type device could suit you.
Zarithia: Really? A sword… huh?
Aetis: Don't take it too seriously. Your staff works fine as it is.
Zarithia: Hrmm… a sword…
Aetis: You're not listening…
Zarithia: Oh right! Tomorrow I'm going to meet a friend of mine from school. I thought maybe you can come too.
Aetis: Tomorrow? I should be alright. Who's your friend?
Zarithia: Her name is Subaru Nakajima. She's really fun person to be with. 'Said she's going to try to bring her partner along too!

Zarithia knows Subaru? I think I better have a pair of eyes on them after this.

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Spoiler for another alternate OP:

STRIKE!
Song: Tank!
By: The Seatbelts
Origin: Cowboy Bebop

First we see flashes of words and incantations when the music starts. When the bass starts playing, the silhouette of Hikki preparing his Devices takes place.

“I think it’s time to blow this scene;
Get everybody and their stuff together;
Okay, three, two, one, let’s jam!”

From 00:15 to 00:21, scene of Hikki running away from something is shown (the lens shows red background). Then he stops and turns to the camera with a grin, before silhouette of Windtalker’s Pave Storm special-operation helicopter is shown.

From 00:21 to 00:28, scene of Armstrong’s legs walking (with incantations in various languages swirling in the background) takes place before a close-up shot on his face is shown.

From 00:28 to 00:31, two scenes of Unison Device Widuri reloading cartridges take place. Both have red backdrop, and the word “Lyrical of Time” can be seen.

From 00:32 to 00:34, black silhouette of Hikki delivering a Reppuken with blue backdrop of “Nanoha StrikerS”.

From 00:34 to 00:35, two successive scenes from Faye hacking through the Internet, to Azali kicking the gas pedal and changing gear take place.

From 00:35 to 00:45, scenes of Pave Storm taking off from base, Storm Hawk’s upper and lower view and Pave Storm’s close-up of its cockpit.

From 00:45 to 00:49, Hikki is seen dodging a sneak attack from AMF before camera switches to close-up shot of Hikki’s angry face.

From 00:49 to 00:56, we see two scenes of Azali: first is his face’s silhouette as he holds a chocolate stick; second is Azali running down the road while evading AMF attacks.

From 00:56 to 00:59, the camera shows pan shot of Hikki in his pose (fully clad in his Barrier Jacket). It is shown on the right side of the screen. Then the camera switches to Armstrong’s portrait on the left side of the screen (00:59-01:03); he, too, is in full Jacket but is holding Overdrive Forneus.

On 01:03-01:04, camera switches to a “bang” gesture formed by Azali’s hands. Then upper half of his body is shown, as he grins to the camera. Background colour is yellow.

On 01:04-01:05, camera switches to silhouette of Armstrong spinning Overdrive Forneus. Armstrong’s face is later shown. Background colour is red.

On 01:05-01:08, camera switches to silhouette of Hikki’s running feet. His face is shown as well. Background colour is blue-green.

On 01:08-01:09, camera shows black silhouette of Faye’s fingers, before Faye’s face is shown (she’s shown wearing her eyeglasses). Background colour is purple.

From 01:09-01:16, Pave Storm is seen making another take off from base. This time it makes transformation into a super robot.

From 01:16 to 01:20, scene switches to a Device Core glowing in the dark.

From 01:20 to 01:24, four portraits of Hikki, Armstrong, Azali and Faye are shown. When the drum rolls, the portraits turn black and only the Windtalkers’ outlines are shown.

From 01:24 and onward, camera switches to the word “Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha StrikerS: Lyrical of Time”, highlighted in white against black background. Finally everything turns black, and “(C) 2007, Animesuki INC.” is shown at the lower right edge of the screen.

For convenience, all of you MUST see video to further get the synchronization. Yes, Cowboy Bebop's OP is quite visual and making this alternate OP based on the video is quite a challenge.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by USB500

He's like Geese. He'll take on any challenge.



seconds later, Armstrong reverts to his old self.
Armstrong: *sees the mess* what happened?
Everyone: *whispers* you started the mess and you DIDN'T remember??????
Chrono: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!
Armstrong: *notices Chrono* are you alright, Admiral?
Chrono: here goes my monthly salary again.....

Poor Chrono and his salary... how much more suffering can he take at the hands of power-crazy mages?

