Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Rising Dragon]

Would she still wear Ferret!Yuuno to the bath? =X

*shot*

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

It's the honest truth. Not to mention, I have no clue how to write Yuuno romantically. He's a difficult character in that way.

I agree, I do want to write Yuuno in sometimes but yet I don't have a good grip on his character so I don't . He doesn't seem to have changed much between the first 2 seasons and the later series, so there isn't much to do with him in some cases.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

I agree, I do want to write Yuuno in sometimes but yet I don't have a good grip on his character so I don't . He doesn't seem to have changed much between the first 2 seasons and the later series, so there isn't much to do with him in some cases.

So give him a character arc and change him yourself?

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

So give him a character arc and change him yourself?

I've been telling her the exact same thing for like a month now.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

So give him a character arc and change him yourself?

I would do that, but I fear being called out for making him OOC since his character is pretty firmly established for at least two seasons of the show.

[spawnofthejudge]

Heck, Yuuno getting his own character arc in the Shadowverse would help define a better Fanon!Yuuno anyway. Since in one corner he's dead, dying or a ^$#%, and in the other we don't seem to know what to do with him.

ETA: Start him like he's canonically defined, then move him forward. Besides, he hasn't had enough screentime to really be defined since A's. I dare you to contradict that.

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

Heck, Yuuno getting his own character arc in the Shadowverse would help define a better Fanon!Yuuno anyway. Since in one corner he's dead, dying or a ^$#%, and in the other we don't seem to know what to do with him.

ETA: Start him like he's canonically defined, then move him forward. Besides, he hasn't had enough screentime to really be defined since A's. I dare you to contradict that.

So... wait: He's canonically defined as... what again?

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

So... wait: He's canonically defined as... what again?

The nice guy who works in the library and has a crush on Nanoha?

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

So... wait: He's canonically defined as... what again?

QFT.

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

The nice guy who works in the library and has a crush on Nanoha?

And had a conversation with Nanoha that NO ONE KNOWS ABOUT.

[Nanya01]

I made Yuuno awesome.

Doesn't that count for something?

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Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Dusk 15:

Back on Earth...

Stretching as she woke up, Filia looked at Val's crib and smiled as the small Dragon let out a yawn and rolled over. Shaking her head, she would be a little worried about him not doing much besides sleeping, but considering that he had shifted to his human form just the other day, she couldn't complain about it. After all, he was learning fast, even if it was just instinctive at this point.

Throwing a robe around her body, she slipped on some slippers and plodded out of her room. As she walked silently through the house, she couldn't help but appreciate the quiet that the early morning had, well, relative quiet, the cars were still loud and annoying, as was the train that was at least two kilometers away and those flying metal birds, Lindy said that they were planes and they were common on this planet.

Grumbling and wishing that she had taken her earplugs with her, Filia stopped at the door to the kitchen and looked as she saw Chrono, sitting at the table in nothing but shorts and nursing a cup of coffee as he looked at the newspaper. Seeing him shirtless sent shivers down her spine. Smiling, she slowly walked up to him before wrapping her arms around his body, pressing herself against his back and getting a startled gasp from him. "Morning, Chrono."

"Filia..." Chrono chuckled softly and put his coffee down to pat her hands. "Sleep well?"

"Mmhmm..." She nodded and leaned against him. "You look handsome like this..." Chrono turned to look at her and his eyes widened as she kissed him on the lips softly. The two blushed softly as Chrono turned in the chair and pulled her into a hug, letting her rest against him more.

"Sleepy-head." He chuckled as she nodded against him. "Why'd you wake up so early?" He let go of the hug as she pulled up a chair to sit next to him. One thing Filia found embarrassing was how Lindy had to get everything reinforced to support her weight. She wasn't fat, she just weighed a lot, due to her being a Dragon.

She shrugged, causing some interesting things to happen to her shirt as her breasts decided to move on their own. "I was a touch too hot, I guess, just woke up." Filia chuckled and gave him a pointed look. "How about you? You woke up early too."

Chrono chuckled and rubbed the back of his head. "Couldn't sleep either."

Filia nodded, smiling lazily at him. "I'm glad... I don't get to see you without a shirt very often."

Chrono chuckled and got up. "Yeah, well, I was going to stay like this for a bit longer, but since you're up, I guess I better..." He trailed off as Filia's tail snapped out and wrapped around his wrist. "Um..."

Filia was blushing heavily. "You don't... Need to get dressed, I like the view."

Chrono's face was red. "Ah, well..." He blinked as Filia did loosen her tail and pull it back. "What?"

