@ Hawk - That sounds very confusing, can you tell me the answer to the riddle?
- No. <Ren> is bvery flexible--essentially she has to adapt to whatever happens and it will alld epend on how Irish deals with things. Irish pulls one thing, <Ren> will do somethign else--usually completely unexpected. It's not something you can plan out because <Ren> doesn't really plan, she plays Xanatos Speed Chess in real time.
- No. <Ren> is very flexible--essentially she has to adapt to whatever happens and it will all depend on how Irish deals with things. Irish pulls one thing, <Ren> will do somethign else--usually completely unexpected. It's not something you can plan out because <Ren> doesn't really plan, she plays Xanatos Speed Chess in real time.
The story just became 10 times more complicated At least the <Ren> capturing Irish part won't come until he kills all of the 6 team members.
After that I'll just have to write the torture chapters, oh joy
@ Meister, Zero and Stratos - Alright! Here's Inami Arisawa's date. Tell me what you guys think.
@ Jak - Do you have plans to continue it again at some point?
Spoiler:
'Okay. Calm down, It's just Tsurugi, everything will be okay.'
Inami Arisawa was standing in front of the mirror dressed in a white button up shirt blue jeans and white rubber shoes, you can't see it, but right now he's experiencing the greatest of sicknesses.
'Come on! You massaged girls while you were wearing a china dress, you can do this!'
That would of course be "Love Sickness"
He looked at himself in the mirror and tried to fix his hair again before he was interrupted.
"Ina-kun~ Hurry up already." A female voice screamed from outside his dorm window.
"C-Coming!"
Inami made his way down the stairs with his heart beating about a mile a minute, he was sincerely hoping that nothing bad would happen today.
"You're late Ina-kun"
"S-Sorry."
He and Tsurugi had a "date" planned for today which Inami had lost sleep over the previous night.
"Don't worry about it Ina-kun" She suddenly did a little spin before leaning forward towards him. "So...how do I look?"
Tsurugi was wearing a pure white summer dress which showed off her girlish figure along with white sandals to complete the all white ensemble. Her dark brown hair was also let down and hung just below her neck.
"Y-You look great."
Truth be told, Inami was wanted to grab her and kiss her right there on the spot, that wouldn't be very gentlemanly though.
"That's it?" She seemed to visibly deflate. "Oh well, let's go."
'What did she want me to say?'
Both of them made their way to the train station that connected IS academy to the city, the train was almost empty so neither of them had any trouble finding good seats.
"So..."
"Um...."
Things were pretty awkward between the young couple, neither of them could find anything to talk about.
"..."
"..."
*CRASH*
A crash from the other car suddenly got both of their attention.
"Sarashiki! Let go of me already!" A male voice screamed from the other car.
"You can't bring a knife Irish-kun! Now just give it to onee-san."
"Take my knife and you'll wake up with your IS in pieces tomorrow!"
"I'll take my chances, now hand over that knife."
"...."
"...."
""...Pffft~ Hahahahahaha!""
Both of them suddenly started laughing, the awkward atmosphere was dispelled from the room.
"Hey, Ina-kun"
"Yeah Tsurugi?"
"Thanks for the massage yesterday, it reminded me of kendo practice when I was younger."
"Yeah." He smiled. "Except you didn't have such big br-" Inami instantly shut his mouth as he realized what he was about to say.
"Big what?" She smirked and leaned closer to him. "Do you see anything different about me?"
"BATHROOM!"
Inami instantly stood up from his seat and made his way to the train restroom.
"That was close, I can't believe I almost said that!"
"Arisawa?"
On the way to the restroom he bumped into an albino looking teenager.
"Irish? What are you doing here?"
"Hiding from Sarashiki, just tell her you didn't see me if you bump into her."
"Alright...I guess."
He continued making his way to the restroom before he bumped into another person.
"Inami-kun, have you seen Irish-kun around anywhere?"
Tatenashi Sarashiki looked slightly annoyed as she asked him.
"Yeah, he's hiding in the other car."
Inami knew he shouldn't have snitched but the arguement from earlier told him it was probably best to trust her over the knife wielding albino.
"Thanks!"
With that business done with, Inami did his business before going back to his seat.
