2011-11-11, 21:52 | Link #7341 |
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@ Zero: It's insanely hard/if not impossible, to top Yuno Gasai class yandereness.
On a random note, I'd really love to see more of the other timeline where Yukiteru actually has a pair of balls. @ Eratas: To make the end choice easier... Well, if there's a harem, and the protagonist has more of an interest in one girl, he'll keep on dropping hints that he prefers that one girl over the rest. Then when the ultimate choice comes, the other girls know that that girl will be the one chosen. Kind of like Love Hina. Though that may be a poor example, since the other girls continued to gun after Keitaro. If the protagonist wants to avoid the "Nice Boat Ending", then... Hm... First, they MUST have a good, morally-inclined personality, no Makoto style assholishness here. Second, keeping the harem balanced might keep them all calmed down, knowing the playing field is even and nobody has the advantage. It also tells the members of the harem that each one of them has an even chance of getting picked. It calms them down even further around the end choice, since they know that there was a good enough chance for them to be picked, but one harem member may have appealed to the protagonist more. And if they're all murderous yanderes by the time the end choice comes... The protagonist should have a good reason to explain to the rest of the harem that he picked this one girl over them and why. He doesn't point out any of their flaws, but he does point out the points in the girl he likes, and maybe a few of the smaller, less important points he likes in the other girls. So basically he tries to appease them without having to break from his decision. If it works, it works, everybody's calm and happy. If not... Well, somebody's going to be chilling down at the beach on a school day evening, saying this to the only thing they can see on the horizion: "Oh, isn't that a nice boat?" ~~~ @ ALL: EVERYTHING SHALL BE EXPLAINED BY CHAPTER 17: Also, there were timeskips. A few of them, varying between days and at least 1 or 2 weeks. Things happen during those timeskips, and so, there was some bonding moments. And there are some more to come. |
2011-11-11, 21:58 | Link #7343 |
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@ Rain - Time skips? I hope it gets explained since the confession pretty much made me go WTF when it happened. I hope you don't mind but it'll be a while till Laura actually expresses feelings for Kyuukai, being a child soldier and all. Same with Irish and Tatenashi. He doesn't even admit to liking her (as a friend) till way later on even if they're roommates.
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2011-11-11, 22:06 | Link #7344 |
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@ Eratas: I don't mind, in fact I'm looking forward to seeing how you choose to develop their relationship.
Also, concerning Tatenashi's confession: Kyuukai was confused by it. First was shock at Tatenashi confessing, then came him racking his head at WHY she was confessing. There's going to be a flashback or two in Chapter 17, the chapter named: The 12 Resolutions of Kyuukai Tokiwa. The chapter's going to be Kyuukai spending time with 12 different people, and resolving his relationships with them before having to leave. For each of the twelve, I've allotted a 2000 word segment max for each person. So the chapter's going to be at max 22 thousand words. It would be about 35-40 if I didn't split it though. |
2011-11-11, 22:08 | Link #7346 |
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Yuno Gasai is an ideal existence. Like Hitagi. Its most likely not going to happen. And if spammed just dilutes the purity of the existence.
(That said, I did fancy giving Erika Weber a bit of surprise Gasai-ness for her chosen one... Because you know that's what "Yamato Nadeshiko" are deep inside...) A harem of ideals is the best design to exist. However, it is immensely difficult to craft. I'm not certain how does one even go about it. @Rain: Oi, oi, does Kyuukai have a Love Spot or something, capable of making any woman fall in love with him?
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2011-11-11, 22:11 | Link #7348 |
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@ Rain - Man.....The most I've done so far is about 5000 or so words for Shadow. Feel a bit inadequate. I hope I can do better as I go along.
Also, mind if Kyuukai has (off-screen) sex before the finale of Shadow? Ichika and Kyuukai are going to do it with their respective partners while Irish chickens out and just talks. I know it's annoying, but can I ask for your help in co-writing parts of shadow?
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2011-11-11, 22:27 | Link #7351 |
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I dreamed up characters using stereotypes, then break some aspect of them:
Karon: Genki girl, not dense or dojiko. Ginjyo: Gentle airhead, but surprisingly perceptive. Riz: Acts tsundere on stage, but isn't always like that. Erika: YAmato Nadeshiko DERE (but voiced by Toyosaki Aki. HNNNNNNNNNNNNNG.) Celeste: Product of SCIENCE, but Meister of ARTS. For example. So I guess I'm already using ideals.
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2011-11-11, 22:39 | Link #7355 |
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@ Eratas: You're improving by quite a bit. I don't really have any ideas for Tatenashi at the moment, so I'll get back to you on that later.
On a side note, I've got a bunch of drafts of the 12 different scenes cooked up already, trying to find the right one that would fit. Here's the only good draft, the part where Kyuukai tries to resolve his friendship with Cecilia: Spoiler for Cecilia's Scene:
I believe I did a good job on it. Last edited by EthernalRain; 2011-11-11 at 22:50. |
2011-11-11, 22:47 | Link #7356 |
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@ Rain - Aw~ That's sweet! I'm gonna do the complete opposite though. I don't think she'll be friendly to the guy who kidnapped her
@ Meister - Yup! I use subversions of concepts. Irish is the child soldier concept and Ichika is the idiot harem hero concept. Both are more than what they appear to be.
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So far so good, but considering your genre, please speed up the plot.
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