Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Laith]

Originally Posted by Satashi

@thread: any other comments on this part before I start on the next?

...Maybe that i hate you because you upload while I am in school?

As for the chapter itself well, i actually expected that (oh the drama...) and while many of the others before me said that they expected a good ending, a happy ending whatever, i hope for the bad end (like JC and Temp.)

...yah guess thats all, everyone had said what could be said... oh silly me for having a education.

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Allquall

Forgive me, I'm horrible with writing comments, so feel free to toss whatever.

Frankly, Syn’s in a situation where there is no “kiss and make-up” kind of quick fix. She cashed in her V-card to someone she trusted emotionally as well as physically.

I don't think Syn was a virgin when she slept with Vivio.

Originally Posted by Allquall

I really appreciate the much more realistic response from Syn (though the situation is a bit on the unrealistic side for the majority of people),but I’m inclined to be suspicious as to where you are heading with this. My selfish hope is that you go deep with the story (no pun intended) and craft the remainder of the tale as a conscious struggle of decisions and consequences between the two as they rebuild the shattered trust and renegotiate their relationship, but that’s not a dish everyone enjoys. However, a quick sack-fix would ruin the set-up; sex is not a magical roll of relationship duct tape.

I have to say that I fully agree with this entire paragraph, particularly this part: My selfish hope is that you go deep with the story (no pun intended) and craft the remainder of the tale as a conscious struggle of decisions and consequences between the two as they rebuild the shattered trust and renegotiate their relationship. Probably my previous comments highlighted this, but I'd love to see them deal with these issues and slowly work forward towards some kind of resolution (preferably happy; I admit it, I hate tragic endings), giving them the chance to grow and connect as people.

And I have to agree with this, too: However, a quick sack-fix would ruin the set-up; sex is not a magical roll of relationship duct tape. Not only is that extremely true in and of itself, but sex is actually the arena in which they're having the problem. Heck, the whole reason the sex with Syn was good for Vivio was because of the level of intimacy and trust she'd established with her; that would have to be repaired first.

[Black_Wolf]

Originally Posted by Satashi

@thread: any other comments on this part before I start on the next?

*Black_Wolf crawls out the woodwork to comment on this one*

First things first, what we all knew was coming came. Syn would find out about Vivio's occupation, we just didn't know how. There was always going to be a 99% chance she was going to go nuts, besides on the offchance its the other 1% and she goes "ok your in the adult entertainment industry, what do you want for dinner?" it wouldn't be realistic and well, that would pretty much end the story dead.

Second. so far Satashi, things have generally been as realistic as possible. If i was out looking for a partner, and i worked in the adult industry, i sure as hell wouldn't reveal it straight away. However even once say i got into the relationship, i would still expect the partner involved to be mad when i got around to telling them, who wouldn't?

As for my take on the whole dilemma thus far.

Adult entertainment may be Vivio's career, but even if its sex without the emotion, and its under the pretense of "work" being separate from "social" life. Sex is still considered an intimate act. How can it *not* be considered intimate? and yet Syn is "sharing" her g/f with other people for sexual activities. How would you feel if a person you were dating turned round and said they had had sex with multiple people while they were dating you regardless of the circumstances? i for one would be absolutely devastated. But for the person working in the adult industry, what dilemma do they face, honesty up front or risk waiting? its a tough call.

As for my take on what happens now.

Whichever way i look at this, It's a relationship breaker. So if i follow through my previous arguments i make it sound impossible for an adult film star to have a successful relationship. heh, and i've got no answer to that one.

In any event: Vivio is broken, she felt confident Syn would understand, and surprise surprise it backfired. She hasn't experienced anything like this before, she's come to know theres more to sex than just the act, that when theres full fledged emotion involved, it makes it the ultimate form of intimacy. That's now been taken away from her because her profession has pushed Syn away in............ disgust? would that be the best word to use?

Syn is going to be confused as anything. Her g/f, the reserved beautiful girl who rarely shows anything and gets embarrassed easily....... gets paid to be filmed doing something she considers should probably be reserved for her and her alone. Shes going to feel betrayed and dejected. Add to this the fact that their first session of lovemaking was in fact Syn's first time, you've got a *very* deep emotional scar there if Syn follows her idea of being "betrayed". Her first time probably meant the world to her and almost nothing to her partner, at least in her eyes at this point of time.

One way i see this, reality check, i can't see them getting back together. I feel like Syn couldn't look at Vivio the same way again, like other people have touched her g/f while they were in a relationship, so intimately, what does that make her to Vivio? Was she anything to begin with? if she was important, would she want to go back to Vivio?

Where this story goes from here relies heavily on Syn, Vivio's told her what she does.........can she accept it? as i go back to my previous statement, thats what partners of adult film entertainers have to do i would guess.

But one more point i think is important, and sticking with the whole mathematical reasoning made by posters before me.

Porn =/= Love Making

Porn is for show. For other People to watch.
Making love is an act between two people physically showing their emotions.
I have a feeling that difference might make an important part in how this story plays out.


*Returns to lurkdom after typing a monster response >.>*



EDIT:

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

I don't think Syn was a virgin when she slept with Vivio.

"I promised you a massage, you pervert." Vivio popped Syn on the head lightly. "I'm not going to seduce you on our first night as dating..."

"Too bad."

"You're a virgin aren't you?"

"...Yes." Syn reached backwards and was rewarded with a pillow from the silent request.

Part 13-20 compiled of the story. Its there. ^^

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Gespenst

Ah, I see. I too thought that Keroko was female (there was a Girl!Keroko in Saved by the Bell... and other's that I've forgotten). Also Keroko sounds like it should be a girls name.

The name was created years ago, when my knowledge of Japanese was non-existent. So even though it is a name that technically can be spelled in Japanese (けろこ I believe) it was never meant as a Japanese name.

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

This part genuinely surprised me; I didn't realize that Syn was capable of that kind of sensitivity...

...

...no, that's not quite it. I didn't realize that Syn was capable of articulating that kind of sensitivity. I didn't see that coming at all. It certainly defuses the worry over a "you do what for a living?" fight--someone capable of understanding Vivio to that extent probably isn't going to jump down her throat over something like that, especially if Syn's been as perceptive about what Vivio is doing as she apparently has been (another thing I didn't expect).

But Vi'd still better fess up before you get to the lemon scene...

Unlike what her rough personality can portray, Syn is actually the best person to articulate her sensitivity. This is because when people think of something to say, they also start thinking how to say it. They cut words and add other before the words exit their mouths. Syn consciously skips this step and puts a far more direct connection between her mind and her mouth, skipping the thinking of how to say it step entirely.

Basically, she doesn't think what to say, she says what she thinks. It makes her words carry all the more meaning, which -as the last chapter shows- is both a good and a bad thing.

It also should be emphasized that skipping the thinking part is a conscious action. Syn can think of how to say the things she does, she just generally doesn't.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.28:

-snip-

Well now, what to say? It's hard to say this came as a surprise, considering everything had been going so smoothly up until now, finishing it with an 'I don't care' as sweet as it would have been, just would have felt... empty and lacking. That, and we all know it ain't Satashi unless it has some drama, especially with a subject that just begs for some rejection drama.

But still, what to say? I can honestly say that the question of 'how would Syn react to a girlfriend in the adult industry' has plagued me ever since Vivio first began hiding her chosen profession from Syn. It made me wonder, regardless of how the Syn in this current fic would respond, how would my Syn, the girl I created, respond to such a situation?

I still haven't found the answer to this question.

Oh sure, as her creator I can just wave my hand and say 'she's cool with it' and be done with it. In fact, it would be really easy to do that. However, then I would be... how to put this? I'd be forcing a progression on Syn that I wouldn't have thought through. If I make Syn cool with the idea, why do I make her cool with the idea? Has she encountered it before? Does she know people like that? A lot of other questions, ones that I never asked, need answering before I can just say 'yes' and even then I have find a way to play the card believably.

While a part of me just wants to handwave it and say its okay, another part fully agrees with Satashi. Syn hates being used, and right now, Syn has every right to feel used. She opened her heart to Vivio, made her desire clear, and yet she was put in the cold again and again, and then after she finally thought she had made it, she finds out that the act she thought would bind them is something Vivio does as a living.

Why did Vivio hide it until then? Why did Vivio make her wait if it was just business as usual for her? How true were the words she spoke? How true were her actions?

Combine this with Syn's natural stubbornness, and I think there are two long, cold and lonely roads ahead. And those roads won't merge with just a kiss and a smile.

As for what follows... I'm curious towards Syn's train of thought more then Vivio's. For Vivio, we can all predict what is going on in her head right now. After all, this was one of two possible actions that the story had been moving forward to, and Vivio's worst nightmare. Syn, however, we have seen relatively little of, both in her life as well as in her feelings for Vivio. How did this impact affect her? How does she feel after what she perceives as having her heart toyed with as an aside between jobs?

I'm curious towards this.

[Gespenst]

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

I don't think Syn was a virgin when she slept with Vivio.

No, no she was...

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

I have to say that I fully agree with this entire paragraph, particularly this part: My selfish hope is that you go deep with the story (no pun intended) and craft the remainder of the tale as a conscious struggle of decisions and consequences between the two as they rebuild the shattered trust and renegotiate their relationship. Probably my previous comments highlighted this, but I'd love to see them deal with these issues and slowly work forward towards some kind of resolution (preferably happy; I admit it, I hate tragic endings), giving them the chance to grow and connect as people.

Why do you two have to be so reasonable... and right?

That does sound best.

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

Adult entertainment may be Vivio's career, but even if its sex without the emotion, and its under the pretense of "work" being separate from "social" life. Sex is still considered an intimate act. How can it *not* be considered intimate?

