Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Kha]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

And I really wouldn't mind Kay being called in for emergencies stemming from shady reasons And as for the Scryas...

Kay: Shinji, I need more info on this relic, find me some good reference material stat!
Shinji: You don't mean the "Ten Time Rheias Award Winning Archaelogist and Author Yuuno Scrya?"
Kay: You're such a mind reader! Get me as much as you can!
Shinji: *sigh* Like she looks up on info with anyone else...

K noted.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Though this version of Keroko is what I like to call the "RPG version"

the real Keroko is a character that actually has a part in the storyline. She would fight alongside Fate and Nanoha, which meant that she had to be at least that powerfull at the time, and that didn't lessen.

I might post her bio later, but its going to take some time to gather all the data and put it to paper. A little sneak preview: Her full name is Takamachi G. Keroko, or in mid-childa style, Keroko Georashi Takamachi.

Yes, there's a story behind that one.

That G unnerved me for a split second there.

I see. Well go ahead. The 'Kha' I put up was in-fic up till the A's to StrikerS arc, and you can see after that it was a plain joke, as with what I intended the FileS arc to be.

Originally Posted by Darco_emp

Kha Print me a paper copy and drop it off at my desk.... I'm serious about this, I'm not read that Thing unless its in me hands

Its interesting too see alot of support types here, I wonder how many of you guys tanks in MMO....

You're gonna have to wait. And I'm not about to let the whole UWAnime discover my true identity as the Messiah of Neo Velka.

Well my mains are a Priest and a Paladin in WoW. And I usually go for the healing character in any game, and I'm a trainee doctor IRL, hence my nickname 'The Cleric' or in this case 'der Kleriker'.

Besides, I think we now worship the Boost class for all the cool tricks they have.

There's a rogue up there I think, and Lowe's Kay should be a full arcane mage.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

@ Kha: WOAH, talk about WALL Of Unabashed Blue Cheese *picks himself up for a moment*, it's more a fanfic than a character profile I am quite envious of your ability to creat cool german sounding attacks and abilities though Especially the armors Panzer, Jaeger and Schneider (I know I've heard of a combination of these three somewhere... Liger Zero... )

Originally Posted by Keroko

@ kha: W00t! More Warcaft references, atta boy, Kha! Now I'll have to work extra hard to get the biggest bio. You ain't seen the true Keroko yet!

Originally Posted by Klashikari

The amount of Warcraft / WOW reference is just... obscene
with some twist of FMP, SC, and even gundam

I must admit : the complexity and density of your "fic" are really high, which could be really a serious and solid fan creation suitable for nanohaverse, except if one catches the references

I was pretty amused by the amount of references, though not on mocking way (though the mention of AS, Power Word : Fortitude/Shield just killed me )

to much my surprise, some of your explanations are even more "believable" than the real things XD (example : Benediction of Freedom)

But please people, I think you should stay withint the "plausible" for nanohaverse : giving the opportunity of some imagined addictions can be really too chaotic, resulting into much more "meh" impressions, rather than enjoyable things. (i hope i won't see anyone mentionning like "yamato mage, using a Strike barrier jacket, which can be fused with Freedom jacket", else, it might be even cheesier than SSS++++ Mages)
beyond a certain limit, it won't be really bearable to read :s [/rant OFF]

For a full list of references in that:

Zoids New Century - Liger Zero
Gundam Wing - Tallgeese for Jaegerform
Gundam SEED - Avenging Wrath reinterpretation
Casshern - Inner Barrier Jacket
Full Metal Panic - Lambda Field, Whispers of the Ascended
Archspace - Whispers of the Ascended refers to an in-game event
World of Warcraft - Paladin (Most of the skills)
Final Fantasy 7 Advent Children - Gemi-stigma
Neon Genesis Evangelion - Gemi-stigma
Starcraft - Zerg
Warcraft 3 - Burning Legion
Command & Conquer 3 - Scrin
Robotech US - Invid (though I'm sure that came from somewhere else first)
The Forever War - Tarsons
Eragon - Dragon Rider (Though that can be anywhere)
Intel - "Core Fusion" was a processor chip
BLEACH - Flash Step (Also any shounen anime)
Jigoku Shoujo - the first 3/4 of Confession is Enma Ai's pet phrase
LASTEXILE - Claudia crystals

DotA - Divine Rapier. My favorite holy weapon.

HERE - Heterophobe legion

The original henshin was based on the "Final Fusion", but Subaru got to it first, so I edited it out, and became a general random super robot combination.

Phew! Did I miss anything? After all that was looong.

I understand the problem of such a character. In fact, most of this file was never used. I personally keep it as a souvenir for fun, as a perfect example of what is fun to do but NOT good to do.

No not that... Joke desu, you know? It was fun, tongue glued to cheek desu. lol But thanks. I thought I was about to be shot to pieces for posting something like that, even though it was really modelling my habit of grabbing little pieces around me to make into a new story.

[Erio]

Ok first I'll reply to comments for my character and other things, then I'll review the new submitted characters. (Dang there are a lot!)

Originally Posted by Keroko

Heh, keroko actually uses this style of fighting as well, only she uses it to keep mid-range. Though in my opinion attacks like Starlight Breaker aren't fully inefective, even without a bind. No matter what your reaction time is, if you can't get out of the blast radius in time, you're still prety much screwed.

Yeah, I had that in mind. But if you see Nanoha gathering that much energy for her next attack, you would definitely start either running away or moving in all directions so she wont be able to aim her attack at you. Of course, if she binds you, then its all over.

Originally Posted by Kha

First impressions...

Sophia: *shouts with echoes* Materialize!

Sigdrifa: *displays in micro-text* Sophia - Orange Assassin - Initializing - Boost Movement - Intelligent Device - Loading... Materialize OK.

At least that's what they remind me of. As an assassin she's got the chance to work on missions that run parallel to the story. We might even be able to explore the TSAB traitor theory with her. And when she gets the red packet with Nanoha's name on it, there's going to be lots of room for hard-hitting action too. She looks pretty advanced not sure how to improve her.

I put a lot of thought into this character, and the idea is not something I invented yesterday. In fact, I had the character ready last week, when we were asking for this thread to be created.


@Skane
Well, at least for my character, the "ranks" are used as an estimate of her ability. Not to mention her magic rank is B.

I agree with what you say, though. I guess for new characters we have to mention how are the magic ranks used: if they are military ranks or just estimates of your character's ability.

Example: In the first season, by the time Nanoha cast SB, her estimated magical power was AAA, but she had the experience of maybe a military rank B, or even C, mage.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

@ Erio: A combat alchemist? Rather unusual even by Nanoha.. still, like the work you put into the character. Although the Counter Combat style seems rather basic in its description, and could almost be applied to other high speed combat styles. Although being an anti-mage makes her good enough for me XD

Well, the difference between an alchemist and a conjurer is that an alchemist changes the properties of an existing object, while the conjurer materializes the object out of thin air.

About the Counter Combat Style, as you said it is basic. I wanted to add more to it but I didnt know what to add. I was just trying to emphasize that, with her ability to materialize any weapon on the fly, she specializes in counterattacking rather than trying to get the initiative.

I'm glad you liked my assassin.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

@Erio: Your character reminds me of Emiya Shirou. In any case, I find her style one of the more interesting one i've seen recently. Good work.

Thanks.

While I definitely liked Emiya Shirou's materialization techniques, having my character say, "I need a blade able to penetrate that barrier!!" or something, feels really out of place in the Nanoha-verse, as the creation of such blade would not have any logical explanation (using Nanoha-verse terms).

My real inspiration was Kurapica, from Hunter X Hunter.


Thank you all for your comments. I'm glad you guys liked my character.

[Loner]

Ok, we've got plenty of unconventional, extremely capable Nanoha protagonists by now. What we need, therefore, are some antagonists ala Fate from season 1, for our protagonists to interact with.

