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StratoSpear · 2013-11-16, 01:43

Given Athena's setting, it's only fitting that I have Arrival as the climax/endgame music.

And I've been updating my chapters in my Google Drive, just in case. I've decided to go with 7 long chapters, each made up of 10 parts. The 7 long chapters make up 1 arc, and my projection is for Athena to have 3 arcs, each revolving around a certain character:

Spoiler for Arcs:

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 01:46

Have anyone thinking about writing about a paralyzed patient?

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 01:58

I tend to avoid talking about people with special needs.

It's an inherently sensitive issue, but I deal with them on daily basis so I understood them well.

Originally though, the Yuuki twins in the TLR Stratos has such issue because of unknown (alien) disease. Riko is left with barely functional leg after recovery.

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 02:06

Don't know why, but seeing so many people of my family got themself sick kind of encourage me to write something like that. And the idea of Prof. Ichika Orimura is still valid...

Also, what is the most foolist thing that Ichika has ever done? No related to harem.

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 02:15

First of all, when write something about things that close to reality, write from their perspective, not yours.

If you want to write someone blind, then cover your eyes for hours to no end. If you want to write someone with paralyzed leg, try to use wheelchair for entire day.

Put that in your writing and you'll see how this is not an enjoyable experience. I write a fanfic for fun, and no way I'll taint that with my own turmoil.

As of Ichika's foolishness, his emotional outburst during Laura's fight is stupid beyond reasoning.

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 02:22

Pss... Guess that you're right. And damn, I couldn't write anything for day. The time between Fall and Winter is so unpleasant in Vietnam.

... That give me a new idea: What if we combine Rin's Impact Cannon, plus Houki's fire and Tate's ice. A tornado, perharp?

Rokumonsen · 2013-11-16, 02:37

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Originally Posted by Fireminer

... That give me a new idea: What if we combine Rin's Impact Cannon, plus Houki's fire and Tate's ice. A tornado, perharp?

They'll repel each other. So it isn't a nice combo.

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 02:39

Chaos born Harmony, my friend. Just like what awaited us after every conflict.

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 02:40

I don't remember Houki has fire control power

citation?

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 02:49

My upgrade for her: Akatsubaki Fusichou (phoenix). A game breaker in the least. Imagine Gundam Phenex in IS form.

wavehawk · 2013-11-16, 03:04

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Originally Posted by Tempest35

@ wavehawk

From what I saw, her alias of Reiko Blahblahblah was one of a corporate sales rep. One can just have a 'No Sales Reps' policy in effect for the school festival. She is 'caught' trying to pitch a sale to Ichika and she's rounded up at the cafe. Nothing else to be had.

- Considered that, but since the fic I'm writing has to fit in with the established story I can't use Chifuyu. Yet. Putting Chifuyu into my fic is like detonating a 20 Megaton Nuke in the middle of a New York apartment just to get rid of the ants in the kitchen.

When I said "Before the School Festival", I mean literally the day before. EG before she's prepared and ready to grab Ichika. An agent or Agents try to stop and fail miserably. The problem is exactly how they come across and encounter her without it being deus ex machina contrived luck.

Tempest35 · 2013-11-16, 03:30

... In that case, you probably can't pull it off without resorting to it since we have absolutely no idea what she was doing prior.

Ugh, I'm trying to hurry and finish this revision as well... Expanding some scenes as Zero requested, mainly the end, the fight with Rin, and the scene of Rin with both Ichikas in her room.

Oh yeah, does Icchan do the whole 'massage' deal too? Or does she have another special 'talent'? Just thinking of a 'special chapter' to have the family take Chifuyu's birthday off and the younger two decide to pamper Oneechan a bit. Nothing to much - it's mostly for the feels.

... mostly.

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 03:44

Acupunture?

Hmm... I wonder what kind of wine would suit Chifuyu?

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 03:48

Icchan and massage huh? Give and take.

Initially, Ikkun is the one getting it after got his body battered down from Chifuyu's training (I need to write the montage, when I can). After he recovered, he offer to do it for her as repayment.