Have you ever seen the film Love Actually? Two of the characters are porn actors (or were they just regular actors in a sex scene?) Either way their scenes have them simulating sexual acts so that the crew can perform lighting checks and so on. During this time they have fairly mundane conversations... it's one of the least intimate and most sexless scenes I've ever seen in any film. Then again porn is usually pretty unsexy tbh

I imagine it'd be something like that.

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

In any event: Vivio is broken, she felt confident Syn would understand, and surprise surprise it backfired. She hasn't experienced anything like this before, she's come to know theres more to sex than just the act, that when theres full fledged emotion involved, it makes it the ultimate form of intimacy. That's now been taken away from her because her profession has pushed Syn away in............ disgust? would that be the best word to use?

The way that Vivio was deals with the sex makes me wonder... is she dealing with it entirely healthy? It makes me wonder if she's really feeling bad about the whole thing and has just bee pretending that everything is alright for her entire career.

Just to add more fuel to the "Vivio is broken" pile.

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

Her first time probably meant the world to her and almost nothing to her partner, at least in her eyes at this point of time.

To Vivio too I think, isn't this the first time she's actually enjoyed sex? The first time she's done it with someone she loves?

Everyone's broken. TT____TT

[Evangelion Xgouki]

And the polls are now closed :3

The final count for Divided Destiny:

A)
B) II
C) IIII

What has Eden been up to these months after the evacuation?

[Satashi]

@ thread:So much discussion, and so much to say to everyone. Although I can't give my input, as my input is the story ><, I do want to say something to everyone here:

I'm extremely flattered everyone has such varied and wide views on what's happening and how it could play out. Even though everyone knew this was coming, when it finally hit, it was still enough to have such different views.

In all, I'm literally speechless as to the discussion on it. I'm honored to have people like the ones here read my stories. I hope I can finish this one in a way that would be satisfactory to the ones who thought about it so much.

I'll try my best.

EDIT: Random fact: PS!Vivio is a 25,000 words long @_@ wow, when did that happen?

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Black_Wolf

*big snip*


Part 13-20 compiled of the story. Its there. ^^

Aw, crap, I missed that line completely. I was just judging by her behavior, which was about as unvirginal as possible (though it does explain why she sucks at kissing...insufficient practice), coming on strong at every opportunity, trying to...well, let's be honest: she was pretty much trying to get laid from the first date.

Hmmm...that might be some interesting character drama there. Could part of why Syn is so angry at Vivio's alleged "cheating" and "whoredom" be a bit of self-directed guilt at her own behavior? After all, she's the one who's been attempting to insert more and more sexuality into the relationship at every opportunity while Vivio was trying to slow things down and create an emotional connection--and now Syn's face-to-face with just how cheap and tawdry sex by itself can be.

[TerranReaper]

Spoiler for Chapter 5:

Chapter 5

“Now what did I say about giving other people choices, Virgil? I thought I ordered you to retrieve the Mid-Childans, not give them choices on whether they want to come with us or not,” said Fleet Admiral Jacques Allègre said. Virgil had been called to him ever since he ordered a retreat back to Earth. Jacques opened a holo COM and replayed back the battle. He stroked his chin, paused the replay and pointed at a pink-haired girl receiving orders from a hooded guy.

“Who is this hooded man and that pink-haired girl? I’m familiar with the girl’s face but not the hooded one,” said Jacques. Terran battles were always recorded by their star ships for future references. Virgil looked closely and shrugged. “I know the girl is Signum but for that man…I’m not sure if I’m familiar or not because his face is covered. But wait…what is that book he’s holding in his hand?”

Virgil touched the COM and zoomed in closer. “Hmm…this is most interesting. If I didn’t know better, that seems like the Book of Darkness. Doesn’t that belong to a certain someone named Hayate Yagami?” asked Virgil. Jacques took out his data pad and scrolled through the history facts uncovered by Terran archaeologists in the form of data crystals 100 years ago on Mid-Childa. He nodded and kept the data pad. “So it seems. What Hayate has now came with the Book of Darkness and if anyone else controls the Book of Darkness, the Wolkenritters, the powers and all that came with the book will have to submit to the new owner’s will. I think we’ve just uncovered another evil scheme by the Belkans.”

“They’re taking Hayate’s book so that they could control what Hayate has. As for Hayate…she won’t know what hit her. The Wolkenritters are one thing but should the enemy uncover the true use of that book…we must be prepared.” Jacques said grimly. He closed the COM and sat on his chair. “Tell me, Virgil, what did your ancestor Caro Ru Lushe taught your family in terms of magic? I, for once, would like to know if you mixed-bloods can do magic.”

Mixed-bloods are those people whose ancestors originate from Mid-Childa and migrated to Earth ever since the destruction of the Mid-Childan colony. Those listed as missing were alive and has lived on Earth ever since. They bred with the non-magical Terrans and produced off springs that either has no magic capabilities, some or maybe full. It’s a matter of genetic variation. A little insight to Caro’s history on Earth: She was married to a military officer from Hawaii 3 days before the Belkans attacked Earth. Life was hard but they managed to live a satisfying enough life. After she gave birth to her first child, she joined the military in the battle against the Belkans. Caro fought in many campaigns and earned many awards. She was a military hero. However, 5 years into the war and she was critically hurt during Operation Thunderbolt when the Terrans attempted to drive the Belkans away from Canada. Under her request, she was put to cryo sleep to halt her injuries from getting worse since the wounds inflicted from her were too hard to heal at that time and…she didn’t want to die. She was thawed out last year and underwent emergency operations to fix her up. She was still unconscious though, recovering inside a tube of healing liquid. According to the doctors, Caro will wake up in about one month.

Virgil looked at the Fleet Admiral and shrugged. “I’m not sure if I can do magic but I’m sure that some mixed-bloods do have magic. Why not introduce them to combat?” asked Virgil. Jacques shook his head and leaned back on his chair. “Some people prefer to hide and stay safe in their little havens. Not all are like that. We can’t force them so we might as well recruit ordinary Terrans,” he said with a smile. “Toran,” Jacques called out to his AI. A hologram of a male AI dressed in thick marine armor appeared on Jacques’s desk. “Can I help you with anything sir?” asked the AI in a hollow voice. “Yes, I would like you to sum up today’s battle and give me the best recommendation for the next course of action,” said Jacques while tugging his moustache. Toran paused for three seconds and a holo note appeared in front of Jacques.

“Today’s objective was not met but the enemies were hit hard. However, according to what I analyzed from the entire mission recording from the star ship Gilgamesh, I found at least one group of soldiers stranded somewhere in the city while attempting to retrieve Hayate. They got her but she refused to leave,” said Toran while zooming in at a certain section of the Belkan city. Virgil saw Hayate there, ordering Rein to leave for some reason. The time was 8 p.m., exactly the time when he ordered a retreat.

“They can’t survive long with so many enemies around them. Unless they strip their battle armor and act normal, they can’t survive. Toran, next best course of action,” said Jacques. “We can’t launch another attack for now. The best time to launch a second offense is when the city is at its weakest. That is when most of the military are resting. Belkans have a decree of having their military stay awake for certain number of days before letting them rest. I estimate that the next resting cycle will approach in 5 days,” said Toran.

Virgil scratched his head. “If the entire military hits the sacks, who’s gonna defend the city?” he asked. “Commander Virgil, they have three towers there to provide protection by surrounding the city with a magic shield that is impenetrable to most attacks, including a direct fusion bomb strike. It is not without weakness though. Anyone tunneling underground can reach into the city but they have deep scanners which detect subterranean units. Still, with current Terran military numbers…it should be sufficient enough to launch a second strike. It would be fun to detonate a nuke within the protective shields though,” said Toran amusingly.

“Innocent people are walking the streets. We can’t do that,” said Jacques sternly. He looked at his data pad and sighed. “If the shields are really up, then there is no way we can send in the Titan battle mechs. I guess we have to use Myrmidon battle tanks for now. Toran, order all war factories around the world to focus more on producing vehicles, APCs included. We’re gonna strike the Belkans when they are in Dream Land and this time, I want the Mid-Childans in our hands. You understand me, Virgil?”

Virgil nodded and saluted. “Yes sir,” he said. As soon as Virgil left, Jacques opened his holo COM again and typed in a few things before closing it. “Why are you so desperate to liberate the Mid-Childans?” asked Toran. The Fleet Admiral combed back his hair and smoked on his grandfather’s antique pipe. He puffed on it and examined the smoke pattern. “If we don’t, the Belkans might continue to slander and brain-wash the Mid-Childans, inciting them to hate us and attack us. One particular one is Nanoha Takamachi. She is strong and so is her friend Fate.T.Harlaown. They are formidable and somewhat…a bit naïve since they think the Belkans are so righteous. My Aunt Mandy’s foot. I still can’t fathom why the Belkans attacked us 490 years ago. Those dipsticks came out of nowhere and attacked us without even bothering to give an explanation,” said Jacques. Toran was silent. “Tell me, Toran, does the idea of magical girl seem far-fetched to you? Sure we’ve seen plenty of that in animes and I enjoy watching them and their misadventures but how is it possible that magic exist? It defies the Laws of Nature,” Jacques said.

“Sir, there are some things that are unknown to us. At first it may seem that it is against what we believe and know but once we see it for ourselves, we always ask ourselves that why didn’t we thought about it in the first place. Why do you ask?” Toran asked in a puzzled tone. “Nothing, the topic just came to my mind all of a sudden. Toran, I need my rest and I want no visitors. Wake me up in six hours and give temporary command of the military to Lieutenant General Sakura Tsukamoto for the next cycle,” said Jacques as he went to lie down on his office’s couch. Toran nodded and winked out.

