(Oreimo Fanfict) My friend can't be this much into BDSM

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Vacation trip, it is then.
(Probably need a bit of research on the setting too... and some set up)


On Kirino's case, I had some ideas with it, but probably will be more on plot device for Ayase and Kuroneko story, rather than actually side- story about it. I will be honest, I already pretty satisfied with the nature of Kousaka's siblings relationship by the end of the LN so I don't want to change that too much.

I see, any idea on what the setting for the vacation trip is going to be? In general, the cliche for anime is the Izu Islands or other islands off the south coast of Japan. That, or Okinawa if you want to go a bit further out. That or you could try something a bit more original.

Also, as for these ideas, do tell if it won't spoil too much... I was kind of wondering if it might have had something to do with Kirino becoming curious about BDSM.

Also, on a random note, I have my own head-canon of what the final result of Ayase and Kuroneko's relationship will look like- this will be a while from now in the story, and you probably won't go into too much lurid detail on this, but I can't help imagining Ayase presenting Kuroneko with a cat tail attached to a plug intended for insertion in a very specific location

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

I see, any idea on what the setting for the vacation trip is going to be? In general, the cliche for anime is the Izu Islands or other islands off the south coast of Japan. That, or Okinawa if you want to go a bit further out. That or you could try something a bit more original.

Also, as for these ideas, do tell if it won't spoil too much... I was kind of wondering if it might have had something to do with Kirino becoming curious about BDSM.

Also, on a random note, I have my own head-canon of what the final result of Ayase and Kuroneko's relationship will look like- this will be a while from now in the story, and you probably won't go into too much lurid detail on this, but I can't help imagining Ayase presenting Kuroneko with a cat tail attached to a plug intended for insertion in a very specific location

After brief researched, I am thinking about Shirahama Onsen. Beach and onsen, pretty good setting to work with.

On the cat tail plug. Call me pervert , but I do think about it more than once. It would just be very very hard for it to appear in this fanfic through. Maybe I could imply on it vaguely at the very ending. With some time skip of course

Anyway, Vol 3 Epilogue. It was quite long actually, almost a chapter long

Spoiler:

Originally Posted by Volume 3 Epilogue

I unpacked the box and stacked a pile of new books onto the shelf. Wow, Setsuna-san novels really were selling quite well recently. …

“Good for her…”, I told myself

A nostalgic thought crossed my mind. She was someone I could have become, but probably won’t.

In some sense, both of our lives were changed by Kirino… in different way through.

Sigh…

A career as professional novelist? It probably isn’t too late for me yet.

But unlike that former self, my current passion has been shifting toward elsewhere. So no regret from me

Either way, as I started to unpack and stack more books onto the shelf, suddenly a voice came up from behind me.

“Ru…Ruri-senpai”

I turned my head around…

Stand just a couple feet from me where the voice coming from was Miyu, one of the new kouhai at my workplace: this bookstore.

Further away down the bookshelf lane, you could see another two girls, Reiko and Nara, were just standing there and observing the situation. They made up the kouhai trio that I am currently in charge.

We were all a bit more relaxed now as it was already past peak-hour, and were near the end of our shift.

I quickly put the books onto the shelf and turned over to her.

“Miyu, is there anything that you needed to help with?”

“Hmmm.. no…hmmm…”:

This girl has always been getting nervous around me for unknown reason.

Maybe my introduction during our first meeting did scare her up a bit too much. Sigh…. I really should be more aware of the way I talked around ordinary people like her.

“A… about tonight dinner... would you come with me, no, with us for dinner?”

“Ah…”

Let’s see, Ayase couldn’t cook, so maybe I can take away some for her as well.

“Sure, but I will have to leave earlier at 7:30 at most”

Miyu looked like Christmas was coming earlier for her as she was absolutely beaming and delighted with my answer. I guessed realising her senpai isn’t as scary as she thought would be that great for a meek girl like her.

“All…also…. “

Miyu reached her back pocket. Then slightly leaned down and present it with both her hands:

“This is your handkerchief. I have washed it. Sorry that I got it dirty that time”

“It’s OK. You didn’t have to do that”

I took the handkerchief off her outstretched hand, with her whole body was shivering in anticipation. It was just a minor incident that happened a couple of days ago.

That however probably troubled Miyu greatly. As she continually looked down, fidgeted her fingers, blood rushed toward her face, and tears almost formed in her eyes.

So I just put my hand up over her head and rub her hair. The same way I often did to Hinata or Tamaki. Miyu is much taller than them of course, even taller than me, and probably would make this scene a bit weird from outsider’s point of view. But I did it anyway

“It’s OK, we all make mistake sometime. So don’t think too much about it….”

“…”

“… and you can always depend on your senpai. I am here for all of you, you know. I may not look like it, but I could ward the whole army of darkness by myself …”

Miyu’s face looked slightly confused for a moment, but that was enough to cheer her up. As her smile returned

“Senpai…. You are a very interesting person. That’s why all the kids loved you… That’s why I…and we all…”

“?”

