Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Dr_Tom]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Sorry, I guess everyone uses different grading scales. And it's not overdoing it, I based that off one of my friends in highschool. On a scoring of 100 (perfect) to zero ( got nothing right), Nanoha only misses maybe one question per test, if that.

A: IIII
B: II

Nanoha wins!

And yes they will progress differntly. The more of Nanoha you see the more of her line will be revealed. The more of Fate you pick, the more her line will show.

Nanoha is a little softer and shyer, whereas FAte is aggressive and not holding back. Whichever you like seeing more, pick that person.

The only differnce would be, like this upcoming one, you will see inside Nanoha's mind, but you have no idea what Fate is thinking. Example after this:

Spoiler for Vampire!ate pt.7:

It was weird, dancing against someone I just met. People were all around me and music was thumping in my chest with each beat. I didn't really worry about 'knowing the moves' to the songs because everyone just seemed to be doing little more than bouncing with the beat. Fate, not surprisingly, drew lots of attention to us by her actions. Despite being in an outrageously gothic frilly dress so didn't seem hindered at all. Her hands were always on me, hips grinding and leading at the same time.

I didn't know if I should feel embarrassed or not because it was such a... provocative motion. Everyone else was doing the same so I could accept it as just 'dancing' but at the same time I wish she would give me a little space.

When we danced enough to make my legs weak I gave her a small questing look and was lead off the dance floor without any protest. Our seats at the bar were taken now so Fate lead me over to a semi-circle booth and sat down next to me. Her arm went over my shoulders and I leaned away lightly.

"Oh, sorry," Fate moved away from me and I sighed out thankfully. "Did I frighten you?"

"... Just a little." I shyly looked down and licked my lips. I was starting to lean toward the fact of Fate asking me on a 'date' as a date, and not a get together like I assumed... "Um, Fate-chan?"

"Yes?" She was comfortable it seemed, leaned back with both arms over the back of the booth. She smiled at me and I noticed again that her K-9 teeth were... just barely noticably longer than normal.

"Why did you ask me to come with you tonight?"

"To get to know you."

"Why?"

"Because you are cute."

"...Okaaaay," I rolled my eyes and leaned back as well. "Um... Are you...you know?"

"I know?"

I blushed. "You know," I said again, getting a chuckle.

"Are you afraid of my answer?" I didn't know how to respond so she went on. "Then don't ask me what you don't want to know."

"That's no fair." I pouted.

Fate leaned forward and our eyes met. Her facial expression changed from daring and teasing to a softer shade that made me settle down some. "Are you having fun? Honestly?"

"...Yes." I sipped the glass of water than was just sat down in front of me. "Thank you."

"Welcome." She drank as well and crossed her legs. "I sometimes come off as aggressive, please don't be afraid of me okay?"

"...Okay," I felt even more at ease and started seeing her as a possible friend. True, a weird one, but she was obviously trying to please me and that meant a lot. "Fate-chan, tell me about yourself?"

She beamed at me. "What do you want to know?"

"What are your hobbies? Besides part time jobs?"

"Anything really. I like to read a lot, I've studied martial arts-"

"Really!?" I knew I interrupted her and sank back.

"Interested?"

"Yes," I smiled happily. "I heard it's really good exercise."

Fate tapped a piece of ice into her water and watched it float back up to the top. "It helps me stay fit." Her eyebrow arched slightly. "Want me to teach you somethings?"

"I-I'd be too embarrassed..."

"No one will have to see." She nodded. "When you are comfortable, I can come to your place? Will that be okay?"

My place... Sure, nothing could happen there. It would help pass the time too since I can't study too hard while watching the register. "Okay, sounds fun."

"A second date already," She teased me happily. "I think I'm doing good?"

"Well," I corrected her. "you're doing well."

"Oh great, an English snob." WE both laughed at her joke and I honestly felt really comfortable with this weird girl now.

I would even say I was looking forward to seeing her again after tongiht.

Spoiler for differnt POVs:

When dancing, you got to see Nanoha's thoughts, how she saw everyone doing it, how she got used to it, and how she was a little uncomfortable with Fate being so close.

If it was Fate's POV, it would be more of Fate observing Nanoha, learning how she moved, and a more 'sensual' approach as she denied herself a taste of her blood. Also she would have noticed another dancer whose movements were too good to be a human...

But since it was Nanoha's POV, we missed that part >: D

[EDIT]: Page claim for POVs!

so what you're saying is basically, the relationship is cemented but how it comes about and is handled is different? an example, we see more Nanoha we get a more shy, romantic, slow moving relationship. Where as we get more Fate, it's more aggressive and raw?

That's what it's sounding like to me, correct me if I'm wrong.

Oh, and thanks for getting Dream Wing out that night. Like I said, I meant no offence by saying you don't seem to hit your ETA's.

[Advent000]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Sorry, I guess everyone uses different grading scales. And it's not overdoing it, I based that off one of my friends in highschool. On a scoring of 100 (perfect) to zero ( got nothing right), Nanoha only misses maybe one question per test, if that.

A: IIII
B: II

Nanoha wins!

And yes they will progress differntly. The more of Nanoha you see the more of her line will be revealed. The more of Fate you pick, the more her line will show.

Nanoha is a little softer and shyer, whereas FAte is aggressive and not holding back. Whichever you like seeing more, pick that person.

The only differnce would be, like this upcoming one, you will see inside Nanoha's mind, but you have no idea what Fate is thinking. Example after this:

Spoiler for Vampire!ate pt.7:

It was weird, dancing against someone I just met. People were all around me and music was thumping in my chest with each beat. I didn't really worry about 'knowing the moves' to the songs because everyone just seemed to be doing little more than bouncing with the beat. Fate, not surprisingly, drew lots of attention to us by her actions. Despite being in an outrageously gothic frilly dress so didn't seem hindered at all. Her hands were always on me, hips grinding and leading at the same time.

I didn't know if I should feel embarrassed or not because it was such a... provocative motion. Everyone else was doing the same so I could accept it as just 'dancing' but at the same time I wish she would give me a little space.

When we danced enough to make my legs weak I gave her a small questing look and was lead off the dance floor without any protest. Our seats at the bar were taken now so Fate lead me over to a semi-circle booth and sat down next to me. Her arm went over my shoulders and I leaned away lightly.

"Oh, sorry," Fate moved away from me and I sighed out thankfully. "Did I frighten you?"

"... Just a little." I shyly looked down and licked my lips. I was starting to lean toward the fact of Fate asking me on a 'date' as a date, and not a get together like I assumed... "Um, Fate-chan?"

"Yes?" She was comfortable it seemed, leaned back with both arms over the back of the booth. She smiled at me and I noticed again that her K-9 teeth were... just barely noticably longer than normal.

"Why did you ask me to come with you tonight?"

"To get to know you."

"Why?"

"Because you are cute."

"...Okaaaay," I rolled my eyes and leaned back as well. "Um... Are you...you know?"

"I know?"

I blushed. "You know," I said again, getting a chuckle.

"Are you afraid of my answer?" I didn't know how to respond so she went on. "Then don't ask me what you don't want to know."

"That's no fair." I pouted.

Fate leaned forward and our eyes met. Her facial expression changed from daring and teasing to a softer shade that made me settle down some. "Are you having fun? Honestly?"

"...Yes." I sipped the glass of water than was just sat down in front of me. "Thank you."

"Welcome." She drank as well and crossed her legs. "I sometimes come off as aggressive, please don't be afraid of me okay?"

"...Okay," I felt even more at ease and started seeing her as a possible friend. True, a weird one, but she was obviously trying to please me and that meant a lot. "Fate-chan, tell me about yourself?"

She beamed at me. "What do you want to know?"

"What are your hobbies? Besides part time jobs?"

"Anything really. I like to read a lot, I've studied martial arts-"

"Really!?" I knew I interrupted her and sank back.

"Interested?"

"Yes," I smiled happily. "I heard it's really good exercise."

Fate tapped a piece of ice into her water and watched it float back up to the top. "It helps me stay fit." Her eyebrow arched slightly. "Want me to teach you somethings?"

"I-I'd be too embarrassed..."

"No one will have to see." She nodded. "When you are comfortable, I can come to your place? Will that be okay?"

My place... Sure, nothing could happen there. It would help pass the time too since I can't study too hard while watching the register. "Okay, sounds fun."

"A second date already," She teased me happily. "I think I'm doing good?"

"Well," I corrected her. "you're doing well."

"Oh great, an English snob." WE both laughed at her joke and I honestly felt really comfortable with this weird girl now.

I would even say I was looking forward to seeing her again after tongiht.

Spoiler for differnt POVs:

When dancing, you got to see Nanoha's thoughts, how she saw everyone doing it, how she got used to it, and how she was a little uncomfortable with Fate being so close.