Both were standing on the observatory at the edge of town looking over the sunset, thankfully he had stashed the Minerva in the city beforehand so they could get here easily.
"Yeah, just like you."
"Did you say something?"
"Oh nothing."
The view was amazing from this height, the city seemed to sparkle in a golden light like it was made of gold.
"It's not over yet Tsurugi."
Inami put on the Minerva before he suddenly grabbed onto her hand and flew to the distance.
Both of them were on the park this time, they were almost home.
"Hey Ina-kun..."
"Yeah?"
"I lo-"
*BOOM*
"Ichika~"
"Wh-What's going on!?"
Ichika Orimura suddenly appeared being attacked by Rin and Cecilia while Irish was holding onto Charlottes IS and stabbing it as hard as he could.
"Nothing different from the usual right Ina-kun."
"Right"
With a smile on his face, Inami suited up and joined the fray.
I suck at romance Anyway, please read and review.
Next up: Irish
Not bad at all
Though I initially thought hoped that:
Spoiler for scene:
- Tsurugi confesses her love while they are at the beach, uninterrupted
Still... It's fine as it is
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"You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album.
...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."
semi-canonical, depending on who in Marbvel or Devil's Due or IDW you speak to.
While there's G.I.Joe influence, it's not stated outright yet. I'm tempted to remark that Natasha Fairs MIGHT be the relative of a Joe Team member...
Well, you could say something was from GI Joe, or deny it, and I wouldn't know... I'm a Trekker, and that's about it for me from the Western World.
I knew about the Transformers xover only while researching about the Headmasters, the anime that I watched as a kid.
Interesting... Cos I was wondering about Browning and her history with the US military. Why would one of their best IS pilots defect? I've yet to come up with a compelling narrative, but this opens up more avenues...
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Karon end chapter? Which one was that?
The one where Karon wants to tell Irish that she's going away for a long time, but he confesses before she gets her chance, which catches her by surprise, because she thought it was Tatenashi that he's interested in at that point.
It was really OPed and refered to events which hadn't occured yet so it was really quite horrid.
@ Stratos - Everyone gets blocked so it's not gonna be just Inami don't worry. Sorry if the draft was rushed, I wrote it in school then a moving car so I wasn't the most concentrated at that point. Maybe I can re-write it again someday.
@ Meister - OPed is how I feel whenever I have to write love stories at all Just check out daydreams and you'll see. I had to write the Rin chapter while I was at school so it was a pain in the ass to keep going.
The first IKaron draft was rushed too Why would he suddenly act like Karon was telling the truth? He had next to no reason for believing her at that point.
The story just became 10 times more complicated At least the <Ren> capturing Irish part won't come until he kills all of the 6 team members.
After that I'll just have to write the torture chapters, oh joy
- Suggestion: Rent "The Bourne Identity" movie and the sequels "The Boune Ultimatum" and "The Bourne Supremacy" to see what kind of Xanatos Speed Chess I'm talking about...
- Suggestion: Rent "The Bourne Identity" movie and the sequels "The Boune Ultimatum" and "The Bourne Supremacy" to see what kind of Xanatos Speed Chess I'm talking about...
I would if I could Unfortunately, I can't get movies right now on account of being swamped with assignments everyday. That's why I have to write drafts in school
Anyway, I'll cross that bridge when I get there. This isn't a serious fic anyhow so I can just take it easy.
Thanks for all the advice though It's really helping.
Side note - Irish is insane in this chapter so he's not gonna act very rationally, that's why he's banging the walls and acting like some kind of psycopath. He probably wont last long against <Ren> anyhow.
@ Stratos - Everyone gets blocked so it's not gonna be just Inami don't worry. Sorry if the draft was rushed, I wrote it in school then a moving car so I wasn't the most concentrated at that point. Maybe I can re-write it again someday.
Naw, it's allright.
Like I said, it's fine as it is
__________________
"You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album.
...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."
- Do you REALLY want her to torture-kill Irish that badly?
Kyuubey: "Contract? Contract? Con---UGH" (buried by Unlimited Knife Works)
This IS a grim dark story Irish isn't the same as the one I wrote in the drafts: He's psychotic, doesn't reason with anyone, and does some truly villain protagonist things later on.