"Sorry, I'm pushing you, aren't I?" She sighed heavily, before blinking as Chrono got close to her. "Chrono?" The blonde's eyes widened comically as he kissed her on the lips, not the soft kiss that she dropped on him a moment ago, but a deep kiss, one that caused her muscles to practically turn into jelly as she felt her brain shutting down. When he pulled his mouth away from hers, she was left gasping for air. "Chrono..?" She wasn't sure exactly what happened just now, but it was incredible.

"If you were pushing me, I wouldn't have done that." Smiling, he turned and left her sitting there.

Chrono had just turned the corner when Filia shook her head and got up off the chair and started to stalk after him. "You're not getting away that easily." She giggled as she saw him stop at his room for a moment before entering it, a moment later, she entered after him and closed the door.

(---)

Back on the Red World...

Looking at the two who walked into the room, Zest raised an eyebrow as he saw their appearance, the female had light colored clothing, except for the leather that covered her right arm and breast, light blue hair and purple eyes and a man in a typical traveling outfit, a red bandana on his head, his dark hair was spiked upwards, interestingly enough, the male looked a touch roughed up for some odd reason.

The king raised an eyebrow. "And you two are..?"

"Name's Luke, this is Milina, we're passing mercs when we heard that the kingdom is a little short on bodyguards."

The king chuckled softly. "Normally I'd say that you're too late and that this man, Zest, took the position before you could get here, but for you, I'll make an exception." Luke blinked in surprise. "I've heard about you two, a hot-headed swordsman and a very skilled sorceress working together and causing a ruckus according to my intelligence."

Milina elbowed Luke hard enough to cause him to double over. "Don't let it go to your head." He pouted at her as she turned back to the king. "If you have heard of us, I would like to start right away and discuss terms of our payment."

"Of course." The king nodded and Zest could have sworn he saw a flash of excitement in his eyes. Looking at the two of them, he could tell they were skilled and strong magic users, but hiring them right away?

Something wasn't right, he was sure of it.

(---)

In town...

Amelia looked at Lyos as she met up with them in the middle of town. "Are you okay, Mr. Lyos?"

He nodded, rolling his shoulder. "Yeah, that Ruby-Eye Blade surprised me though." Looking at his sword, he sighed heavily and slung it on his back. "I need to find a blacksmith."

"Ruby-Eye Blade?" Amelia tilted her head. "...What's that?" Zelgadis shrugged at her.

"Honestly, if I had to describe it, I would say that the Astral Vine spell was used to weaken the Ragna Blade, though if I think about it a bit more..." Zelgadis trailed off and twitched. "Man, it's times like this I wish Lina was around more often, she would have noticed right away." When Amelia and Lyos looked at him in confusion, he sighed. "Think about the name... It has to be a spell from Shabranigdo."

"Like the Dragon Slave?" Amelia tapped her chin, getting a nod from Zelgadis. "But, I thought there was only one spell from Shabranigdo."

"The Dragon Slave's more popular and more known, but that doesn't mean that there's not other spells from Shabranigdo." Zelgadis shook his head. "Heck, I bet you could probably develop a spell to jump from one world to another by drawing off of Shabranigdo."

"Really?" Amelia and Lyos looked at him in surprise, causing Zelgadis to face-fault to the ground.

"Like I know, Lyos, go get your sword fixed up, Amelia and I are going to scout around, see what's going on in this kingdom, when you got that done, look around yourself."

Lyos nodded and turned, waving them off as he went to find a blacksmith who could fix his sword.

[RadiantBeam]

In all fairness, though, some fanfics do make Yuuno quite awesome. I especially like the way Moczo has handled him in Infinity: making him badass without straying far from the idea that he's still a guy who works in the library and is primarily good with defense magic.

[Justin_Brett]

People who go 'Yuuno should get a Device!' really kind of miss the point of him, I think.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

So give him a character arc and change him yourself?

The biggest trouble with that is that Yuuno has a general appeal to most of fandom the way he is--he doesn't have a hugely dramatic personality, he's a genuinely nice guy and he is a great support character (both story-wise and relationship-wise). Unfortunately, those traits aren't really easy to write stories around .

And giving him something dramatic to react to kind of pushes Yuuno away from all his good traits, and that would be doing him a disservice as well....

(Besides, you guys know the kinds of stories I write--can you really say that he'd be well-served to have me write a story about him? )

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

I've been telling her the exact same thing for like a month now.

Noooooo freeeeeeeeee timeeeeeeeee................

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

Heck, Yuuno getting his own character arc in the Shadowverse would help define a better Fanon!Yuuno anyway. Since in one corner he's dead, dying or a ^$#%, and in the other we don't seem to know what to do with him.

LOL, I feel that's a crack at me , and how he's dead or missing in most of my stories....

ETA: Start him like he's canonically defined, then move him forward. Besides, he hasn't had enough screentime to really be defined since A's. I dare you to contradict that.