If it was Fate's POV, it would be more of Fate observing Nanoha, learning how she moved, and a more 'sensual' approach as she denied herself a taste of her blood. Also she would have noticed another dancer whose movements were too good to be a human...

But since it was Nanoha's POV, we missed that part >: D

[EDIT]: Page claim for POVs!

I think I see know, but if say we miss something from a pov will we get a mention of it in the next one of the person that was missed, say in the next or a latter point of veiw, will Fate think about the dancer and how Nanoha was moving, because I don't want to miss a single thing!

And thanks for explaning the grading system.

Oh, whats the letters and colour for voting this time?

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Advent000

Oh, whats the letters and colour for voting this time?

any colour :3

Example on system again:

Spoiler for another point of view:

Say, as before, during dancing

Nanoha: Focuses on Fate and how she feels. Relationship moves forward a bit no matter what, but we SEE it moving.

Fate:Thinks about Nanoha, what they're doing, a little vampire moment, and she notices someone who could potentially be a vampire.

-next part-

Nanoha: finishes date, goes home, reflects on it, see relationship moving.
Fate: finishes date, splits with Nanoha, and roof-top jumps to look for something to pass the time. Thinks about her night, sees relationship move from Fate's POV

-next part-
Nanoha: Goes to class, opens her bakery, bakes, meets Fate, talks
Fate: Does her thing, and starts hunting for the vampire(?) she saw, possibly something else, goes to see nanoha and talks

Those are not what's going to happen, but that's the idea of it. The relationship will progress no matter what, but depending on who you select, you will see either daily life or action ( sometimes the roles will be reversed).

Picture it like this: You are reading a story from 3rd person, and at any given moment you can 1st person one of the characters. Everything will happen the same, but in some cases you will see something that the other character wouldn't.

Fate isn't always action, Nanoha isn't always romance. It mixes up, you just have the freedom to in-depth the story from any given point.

[Gillian]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.6:

Nanoha looked at me in thought for a few moments before actually answering my simple question with one of her own. "What do you want to know?"

"Anything," I moved my hand to accept the ordered drink; a scotch on the rocks. I could probably drink a gallon of Everclear and still not be drunk, but the taste of this really seemed to sit with me for some reason. Nanoha was fiddling with her drink, moving the straw around while probably pondering if she was supposed to mix the cool whip on top into her drink or if it was meant to be enjoyed separate. Finally she decided to simply take a sip and smiled down at it in appreciation, smacking her lips. "It's an acquired taste," I giggled at her. For once I was actually amused, my smile real. She was a funny girl, a goody-goody out of her element.

"Well," Nanoha pulled up her straw and sucked the cream off the end, eyes darting around at the many things around us. "Umm...."

"How old are you?" I offered her a place to start.

"Nineteen."

" School?"

"The Christan college in town."

"The private one?"

"Mm-hmm," Nanoha drank again. "My parents made me go."

I was interested now. That college was extremely picky with their students, which meant that pretty little head of hers was for more than decoration like I originally had thought. "Get good grades?"

The girl scratched her cheek. "Um, 4.7 GPA."

"Point seven?"

"I've never made below a ninety-five," Instead of bragging she seemed almost ashamed of this fact. "My parents are really strict... They would disown me if they found out I came here..."

"Don't worry, no one would ever see you here unless they were here as well. If that was the case, they couldn't tattle on you without putting themselves at risk."

"Yeah," She nodded. "And yourself?"

"I don't go to school."

"Job?"

"Everything," I waved off the annoyed look. "No, I'm not avoiding. Really, I do everything. I have a hobby of getting part time jobs. I'm well off money wise but I don't like wasting away my life, so I like to learn different things." I seemed to have picked up her interest now. "More on me later, right now we're talking about you." I leaned forward and tapped her nose, making the girl jump lightly and blush so red I thought she might pass out.

"Uhmm...." She averted her eyes and looked at the dance floor. "I live above my bakery, alone. It's a branch from my parent's main one...I was kind of forced into picking it up as well."

"You don't like baking?"

"I like it. I really do, actually... but..."

"But what?"

Nanoha sighed and moved to sit properly at the bar instead of facing me. "I just feel like... I'm 'wasting my life away', you know?" I gave a small nod and faced the front as well. "I know there is something more out there. Something that I've never done..." Her ponytail seemed to react to her mood and sagged down as her head did. "I've never been to a party before... Never just went out to have a 'girl's night out'... It was always just 'study, study,study' and 'get a good degree, geta good job, marry a nice husband'... NEver once 'what do you want to do?'"

"What do you want to do?"

She stayed silent a while and I realized over our course of talking we had finished our drinks. "I want to..." She looked behind us.

"Let's dance."

"huh?" I grabbed her wrist and pulled her along with me while going to the floor. "Wha? I don't... Fate-chan!"

"-chan?" I grinned, getting behind her and putting mt arm around her stomach, grinding to he music. "We're that close already?"

"B-but!"

"Shake those hips!" I twirled around, going face to face and moving with the beat. Slowly Nanoha started moving as well, a smile appearing on her face as she got the hang of it. "That's the way!"

Vote:
A.) Nanoha's POV
B.) Fate's POV

Votes can be any color, but if you use BOLD and PINK, you'll get cookies

arghs,
I can't get it, that I missed/overlooked that part

Originally Posted by Satashi

Sorry, I guess everyone uses different grading scales. And it's not overdoing it, I based that off one of my friends in highschool. On a scoring of 100 (perfect) to zero ( got nothing right), Nanoha only misses maybe one question per test, if that.

A: IIII
B: II

Nanoha wins!

And yes they will progress differntly. The more of Nanoha you see the more of her line will be revealed. The more of Fate you pick, the more her line will show.

Nanoha is a little softer and shyer, whereas FAte is aggressive and not holding back. Whichever you like seeing more, pick that person.

The only differnce would be, like this upcoming one, you will see inside Nanoha's mind, but you have no idea what Fate is thinking. Example after this:

Spoiler for Vampire!ate pt.7:

It was weird, dancing against someone I just met. People were all around me and music was thumping in my chest with each beat. I didn't really worry about 'knowing the moves' to the songs because everyone just seemed to be doing little more than bouncing with the beat. Fate, not surprisingly, drew lots of attention to us by her actions. Despite being in an outrageously gothic frilly dress so didn't seem hindered at all. Her hands were always on me, hips grinding and leading at the same time.

I didn't know if I should feel embarrassed or not because it was such a... provocative motion. Everyone else was doing the same so I could accept it as just 'dancing' but at the same time I wish she would give me a little space.

When we danced enough to make my legs weak I gave her a small questing look and was lead off the dance floor without any protest. Our seats at the bar were taken now so Fate lead me over to a semi-circle booth and sat down next to me. Her arm went over my shoulders and I leaned away lightly.

"Oh, sorry," Fate moved away from me and I sighed out thankfully. "Did I frighten you?"

"... Just a little." I shyly looked down and licked my lips. I was starting to lean toward the fact of Fate asking me on a 'date' as a date, and not a get together like I assumed... "Um, Fate-chan?"

"Yes?" She was comfortable it seemed, leaned back with both arms over the back of the booth. She smiled at me and I noticed again that her K-9 teeth were... just barely noticably longer than normal.

"Why did you ask me to come with you tonight?"

"To get to know you."

"Why?"

"Because you are cute."

"...Okaaaay," I rolled my eyes and leaned back as well. "Um... Are you...you know?"

"I know?"

I blushed. "You know," I said again, getting a chuckle.

"Are you afraid of my answer?" I didn't know how to respond so she went on. "Then don't ask me what you don't want to know."

"That's no fair." I pouted.

Fate leaned forward and our eyes met. Her facial expression changed from daring and teasing to a softer shade that made me settle down some. "Are you having fun? Honestly?"

"...Yes." I sipped the glass of water than was just sat down in front of me. "Thank you."

"Welcome." She drank as well and crossed her legs. "I sometimes come off as aggressive, please don't be afraid of me okay?"

"...Okay," I felt even more at ease and started seeing her as a possible friend. True, a weird one, but she was obviously trying to please me and that meant a lot. "Fate-chan, tell me about yourself?"

She beamed at me. "What do you want to know?"

"What are your hobbies? Besides part time jobs?"

"Anything really. I like to read a lot, I've studied martial arts-"

"Really!?" I knew I interrupted her and sank back.

"Interested?"

"Yes," I smiled happily. "I heard it's really good exercise."

Fate tapped a piece of ice into her water and watched it float back up to the top. "It helps me stay fit." Her eyebrow arched slightly. "Want me to teach you somethings?"

"I-I'd be too embarrassed..."

"No one will have to see." She nodded. "When you are comfortable, I can come to your place? Will that be okay?"

My place... Sure, nothing could happen there. It would help pass the time too since I can't study too hard while watching the register. "Okay, sounds fun."