So I made one.

And then I read back through what I'd made, looked in the mirror, and told the guy staring at me, "...Man, you are MESSED. UP."

Spoiler for I can't believe this came out of my imagination...:

Name: Shizuko (no family name)
Gender: Female

Current Age: 15
Height: 5'4" (as of age 13)
Weight: 86 lbs (as of age 13)
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Black
Rank (Mage): C (as of age 13)
Magic type: Neo-Velkan
Previous Affiliation: TSAB Armed Forces, 2nd Regiment
Previous Rank (Organizational):: Cadet
Current Location: Unkown
Current Affiliation: Unknown
Current Status: AWOL

Background: Shizuko was born on one of the core worlds. Left at an orphanage shortly after birth, she produced unremarkable grades in school until her possession of a Linker Core was diagnosed at age 10. She enrolled in the Cadet Training program at age 11. She was regarded as an cadet of average potential with no disciplinary problems, though a low level of self-esteem and an unusually high level of performance anxiety was noted by Instructor Takamachi Nanoha early in year 73.

In June of year 73, during a combat training session, Cadet Shizuko suffered self-inflicted injuries due to the use of an unauthorized device. Subsequent evaluation resulted in Shizuko being removed from the Cadet program and being placed into psychiatric care. She escaped confinement three days later and, as of April year 75, remains at large.


Personality: Shizuko was regarded as shy and reticent by the majority of personnel who had significant contact with her, while displaying a tendency to avoid social confrontation, generally by assuming fault in all such situations. A target of more frequent than average hazing by her peers, this may have exacerbated her preconcieved notions regarding her own worth. She was noted for being simultaneously encouraging of others while still being overly preoccupied by any real or perceived shortcomings in herself. It was specifically noted during the interrogation of Shizuko immediately upon her regaining consciousness following the incident, that her attitude at learning about the effects of the device were what Instructor Takamachi described as "joyful" in spite of - or potentially because of - the injuries she sustained.

The psychological evaluations performed during Shizuko's entrance examination failed to reveal the existance or extremety of self-hatred that led to the training incident. The fact that Shizuko chose such a dangerous method of increasing her magical power in spite of having access to safer methods, such as the Velka-style cartridge system, is cited as proof of these conclusions.

Post-incident evaluation of her actions suggest Shizuko possesses a considerable fear of failure, as well as a strong passion to protect others. The psychological pressure of these factors, when combined with her own devalued sense of worth, is believed to be responsible for the mental breakdown that led to the decision to pursue the construction of such a dangerous device.

The probability that Shizuko would intentionally take actions that might result in casualties to innocents is believed to be low. However, the exact nature any further progression of her instability might take cannot be predicted with any degree of confidence.

Armament: Shizuko's primary device at the time of the incident was a standard-issue, Velka-type training spear. This device was critically damaged during the incident, as a result of being force-fed more energy than it was rated for.

Her second device was invented by Shizuko herself and its existance had been successfully concealed from Bureau personnel until its first activation. A non-intelligent, single-function unit, this unnamed apperatus was embedded in a chestpiece slim enough to be concealed under the wielder's clothes.

The unauthorized apperatus was designed to forcibly extract potential sources of non-magical energy - including, but not limited to, electrical energy from the central nervous system, caloric energy from fat cells, and nuclear energy from the molecules making up the body's cellular structure - from the wearer's body and convert it to a form that is compatible with the output of a mage's Linker Core. While the exact efficiency of this conversion process is unknown and depends upon how much energy is initially extracted from the target, the resulting increase in output observed during the training incident was roughly comparable to that produced by two standard Velka-style cartridges. These results were achieved with the apperatus performing at what was later determined to be approximately 30% of its maximum capacity.

The consequences resulting from the operation of this device are extreme. Cadet Shizuko went into cardiac arrest immediately following the dispatching of the third of three combat drones. The cadet's appearance, as described by the first instructor to reach her after her collapse, was "emaciated, with her mouth frozen open in a distended scream of agony", which suggests the extraction process is highly painful. Medical examination revealed high levels of strain to all internal organs, cellular-level damage, internal bleeding, and a severe reduction in the stored fat within Shizuko's body.

Analysis of the confiscated apperatus and its operating principles suggest that the energy requirements of the extraction process increase logrithmically with distance from the intended target. This, and the effectiveness of standard mage barriers against the technique, leads to the conclusion that any attempt to create an effective offensive weapon based on the same principles would be impractical. However, the potential for misuse - specifically, the possibility of using non-mages, willing or otherwise, as expendable sources of mage energy - has led the TSAB to declare this an illegal technology.

The TSAB is currently in possession of both devices. However, Shizuko has demonstrated the ability to construct both standard Velka devices and the confiscated apperatus, given access to the necessary components.

Recommendations: Since the incident, revisions have been made to psychological evaluation practices for both the recruitment process and the ongoing observation process used during cadet training, to better facilitate early detection and treatment of similar problems in current and future personnel. Lines of access to the supplies necessary for a cadet to engage in the construction of any device have been reevaluated and restricted, and the regulations governing the development and use of non-standard devices by personnel in the Cadet program have been updated.

Shizuko is considered to be mentally ill and a danger to herself, as well as to others (albeit indirectly). If encountered by Bureau personnel, she is to be taken into custody immediately.

Consider this character, or any part of her concept, open for use by all.

Now, as far as meeting the forum rules about commenting on other peoples' characters:

Kha, it shows you put a lot of time and thought into those characters. Having said that, with the number and level of abilities you put into der Kleriker, I may have to start referring to you as Gah! instead of Kha. :P Definately an alternate universe character, though, with all the non-canon revisions to Fate's backstory. (Nothing wrong with that!) VERY nice detail in the visual descriptions.

Enigma, love the concept. I've been expecting someone to look at how the Wolkenritter might have to face up to their past sins, and it looks like you're version has a lot of potential.

USB500, just one question: where does Leonidas' stand on the views expressed by this board's 300?

[Serenity85]

lol Wow, so many new characters to read^^ I'll have to read them all carefully before I can really comment on them, but I'm kinda busy right now (just trolling). Give me a couple hours and I'll have comments as well as additions for my charcter to boot^^

[Erio]

I'm quite busy today too so I havent been able to check out the newly submitted characters. I'll check them out in order when I get home tonight.


For now, though, here are my comments for Keroko's character.

- First, I wonder, did you come up with Aspect magic and all the dragons yourself? The whole story was very interesting.

- I love the part about Keroko being good friends with Nanoha. I already pictured a scenario where my character, Sophia, meets Nanoha and the rest of the cast, too (with lots of encounters and blood... well, not that many...). I dont know if I should post it here or in the Fanfic thread... (not to mention I'm afraid some will consider it lame... )

- More on Keroko and Nanoha's relationship: I find it weird that, in StrikerS, Nanoha didnt make a friend in a similar way and invited him or her to Hayate's unit. It would have made so much sense. And Nanoha being as popular as she is (the Ace of Aces), I would have thought of a huge group of Nanoha Fanclub members begging to join Riot Force 6.

- Hyperdrive... Disgaea reference?

- Ok, lets see if I understood this: What Aspect mages do differently, when compared to Mid-Childan and Belkan mages, is that they draw their magic energy from one of the five great dragons. This energy is imbued into a magical device, which has a limiter to control the power (in the case of the Black aspect).