Originally Posted by USB500

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Spoiler for another alternate OP:

STRIKE!
Song: Tank!
By: The Seatbelts
Origin: Cowboy Bebop

First we see flashes of words and incantations when the music starts. When the bass starts playing, the silhouette of Hikki preparing his Devices takes place.

“I think it’s time to blow this scene;
Get everybody and their stuff together;
Okay, three, two, one, let’s jam!”

From 00:15 to 00:21, scene of Hikki running away from something is shown (the lens shows red background). Then he stops and turns to the camera with a grin, before silhouette of Windtalker’s Pave Storm special-operation helicopter is shown.

From 00:21 to 00:28, scene of Armstrong’s legs walking (with incantations in various languages swirling in the background) takes place before a close-up shot on his face is shown.

From 00:28 to 00:31, two scenes of Unison Device Widuri reloading cartridges take place. Both have red backdrop, and the word “Lyrical of Time” can be seen.

From 00:32 to 00:34, black silhouette of Hikki delivering a Reppuken with blue backdrop of “Nanoha StrikerS”.

From 00:34 to 00:35, two successive scenes from Faye hacking through the Internet, to Azali kicking the gas pedal and changing gear take place.

From 00:35 to 00:45, scenes of Pave Storm taking off from base, Storm Hawk’s upper and lower view and Pave Storm’s close-up of its cockpit.

From 00:45 to 00:49, Hikki is seen dodging a sneak attack from AMF before camera switches to close-up shot of Hikki’s angry face.

From 00:49 to 00:56, we see two scenes of Azali: first is his face’s silhouette as he holds a chocolate stick; second is Azali running down the road while evading AMF attacks.

From 00:56 to 00:59, the camera shows pan shot of Hikki in his pose (fully clad in his Barrier Jacket). It is shown on the right side of the screen. Then the camera switches to Armstrong’s portrait on the left side of the screen (00:59-01:03); he, too, is in full Jacket but is holding Overdrive Forneus.

On 01:03-01:04, camera switches to a “bang” gesture formed by Azali’s hands. Then upper half of his body is shown, as he grins to the camera. Background colour is yellow.

On 01:04-01:05, camera switches to silhouette of Armstrong spinning Overdrive Forneus. Armstrong’s face is later shown. Background colour is red.

On 01:05-01:08, camera switches to silhouette of Hikki’s running feet. His face is shown as well. Background colour is blue-green.

On 01:08-01:09, camera shows black silhouette of Faye’s fingers, before Faye’s face is shown (she’s shown wearing her eyeglasses). Background colour is purple.

From 01:09-01:16, Pave Storm is seen making another take off from base. This time it makes transformation into a super robot.

From 01:16 to 01:20, scene switches to a Device Core glowing in the dark.

From 01:20 to 01:24, four portraits of Hikki, Armstrong, Azali and Faye are shown. When the drum rolls, the portraits turn black and only the Windtalkers’ outlines are shown.

From 01:24 and onward, camera switches to the word “Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha StrikerS: Lyrical of Time”, highlighted in white against black background. Finally everything turns black, and “(C) 2007, Animesuki INC.” is shown at the lower right edge of the screen.

For convenience, all of you MUST see video to further get the synchronization. Yes, Cowboy Bebop's OP is quite visual and making this alternate OP based on the video is quite a challenge.

Hard to imagine synchronization with an all-instrumental OP, but once you do, it works all the same Ironic how both OP's have a Faye in them

Wait a minute though... Pave Storm is a Super Robot?!?!?!

[USB500]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Poor Chrono and his salary... how much more suffering can he take at the hands of power-crazy mages?

Hard to imagine synchronization with an all-instrumental OP, but once you do, it works all the same Ironic how both OP's have a Faye in them

Wait a minute though... Pave Storm is a Super Robot?!?!?!

1: it indeed is hard as an Admiral. but hey, it's fun to bully Chrono once in a while. >;D

2: I'm trying to set apart from the usual super robot/awesome vibes we get from all the alternate OPs and employ other genres; in my case, both my alternate OPs use jazz as their backdrop music.

I'll try working on alternate EDs this time :3

3: not just super robot, but a TRANSFORMING super robot

[KBTKaiser]

hrm...maybe I'll try my hand at a Mabiko centric OP...