Agito watched anxiously as Virgil came down the corridor. “So how did it go, Virgil? Did the Fleet Admiral ordered you to be demoted?” she asked in a worried voice. Virgil shook his head. “No, he just told me not to repeat the mistake again,” said Virgil. He entered his office and sat on his chair, looked through some paperwork before leaning back. Agito gave him his cup of coffee. Virgil took the cup and drained the coffee. “Agito, what do you have for me today?” asked Virgil. She handed him a holo pad. “It’s the test result for Caro Ru Lushe. Good news for you, it seems like she’ll be awake in 5 days time,” Agito said with a smile.

Agito was also one of missing ones who migrated to Earth since she lost Signum. Agito has served under many military top brasses in the Terran army for many centuries and she never grew tired of it. She served from being a tea maid and entertainer to Battle Ship Navigations Officer and Frontline Commander. For someone that small, she was talented and even she never knew she had it in her. Agito picked to serve Virgil mainly because he was talented and maybe because he was good-looking as well. Okay, maybe she was attracted to Virgil…but not to the extent of love. His demeanor reminded her of Zest, who was killed by Signum in Regius Gaiz’s office. She won’t allow Virgil to die…he is too nice to be dead.

Virgil nodded and smiled. “That is all I need to know. I never knew my family since I was adopted by another family after my parents died during a Belkan attack. I traced my origins and found out about my connection with Caro. Maybe she can be my new mother,” he said smilingly. Agito liked it when he smiled, it made him look charming. “Still wanna be mama’s boy eh,” said Agito. “I thought you already have a foster mother,” she continued. Virgil shrugged and combed back his hair. The silver lining on his hair was the result of a genetic mutation and Virgil thinks it doesn’t look very good on him. Many times he had tried to dye his hair according to the original brown of his hair but the silver linings can’t be covered as the dye wouldn’t stick to it.

“I do have a foster mother but the feeling of being with someone related to you is different. Don’t you agree?” he asked. Agito nodded and sat down on his desk. He turned his chair around to face the window of his office. It showed the view of the sun setting over the Nevada desert. Not really beautiful but relaxing to look at. “So, how do you find Earth ever since you migrated here?” asked Virgil. Agito put a finger on her chin and tapped it. “Not very different from Mid-Childa and you people look no different from the Mid-Childans.”

Virgil laughed. “We are of the same species but live in different dimensions, different society structure and different lives. Mid-Childans are very advanced but now…I think we Terrans have surpassed them. Maybe. Though we don’t do magic, we certainly have firepower. I don’t cherish the thought of one Homo Sapien living on Earth fighting the other Homo Sapien living on Mid-Childa,” Virgil said with a laugh. Agito didn’t get what he meant.

Suddenly, Agito thought she saw Virgil blush for some reason. “Are you feeling okay, Virgil? Your face is red,” said Agito. Virgil looked out the window and didn’t want to look at Agito. “Agito, do you think it’s a good idea if…I like…Nanoha?” asked Virgil. Agito was taken aback by that confession. She felt like she hated Nanoha on the spot. Agito quickly declined. “You barely knew her and now you wanna hit on her?! Virgil, there is a chance she will refuse you because she has Fate by her side and they are in love already. Besides, Nanoha has Yuuno Scrya as her possible male lover,” said Agito in an agitated voice.

“Speaking of Scrya, Agito, he died of old age. As for Fate…well, maybe you’re right. Nanoha loves Fate and she won’t leave her side. Oh well, I guess I’ll have to find another one to be my future bride,” Virgil said calmly. Agito sighed in relief. She flew to his shoulder and sat on it, watching the sun set over the horizon.

“Admiral Jacques, wake up! We have an emergency call from Martian Capital Defense Initiative!” someone yelled outside his office. Jacques looked at the clock on his wall and saw that it was 9 p.m. sharp. He has slept exactly six hours. “Come in,” he said while sitting up. In came a young woman in blue military uniform: a standard uniform for the Special Marine Forces. She saluted. “Sir, General Alexander Kerensky has asked for your immediate attention,” said the woman. “What is it? Have the Belkans attacked Mars?” asked a nervous Jacques. He has every reason to be nervous because something important is on Mars that kept Earth safe from Belkan attacks.

“Yes sir. They’re aiming for the fusion reactors that powered Earth’s orbital cannons. If the reactors are destroyed, our Magnetic Accelerator Cannons will be nothing more than space junk. If that happens, the Belkans will move in on Earth. They have begun the assault 10 minutes ago and the Martian defense line is at the verge of falling. I dunno what they have that made them so powerful,” said the woman.

Earth’s MAC cannons were the only things keeping the Belkan ships at bay. They fired a 4000 ton uranium core slug at the speed of 3/10 the speed of light. Once on impact, they can break through the magical barrier surrounding the Belkan ships and puncture the ships from the tip of the nose to the tail. Even for ships with the Saint’s Cradle design, a salvo of these shots can shatter it. If the cannons fall, Earth is open to an invasion.

“They know where the power source is. Woman, go alert my men! We’re going to Mars now!” yelled Jacques. The woman saluted and ran out of the office. “Well then, Saint King Georg, if you think we’ll fall that easily, you’re very much mistaken.”

He put on his armor and exited his office.

This chapter is all about the background history. Anyway, here's a love question. Should Virgil try to win Nanoha's heart?
A)Yes
B)No

[Krinen]

Originally Posted by Satashi

@ thread:So much discussion, and so much to say to everyone. Although I can't give my input, as my input is the story ><, I do want to say something to everyone here:

I'm extremely flattered everyone has such varied and wide views on what's happening and how it could play out. Even though everyone knew this was coming, when it finally hit, it was still enough to have such different views.

In all, I'm literally speechless as to the discussion on it. I'm honored to have people like the ones here read my stories. I hope I can finish this one in a way that would be satisfactory to the ones who thought about it so much.

I'll try my best.

EDIT: Random fact: PS!Vivio is a 25,000 words long @_@ wow, when did that happen?

Though I wish I could give some hundred-word review, going into the deeper aspects of the story... Seeing as that's already covered, I can only show my enthusiasm in this way;

Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine, Twenty-nine!

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.28:

~**~

'Okay... It's almost time.' Vivio sniffed heavily and retreated to her bedroom to grab a tissue from the steadily depleting box. As an afterthought she went to her bathroom and struggled with the child protection cap on her bottle of medicine. 'Stupid little...there.' The cap was finally pried off and two pills were taken with a gulp of water. 'Maybe I should have listen to Allquall...'The thought was pushed aside and the girl went back into the living room to go over everything.

'Okay... I have my laptop ready to show her my web page... A few of my recent magazines.... Maybe a movie would be too much right now...' Vivio rechecked the magazines to make sure they were her best photo shoots. 'I think these will be fine... nothing too bad to shock her until she can accept it.' A deep breath calmed her down a little. ' Everything is ready...Or maybe I should make some tea? We might be talking about this a long time...' The idea was cut off when a knocking came on her door. 'Here goes nothing...' She jogged to the the entrance to her apartment and looked through the peephole, grinning at the sight of Syn crossing her eyes and sticking out her tongue. "Silly girl," She greeted as the door opened.

"That's my line." Syn retorted, giving her girlfriend a quick hug. "What's so important that you wanted me to come here after work before going home? I smell like french fries."

"Yummy." Vivio sniffed her. "Hey, you really do!" She got swatted at as she closed the door. "Anyway, I wanted to talk to you about something."

"Oh?" Syn looked at her and was guided over to the couch, glancing at the adult magazines on the table. "What is it?"

"Well..." She took a breath. "You know how I'm always a little evasive about my job?"

"Yes?" Syn looked at Vivio fully when the tone of the voice meant for her to get serious.

The blond looked at her and reassured herself of their relationship. "The reason is because I was scared that it would scare you off." She was blinked at. "You see... Syn, I'm in the adult entertainment industry." This time Syn looked at her blankly. "Yes, it's what you're thinking."

"You're..." Syn tried to make sure she was getting this right. "In adult entertainment...?"

"Yes." Vivio picked up a magazine and turned to her pages. "Here."

Syn slowly looked down at the magazine, amazed at the nude images of her girlfriend staring her in the face. "You... pose naked?" She asked the obvious, still confused at the sudden information.

"Yes."

"I... see..." A page was turned and the images were scanned. "... God, for a second there I thought you shot pornos."

Vivio almost physically flinched. "Ah... Well..." Syn looked at her. "I... do."

"You do?" The tone of voice went from shocked to unsure. "Like... filmed sex?"

"Yes." Vivio swallowed thickly. Syn looked back down at he magazine, as if to confirm what she was hearing. Once the section was finished, she tossed it on the table and picked up the other one, flipping until she came across her girlfriend again, eyes going wide as the hardcore images were found. "Those were taken about a month ago," Vivio offered.

Syn threw the magazine onto the couch and stood up, pacing while she thought. Several seconds passed by in silence before Syn turned to her again. "You're a porn star." It was a statement but a question at the same time. A meek nod was her reply, making her stop and stare. "You're in porn." Another nod. "You... you fuck people for money." The wording made Vivio wince, but after Syn stared at her for an answer, she finally forced herself to reply.

"Well, it's not really sex, it's more like-"

"You screw people for money!" Syn pointed at the magazines. "And they record you and sell it so people can WATCH you doing it!?"

Vivio tried to think quickly. "It's not like it sounds! I don't.... It's... Hard to explain."

Syn bent over and glared, voice getting louder. "Do you, or do you not, get paid to have sex!?"

Vivio steadied herself under the gaze and swallowed. "Yes." The blue haired girl moved away and threw up her hands. "Syn, listen, I need to explain-"

"What's there to explain!?" Syn turned on her, still amazed. "You.... oh god, When you blew me off because you had work, did you go screw someone!?"

Once again Vivio felt like a deer in the headlights of an oncoming car. "I... I..."