- You know, it sounds fishy that the TSAB would allow mages to choose the Black aspect even though it is extremely unstable and full of dark and negative energy. Maybe you could have said that Keroko chose to become a Black aspect mage before she joined the TSAB, and that she had been corrupted by the negative magic and thus not able to stop using it. Then the TSAB applied a limiter to her device in other to keep her in control.
(Whoa, I found Keroko's story to be quite interesting so I came up with different scenarios for her background. Of course, its your character, so this is just some fanfic about it... I guess )

- Very good character. I really like her background story with Nanoha, as it seems very natural if added to the main StrikerS storyline. If you made a fanfic about Keroko when she was training with Nanoha, the fanfic could also go as a Nanoha fanfic about her days as a trainee.

- The fact that Caro has a dragon summon can only mean one thing: Your Aspect magic may actually be for real.

[Timeless Enigma]

Loner, I really like that character, Shizuko, great description. When I read the way she converted energy into usable magical power I cringed. This girl is really messed up. Shizuko has a lot of potential, but in the end I don't think a little "befriending" would help too much.

I made some small changes to my character's description and added "Arcane Magic."

The simplest way to explain Arcane Magic would be to use Final Fantasy XII/X-2's Arcane Magic(k) as an example. For one to use Arcane Magic, sacrifice has to made, such as dealing triple damage but losing a bit of HP yourself. This sacrifice is known as "feedback."

Arcane Magic is really about manipulating the soul, closely related with the linker core. It's a very dangerous type of power that should not be used frequently and each use should be carefully planned out for maximum effectiveness and minimum feedback. Every Arcane ability has the possibility of affecting the caster.

Here are some examples:

Soul Siphon
The most commonly used ability by Amemiya is one embedded in Sirocco itself. There are two types of siphoning, active and passive.
Passive: collects only the excess, free-flowing magic power and soul power in the environment
Active: forcibly leeches power from living beings and converts it to magic power. Has the potential to drain even the caster's power.

Heat
Removes some mental inhibitions of the target. Target may cave in to irrational behaviour (similar to Final Fantasy's Berserk). May have similar effects on the caster.

Mind Cloud
Softens situational awareness, allowing for greater deception and less attention to detail in a high-pressure situation (Similar to Confuse)

Grim Reaper
Target experiences near-death, being pushed on the brink of insanity. Only effective on those afraid of dying.

Sweet Sorrow
Similar to Grim Reaper, the target is assaulted by his own fears and failures. Caster must have knowledge of what the target is truly afraid of for maximum effectiveness.

Soul Sacrifice
Boosts magic output (for a single attack or for a period of time) while weakening caster's defense against Arcane Magic. Very dangerous spell if used frequently.

Salt Wounds
Boosts strength (for a single attack or for a period of time) while weakening caster's physical defense. Very dangerous spell if used frequently.

You'll notice that a lot of these abilities are mindgames.
If I can get through the Prologue of my fic, I think I'll be in good shape. I'll try not to make an original character the most prominent character featured.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Kha

That G unnerved me for a split second there.

The G had you unnerved? Why?

Originally Posted by Erio

- First, I wonder, did you come up with Aspect magic and all the dragons yourself? The whole story was very interesting.

The aspect magic part, yes. The aspect dragons themselves are a Warcraft refference. Most people tend to skim past the treasure of lore that is the Warcraft background.

Originally Posted by Erio

- I love the part about Keroko being good friends with Nanoha. I already pictured a scenario where my character, Sophia, meets Nanoha and the rest of the cast, too (with lots of encounters and blood... well, not that many...). I dont know if I should post it here or in the Fanfic thread... (not to mention I'm afraid some will consider it lame... )

You could always give it a shot, worst that could happen here is people telling wha they didn't like and giving some pointers.

Originally Posted by Erio

- More on Keroko and Nanoha's relationship: I find it weird that, in StrikerS, Nanoha didnt make a friend in a similar way and invited him or her to Hayate's unit. It would have made so much sense. And Nanoha being as popular as she is (the Ace of Aces), I would have thought of a huge group of Nanoha Fanclub members begging to join Riot Force 6.

Huh, never thought about that. Good point.

Originally Posted by Erio

- Hyperdrive... Disgaea reference?

Star Wars, actually. Hyperdrives are the engines that allow them to make the jump to lightspeed.

Originally Posted by Erio

- Ok, lets see if I understood this: What Aspect mages do differently, when compared to Mid-Childan and Belkan mages, is that they draw their magic energy from one of the five great dragons. This energy is imbued into a magical device, which has a limiter to control the power (in the case of the Black aspect).

Exactly.

Originally Posted by Erio

- You know, it sounds fishy that the TSAB would allow mages to choose the Black aspect even though it is extremely unstable and full of dark and negative energy. Maybe you could have said that Keroko chose to become a Black aspect mage before she joined the TSAB, and that she had been corrupted by the negative magic and thus not able to stop using it. Then the TSAB applied a limiter to her device in other to keep her in control.

Funny thing is, the original Keroko did have something like that. Only in that case it was an accidental encounter that left her with the powers of neltharion, and an unstable seal to contain it. The unstable seal made her pretty violent, always looking for fights and getting in trouble, untill she encountered Nanoha and Yuuno. Yuuno immediately recognised the seal and fixed it by using a scale of Neltharion. (yes, he was carying a scale of Neltharion. He's an archeologist).

But you'll read a more detailed description about that when I get her real bio up.

Originally Posted by Erio

(Whoa, I found Keroko's story to be quite interesting so I came up with different scenarios for her background. Of course, its your character, so this is just some fanfic about it... I guess )

Hey, that's what were posting these things here for, right?

Originally Posted by Erio

- Very good character. I really like her background story with Nanoha, as it seems very natural if added to the main StrikerS storyline. If you made a fanfic about Keroko when she was training with Nanoha, the fanfic could also go as a Nanoha fanfic about her days as a trainee.

I'll think about it. I'm not a fast updater when it comes to fanfics.

Originally Posted by Erio

- The fact that Caro has a dragon summon can only mean one thing: Your Aspect magic may actually be for real.

Yes, imagine my surprise.

[Nightengale]

@Kha

Haha..The Gil Graham Screwed Love Chronicles, as cranky as it sounds, is serious. Imagine the original Nanoha season and A's only with young Graham and without a very happy ending, where both seasons has important women in Graham's life bite the dust. The first season being ARIA, and the second Lieze. As for where Lotte plays a part, let's just say she's Mary Jane in the ending of Spiderman 1 movie, only without a happy sequel for her. :P

Spoiler for Aria:

• Name: Artificial Receptionary Intelligence Android Type-Weapon/A.R.I.A
• Gender: None, preprogrammed identity : female
• Age: 2 year old, appearance-wise 15
• Hair colour: Light toned brown
• Eye colour: Purple
• Height: 162 cm
• Weight: Classified Information
• Birth World : Mid-Childa
• Affiliation: Professor Efini
• Occupation: Android Anti-Mage Weapon
• Alignment: Neutral
• Magic Type: Mid-childa
• Mage-Type: Anti-Mage Magic-emulation Close Combat Mage
• Magic Rank: AA-

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• Device Name: Herself
• Device Type: Emulative Manipulation Core-System
• Magic System: Mid-Childa
• Magic Element: None
• Magic Circle Color: None

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Character Background:

A.R.I.A was created by Professor Efini, using his granddaughter's personality core as a response behavioural system to obey him and also to save time from writing a proper A.I, with the sole purpose of collecting enough Linker Core source of humans with magical aptitudes, in order to create a spatial time-gate to return back home to Mid-childa to meet his family. Being a android capable of emulating magical powers, she is powered by magical reactions from Linker Core responses, which indirectly requires her to collect Linker Cores to actually survive as well.Her programming structure works in 2-cours, where her A.I dictates regular personality control with the magic system shut down to regulate power-saving, and the other way round during missions, to emphasis on combat efficiency.

Her personality, similar to those of Efini's actual granddaughter, was slightly similar to how Aria acted,carefree, cheerful and fun, even if less of a tease. However, her core programming only reacts to her outer behavioural patterns outside of combat, and thus isn't imprinted with memories of proper human interaction other than regular A.I patterns on speech response. Therefore, on an occasion where she unabashly stir up trouble due to lack of understanding, she was pulled out of the scene, by then 12 year old Graham.