The song, you ask?

...Garnet Moon.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Keroko

Th-the god emperor of mankind!?!?!?!

*looks again*

Dammit Kha! You had me scared there for a sec!

*Sigh* Oh yeah, I finished the second part of the getting-Nanoha-to-relax fluff: Sisters by soul.

Spoiler for Sisters by soul:

*door buzzes*
Nanoha: *muffled from the other side of the door* Dozo!
Keroko: ojamashimasu!
Nanoha: Keroko-chan! What brings you here?
Keroko: Chrono told me you had to take a day of tomorrow or face the wrath of Shamal. I have a day off too, so I figured we could spend it together.
Nanoha: Ah, good idea. Let me finish these requests and-
Keroko: -Yappari-. Ano na, Nanoha-chan, the idea of a day off is that you don’t work for a change.
Nanoha: But-
Keroko: Ah! I brought chicken, and marinaded them too. All we need is some rice. Eto… where did I put it?
Nanoha: Did you bring vegetables?
Keroko: *raises hand dramatically, one finger pointing skywards* You don’t need vegetables when you have meat!
Nanoha: Ehehehe, I’ll go see what I have then.

*the sound of a lit stove, sizzling meat, boiling water and the chopping of vegetables fills the room*
Nanoha: It’s almost as if we’re back home, isn’t it? You do the meat, I make the vegetables.
Keroko: Un, ah, the rice is done.
Nanoha: I’ve got it.
Keroko: Hmm, the chicken is almost done, too. Let’s go set up the table.
Nanoha: Hai.

Nanoha: So how is Rogue Squadron?
Keroko: We’re doing pretty well. Ever since I got pushed for that promotion to Captain when the Squadron entered active duty, it’s been hectic. Trying to manage the Squadron, flying missions and doing my things as an instructor at the same time. Luckily things calmed down a bit after the first few months.
Nanoha: And they accuse me of working too hard.
Keroko: You are working too hard. Whatever I do as an instructor, you do the double. Granted, we recently balanced out a little, but you’ve been pushing yourself.
Nanoha: … Heh, here we are supposed to have a day off and we’re still talking about work.
Keroko: It’s because we have nothing else to talk about. Let’s change that tomorrow.
Nanoha: So where will we go?
Keroko: Hmm, we could go to that new movie that all the privates are talking about. Or we could go into the city, Tyria told me about the brilliant shopping center that opened up recently.
Nanoha: Un, sounds like fun. But let’s eat first.
Nanoha/Keroko: Itadakimasu!

*later that night*
Nanoha: That was delicious.
Keroko: Un, I can’t wait until tomorrow.
Nanoha: But let’s get some sleep first. I promised Shamal that I would try to go to sleep at 11.
*The two snuggle into the bed, facing each other with a smile.*
Nanoha: Oyasumi, onee-chan.
Keroko: Oyasuminasai, onee-chan.

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*Several blocks away, a group of people can be seen staring at the monitor.*
Hayate: Kawaiiiiii! Just look at the two of them!
Rein: Honto-desu! It was a good idea of Chrono-kun to let Keroko do this.
Chrono: Ma, I’m curious as to how tomorrow will end up, but for now it’s a ‘mission complete’
Signum: Desuga, who would have thought Keroko would succeed so easily?
Shamal: Tabun… because those two are true sisters. Despite not being related by blood, they care for each other just like blood siblings would do. Almost like you and Fate, Chrono-kun.
Chrono: *sighs* Tamashi no shimai… ka?

What's with the hidden camera's everywhere
Did Nanoha only give in because she didn't want to end up cosplaying somewhere in the future?

Originally Posted by Meophist

Got five more characters to fit with some previous characters. Will post two for now.

Spoiler for Zarithia Saah:

???: Argh! I'm bored! What to do, what to do… Hrmm… I guess I'll just look at my own profile. See what's there.

Profile — Zarithia Saah
Name: Zarithia Saah (ザリシア・サー)
D.O.B.: 02/01/0058
Hair Colour: Red
Eye Colour: Blue

TSAB Mage Rank: B (Air)
Magic Type: Midchildran

History:
Born and raised in Elseia, Zarithia is the second youngest of four sisters. She had relatively little interest in magic or magic training until her second oldest sister died in an accident while a part of the TSAB. From that point, Zarithia started to self-train herself and soon joined the TSAB.

