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Old 2008-03-16, 02:58   Link #2341
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Hmm. The stories are nice. Very good actually. Though, I don't mean to sound rude, or such. But I had a hard time reading them. I noticed several spelling and grammar issues. Aside from the things that need tweaking, They're actually very good.

If you'd like, maybe I could help proofread them?
I think English is his second language. Spanish is first right?

But yes, like Krinen said, people here love to help out with proofs and such.

Although I can't. I fail at Grammar. Krinen, though, is good

edit: Page claim! I dedicate this page to the new people who recently joined! Specially the ones who are writing now!
Good job!
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:01   Link #2342
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You are scaring the guy....

Well anyways I'm sort of giving up on posting such long posts here and rather present Scenarios- giving people teasers of the Ideas that currently are running inside my head yes, Saint X's mind...

I'm looking forward for people to comment a bit on how i write...

And expect a lot of names that you are not familiar with... some may come from other series and some may come from OC itself...

*drops package*

Spoiler for Seq 11-n31:


*rows gondola fast&
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Oh my... what backlog I have...

I hate to seem like I'm doing a stop and run but a new segment of Landscaper!Fate is ready (which got a little help to fix mistakes).

Hope you enjoy...

Edit: and welcome all new people.

Spoiler for L!F... Patching a hole:
Not much to say but that both are really cool, that's the way to do it Amigos!
On, hi Junkedcat! Haven't see you here in a while

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Hmm. The stories are nice. Very good actually. Though, I don't mean to sound rude, or such. But I had a hard time reading them. I noticed several spelling and grammar issues. Aside from the things that need tweaking, They're actually very good.

If you'd like, maybe I could help proofread them?
Evil Rick: !

*_*!... O.k don't need to panic, just don't tell anybody about my spell
(Yes I know, bad joke) If you like and have some free time, yes, you can fixthem... just please don't change anything from the story and do it only if you have FREE TIME, thankyou Amigo
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:03   Link #2343
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I think English is his second language. Spanish is first right?

But yes, like Krinen said, people here love to help out with proofs and such.

Although I can't. I fail at Grammar. Krinen, though, is good

edit: Page claim! I dedicate this page to the new people who recently joined! Specially the ones who are writing now!
Good job!
Yes Spanish is my first languaje, and about my question... you read it, right?
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:05   Link #2344
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Evil Rick: !

*_*!... O.k don't need to panic, just don't tell anybody about my spell
(Yes I know, bad joke) If you like and have some free time, yes, you can fixthem... just please don't change anything from the story and do it only if you have FREE TIME, thankyou Amigo

Free time's about all I have at 2 AM.
I'll start if you'd like. Though I'm not sure weather to just post the edits, or send them to you... *thinks*
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Although I can't. I fail at Grammar. Krinen, though, is good
Well, much thanks for the complement, Satashi~!
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:07   Link #2345
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Free time's about all I have at 2 AM.
I'll start if you'd like. Though I'm not sure weather to just post the edits, or send them to you... *thinks*
Whatever you like
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:12   Link #2346
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Yes Spanish is my first languaje, and about my question... you read it, right?
My PMs are having trouble >.< I'll just post here then. I was referring to your first set of comics and stuff that you did, in case you wanted the start of your story to be profiled. If you want to wait until you have more done, that's okay too
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Old 2008-03-16, 03:16   Link #2347
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My PMs are having trouble >.< I'll just post here then. I was referring to your first set of comics and stuff that you did, in case you wanted the start of your story to be profiled. If you want to wait until you have more done, that's okay too
Ohhh... >.<, First Page of this thread right?
Mmm... better wait until "Evil Rick Presents: Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha. Rise of Techno - Union. 1)The Machine's Assault is complete
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Old 2008-03-16, 05:30   Link #2348
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Proofreads and Edits complete.
Let me know if I did anything wrong. =3

Spoiler for Vivio:


Spoiler for Hayate:


Spoiler for Fate:


I tried to keep things as close to the originals plot line as I could. Only one major change that I really note, and that's in Fate's part.
When Vivio was with Nanoha and Fate, they used the TSAB video-phone-thing, so I had to change the Cellphone conversation around a bit.

Last edited by Krinen; 2008-03-17 at 01:07. Reason: So, proofing at 2 AM isn't exactly the best...
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Old 2008-03-16, 05:42   Link #2349
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Oh my god, newbs! I love it!
Nothing like a little fresh meat to get the creative mind burning!

Now go read my fic!
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Old 2008-03-16, 06:00   Link #2350
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Hey all
Been stalking this forum for days now, finally decided to create an account and post xD Now I need to figure out the controls, argh.
Anyway, nanofate all the way! xP Satashi, your stuff are awesome (: (Got redirected here from ffnet) Since I haven't figured out how to quote yet (facepalm), I'll just comment that Week pt 1-4 have been awesome, they made me laugh out loud xD
Fate is -so- cute
Anyway, keep up the awesome writing! (:
Welcome to the forum Enraptured, hope you enjoy your stay here :3
This thread (amongst others) houses some pretty awesome writers as I'm sure you've noticed.
Don't worry if you get a bit confused though, cos I'm about the same, people posting left, right and centre on stuff I hardly understand ;-;

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Oh my... what backlog I have...

I hate to seem like I'm doing a stop and run but a new segment of Landscaper!Fate is ready (which got a little help to fix mistakes).

Hope you enjoy...

Edit: and welcome all new people.