Through constant interaction and meeting with Graham then, who treated her like a slightly dim-witted, but kind hearted and cheerful elder sister, she began developing...a form of attachment and attraction towards Graham, who then had a crush on Lotte, a regular girl from his school. Unaware of herself, Aria seems even more awkward in her cluster programs, and somehow created a slight imagery shift on her personal looks to slighty resemble Lotte. As an A.I..she was venturing into dangerous teritorries of human-like emotions.

Her weapon-systems slowly came across masked Graham who's then Barrier Jacket included teh mask to hide from possible onlookers, and in a heated battle, where Aria holds dominance of flight due to Graham not trained to fly, despite possessing the combat powers of AA+ rank mage, lost to Aria who used the method to try to absorb his Linker Core powers, only to realize that she was fighting Graham, and her A.I somehow struggles to regain dominance in that combat state, and flew off. Graham knew then...that that girl was Aria.

Due to Aria's overlap of both A.I and combat functions, the Dr. pitied her, and removed her magical functions, but she was still slowly losing energy due to the short moment of shortcircuit. As Graham and the TSAB clerk eventually stormed the hideout of the Dr, Graham in shock learned that Aria, was far from human, an android composed of 95% robotic components, with only shreds of bio-organic layers, for recon purposes. However, to Graham, even though she's not flesh and blood, she was still his friend, and someone he shared his friendship with and will save her.

In the climax, when 5 of the Dr.'s non A.I cyborg-emulations of Aria lost to Graham, Aria revealed that she knew...the time that cross-laped from the Dr's previous world world across Earth and to Mid-childa again...30 years of difference had already occured before the Dr. even reached Earth, and that no matter if the Dr. returned or not, his family he wanted to see...is dead. Then, as the Dr. resigned to his fate and proceeds to start the self-destruct countdown, Graham came to save Aria, who was then already slowly shutting down. Graham tried to give Aria his Linker Core permanently so that she can live on at the cost of his magical affinity, but then, Aria, despite losing magical powers, somehow rewrote her android functions and pushed Graham away to safety, and at that final moment, confesses her true feelings to him before permanently shutting down.

Following that, one day before the clerk returns back to service and also one day before Graham finised primary school, he went on a date with Lotte, only to realize something inside him has died. And the next day...Graham dissapeared from Earth.

Magical Capabilities:

Due to the limitations of self-defined humanoid weapons with organic components in the release of long-range spells, Aria was designed in mind for close-combat along with high speed dogfights. Her left arm, mainly composed of magic-inducing organic components are focused for use of sensitive magical spells and extraction of Linker Core energy, something Graham would later refine practically and teach his familiar, meanwhile her left arm, despite still possessing external touch sensories similar to human skin, are more composed of flex-material exoskeleton-based metal, which despite not being the most flexible material in handling magical energy, is also one of the strongest components that can withstand and force out concentrated masses of raw magical energy. This arm is unable to conjur elemental magic conversion due to it's resistance to control sensitivity, but it's primary usage in the channel of magical energy in the surrounding similar to collection spells to save her own power supply and maintain it as reinforced magical fist or even magically formed meta-physical weapons formed solely out of raw magical energy in the forms of swordarms or lightsabers. Due to her nature of internal-self formation of magical powers, she does not physically show out any magical circles, and are self-contained inside her skeletonal structure, thus allowing a better aptitude at physical combat.

Magnetition :~ High speed external-attachment spell. This spell works only when the opponent is faster, and reacts by using the internal Linker Core responsive mechanism to forcefully create a magnetic push towards the opponent at a very close range, allowing for high speed close combat dog fights even with faster opponents.

Form II Saber :~ High precision energy manipulation blade. Using the right arm's forceful collective reactor core, this spell works through a high compression of collective energy from surroundings if possible, and forms an energy blade, and extra magical energy not used for the blade formation is supplied towards to the reaction and limb reinforcement core of the android, to focus on elegant swordfighting that is both powerful and precise by magically adapting the body response.

Runic Reinforce :~ By using similar proportions of Mid-childa Boost Elements solely concentrated on her limbs and her fist along with rune-based magical enchantment drawn internally inside her system core, she is capable of consistent high speed/power jabs, punches and kicks that varies to dramatic license lol.

Linker Extract :~ Self-explainatory.

R.S.S Feed :~ Reactive Sphere Shielding Feed, which is a self-responce magical barrier that responses to the reactionary system of the android and the android's estimation of the attack level, only to conjure up just enough of a barrier to protect from long-range and mid-range attacks. This system is ineffective against spells above AA rank, and also doesn't respond properly in high speed close combat dogfights due to the reactive system being focused on the limb reactive structure than the shields.

I'm halfway through Admiral Lieze, but got stuck due to not being so sure how to handle her shotacon side (( She's 32, when Graham's 19 )) while still making her a strong, mature adult female and how to handle her 'death', so I'll give ARIA first...which has some problems too, but you know...flexibility.

I had 3 "references" in my magic spells. Cookie to anyone who gets all right. :P

[Serenity85]

lol this thread has sorta died down now hasn't it^^ well I'll see if I can spice things up a bit^^

I'm really loving everyones ides, really well thoughtout. My only thought is with giving a character uber ranks like S. Come on, your like making uber rare mages that are suppose to be few and fleeting I think a nice cap is AA, good but theres room for improvement^^

Ok Back to my character^^

For those who have forgotten, this is where she stands as of now
http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...1&postcount=14

now on to chapter 2^^

Spoiler for How Aselia Joined TSAB, RF6:

How Aselia joined TSAB, RF6

It happened quite accidentally really. Nanoha, Fate and Hayate were no a weekend break from RF6, giving the new recruits a chance to visit family and generally take a break after a week of training. While site seeing in Tokyo, they sense a magical disturbance coming from the nearby forest. As they rushed to the seen, the disturbance faded. To be safe, they decided to search the surrounding area; hopefully they would fine something that would be linked to the disturbance. They came across the Mayio Monk Shrine and so they decided to make sure no one was hurt. Upon entering they could feel the residual affects of a spell, and soon enough they came across the main courtyard were a group of monks had started to repair a damaged pillar and a little blue haired girl being comforted by what appeared to be the resident Master Monk. They decided to see if the girl was Ok, and if there was anything they could do to help. Upon a brief conversation they soon discovered that the little girl, Aselia, had caused the disturbance.

After things cooled down, the Aces decide they needed to have a conversation with Miroku about Aselia’s well being. Over a pot of green tea, they carefully explain to Miroku that although she is young and so far she’s only caused minor incidents with no injuries, she will eventually get older and her magic potential will eventually get much stronger then it is now, she may accidentally let her power go out of control again with a higher risk of doing harm to herself and those around her. They explained to him, that it is best for her to get proper magical training, something she can’t get here. After taking in everything they had to say, he decides, with a reluctant heart, to let them take Aselia back with them, under a few conditions one of which stated that she would be put under their care and no one else’s. They agree, and Miroku heads out to explain things to his daughter. As expected, she doesn’t take it well; after all, this was the first real home she ever knew. Aselia wipes the tears from her eyes and reluctantly agrees with her father, and she begins packing her belongings. A teary eyed Aselia says her goodbyes to rest of the shrine, but just as she prepares to board the TSAB helicopter with Nanoha, Miroku emerges from the Temple caring the shrines ancient sword. In a final jester of love before his daughter leaves, he hands over the blade, telling her to be careful and train hard. A now crying Aselia hugs her father and boards the helicopter. It then takes off, heading towards the TSAB main headquarters in Mid-Childan, where Aselia would begin training with the rest of the recruits.