"Did you!?" Syn's voice was almost screaming now. "My first day at my new job, you said you would come see me, what did you do when you didn't show up!?" Vivio's eyes glanced to the earlier tossed magazine before she could help herself and Syn almost screamed out in annoyance. "You promised! you promised me, Vivio! You said you would be there! I waited all day, I worked through my lunch, I looked at everyone who came in the door, and you... you were having sex with some guy! Did you even know him!?"

"I... I don't..."

Syn walked around some more, shaking her head before finally putting both hands on the bar dividing the kitchen. "I hit on you constantly, tried to kiss you, tried to hug you, tried to get intimate with you... and you kept blowing me off. I wanted some way to show you how much I cared for you." Her words were soft now, voice quivering. "The girl who pulled me up when I hit rock bottom... the girl who made me decide to keep making it on my own instead of giving up and moving back in with my mother... I had my things packed, Vivio." She turned and looked at the frozen girl. "I had my clothes in boxes. I... I was going to call her the next day and ask if I could move in... but you gave me hope. You showed me that there were people who cared. That others were struggling too. That... That maybe I could pursue something besides being lonely." She put a hand to her face and stayed silent a moment. "How many?"

"...What?"

"How many times did you cheat on me?"

"I didn't- it's work, I-"

"How many!?" The words were screamed, cutting her off.

"... I don't know."

Syn stood there for a long time, looking down at the carpet. Silence passed over them both until she finally spoke again. "It's over."

"Syn, wait! Let me explain!" Vivio ran over to her but was shrugged off.

"You're nothing but a whore." Syn moved away and opened the door to the apartment. "I never want to see or hear from you ever again." The door closed behind her, leaving Vivio standing there alone. Seconds passed by as she looked at the spot where Syn vanished from her sight before her knees finally buckled and gave under her weight. Falling down, she braced herself on her hands and looked at her floor, gasping as the first tears started to fall.

Oh dear, what an emotional chapter

I never expected that Syn would react like that, although somehow is logical, in a manner of speaking, Vivio cheated Syn, well, I think that Syn also overreacted, it's Vivio's job, things that she has to do

Well, the things are pointing bad now, I hope that this story will have a happy ending

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by TerranReaper

Spoiler for Chapter 5:

Chapter 5

“Now what did I say about giving other people choices, Virgil? I thought I ordered you to retrieve the Mid-Childans, not give them choices on whether they want to come with us or not,” said Fleet Admiral Jacques Allègre said. Virgil had been called to him ever since he ordered a retreat back to Earth. Jacques opened a holo COM and replayed back the battle. He stroked his chin, paused the replay and pointed at a pink-haired girl receiving orders from a hooded guy.

“Who is this hooded man and that pink-haired girl? I’m familiar with the girl’s face but not the hooded one,” said Jacques. Terran battles were always recorded by their star ships for future references. Virgil looked closely and shrugged. “I know the girl is Signum but for that man…I’m not sure if I’m familiar or not because his face is covered. But wait…what is that book he’s holding in his hand?”

Virgil touched the COM and zoomed in closer. “Hmm…this is most interesting. If I didn’t know better, that seems like the Book of Darkness. Doesn’t that belong to a certain someone named Hayate Yagami?” asked Virgil. Jacques took out his data pad and scrolled through the history facts uncovered by Terran archaeologists in the form of data crystals 100 years ago on Mid-Childa. He nodded and kept the data pad. “So it seems. What Hayate has now came with the Book of Darkness and if anyone else controls the Book of Darkness, the Wolkenritters, the powers and all that came with the book will have to submit to the new owner’s will. I think we’ve just uncovered another evil scheme by the Belkans.”

“They’re taking Hayate’s book so that they could control what Hayate has. As for Hayate…she won’t know what hit her. The Wolkenritters are one thing but should the enemy uncover the true use of that book…we must be prepared.” Jacques said grimly. He closed the COM and sat on his chair. “Tell me, Virgil, what did your ancestor Caro Ru Lushe taught your family in terms of magic? I, for once, would like to know if you mixed-bloods can do magic.”

Mixed-bloods are those people whose ancestors originate from Mid-Childa and migrated to Earth ever since the destruction of the Mid-Childan colony. Those listed as missing were alive and has lived on Earth ever since. They bred with the non-magical Terrans and produced off springs that either has no magic capabilities, some or maybe full. It’s a matter of genetic variation. A little insight to Caro’s history on Earth: She was married to a military officer from Hawaii 3 days before the Belkans attacked Earth. Life was hard but they managed to live a satisfying enough life. After she gave birth to her first child, she joined the military in the battle against the Belkans. Caro fought in many campaigns and earned many awards. She was a military hero. However, 5 years into the war and she was critically hurt during Operation Thunderbolt when the Terrans attempted to drive the Belkans away from Canada. Under her request, she was put to cryo sleep to halt her injuries from getting worse since the wounds inflicted from her were too hard to heal at that time and…she didn’t want to die. She was thawed out last year and underwent emergency operations to fix her up. She was still unconscious though, recovering inside a tube of healing liquid. According to the doctors, Caro will wake up in about one month.

Virgil looked at the Fleet Admiral and shrugged. “I’m not sure if I can do magic but I’m sure that some mixed-bloods do have magic. Why not introduce them to combat?” asked Virgil. Jacques shook his head and leaned back on his chair. “Some people prefer to hide and stay safe in their little havens. Not all are like that. We can’t force them so we might as well recruit ordinary Terrans,” he said with a smile. “Toran,” Jacques called out to his AI. A hologram of a male AI dressed in thick marine armor appeared on Jacques’s desk. “Can I help you with anything sir?” asked the AI in a hollow voice. “Yes, I would like you to sum up today’s battle and give me the best recommendation for the next course of action,” said Jacques while tugging his moustache. Toran paused for three seconds and a holo note appeared in front of Jacques.

“Today’s objective was not met but the enemies were hit hard. However, according to what I analyzed from the entire mission recording from the star ship Gilgamesh, I found at least one group of soldiers stranded somewhere in the city while attempting to retrieve Hayate. They got her but she refused to leave,” said Toran while zooming in at a certain section of the Belkan city. Virgil saw Hayate there, ordering Rein to leave for some reason. The time was 8 p.m., exactly the time when he ordered a retreat.

“They can’t survive long with so many enemies around them. Unless they strip their battle armor and act normal, they can’t survive. Toran, next best course of action,” said Jacques. “We can’t launch another attack for now. The best time to launch a second offense is when the city is at its weakest. That is when most of the military are resting. Belkans have a decree of having their military stay awake for certain number of days before letting them rest. I estimate that the next resting cycle will approach in 5 days,” said Toran.

Virgil scratched his head. “If the entire military hits the sacks, who’s gonna defend the city?” he asked. “Commander Virgil, they have three towers there to provide protection by surrounding the city with a magic shield that is impenetrable to most attacks, including a direct fusion bomb strike. It is not without weakness though. Anyone tunneling underground can reach into the city but they have deep scanners which detect subterranean units. Still, with current Terran military numbers…it should be sufficient enough to launch a second strike. It would be fun to detonate a nuke within the protective shields though,” said Toran amusingly.

“Innocent people are walking the streets. We can’t do that,” said Jacques sternly. He looked at his data pad and sighed. “If the shields are really up, then there is no way we can send in the Titan battle mechs. I guess we have to use Myrmidon battle tanks for now. Toran, order all war factories around the world to focus more on producing vehicles, APCs included. We’re gonna strike the Belkans when they are in Dream Land and this time, I want the Mid-Childans in our hands. You understand me, Virgil?”

Virgil nodded and saluted. “Yes sir,” he said. As soon as Virgil left, Jacques opened his holo COM again and typed in a few things before closing it. “Why are you so desperate to liberate the Mid-Childans?” asked Toran. The Fleet Admiral combed back his hair and smoked on his grandfather’s antique pipe. He puffed on it and examined the smoke pattern. “If we don’t, the Belkans might continue to slander and brain-wash the Mid-Childans, inciting them to hate us and attack us. One particular one is Nanoha Takamachi. She is strong and so is her friend Fate.T.Harlaown. They are formidable and somewhat…a bit naïve since they think the Belkans are so righteous. My Aunt Mandy’s foot. I still can’t fathom why the Belkans attacked us 490 years ago. Those dipsticks came out of nowhere and attacked us without even bothering to give an explanation,” said Jacques. Toran was silent. “Tell me, Toran, does the idea of magical girl seem far-fetched to you? Sure we’ve seen plenty of that in animes and I enjoy watching them and their misadventures but how is it possible that magic exist? It defies the Laws of Nature,” Jacques said.

“Sir, there are some things that are unknown to us. At first it may seem that it is against what we believe and know but once we see it for ourselves, we always ask ourselves that why didn’t we thought about it in the first place. Why do you ask?” Toran asked in a puzzled tone. “Nothing, the topic just came to my mind all of a sudden. Toran, I need my rest and I want no visitors. Wake me up in six hours and give temporary command of the military to Lieutenant General Sakura Tsukamoto for the next cycle,” said Jacques as he went to lie down on his office’s couch. Toran nodded and winked out.

Agito watched anxiously as Virgil came down the corridor. “So how did it go, Virgil? Did the Fleet Admiral ordered you to be demoted?” she asked in a worried voice. Virgil shook his head. “No, he just told me not to repeat the mistake again,” said Virgil. He entered his office and sat on his chair, looked through some paperwork before leaning back. Agito gave him his cup of coffee. Virgil took the cup and drained the coffee. “Agito, what do you have for me today?” asked Virgil. She handed him a holo pad. “It’s the test result for Caro Ru Lushe. Good news for you, it seems like she’ll be awake in 5 days time,” Agito said with a smile.