"A second date already," She teased me happily. "I think I'm doing good?"

"Well," I corrected her. "you're doing well."

"Oh great, an English snob." WE both laughed at her joke and I honestly felt really comfortable with this weird girl now.

I would even say I was looking forward to seeing her again after tongiht.

Spoiler for differnt POVs:

When dancing, you got to see Nanoha's thoughts, how she saw everyone doing it, how she got used to it, and how she was a little uncomfortable with Fate being so close.

If it was Fate's POV, it would be more of Fate observing Nanoha, learning how she moved, and a more 'sensual' approach as she denied herself a taste of her blood. Also she would have noticed another dancer whose movements were too good to be a human...

But since it was Nanoha's POV, we missed that part >: D

[EDIT]: Page claim for POVs!

nice chapter
it's good to see Nanoha could make a friend
now there aren't any POV's to choose?

PS: I kind of get the feeling to play Vampire:Masquerade Bloodlines

[Satashi]

edited post. Be sure to vote!

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical, special:

*snip*

*vanishes into a mirror*

:3 Nice to get some back story.

And now....

a completely different side of Phantom of the Lyrical.

Spoiler for The "Story":

Since this scene is quite plot oriented I thought I'd make a few notes on the plot points that are important for anyone who hasn't seen The Phantom of the Opera . I'm not putting much work into this in case Eva or someone else actually wants to write the beginning of the story. Also I apologize for this not perfectly matching what Eva wrote in the first part >,<.

-Zafira and Chrono have been assigned to manage the TSAB's annual three month long run of an Opera.
-Hayate, who typically stars in the productions, had a bit of an accident right before opening night so Nanoha, who normally did small parts, took over for the night.
-Attending the show that night (as well as having attended the rehearsal) was Yuuno Scrya, Nanoha's childhood friend. Yuuno, a good friend of Chrono and Zafira, is helping sponsor the event. Yuuno goes to see Nanoha after the performance. She's happy to see him but rejects his invitation to go out.
-Then we get Eva's awesome scenes

-It's now the next day and Nanoha is no where to be seen...

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical: Notes:

Spoiler for Acompanying song:

Please watch from 0.54 on.

Italics=Singing

Zafira straightened his tie. This was a truly bothersome issue. He held tight to his walking cane as he steered himself through Mid’s busy streets. He marched up the steps to the bureau’s opera house. His opera house! Even if they were just renting it for three months as they always did it was still his! Not some silly little ghost’s. As he walked into the building he couldn’t take it anymore.

“Mystery after gala night!” He handed his hat to a worker standing by. “It says mystery of soprano's flight!” Another man helped him remove his heavy blue coat. “Mystified all the papers say,” Zafira smacked his paper into the chest of a third surprised looking worker. “We are mystified, we suspect foul play.”

Zafira marched up the stairs trying to keep calm and not show his anger to his underlings, “Bad news on soprano's scene,” He rubbed his forehead. “First Hayate now Nanoha.” He sighed, there was a bright side; “Still, at least, the seats get sold.

“Gossip's worth its weight in gold.”

He nodded to a few lingering officers, “What a way to run a bureau. Spare me these unending trials.” Once a year! They did this once a year! And never before Ms. Takamachi came along had they ever had a problem! “Half your cast disappears but the crowd still cheers,” and cheer they had. “Opera! To hell with Gluck and Handel. Have a scandal and you're sure to have a hit!” They were sold out for three weeks straight and the TSAB’s opera only ever ran for three months.

As he started down a hall his partner cut him off.

“Damnable!” Chrono stormed up to him. “Will they all walk out? This is damnable!”

Zafira tried to calm down his friend though he was in no mood to help. “Chrono please don't shout!” He placed a hand on Chrono’s shoulder. “It's publicity! And the take is vast. Free publicity!” And the Bureau needed all it could get.

“But we have no cast!” Chrono spat out. He was turning red.

“Chrono, have you seen the queue?” It was out the door everyday.

Chrono pulled out a small envelope.

“Ah, it seems you've got one too.”

He opened it up and started to read it as they walked down the hall. “Dear Chrono, What a charming gala, Nanoha was, in a word, sublime. We were hardly bereft when Hayate left. On that note, the diva's a disaster, must you cast her when she's seasons past her prime!?!”

Zafira pulled out his own, “Dear Zafira, Just a brief reminder. My salary has not been paid. Send it care of the ghost by return of post. P.T.O No one likes a debtor so it's better if my orders are obeyed!” He crumpled up the letter.

They looked at each other and spoke in sequence, “Who would have the gall to send this? Someone with a puerile brain.”

“These are both signed O.G.” Zafira shook his head.

Chrono threatened to pop a blood vessel, “Who the hell is he?”

It hit them at the same time, “Opera Ghost!”

“It's nothing short of shocking.”

“He is mocking our position!” Chrono threw his hands into the air.

“In addition he wants money!” Surely this fellow didn’t need it.

“What a funny apparition!” Considering they didn’t have much.

They spoke at once again, “To expect a large retainer. Nothing plainer, he is clearly quite insane!”

“Where is she?”

They turned to the bottom of the stairs where young Yuuno was standing holding a letter as well.

Zafira raised an eyebrow, “You mean Hayate?”

“I mean miss Takamachi. Where is she?” He begun to march up the steps.

Zafira shook his head and crossed his arms, “Well how should we know?”

“I want an answer! I take it that you sent me this note!”

Zafira and Chrono started to walk back the way they came.

“What's all this nonsense?” As if they didn’t have enough on their minds.

“Of course not!” Zafira had not sent any notes.

“Don't look at us!” Chrono waved his own note.

“She's not with you then?” Yuuno’s expression grew confused.

“Of course not!” Chrono yelled down. Why would she be?

“We're in the dark!” Zafira followed up with.

“Admirals don’t argue.” Yuuno held up a hand and the note. “Isn't this the letter you wrote?”

The three met on the central steps. Zafira eyed him, “And what is it that we're meant to have wrote?” He hit his head with his hand, bad grammar. “Written!”

Chrono snatched the letter from Yuuno’s hands, “Do not fear for Miss Takamachi, The angel of music has her under his wing. Make no attempt to see her again.” Well this was a troublesome letter.

Yuuno looked concerned, “If you didn't write it, then who did?”

Zafira opened his mouth to reply but—

“Where is he?”

The three men turned to see Hayate Yagami and her entourage storming through the doors towards them.

Zafira held his hand up in greeting, “Ah, welcome back!”

“Your precious patron. Where is he?” Hayate demanded.

Yuuno sighed, “What is it now?”

“I have your letter,” She too had a letter, a letter she waved it in Yuuno’s face. “A letter which I rather resent.”

“And did you send it?” Zafira knew he hadn’t but to keep Hayate happy…

“Of course not!” Yuuno looked shocked.

“As if he would!” Chrono looked indignant.

“You didn't send it?” Hayate still looked suspicious.

“Of course not!” Yuuno had just said that.

Zafira was confused. “What's going on?”

“You dare to tell me that this is not the letter you sent?” Hayate thumped the letter with her hand and shoved it in Yunno’s.

“And what is it that I'm meant to have sent?” He flipped the letter open and began to read. “Your days at the Bureau Opera are numbered Nanoha Takamachi...”

“Nanoha! Nanoha Takamachi!” Hayate threw her hands into the air.

Yuuno ignored her, “...will be singing on your behalf tonight. Be prepared for a great misfortune should you attempt to take her place.” He looked to be deep in thought.

Chrono and Zafira looked at each other and nodded, “Far too many notes for my taste” they both took Hayate’s arms and started to lead her up the stairs. “And most of them about Nanoha! All we've heard since we came is Miss Takamachi's name--!”

“Miss Takamachi has returned.”

All of the group turned to see Alicia at the bottom of the steps with the young Miss Arf behind her.

Zafira furrowed his brow. “I hope no worse for wear as far as we're concerned.”

“Where precisely is she now?” Chrono humphed.

“I thought it best she was alone,” Alicia didn’t seem intimidated at all by the high ranking officers in front of her.

“She needed rest,” Arf added in from behind.

Yuuno stepped forward, “May I see her?”

“No, Monsieur,” Alicia shook her head, “She will see no one.”

“Will she sing, will she sing?” Hayate stepped forward her loyal green haired companion beside her.

“Here, I have a note,” Alicia ignored the diva and held the note out.

“Let me see it!” Hayate, Yuuno and Chrono all dove for it.

“Please,” Zafira took the note. He cleared his throat. “Gentlemen, I have now sent you several notes of the most amiable nature detailing how my theatre is to be run.
You have not...”


“…followed my instructions. I shall give you one last chance,” The Phantom scratched out the words on paper. She would not let that morning’s incident deter her plans.