Bio States at this point in the timeline:

Character Name: Aselia Mayio
Gender: Female
Looks: Hair: Long light blue-ish/purple
Eyes: Blue
Height: 110 cm
Age: 10 (confirmed after medical exam)
Birthday: 8th April
Weight: 31 kg
Affiliation: TSAB Trainee
She is currently under the care of RF6 as per Miroku’s request, must to the dismay of the higher-ups

Mage Rank: C+ (tested)
She has potential to be very strong, but she currently can’t fully control some of her stronger spells, resulting in the lower rank.

Skill Rank: A+ (tested)
Not a common rank given as magic is the main key factor, but because of her skills with the sword, they decided to test her and give an appropriate rank. Even thou she is one of the best swordsman (minus Signum) RF6 and TSAB have, her lack of skill with magic has kept her in training then on missions.

Usual Wear: a modified white Monk robe to fit her size and a pair of running shoes purchased for her by Miroku while he was shopping for supplies in downtown Tokyo. She considers these her most cherished positions. She currently still doesn’t have a barrier jacket as of yet.

Magic Type: Vaulcon – a mix of Velka and Summoning, it still not known what type it truly is yet, so for now, it is being called Vaulcon

Caster class: Close-Range Elemental Summoner (Ice)

Device: She currently uses the ancient sword given to her by her father, it is still not known if it is and I.D. or what power if any it holds.

No new spells at this time other then ones she currently knows.

Heres something for ppl to chat about. Let me know what you think, as well as suggestions to improve it^^

I'll post chapter 3 when I have it finalized. Here some hints, she gets he device and barrier jacket, and a familar face will join in the trainning exercises, try to guess who^^

[USB500]

I just love the characters you guys just posted. Give me some times so that I can comment each and every one of them.

@ Skane:
Well, I guess I should edit some of my future characters. I appreciate your feedback.

@ Kha:
...did I sense shameless self-promotion?

Originally Posted by Loner

USB500, just one question: where does Leonidas' stand on the views expressed by this board's 300?

Err.... can you elaborate?

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Nightengale

@Kha

Haha..The Gil Graham Screwed Love Chronicles, as cranky as it sounds, is serious. Imagine the original Nanoha season and A's only with young Graham and without a very happy ending, where both seasons has important women in Graham's life bite the dust. The first season being ARIA, and the second Lieze. As for where Lotte plays a part, let's just say she's Mary Jane in the ending of Spiderman 1 movie, only without a happy sequel for her. :P

Spoiler for Aria:

• Name: Artificial Receptionary Intelligence Android Type-Weapon/A.R.I.A
• Gender: None, preprogrammed identity : female
• Age: 2 year old, appearance-wise 15
• Hair colour: Light toned brown
• Eye colour: Purple
• Height: 162 cm
• Weight: Classified Information
• Birth World : Mid-Childa
• Affiliation: Professor Efini
• Occupation: Android Anti-Mage Weapon
• Alignment: Neutral
• Magic Type: Mid-childa
• Mage-Type: Anti-Mage Magic-emulation Close Combat Mage
• Magic Rank: AA-

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• Device Name: Herself
• Device Type: Emulative Manipulation Core-System
• Magic System: Mid-Childa
• Magic Element: None
• Magic Circle Color: None

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Character Background:

A.R.I.A was created by Professor Efini, using his granddaughter's personality core as a response behavioural system to obey him and also to save time from writing a proper A.I, with the sole purpose of collecting enough Linker Core source of humans with magical aptitudes, in order to create a spatial time-gate to return back home to Mid-childa to meet his family. Being a android capable of emulating magical powers, she is powered by magical reactions from Linker Core responses, which indirectly requires her to collect Linker Cores to actually survive as well.Her programming structure works in 2-cours, where her A.I dictates regular personality control with the magic system shut down to regulate power-saving, and the other way round during missions, to emphasis on combat efficiency.

Her personality, similar to those of Efini's actual granddaughter, was slightly similar to how Aria acted,carefree, cheerful and fun, even if less of a tease. However, her core programming only reacts to her outer behavioural patterns outside of combat, and thus isn't imprinted with memories of proper human interaction other than regular A.I patterns on speech response. Therefore, on an occasion where she unabashly stir up trouble due to lack of understanding, she was pulled out of the scene, by then 12 year old Graham.

Through constant interaction and meeting with Graham then, who treated her like a slightly dim-witted, but kind hearted and cheerful elder sister, she began developing...a form of attachment and attraction towards Graham, who then had a crush on Lotte, a regular girl from his school. Unaware of herself, Aria seems even more awkward in her cluster programs, and somehow created a slight imagery shift on her personal looks to slighty resemble Lotte. As an A.I..she was venturing into dangerous teritorries of human-like emotions.

Her weapon-systems slowly came across masked Graham who's then Barrier Jacket included teh mask to hide from possible onlookers, and in a heated battle, where Aria holds dominance of flight due to Graham not trained to fly, despite possessing the combat powers of AA+ rank mage, lost to Aria who used the method to try to absorb his Linker Core powers, only to realize that she was fighting Graham, and her A.I somehow struggles to regain dominance in that combat state, and flew off. Graham knew then...that that girl was Aria.

Due to Aria's overlap of both A.I and combat functions, the Dr. pitied her, and removed her magical functions, but she was still slowly losing energy due to the short moment of shortcircuit. As Graham and the TSAB clerk eventually stormed the hideout of the Dr, Graham in shock learned that Aria, was far from human, an android composed of 95% robotic components, with only shreds of bio-organic layers, for recon purposes. However, to Graham, even though she's not flesh and blood, she was still his friend, and someone he shared his friendship with and will save her.

In the climax, when 5 of the Dr.'s non A.I cyborg-emulations of Aria lost to Graham, Aria revealed that she knew...the time that cross-laped from the Dr's previous world world across Earth and to Mid-childa again...30 years of difference had already occured before the Dr. even reached Earth, and that no matter if the Dr. returned or not, his family he wanted to see...is dead. Then, as the Dr. resigned to his fate and proceeds to start the self-destruct countdown, Graham came to save Aria, who was then already slowly shutting down. Graham tried to give Aria his Linker Core permanently so that she can live on at the cost of his magical affinity, but then, Aria, despite losing magical powers, somehow rewrote her android functions and pushed Graham away to safety, and at that final moment, confesses her true feelings to him before permanently shutting down.

Following that, one day before the clerk returns back to service and also one day before Graham finised primary school, he went on a date with Lotte, only to realize something inside him has died. And the next day...Graham dissapeared from Earth.

Magical Capabilities:

Due to the limitations of self-defined humanoid weapons with organic components in the release of long-range spells, Aria was designed in mind for close-combat along with high speed dogfights. Her left arm, mainly composed of magic-inducing organic components are focused for use of sensitive magical spells and extraction of Linker Core energy, something Graham would later refine practically and teach his familiar, meanwhile her left arm, despite still possessing external touch sensories similar to human skin, are more composed of flex-material exoskeleton-based metal, which despite not being the most flexible material in handling magical energy, is also one of the strongest components that can withstand and force out concentrated masses of raw magical energy. This arm is unable to conjur elemental magic conversion due to it's resistance to control sensitivity, but it's primary usage in the channel of magical energy in the surrounding similar to collection spells to save her own power supply and maintain it as reinforced magical fist or even magically formed meta-physical weapons formed solely out of raw magical energy in the forms of swordarms or lightsabers. Due to her nature of internal-self formation of magical powers, she does not physically show out any magical circles, and are self-contained inside her skeletonal structure, thus allowing a better aptitude at physical combat.

Magnetition :~ High speed external-attachment spell. This spell works only when the opponent is faster, and reacts by using the internal Linker Core responsive mechanism to forcefully create a magnetic push towards the opponent at a very close range, allowing for high speed close combat dog fights even with faster opponents.