“… nothing…” Miyu started to blush heavily “We will all wait for you in the locker room later then…”

“Sure… let me get all of these onto the shelves first”

But Miyu isn’t leaving, as she started to fidget her fingers again…

“Ah, senpai just one last thing”

Miyu started to close up on me, and tried to keep her voice down

“I… I might be wrong…. But there is that suspicious person behind you near Sci-fi section. The one in long coat, sun glass and big hat…Even in this heat. I… I think that person has been constantly staring at you.”

“…”

“It could .. could be a stal…stalker…”

“Ah. Don’t worry about that”

“But…I….”

“Believe me. It is nothing…”

“…”

“Go change first. I think the other two girls are waiting for you”

Miyu reluctantly left me and walked back toward her friend, before being jumped all over by those two.

Good to be young… I guess

As for me….

I glanced my head over my shoulder, staring straight at the suspicious person Miyu described. The individual immediately tried to hide her face behind a fiction book.

Not the first time I saw a stalker. But yes, there is nothing to worry about this one.

It was just a very naughty girl trying to play detective on me, that’s all.

…End of Volume 3….

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

After brief researched, I am thinking about Shirahama Onsen. Beach and onsen, pretty good setting to work with.

On the cat tail plug. Call me pervert , but I do think about it more than once. It would just be very very hard for it to appear in this fanfic through. Maybe I could imply on it vaguely at the very ending. With some time skip of course

Anyway, Vol 3 Epilogue. It was quite long actually, almost a chapter long

As for Shirahama, sounds good, plenty of things to work with, especially if Kuroneko and Ayase are sharing a hotel room to themselves! I look forward to seeing what those two get up to!

Also, as for the tail plug, I doubt you or I are the first person to come up with the idea of using a tail plug on Kuroneko. I mean, if you say "nekomimi" and "BDSM", isn't it natural that I say tail butt plug!

As for being a pervert, nothing wrong with that, from where I see it, there are two kinds of people in this world, people who embrace their perversion and those who deny it. As long as it's consentual and won't cause permanant injury, there's nothing wrong with a having a perverted side- don't listen to the elements in society that tell you otherwise!

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

As for Shirahama, sounds good, plenty of things to work with, especially if Kuroneko and Ayase are sharing a hotel room to themselves! I look forward to seeing what those two get up to!

Also, as for the tail plug, I doubt you or I are the first person to come up with the idea of using a tail plug on Kuroneko. I mean, if you say "nekomimi" and "BDSM", isn't it natural that I say tail butt plug!

As for being a pervert, nothing wrong with that, from where I see it, there are two kinds of people in this world, people who embrace their perversion and those who deny it. As long as it's consentual and won't cause permanant injury, there's nothing wrong with a having a perverted side- don't listen to the elements in society that tell you otherwise!

Haha, thank as always, for the comments, and that last bit at the end too =D


On the chapter, honestly, when I first planned to write this whole fanfic, I was worried that Kuroneko may end up to be too submissive (and make their relationship mostly one-sided). But right now I am quite content at the development up to this point as it started to shape into the sort of relationship I expected them to have.

Had the plan for most of chapter 17, and more than half for chapter 18, then a fair bit of chapter 19 (or 20). Just need actual time and mood to write them (my life has been hell lately >__<). Also still need to research a bit more on Shirahama through as doesn't quite have the feel of it yet

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Haha, thank as always, for the comments, and that last bit at the end too =D


On the chapter, honestly, when I first planned to write this whole fanfic, I was worried that Kuroneko may end up to be too submissive (and make their relationship mostly one-sided). But right now I am quite content at the development up to this point as it started to shape into the sort of relationship I expected them to have.

Had the plan for most of chapter 17, and more than half for chapter 18, then a fair bit of chapter 19 (or 20). Just need actual time and mood to write them (my life has been hell lately >__<). Also still need to research a bit more on Shirahama through as doesn't quite have the feel of it yet

No problem, always happy to comment.

As for Kuroneko as Ayase's relationship, as I have never seen the second season of OreImo, you probably have a better grasp of what sort of relationship makes most sense canon-wise.

That said, I'm not sure if one character always taking the a more dom/sub role necessarily makes the relationship one-sided- there may be many reasons why one person in this sort of relationship may lean heavily towards either a dominant or submissive role- it may simply be an aspect of their personality or simply their sexual interests, or there may be some deeper-rooted psychological reason behind a person being more dominant or submissive.

Also, as for why my ideas always seems to involve Kuroneko as the sub, I guess her already being into cosplay and being somewhat chuuni just somehow leads into more perverted ideas about how to combine them with BDSM lifestyle. IDK, perhaps this fic has just gotten me thinking about some of the perverted things I'd like to do if I ever find myself a cosplayer and perhaps slightly chuuni submissive... Unfortunately for your ideas, a lot of them are probably too graphic for this fic.

Of course, I find Kuroneko and Ayase fit pretty well into the switch relationship they have now. In any case, sorry to hear your life's been difficult lately, but take your time, and I will be looking forward for the next chapter in Ayase and Kuroneko's kinky adventures!

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

No problem, always happy to comment.