Chifuyu got herself drunk trying to forget the scene (two of them actually)

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 04:10

Have been thinking: Outside of the fact that Ichika and Chifuyu is perfect together, are there any reason why this pairing has been attracting lots of attention these days? The anime?

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 04:12

Perfect together in what way?

In theory, they might be nice and hot. And the fans wanted their waifu hot AND badass. Even I can admit that.

In practice, their relationship is self destructive.

Tempest35 · 2013-11-16, 04:12

Finally! Done with those edits! I'll have to read through the entire thing tomorrow to make sure I didn't mess things up too much. Next chapter of Mirrorverse should be up by Monday-ish.

...and...oh my... It was that good eh...

An outline of it will be alright. I can infer all the visual imagery needed to flesh it out. XD

Soooo~ Chifuyu thinks they are giving each other happy end massages... LOL Oh wait until it is your turn, my dear oneesan... *cackle cackle*

I was thinking about it since Icchan is very conscious of the fact that she doesn't have a 'girly appearance' but she still cooks and cleans so she wanted something else that she could do that would be identifiable as being 'girly'. I almost thought of Yoga and Pilates but... >.>

Yeah, 'no go' on that idea.

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Originally Posted by Fireminer

Have been thinking: Outside of the fact that Ichika and Chifuyu is perfect together, are there any reason why this pairing has been attracting lots of attention these days? The anime?

...

Don't think too much on it. It's the 'wincest' element. It's like eating sweets. Everyone knows that they are bad for you but people eat it anyway. As much as I go on about them, Ichika will never be a real man as long as he's under Chifuyu (he doesn't need to be as long as she's there), and Chifuyu won't stop protecting him as long as he's not strong enough to do so himself. She has conflicting interests in that she wants him to grow and leave, but at the same time, she doesn't want him to leave her alone since they are the only family they've got. And thanks to the Japanese stereotype of misinterpreting everything the opposite sex throws at you, they are seen as a couple rather than a team.

Fireminer · 2013-11-16, 04:30

She is just too possessive and paranoid. Heck, I might even imagine a scenario of her gravely injured and made Ichika married Houki before she died, in fear of no one would protect him.

Actually, that is not a bad idea!

Hey, having this weird idea of Stockholm Syndrome: Basically one of Ichika's kidnapper changed his mind and saved him, then ran away.

Posibility of a crossover with Harvest Moon? I always dream to write about a farmer, just like my father does.

ZeroXSEED · 2013-11-16, 04:32

The new chapter is excellent

The scene with bullet dancing is exceedingly funnier, my sister is rolling on the floor laughing. The match with Lingyin is incredibly intense too.

And the scene with Lingyin is both fun and sweet, this is the best chapter as of yet. Thank you very much, sir!

Tempest35 · 2013-11-16, 04:59

I found some stuff with it so I'll go back over it tomorrow and update the DOCS with the newer version.

Anything else you think should be added?

2013-11-16, 01:43	Link #48421
StratoSpear Titans Test Team Pilot Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: The Elysium	Given Athena's setting, it's only fitting that I have Arrival as the climax/endgame music. And I've been updating my chapters in my Google Drive, just in case. I've decided to go with 7 long chapters, each made up of 10 parts. The 7 long chapters make up 1 arc, and my projection is for Athena to have 3 arcs, each revolving around a certain character: Spoiler for Arcs: 1st Arc - Athena (Tsurugi) 2nd Arc - Falken (Kirin) 3rd/Final Arc - White Elf (White Elf) __________________ "You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album. ...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

2013-11-16, 01:58	Link #48423
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	I tend to avoid talking about people with special needs. It's an inherently sensitive issue, but I deal with them on daily basis so I understood them well. Originally though, the Yuuki twins in the TLR Stratos has such issue because of unknown (alien) disease. Riko is left with barely functional leg after recovery. __________________