Form II Saber :~ High precision energy manipulation blade. Using the right arm's forceful collective reactor core, this spell works through a high compression of collective energy from surroundings if possible, and forms an energy blade, and extra magical energy not used for the blade formation is supplied towards to the reaction and limb reinforcement core of the android, to focus on elegant swordfighting that is both powerful and precise by magically adapting the body response.

Runic Reinforce :~ By using similar proportions of Mid-childa Boost Elements solely concentrated on her limbs and her fist along with rune-based magical enchantment drawn internally inside her system core, she is capable of consistent high speed/power jabs, punches and kicks that varies to dramatic license lol.

Linker Extract :~ Self-explainatory.

R.S.S Feed :~ Reactive Sphere Shielding Feed, which is a self-responce magical barrier that responses to the reactionary system of the android and the android's estimation of the attack level, only to conjure up just enough of a barrier to protect from long-range and mid-range attacks. This system is ineffective against spells above AA rank, and also doesn't respond properly in high speed close combat dogfights due to the reactive system being focused on the limb reactive structure than the shields.

I'm halfway through Admiral Lieze, but got stuck due to not being so sure how to handle her shotacon side (( She's 32, when Graham's 19 )) while still making her a strong, mature adult female and how to handle her 'death', so I'll give ARIA first...which has some problems too, but you know...flexibility.

I had 3 "references" in my magic spells. Cookie to anyone who gets all right. :P

... now truly wishing you did write that fanfic, Graham's interactions with A.R.I.A. would be truly delightful to see. Admiral Lieze as a shotacon? Wow, Graham must really have been pimping. Go Graham!

And no cookies for me, since I don't get the references

[USB500]

@ Nightengale:
Android? That's so new to me. And... Graham, you have complex! OHNOES!

I heard someone needs an antagonist. So....

Spoiler for new antagonist:

LEOPOLD GRANDEUR
Age: 38 (physical appearance)
Birthday: unknown
Hair colour: blonde
Eye colour: golden yellow
Height: 182cm
Weight: 70kg
Affiliation: none
Position / Rank in TSAB: none
Home world: Earth
Device: Defaeco Extraho
Device type: Intelligent Device
Device appearance: rosary
Magic system: Mid-Childa / possibly "Ancient Knowledge"
Magic element: fire
Magic symbol: circle (with Star of David on the inside)
Magic colour: gold
Partner: unknown
Personality: calm, down-to-earth and has traditional speech style, Leopold treats friends and enemies with respect. He, however, approaches his enemies with the objective to “purify all living beings from corruption.” He is very relaxed during battle and often quotes famous speeches even during the heat of battle.

BACKGROUND
In 18th century, Grandeur Dynasty was one of the powerful families whose influence stretched across Germany. The Grandeurs had full control over socioeconomic aspects and were often at odds with the Kaisers. Nevertheless, they had essential role in keeping Europe’s political stability, as proven during the rise of Napoleon Bonaparte where they secretly supplied logistic means to rebels across the continent. Their function waned after the Battle of Waterloo and by the end of 19th century Grandeur Dynasty was largely forgotten.

To continue the legacy of the dynasty, some of the Grandeurs went underground to avoid authorities. They conducted various activities that involved research on alchemy, one of the controversial subjects, and learned the existence of a magic system. Despite the high potency, it was deemed unnecessary in their point of view to pursue such exotic knowledge and concentrated their study on Earthly subjects instead.

During World War Two, German troopers marched across Austria-Hungary border and came across a village. They ransacked the village, killed every people they found and enslaved every woman they got. They even burnt down a chapel and left the entire area in ruins. It seemed their atrocity was unstoppable until a boy came out of the inferno unharmed. Stating that the soldiers had angered the God, he summoned golden fire from his hand and obliterated the entire battalion. The surviving villagers thanked him for saving them but their fate was forever sealed as the boy “freed all souls from agonizing pain.”

Several years later, the 19-year-old Leopold Grandeur began an extensive research on his dynasty’s paper works and found a document with the name “Mid-Childa” inside a vault in the underground chamber his grandfather’s mansion. It was found along with a rosary with Latin inscription that read “one does not simply walk into the chamber of purification.” He examined the document and learned that it referred to the magic system that was previously discovered before World War One but later abandoned. He also learned that the Mid-Childan magic system may have connection with his ability to control fire as he recalled seeing circular symbol with intricate inscriptions similar to the one he found in the document. He also learnt that the rosary could be used to harness and enhance his magical power to certain extents.

After trials and errors, Leopold finally got hold of his magical power. Having perfected the summoning technique, all he saw from his newfound ability was self-confidence and means of protection. However after reading news of various nuclear tests conducted around the world, wars that ravaged the Middle-East and battles for independence in South-East Asia, Leopold felt an unstoppable responsibility to “protect the world from destruction and cleanse all forms of impurity.” He decided to make use of his ability and proceeded with a mission “to convey God’s Words.”

As time passed by, Leopold discovered that conveying the words of God was not enough. He felt he must perform God’s words regardless of the consequences he may face. Unknown to him, his magic gradually became corrupted by the overwhelming desire. It took years for him to realize the fact but it would be too late to turn back as he was completely immersed in his power. It was an irony, considering his ambition ti purify the world yet at the same time forgetting to cleanse his soul firsthand.

POWER
Leopold Grandeur is classified as an S-ranked fire mage. His skill reaches the level he simply needs to snap his fingers in order to execute magic spells. Because he doesn’t have a position in TSAB (and he never intends to join an organization anyway) he is treated as a “highly dangerous subject of investigation.”

His combat style depends on trickery and deception, where he first lures his opponent into believing that he won’t perform any move. Only after his opponent falls into his trap will he unleash his attacks. He also uses long-range attacks and will occasionally engage in melee combats whenever necessary.

Leopold’s Intelligent Device, Defaeco Extraho (Purifying Dragon in Latin) has male voice and addresses him as “sir”. It speaks British-accented English despite its Latin name.

• Dico Meus Nomen (Call My Name): Leopold uses this chant to unlock Defaeco Extraho, and usually his Barrier Jacket is unlocked as well. The transformation is instantaneous, and doesn’t require long phrases.

FORMS

• Signum (Sealed): Defaeco Extraho takes form of a rosary.
• Ressurectio (Awaken): the most frequently used form, Leopold gains access to his spells as well as enhancing the Device’s melee capability.
• Sanctus Flamma (Holy Flame): the most powerful form, Sanctus Flamma is incredibly stable and doesn’t break down in prolonged battle.

DEFENSIVE ABILITIES

• Barrier Jacket: Leopold’s suit is a golden yellow priest uniform with cape and rosary hanging under its collar. It is not just flashy costume but also refers to an invisible defensive field generated by the costume, reducing or eliminating any serious injury from events such as an impact with a building.
• Bastion: Leopold’s first and most frequently used spell. It protects its caster from attacks coming from all directions.
• Rotundus Contego (Round Shield): a powerful shield able to absorb physical or magical attacks. It defends its caster from one direction only, however.
• Nixor Redimio (Struggle Bind): Leopold uses this spell to prevent a target from moving. The amount of time required to activate this spell depends on the complexity of target.
• Redimio Effrego (Bind Break): Leopold attempts to deactivate a binding or imprisoning spell. The amount of time required to deactivate depends on the complexity of the target magic.
• Incendia Parietis (Fire Wall): a powerful version of Round Shield. This time, instead of the usual circular magical symbol, Leopold summons an entire wall of flame that surrounds him.
• Vis Agri (Force Field): functions in the similar way as a barrier, Leopold summons a ‘force field’ to surround target or battlefield area. This is usually done to enclose his appearance.