That's true , but even so, his core personality shouldn't change, and I'm just not interested in Yuuno for all those reasons I put above. I did write him in "What Could Have Been", but that's how I see Yuuno really, more as a supporting character than a lead one.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

The biggest trouble with that is that Yuuno has a general appeal to most of fandom the way he is--he doesn't have a hugely dramatic personality, he's a genuinely nice guy and he is a great support character (both story-wise and relationship-wise). Unfortunately, those traits aren't really easy to write stories around .

And giving him something dramatic to react to kind of pushes Yuuno away from all his good traits, and that would be doing him a disservice as well....

(Besides, you guys know the kinds of stories I write--can you really say that he'd be well-served to have me write a story about him? )

Gah. Stop it! I don't want to have a fourth story running at once when I'm trying to cut down on my fanfiction! Dammit!

Originally Posted by deathcurse

LOL, I feel that's a crack at me , and how he's dead or missing in most of my stories....

It's a crack at NanoFate Die-for-our-shippers. I will never stop taking potshots at them, as much as that isn't entirely nice of me.

Originally Posted by deathcurse

That's true , but even so, his core personality shouldn't change, and I'm just not interested in Yuuno for all those reasons I put above. I did write him in "What Could Have Been", but that's how I see Yuuno really, more as a supporting character than a lead one.

So clearly he needs to take a lead, and learn something about himself/the world that doesn't affect his genuine nice guy traits.

...

DAMN IT

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

So clearly he needs to take a lead, and learn something about himself/the world that doesn't affect his genuine nice guy traits.

...

DAMN IT

I just got a raging plot bunny that I'm unable to calm down.

[Justin_Brett]

Speaking of Take Thats, I've actually been writing one in Section Thirteen toward a story that kind of riled me up a bit. Chapter's coming along fairly well, I'd say there's only a few (fairly large) scenes left before it's done.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by spawnofthejudge

So clearly he needs to take a lead, and learn something about himself/the world that doesn't affect his genuine nice guy traits.

...

DAMN IT

*munches carrot* Want some of my free plotbunnies, or are you fine with yours? It looks like they're starting to overrun you there.

[spawnofthejudge]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

*munches carrot* Want some of my free plotbunnies, or are you fine with yours? It looks like they're starting to overrun you there.

...But I want to focus more on my OF!

[RadiantBeam]

Request finished! Humor instead of pure romance, but hey, it's Signum/Yuuno.

Spoiler for Daddy's Little Girl: Hayate Edition:

Yuuno Scrya was a nervous young man.

In general, he was rarely ever nervous. It had been many years since he had gone out into a fight, and even though he had recently embarked on a romantic relationship with one of his co-workers—something that, by simple virtue alone, should have probably made him at least a little nervous. But he hadn’t been nervous in a good long while.

It helped in particular that Signum herself was a very calm woman. It had only been a few weeks since they had decided to give dating a try, and so far it had progressed without a hitch. Yuuno knew it was still a little too early to really be sure about anything, but he had a good feeling about the relationship.

Or he had had a good feeling, until he had gotten a notice from one Yagami Hayate, requesting that he come to her office when he had some free time.

As a result, Yuuno was a very, very nervous young man.

He cleared his throat, took a deep breath, and lifted his hand; out of habit, he knocked lightly on Hayate’s office door before he came inside, smiling at her as best he could manage. It came out weak and lopsided. “You wanted to see me?”

Sitting behind her desk, with her window open to the sunlight outside, Hayate looked surprisingly imposing. Yuuno supposed it had to do with the angle of the light; it swept over her from outside, cutting sharply through the dark shadows and completely obliterating everything it touched. It didn’t help that the light seemed more white than yellow at the moment.

The imposing aura was further enforced by how she sat; her hands folded in front of her mouth, her eyes giving him a strange, piercing stare as if she could see into his soul. It was oddly disturbing.

Behind her hands, Hayate smiled. Yuuno suddenly felt the urge to run for his life.

“Take a seat, Yuuno-kun. Let’s talk about your intentions with my daughter.”

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“Hayate did WHAT?”

Vita winced, rubbing her eyes. “Signum,” she groaned from the medical bed as she lay recovering from a rough mission. “Have some respect for the dying.”

“That’s not the point.” Signum swung back around, facing Shamal as the blonde absently tied some bandages around the tiny redhead’s wounds. “Hayate called for Yuuno?”

“Why yes, she did,” Shamal responded mildly, never even looking up from her task. “It seems the news about you and Yuuno finally caught up with her. I do wonder why you never told her yourself.”

Signum winced a bit; it seemed Shamal still held a bit of a grudge about the fact that she had kept quiet about her relationship with the librarian until this point. Even as she felt the urge to defend her decision, she squashed it. She had bigger concerns at the moment.

“Shamal,” she said patiently, “forgive me for raising my voice, but I’m concerned about this.”

