2008-07-13, 23:09 | Link #7241 | |
Undercover Mole
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Join Date: Mar 2008
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OMG! Lol, at the rod. Lol, now all Hayate needs to do it catch him and make him try on different costumes.
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2008-07-13, 23:19 | Link #7242 | ||
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Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Imaginary World no. 856
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I would edit the text a little, rephrasing some stuff. My suggestion: Spoiler for How I see it:
If you're to add images and stuff between them, I think you need to overlay some fast paced music fragments when the images show. I'm seeing something like a Mass Effect vision, but less gross. My two cents.
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2008-07-14, 01:05 | Link #7243 |
Black Dragon
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Join Date: Dec 2007
Location: In the Netherrealm, thinking who to betray next...
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Chapter 76
Final Chapter Spoiler for Choise:
Spoiler for Words from the author:
Spoiler for A present for the fans of Vatican Knights ^.^:
With no more to say... Thankyou all!!!
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2008-07-14, 01:29 | Link #7244 |
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Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Imaginary World no. 856
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Marathoning anime is unhealthy.
Spoiler for Rozen Breaker:
Now, before I get shot... *hides in the depths of Dark Space* ---------------- @Evil Rick: <- That's all I can say for now! Nice logo! I'm all smiles from that ending, it was awesome. I'll put out a decent comment (probably a longer one than usual ) after I eat breakfast. Vivio with a green and red eye? I think I know now where that came from. Congratulations!
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2008-07-14, 01:34 | Link #7245 |
Undercover Mole
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's over!! I'm so sad...but so happy. I thought it was a cool twist making the one eye green and one red. That was a nice touch. Though I have a question, Why were some of the words completely capitalized? Was there a point to that? I love the drawing! Though Jasper looks all alone...but Alphonse and Helga are so cute. I like how its by the Gargoyle where they all hang out. So now Vivio and Karil are free to live their life. That was nice of Raphael, I don't hate him anymore.
Congrats EvilRick, the journey was long (76 chapters!! Wow!) but awesome! Looking forward to Vita Shadows of the Past. @KaitheReaper: Yuuno is really going through a lot of trouble lately. Lol, love it.
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2008-07-14, 02:12 | Link #7246 | |
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Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Imaginary World no. 856
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I think the greatest part was probably the characters. It was easy to get attached to them or hate them. Vivio was really awesome because she felt like a continuously growing character. Ending up putting a gun to her head just so that she wouldn't hurt Karil really showed how much she had grown during the whole story. It was impressive. The second greatest part was probably the suspense and surprise. Not only did the chapters provide quite a great amount of suspense, which lots of situations where the characters escaped by pure luck, but the surprises were epic. Characters dieing, truths being revealed, nothing was missing. Third, but not last, the drawings! The drawings were one of the most helpful things from the whole story! Besides the cinematic descriptions, the drawings were the main factor that helped visualise the scenes and 'see' the monsters and everything. Not to mention there were a LOT of monsters. One (actually the only) problem was the occasional grammar mistakes and typos, along with misspellings that made the story occasionally hard to read because it was hard to understand, but it's just a minor detail, compared to the epic scale of the whole thing. The most I liked the ending. Truthfully, I wasn't expecting it to end in a happy way, but it was a pleasant surprise. That drawing with all the characters is awesome. Helga and Alphonse look so cute together, the same as with Vivio and Karil. I think Jasper sitting alone like that sort of catches his character. Congratulations Evil Rick for making such an awesome story! And thank you for making such an awesome story and giving such a good reading experience.
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2008-07-14, 02:39 | Link #7247 | ||
Black Dragon
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Beautifull words, thanks again guys,you 2 were always backuping me with this fic Thanks again for to all the thread for allowing me post my stories here And special thanks to Satashi for linking the chapters XD Vita Shadows of the past will arrive soon PD: marksellus, that capitalyzed words were a little mistake that I alredy fixed
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2008-07-14, 05:08 | Link #7249 | |
The Interstellar Medium
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2008-07-14, 07:13 | Link #7250 |
I am the lies in you.
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Just finished Vegas Stakes Chapter Two. Was away for the weekend so had to leave it two thirds read on Friday. Liked it a lot, looking forward to continuation. I'm certainly interested in where things are heading.