Zarithia: Well, that sounds kinda cool, the two events are unrelated. Just a coincidence. I need to get into contact with the guy who wrote this and clear this up.

Once in, Zarithia showed ambition and talent which allowed her to quickly get through training and soon joined the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces. However, following a particular incident, the force was disbanded. Zarithia has since created a quick-response strike unit with Aetis Zast, who was her partner in the 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: That's it? Well, I guess I still haven't done much. Let's see, next page…

About:
Zarithia is a kind, cheerful, and mostly carefree girl. When she considers somebody to be her friend, she will work hard to defend that person when possible.

Zarithia: It's nice to read good things about you.

However, Zarithia has shown an obsession with the colour blue…

Zarithia: Obsession? Favourite colour isn't an obsession!

…as she is frequently seen wearing blue, her barrier jacket is almost entirely blue, she decorates her room with mostly blue, she notices the mention of blue even if it's across the room, and tends to side with whoever has the most amount of blue on them during arguments(hair, eyes, clothing, etc.). It is thus recommend not to count her during arguements.

Zarithia: …I'm going to kill whoever wrote this. DIE! DIE! DIE!

Zarithia uses an only minimally modified standard issue storage device for combat. However, unlike most Midchildran users, Zarithia prefers combat in close-range and is surprisingly effective at such. Her style is more defensive than offensive, making her an effective front guard. Her specialties lie in speed and defense.

Zarithia: I don't care if you're starting to praise me now. You're not getting out of this alive, Mr. whoever-wrote-this. You're the reason nobody listens to me!
???: Actually, it's because of how you act.
Zarithia: Oh, hey blue~
???: He- hey, let go of my hair. So I'm guessing you were reading your own profile?
Zarithia:Ah, yeah. Hey, Aetis, you happen to know who wrote it? I want to kill him.
Aetis: No, but if you keep saying things like that, somebody's going to arrest you.
Zarithia: You're no fun. I'm bored. Maybe I'll check out your profile.
Aetis: Hey, wait! …You already opened it.
Zarithia: Hiding something?
Aetis: Not really. My life isn't that interesting though.

Zarithia: Well, let's see…

Spoiler for Aetis Zast:

Profile — Aetis Zast
Name: Aetis Zast (エィテス・ザースト)
D.O.B.: 26/06/0057
Hair Colour: Blue

Zarithia: Blue~
Aetis: Cut it out.

Eye Colour: Green

TSAB Mage Rank: A (Mixed)
Magic Type: Neo-Belkan

Zarithia: Miss high-rank.
Aetis: You'll be A-rank too if you'd just try. Your apparent determination from training seems to be all gone now, though.

About:
Born in Kranagan, Aetis is an only child. She has always shown a desire to be a TSAB officer like her parents and joined early.

Zarithia: Hrmm… only child. Your mom and dad are here too?
Aetis: Well, yeah.
Zarithia: Cool! I want to meet them. Do they have blue hair too?
Aetis: Mom does… Is that the only reason why you want to meet them?

After training, Aetis joined the Emergency Response Force - Blue team, but left after 2 months to join 34th Lost Logia Search Forces.

Zarithia: Huh? You were a part of the ERF Blue team? For two months? What happened?
Aetis: It's… a little complicated.
Zarithia: But why did you leave? It's blue!
Aetis: Not everyone shares your enthusiasm for the colour.
Zarithia: Well, because you left, I get to meet you. So it's all good.
Aetis: …
Zarithia: Alright, I'm skipping over to the next page.

About:
Aetis is perceived to be often serious but enjoys conversation and tends to get along with others. She has a strong sense of duty and responsibility and is good a following orders but sometimes becomes lost during the absense of orders. She has trouble when the situation requires going beyond what the normal rules allow.

Zarithia: You don't seem to be mad about it badmouthing you.
Aetis: It's not badmouthing, it's valid flaw that I need to work on.
Zarithia: …Boring

Aetis uses a heavily modified version of the standard issue spear-type armed device, increasing its effective range as well as its power output to better handle longer range attacks. Aetis mostly concentrates on powerful medium-range attacks in battle, focusing on off-balancing her opponent. However, she is weak in defense so she prefers countering attacks with her own attacks rather than bringing up a defensive shield or barrier.