“Nanoha Takamachi has returned to you and I am anxious her career should progress. In the new production of Il Muto,” It was quite simple, all they had to do was follow her instructions. “You will therefore cast Hayate as the pageboy and put Miss Takamachi in the role of Countess.” Why couldn’t they follow orders properly? “The role which Miss Takamachi plays calls for charm and appeal, the role of the pageboy is silent, which makes my casting, in a word, ideal.”

The phantom poured hot wax over the envelope. It formed the shape of a small triangle, her symbol. “I shall watch the performance from my normal seat in box five, which will be kept empty for me. Should these commands be ignored a disaster beyond your imagination will occur.

“I remain, gentlemen, your obedient servant,” The letter was tucked into her breast pocket. “O.G.”

“Nanoha!” Hayate shouted.

Chrono rolled his eyes, “Whatever next?”

“It's all a plot to help Nanoha!”

Zafira threw his hands up, “This is insane...”

“I know who sent this,” Hayate spun around and pointed at Yuuno, “This boy--her lover!” She begun to march off.

“Indeed?” Yuuno watched her with wary eyes. “Can you believe this?”

“Miss Hayate!” Chrono followed after her.

“O traditori!”

“This is a joke!” Zafira growled up at the ceiling.

“This changes nothing!” Chrono sped up to keep up with the speed demon.

“O menititori!”

“What does that mean!” Chrono yelled.

“Miss Hayate,” Zafira was desperate.

“You are our star!” Chrono was getting close to hair pulling.

“And always will be!” Zafira tried to calm the raging ace.

“Miss Hayate,” Somehow she had managed to march them all the way to her temporary quarters where her entourage started to take away her things.

“This man is mad!” Chrono held up his note.

“We don’t take orders!” Zafira crushed it.

“Miss Takamachi will be playing the pageboy” Zafira assured her, “the silent role...”

At the same time Chrono and Zafira nodded, “Hayate will be taking the lead.”

Hayate shook her head and lead them out of the room again. She lead them through the opera house and to the back of the stage. “It's useless trying to appease me!
You're only saying this to please me!”

Chrono motioned stabbing her in the back.

“Signori, e vero?”

“She speaks Italian?”Chrono’s mouth hung wide.

Zafira shrugged.

“Non, non, non voglio udire! Lasciatemi morire!”

“What does that mean?” Chrono looked to Zafira but he didn’t know either. They both had no choice but to follow her all the way through the back of the stage.

“O padre mio! Dio!”

Alicia shook her head, somewhere along the line she had caught up to them. “Who scorn his word, beware to those...”

“You have reviled me!”

“The angel sees, the angel knows...”

“You have rebuked me!”

“Miss Hayate, pardon us.”

“You have replaced me!”

“Please, Miss Hayate. We beseech you...”

“This hour shall see your darkest fears”

Yuuno and Arf joined them as they rounded into the opening hall again. “I must see her...”

“Abbandonata! Deseredata! O, sventurata!”

“What’s with the Italian?”

“The angel sees, the angel hears...”

“Where did she go?”

“Abbandonata! Disgraziata!”

“Hayate, sing for us! Don’t be a martyr...”

“What new surprises lie in store...?”

“Our star!”

“Non vo' cantar!”

“Italian!”

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical: Prima Donna:

Spoiler for Accompanying song:

Hayate threw open the doors, only to be mobbed by a mass of fans.

“Miss Yagami! They called out, except for one blue haired girl who pushed to the front.

She held out a rose and Hayate took it, “Please deliver this to miss Takamachi.” Then she ran away like the devil was chasing her.

Hayate retreated slamming the doors shut. “Deliver! Me!”

Zafira and Chrono traded panicked glances.

“Your public needs you,” Chrono took her arm.

“We need you too,” Zafira took the other.

Hayate stuck her nose up. “Would you not rather have your precious little ingenue?”

“What’s an ingénue?” Chrono looked to Zafira who merely shrugged as usual.

“My question still stands.”

“Hayate.” Actually Nanoha had been much easier to work with. “No. The world wants you.”

They guided Hayate away from the now dissipating group and towards her dressing room.

“Prima donna, first lady of the stage!” The two men serenaded her, desperate to keep her happy. “Your devotees are on their knees to implore you!”

Chrono snatched a flower from a nearby bouquet and held it out, “Can you bow out when they're shouting your name?”

“Think of how they all adore you.” Zafira led her to a chair.

“Prima donna, enchant us once again,” Chrono and Zafira both grabbed chocolate boxes from a table and offered them to rejecting hands.

“Think of your muse...” Chrono threw his box behind himself.

“And of the queues round the theatre!” Zafira placed his neatly back on the table.

“Can you deny us the triumph in store?” Chrono and Zafira felt they were winning her over. Zafira grabbed a blue puppy and Chrono a diamond necklace.

Hayate seemed to be coming around.

“Sing, prima donna, once more!”

“Christine spoke of an angel...” Yuuno stood in a dark tunnel. If he couldn’t see Nanoha then he’d find out just who this “O.G” was.

“Prima donna, your song shall live again!” Hayate stood up, her ego thoroughly padded.

“Think of your public,” Zafira and Chrono grinned to one another. They were back on!

“You took a snub, but there's a public who needs you!” Hayate was full of it once again.

Alicia watched sadly from the doorway. “She has heard the voice of the angel of music...”

“Those who hear your voice liken you to an angel!”

“Think of their cry of undying support!”
Yuuno looked at his letter, “Is this her angel of music...?”

“We get our opera...” Chrono popped open the Champaign.

“She gets her limelight!” Zafira toasted to them.

“Follow where the limelight leads you!” Hayate allowed everyone to prepare her for her roles.

Their eyes widened in annoyance, “Leading ladies are a trial!”

Yuuno’s grip tightened on the letter, “Angel or madmadman...?”

“Prima donna, your song shall never die!” Hayate glided down from the stepstool in full costume.

Alicia shook her head and walked away, “Heaven help you, those who doubt...”

“You'll sing again, and to unending ovation!” She swished down the hall with Zafira and Chrono chasing after her.

“Orders! Warnings! Lunatic demands!” Yuuno gritted his teeth and bustled down the hall.

Alicia ran a hand through her hair, “This miscasting will invite damnation.”

“Think how you'll shine in that final encore! Sing, prima donna, once more!” Hayate waved her hand at ever passing person. She was back to her blissful diva self.

“Oh fools, to have flouted her warnings!”

“Surely, for her sake...” Yuuno bit his thumb.

“Surely there'll be further scenes worse than this!” Zafira and Chrono found themselves running as Hayate grew faster and faster.

“Think, before these demands are rejected!” Alicia warned no one in particular.

“I must see these demands are rejected!” Yuuno threw the note to the ground.

“Who'd believe a commander happy to relieve an officer, who's gone and slept with the patron? Yuuno and the soubrette, entwined in love's duet! Although he may demur, he must have been with her!” It wasn’t fair to Nanoha or Yuuno but Zafira and Chrono were happy to accept it as the truth if it meant they didn’t have to hear Hayate complain.

“O, fortunata! Non ancor abbandonata!”

“Italian again?”

As they grew nearer to the stage, Zafira and Chrono started to congratulate themselves. “You'd never get away with all this in a play, but if it's loudly sung and in a foreign tongue, it's just the sort of story audiences adore, in fact a perfect opera!”

“His game is over!” Yuuno climbed up to box 5.

“This is a game you cannot hope to win!” Alicia warned him.

“And in Box Five a new game will begin...”

“For, if his curse is on this opera...”

“Prima donna, the world is at your feet! A nation waits, and how it hates, to be cheated!” A finale prod and they would have Hayate on the stage.

“The stress that falls upon a famous prima donna! Terrible deseases, coughs and colds and sneezes!” Hayate finally took her place among the other the other cast members.

Zafira and Chrono thought it was much harder for them then their lead.

“Still, the dryest throat will reach the highest note, in search of perfect opera!”

Yuuno leaned on box 5’s balcony, “Nanoha plays the Pageboy, Hayate plays the Countess...” Admittedly he’d rather see Nanoha as the Countess but they couldn’t give in to an insane person.

They all began to speak at once, “Light up the stage with that age-old rapport! Sing, prima donna, once more!”

The Phantom cursed as she stood in the catwalk. How dare they? And that boy in her box! She had warned them and they were stupid enough to disobey her. “So, it is war between us!” Her words rang out but no one heard them in their own chattering.

She jumped onto the railing, anyone who looked up would get a terrible fright. “If these demands are not met, a disaster beyond your imagination will occur!”

“Once… MORE!”

