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2011-10-03, 22:53 | Link #2163 | |
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2011-10-03, 23:32 | Link #2165 |
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Zero here reporting, Sir!
Chapter 9 is about 80%, ETC (Estimated Time of Completion) is in 3-6 hours, today there's some convenient meeting between mentors in my Campus and I went home early as result. And now I'm going Trans Am. Because my Brother took the modem I had, I had to rely on internet cafe, sorry for the late update.
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2011-10-03, 23:38 | Link #2166 | |
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2011-10-03, 23:47 | Link #2167 | |
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I'm just going to read the chapter 3 now, see if I can help with chapter 4 later. @Blitz: The fight scene is for Chapter 10 during Gotanda arc. I've read it and it was damn good. EDIT: @ Eratas I mean the chapter 4 prologue several pages back, sorry.
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It would even further her plans to have started your shadow war as well. Because when you create an antagonist to IS development, you instigate an arms race and hence more progress in IS development. In the mean time, she has Three Diagram and Shooting Star running around cleaning up spills and program offshoots as a result of her actions (though they too don't know the full picture). Yes, I believe that the real Tabane is a psychopath, but she's so smart she's gonna get away with it... ...until her pawns turn on her that is. And even then, are things still going according to her plan? Did she do all this, and eventually implicate herself, just so that IS can be found everywhere and her forever remembered as a god? Scary thought, isn't it?
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2011-10-04, 00:30 | Link #2169 | |
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2011-10-04, 00:33 | Link #2170 |
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@MeisterBabylon- It's more of a case of Irish attacking her rather than the other way around. Most likely I'll have him be tricked by someone into thinking she read his mind and is planning to spread his secret so he rashly chooses to attack her. He is a former terrorist so he exhibits symptoms of paranoia and agression. She's not attacking Kyuukai, just a paranoid Irish. I'd Imagine Karon would use the suit and non-lethally try to take down Irish. By the way, Chaff grenades explode on contact so they can't be thrown back
I also planned to use Tabane as the main antagonist in the early draft, I can't now because I've already included Kyuukai Tokiwa as a main protagonist and having his mother figure turn into the big bad will look like a really dick move. I do plan to have Irish and him butt heads on this since he hates Tabane for building the Infinite Stratos while Kyuukai defends her by saying she was trying to help the world get better and is trying to make up for it. Basically it's an Idealism (Kyuukai) Vs Cynicism (Irish) arguement. Just because they're the three protags doesn't mean they have to be buddies. @Zero- Any Idea's so far Zero? Last edited by Eratas123; 2011-10-04 at 03:10. |
2011-10-04, 01:43 | Link #2171 |
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Please, no content from the IS Light Novels on this thread. As far as Vol. 5-7 goes.
Now, for another question. How did I do on Ratchet's Personality and Traits? It kinda feels like that I'm actually putting more work into his than the others. Here's a part from Ch. 2 of Project Silverback as an example. Spoiler for Ratchet's Personality/Traits:
I'd appreciate everyone's thoughts on this. Remember, Ratchet's suppose to be the Negative/Sarcastic and, sometimes, unkind type. But he does have a caring side to those who are close to him. |
2011-10-04, 02:00 | Link #2174 | |
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Clay: Ratchet is that you. Ratchet: No it's the easter bunny, who do you think it is? Or something like. Clay: Hey, look at those girls playing. Ratchet: Oh great, first the closet and now an arcade game. Are they stalking memor something? Hot shot seems more sarcastic than he does truth be told, Ratchet always seems to yell out or be emotional when he says things rather than be negative/sarcastic about it. |
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2011-10-04, 02:08 | Link #2175 | |
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2011-10-04, 04:29 | Link #2176 |
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*Reading Infinite Stratos wiki about IS academy* "IS academy has a very high security system due to the fact that every potential pilot is valuable, it's therefore very hard to enter and is equipped to defend itself from outside attack. *Remembers the two golem attacks, the attack during cannonball fast, the Valkyrie trace incident and the attack by Arachne* Right~ IS Academy sounds like they're doing a great job with their security.
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2011-10-04, 04:50 | Link #2177 |
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Help me a bit here. I wrote this part to start off the second part of my fic with <Ren> (Yes, I still have no title because I'll be reworking it before it goes to FF.net!), but I'm not sure if this will be accepted by the readers or if it'll tick them off. My probalem is trying to write <Ren> into the story without adversely affectign what's going to happen in Chapter 5 or the LN, and I need honest reviews:
Just fyi this is very alpha first draft and I need to rewrite it when I can, but I need opinions and fast. Am I pulling Tatenashi in a bit too early? And since I've not read enough of Vol.5 I don't know if I'm portrayign her wrongly... Spoiler:
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2011-10-04, 05:00 | Link #2178 |
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Tatenashi's Character seems good enough by itself, it still seems odd that she's intentionally harassing <Ren> over something that obviously seems personal to her. She seems more of the type to innocently tease people but stop when it goes too far.
The canon events didn't really change much which is good since this is what you're aiming for <Ren> being genre savvy enough to not get involved since it was Laura and Charlotte in the cafe made me laugh too. Good luck! |
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I'm seriously tempted to just remove that part altogether since it might end up coflicting with what happens in the LNs if it goes the wrong way.
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2011-10-04, 05:20 | Link #2180 | |
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For example: In my fanfic almost everyone tends to act the same except I changed their reason for acting that way; Houki still hates her sister but this time it's due to the deaths caused by the Infinite Stratos, Rin is still a clingy jealous girl but it's due to her family problems, Tatenashi still acts the same but that's because she can't seem to see the consequences of her actions. They still act the same but I provide my own reasoning for them doing so. All in all just remember that these are fan stories that we're writing and not novelizations with our OC's included. Adding your own personal touch to it is what makes it fun |
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