Agito was also one of missing ones who migrated to Earth since she lost Signum. Agito has served under many military top brasses in the Terran army for many centuries and she never grew tired of it. She served from being a tea maid and entertainer to Battle Ship Navigations Officer and Frontline Commander. For someone that small, she was talented and even she never knew she had it in her. Agito picked to serve Virgil mainly because he was talented and maybe because he was good-looking as well. Okay, maybe she was attracted to Virgil…but not to the extent of love. His demeanor reminded her of Zest, who was killed by Signum in Regius Gaiz’s office. She won’t allow Virgil to die…he is too nice to be dead.

Virgil nodded and smiled. “That is all I need to know. I never knew my family since I was adopted by another family after my parents died during a Belkan attack. I traced my origins and found out about my connection with Caro. Maybe she can be my new mother,” he said smilingly. Agito liked it when he smiled, it made him look charming. “Still wanna be mama’s boy eh,” said Agito. “I thought you already have a foster mother,” she continued. Virgil shrugged and combed back his hair. The silver lining on his hair was the result of a genetic mutation and Virgil thinks it doesn’t look very good on him. Many times he had tried to dye his hair according to the original brown of his hair but the silver linings can’t be covered as the dye wouldn’t stick to it.

“I do have a foster mother but the feeling of being with someone related to you is different. Don’t you agree?” he asked. Agito nodded and sat down on his desk. He turned his chair around to face the window of his office. It showed the view of the sun setting over the Nevada desert. Not really beautiful but relaxing to look at. “So, how do you find Earth ever since you migrated here?” asked Virgil. Agito put a finger on her chin and tapped it. “Not very different from Mid-Childa and you people look no different from the Mid-Childans.”

Virgil laughed. “We are of the same species but live in different dimensions, different society structure and different lives. Mid-Childans are very advanced but now…I think we Terrans have surpassed them. Maybe. Though we don’t do magic, we certainly have firepower. I don’t cherish the thought of one Homo Sapien living on Earth fighting the other Homo Sapien living on Mid-Childa,” Virgil said with a laugh. Agito didn’t get what he meant.

Suddenly, Agito thought she saw Virgil blush for some reason. “Are you feeling okay, Virgil? Your face is red,” said Agito. Virgil looked out the window and didn’t want to look at Agito. “Agito, do you think it’s a good idea if…I like…Nanoha?” asked Virgil. Agito was taken aback by that confession. She felt like she hated Nanoha on the spot. Agito quickly declined. “You barely knew her and now you wanna hit on her?! Virgil, there is a chance she will refuse you because she has Fate by her side and they are in love already. Besides, Nanoha has Yuuno Scrya as her possible male lover,” said Agito in an agitated voice.

“Speaking of Scrya, Agito, he died of old age. As for Fate…well, maybe you’re right. Nanoha loves Fate and she won’t leave her side. Oh well, I guess I’ll have to find another one to be my future bride,” Virgil said calmly. Agito sighed in relief. She flew to his shoulder and sat on it, watching the sun set over the horizon.

“Admiral Jacques, wake up! We have an emergency call from Martian Capital Defense Initiative!” someone yelled outside his office. Jacques looked at the clock on his wall and saw that it was 9 p.m. sharp. He has slept exactly six hours. “Come in,” he said while sitting up. In came a young woman in blue military uniform: a standard uniform for the Special Marine Forces. She saluted. “Sir, General Alexander Kerensky has asked for your immediate attention,” said the woman. “What is it? Have the Belkans attacked Mars?” asked a nervous Jacques. He has every reason to be nervous because something important is on Mars that kept Earth safe from Belkan attacks.

“Yes sir. They’re aiming for the fusion reactors that powered Earth’s orbital cannons. If the reactors are destroyed, our Magnetic Accelerator Cannons will be nothing more than space junk. If that happens, the Belkans will move in on Earth. They have begun the assault 10 minutes ago and the Martian defense line is at the verge of falling. I dunno what they have that made them so powerful,” said the woman.

Earth’s MAC cannons were the only things keeping the Belkan ships at bay. They fired a 4000 ton uranium core slug at the speed of 3/10 the speed of light. Once on impact, they can break through the magical barrier surrounding the Belkan ships and puncture the ships from the tip of the nose to the tail. Even for ships with the Saint’s Cradle design, a salvo of these shots can shatter it. If the cannons fall, Earth is open to an invasion.

“They know where the power source is. Woman, go alert my men! We’re going to Mars now!” yelled Jacques. The woman saluted and ran out of the office. “Well then, Saint King Georg, if you think we’ll fall that easily, you’re very much mistaken.”

He put on his armor and exited his office.

This chapter is all about the background history. Anyway, here's a love question. Should Virgil try to win Nanoha's heart?
A)Yes
B)No

B

Spoiler for Virgil:

[TerranReaper]

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

B

Spoiler for Virgil:

Isn't this an interesting looking guy . That is a familiar face if you ask me.

[rustau]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.21:

-snip-

I think I must be the only one that actually feels sorry for Vivio here. In truth, Syn is justified to be as angry as she is; however, I can't help but feel that if she were privy to some of the background information that we are she would have had a far different reaction. And while that seems like an obvious statement, I feel as if I should mention it since there seems to be quite a large bias to one side of this picture...

At first I thought that it was a really cruel way for Syn to find out about Vivio's profession and was going to ship out on the next "reality is harsh and Vivio needs a wake-up call on what is accepatable and not acceptable in a relationship". I thought about it a little more and recalled the prologue: Vivio is very much aware of how inappropriate her profession is, but what she IS proud of is the way she built her life from scratch to something sucessful all on her own (standing on her own two feet was something that Nanoha stressed alot in the series to Vivio). I get the feeling that what Vivio wanted was to share that success with Syn, not as a 'gotta-get-this-load-off-my-chest' but as a 'this is something important to me that I'm proud of creating on my own'. Relationships (lawl or so I am told) are all about sharing moments together - sharing joyous moments, sad moments, moments to be proud of; Vivio is looking to share one of her most important moments and take her budding relationship with Syn to the next level of seriousness.

Oh and hi. =)

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by Laith

Spoiler for The Wolf and the Girl pt 7:

“Alicia, can I ask you one question?” Nanoha was trying to sweep some of the dust in the kitchen. It was trying because she was failing miserably at holding the broom.

“What is it?” Alicia, on the contrary, was drinking a cup of tea. Although her reason was other, Nanoha thought that she was being lazy.

“How did you meet Hayate? Where do you live before coming here? Do you have family?”

“Hey, hey, you said one question Nanoha,” Alicia said smiling. The scare that the wolf had given her was passing slowly thanks to the tea she had and Nanoha´s presence. “I am just answering the first.”

“Awww, why?” Nanoha asked faking sadness.

“Because, you just said one,” Alicia replied smiling.

---

The young witch left the wolf, which was still unconscious, and decided to investigate the forest. After all she was going to live in the forest for a long time, probably until the wolf died or the effect of her spell ended. Probably the former as her spell would last a while.

As she walked through the forest, she saw something interesting. It was a house in a tree, or rather, a tree shaped as a house. Magic was the only way there could be something like that. And if someone used magic, being past or present, and the council didn’t knew, as there were no records of magic being casted there, it would only mean one thing. The caster was a human of great force and, if her intuition was right, probably one of those rogues mages. Deciding to investigate the matter, as it was her responsibility as an original witch, she looked through a window and saw something interesting. Two humans with magic in their system, not considered mages, were arguing. The interesting thing was that both of them were twins, and usually those kinds of humans got really well. Perhaps it was just a family discussion. She would ask later, if she hadn´t two words.

“…that to the dream seeker?”

“Because she asked me too,”

“But mother wanted us to-”

“Mother died because of that you know,”

“…How dare you to said that. She-”

“You know what happened. Why you…”

“…Leave. Leave right now.”

“Fate I-“

“Leave.”

Hayate decided to stop looking at the scene behind the window. She was certain that neither of the two sisters could do something like this. After all humans with blood magic didn’t had the ability to do something so complex.

“Who… who are you?” Alicia asked to the one that was peeping in their house.

“E…eh?” Hayate had forgotten to leave before one of the sisters left the house. “Ummm… well… hi there,” she tried to sound as nice and calm as possible.

“Who are you?” She repeated again.

“Ummm well I am a… umm witch… errrh well my name is Hayate and… ummm”

“What do you want in here?” she still sounded angry.

“I… well, wanted to meet the ummm,” Hayate was becoming more nervous. She wasn’t supposed to meddle with the affairs of the humans damn it. “The builder of this house.”

“She… she is not here.” The girl said with a sad tone.

“Where is she?”

“…She is dead”

What is this? Laith... updating twice in a day? World is ending!!! *shot*

Anyway enjoy.

Yay for back story! I like how Alicia responded to Nanoha. I'm guessing Fate's all mama's girl while Alicia isn't.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.27:

~**~

Vivio smiled contently, eyes closed and breathing steadily against the chest of her lover. Syn's hand ran down her back and back up slowly. No words were said for a while now but neither felt the need to. The only sounds were their breath and the rain tapping against the window. 'This is so nice,' The blond thought to herself, feeling yet another kiss placed in her hair. 'I've never felt like this before... Being held after sex... making love... Having her stay with me once it's over...I don't ever want her to let me go...'

The girl sighed out contently, cuddling up a little closer to Syn. 'This is what I was missing... This feeling, this warmth, these feelings...' Her eyes opened lightly, seeing Syn's chest raise and fall with her breath. 'I know now... what love is... what it means to care about someone... what being intimate really is...' She gave her lover a small kiss on her chest and looked up to see Syn gazing at her. "I love you," She whispered, getting her lips kissed this time.