OFFENSIVE ABILITIES

• Ustulo Culmen (Scorching Pillar): Leopold flips his pointer and middle fingers and summons a tiny fire vortex that appears from the ground. Leopold can control where it appears and can also delays its appearance.
• Solor Flare (Solar Flare): an average area-of-affect attack.
• Igneus Offensus (Burning Collision): Leopold charges at target and suddenly slices through it, leaving the target stunned for indefinite amount of time. Then he appears behind the target, says something before snaps his fingers, leaving the target engulfed in explosion.
• Deceptio (Deception): Leopold does the usual Burning Collision tackle but doesn’t actually perform the attack; he just stops next to target, often catching it by surprise. Leopold may then proceed with the actual attack or performing other abilities.
• Incendia Tempestas (Firestorm): more powerful than Solar Flare. Leopold lifts his hand and brings it down while saying “let the holy fire purify your soul.” Then pillars of fire appear from above and strike down onto unsuspecting target.
• Uracinus Ratio (Heavenly Judgment): the most powerful fire-based attack, it is actually a variation of Firestorm where instead of the “usual” storm Leopold will bring in a burning asteroid from the sky, sending it to target area.

Okay, done. Abilities, checked. Forms, checked. Background, checked. What else? Oh, yeah. I hope the Latin translations are correct, because I'm using online translator to translate the stuffs.

[Timeless Enigma]

Hm, I would have thought someone from Gault, Wizard or Sorcerer would be a villain, not someone from Schnee. Nonetheless it looks good, I hope you'll have her say "(insert country here) mercenaries! This is gonna be fun!" even though that's what Schnee 1 would have said... speaking of which, who is Schnee 1? You've got Schwarze 1 but no Silber 1 as well.

I hope someone will say "No rules in a dogfight, you just have to take the enemy out."

I await the next batch of characters.

I think I'm going to want to replay a campaign in Zero now...

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Timeless Enigma

Hm, I would have thought someone from Gault, Wizard or Sorcerer would be a villain, not someone from Schnee. Nonetheless it looks good, I hope you'll have her say "(insert country here) mercenaries! This is gonna be fun!" even though that's what Schnee 1 would have said... speaking of which, who is Schnee 1? You've got Schwarze 1 but no Silber 1 as well.

I hope someone will say "No rules in a dogfight, you just have to take the enemy out."

I await the next batch of characters.

I think I'm going to want to replay a campaign in Zero now...

I think you're right. I should have posted Gault 1 instead. I see if I can post them instead. I'm still working on Silber 1, though, so it may have to wait.

If you're referring to my post, Schnee 1 would be Eleanor herself (she was a squad leader when the incident took place). Otherwise, Schnee 1 is Erich Hillenbrand, the Eternal 2nd Lieutenant.

Don't worry. I'm sure Eleanor doesn't really want to be a villain in the first place.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by USB500

I just love the characters you guys just posted. Give me some times so that I can comment each and every one of them.

@ Kha:
...did I sense shameless self-promotion?

I'm still rebalancing the 2 mages I put up so I'll repost them together.

Uh... No not really. His story's been developed over several short stories I wrote offline for the informal writing circle I was part of back in my home country, and I made sure I balanced it and kept it in canon as much as possible.

@Loner: Revisions? I thought there was no data on her past in the first place as I thought the YnS illusion was based on Fate's wish for a happy family rather than fact. And so, I conjured up this scenario to insert a char believably into the story while not disrupting the canon events (which explains Kha's absence during all anime series) such that there's no canon trace that he's ever there, but it was because he's somewhere else when the canon took place. This only works if everything fits nicely with canon, which until recently was all anime-canon. However, my lack of light novel and manga knowledge impedes me from being 100% sure, and thus I am concerned, for my friend's gonna be using most of the proposed backstory so I got to correct it fast. As a Fate-fanboy and considering almost all of my fics has some conjecture related to Fate's past, I better get this straight.

How much about Fate's past is there in canon across all media (light novel, manga, sound stage, anime)? Has there been contradictions amongst the media?

Originally Posted by Serenity85

lol this thread has sorta died down now hasn't it^^ well I'll see if I can spice things up a bit^^

I'm really loving everyones ides, really well thoughtout. My only thought is with giving a character uber ranks like S. Come on, your like making uber rare mages that are suppose to be few and fleeting I think a nice cap is AA, good but theres room for improvement^^

Ok Back to my character^^

For those who have forgotten, this is where she stands as of now
http://forums.animesuki.com/showpost...1&postcount=14

now on to chapter 2^^

Spoiler for How Aselia Joined TSAB, RF6:

How Aselia joined TSAB, RF6

It happened quite accidentally really. Nanoha, Fate and Hayate were no a weekend break from RF6, giving the new recruits a chance to visit family and generally take a break after a week of training. While site seeing in Tokyo, they sense a magical disturbance coming from the nearby forest. As they rushed to the seen, the disturbance faded. To be safe, they decided to search the surrounding area; hopefully they would fine something that would be linked to the disturbance. They came across the Mayio Monk Shrine and so they decided to make sure no one was hurt. Upon entering they could feel the residual affects of a spell, and soon enough they came across the main courtyard were a group of monks had started to repair a damaged pillar and a little blue haired girl being comforted by what appeared to be the resident Master Monk. They decided to see if the girl was Ok, and if there was anything they could do to help. Upon a brief conversation they soon discovered that the little girl, Aselia, had caused the disturbance.

After things cooled down, the Aces decide they needed to have a conversation with Miroku about Aselia’s well being. Over a pot of green tea, they carefully explain to Miroku that although she is young and so far she’s only caused minor incidents with no injuries, she will eventually get older and her magic potential will eventually get much stronger then it is now, she may accidentally let her power go out of control again with a higher risk of doing harm to herself and those around her. They explained to him, that it is best for her to get proper magical training, something she can’t get here. After taking in everything they had to say, he decides, with a reluctant heart, to let them take Aselia back with them, under a few conditions one of which stated that she would be put under their care and no one else’s. They agree, and Miroku heads out to explain things to his daughter. As expected, she doesn’t take it well; after all, this was the first real home she ever knew. Aselia wipes the tears from her eyes and reluctantly agrees with her father, and she begins packing her belongings. A teary eyed Aselia says her goodbyes to rest of the shrine, but just as she prepares to board the TSAB helicopter with Nanoha, Miroku emerges from the Temple caring the shrines ancient sword. In a final jester of love before his daughter leaves, he hands over the blade, telling her to be careful and train hard. A now crying Aselia hugs her father and boards the helicopter. It then takes off, heading towards the TSAB main headquarters in Mid-Childan, where Aselia would begin training with the rest of the recruits.

Bio States at this point in the timeline:

Character Name: Aselia Mayio
Gender: Female
Looks: Hair: Long light blue-ish/purple
Eyes: Blue
Height: 110 cm
Age: 10 (confirmed after medical exam)
Birthday: 8th April
Weight: 31 kg
Affiliation: TSAB Trainee
She is currently under the care of RF6 as per Miroku’s request, must to the dismay of the higher-ups

Mage Rank: C+ (tested)
She has potential to be very strong, but she currently can’t fully control some of her stronger spells, resulting in the lower rank.

Skill Rank: A+ (tested)
Not a common rank given as magic is the main key factor, but because of her skills with the sword, they decided to test her and give an appropriate rank. Even thou she is one of the best swordsman (minus Signum) RF6 and TSAB have, her lack of skill with magic has kept her in training then on missions.

Usual Wear: a modified white Monk robe to fit her size and a pair of running shoes purchased for her by Miroku while he was shopping for supplies in downtown Tokyo. She considers these her most cherished positions. She currently still doesn’t have a barrier jacket as of yet.