As for Kuroneko as Ayase's relationship, as I have never seen the second season of OreImo, you probably have a better grasp of what sort of relationship makes most sense canon-wise.

That said, I'm not sure if one character always taking the a more dom/sub role necessarily makes the relationship one-sided- there may be many reasons why one person in this sort of relationship may lean heavily towards either a dominant or submissive role- it may simply be an aspect of their personality or simply their sexual interests, or there may be some deeper-rooted psychological reason behind a person being more dominant or submissive.

Also, as for why my ideas always seems to involve Kuroneko as the sub, I guess her already being into cosplay and being somewhat chuuni just somehow leads into more perverted ideas about how to combine them with BDSM lifestyle. IDK, perhaps this fic has just gotten me thinking about some of the perverted things I'd like to do if I ever find myself a cosplayer and perhaps slightly chuuni submissive... Unfortunately for your ideas, a lot of them are probably too graphic for this fic.

Of course, I find Kuroneko and Ayase fit pretty well into the switch relationship they have now. In any case, sorry to hear your life's been difficult lately, but take your time, and I will be looking forward for the next chapter in Ayase and Kuroneko's kinky adventures!

Ah, I don't means one-sided as like that. It's one-sided as in oppose to the switching of their relationship (which is canon in the novel). =D

I may have mentioned to you before, but this is why I liked Kuroneko in the novel. A bit awkward, straightforward, kind-heart, but in the same time very manipulative when it comes to the need or well-being of her loved ones. And as you can see in this fanfic, she can still actually control the relationship even when she is the one being tied down.

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Ah, I don't means one-sided as like that. It's one-sided as in oppose to the switching of their relationship (which is canon in the novel). =D

I may have mentioned to you before, but this is why I liked Kuroneko in the novel. A bit awkward, straightforward, kind-heart, but in the same time very manipulative when it comes to the need or well-being of her loved ones. And as you can see in this fanfic, she can still actually control the relationship even when she is the one being tied down.

I haven't read the novel, but I think you got the switching thing, as well as Kuroneko's personality, at least as far as what I've seen from the anime. As always, I'm looking forward to the next installment. I'll be interested to see what the two of them get up to in the vacation arc.

[risingstar3110]

I actually stuck on a part in the original Chapter 17, so decided to just remove the whole thing and jump straight to Chapter 18, the summer vacation. Actually was planning it out several days ago already, just don't have time to write it down =/


As always, I will proof-read on it later

Spoiler for Chapter 17:

My girlfriend is a demon

Name is Ruri Gokou, but more well-known with her alias Kuroneko .

However don’t be fool by that charming alias …

Or by that cute white one-piece dress gracing her rather small stature…

Or her flowing black long hair with hime cut that draw great contrast with her porcelain white skin …

Or the oversized straw hat with white ribbon, which she so adorably placed on top of her thigh, as she rested herself on the seat next to mine …

Or…

Ahem…

My point is... don’t let the appearance fool you.

She’s actually a demon

A cruel cruel succubus with an angel’s outlook

A wicked sadist who dine on other people suffering…

Unfortunately the poor poor soul that was fallen to her victim is… me.

As I was seating there, trembling at her presence, the scorching sun shined through the train car’s windows heating the thick skirt layer over my thigh.

Yes, currently we were on a trip.

To Shirahama for our summer vacation.

Just us two, alone.

Most people would have been so exciting on their first overnight trip with their loved one.

Not me through…

Especially not in my current situation….

Why was I trapped in this again?

I tried to distract myself by looking out at the car window, but couldn’t stop nervously fidgeting my fingers.

“Don’t worry, everything will be alright”

Like reading through my mind, Kuroneko broke off the silence.

“Don’t need your worry…. You, pervert…”

I reacted angrily.

“Hmmm…?”

“…”

“…”

I looked downward trying to avoid her eyes as Kuroneko continued staring straight at me…

“Say, that Mai girl…”

“…”

“She’s such a nice girl, isn’t she? Introduce us to such a beautiful inn….”

“…”

“… at such a cheap price also…”

“…”

“…maybe I should go thank her later when we’re back… In fact what is her phone number?”

“Don’t just go around talking to my friend, you lewd cat!!”

“!!!”

That somehow ticked Kuroneko off as you could feel her forehead vein started popping up.

Ekkk. I moved my arms toward my chest in a defence position.

But like realising something, Kuroneko just dropped back to her cold self, and slowly took out her purse

“So, you called me a pervert, eh? Miss Ayase…?”

She then took out a small piece of black lace cloth, as she slowly stretching it out with both of her index fingers, and showed it to me.

“… said the girl who is not wearing anything down ther..”

“WHA….WHAA….”

I grabbed both of Kuroneko hands and hold them down in the space between our seats

That’s my… my…

“What are you trying to do?? You, per…”

“You…what? My dear Ayase?”

“…”

“Hmmm…?”

“I’m… I’m sorry. It was my fault….”

Kuroneko then cracked our an devilish smirk, as she hold ‘it’ tight with her close right palm and with her left, took my lifeless shivering hands off hers.

“You apparently don’t repent on your sin, don’t you, Ayase…?”