Zarithia: Hrmm… it's not a very interesting profile.
Aetis: What did I tell you?
Zarithia: Oh yeah, why did you come here anyways?
Aetis: I just thought I'd check up on you.
Zarithia: Hrmm… ok. Oh! There's this book I thought you might like. Here! It's a comic book my cousin on Earth gave me.
Aetis: "Magic Knight Rayearth"? Is this about Belkan practiciners or something?
Zarithia: No, they don't have magic on Earth, much less Midchildran or Belkan. It's all fantasy. Anyways, one of the characters in it has blue hair and…
Aetis: Blue again, huh? Hrmm… the main girl looks kinda like you. She has a sword… come to think of it, I think a sword-type device could suit you.
Zarithia: Really? A sword… huh?
Aetis: Don't take it too seriously. Your staff works fine as it is.
Zarithia: Hrmm… a sword…
Aetis: You're not listening…
Zarithia: Oh right! Tomorrow I'm going to meet a friend of mine from school. I thought maybe you can come too.
Aetis: Tomorrow? I should be alright. Who's your friend?
Zarithia: Her name is Subaru Nakajima. She's really fun person to be with. 'Said she's going to try to bring her partner along too!

Yay BLUE!! And people with the standard devices.... That's unpossible in this thread....

Originally Posted by Erio

Spoiler for for space:

Hello everyone. I have very little time for reading right now, so I apologize for not making comments on what you guys are talking about now...

However, I do have a few comments about what you guys were talking about yesterday (sorry ) which involves this thread's #1 target: the infamous Serge.

Yesterday I had some time so I read through all 5 acts of An Hero's scenario. That was very nice, An Hero. I liked how the whole battle played out, Serge's objectives and motivations, and how thoroughly you explained everything. HOW DARE YOU DO THAT TO NANOHA, YOU B-- err... oops, I didnt mean to say that out loud.

You know, I already had an idea of what special powers I was going to give Gaia by the time I created my 5 Relic users, but I did not have a good way to explain how his powers worked. However, thanks to An Hero's ideas about Serge's powers I now have a good way of describing how they work. You guys will not see Gaia in action until a couple of episodes from now, but expect some uber h4xness. I'm serious about this.

This leads to what I want to say now: How far should we develop our characters?
--First a disclaimer: while I will be using Serge to explain my points, I by no means am saying that he should be nerfed. In fact, I love Serge--he's just how I would do a badass villain.--
I dont know if you, An Hero, noticed while you were writing your combat scenario against the Aces, but I found out while writing my ficlets how... under-skilled (for the lack of a better word) the Aces are. What I'm trying to say is that our Aces only have about 4-5 major skills that they use in different ways. Example, Nanoha's offensive arsenal consists of Divine Buster, Accel Shooter, Starlight Breaker and Excelion Buster, and a few other, which are variations of these four main spells. The first three do about the same thing: attack the target directly with raw power. The fourth is Nanoha's attempt at melee combat. If we group her spells this way, we see that Nanoha's main ability is long range energy bombardment, and Excelion Buster is Raising Heart's attempt to give Nanoha another combat approach in battle. As you can see, Nanoha doesnt go too far away from her main combat style which is long range combat. She did reveal another spell, Stardust Fall (was it? forgot the name), so she might have other spells hidden from us right now, but I strongly believe that they will all fall into the long-range category.

Now, if we see characters like Serge, he has 10 known abilities (as An Hero obviously has a bunch others trump cards under his sleeve) all of which do different things. In his case, 7 of the spells counter 7 or more different types of attacks, which include melee, mid-range, and long-range. In other words, this guy is capable of handling almost every attack thrown at him! And we were proven this by An Hero's scenario. To think that he is only two years older than our Aces...

And what about characters like Kha? He has more spells, barrier jacket forms, and device modes than all our Aces combined. I cannot comment about Kha right now, though, as we have yet to see him in action. How does he handle his huge arsenal of spells? Is he a quick thinker? Can he actually remember all the spells he has and use each of them in the right circumstances? Does changing between barrier jacket forms and device modes affect his stamina?

This is why I like to create characters with a main strength or ability, and then make them learn new moves by modifying such ability or using the ability in different ways as the need arises. However, I've been trying to make my characters fit into the main canon without problems, as proven in my little fanfic, so I guess that's why my characters are all underdeveloped, as I take a different approach when creating a character.