"You too." Syn replied in kind, closing her eyes once more and hugging the girl in her arms. "That was really nice."

"It was." Vivio felt her body shiver as her spine was traced yet again. "I've never felt this way before."

"Same. I liked it." Syn smiled and moved back to look at Vivio again. "But I think we need a shower." She moved her hand to pick up a section of their hair that was tangled together.

Vivio's stomach growled at her as well, making her blush darkly. "Um... Food too?" She giggled softly. 'But I don't want her to let me go...'

"Come on, silly girl." Syn moved away from Vivio but scooped her up before she could get off the bed.

"Huh?"

"Nothing." Syn commented casually while carrying her. "I just wanted to carry you."

Vivio grinned and wrapped her arms around Syn's neck and leaned against her. "Okay." Shelet herself be carried the few steps to her bathroom and reluctantly was sat down on her bathtub. She watched Syn curiously look for towels to set out before getting the water going and allowing it to run over her wrist to check the temperature. 'Tomorrow,' Vivio though while fondly looking at her lover. 'I'll tell her everything tomorrow...I know she will accept me... Because I can tell, she loves me.

"...What?" Syn asked, cheeks coloring when she realized the girl was gazing at her.

"Nothing. I just want to look at you." Vivio held out her arms and got a hug. "I love you Syn."

Nice build up here, just the right set up for the drama that ensues. Just seeing it breaks my heart.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for PornStar!Vivio pt.28:

~**~

'Okay... It's almost time.' Vivio sniffed heavily and retreated to her bedroom to grab a tissue from the steadily depleting box. As an afterthought she went to her bathroom and struggled with the child protection cap on her bottle of medicine. 'Stupid little...there.' The cap was finally pried off and two pills were taken with a gulp of water. 'Maybe I should have listen to Allquall...'The thought was pushed aside and the girl went back into the living room to go over everything.

'Okay... I have my laptop ready to show her my web page... A few of my recent magazines.... Maybe a movie would be too much right now...' Vivio rechecked the magazines to make sure they were her best photo shoots. 'I think these will be fine... nothing too bad to shock her until she can accept it.' A deep breath calmed her down a little. ' Everything is ready...Or maybe I should make some tea? We might be talking about this a long time...' The idea was cut off when a knocking came on her door. 'Here goes nothing...' She jogged to the the entrance to her apartment and looked through the peephole, grinning at the sight of Syn crossing her eyes and sticking out her tongue. "Silly girl," She greeted as the door opened.

"That's my line." Syn retorted, giving her girlfriend a quick hug. "What's so important that you wanted me to come here after work before going home? I smell like french fries."

"Yummy." Vivio sniffed her. "Hey, you really do!" She got swatted at as she closed the door. "Anyway, I wanted to talk to you about something."

"Oh?" Syn looked at her and was guided over to the couch, glancing at the adult magazines on the table. "What is it?"

"Well..." She took a breath. "You know how I'm always a little evasive about my job?"

"Yes?" Syn looked at Vivio fully when the tone of the voice meant for her to get serious.

The blond looked at her and reassured herself of their relationship. "The reason is because I was scared that it would scare you off." She was blinked at. "You see... Syn, I'm in the adult entertainment industry." This time Syn looked at her blankly. "Yes, it's what you're thinking."

"You're..." Syn tried to make sure she was getting this right. "In adult entertainment...?"

"Yes." Vivio picked up a magazine and turned to her pages. "Here."

Syn slowly looked down at the magazine, amazed at the nude images of her girlfriend staring her in the face. "You... pose naked?" She asked the obvious, still confused at the sudden information.

"Yes."

"I... see..." A page was turned and the images were scanned. "... God, for a second there I thought you shot pornos."

Vivio almost physically flinched. "Ah... Well..." Syn looked at her. "I... do."

"You do?" The tone of voice went from shocked to unsure. "Like... filmed sex?"

"Yes." Vivio swallowed thickly. Syn looked back down at he magazine, as if to confirm what she was hearing. Once the section was finished, she tossed it on the table and picked up the other one, flipping until she came across her girlfriend again, eyes going wide as the hardcore images were found. "Those were taken about a month ago," Vivio offered.

Syn threw the magazine onto the couch and stood up, pacing while she thought. Several seconds passed by in silence before Syn turned to her again. "You're a porn star." It was a statement but a question at the same time. A meek nod was her reply, making her stop and stare. "You're in porn." Another nod. "You... you fuck people for money." The wording made Vivio wince, but after Syn stared at her for an answer, she finally forced herself to reply.

"Well, it's not really sex, it's more like-"

"You screw people for money!" Syn pointed at the magazines. "And they record you and sell it so people can WATCH you doing it!?"

Vivio tried to think quickly. "It's not like it sounds! I don't.... It's... Hard to explain."

Syn bent over and glared, voice getting louder. "Do you, or do you not, get paid to have sex!?"

Vivio steadied herself under the gaze and swallowed. "Yes." The blue haired girl moved away and threw up her hands. "Syn, listen, I need to explain-"

"What's there to explain!?" Syn turned on her, still amazed. "You.... oh god, When you blew me off because you had work, did you go screw someone!?"

Once again Vivio felt like a deer in the headlights of an oncoming car. "I... I..."

"Did you!?" Syn's voice was almost screaming now. "My first day at my new job, you said you would come see me, what did you do when you didn't show up!?" Vivio's eyes glanced to the earlier tossed magazine before she could help herself and Syn almost screamed out in annoyance. "You promised! you promised me, Vivio! You said you would be there! I waited all day, I worked through my lunch, I looked at everyone who came in the door, and you... you were having sex with some guy! Did you even know him!?"

"I... I don't..."

Syn walked around some more, shaking her head before finally putting both hands on the bar dividing the kitchen. "I hit on you constantly, tried to kiss you, tried to hug you, tried to get intimate with you... and you kept blowing me off. I wanted some way to show you how much I cared for you." Her words were soft now, voice quivering. "The girl who pulled me up when I hit rock bottom... the girl who made me decide to keep making it on my own instead of giving up and moving back in with my mother... I had my things packed, Vivio." She turned and looked at the frozen girl. "I had my clothes in boxes. I... I was going to call her the next day and ask if I could move in... but you gave me hope. You showed me that there were people who cared. That others were struggling too. That... That maybe I could pursue something besides being lonely." She put a hand to her face and stayed silent a moment. "How many?"

"...What?"

"How many times did you cheat on me?"

"I didn't- it's work, I-"

"How many!?" The words were screamed, cutting her off.

"... I don't know."

Syn stood there for a long time, looking down at the carpet. Silence passed over them both until she finally spoke again. "It's over."

"Syn, wait! Let me explain!" Vivio ran over to her but was shrugged off.

"You're nothing but a whore." Syn moved away and opened the door to the apartment. "I never want to see or hear from you ever again." The door closed behind her, leaving Vivio standing there alone. Seconds passed by as she looked at the spot where Syn vanished from her sight before her knees finally buckled and gave under her weight. Falling down, she braced herself on her hands and looked at her floor, gasping as the first tears started to fall.

Lllama Drama! Allquall!
Well I have to say that was quite the explosive reaction. Everybody has kind of said all my reactions (in many words) so I'll keep this short. This was pure evil and I can't wait to see what you'll drag Vivio through next.

Originally Posted by TerranReaper

Spoiler for Chapter 5:

Chapter 5

“Now what did I say about giving other people choices, Virgil? I thought I ordered you to retrieve the Mid-Childans, not give them choices on whether they want to come with us or not,” said Fleet Admiral Jacques Allègre said. Virgil had been called to him ever since he ordered a retreat back to Earth. Jacques opened a holo COM and replayed back the battle. He stroked his chin, paused the replay and pointed at a pink-haired girl receiving orders from a hooded guy.

“Who is this hooded man and that pink-haired girl? I’m familiar with the girl’s face but not the hooded one,” said Jacques. Terran battles were always recorded by their star ships for future references. Virgil looked closely and shrugged. “I know the girl is Signum but for that man…I’m not sure if I’m familiar or not because his face is covered. But wait…what is that book he’s holding in his hand?”

Virgil touched the COM and zoomed in closer. “Hmm…this is most interesting. If I didn’t know better, that seems like the Book of Darkness. Doesn’t that belong to a certain someone named Hayate Yagami?” asked Virgil. Jacques took out his data pad and scrolled through the history facts uncovered by Terran archaeologists in the form of data crystals 100 years ago on Mid-Childa. He nodded and kept the data pad. “So it seems. What Hayate has now came with the Book of Darkness and if anyone else controls the Book of Darkness, the Wolkenritters, the powers and all that came with the book will have to submit to the new owner’s will. I think we’ve just uncovered another evil scheme by the Belkans.”

“They’re taking Hayate’s book so that they could control what Hayate has. As for Hayate…she won’t know what hit her. The Wolkenritters are one thing but should the enemy uncover the true use of that book…we must be prepared.” Jacques said grimly. He closed the COM and sat on his chair. “Tell me, Virgil, what did your ancestor Caro Ru Lushe taught your family in terms of magic? I, for once, would like to know if you mixed-bloods can do magic.”

Mixed-bloods are those people whose ancestors originate from Mid-Childa and migrated to Earth ever since the destruction of the Mid-Childan colony. Those listed as missing were alive and has lived on Earth ever since. They bred with the non-magical Terrans and produced off springs that either has no magic capabilities, some or maybe full. It’s a matter of genetic variation. A little insight to Caro’s history on Earth: She was married to a military officer from Hawaii 3 days before the Belkans attacked Earth. Life was hard but they managed to live a satisfying enough life. After she gave birth to her first child, she joined the military in the battle against the Belkans. Caro fought in many campaigns and earned many awards. She was a military hero. However, 5 years into the war and she was critically hurt during Operation Thunderbolt when the Terrans attempted to drive the Belkans away from Canada. Under her request, she was put to cryo sleep to halt her injuries from getting worse since the wounds inflicted from her were too hard to heal at that time and…she didn’t want to die. She was thawed out last year and underwent emergency operations to fix her up. She was still unconscious though, recovering inside a tube of healing liquid. According to the doctors, Caro will wake up in about one month.

