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Originally Posted by Kakurin-san
So with that in mind here's something that in my eyes would've worked better:
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Not bad, but I'll drop Fubuki's Kai-2 plot. Speaking
purely of the anime, her least lovable moments were between Yuudachi getting her Kai-2 and Fubuki's body deciding to concede the point rather than risk destruction. And the worst part is ... they didn't even use it! Fubuki did shoot down a few fighters, but that's within the arc of anime plot and the anime didn't make explicit her use of the Director, so it
feels like it was all for nothing.
I'll start throwing in Kisaragi in Ep1. We only have 3 episodes before we lose her and we need every moment to make her more of a character. So in Ep1, Kisaragi is still in TS3. Fubuki will replace her when she gets up to speed. In the first battle, Fubuki is not expected to be a combat capable unit so is outside of the regular structures, but tags along to see what fights are like. She still gets into trouble but is saved.
In Ep3, with Fubuki getting a provisional Sat, Kisaragi moves to TS4. The rest of the episode is the same. Less death flags. Kisaragi bites the dust.
Ep4, yeah, let it be. Don't make Yuudachi work hard just yet - the idea is kind of everyone is distracted over Kisaragi's death.
Ep5. Keep the fleet restructuring, but Fubuki does not become flagship. I know this anime is about Fubuki, but MC does not mean Hero every Day, and shafting five other characters until she can become flagship is not the way to go in my dictionary. Just show her improving, maybe even making some good points and that would be enough. Let Kongo lead the fleet - a MC shines more when she's in a band of good people than when she is leading the blind as the One-Eyed Man.
Ep6. An episode is too much to blow just on curry, so we have a Yuudachi centric episode. We learn that Yuudachi has transferred to be with the Akatsukis - the aces of the base (look at where they are in Ep1 - from a pure anime standpoint, I really didn't like how they were sneak-sidelined to Expedition duty; looks way too much like a demotion). Yuudachi realizes that she can't quite keep up with these destroyers who look several years younger than her. She gets the motivation to improve. Along the way, we can slip in the curry contest, which the Akatsukis want to join, dragging Yuudachi behind them. They go on the mission for that "Golden Spice", which they get, but not before a fight with the Abyssals (in the anime's equivalent of the Solomons, perhaps?) Yuudachi finds her spot and does something MVP worthy. The "Golden" thing gives them the edge for victory - I get the feeling that Ashigara actually made the better (if spicy) curry in Ep6, but Nagato sided with the Akatsukis.
Ep7: Put the Yamato episode here so we have two lighter episodes back to back. On finishing, we get serious.
Ep8: Effectively Ep7. Kaga gets knocked out. OK for the stuff about radio, but perhaps it might be time to introduce the "Fate" concept here. Shokaku gets hurt. Let Fubuki keep her creds here. Except we can add one detail. Everyone decides that Wo was Tai-haed but Fubuki, who inwardly wonders whether taking out one eye with one 5 inch shell counts. Since she's not the flagship, she doesn't get to make the choice. There, now Fubuki looks
smart. Somewhere near the end we spend one minute on Yuudachi, who is doing repeated sweeps somewhere in the Solomons with her group.
Ep9: Yuudachi glows. Fubuki wants to get a Kai-2 too, of course, but is told she probably won't make it. Apparently, hard work is one thing, but whether you get a Kai-2 depends on the qualities of the past ship, its possibilities ... etc. Since HIJMS Fubuki was unfortunately a most ordinary destroyer with a most ordinary battle record with no intended mods in her lineage (and a quick death), sorry probably not. She sulks for more of the episode than actual (if we are going to angst, let's Angst). Base gets bombed by the supposedly Taihaed Wo (now Flagship Kai).
Ep10: Yuudachi isn't sure exactly what special event gave her a Kai-2 but actually spends some time telling Fubuki what she did do. Fubuki gets happier knowing that her friend did have to work, but that doesn't solve the problem of her Kai-2 and working with Akagi, which looks farther away than the moon.
Yuudachi asks her that if she had her choice of Kai-2, what might it look like. Fubuki's answer and reasons are obvious, and Yuudachi suggests that if possibilities can count, then maybe Fubuki can just
create the possibility from the present rather than the past.
They run to Yubari who spends some time making a radar, FD director and gun for Fubuki, so she can practise with a form similar to her desire. The rest of the chapter involves Fubuki working
smarter, with Mutsuki and Yuudachi helping her look up information and all. She gets good at shooting down planes, but she doesn't glow. Yuudachi says this is something she can't do even with her Kai-2, and Fubuki will be a good escort for Akagi. Fubuki starts to almost forget all about Kai-2 in favor of doing her personal best. As she gets this epiphany, she glows and Kai-2s.
Ep11-12 Midway. Please Akagi, look like you are fighting smarter. Look like you are fighting Fate. Make Fate work. And when Fate works, it’d be nice if it was cleverer than repeated respawns and a gamey failure to kill boss until you kill carriers.
(Ironically, Ep12, for all its flaws, did manage to put Fubuki in almost the right relative position. Let's keep it this way.)
. It's from a fucking Free-to-Play browser game, the trailers never promised something groundbreaking and cerebral, and I sure as hell never expected them. I like what I got. Besides, there's plenty of doujins for the non-usual (and thus more commercially risky) stories out there whenever I'm in the mood.
.It's not really a "tragedy" anime per se.I still believe Kisaragi is still alive and and being hidden by the kuso teitoku in this anime...
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