Spoiler for L!F... Patching a hole:
I am seriously enjoying Landschaper-chan; she's so manly, and yet so cute at the same time, haha, its gold ;p

@Sata-chan: I'm liking your current set of shorts too, but I'm a bit lazy to tag atm so yeh... haha. Nanoha's really giving it her all at the moment, and it felt a little odd at first knowing that she suddenly dived head-first into this temp kind of relationship, but I think it fits with her personality all things considered, so that was a nice touch. I'm curious to know how you'd spice thing sup a bit though hehe
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Old 2008-03-16, 06:02   Link #2351
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Now it's been a while since last release, so maybe a teaser?

Note: long spoiler

Spoiler for That Day - Chapter V:


PS. Kagerou, I love your avater :3 lol
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Old 2008-03-16, 11:03   Link #2352
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Now it's been a while since last release, so maybe a teaser?

Note: long spoiler

Spoiler for That Day - Chapter V:


PS. Kagerou, I love your avater :3 lol
Ash you start to pick up Satashi's behavior for evil teasers...
otherwise:
I cannot wait until I can read chapterV
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Old 2008-03-16, 11:45   Link #2353
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Proofreads and Edits complete.
Let me know if I did anything wrong. =3

Spoiler for Vivio:


Spoiler for Hayate:


Spoiler for Fate:


I tried to keep things as close to the original's plotline as I could. Only one major change that I really note, and that's in Fate's part.
When Vivio was with Nanoha and Fate, they used the TSAB video-phone-thing, so I had to change the Cellphone conversation around a bit.
Thankyou very much Krinen,
I'm really happy that you made this... ejhemm.. Translations
I promise I will be more carefull when I post future storyes, (Well, chapter 1 of my doujinshi is like a 80% ready, so... hope not to have much mistakes)
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Old 2008-03-16, 14:01   Link #2354
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@The Peoples: Thank you for the comments on Landscaper!Fate, I really appreciate them. I disappeared last week due to all the stuff i had to do during the school break. I've read most of the stories put up during my break time but i don't think I'll be able to write any comments on them.

Now for a moment of my thoughts on Landscaper!Fate
Spoiler for in my head:
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Old 2008-03-16, 14:23   Link #2355
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@The Peoples: Thank you for the comments on Landscaper!Fate, I really appreciate them. I disappeared last week due to all the stuff i had to do during the school break. I've read most of the stories put up during my break time but i don't think I'll be able to write any comments on them.

Now for a moment of my thoughts on Landscaper!Fate
Spoiler for in my head:
There's just something about Fate being Nanoha's call girl that is spiffy :3

as for FF.N, you can copy-pasta your post here and they will keep their italics and stuff. Then put them in a wordpad of your choice , save, and upload. FF.N has a preview chapter function that will make sure you have everything right before you submit it finally.
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Old 2008-03-16, 14:39   Link #2356
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There's just something about Fate being Nanoha's call girl that is spiffy :3

as for FF.N, you can copy-pasta your post here and they will keep their italics and stuff. Then put them in a wordpad of your choice , save, and upload. FF.N has a preview chapter function that will make sure you have everything right before you submit it finally.
Yea, but the ones posted on here don't have all the up to date changes... It wouln't be that bad...
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Old 2008-03-16, 14:45   Link #2357
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Thankyou very much Krinen,
I'm really happy that you made this... ejhemm.. Translations
I promise I will be more carefull when I post future storyes, (Well, chapter 1 of my doujinshi is like a 80% ready, so... hope not to have much mistakes)
You're very welcome. If you'd like me to check anything else, just holler.

*goes back to lurking, seeing as he has nothing else to contribute*
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Old 2008-03-16, 14:59   Link #2358
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Oh my... what backlog I have...

I hate to seem like I'm doing a stop and run but a new segment of Landscaper!Fate is ready (which got a little help to fix mistakes).

Hope you enjoy...

Edit: and welcome all new people.

Spoiler for L!F... Patching a hole:
Spoiler for Hidden:


Quote:
Originally Posted by USB500 View Post
Spoiler for cracky:
Random crack is made of random and crack

Quote:
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Midchilda having a GE?! THIS IS MADNESS!!!
*Insert 300 joke here*


Spoiler for Scenarios 69, 70, 71 & 72:


Spoiler for Special:
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Old 2008-03-16, 15:12   Link #2359
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Spoiler for Hidden:
Chrono and Fate work for a company and have a boss above them, its just that they are on the same "Team" all the time so when others are around they are in charge of them...

Amy in L!F? Never thought about that....

As for the newbie i thought about making it Erio but i would have to bump him up a few years to, say, 16.

There are more characters to come...
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Old 2008-03-16, 17:07   Link #2360
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It was weird to say the least. Nanoha had invited me over after school to stay the night because last week was a bust on going out. I don't really blame her, though, after her confession and our small argument, I can understand wanting a day to recover. Now, though, I was feeling a little awkward. I had just changed from my track meeting and was waiting outside near the school gates. Air blew around me and I sighed out. Thanks to a hurricane we had a massive warm front come through all week. My snow was all melted and the temperature had managed to even reach the seventies. The ground was a little soft thanks to the melted snow but generally I felt as if winter was cut short on me, even if we did have another month and some to go. Speaking of, Nanoha's birthday was coming up. I was already struggling for money, this wasn't helping any. First my little splurge on the Internet ensured me I couldn't borrow any money from my mom for a while, after that I bought Nanoha that necklace which is still taking almost ninety percent of my weekly allowance to pay off, and now her birthday was coming up, followed by valentine's day not four days later. Wow, I really need to work some...But the parlor closes when I get off school, and I'm busy this weekend... I sighed out sadly.

Saved by the Bell XVIII
By: Satashi


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my hand refuses to write........
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