Virgil looked at the Fleet Admiral and shrugged. “I’m not sure if I can do magic but I’m sure that some mixed-bloods do have magic. Why not introduce them to combat?” asked Virgil. Jacques shook his head and leaned back on his chair. “Some people prefer to hide and stay safe in their little havens. Not all are like that. We can’t force them so we might as well recruit ordinary Terrans,” he said with a smile. “Toran,” Jacques called out to his AI. A hologram of a male AI dressed in thick marine armor appeared on Jacques’s desk. “Can I help you with anything sir?” asked the AI in a hollow voice. “Yes, I would like you to sum up today’s battle and give me the best recommendation for the next course of action,” said Jacques while tugging his moustache. Toran paused for three seconds and a holo note appeared in front of Jacques.

“Today’s objective was not met but the enemies were hit hard. However, according to what I analyzed from the entire mission recording from the star ship Gilgamesh, I found at least one group of soldiers stranded somewhere in the city while attempting to retrieve Hayate. They got her but she refused to leave,” said Toran while zooming in at a certain section of the Belkan city. Virgil saw Hayate there, ordering Rein to leave for some reason. The time was 8 p.m., exactly the time when he ordered a retreat.

“They can’t survive long with so many enemies around them. Unless they strip their battle armor and act normal, they can’t survive. Toran, next best course of action,” said Jacques. “We can’t launch another attack for now. The best time to launch a second offense is when the city is at its weakest. That is when most of the military are resting. Belkans have a decree of having their military stay awake for certain number of days before letting them rest. I estimate that the next resting cycle will approach in 5 days,” said Toran.

Virgil scratched his head. “If the entire military hits the sacks, who’s gonna defend the city?” he asked. “Commander Virgil, they have three towers there to provide protection by surrounding the city with a magic shield that is impenetrable to most attacks, including a direct fusion bomb strike. It is not without weakness though. Anyone tunneling underground can reach into the city but they have deep scanners which detect subterranean units. Still, with current Terran military numbers…it should be sufficient enough to launch a second strike. It would be fun to detonate a nuke within the protective shields though,” said Toran amusingly.

“Innocent people are walking the streets. We can’t do that,” said Jacques sternly. He looked at his data pad and sighed. “If the shields are really up, then there is no way we can send in the Titan battle mechs. I guess we have to use Myrmidon battle tanks for now. Toran, order all war factories around the world to focus more on producing vehicles, APCs included. We’re gonna strike the Belkans when they are in Dream Land and this time, I want the Mid-Childans in our hands. You understand me, Virgil?”

Virgil nodded and saluted. “Yes sir,” he said. As soon as Virgil left, Jacques opened his holo COM again and typed in a few things before closing it. “Why are you so desperate to liberate the Mid-Childans?” asked Toran. The Fleet Admiral combed back his hair and smoked on his grandfather’s antique pipe. He puffed on it and examined the smoke pattern. “If we don’t, the Belkans might continue to slander and brain-wash the Mid-Childans, inciting them to hate us and attack us. One particular one is Nanoha Takamachi. She is strong and so is her friend Fate.T.Harlaown. They are formidable and somewhat…a bit naïve since they think the Belkans are so righteous. My Aunt Mandy’s foot. I still can’t fathom why the Belkans attacked us 490 years ago. Those dipsticks came out of nowhere and attacked us without even bothering to give an explanation,” said Jacques. Toran was silent. “Tell me, Toran, does the idea of magical girl seem far-fetched to you? Sure we’ve seen plenty of that in animes and I enjoy watching them and their misadventures but how is it possible that magic exist? It defies the Laws of Nature,” Jacques said.

“Sir, there are some things that are unknown to us. At first it may seem that it is against what we believe and know but once we see it for ourselves, we always ask ourselves that why didn’t we thought about it in the first place. Why do you ask?” Toran asked in a puzzled tone. “Nothing, the topic just came to my mind all of a sudden. Toran, I need my rest and I want no visitors. Wake me up in six hours and give temporary command of the military to Lieutenant General Sakura Tsukamoto for the next cycle,” said Jacques as he went to lie down on his office’s couch. Toran nodded and winked out.

Agito watched anxiously as Virgil came down the corridor. “So how did it go, Virgil? Did the Fleet Admiral ordered you to be demoted?” she asked in a worried voice. Virgil shook his head. “No, he just told me not to repeat the mistake again,” said Virgil. He entered his office and sat on his chair, looked through some paperwork before leaning back. Agito gave him his cup of coffee. Virgil took the cup and drained the coffee. “Agito, what do you have for me today?” asked Virgil. She handed him a holo pad. “It’s the test result for Caro Ru Lushe. Good news for you, it seems like she’ll be awake in 5 days time,” Agito said with a smile.

Agito was also one of missing ones who migrated to Earth since she lost Signum. Agito has served under many military top brasses in the Terran army for many centuries and she never grew tired of it. She served from being a tea maid and entertainer to Battle Ship Navigations Officer and Frontline Commander. For someone that small, she was talented and even she never knew she had it in her. Agito picked to serve Virgil mainly because he was talented and maybe because he was good-looking as well. Okay, maybe she was attracted to Virgil…but not to the extent of love. His demeanor reminded her of Zest, who was killed by Signum in Regius Gaiz’s office. She won’t allow Virgil to die…he is too nice to be dead.

Virgil nodded and smiled. “That is all I need to know. I never knew my family since I was adopted by another family after my parents died during a Belkan attack. I traced my origins and found out about my connection with Caro. Maybe she can be my new mother,” he said smilingly. Agito liked it when he smiled, it made him look charming. “Still wanna be mama’s boy eh,” said Agito. “I thought you already have a foster mother,” she continued. Virgil shrugged and combed back his hair. The silver lining on his hair was the result of a genetic mutation and Virgil thinks it doesn’t look very good on him. Many times he had tried to dye his hair according to the original brown of his hair but the silver linings can’t be covered as the dye wouldn’t stick to it.

“I do have a foster mother but the feeling of being with someone related to you is different. Don’t you agree?” he asked. Agito nodded and sat down on his desk. He turned his chair around to face the window of his office. It showed the view of the sun setting over the Nevada desert. Not really beautiful but relaxing to look at. “So, how do you find Earth ever since you migrated here?” asked Virgil. Agito put a finger on her chin and tapped it. “Not very different from Mid-Childa and you people look no different from the Mid-Childans.”

Virgil laughed. “We are of the same species but live in different dimensions, different society structure and different lives. Mid-Childans are very advanced but now…I think we Terrans have surpassed them. Maybe. Though we don’t do magic, we certainly have firepower. I don’t cherish the thought of one Homo Sapien living on Earth fighting the other Homo Sapien living on Mid-Childa,” Virgil said with a laugh. Agito didn’t get what he meant.

Suddenly, Agito thought she saw Virgil blush for some reason. “Are you feeling okay, Virgil? Your face is red,” said Agito. Virgil looked out the window and didn’t want to look at Agito. “Agito, do you think it’s a good idea if…I like…Nanoha?” asked Virgil. Agito was taken aback by that confession. She felt like she hated Nanoha on the spot. Agito quickly declined. “You barely knew her and now you wanna hit on her?! Virgil, there is a chance she will refuse you because she has Fate by her side and they are in love already. Besides, Nanoha has Yuuno Scrya as her possible male lover,” said Agito in an agitated voice.

“Speaking of Scrya, Agito, he died of old age. As for Fate…well, maybe you’re right. Nanoha loves Fate and she won’t leave her side. Oh well, I guess I’ll have to find another one to be my future bride,” Virgil said calmly. Agito sighed in relief. She flew to his shoulder and sat on it, watching the sun set over the horizon.

“Admiral Jacques, wake up! We have an emergency call from Martian Capital Defense Initiative!” someone yelled outside his office. Jacques looked at the clock on his wall and saw that it was 9 p.m. sharp. He has slept exactly six hours. “Come in,” he said while sitting up. In came a young woman in blue military uniform: a standard uniform for the Special Marine Forces. She saluted. “Sir, General Alexander Kerensky has asked for your immediate attention,” said the woman. “What is it? Have the Belkans attacked Mars?” asked a nervous Jacques. He has every reason to be nervous because something important is on Mars that kept Earth safe from Belkan attacks.

“Yes sir. They’re aiming for the fusion reactors that powered Earth’s orbital cannons. If the reactors are destroyed, our Magnetic Accelerator Cannons will be nothing more than space junk. If that happens, the Belkans will move in on Earth. They have begun the assault 10 minutes ago and the Martian defense line is at the verge of falling. I dunno what they have that made them so powerful,” said the woman.

Earth’s MAC cannons were the only things keeping the Belkan ships at bay. They fired a 4000 ton uranium core slug at the speed of 3/10 the speed of light. Once on impact, they can break through the magical barrier surrounding the Belkan ships and puncture the ships from the tip of the nose to the tail. Even for ships with the Saint’s Cradle design, a salvo of these shots can shatter it. If the cannons fall, Earth is open to an invasion.

“They know where the power source is. Woman, go alert my men! We’re going to Mars now!” yelled Jacques. The woman saluted and ran out of the office. “Well then, Saint King Georg, if you think we’ll fall that easily, you’re very much mistaken.”

He put on his armor and exited his office.