“I’m sorry…”

“Spying on me? Then lying about it?”

“I’m truly sorry…”

“And I was going easy on you too”

“Sorry… sorry…. It was all A…Ayase’s fault”

“Hmmm…”

Starring at my chest Kuroneko continue:

“You know how generous I was, even letting you wearing your bra today?”

“Yes, Ayase is very thankful for that, Kuroneko-sama!!”

“Good girl, Ayase…”

She said that as she put her other hand on top of my head and pat it ….

Uhhh… this level of humiliation…

I headed down, closed my eyes, clenched on my teeth trying to stop myself from crying out…

But apparently that didn’t stop Kuroneko….

She is a sadist after all. Because only a true sadist can continue after all that….

“Sigh….. I am disappointed through”

Still hold ‘it’ inside her right palm, she moved it over her nose and mouth before breathed through ‘it’ ….

“It would have made me much happier if you actually wore this before handing it to me, you know”

“…”

“Not enough of your scent here...” She sniffed on it some more before saying:

“…how’s about we try that next time, Ayase…? “

“!!!”

“ Would my Ayase be a good girl for me?”

Despite tried to hold it down, but slowly tears had started to form on the corners of my eyes. As more blood flooded onto my face. Both my hand now clenched tight onto my skirt as if my life depends on it.

Uhhh… Uhhhhh…

That was so mean , Kuroneko.

Ayase had done everything you asked her for.

Everything. Ayase did everything that was instructed to her.

Why did you still have to act so mean …?

Suddenly I felt a touch over both my hands, and another one over my right cheek as Kuroneko face closed down on me. Her tone low to almost a whisper

“Was that too much…?

Still closed my eyes, I nodded furiously. There was something stuck inside my throat. And there was a fear in me that everything will fall apart if I let a sound out right now.

“ I’m sorry. I was too into it…”

“…”

“There… There… Don’t cry.”

“…”

“ I will protect you. I won’t let anyone harm my dear Ayase”

“!!!”

“Trust me on that, alright?”

I opened my eyes, gazed straight at Kuroneko’s face as she smiled back at me, before instinctively made a small nod

That was so unfair, Kuroneko.

…End of Chapter 17….

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

I actually stuck on a part in the original Chapter 17, so decided to just remove the whole thing and jump straight to Chapter 18, the summer vacation. Actually was planning it out several days ago already, just don't have time to write it down =/


As always, I will proof-read on it later

First off, as for little fixes that I noticed, anyway:

A wicked sadist who dines on other people suffering…

Ekkk. I moved my arms toward my chest in a defensive position.

That was so mean , Kuroneko.

Ayase had done everything you asked her for.

Everything. Ayase did everything that was instructed to her.

I noticed you switched from first to third person in that little bit of there. Now, you had Ayase switch to third person while speaking to Kuroneko, but this was her inner monologue- not sure if that was intentional.


Now, as for my thoughts on the chapter itself, way to punish your naughty spying girlfriend, Kuroneko! A little public humiliation, or at least the potential for its is always effective.

I know most of my ideas have involved Kuroneko as the sub, so here if I were to give our pervert cat some ideas for how to further torture poor Ayase, how about next time, let her keep her panties on... but leave a little something extra inside them... specifically a little egg-shaped, vibrating remote-controlled "something! Although that might have to wait until they are little more intimate, but after this, I could totally see Kuroneko doing that... perhaps when Ayase is in her college classes, or with Mai, or Kirino... or I wouldn't put it past Ayase... as an act of revenge.

Also, I like the way Kuroneko is "disciplining" Ayase for things she did in real life, although at this point it may be more an excuse to do kinky things to her!

If they were to get more into actually disciplining each other for things they did, it would be an excellent way to keep the plot interesting while at the same time deepening their relationship.

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

First off, as for little fixes that I noticed, anyway:

I noticed you switched from first to third person in that little bit of there. Now, you had Ayase switch to third person while speaking to Kuroneko, but this was her inner monologue- not sure if that was intentional.

Hey thank as always

On the 'third person POV', it was not what I meant. As to my knowledge , in Japan and East Asia culture in general, addressing yourself by name or as third person (rather than "I", "my") is a childish/cute way to do. So in term of BDSM, it was part of dirty talk. For example, one do that to act cute/childish so they can beg the other party to do things for them. For example Ayase did this in Chapter 7 (out of desperation), or Kuroneko did this in Chapter 14 (obviously out of jealousy)

(Or it's also part of an act, as obviously it's more sadistic to punish a childish or cute person. So the submissive do that to make the dominant party more satisfied with their acts, sort of)

Ayase case this chapter here however is a little bit different, as I tried to show that she was really into the act at that point, that she unconsciously address herself in her monologue as "Ayase" (basically she start to forget that the whole thing was part of an act)

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Now, as for my thoughts on the chapter itself, way to punish your naughty spying girlfriend, Kuroneko! A little public humiliation, or at least the potential for its is always effective.