Spoiler for Notes, and changes:

There aren't many major changes in the Notes scene with the exception of lampshading Hayate's random Italian (I contemplated cutting it or replacing it with Japanese but I didn't want to for various reasons. Other changes are really just names. (Takamachi is a very awkward word to replace Daee with ><)

Prima Donna has a lot of changes for several reasons. One, the lyrics I was using were the play's so it doesn't match the movie perfectly ><. Two I like having the phantom speak at the end so that's why I used that version. There are also a few extra lines added in (on being the joke on ingenue, a word I had to look up)

And in case anyone asks the only reason Alicia is in the role of Madam Giry is that she was the only person I could think of who would have some kind of connection to Fate other then Arf. Personally I don't think it conflicts with Eva's back story at all.

And I'm sorry to all Hayate fans (let's just think of it as she was having a really bad day). ><

Sorry for the length ^^; and Thank you for reading


and

B

[Advent000]

I choose B

[ghazghkull]

Advent, make your statement in Magenta if you're voting for Vampire!Fate :3

And I vote for B

[Gillian]

We need some Vampire action

B

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Satashi

@wanwan1203: I've tried contacting Arigatou Sheitarou a few times but I'm always ignored. Never read and fics but heard they were pretty good.

Eagle comes around here every now and then, just rarely T_T we miss you eagle!

GPA= Grade Point Average. 4.0 is all A's, and anything above that is generally insanely good, where classes give extra credit work and stuff to allow over a "perfect score". Nanoha's GPA basically says she almost never misses any questions on a test and does enough extra credit to push her score up even higher.

...Something that a certain vampire could put a stop to...

Hmm I foresee a drop in grades But can't blame Nanoha. Vampire Fate is...distracting. Thanks for the little lesson on GPA for us non-Americans.
About the authors: aww that's too bad. hrrghh but I shall wait!! yes, I shall!! lol

Originally Posted by Gillian

yeah, good stories

I think eagle took a longer break from writing or so
*don't know for sure*

Arigatou always took a month or so for an update
I think, she said, she will finish R e d R o s e s first
*unsure*

btw I miss you too, eagle

Long update is long.. but I think it will be worth it. Thanks.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical, special:

-cut-

I never knew Fate was this lonely.. She needs Nanoha!!

Originally Posted by Satashi

Sorry, I guess everyone uses different grading scales. And it's not overdoing it, I based that off one of my friends in highschool. On a scoring of 100 (perfect) to zero ( got nothing right), Nanoha only misses maybe one question per test, if that.

Your friend's a genius!

And yes they will progress differntly. The more of Nanoha you see the more of her line will be revealed. The more of Fate you pick, the more her line will show.

Nanoha is a little softer and shyer, whereas FAte is aggressive and not holding back. Whichever you like seeing more, pick that person.

Spoiler for differnt POVs:

When dancing, you got to see Nanoha's thoughts, how she saw everyone doing it, how she got used to it, and how she was a little uncomfortable with Fate being so close.

If it was Fate's POV, it would be more of Fate observing Nanoha, learning how she moved, and a more 'sensual' approach as she denied herself a taste of her blood. Also she would have noticed another dancer whose movements were too good to be a human...

But since it was Nanoha's POV, we missed that part >: D

[EDIT]: Page claim for POVs!

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

oO!!! That's interesting.. I'm curious about this "vampire" so B

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

:3 Nice to get some back story.

And now....

a completely different side of Phantom of the Lyrical.

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical: Prima Donna:

-cut-

Spoiler for Notes, and changes:

There aren't many major changes in the Notes scene with the exception of lampshading Hayate's random Italian (I contemplated cutting it or replacing it with Japanese but I didn't want to for various reasons. Other changes are really just names. (Takamachi is a very awkward word to replace Daee with ><)

Prima Donna has a lot of changes for several reasons. One, the lyrics I was using were the play's so it doesn't match the movie perfectly ><. Two I like having the phantom speak at the end so that's why I used that version. There are also a few extra lines added in (on being the joke on ingenue, a word I had to look up)

And in case anyone asks the only reason Alicia is in the role of Madam Giry is that she was the only person I could think of who would have some kind of connection to Fate other then Arf. Personally I don't think it conflicts with Eva's back story at all.

And I'm sorry to all Hayate fans (let's just think of it as she was having a really bad day). ><

oO;; Hayate must be PMSing.. a bad day indeed. I haven't seen Phantom of the Opera so this is full of suspense for me. Will they be feeling the wrath of a certain masked girl soon?

[Satashi]

I think this is relevant to phantom of the lyrical?

Spoiler for clip:

Miku/Kaito version!

[mercurianangel]

B
for

Spoiler for Bite Me:

0: 3

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

Spoiler for Bite Me:

0: 3

I love you.

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

Spoiler for Bite Me:

0: 3

*stares*
*stares some more*

"what are you looking at?"
Vampire Fate Testarossa
"ooh red eyes. pretty face too!"
uh huh.. .... ... huh? what face?
"..."
*gets smacked in the head by my conscience*
"the face is not located in the chest area you pervert!"
hurghh.. bew-...bewbs... urghh -faints-

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oh wow Fate.. that's some ehem.. cleavage.. *cough cough* cute outfit too!! Thanks for the pic. I'm such a Fate fan.

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

B
for

Spoiler for Bite Me:

0: 3

lol why didn't you set the bands in the same place as Fate originally had it as a child? :3



*giggles like a madman*

Originally Posted by wanwan1203

*stares*
*stares some more*

"what are you looking at?"
Vampire Fate Testarossa
"ooh red eyes. pretty face too!"
uh huh.. .... ... huh? what face?
"..."
*gets smacked in the head by my conscience*
"the face is not located in the chest area you pervert!"
hurghh.. bew-...bewbs... urghh -faints-

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oh wow Fate.. that's some ehem.. cleavage.. *cough cough* cute outfit too!! Thanks for the pic. I'm such a Fate fan.

*Whacks wanwan1203 over the head*

Get a hold of yourself man! :3

[markesellus]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

With no more to say:

Spoiler for City of Demons:

Download link:
http://rapidshare.com/files/11532993...emons.rar.html

Note: If it's to dificult to download by Rapidshare, tellme to upload it in other browser

And before you say, yes, this cover isn't exactly my best draw, but I supose it's Okay

Oh, one more thing, I think that if there is a Gramar mistake in this chapter, they will be minimum ... I hope

Downloading now...real comments will come later but I'm excited. I like how Nanoha is sitting on top of the spider.

Originally Posted by Satashi

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.6:

Nanoha looked at me in thought for a few moments before actually answering my simple question with one of her own. "What do you want to know?"

"Anything," I moved my hand to accept the ordered drink; a scotch on the rocks. I could probably drink a gallon of Everclear and still not be drunk, but the taste of this really seemed to sit with me for some reason. Nanoha was fiddling with her drink, moving the straw around while probably pondering if she was supposed to mix the cool whip on top into her drink or if it was meant to be enjoyed separate. Finally she decided to simply take a sip and smiled down at it in appreciation, smacking her lips. "It's an acquired taste," I giggled at her. For once I was actually amused, my smile real. She was a funny girl, a goody-goody out of her element.

"Well," Nanoha pulled up her straw and sucked the cream off the end, eyes darting around at the many things around us. "Umm...."

"How old are you?" I offered her a place to start.

"Nineteen."

" School?"

"The Christan college in town."

"The private one?"

"Mm-hmm," Nanoha drank again. "My parents made me go."

I was interested now. That college was extremely picky with their students, which meant that pretty little head of hers was for more than decoration like I originally had thought. "Get good grades?"

The girl scratched her cheek. "Um, 4.7 GPA."

"Point seven?"

"I've never made below a ninety-five," Instead of bragging she seemed almost ashamed of this fact. "My parents are really strict... They would disown me if they found out I came here..."

"Don't worry, no one would ever see you here unless they were here as well. If that was the case, they couldn't tattle on you without putting themselves at risk."

"Yeah," She nodded. "And yourself?"

"I don't go to school."

"Job?"

"Everything," I waved off the annoyed look. "No, I'm not avoiding. Really, I do everything. I have a hobby of getting part time jobs. I'm well off money wise but I don't like wasting away my life, so I like to learn different things." I seemed to have picked up her interest now. "More on me later, right now we're talking about you." I leaned forward and tapped her nose, making the girl jump lightly and blush so red I thought she might pass out.

"Uhmm...." She averted her eyes and looked at the dance floor. "I live above my bakery, alone. It's a branch from my parent's main one...I was kind of forced into picking it up as well."

"You don't like baking?"

"I like it. I really do, actually... but..."

"But what?"

Nanoha sighed and moved to sit properly at the bar instead of facing me. "I just feel like... I'm 'wasting my life away', you know?" I gave a small nod and faced the front as well. "I know there is something more out there. Something that I've never done..." Her ponytail seemed to react to her mood and sagged down as her head did. "I've never been to a party before... Never just went out to have a 'girl's night out'... It was always just 'study, study,study' and 'get a good degree, geta good job, marry a nice husband'... NEver once 'what do you want to do?'"

