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I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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2013-11-22, 09:26 | Link #48625 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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The second Quote? That is Ichika. Between him, Dan, and Lingyin's sistuation no wonder Ichika is wary of adults (with few exceptions). Before they knew it, Dan end up in Europe participating in Gunpla championship.
Also, you had to define full drama. Even silly things can be engaging if brought properly, it doesn't always need to be rapepillageburn and it's equivalent.
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2013-11-22, 09:40 | Link #48626 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 17
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"Ichika, what happened? Who made you like this?" Chifuyu frantically asked her crying little brother. (Sob) "Chifuyu-nee, some kid at school said that I couldn't be a hero, and then we fought." (Sob) To reaping the dream of a little kid is even worse than to kill them. "Shh... Don't cry, little brother! A hero is a person who shouldered the weight of this world on his shoulder, the man who protect his beloved, and yet still stand tall with it." "Chifuyu-nee... Do you think that I will be a hero?" "I'm sure that you will be a fine hero! Now go and play with your friends!" As Chifuyu watching Ichika running and shouting to Madoka plus Houki about how would him protect both of them, a small smile creeped through her face. And Tabane's, her best friend. "They grow up so fast, huh Chifuyu? Look, they have already reach a sharing agreement!" She means Houki and Madoka both hugging Ichika, which Chifuyu has to admit, is quite cute. "I know!" ... Too bad that the Sharing Agreement didn't last long. |
2013-11-22, 10:56 | Link #48633 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 17
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We have Child Ichika, Mature Ichika, Female Ichika, Badass Ichika, Romantic Ichika,...
So what we don't got? Lion Ichika? Damn! Too much Saber! Say, what if all these thing is just a dream? Ichika is just a near-death kid, chained to his bed and thinking this as a mean to delusion him? And in the last moment to obilvation, he realized that life itself is a dream. A Nightmare or the Opposite, it's yourself. |
2013-11-22, 11:01 | Link #48634 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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Sure, go with it.
Meanwhile I'm deluding myself believing that this is just an extended nightmare, the real me is reading a perfectly written light novel with likeable characters and engaging plot. Or is it? Miner, just in case you wonder why I react just like that, that exact same plot you propose appear in gunpla thread of all things. I just wonder why people keep trying to make Orimura more miserable than they are already.
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2013-11-22, 11:06 | Link #48635 |
Awe of She
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Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Orlando
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Hnnn, Chifuyu as Ichika's actual mother...? ... *beat*
... I hate my brain sometimes... Before that, her role in IS would be either reduced, or the timeline has to be altered if she's to do all that stuff and still give birth to him. And also, is 'Daddy' going to be around, or will she raise him as a single mother? Things I must know before I re-write virtually her entire story... Giving birth to Ichika would be the reason she'd retire - wanting to devote everything to raising him (she is like that). She *has* to learn to cook, do laundry, all of that. The Shinomono can help with that. She'll try to keep a relatively private life but you know how the paparazzi are. She can even have a bad run-in with one of them and she flips out, nearly killing the guy (either partial IS summon or highheel to face) for spooking Ichika so much he runs into traffic. A baby sitter she will need... and this is where the fun can begin... XD Houki can be his baby-sitter for the longest time.
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2013-11-22, 11:18 | Link #48636 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 17
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Weird... Maybe I've got a counterpart on another part of this world?
Have you guys read How the Steel Was Tempered (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_the..._Was_Tempered)? My favorite book and the guideline to generations of Vietnamese youth in our War. The character has got pretty much every type of disaster upon him. And yet he still managed to come out as the victory challenger to Fate. And that's how I want every of my character to be. You could also say that I was influenced by Marxim Gorky and Lev Tonstoi. Beside, Ichika's father, according to that scenario of mine, were an aircraft scientist, mentor to Tabane and died in a mysterious accident - Tabane picked Chifuyu for her is an Ace fighter pilot. |
2013-11-22, 11:28 | Link #48637 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
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That's alright, just remember that there are limits.
I'll reiterate someone in SB: "If you want to read dark, read Ai-Ren, heavy drama, light in the end of tunnel. Instead, many fanfic writer want eveyrthing they encounter dark and edgy as if they're the second coming of Gen Urobuchi or Yoshiyuki Tomino" Your ability to write decide how far you can push things to hell before the readers lost their sympathy because they can't simply see a satisfying conclusion. While that's not my cup of cake, I don't think the concept itself is bad, it's the execution that need to be carefully done.
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2013-11-22, 12:20 | Link #48639 |
Awe of She
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Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Orlando
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I know he's gone but...
Having 'every character' be from the same mold, or go through the same trials will get boring really quick. 'Dark and Edgy' certainly does not make for automatic 'compelling story-telling'. Experimentation and practice - the only sure-fire way to get better. Now then... To finish up compiling those three parts... How many of you have Gmail accounts? I just need to know if you have one since I'll post this up on GoogleDocs and have you guys take a look at it/make comments.
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2013-11-22, 12:27 | Link #48640 | ||
Fear the Spear
Join Date: Oct 2013
Location: Osaka Castle
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BTW, more ideas for KR/IS xover, again: Quote:
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