I know most of my ideas have involved Kuroneko as the sub, so here if I were to give our pervert cat some ideas for how to further torture poor Ayase, how about next time, let her keep her panties on... but leave a little something extra inside them... specifically a little egg-shaped, vibrating remote-controlled "something! Although that might have to wait until they are little more intimate, but after this, I could totally see Kuroneko doing that... perhaps when Ayase is in her college classes, or with Mai, or Kirino... or I wouldn't put it past Ayase... as an act of revenge.

Also, I like the way Kuroneko is "disciplining" Ayase for things she did in real life, although at this point it may be more an excuse to do kinky things to her!

If they were to get more into actually disciplining each other for things they did, it would be an excellent way to keep the plot interesting while at the same time deepening their relationship.

On the chapter itself. But yeah, as you noticed , a lot of what we discussed early ended up playing part of recent chapters (So, thank for that!!). For example about using outsider characters/ normal events as excuse for them to be a bit more bold/ go out of their comfort zone. I did think about the public humiliation probably way way back at the end of chapter 11, and think Kuroneko probably will find that intriguing , and Ayase could be curious to follow. But it will feel slightly repetitive if it's just a daily format. And will be a bit out of nowhere as there is no excuse for them to go out of comfort zone

You will recognise another thing that you mentioned to me way back later. And one more idea, that already sorta have its own chapter , but is pushed back (or will happen later) in this vacation arc.

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Hey thank as always

On the 'third person POV', it was not what I meant. As to my knowledge , in Japan and East Asia culture in general, addressing yourself by name or as third person (rather than "I", "my") is a childish/cute way to do. So in term of BDSM, it was part of dirty talk. For example, one do that to act cute/childish so they can beg the other party to do things for them. For example Ayase did this in Chapter 7 (out of desperation), or Kuroneko did this in Chapter 14 (obviously out of jealousy)

(Or it's also part of an act, as obviously it's more sadistic to punish a childish or cute person. So the submissive do that to make the dominant party more satisfied with their acts, sort of)

Ayase case this chapter here however is a little bit different, as I tried to show that she was really into the act at that point, that she unconsciously address herself in her monologue as "Ayase" (basically she start to forget that the whole thing was part of an act)


On the chapter itself. But yeah, as you noticed , a lot of what we discussed early ended up playing part of recent chapters (So, thank for that!!). For example about using outsider characters/ normal events as excuse for them to be a bit more bold/ go out of their comfort zone. I did think about the public humiliation probably way way back at the end of chapter 11, and think Kuroneko probably will find that intriguing , and Ayase could be curious to follow. But it will feel slightly repetitive if it's just a daily format. And will be a bit out of nowhere as there is no excuse for them to go out of comfort zone

You will recognise another thing that you mentioned to me way back later. And one more idea, that already sorta have its own chapter , but is pushed back (or will happen later) in this vacation arc.

I'm glad you liked my ideas, and you are very welcome to them. I eagerly the next chapters so I can see what other activities Kuroneko and Ayase get up when they are alone on vacation. My advice to them, just don't do anything that could leave marks visible from the a swimsuit... unless of course that's the idea!

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

I'm glad you liked my ideas, and you are very welcome to them. I eagerly the next chapters so I can see what other activities Kuroneko and Ayase get up when they are alone on vacation. My advice to them, just don't do anything that could leave marks visible from the a swimsuit... unless of course that's the idea!

I do not intended for any rope play. But maybe we will see if that fit in anywhere.

At this moment I had ideas for almost 2 chapters , possibly 3, but I prefer the 3rd one to happen after they have been back home. So depend on whether I felt the arc has already been long enough. Feel free to feed me more ideas if anything comes up (even if i can't use in this arc, I always can implement it later )

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

I do not intended for any rope play. But maybe we will see if that fit in anywhere.

At this moment I had ideas for almost 2 chapters , possibly 3, but I prefer the 3rd one to happen after they have been back home. So depend on whether I felt the arc has already been long enough. Feel free to feed me more ideas if anything comes up (even if i can't use in this arc, I always can implement it later )

Hmm... as for leaving a mark, I was thinking more spank/bite/etc marks, but rope play is also something that could be left until they get home- unless Ayase wants to take revenge on Kuroneko for the little train thing by letting everyone on the beach know exactly what shes' into!

Or she could covertly lay a stencil on her back while she's tanning and "write" something in tan lines. As for what the stencil should say, perhaps "Property of Ayase Arageki" or perhaps the old favorite: "Pervert Cat" (As a bonus, after doing the latter, she should call Kuroneko "Hentaineko" for the rest of the trip).

Once again, you're welcome to ideas, and as for the next chapters, I look forward to seeing them, and if you need any help writing them, feel free to ask me about some of your ideas.

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Hmm... as for leaving a mark, I was thinking more spank/bite/etc marks, but rope play is also something that could be left until they get home- unless Ayase wants to take revenge on Kuroneko for the little train thing by letting everyone on the beach know exactly what shes' into!

Or she could covertly lay a stencil on her back while she's tanning and "write" something in tan lines. As for what the stencil should say, perhaps "Property of Ayase Arageki" or perhaps the old favorite: "Pervert Cat" (As a bonus, after doing the latter, she should call Kuroneko "Hentaineko" for the rest of the trip).