@ Meister, Zero and Stratos - Alright! Here's Inami Arisawa's date. Tell me what you guys think.
@ Jak - Do you have plans to continue it again at some point?
Spoiler:
'Okay. Calm down, It's just Tsurugi, everything will be okay.'
Inami Arisawa was standing in front of the mirror dressed in a white button up shirt blue jeans and white rubber shoes, you can't see it, but right now he's experiencing the greatest of sicknesses.
'Come on! You massaged girls while you were wearing a china dress, you can do this!'
That would of course be "Love Sickness"
He looked at himself in the mirror and tried to fix his hair again before he was interrupted.
"Ina-kun~ Hurry up already." A female voice screamed from outside his dorm window.
"C-Coming!"
Inami made his way down the stairs with his heart beating about a mile a minute, he was sincerely hoping that nothing bad would happen today.
"You're late Ina-kun"
"S-Sorry."
He and Tsurugi had a "date" planned for today which Inami had lost sleep over the previous night.
"Don't worry about it Ina-kun" She suddenly did a little spin before leaning forward towards him. "So...how do I look?"
Tsurugi was wearing a pure white summer dress which showed off her girlish figure along with white sandals to complete the all white ensemble. Her dark brown hair was also let down and hung just below her neck.
"Y-You look great."
Truth be told, Inami was wanted to grab her and kiss her right there on the spot, that wouldn't be very gentlemanly though.
"That's it?" She seemed to visibly deflate. "Oh well, let's go."
'What did she want me to say?'
Both of them made their way to the train station that connected IS academy to the city, the train was almost empty so neither of them had any trouble finding good seats.
"So..."
"Um...."
Things were pretty awkward between the young couple, neither of them could find anything to talk about.
"..."
"..."
*CRASH*
A crash from the other car suddenly got both of their attention.
"Sarashiki! Let go of me already!" A male voice screamed from the other car.
"You can't bring a knife Irish-kun! Now just give it to onee-san."
"Take my knife and you'll wake up with your IS in pieces tomorrow!"
"I'll take my chances, now hand over that knife."
"...."
"...."
""...Pffft~ Hahahahahaha!""
Both of them suddenly started laughing, the awkward atmosphere was dispelled from the room.
"Hey, Ina-kun"
"Yeah Tsurugi?"
"Thanks for the massage yesterday, it reminded me of kendo practice when I was younger."
"Yeah." He smiled. "Except you didn't have such big br-" Inami instantly shut his mouth as he realized what he was about to say.
"Big what?" She smirked and leaned closer to him. "Do you see anything different about me?"
"BATHROOM!"
Inami instantly stood up from his seat and made his way to the train restroom.
"That was close, I can't believe I almost said that!"
"Arisawa?"
On the way to the restroom he bumped into an albino looking teenager.
"Irish? What are you doing here?"
"Hiding from Sarashiki, just tell her you didn't see me if you bump into her."
"Alright...I guess."
He continued making his way to the restroom before he bumped into another person.
"Inami-kun, have you seen Irish-kun around anywhere?"
Tatenashi Sarashiki looked slightly annoyed as she asked him.
"Yeah, he's hiding in the other car."
Inami knew he shouldn't have snitched but the arguement from earlier told him it was probably best to trust her over the knife wielding albino.
"Thanks!"
With that business done with, Inami did his business before going back to his seat.
Both were standing on the observatory at the edge of town looking over the sunset, thankfully he had stashed the Minerva in the city beforehand so they could get here easily.
"Yeah, just like you."
"Did you say something?"
"Oh nothing."
The view was amazing from this height, the city seemed to sparkle in a golden light like it was made of gold.
"It's not over yet Tsurugi."
Inami put on the Minerva before he suddenly grabbed onto her hand and flew to the distance.