"What do you want to do?"

She stayed silent a while and I realized over our course of talking we had finished our drinks. "I want to..." She looked behind us.

"Let's dance."

"huh?" I grabbed her wrist and pulled her along with me while going to the floor. "Wha? I don't... Fate-chan!"

"-chan?" I grinned, getting behind her and putting mt arm around her stomach, grinding to he music. "We're that close already?"

"B-but!"

"Shake those hips!" I twirled around, going face to face and moving with the beat. Slowly Nanoha started moving as well, a smile appearing on her face as she got the hang of it. "That's the way!"

Vote:
A.) Nanoha's POV
B.) Fate's POV

Votes can be any color, but if you use BOLD and PINK, you'll get cookies

Originally Posted by Satashi

Sorry, I guess everyone uses different grading scales. And it's not overdoing it, I based that off one of my friends in highschool. On a scoring of 100 (perfect) to zero ( got nothing right), Nanoha only misses maybe one question per test, if that.

A: IIII
B: II

Nanoha wins!

And yes they will progress differntly. The more of Nanoha you see the more of her line will be revealed. The more of Fate you pick, the more her line will show.

Nanoha is a little softer and shyer, whereas FAte is aggressive and not holding back. Whichever you like seeing more, pick that person.

The only differnce would be, like this upcoming one, you will see inside Nanoha's mind, but you have no idea what Fate is thinking. Example after this:

Spoiler for Vampire!ate pt.7:

It was weird, dancing against someone I just met. People were all around me and music was thumping in my chest with each beat. I didn't really worry about 'knowing the moves' to the songs because everyone just seemed to be doing little more than bouncing with the beat. Fate, not surprisingly, drew lots of attention to us by her actions. Despite being in an outrageously gothic frilly dress so didn't seem hindered at all. Her hands were always on me, hips grinding and leading at the same time.

I didn't know if I should feel embarrassed or not because it was such a... provocative motion. Everyone else was doing the same so I could accept it as just 'dancing' but at the same time I wish she would give me a little space.

When we danced enough to make my legs weak I gave her a small questing look and was lead off the dance floor without any protest. Our seats at the bar were taken now so Fate lead me over to a semi-circle booth and sat down next to me. Her arm went over my shoulders and I leaned away lightly.

"Oh, sorry," Fate moved away from me and I sighed out thankfully. "Did I frighten you?"

"... Just a little." I shyly looked down and licked my lips. I was starting to lean toward the fact of Fate asking me on a 'date' as a date, and not a get together like I assumed... "Um, Fate-chan?"

"Yes?" She was comfortable it seemed, leaned back with both arms over the back of the booth. She smiled at me and I noticed again that her K-9 teeth were... just barely noticably longer than normal.

"Why did you ask me to come with you tonight?"

"To get to know you."

"Why?"

"Because you are cute."

"...Okaaaay," I rolled my eyes and leaned back as well. "Um... Are you...you know?"

"I know?"

I blushed. "You know," I said again, getting a chuckle.

"Are you afraid of my answer?" I didn't know how to respond so she went on. "Then don't ask me what you don't want to know."

"That's no fair." I pouted.

Fate leaned forward and our eyes met. Her facial expression changed from daring and teasing to a softer shade that made me settle down some. "Are you having fun? Honestly?"

"...Yes." I sipped the glass of water than was just sat down in front of me. "Thank you."

"Welcome." She drank as well and crossed her legs. "I sometimes come off as aggressive, please don't be afraid of me okay?"

"...Okay," I felt even more at ease and started seeing her as a possible friend. True, a weird one, but she was obviously trying to please me and that meant a lot. "Fate-chan, tell me about yourself?"

She beamed at me. "What do you want to know?"

"What are your hobbies? Besides part time jobs?"

"Anything really. I like to read a lot, I've studied martial arts-"

"Really!?" I knew I interrupted her and sank back.

"Interested?"

"Yes," I smiled happily. "I heard it's really good exercise."

Fate tapped a piece of ice into her water and watched it float back up to the top. "It helps me stay fit." Her eyebrow arched slightly. "Want me to teach you somethings?"

"I-I'd be too embarrassed..."

"No one will have to see." She nodded. "When you are comfortable, I can come to your place? Will that be okay?"

My place... Sure, nothing could happen there. It would help pass the time too since I can't study too hard while watching the register. "Okay, sounds fun."

"A second date already," She teased me happily. "I think I'm doing good?"

"Well," I corrected her. "you're doing well."

"Oh great, an English snob." WE both laughed at her joke and I honestly felt really comfortable with this weird girl now.

I would even say I was looking forward to seeing her again after tongiht.

Spoiler for differnt POVs:

When dancing, you got to see Nanoha's thoughts, how she saw everyone doing it, how she got used to it, and how she was a little uncomfortable with Fate being so close.

If it was Fate's POV, it would be more of Fate observing Nanoha, learning how she moved, and a more 'sensual' approach as she denied herself a taste of her blood. Also she would have noticed another dancer whose movements were too good to be a human...

But since it was Nanoha's POV, we missed that part >: D

[EDIT]: Page claim for POVs!

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Yay Vampire!Fate and ... Human!Nanoha? lol Anyways those were awesome but I still like the V!F more. I did like seeing Nanoha POV. So B
Nanoha is smart! I haven't even gotten a 4.0!

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical, special:

Spoiler for Accompanying Song:

In the underground cavern, the phantom sat on the stairs leading to the water's edge. Her cloak and coat were discarded for the moment, giving her a less ominous appearance in black slacks and a white blouse. The white mask remained on even though she was alone in her haven, eyes staring out over the murky water as she reflected.

No one would listen
No one but her
No one

But as the outcast hears

Shamed into solitude
Shunned by the multitude

No one would listen
I learned to listen

She rose up and turned to make her way towards the corner of the cave opposite of the bed. Over the countless years she had lived here she had gotten used to the solitude. After all, who would want to have anything to do with someone...no, something like her?

In the dark, my heart heard music
I long to teach the world
Rise up and reach the world

No one would listen

I alone could hear the music

Burgundy eyes wandered over several sketches she had made over the years. Each one was of her young apprentice staring off into the unknown before her. What that unknown was she was not sure. Perhaps it was her relationship with herself, the phantom. Nanoha did not know much about her 'help' after all these years, which was probably for the best. Sometimes a bit of mystery is needed, some secrets to remain unspoken.

Then at last
A voice in the gloom
Seemed to cry
'I hear you'
'I hear your fears,
Your torment and your tears'

Everything had changed when she came into her life, now that she thought about it. Nanoha was perhaps the first to see her underground haven and the first person to stay in the bed. It was the same bed she left in day after day, but she was not a person. She was a thing, a freak not worthy of being called human. They say technology is a wondrous thing, but everything has a dark side.

She saw my loneliness
Shared in my emptiness

She sat down on a chair and rolled a rose between her fingers. It was just like the many she had secretly placed in Nanoha's dressing room after each performance. Perhaps the brunette could love her, something she had yearned for for as long as she could remember. The phantom shook her head. Like the many times the thought had wandered into her head, it was merely a dream. Who could love something like her?

No one would listen
No one but her

The long forgotten Project F. It was a secret research plan created by the TSAB to explore the possibility of creating artificial mages to boaster their forces. Very few knew about its existence when it was in operation. The project had since been shut down and any loose ends...taken care of. Though she still remained. One of the few successes and sole surviving product of Project F. She had no name. They had referred to her as 'it,' 'the successful creation,' 'subject 527,' and other vague 'names.' Even now she had no name, though she had considered taking the name 'Fate.' But a thing like her was not deserving of a name.

But as the outcast hears

No one would listen
No one but her

She brought up a hand to touch the white mask that adorned her face. It was not there to hide some grotesque deformation like many believed. No, her face was unblemished beneath its smooth surface. Some may even call her beautiful if they didn't know what she truly was. She kept the mask on as a reminder and a symbol. The mask hid half of herself from the world, the part of her that was the freak creation of man while the exposed half of her face was what she wanted, what she let people see of her. She was not deserving to live free up above like a person and the mask was a constant reminder of that.

But as the outcast hears...

Leaning back in the chair, she closed her eyes for a moment. It would soon be time her to travel up yet again to make her appearance.

*vanishes into a mirror*

Aww that was sad. Poor Fate. I love the back story behind the mask. It was deep.

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

:3 Nice to get some back story.

And now....

a completely different side of Phantom of the Lyrical.

Spoiler for The "Story":

Since this scene is quite plot oriented I thought I'd make a few notes on the plot points that are important for anyone who hasn't seen The Phantom of the Opera . I'm not putting much work into this in case Eva or someone else actually wants to write the beginning of the story. Also I apologize for this not perfectly matching what Eva wrote in the first part >,<.