Once again, you're welcome to ideas, and as for the next chapters, I look forward to seeing them, and if you need any help writing them, feel free to ask me about some of your ideas.

Wow that is some good ideas you were having there. Don't blame me if I really use some for the coming chapters

(Like I could actually see the screen of Ayase dropping sand on Kuroneko to form words on her back, you know. Don't know where it will fit in through. Or whether it should just be briefly mentioned or have whole actual chapter on it)

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Wow that is some good ideas you were having there. Don't blame me if I really use some for the coming chapters

(Like I could actually see the screen of Ayase dropping sand on Kuroneko to form words on her back, you know. Don't know where it will fit in through. Or whether it should just be briefly mentioned or have whole actual chapter on it)

Realistically speaking, unless she had a prepared stencil like of cardboard cut out or something, it would be difficult to accurately write in the words in Kuroneko's back with sand, although it might work at least to a degree. That said, even writing them off in some sort of marker might work- even after the ink washes off, the words would be written in her tan lines.

And if anything doesn't fit in at this point, there is plenty of other points in their relationship to for them to experiment with all kinds of different things!


And don't worry about using my ideas, I'm always happy to provide some romantic advice to our two lovebirds (at this point, I think I like your versions of Kuroneko and Ayase more than the canon ones... then again, maybe it's simply because I can relate to the kind of things they're into!)

In any thing, if you don't mind me asking, how are you doing on the chapters, any idea on a estimated time of completion. In any case, I eagerly await the next instalment.

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Realistically speaking, unless she had a prepared stencil like of cardboard cut out or something, it would be difficult to accurately write in the words in Kuroneko's back with sand, although it might work at least to a degree. That said, even writing them off in some sort of marker might work- even after the ink washes off, the words would be written in her tan lines.

And if anything doesn't fit in at this point, there is plenty of other points in their relationship to for them to experiment with all kinds of different things!


And don't worry about using my ideas, I'm always happy to provide some romantic advice to our two lovebirds (at this point, I think I like your versions of Kuroneko and Ayase more than the canon ones... then again, maybe it's simply because I can relate to the kind of things they're into!)

In any thing, if you don't mind me asking, how are you doing on the chapters, any idea on a estimated time of completion. In any case, I eagerly await the next instalment.

Next chapter 18 gonna be a bridge so don't expect any of the BDSM.
Just need a bit of detail on it out. The chapter 19 however is still on sketch, like I already know the main beef for it, but the lead up is still a bit vague

I actually had more problems with life than with writing those chapters honestly (both with work, and another family matter). Like last chapter I already got every detail planned out 3 days before actually have time to start typing... so... =/

Then as you already knew, unlike for the first few where i will just write whatever come to my mind. Now there is a need to double check/ triple check an idea to make sure a) it fit with previous chapters, and b) it won't deny any possible future events. So...

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

Next chapter 18 gonna be a bridge so don't expect any of the BDSM.
Just need a bit of detail on it out. The chapter 19 however is still on sketch, like I already know the main beef for it, but the lead up is still a bit vague

I actually had more problems with life than with writing those chapters honestly (both with work, and another family matter). Like last chapter I already got every detail planned out 3 days before actually have time to start typing... so... =/

Then as you already knew, unlike for the first few where i will just write whatever come to my mind. Now there is a need to double check/ triple check an idea to make sure a) it fit with previous chapters, and b) it won't deny any possible future events. So...

Take your time, and also, sorry for the slow replies, had a lot to do this weekend. Also, just out of curiosity, you have an account on MyAnimeList? There is a club there that might be of interest. Sadly its not as active as it was.

[risingstar3110]

Originally Posted by SPARTAN 119

Take your time, and also, sorry for the slow replies, had a lot to do this weekend. Also, just out of curiosity, you have an account on MyAnimeList? There is a club there that might be of interest. Sadly its not as active as it was.

I don't, but maybe I will try to look for it.

Meanswhile chapter 18. It was literally twice as long as normal chapter. And further to my defense at the slow writing of this, but real life has been hell for me these past weeks and possibly in coming weeks as well =/

As usual, it still hasn't proof-read properly... So...

Spoiler for Chapter 18:

“Matana Inn? I think I heard about it before, but can’t remember where it could be… Maybe try to ask the retail shop owner at the end of this street. She lived around here longer than me”

“Thank a lot for your trouble”

“You ladies take care of yourself as well”

I nodded back at the cafe owner to show my appreciation.

Sigh…. It’s the fifth person we asked already. All mentioned that they heard the name somewhere, but none could pinpoint where that Inn supposed to be.

I turned to Ayase:

“Ayase, do you remember if your friend said anything about that Inn location? “

“…”

“…”

“Ayase…? ”

“Yes… Kuroneko. Sorry were you asking something?”

Ayase had been in a state of absent-minded since we get off the train an hour ago.

I won’t lie, we currently are in a grave situation.

Because Ayase was so nervous, and stressed out during the whole time we were on the train. I would expect Ayase to reach her limit it as we stepped out of the close space of the train car and into the open street….