Shamal shrugged, tightening a bandage slightly and making Vita hiss in protest. “I imagine they’ll only talk, Signum. Hardly anything worth worrying about.”

“Except it’s Hayate. And Yuuno’s dating me.”

A long, long pause fell as the three women considered this. For some reason, the image of Yuuno dressed in a white wedding gown, with Hayate cackling and rubbing her hands together in the background, flashed through Signum’s head.

“He’s a dead man,” Vita announced.

“… You should probably run,” Shamal said.

“Better. I’ll fly.” Already calculating the distance she had to cover from the infirmary to Hayate’s office, Signum practically shot out of the room, a blur of pink movement that would knock over anyone dumb enough to stand in her way.

Back on the bed, Vita chuckled.

“Hell, if that boy survives talking with Hayate, I’ll buy him a drink. He’ll have earned it.”

“… And if he doesn’t?”

“I’m not thinking about that.”

Yes, I know Hayate is younger than Signum, but she does consider the Wolkies her kids in canon, and I mostly only used the "daughter" line as a humor thing. And I blame the wedding dress gag on Moczo.

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Request finished! Humor instead of pure romance, but hey, it's Signum/Yuuno.

Spoiler for Daddy's Little Girl: Hayate Edition:

Yuuno Scrya was a nervous young man.

In general, he was rarely ever nervous. It had been many years since he had gone out into a fight, and even though he had recently embarked on a romantic relationship with one of his co-workers—something that, by simple virtue alone, should have probably made him at least a little nervous. But he hadn’t been nervous in a good long while.

It helped in particular that Signum herself was a very calm woman. It had only been a few weeks since they had decided to give dating a try, and so far it had progressed without a hitch. Yuuno knew it was still a little too early to really be sure about anything, but he had a good feeling about the relationship.

Or he had had a good feeling, until he had gotten a notice from one Yagami Hayate, requesting that he come to her office when he had some free time.

As a result, Yuuno was a very, very nervous young man.

He cleared his throat, took a deep breath, and lifted his hand; out of habit, he knocked lightly on Hayate’s office door before he came inside, smiling at her as best he could manage. It came out weak and lopsided. “You wanted to see me?”

Sitting behind her desk, with her window open to the sunlight outside, Hayate looked surprisingly imposing. Yuuno supposed it had to do with the angle of the light; it swept over her from outside, cutting sharply through the dark shadows and completely obliterating everything it touched. It didn’t help that the light seemed more white than yellow at the moment.

The imposing aura was further enforced by how she sat; her hands folded in front of her mouth, her eyes giving him a strange, piercing stare as if she could see into his soul. It was oddly disturbing.

Behind her hands, Hayate smiled. Yuuno suddenly felt the urge to run for his life.

“Take a seat, Yuuno-kun. Let’s talk about your intentions with my daughter.”

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“Hayate did WHAT?”

Vita winced, rubbing her eyes. “Signum,” she groaned from the medical bed as she lay recovering from a rough mission. “Have some respect for the dying.”

“That’s not the point.” Signum swung back around, facing Shamal as the blonde absently tied some bandages around the tiny redhead’s wounds. “Hayate called for Yuuno?”

“Why yes, she did,” Shamal responded mildly, never even looking up from her task. “It seems the news about you and Yuuno finally caught up with her. I do wonder why you never told her yourself.”

Signum winced a bit; it seemed Shamal still held a bit of a grudge about the fact that she had kept quiet about her relationship with the librarian until this point. Even as she felt the urge to defend her decision, she squashed it. She had bigger concerns at the moment.

“Shamal,” she said patiently, “forgive me for raising my voice, but I’m concerned about this.”

Shamal shrugged, tightening a bandage slightly and making Vita hiss in protest. “I imagine they’ll only talk, Signum. Hardly anything worth worrying about.”

“Except it’s Hayate. And Yuuno’s dating me.”

A long, long pause fell as the three women considered this. For some reason, the image of Yuuno dressed in a white wedding gown, with Hayate cackling and rubbing her hands together in the background, flashed through Signum’s head.

“He’s a dead man,” Vita announced.

“… You should probably run,” Shamal said.

“Better. I’ll fly.” Already calculating the distance she had to cover from the infirmary to Hayate’s office, Signum practically shot out of the room, a blur of pink movement that would knock over anyone dumb enough to stand in her way.

Back on the bed, Vita chuckled.

“Hell, if that boy survives talking with Hayate, I’ll buy him a drink. He’ll have earned it.”

“… And if he doesn’t?”

“I’m not thinking about that.”

Yes, I know Hayate is younger than Signum, but she does consider the Wolkies her kids in canon, and I mostly only used the "daughter" line as a humor thing. And I blame the wedding dress gag on Moczo.

Poor Yuuno.