All around me are firmiliar faces
Worn out places, worn out faces
Bright and early for the daily races
Going nowhere, going nowhere
Their tears are filling up their glasses
No expression, no expression
Hide my head I wanna drown my sorrow
No tomorrow, no tomorrow
And I find it kind of funny
I find it kind of sad
The dreams in which I'm dying
Are the best I've ever had
I find it hard to tell you
I find it hard to take
When people run in circles
It's a very very, mad world, mad world
Children waiting for the day they feel good
Happy Birthday, Happy Birthday
And I feel the way that every child should
Sit and listen, sit and listen
Went to school and I was very nervous
No one knew me, no one knew me
Hello teacher tell me what's my lesson
Look right through me, look right through me
And I find it kind of funny
I find it kind of sad
The dreams in which I'm dying
Are the best I've ever had
I find it hard to tell you
I find it hard to take
When people run in circles
It's a very very, mad world, mad world
Enlarge your world, mad world
[Sighs] Not like that anyone cares...
STOP BEING PESSIMISTIC.
It's no matter if you're stopping it cos you have no drive, fanfic writing is nothing but fun.
Writing for another fandom or just stop writing for awhile willl help you, as you said earlier.
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Originally Posted by Detective-san
A small draft for my still
unnamed alternate setting fic.
Spoiler for BEHOLD!!!:
The boy contemplated on her words, words that
he'd both known and feared for years, and yet
it's strange, all this time he feared he would not
be able to accept these words.
And yet here he is, calm, no, calmer than he's
ever felt, though not painless, he could still do what
he knows that he must, what he's known for years.
"...tomorrow, I'm telling him tomorrow." The girl's
words carried uncertainty, which he, her best friend,
could easily alleviate from her, planning to confess
her feelings to the boy she's liked since their childhood,
this, he could easily help her with.
Despite having been in love for her nearly as long, he
holds no more weight in his heart, none of the things
he's tormented himself with are left, it's time.
"Go ahead, Ichika may be a block-head, but I'm sure
your feelings will reach him, even if you have to spell it out."
The girls face lighted up at his words, no longer holding
uncertainty, she happily nodded and ran off back home,
for it was late, and tomorrow will be a long day.
The closure he'd wanted all these years has finally come,
the prologue for his life was now over, and he was now
free to write out the rest of the story as he chose.
"Goodbye, Houki..."
Turning away, he walked in the opposite direction, with
a smile not even he has seen on himself before, it was
a special occasion after all.
"...time to let you go."
The prologue to the rest of his life, had ended.
It's painfully obvious how bad I am at 3rd-person,
so comments and suggestions are sorely needed
at this point, I appreciate all of them.
R U Mad? Cos that's THE most heartwarming (failed) IchikaHouki I've read so far. This is incredible!
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Originally Posted by Eratas123
@ Wavehawk and Zero - Next <Ren> Draft, tell me what you think and any suggestions.
Spoiler:
Mike suited up with the rest of his squad to for the upcoming mission, they were supposed to capture some kind of fugitive that escaped into the facility a few hours ago.
"Mike, are you ready?" A female dressed in the same armor asked as she walked up to him.
"Yeah, don't worry Lucy, this'll be easy."
The entire squad had some of the highest ranking operatives in terms of field efficiency and teamwork. Nothing could go wrong.
Mark and his team were preparing the final stages before the operation started, they had been briefed for everything they had to do and now just had to wait for the specialist to show up.
"What's taking her so long? You'd think she'd be on time for a mission." Mark complained
"Are you talking about me?" A cocky voice suddenly asked behind him.
Turning around. Mark saw a young girl, probably no older than 15 or 16, staring at him with a smirk on her face.
"You're the specialist then?" Mark was briefed that the specialist was young but even he didn't expect a teenager to show up.
"That's right, the names <Ren>." Her smirk was made unsettling by her snake-like eyes. "Are you the team that's supposed to catch this guy?"
Mark straightened up before he answered. "Yes, me and my squad have been assigned to capture the fugitive."
<Ren> stared right at him after he answered, her eyes seemingly digging into his soul.
"Do me a favor and ask for more men will you?" She nonchalantly replied.
"What? There's ten of us here armed to the teeth with weaponry, one fugivitive won't be a problem."
"Suit yourself then." She shrugged her shoulders. "I'm just here in case you guys fail."
Mark turned away from the teenage girl and back towards his team, the mission was starting.
"Everyone split up into groups of two, once you find him radio us for the capture. Is that clear?"