And clowns have quite the capability to be scary; I can certainly sympathise with Nanoha. Anyone read/seen Stephen King's IT? Ah, that gave me an idea for a random amusing short. Fate reads 'IT' to Nanoha (or watches it with her). Maybe when Halloween comes around. |
2008-07-14, 08:39 | Link #7251 | |
The Not-So-Kind One
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Nanoha would never enter a shower again! "Raising Heart! Monitor the drain!" |
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2008-07-14, 08:52 | Link #7252 | |
I am the lies in you.
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EDIT: Well, my memory of the film is somewhat flimsy, but I just set about acquiring it once again. Regardless, here's the introduction (I was bored ): Spoiler for Nanoha + Fate + Stephen King's 'It' = ?.1:
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2008-07-14, 11:19 | Link #7253 | |
Master of the Shiny Crack
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You missed a couple though XD Spoiler for missed it:
@ Evil_Rick CONGRATULATIONS! |
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2008-07-14, 13:53 | Link #7254 | |
Teh lovable geek
Join Date: May 2008
Location: Quebec
Age: 33
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2008-07-14, 14:08 | Link #7255 |
Vividly Vivio
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New story~
Emerald Eyes! Spoiler for NSFW text:
Here is Syn's profile ( Made by Keroko). It has pictures of her too :P Enjoy ^_^ you can leave your reviews or comments here if you want ^^
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2008-07-14, 14:43 | Link #7256 |
The Interstellar Medium
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@Satashi: Well, as I said in FFC I think it was pretty good, but I mentioned that the ending was..empty. I think I know why I said that.
Since you haven't written this as you normally do I didn't switch over. I guess I'm used to your writing style that you normally use. Good thing I cleared that up, I usually don't know how to explain myself in similar situations *facedesk*
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2008-07-14, 15:08 | Link #7257 | |
Warrior and Fluffy Pillow
Join Date: May 2008
Location: The Shadows
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Syn Vivio
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I don't know what it is with the Vivio/Syn pairing craze lately, but it really seems to work for some reason. Syn and Vivio seem to be a really good match. I don't know if its simply because there is such a large scope to be able to change Vivio's character to be what authors want as there is no "Canon" personality. Syn is also a very good OC, i love the drawings in the profile. Anyway about the story itself. I definitely like the whole teenage playfulness thing going on. You wrote it well in that there was confidence in each of the characters and they were comfortable in the situation, to a reasonable extent, but thats simply regurgitating what you wanted it to be anyway. I agree with AX to some extent on the ending, but then again you mention its part of a larger fic? and its meant to be taken as a a slightly larger snapshot if anything. After re-reading it, i really can't find anything to criticize! without taking it out of context of what it is, a short playful snippet. Just simply that its nicely done and that I: Spoiler for .:
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2008-07-14, 15:58 | Link #7258 |
I am the lies in you.
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Join Date: Dec 2005
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All questions concerning the fiction will be answered eventually as the story progresses. At least, I hope they will. Here is part two. I will say, however, that they (and I refer to existing MGLN characters) all know each other in some capacity.
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2008-07-14, 16:11 | Link #7259 | |
Troublemaker
Join Date: May 2008
Location: lost
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................o///////////////////////////////////////////o omg... >////////////////< @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ @.@ i....i...i-....i--... o/////o th-that was umm most certainly...umm very interesting... indeed.. yeah... yeah that.. @_@ Spoiler for there are no forward slashes in this one:
edit (off-topic): *just found out that one of her favorite on-going stories in ff.net was deleted by the author (non-MGLN)* and just like that my mood changed.. sigh... i understand that author-san's "heart wasn't in it anymore" and that it's his/her choice if she wants to do that but sigh... what a loss... one of the better written fics gone just like that.. must be tough being an author.. *huggles the authors in the thread* Last edited by wanwan1203; 2008-07-14 at 16:38. |
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2008-07-14, 16:31 | Link #7260 | |
Lightning Devil
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anyway you done it well. @Satashi: i have to say this, you suprised me. @Black_wolf: i agree with, indeed Syn is good OC, all thanks to Keroko who brought for us Syn. ^_^ |
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