-Zafira and Chrono have been assigned to manage the TSAB's annual three month long run of an Opera.
-Hayate, who typically stars in the productions, had a bit of an accident right before opening night so Nanoha, who normally did small parts, took over for the night.
-Attending the show that night (as well as having attended the rehearsal) was Yuuno Scrya, Nanoha's childhood friend. Yuuno, a good friend of Chrono and Zafira, is helping sponsor the event. Yuuno goes to see Nanoha after the performance. She's happy to see him but rejects his invitation to go out.
-Then we get Eva's awesome scenes

-It's now the next day and Nanoha is no where to be seen...

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical: Notes:

Spoiler for Acompanying song:

Please watch from 0.54 on.

Italics=Singing

Zafira straightened his tie. This was a truly bothersome issue. He held tight to his walking cane as he steered himself through Mid’s busy streets. He marched up the steps to the bureau’s opera house. His opera house! Even if they were just renting it for three months as they always did it was still his! Not some silly little ghost’s. As he walked into the building he couldn’t take it anymore.

“Mystery after gala night!” He handed his hat to a worker standing by. “It says mystery of soprano's flight!” Another man helped him remove his heavy blue coat. “Mystified all the papers say,” Zafira smacked his paper into the chest of a third surprised looking worker. “We are mystified, we suspect foul play.”

Zafira marched up the stairs trying to keep calm and not show his anger to his underlings, “Bad news on soprano's scene,” He rubbed his forehead. “First Hayate now Nanoha.” He sighed, there was a bright side; “Still, at least, the seats get sold.

“Gossip's worth its weight in gold.”

He nodded to a few lingering officers, “What a way to run a bureau. Spare me these unending trials.” Once a year! They did this once a year! And never before Ms. Takamachi came along had they ever had a problem! “Half your cast disappears but the crowd still cheers,” and cheer they had. “Opera! To hell with Gluck and Handel. Have a scandal and you're sure to have a hit!” They were sold out for three weeks straight and the TSAB’s opera only ever ran for three months.

As he started down a hall his partner cut him off.

“Damnable!” Chrono stormed up to him. “Will they all walk out? This is damnable!”

Zafira tried to calm down his friend though he was in no mood to help. “Chrono please don't shout!” He placed a hand on Chrono’s shoulder. “It's publicity! And the take is vast. Free publicity!” And the Bureau needed all it could get.

“But we have no cast!” Chrono spat out. He was turning red.

“Chrono, have you seen the queue?” It was out the door everyday.

Chrono pulled out a small envelope.

“Ah, it seems you've got one too.”

He opened it up and started to read it as they walked down the hall. “Dear Chrono, What a charming gala, Nanoha was, in a word, sublime. We were hardly bereft when Hayate left. On that note, the diva's a disaster, must you cast her when she's seasons past her prime!?!”

Zafira pulled out his own, “Dear Zafira, Just a brief reminder. My salary has not been paid. Send it care of the ghost by return of post. P.T.O No one likes a debtor so it's better if my orders are obeyed!” He crumpled up the letter.

They looked at each other and spoke in sequence, “Who would have the gall to send this? Someone with a puerile brain.”

“These are both signed O.G.” Zafira shook his head.

Chrono threatened to pop a blood vessel, “Who the hell is he?”

It hit them at the same time, “Opera Ghost!”

“It's nothing short of shocking.”

“He is mocking our position!” Chrono threw his hands into the air.

“In addition he wants money!” Surely this fellow didn’t need it.

“What a funny apparition!” Considering they didn’t have much.

They spoke at once again, “To expect a large retainer. Nothing plainer, he is clearly quite insane!”

“Where is she?”

They turned to the bottom of the stairs where young Yuuno was standing holding a letter as well.

Zafira raised an eyebrow, “You mean Hayate?”

“I mean miss Takamachi. Where is she?” He begun to march up the steps.

Zafira shook his head and crossed his arms, “Well how should we know?”

“I want an answer! I take it that you sent me this note!”

Zafira and Chrono started to walk back the way they came.

“What's all this nonsense?” As if they didn’t have enough on their minds.

“Of course not!” Zafira had not sent any notes.

“Don't look at us!” Chrono waved his own note.

“She's not with you then?” Yuuno’s expression grew confused.

“Of course not!” Chrono yelled down. Why would she be?

“We're in the dark!” Zafira followed up with.

“Admirals don’t argue.” Yuuno held up a hand and the note. “Isn't this the letter you wrote?”

The three met on the central steps. Zafira eyed him, “And what is it that we're meant to have wrote?” He hit his head with his hand, bad grammar. “Written!”

Chrono snatched the letter from Yuuno’s hands, “Do not fear for Miss Takamachi, The angel of music has her under his wing. Make no attempt to see her again.” Well this was a troublesome letter.

Yuuno looked concerned, “If you didn't write it, then who did?”

Zafira opened his mouth to reply but—

“Where is he?”

The three men turned to see Hayate Yagami and her entourage storming through the doors towards them.

Zafira held his hand up in greeting, “Ah, welcome back!”

“Your precious patron. Where is he?” Hayate demanded.

Yuuno sighed, “What is it now?”

“I have your letter,” She too had a letter, a letter she waved it in Yuuno’s face. “A letter which I rather resent.”

“And did you send it?” Zafira knew he hadn’t but to keep Hayate happy…

“Of course not!” Yuuno looked shocked.

“As if he would!” Chrono looked indignant.

“You didn't send it?” Hayate still looked suspicious.

“Of course not!” Yuuno had just said that.

Zafira was confused. “What's going on?”

“You dare to tell me that this is not the letter you sent?” Hayate thumped the letter with her hand and shoved it in Yunno’s.

“And what is it that I'm meant to have sent?” He flipped the letter open and began to read. “Your days at the Bureau Opera are numbered Nanoha Takamachi...”

“Nanoha! Nanoha Takamachi!” Hayate threw her hands into the air.

Yuuno ignored her, “...will be singing on your behalf tonight. Be prepared for a great misfortune should you attempt to take her place.” He looked to be deep in thought.

Chrono and Zafira looked at each other and nodded, “Far too many notes for my taste” they both took Hayate’s arms and started to lead her up the stairs. “And most of them about Nanoha! All we've heard since we came is Miss Takamachi's name--!”

“Miss Takamachi has returned.”

All of the group turned to see Alicia at the bottom of the steps with the young Miss Arf behind her.

Zafira furrowed his brow. “I hope no worse for wear as far as we're concerned.”

“Where precisely is she now?” Chrono humphed.

“I thought it best she was alone,” Alicia didn’t seem intimidated at all by the high ranking officers in front of her.

“She needed rest,” Arf added in from behind.

Yuuno stepped forward, “May I see her?”

“No, Monsieur,” Alicia shook her head, “She will see no one.”

“Will she sing, will she sing?” Hayate stepped forward her loyal green haired companion beside her.

“Here, I have a note,” Alicia ignored the diva and held the note out.

“Let me see it!” Hayate, Yuuno and Chrono all dove for it.

“Please,” Zafira took the note. He cleared his throat. “Gentlemen, I have now sent you several notes of the most amiable nature detailing how my theatre is to be run.
You have not...”


“…followed my instructions. I shall give you one last chance,” The Phantom scratched out the words on paper. She would not let that morning’s incident deter her plans.

“Nanoha Takamachi has returned to you and I am anxious her career should progress. In the new production of Il Muto,” It was quite simple, all they had to do was follow her instructions. “You will therefore cast Hayate as the pageboy and put Miss Takamachi in the role of Countess.” Why couldn’t they follow orders properly? “The role which Miss Takamachi plays calls for charm and appeal, the role of the pageboy is silent, which makes my casting, in a word, ideal.”

The phantom poured hot wax over the envelope. It formed the shape of a small triangle, her symbol. “I shall watch the performance from my normal seat in box five, which will be kept empty for me. Should these commands be ignored a disaster beyond your imagination will occur.

“I remain, gentlemen, your obedient servant,” The letter was tucked into her breast pocket. “O.G.”

“Nanoha!” Hayate shouted.

Chrono rolled his eyes, “Whatever next?”

“It's all a plot to help Nanoha!”

Zafira threw his hands up, “This is insane...”

“I know who sent this,” Hayate spun around and pointed at Yuuno, “This boy--her lover!” She begun to march off.

“Indeed?” Yuuno watched her with wary eyes. “Can you believe this?”

“Miss Hayate!” Chrono followed after her.

“O traditori!”

“This is a joke!” Zafira growled up at the ceiling.

“This changes nothing!” Chrono sped up to keep up with the speed demon.

“O menititori!”

“What does that mean!” Chrono yelled.

“Miss Hayate,” Zafira was desperate.

“You are our star!” Chrono was getting close to hair pulling.