BTW, these comments were all thought up after I tried to get Kha and Serge involved in my fanfic. They seem to be way out of my character's, and even the Aces', league.

What do you guys think?

Good points raised there Erio. Out of my OC's that have been made or are in development, Only one (Akilae) approaches haxx levels.. (although that's really as he doesn't really belong in the Nanohaverse). The rest of them are what I consider to be reasonably balanced in their skills and abilities. The reason behind this is that for the majority of my OC's have been thought up to operate in squads so that someone else is able to pick up on thier weaknesses.

However, with Serge and to a lesser extent Kha are just one man teams that need to be well rounded in their abilities. (Although as An Hero has said most of Serge's haxx powers come from his device). Still IMO none of the OC's in th e thread so far has been haxx to the point where they're completely unstopppable so its ok atm.

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Though, some things don't seem quite accurate there...

Ok, the drawing of the "movie scene" as requested...

Spoiler for Rice and Pasta:

Yeah, it was a bit rushed...kid of like the last movie scene...lol

Nice drawing as usual FlameSparkZ

Originally Posted by Mow Yun

I'd agree completely here. :X The problem as it appears to me, is that it seems some of our OC's are not only godly at one thing, they seem to have a strength in every area. It's gotten pretty bad as it seems many characters seem to lack significant weaknesses. They're not only versatile but they seem to be every single Nanoha character's strengths combined into a single package. They seem to have a very strong answer to any combat situation, which makes them seem...a little too extraordinary.

Now after that very short rant, I now feel like I'm speaking out of my ass because I only read and don't post at all much.

Even though I'm speaking against characters being strong in many areas, I feel slightly guilty because even though my character specializes in defense, I've given her a very powerful offensive spell.

I don't think that's a problem. It is a powerful offensive skill but at least she doesn't have as many defensive set.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Sorry about the delay on this one. And also for it's shortness. Life had been kind of a pain on me lately, so there's less time for me to indulge in writing and backlogs, other than the occasional appearances here and there.

Anyway, it's short, but I think it's better to post this in parts again like usual, so here goes Part 12 :1, I mean. :3

Spoiler for Part 12 : 1 Beginning :

~Part XII Verse 2: ~ Reenactment of Knighthood ~

~Lost Pages 317 : Diablo ~

“Pain is but an eternal cycle, a spiral of immortality…Who can save one from it?”

-Saga-

17th December, Year of the 11th Twilight Sky.

It was the beginning of the descent…

It was the beginning…to everything.

Our despair, our pains, our loss, our suffering, our darkness…even our hope.

It all began on that night.

Night of the Vergessenheit.

~Saga/Tiara~

A stampede of emotions and conflict born from bloodshed… That was what it was.

Countless knights from both sides, some as young as 10…some peaking even the 60s… woman, children, elders… people who should not be fighting… amidst the clash of power, born from the strength of a thousand knights, and the sound of clashing blades and shields…

A pitch of hardness, from the first clash of metallic sounds of the rushing stampede of spears and shields, amidst the thousands, almost simultaneous, like the first melody of the night.

“Hold your defenses! Balance the offensive and defensive fronts within 3 layers! Don’t let the enemy break through!”

Life never looked so small, and fragile.

Another sound, this time…low as the grounds crackle in anticipation…a sound of focused strength...a low, peaceful sound of weight being applied, a melody of 2 kinds…and with a fleeting second, the sound turned mellow with a sharp tune, as the skies are covered with a barrage of countless magical arrows, it’d almost cover the moon…

Accompanying was the fellow sound of cracks, and breaks… as shields, each individually small, and seemingly powerless, as a whole covers the entire earth from beyond what eyes can see, protecting the knights from the barrage of arrows…

A temporary silence following the ensuing exchange… Both sides were patient, pushing their games. Now…it was a test of true endurance.

“Load Cartridge!”

Under my orders, my knights, and similarly, the enemy’s as in a symphony of a march, without a split-second’s doubt, all boosted their weapons, with cartridges loaded as magical triangles scatter throughout the battlefield, almost a rainbow of colors on the night’s illuminated earth… The sound of it… the low sound of boosted cartridges, the falling sound of the metal core…and the blaze of thunderous clash that follows after…

A blaze of white… a multitude clash of energies fill the battlefield, it’s almost blinding.