Mark was the squad leader for this mission, they usually swapped roles so they can cover for others if they could not make it.
"Understood!"
The group of six split into the different parts of the facility, each not knowing what they had gotten themselves into.
Team 1
The two commandos made their way slowly down the corridor, each paying rapt attention to their surroundings as they proceeded.
"Hey, what do we know about this fugitive anyway?" The first one asked.
"We weren't given much intel on him, all we know is that he's some kind of terrorist." The second replied.
Both continued to make their way down the hallway.
*Clang*
A wrench had fallen down one of the toolboxes and smashed against the floor.
"What was that!?"
"It's just a wrench, keep moving."
Neither saw the dark shadow following them until it was too late.
"Hey, how dangerous is this guy anyway?"
"They said he's taken out everybody sent in so far, that's why they're sending us in."
Their team had always succeeded where others failed.
*WHIIIIIR*
"WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT!?"
The generators in the room suddenly stopped running, scaring the living hell out of the two operatives.
"It's just the generators. Wait here, I'll go check.
The second operative made his way past the maze of generators towards the center of the room, the darkness obscuring his vision the entire way.
*CLANG* *CLANG*
The sounds of banging metal suddenly echoed all around the room and he held his gun tighter to himself.
*CLANG* *CLANG*
The sound kept getting louder and louder, it obscured his focus and sealed his doom.
*BANG*
A gunshot rang through the air, the operative went down soon after.
'1 down, 5 to go.'
The gunshot had earned the attention of the first operative and he immediately rushed to the site of the sound.
On the ground he found the body of his teammate, the body armor blasted apart by ballistic impact.
"Hey! Are you alright!?"
He immediately kneeled down and tried to resuscitate his comrade.
*CLANG* *CLANG*
The sounds of metal hitting metal once again echoed but they were ignored by the frantic man trying to save the other's life.
*Click*
The tip of a gun suddenly found it's way to the back of his head, he couldn't react before the pull of a trigger ended his life.
*BANG*
The one holding the shotgun smirked as the blood splattered onto his pale skin, the contrasting colors giving him the appearance of some kind of demon.
"Team 1 lease respond, we need a status report."
The radio the recently killed man had suddenly blared to life.The albino picked it up before replying into it.
"Hi~ I'm afraid these two can't get back to you, they're taking a trip to heaven and they can't get back. I'll be sure to tell them you said hello."
He smirked before turning off the radio, he still had 4 more to go.
HOLY FUCK the grimdark atmosphere, while ain't as thick as Old Man's, still good!
Since you're a nurse-in-training can you help me out: what types of medical machinery would Ichika need after he had the IS core installed, but was still in a medically induced coma?
@ Falco - I'm not a nurse but I'd imagine that at the very least he'd need a life support machine to keep him alive while he's in a coma along with a pacemaker to keep his heart stable. Hope this helps.
@ Meister - What's Magikoi? Anyway, so you think the going to drink with the rest of the teachers is a good idea?
Also, are there any other male teachers in your fanon?
Side note - I'm just wondering how ANY of the male OC's can function in a normal society. Look at the list:
Marvelous Maximillian - 19 year old teacher and combat tactician who teaches probably the most anti-male and dysfunction junction class.
Kyuukai Tokiwa - 17 year old combat engineer and specialist agent.
Irish - 14 year old Gynophobic child terrorist with mental issues.
Octans - 17 year old engineer who's grown disillusioned with life.
Inami Arisawa - 16 year old power armor pilot that constantly deals with danger.
Location: Fighting against those who oppress the system
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@ Zero:
Since you're a nurse-in-training can you help me out: what types of medical machinery would Ichika need after he had the IS core installed, but was still in a medically induced coma?
Hmm, at least Dextrose IV, to give him sugar to live.
Maybe Heparin light dose to prevent blood from pooling.
2011-10-21, 06:23
At least the <Ren> capturing Irish part won't come until he kills all of the 6 team members.
Author
It's really helping.
Irish isn't the same as the one I wrote in the drafts: He's psychotic, doesn't reason with anyone, and does some truly villain protagonist things later on.
Now I'm gonna rip my hair out trying to do Irish and Tatenash's date
Wish me luck