This chapter is all about the background history. Anyway, here's a love question. Should Virgil try to win Nanoha's heart?
A)Yes
B)No

Yay for Hawaii! I knew it was Caro! I was debating between Caro and Lutecia. Definitely B because I like my yuri love (unless she's with Yuuno).

@Rustau: Hi and welcome! Embrace the crack, it's good for you. Anything you might possibly need is under Satashi's signature.

@Thread: Random fact for today: Obama won the U.S presidential election. (Just a fact not supporting any party).

[Laith]

Spoiler for Wolf and Girl pt 8:

“I… I’m sorry for that.” Hayate said while she saw that the girl started to tear a little. Hayate intuited that it was something recent or it was a painful memory for her.

“…Why did you want to meet her?” The girl said less aggressive than before, but without lowering her guard.

“Well, I wanted to ask about something,” she decided to not reveal the real reason of her curiousness. “But, I guess is impossible. My apologies if I hurt you somehow. I will take my leave here.”

“…Wait,”

“Mmm?”

“…Do you have a place to stay?” The girl didn´t know what had given her the courage to say something like that.

“Not yet.” Realizing why the girl asked this, she added in a hurry. “But its okay, I´ll found a place to stay, and she is mad at you and…”

“You were spying us?”

“I…well… hahaha,” she smiled nervously and looked at the young girl in front of her. The glaring made her sigh, “Yes I was.”

“I see.” The girl smirked and plainly said “Let´s see, since you owe me one by spying on us, you will repay me by accompanying me tonight, okay?”

“What? I… well… ummm,” seeing as how her argument was going to be useless against the girl she gave up before even trying. “Fine i… will accompany you.”

“Thank you very much, Ms. Hayate.”

“May I know the name of my… companion?”

“Alicia, Alicia Testarossa.”

---

“So it was by complete accident? Or perhaps was a destined meeting?” Nanoha had stopped trying to do some house work.

“I think it was more of a coincidence. Hayate tells me that there is no destiny and that things like that don’t exist and the like, and I believe it so… anyway go back to work with you Nanoha. You have to help if you want to stay.”

“Mou, Alicia, this is tiring. How can you do it everyday?”

“Practice Nanoha.” Alicia smiled at the girl. “Here let me teach you…”

---

“But Master Fate, according to these notes, the power of a dream seeker is too much for only one witch. Isn’t it dangerous to try?” Tiana asked. They had decided to walk to the little house on the forest.

“That´s why I need you, Tiana.”

“Eh?”

“You will help me to control the power. It´s what I been teaching right?”

“Yeah but… if the both of us can restrain it?”

“Then we will ask for the help of my sister and her lover.”

“They will help us? I thought they didn’t want to help us.”

“Well, they are always like that. Don’t worry they will,” she added perhaps to relieve her apprentice. “Because the girl is important to them,”

“I see. But how are we going to enter their protective circle? Last time we waited outside for a while before one of them left the house.”

“I have a hunch one of them is outside.” She stopped for a second and calmly announced. “We have arrived. And look, my sister´s lover is outside. We are lucky.”

...Climax (and ending) near (like in 5/6 parts). No, no action in this (thanks free-action plot)

@Rustau Welcome posts lots and forget your sanity at the door.

[rustau]

Thank you! Actually, I've been lurking this thread for the past 4-5 months now SO I know just how crazy (messed up) some of you guys are.

I usually just don't post anything because I'm not a writer (nor plan to be one =( ). I do enjoy editing and critiquing work, but usually it doesn't come off so well when you have no proof of your own writing =X. BUT, that last chapter (and all the responses it got) wow'ed me enough that I had to leave my opinion =). Interactive discussions like that where everyone has a different outlook on the situation is great.

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by Laith

Spoiler for Wolf and Girl pt 8:

“I… I’m sorry for that.” Hayate said while she saw that the girl started to tear a little. Hayate intuited that it was something recent or it was a painful memory for her.

“…Why did you want to meet her?” The girl said less aggressive than before, but without lowering her guard.

“Well, I wanted to ask about something,” she decided to not reveal the real reason of her curiousness. “But, I guess is impossible. My apologies if I hurt you somehow. I will take my leave here.”

“…Wait,”

“Mmm?”

“…Do you have a place to stay?” The girl didn´t know what had given her the courage to say something like that.

“Not yet.” Realizing why the girl asked this, she added in a hurry. “But its okay, I´ll found a place to stay, and she is mad at you and…”

“You were spying us?”

“I…well… hahaha,” she smiled nervously and looked at the young girl in front of her. The glaring made her sigh, “Yes I was.”

“I see.” The girl smirked and plainly said “Let´s see, since you owe me one by spying on us, you will repay me by accompanying me tonight, okay?”

“What? I… well… ummm,” seeing as how her argument was going to be useless against the girl she gave up before even trying. “Fine i… will accompany you.”

“Thank you very much, Ms. Hayate.”

“May I know the name of my… companion?”

“Alicia, Alicia Testarossa.”

---

“So it was by complete accident? Or perhaps was a destined meeting?” Nanoha had stopped trying to do some house work.

“I think it was more of a coincidence. Hayate tells me that there is no destiny and that things like that don’t exist and the like, and I believe it so… anyway go back to work with you Nanoha. You have to help if you want to stay.”

“Mou, Alicia, this is tiring. How can you do it everyday?”

“Practice Nanoha.” Alicia smiled at the girl. “Here let me teach you…”

---

“But Master Fate, according to these notes, the power of a dream seeker is too much for only one witch. Isn’t it dangerous to try?” Tiana asked. They had decided to walk to the little house on the forest.

“That´s why I need you, Tiana.”

“Eh?”

“You will help me to control the power. It´s what I been teaching right?”

“Yeah but… if the both of us can restrain it?”

“Then we will ask for the help of my sister and her lover.”

“They will help us? I thought they didn’t want to help us.”

“Well, they are always like that. Don’t worry they will,” she added perhaps to relieve her apprentice. “Because the girl is important to them,”

“I see. But how are we going to enter their protective circle? Last time we waited outside for a while before one of them left the house.”

“I have a hunch one of them is outside.” She stopped for a second and calmly announced. “We have arrived. And look, my sister´s lover is outside. We are lucky.”

...Climax (and ending) near (like in 5/6 parts). No, no action in this (thanks free-action plot)

@Rustau Welcome posts lots and forget your sanity at the door.

Well this is intrigiung. Fate and Tiana seem to be kind of enemies (but only kind of).

Originally Posted by rustau

Thank you! Actually, I've been lurking this thread for the past 4-5 months now SO I know just how crazy (messed up) some of you guys are.

I usually just don't post anything because I'm not a writer (nor plan to be one =( ). I do enjoy editing and critiquing work, but usually it doesn't come off so well when you have no proof of your own writing =X. BUT, that last chapter (and all the responses it got) wow'ed me enough that I had to leave my opinion =). Interactive discussions like that where everyone has a different outlook on the situation is great.

Actually I noticed your name at the bottom right before you posted. It was weird. Lol, anyway, It's ok if you don't write. I mean I don't (aside from random shorts), but I still critique or at least comment on all the stories here. I even Beta too. I personally like getting any kind of feedback on things I write, even if it's just "That was awesome". Discussions like that are fun, that's why forums are fun. You get to hear everyone's opinion, though it can get out of hand sometimes. Ship Wars!

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by Gespenst

But fluff is love. Love the fluff. /creepy voice

I know you're being sarcastic, but this is 99% of what's wrong with this thread.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

I could argue with that. My favorite series didn't have what many would call a good end but it was still awesome with all the drama and angst

Hush you. If we really brought the power of Eva to these people who've never seen it, it would break their MINDS.

Originally Posted by Allquall

*snip*

Pretty much agree. As far as I'm concerned, Syn has every right to be pissed off because as far as I'm concerned Vivio is now a damn whore and gets anything that comes to her from here on out, preferably something as negative as possible.

I'll admit, I haven't been keeping up with this story at all, if only because the idea absolutely repulses me in many many ways. I absolutely despise pornography and everything about it, find no interest in it, and can't stand it when people talk about it.

Hell, I won't even write lemons, and going into lime territory is more than enough for me. And this is coming from someone who used to read them all the time. When I finished Home/Bodies waaay back in the day, I decided I was done. I don't care if there's romance attached anymore. Me + reading/watching/looking at any sort of X-rated content is over.

No, I don't care if it's a well written story. I don't care about the drama. It's about porn. This is why I didn't want to have an appearance in this story, Satashi, because I hate, hate, hate it. This is one of the stories you'll write that I'll never care about. I don't care how amazingly fucking popular it is, or if you go on for twenty more chapters, you will never catch me reading this... drivel.[/rant]

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by Satashi

But I don't consider Vivio "being called out for what she is" being right. She isn't a whore, she doesn't go have sex with anyone for the fun of it. She keeps her job separate from her real life and her clothes don't even show off her body.

...

@thread: any other comments on this part before I start on the next?

Not sure I can agree with that particular explanation of Vi not being a vernacular 'whore' there. She's getting paid for sex, which is pretty much a standard definition of what a prostitute does. Whether it gets filmed, and whether she enjoys it or not is, in my humblest opinion, irrelevant. I'm sure a lot of prostitutes out there dont' enjoy being touched by their clients.

Vi's a professional, I'll give her that, but I think Syn pretty much called a spade a spade. Vi chose to be a porn star, which can only make things worse. As to Syn's pov, it probably seems like Vi lied to her, and broke a promise doing so. I dont' think she'll ever understand Vi's reasons for going to work that day, even if Vi weren't in the porn industry, because Syn's train of thought will likely get stuck on 'Vivio broke a promise for money'. She wouldn't give a damn that Vi wanted to spend that money on her.

And I wouldn't date a porn star for health reasons lol.


edit: Oh wow, another top post. Page claim for unclaimed pages!