“And always will be!” Zafira tried to calm the raging ace.

“Miss Hayate,” Somehow she had managed to march them all the way to her temporary quarters where her entourage started to take away her things.

“This man is mad!” Chrono held up his note.

“We don’t take orders!” Zafira crushed it.

“Miss Takamachi will be playing the pageboy” Zafira assured her, “the silent role...”

At the same time Chrono and Zafira nodded, “Hayate will be taking the lead.”

Hayate shook her head and lead them out of the room again. She lead them through the opera house and to the back of the stage. “It's useless trying to appease me!
You're only saying this to please me!”

Chrono motioned stabbing her in the back.

“Signori, e vero?”

“She speaks Italian?”Chrono’s mouth hung wide.

Zafira shrugged.

“Non, non, non voglio udire! Lasciatemi morire!”

“What does that mean?” Chrono looked to Zafira but he didn’t know either. They both had no choice but to follow her all the way through the back of the stage.

“O padre mio! Dio!”

Alicia shook her head, somewhere along the line she had caught up to them. “Who scorn his word, beware to those...”

“You have reviled me!”

“The angel sees, the angel knows...”

“You have rebuked me!”

“Miss Hayate, pardon us.”

“You have replaced me!”

“Please, Miss Hayate. We beseech you...”

“This hour shall see your darkest fears”

Yuuno and Arf joined them as they rounded into the opening hall again. “I must see her...”

“Abbandonata! Deseredata! O, sventurata!”

“What’s with the Italian?”

“The angel sees, the angel hears...”

“Where did she go?”

“Abbandonata! Disgraziata!”

“Hayate, sing for us! Don’t be a martyr...”

“What new surprises lie in store...?”

“Our star!”

“Non vo' cantar!”

“Italian!”

Spoiler for Phantom of the Lyrical: Prima Donna:

Spoiler for Accompanying song:

Hayate threw open the doors, only to be mobbed by a mass of fans.

“Miss Yagami! They called out, except for one blue haired girl who pushed to the front.

She held out a rose and Hayate took it, “Please deliver this to miss Takamachi.” Then she ran away like the devil was chasing her.

Hayate retreated slamming the doors shut. “Deliver! Me!”

Zafira and Chrono traded panicked glances.

“Your public needs you,” Chrono took her arm.

“We need you too,” Zafira took the other.

Hayate stuck her nose up. “Would you not rather have your precious little ingenue?”

“What’s an ingénue?” Chrono looked to Zafira who merely shrugged as usual.

“My question still stands.”

“Hayate.” Actually Nanoha had been much easier to work with. “No. The world wants you.”

They guided Hayate away from the now dissipating group and towards her dressing room.

“Prima donna, first lady of the stage!” The two men serenaded her, desperate to keep her happy. “Your devotees are on their knees to implore you!”

Chrono snatched a flower from a nearby bouquet and held it out, “Can you bow out when they're shouting your name?”

“Think of how they all adore you.” Zafira led her to a chair.

“Prima donna, enchant us once again,” Chrono and Zafira both grabbed chocolate boxes from a table and offered them to rejecting hands.

“Think of your muse...” Chrono threw his box behind himself.

“And of the queues round the theatre!” Zafira placed his neatly back on the table.

“Can you deny us the triumph in store?” Chrono and Zafira felt they were winning her over. Zafira grabbed a blue puppy and Chrono a diamond necklace.

Hayate seemed to be coming around.

“Sing, prima donna, once more!”

“Christine spoke of an angel...” Yuuno stood in a dark tunnel. If he couldn’t see Nanoha then he’d find out just who this “O.G” was.

“Prima donna, your song shall live again!” Hayate stood up, her ego thoroughly padded.

“Think of your public,” Zafira and Chrono grinned to one another. They were back on!

“You took a snub, but there's a public who needs you!” Hayate was full of it once again.

Alicia watched sadly from the doorway. “She has heard the voice of the angel of music...”

“Those who hear your voice liken you to an angel!”

“Think of their cry of undying support!”
Yuuno looked at his letter, “Is this her angel of music...?”

“We get our opera...” Chrono popped open the Champaign.

“She gets her limelight!” Zafira toasted to them.

“Follow where the limelight leads you!” Hayate allowed everyone to prepare her for her roles.

Their eyes widened in annoyance, “Leading ladies are a trial!”

Yuuno’s grip tightened on the letter, “Angel or madmadman...?”

“Prima donna, your song shall never die!” Hayate glided down from the stepstool in full costume.

Alicia shook her head and walked away, “Heaven help you, those who doubt...”

“You'll sing again, and to unending ovation!” She swished down the hall with Zafira and Chrono chasing after her.

“Orders! Warnings! Lunatic demands!” Yuuno gritted his teeth and bustled down the hall.

Alicia ran a hand through her hair, “This miscasting will invite damnation.”

“Think how you'll shine in that final encore! Sing, prima donna, once more!” Hayate waved her hand at ever passing person. She was back to her blissful diva self.

“Oh fools, to have flouted her warnings!”

“Surely, for her sake...” Yuuno bit his thumb.

“Surely there'll be further scenes worse than this!” Zafira and Chrono found themselves running as Hayate grew faster and faster.

“Think, before these demands are rejected!” Alicia warned no one in particular.

“I must see these demands are rejected!” Yuuno threw the note to the ground.

“Who'd believe a commander happy to relieve an officer, who's gone and slept with the patron? Yuuno and the soubrette, entwined in love's duet! Although he may demur, he must have been with her!” It wasn’t fair to Nanoha or Yuuno but Zafira and Chrono were happy to accept it as the truth if it meant they didn’t have to hear Hayate complain.

“O, fortunata! Non ancor abbandonata!”

“Italian again?”

As they grew nearer to the stage, Zafira and Chrono started to congratulate themselves. “You'd never get away with all this in a play, but if it's loudly sung and in a foreign tongue, it's just the sort of story audiences adore, in fact a perfect opera!”

“His game is over!” Yuuno climbed up to box 5.

“This is a game you cannot hope to win!” Alicia warned him.

“And in Box Five a new game will begin...”

“For, if his curse is on this opera...”

“Prima donna, the world is at your feet! A nation waits, and how it hates, to be cheated!” A finale prod and they would have Hayate on the stage.

“The stress that falls upon a famous prima donna! Terrible deseases, coughs and colds and sneezes!” Hayate finally took her place among the other the other cast members.

Zafira and Chrono thought it was much harder for them then their lead.

“Still, the dryest throat will reach the highest note, in search of perfect opera!”

Yuuno leaned on box 5’s balcony, “Nanoha plays the Pageboy, Hayate plays the Countess...” Admittedly he’d rather see Nanoha as the Countess but they couldn’t give in to an insane person.

They all began to speak at once, “Light up the stage with that age-old rapport! Sing, prima donna, once more!”

The Phantom cursed as she stood in the catwalk. How dare they? And that boy in her box! She had warned them and they were stupid enough to disobey her. “So, it is war between us!” Her words rang out but no one heard them in their own chattering.

She jumped onto the railing, anyone who looked up would get a terrible fright. “If these demands are not met, a disaster beyond your imagination will occur!”

“Once… MORE!”

Spoiler for Notes, and changes:

There aren't many major changes in the Notes scene with the exception of lampshading Hayate's random Italian (I contemplated cutting it or replacing it with Japanese but I didn't want to for various reasons. Other changes are really just names. (Takamachi is a very awkward word to replace Daee with ><)

Prima Donna has a lot of changes for several reasons. One, the lyrics I was using were the play's so it doesn't match the movie perfectly ><. Two I like having the phantom speak at the end so that's why I used that version. There are also a few extra lines added in (on being the joke on ingenue, a word I had to look up)

And in case anyone asks the only reason Alicia is in the role of Madam Giry is that she was the only person I could think of who would have some kind of connection to Fate other then Arf. Personally I don't think it conflicts with Eva's back story at all.

And I'm sorry to all Hayate fans (let's just think of it as she was having a really bad day). ><

Sorry for the length ^^; and Thank you for reading


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B

OMG! O-some (how I say awesome). I love how you brought in the male cast. And Alisa too! Can't wait to see the Phantom's revenge.

Originally Posted by mercurianangel

B
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Spoiler for Bite Me:

0: 3

Thank you! It's pure win!

[Evil Rick]

Another link to download Nanoha Rise of Techno - Union chapter 3
(In case anyone had troubles with rapidshare)
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@mercuriangel: God draw of Vampire Fate

[Satashi]

Again......

If you QUOTE someone who has voted for something, be it mine or anyone else's, please, please, please, please edit out their vote in the quote. It makes it insanely hard to tally votes.

[Mae]

B please. Really want to know about this other potential vampire.

[Plain Crackers]

B. Vampire for the win! I need a dose of vampirefate.