Maybe even throwing a bit of tantrum and call it quit.

But instead, she didn’t have any reactions as she was sinking deeper and deeper into this trance-like state…

“Did Mai mention anything about that inn location? “

“No, she did not Kuroneko”

“Let’s try to walk that way for another two blocks, OK?”

“As you wished, Kuroneko”

“Actually just stay here, I will ask the lady in front of us”

“I will, Kuroneko”

… and docile. Ayase had become totally docile as well.

She had been following and agreeing with everything I told her to do, without any questions. Despite I clearly have been leading her going around in circle for the past hour.

Ughhh… I think we returned to that early intersection. Strange. The advertisement clearly said it was only 15 minutes walking from the station.

Maybe I should take the right turn this time.

I hold to Ayase’s arm and try to direct her to turn at the right corner. That’s when I realised her whole upper body was completely stiff. As both of her arms already and probably unconsciously locked down in place to hold on her luggage and her front skirt.

This is not good.

Ayase is fast approaching the end threshold of her limit. Maybe if we can’t find that inn within the next 10 minutes, I really should take Ayase back to the station’s restroom to ‘fix’ her up.

Ughhh… dead end again.

As I tried to lead Ayase to turn around toward the station. Someone was appeared to block our way.

A huge muscular man, probably almost 2m in height with a well- tanned skin. Middle ages, probably in his mid-40s. Clearly to be a local, even before he spoke with a rough voice and thick local accents:

“Where are you ladies going?”

“…”

“ Have some time? Let’s have a chat, shall we?”

I could feel Ayase hands hold to my back, as I stood in front to protect Ayase away from said person.

Cleared my throat, I asked back with a stern voice :

“Before that, why don’t you tell us who you are first?”

……………………

“That is my stupid husband”

The inn lady laughed as she filled in the detail for our names.

“Don’t be so harsh, dear. How could I know that Aragaki-san would look so different to the picture that Mai printed for me? She looked so cheerful….”

“Stop being rude to our guests…”

The lady turned around and whacked her husband arm with a folding fan, before turned to us…

“Sorry Ayase-chan, my stupid husband didn’t mean anything by that…”

Even Ayase also did’t know how else to respond, other than forcing up an awkward smile…

She seemed to start recovering a fair bit from her earlier trance-like state, but still has much stiffer responses than her normal would.

Yes, as you have guessed, we had finally reached the Matana’s inn.

Apparently the inn owner was waiting for us around the station all along. And after realised that the two girls who have been wandering around outside the stations for an hour could be the two that he was looking for, he finally decided to approach us

In his defence, the picture that he held onto was a selfie of a very cheerful Ayase taking with another girl. And Ayase in there certainly looked really different to the tranced Ayase that I left the station with.

“Here, you just need to sign your name here”

“Ah, thank you..eh… Mrs…”

“Rie. Rie Tanaka. But you can just call me Rie.”

“Thank, Rie-san”

Similar to her husband, Rie-san also is a really tall woman, nearly 1.9m in height. She made the ‘teenager model’ Ayase looked like a child in comparison.

But unlike her husband (or their exchanges), she expressed a very refined aura, like she has been trained under this service business since young.

I means, she wear a full proper kimono even in this heat.

Either way, her name, I think I have seen it somewhere…

“Now please sit down, I will get ‘that’ girl to show you your room.”

I turned to Ayase seeking for answer, but she also had the same confused look on her face.

“Mai. Come down, your friends are here!!”

“Right away, Mom”

Instantly, you could hear footsteps of someone sprinting at full speed right on a floor above us toward the stair case. Then a small girl in yukata appeared, or rather “landed” at the bottom of the stair case, before rushing toward us at full-throttle.

“Tatatata… A… YA...SE….”

The small girl was definitely planning to glomp at Ayase at her full speed.

Without exchanging we both realised how bad this situation could turn out. If she tackled Ayase down and somehow unveiled her skirt.

As I immediately stepped up in front of Ayase shielding her away from any possible impact, that turned out to be unnecessary, as Rie-san immediately grab the small girl by her collar and pretty much lifted her off the ground…

“How many times have I told you not running inside the house already?”

“Ehehehe… sorry I was just too excited…”

Rie-san sighed and put the girl back on her feet, before slapping on her back…

“Now, go show your friends where the room is…”

“Yes, Mom.”

The daughter stood straight, saluted back and somehow cracked a smirk from her mother. Before start to float slowly toward our direction.

“Ayase!! I missed you so much…”

… despite all that the girl still managed to jump up and hang onto Ayase neck.

“Let…me…go….!! And didn’t we just had the same class until last week!!”

Ayase resisted with full power. Of course her dignity is at risk right now

“That is still a week. A… whole… week.”

“And why are you here? You never told me that you live here!”

“It’s my house after all, and…”

The girl started to grin like a certain robotic cat

“…it won’t be as interesting if I told you beforehand, is it?”

And then as her eye glanced toward me, and noticed my presence…

“Aghhh… Gokou-senpai.”

“Good day. Thank for havin…”

“No!!!”