2013-11-16, 02:15	Link #48425
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	First of all, when write something about things that close to reality, write from their perspective, not yours. If you want to write someone blind, then cover your eyes for hours to no end. If you want to write someone with paralyzed leg, try to use wheelchair for entire day. Put that in your writing and you'll see how this is not an enjoyable experience. I write a fanfic for fun, and no way I'll taint that with my own turmoil. As of Ichika's foolishness, his emotional outburst during Laura's fight is stupid beyond reasoning. __________________

2013-11-16, 02:40	Link #48429
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	I don't remember Houki has fire control power citation? __________________

2013-11-16, 03:30	Link #48432
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	... In that case, you probably can't pull it off without resorting to it since we have absolutely no idea what she was doing prior. Ugh, I'm trying to hurry and finish this revision as well... Expanding some scenes as Zero requested, mainly the end, the fight with Rin, and the scene of Rin with both Ichikas in her room. Oh yeah, does Icchan do the whole 'massage' deal too? Or does she have another special 'talent'? Just thinking of a 'special chapter' to have the family take Chifuyu's birthday off and the younger two decide to pamper Oneechan a bit. Nothing to much - it's mostly for the feels. ... mostly. __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."

2013-11-16, 01:46	Link #48422
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Have anyone thinking about writing about a paralyzed patient?

2013-11-16, 02:06	Link #48424
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Don't know why, but seeing so many people of my family got themself sick kind of encourage me to write something like that. And the idea of Prof. Ichika Orimura is still valid... Also, what is the most foolist thing that Ichika has ever done? No related to harem.

2013-11-16, 02:22	Link #48426
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Pss... Guess that you're right. And damn, I couldn't write anything for day. The time between Fall and Winter is so unpleasant in Vietnam. ... That give me a new idea: What if we combine Rin's Impact Cannon, plus Houki's fire and Tate's ice. A tornado, perharp?

2013-11-16, 02:39	Link #48428
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Chaos born Harmony, my friend. Just like what awaited us after every conflict.

2013-11-16, 02:49	Link #48430
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	My upgrade for her: Akatsubaki Fusichou (phoenix). A game breaker in the least. Imagine Gundam Phenex in IS form.

2013-11-16, 03:44	Link #48433
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Acupunture? Hmm... I wonder what kind of wine would suit Chifuyu?

2013-11-16, 03:48	Link #48434
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Icchan and massage huh? Give and take. Initially, Ikkun is the one getting it after got his body battered down from Chifuyu's training (I need to write the montage, when I can). After he recovered, he offer to do it for her as repayment. Chifuyu got herself drunk trying to forget the scene (two of them actually) __________________

2013-11-16, 04:10	Link #48435
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	Have been thinking: Outside of the fact that Ichika and Chifuyu is perfect together, are there any reason why this pairing has been attracting lots of attention these days? The anime?

2013-11-16, 04:12	Link #48436
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	Perfect together in what way? In theory, they might be nice and hot. And the fans wanted their waifu hot AND badass. Even I can admit that. In practice, their relationship is self destructive. __________________

2013-11-16, 04:30	Link #48438
Fireminer Lumine Passio Author Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Hanoi, Vietnam Age: 18	She is just too possessive and paranoid. Heck, I might even imagine a scenario of her gravely injured and made Ichika married Houki before she died, in fear of no one would protect him. Actually, that is not a bad idea! Hey, having this weird idea of Stockholm Syndrome: Basically one of Ichika's kidnapper changed his mind and saved him, then ran away. Posibility of a crossover with Harvest Moon? I always dream to write about a farmer, just like my father does.

2013-11-16, 04:32	Link #48439
ZeroXSEED I am no one Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Inside your head	The new chapter is excellent The scene with bullet dancing is exceedingly funnier, my sister is rolling on the floor laughing. The match with Lingyin is incredibly intense too. And the scene with Lingyin is both fun and sweet, this is the best chapter as of yet. Thank you very much, sir! __________________

2013-11-16, 04:59	Link #48440
Tempest35 Awe of She Author Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Orlando	I found some stuff with it so I'll go back over it tomorrow and update the DOCS with the newer version. Anything else you think should be added? __________________ "Focus entirely on me, you ordinary soldier."