Magic Type: Vaulcon – a mix of Velka and Summoning, it still not known what type it truly is yet, so for now, it is being called Vaulcon

Caster class: Close-Range Elemental Summoner (Ice)

Device: She currently uses the ancient sword given to her by her father, it is still not known if it is and I.D. or what power if any it holds.

No new spells at this time other then ones she currently knows.

Heres something for ppl to chat about. Let me know what you think, as well as suggestions to improve it^^

I'll post chapter 3 when I have it finalized. Here some hints, she gets he device and barrier jacket, and a familar face will join in the trainning exercises, try to guess who^^

Chario better reinforce the holodeck to avoid getting smashed by "Kaze no Kise" or a related variant.

More skills for Nanoka and loli Capn. Tessa coming soon but in the meantime keep the comments coming!

[Saint X]

"the prefect antagonist would be the inverse of Nanoha..." - which i'm trying to do without making it look like a clone of Nanoha.

geez, no one even commented- figures that i can't do anything good in a three hour high-avail period.

*sulks in a corner while thinking of something for the weekends.

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Saint X

Spoiler for Character Prototype- pardon the rushed style:

Name: Ashton Marten Mcdouglas

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Birthday: February 29

Hair: Brown, low-cropped, often messy but when needed, his comb is not to far away, straightening it.

Eyes: Astral Blue- Similar to Subaru's.

Build: Medium build, strong arms and legs.

Height: 5'9"

Weight: he does not say, for fear of reprisals from girls.

Home World: Mid-childa

Magic System: Dei-Type (In Anime terms, it would be a gatekeeper's gate seal, with some Cyrillic Characters ringing around it.)

Magic Color: Green.

Mage Rank: BB+
Personality: A somewhat happy disposition. Loves acting cool but he sometimes doubts Himself. Loves to pester Subaru (and Subaru pesters back) and Tia is annoyed by the sight of him. He's neutral when it comes to Elio and Carol. Almost zealot-like but does not follow orders often, making him end up in trouble, sometimes.

Affiliation: Time-Space Administraion Bureau, Mobile Division 6 with the First Exatactical Group, Cross Squadron Under Hayate Yagami, TSABS Silvana. Call Sign "Cross 3".

Device: Praesulus (Latin for 'Director')

Device Type: Key Device, Combat Boost Support

Description: It resembles a jeweled, less armored white version of the right-hand Revolver Knuckle, though without the 'revolver', thus making it akin to Carol's BD (boost device). It has a clear crystal cross about 2"x 1.3" in area on the top of it, surrounded by four red stones at the corners.

Device History: In a previous mission of the trio, before the apperance of the Gadget Drones, they have managed to recover a group of devices known as 'Key Devices', devices that were held in mytical status in legends in all the dimensions- with powers beyond that of the established. So far, only a handful of these devices were ever activated, much less on Bureau Recruits. This is also the device from which Carol's device is based from, based on a research paper crafted from an illusive Bureau Admiral- also ranting that Uninterfaced mages (mages who have no devices- Like Yuuno), the only kinds who can easily cast supporting spells are few and far between . The device found its way into Ashton's hands when it went missing from the reseach lab when said person was about to recruit into the bureau- it turns out that Key Devices seek out their respective "keepers" when needed.

Offensive Skills:
- Since this device is for support reasons, the number of offensives it can manage is low, but he can still fight with other methods.

Kinetic Dart: basically generates and fires off a powerful dart made of physical matter, thus bypassing AMF fields. Can also be steered to hit the target anywhere.
Lancet: generates a medium-length metal lance from the device, allowing the user to hack and slash. Can also bypass AMF due to the physical nature of the weapon.

Defensive Skills:

Agile Shield: basically a seal shield, in the likes of round guard or plate shield, but can be moved faster.
Agile Guard: basically similar to protection, but can be used while moving at full speed.

Support Skills:
- the forte of a supporter mage! several of the skills are akin to Carol's, since this being the device Carol's was based upon. though some Carol-centric abilites are clearly lacking.

Deflect: a shield enhancement that can deflect shots at some degree.
Reflect: a shield enhancement that can reflect shots by chance.
Accura (Accurate Cura): a healing spell that regenerates exactly 10% of a person's health per second.
Raise: increases defensive value of a target
Tune: increases accuracy and critical hit value of a target
Strech: increases range capability of a target. He uses this on Nanoha to enable her to snipe even farther with DB-X.
Haste: increases movement and attack speeds of a target for a time limit.
Hang: attempts to freeze the enemy targeted in its tracks. if sucessful, the target stops, slows down and speeds up randomly.
Drain: attempts to sap the enemy of his/her/its strength. if sucessful, targets suddenly tires or shuts down.
Block: attempts to bar the enemy's movement by putting up a wall of force, if sucessful the target hits the wall and gets damged and stops.
Boost Line: generates a pair of magic boost rails, allowing those inside of it to speed up movement- akin to a railgun. When used in conjunction with Subaru's Wing Road, it becomes a catapult, boosting those being 'launched'. He uses this on any ranged attack to further increase attacking power- one time he used it on Nanoha, making her Accel Shooter shots feel like Divine Buster hits on the enemy end- the same effect also occured with Tia. He also uses this on Erio to not just wreck one, but six AMF+APF (Anti-magic+Anti-physical field, called an I-field) drones with one move.
Gap Generator: the bane of all AMF emmitting devices! similar to Carol's field invalider, this spell generates a gap in the AMF field present, enabling those inside the gap to use magic, as if the AMF was not there.

History:
Much of his history was like that of a normal mid-childan child, happy family, happy life- a relative nobody, until he recruited in the bureau. After being caught with the Key device, he was monitored closely and educated separately- due to the still unknown nature of the device with him. during his academy days, he had also heard about the duo of Nakajima and Lanstar- the 'non-standard duo' as he called them. He graduated a realative commoner and was assigned to the mysterious ship Silvana, under the command of the illusive Admiral Kyla, the same admiral who submitted the paper on support magic. While on board, he and the crew of the ship had heard the events of MD6 and the Relics, but unfortunately, a much as Chrono or Carim would like, the ship was in a top secret mission, hunting a rumored X-class criminal called 'Fangwang'. A year later, MD6 was tasked by the chain of command to work with the Silvana on the case it was handling. Admiral Kyla took temporary command of MD6 in the process- being a higher authority than Hayate- thus enabling Hayate to join Nanoha and Fate in the sky once more- with two new subordinates as well- Him and another Dei-type warrior. But he has a secret in his lineage- he was one of the few recorded cases of being a 'reactive', a person who can fuse with another, turning into his/her weapon- and one of the forward stars will experience it- Final Fusion anyone?

Gatekeepers... did you perhaps base Ashton on the Gatekeepers anime? Sorry, that's the only thing I'd like to ask since the word so stands out in the profile.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by USB500

Gatekeepers... did you perhaps base Ashton on the Gatekeepers anime? Sorry, that's the only thing I'd like to ask since the word so stands out in the profile.

Being involved in Ashton's creation process, I know it's a car and aircraft reference. Care to elaborate, X?

[LoweGear]

Lemme see if I can give it a try...

The Aston Martin (European luxury car manufacturer, often known for their very expensive custom made vehicles) and McDonell Douglas (the latter formerly one of the largest aircraft manufacturing companies in the US, responsible for the development of aircraft such as the F-15 Eagle and F/A-18 Hornet. Later bought by Boeing after experiencing financial difficulties in the early 90s).

[Kha]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Lemme see if I can give it a try...

The Aston Martin (European luxury car manufacturer, often known for their very expensive custom made vehicles) and McDonell Douglas (the latter formerly one of the largest aircraft manufacturing companies in the US, responsible for the development of aircraft such as the F-15 Eagle and F/A-18 Hornet. Later bought by Boeing after experiencing financial difficulties in the early 90s).

Bingo.

Now back to working on Tessa-chan...