She immediately moved away from me. But that threw her off balance, so the girl ended up scrambling, and pretty much crawling away to hide behind the counter.

Before after few second passed, she sneakily appeared next to Ayase from the other side of the counter.

“Uuuu, Ayase. What should I do? I just showed such an embarrassing sight in front of Gokou-senpai. ”

I quickly glance at Ayase, before she returned with a ‘ I will tell you later, now do something about this’ look.

So I slightly bowed at the girl…

“Tanaka-chan wasn’t it? Thank you for having us today…”

“…”

“Sorry for intruding while you are still catching up with Ayase-chan. But could you show us our room? Ayase… I mean I got really tired from the trip, so would want to lay down for a bit…”

Mai from the other side of the counter looked at Ayase for help in vain, and ended up deciding to consolidate herself on her own, stood up, and return with her own bow.

“My apologise for earlier shameful expression. Please follow me this way”

Despite still sniffing on her running nose, Mai suddenly and abruptly shifted away from her childish self, and replaced it with a very mature and refined business persona.

She literally transformed herself to another person within seconds. This girl certainly was Rie-san daughter after all.

As we followed Mai to our room, I did feel a bit guilty for crushing her joyful union with Ayase, and force her into this mask.

I really had to make up for her later…

… But Ayase’s issue comes first.

So we were led through a long corridor toward almost a separate building, before going upstairs toward a room at the corner.

And once the door opened, both I and Ayase simply were astounded by the sight.

The room certainly was not cheap, as it was at least 12-tatami in size and a direct clear view of ocean.

I turned to Mai, planning to ask if it was a mistake. But as if was trying to avoid me, she fully on her knee, bow down, telling us lunch will be served later, wishing us a happy stay, and almost ran away as fast as she could.

I really had to make up to that girl later.

Anyway

Phew… we finally could relax.

Now let’s move to that

I locked the door. Put down my bag. Handed ‘it’ to Ayase and sit myself down to one of the armchair

“Well done, Ayase.” “

“Eh…”

It did take Ayase a couple of seconds to realise that it finally ended.

“You got through my strenuous challenge; you can put it back on now…”

Ayase started to blush a bit before cracking up a nervous smile

“Then, please excuse m…”

“Ayase, where are you going?”

“Eh…?”

Ayase was half-pointing toward the restroom

“Just do it here”

“!!!”

“I already locked the door. And the window view is the sea, so no one would be able to peek at you from outside”

“But…”

Ayase glanced at me, then at the floor, then at me again….

“What’s wrong?”

“…”

“Don’t you want me to see?”

“I….I…but…”

“Why not? My dear Ayase is a good girl, right?”

“…”

“Why don’t you follow this one more request of mine…?.”

I could see the moment she gave up. As without further responding, she started to divert her eyes away from me, closed her eyes shut….

And reluctantly but slowly, Ayase started to put the panty that I gave to her back on.

To be honest, you won’t be able to see any of her private places due to her long flowing skirt.

But Ayase wouldn’t know that

She only knew that she is doing it right in front of me

In the middle of a room, in an unfamiliar place, in an unfamiliar town.

The extreme humiliation she was enduring… oh… how exciting it could feel.

Let’s push it a bit more, shall we?

“Could you hold up your skirt just like that? So I can see how it would look like on you?”

Ayase obediently followed my request. Surprisingly, without any resistance this time.

“Cute, very cute, my dear Ayase. Black laced really does look perfect on your white skin…”

“…”

“Open your eyes. Look at me. Ayase”

“...”

Once again, Ayase followed my commands without any questioning.

As I continuously enjoyed the sight. I could realise that tears had started to form in her eyes and her breath started getting shorter and shorter.

A real pity, but I guessed it’s about time to end this


“You can put your skirt back down now”

“…”

“Now come over here…”

Ayase obediently, slowly and cautiously approached me.

“Relax, Ayase. Just a reward for doing so well today…”

Still sitting on the armchair, I reached up, grabbed her collar with my right hand, and pull her face down toward mine before giving her a short kiss on her lips.

A short and sweet kiss.

It should be just that. But as I released her collar, opened up my eyes, and parted our lips away. Captivating mine was Ayase’s passionate eyes as she didn’t even move an inch away from me. I could notice that her lips were nibbling at themselves like yearning for more.

Sigh…. I really spoiled you today didn’t I?

And our lips started to touch again

…End of Chapter 18….

[SPARTAN 119]

Originally Posted by risingstar3110

I don't, but maybe I will try to look for it.

Meanswhile chapter 18. It was literally twice as long as normal chapter. And further to my defense at the slow writing of this, but real life has been hell for me these past weeks and possibly in coming weeks as well =/

As usual, it still hasn't proof-read properly... So...

Another excellent installment as usual. Looks to me like things are about to heat up next chapter. I look forwards to seeing what happens next in Ayase and Kuroneko's adventures in BDSM. It's OK with regard to the slow replies, I have had some stuff distracting me as well.

[risingstar3110]

Thank for the comments as always

Yeah, I guess everyone is busy as the end of the year approach...