In a way… this battle almost feels like an symphony… A musical symphony that honors the fallen of this war.

“Can all of you hear this, the knights who had passed on?”

It was uncharacteristic of me… but I feel that it’s only right to address it. Countless had died to see the end of the war, and here we are…at the beginning of it’s end.

Can you hear this?



This is the requiem by your fellow comrades.

A requiem to show to all of you… We are here now, at the pinnacle of the end.

Your deaths will not be in vain. Because today, it will end.

The next part shouldn't take too long...I hope.

It's short yes but conveys alot about the battle itself and is a good way to begin.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

H-SHE LIVES!!!! THE GOD EMPRESS LIVES!!!! THE STAR CHILD HAS RETURNED!!!!!! THE RISE OF THE IMPERIUM HAS BEGUN!!!

Watch out for the ION CANON though...

Akilae: [The star child has returned? No matter. As long as it fulfills it's purpose in destroying chaos, it will be a useful tool. I will ensure that the barbarian child returns to it's throne and we are safe once more, dispose of it.]

On references... well they're references. There's no loss if you don't get them, but you'll appreciate it much better if you do. They should have no further explanation other than being there

@ Issue of Balance and Skill:

I agree on most of the points presented here, especially by Elio, Moy Yun and dkellis on the power levels of recent characters, and the trend of overpowering characters. A certain amount of balance must be enforced when creating character spell skillsets and abilities, such that they are powerful, but due to how the spell's effects are used, and not due to the spell itself, and also the circumstances of that spell.

Like Meophist, when thinking of a character skillset I first try and imagine what their fighting style would be like, then work out what individual spells would that character have to allow them to perform that style. RPG's give you a very good idea of how to proceed with this approach. Although I admit I'm rather random at giving out spells

For my characters as examples... I think that asides from dkellis' Library Girls, Kaylin is one of the weakest base mages here in terms of innate skillset. While Tais has a much lower magic rank, he does have Yui with him to get through (or get him into )most... *ehem* situations. Kaylin's combat skillset though is pathetic compared to most of the others here, but because she's not meant to get into lots of battles (more like get herself out of them), it's not like she requires overly powerful spells. However, her skillset is unusually versatile despite their limited functions, because she can use them outside of combat as well for utility reasons. Also, because she's an archaeologist she'll need to have a skillset that'll allow her to FIND anything, which is why she has the most types of search spells here

Glock's a much different case... I don't have a unique skillset for him yet, because I imagined him as someone who doesn't have much in the way of unique abilities, and so takes stock TSAB spells and runs with them. His Necron powers are more technological than magical, which means Belka magic-wise Glock isn't anything special.

And Mai... going by the Chaos Magic motif I molded her skillset to use powerful yet unstable powers, which results in short-ranged, short-lived and imprecise spells. Her "Doom" skills are basically just basic buster spells with the same effects (aka splinter on impact), but designed for different types of enemies and situations. And despite her signature Chain Staff, she only has three melee spells because that's her weakest area in combat (although it works wonders for terrorizing people ).

More good points to add on the discussion about chracter levels and skills. See above for my reply to this.....

[Saint X]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

It's always the most respected and cool characters that get the knockout reaction in SRWverse. I guess it applies here too.

- *nods*

- heheh what could happen after she wakes up? i dunno hehe.

- wait until Ruri tries the NECTAR!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Mai: *Dodges Divine Voltage*

*Sees her uneaten Tayaki on her hand burnt by Divine Voltage*

...

*Stares Ojii-chan directly in the eye*

Your pitiful shadow is cloaked in darkness
You have caused great pain and suffering
Your hollow soul drowns in your sins

... Would you like to try dying onc-

*Mai dissapears from her spot*

Smith / Wesson: *Running out the door with Mai at light speed*
WE'RE SORRY GENERAL, SHE MEANT NO HAAAAAAAAAAARM!!!!!
*Doppler Effect*

- not a good way to spoil a girl's food- especially taiyaki.

- Kyla: ARMSTRONG!!!

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Q: by the way, can you guys give me which OCs / arcs occur when?
i need to check so that i can add character from this thread into my current fiction work- AlternateS I

thanks,

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